EPISODE 10 第 10 集
As the final episode of the first release, this one doesn't build much suspense. My suggestion is to include some scenes of Nora's everyday college life in the first half—for example, when she's studying quietly in her room and her roommate bursts in excitedly, asking if Nora wants to go to a party that night. Nora declines, as usual. Then the episode ends with Julian saying, "It's time for you to gain more privileges. I trust you won't let me down."
and the closed contract
delete the contract
closed contract
delete the contract, reason as above
He places the closed contract documents beside it, then steps across the threshold.
delete the contract, reason as above
the contract
Let's just delete the contract. Personally, I'd prefer that the exclusive service arrangement remain just a verbal agreement between Nora and Adrian.
Nora takes a length of coarse rope from the bench, pulls his arms behind his back, and binds his wrists tightly against the base of his spine.诺拉从长凳上取下一段粗绳，将他的双臂拉到背后，把他的手腕紧紧绑在脊椎底部。She steps in front of him, pressing gloved fingers under his chin and forcing his face up.她走到他面前，戴着手套的手指按住他的下巴，强行将他的脸抬起来。NORAFrom now on, you speak when I allow it. And when you speak to me, you call me Master.从现在起，只有在我允许的时候，你才能说话。而且，当你跟我说话时，必须称呼我为“主人”。Adrian's lips part. 阿德里安微微张开了嘴。NORADid I allow it? 是我允许的吗？He shuts his mouth. A beat.他闭上了嘴。停顿了一会儿。NORANow. Say it. 现在。说出来。ADRIAN 阿德里安Master. 大师。Nora releases his jaw and points downward.诺拉松开了他的下巴，朝下指了指。NORAGaze down. 低头看看。Adrian lowers his eyes instantly, his bare shoulders rigid against the biting rope.阿德里安瞬间低下了头，赤裸的双肩因那条勒得生疼的绳索而僵硬起来。Nora gestures to the bare wood.诺拉朝那块裸露的木头示意。NORAOn your stomach. 趴下。Adrian lowers himself flat onto the empty floorboards, pressing his bare chest and hips against the cold ground with his bound hands locked behind him.阿德里安俯身趴在空荡荡的木地板上，赤裸的胸膛和臀部紧贴着冰冷的地面，双手被反绑在身后。Nora steps over his prone, bare-chested frame and plants her gloved hand firmly on his lower back. Then she straightens, steps back, and raises the long black leather whip high above him.诺拉跨过他仰面躺着、赤裸上身的身体，将戴着手套的手牢牢按在他的下背部。随后，她挺直身子，向后退了一步，将那根长长的黑色皮鞭高高举过他的头顶。NORALet's see if you mean it. Do not move.看看你是不是认真的。别动。The lash hangs in the air. Seconds stretch. Sweat beads at his hairline.那根鞭子悬在半空中。时间仿佛凝固了。他的发际线处冒出了汗珠。Nora looks down at him: the man who holds her debt, her mother's life, her secrets. He is flat on her floor, waiting for her permission to breathe.诺拉俯视着他：这个掌握着她的债务、她母亲的性命以及她所有秘密的男人。他平躺在她的地板上，等待着她允许他呼吸。Adrian's wrists remain bound tightly behind his spine. He lies completely motionless and does not flinch beneath the suspended strike.阿德里安的手腕仍被紧紧绑在背后。他一动不动地躺着，面对那悬在头顶的重击，连一丝颤动都没有。
The last third of this episode and Episode 9 follow a similar plotline, which might lead to viewer fatigue. My suggestion is that Episode 8 should end right when Nora shouts, “Get down on your knees!” at the very end; this would leave viewers wanting more and encourage them to keep watching.
ADRIAN 阿德里安So that's why you wouldn't answer me.
I don't think this line fits the logic of the story very well. It would be better to change it to, "So this is what you meant when you said you wouldn't fall for him."
Nora lowers her eyes to the sorted papers.朱利安缓缓呼出一口气，在她沉稳的气场下，他紧绷的身姿终于松弛下来。诺拉低头看着那些已整理好的文件。NORA (V.O.) 诺拉（原声）He grieves like a doctor. And he's leaning on the spy.
This scene is unnecessary and adds nothing to the plot.
NORALook at me, Julian. What happened?
Here, Nora’s tone doesn’t sound much like that of a new assistant speaking to her boss, and she has always presented herself to Julian as capable yet well-behaved; her tone needs to be gentler, but not weak.
NORAI spilled coffee on myself. On purpose. He went to find me dry clothes, and I had a minute alone with the screen.我把咖啡洒在了自己身上。是故意的。他去给我找干衣服，而我则有片刻时间独自面对屏幕。ADRIAN 阿德里安Dry clothes. 晾干衣物。NORAMy shirt was soaked. He lent me some of his.我的衬衫湿透了。他把他的衬衫借给我穿。
The pace is a bit slow here. After Nora says she did it on purpose, she could say, “He let me borrow his clothes,” and then the last two sentences can be omitted entirely—they’re too redundant.
NORAYou wanted progress. 你们想要进步。
I think this line sounds a little odd. At first glance, the audience might not quite understand what Nora is saying. It might be better to change it to something like, “I’ve done my best.”
Scene 2 场景 2
This scene doesn't add much to the overall plot; it's enough for this episode to end with both characters feeling their feelings for each other grow stronger.
Offscreen, a locker door clicks open in the lounge.
The scene changes seem a bit too frequent here. I think it would be fine to stay on this shot, but we could add some background sound—footsteps that get louder as the person approaches.
JULIAN (O.S.) 朱利安（画外音）These might be a little big on you.这件衣服对你来说可能稍微大了一点。
Similarly, don't let Julian say that line; instead, use the sounds of a closet door opening and clothes rustling coming from the dressing room.
JULIAN (O.S.) 朱利安（画外音）I have dry clothes in the locker. Stay right there.我的储物柜里有干衣服。你就在那儿别动。
I don't think this line is necessary; adding it to Julian's character would make him seem less sharp.
His free hand crushes the pen on his desk.
That's a bit unrealistic—fountain pens aren't that fragile. I think this could be changed to "snapped a pencil on the table."
the rumpled bedcovers.
same as the above
rumpled covers
The phrase "rumpled covers" sounds a bit odd—the blanket should be smooth, but the area between Adrian's legs would be raised high, and the bulge in the blanket would create wrinkles.
his rhythm involuntarily
It doesn't specify what kind of rhythm this is; it actually refers to the twitching of Adrian's hand, which causes the blanket to rise and fall—first high, then low—with the rate of change accelerating.