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  1. Last 7 days
    1. HARPER turns and crosses to the Office Door. Behind her, CELESTE lifts the camel coat off the floor and lays it over her bare thighs.

      Harper气冲冲地转身走向办公室的门。

    2. That whole line in the hallway watched me walk through that door. Not one of them saw me walk out.

      删掉,改成Harper用手捂住了嘴,朝老师的方向乖巧地点了点头

    3. HARPER unbuttons CELESTE's slacks and lowers the zipper. She hooks her fingers into the waistband and the underwear beneath it and pulls. The fabric drags down to CELESTE's upper thighs and catches there, half pinned under her.

      Harper小心翼翼地解开老师长裤拉链,她用手指轻轻勾住裤腰往下一拉。布料滑落到老师的膝盖上部,卡在那里。露出老师的冷白色肌肤和白色内裤

    4. CELESTE reclines in the Office Chair, rolled back from the desk, asleep. Her gold-rimmed glasses sit folded on the desk's edge.

      特写: 百叶窗的光一道一道落在Celeste身上。她仰靠在办公椅里,头微微偏向一侧,白衬衫最上面那颗扣子松开了。她的眉眼比在讲台上柔和。睫毛垂着,眼下泛着淡淡的青色,粉嫩嘴唇微张,呼吸又轻又匀。

    5. I already have an F on her midterm. One more failed class and I'm out. I'm getting expelled anyway. So I'm taking you. Right now.

      直接改成:I'm getting expelled anyway. So I'm taking you. Right now.

    6. A line of students waiting for office hours runs along the hallway wall outside the Office Door.

      这些学生背着书本、抱着书稀稀拉拉地在喧闹的走廊中

    7. She lifts out the Gray Hardcover and opens it. Between the pages lies the Handwritten Letter, crumpled once and smoothed flat.

      信纸曾经被撕碎过,现在那些碎片已经用胶布小心地粘好,还原出原本的模样,被书熨平。

    8. CELESTE's face doesn't change.

      celeste闭上眼睛,终于忍不住欲望呻吟了一声。哪知道这声呻吟对于harper来说简直是春药,harper的手速更快了,终于celeste猛地一颤,睁开眼睛,大腿受不住似的猛地夹住harper的手,将手禁锢住。

    9. HARPER slaps the paper face down on the desk.

      之前加上:学生内心VO:为什么?老师,每次听你上课,都在心底渴望你,可是你那眼神从未注视过我啊

    10. CELESTE sets down the red pen. She folds the coat into neat thirds and lays it on the corner of the desk. The Probation Order lies bare again.

      她见状停下了手头的动作,站起来将大衣整齐地折了起来

    11. CELESTE sits behind the desk in the Office Chair, glasses on, a red pen in her hand.

      celeste坐在书桌后的办公椅上,戴着眼镜,手里握着一支红笔在转,正在低头批阅试卷。

    12. She smooths it on the Lectern, one crease at a time. She slides it between the pages of the Gray Hardcover and closes the cover over it.

      将那些信封碎片塞进书本里,然后合上书本

    13. CELESTE looks down at the Handwritten Letter. She doesn't open it. Two fingers slide it back across the Lectern until it touches HARPER's hand.

      celeste眼里的冰冷如遇暖春般消融,但她还是选择偏过头

    14. HARPER holds the exam up where CELESTE can see it and crushes it into a ball in one fist. 哈珀把试卷举到塞莱斯特能看到的地方,然后用一只手将它揉成一团。

      边挑衅地看着celeste

    15. BOY  男孩I heard she wanted to sleep with a professor for a grade. 我听说她为了拿分数,想和一位教授上床。GIRL  女孩She's on academic probation. One more failed class and she's out.

      两人是低声交头接耳地说,并且幸灾乐祸的语气

    16. CELESTE stands at the Lectern at the foot of the steps. She wears her hair in a low bun, gold-rimmed glasses, and a camel long coat. She has no notes.

      驼色长大衣里面是白衬衫,她把袖子半挽起,双手撑在讲台上,面向整个教室,低沉有力地说道

    1. MARGOT slides out from under her and over the edge. She sinks to her knees on the Carpet in front of WREN.

      Margot从她身下挣脱起来,跪在床上,朝着wren,浴袍已敞开大半,极致魅惑

    2. MARGOT (V.O.)  玛戈特(画外音)One photo to Bea. Wren loses her contract. Then Bea sues.

      inner monologue:只要说出去,我就再也不用和wren在镜头前扮演恶心的闺蜜了!

    3. MARGOT (V.O.)  玛戈特(画外音)Wildcat. What W calls M in bed. “野猫”。W 在床上对 M 的称呼。MARGOT (V.O.)  玛戈特(画外音)She knew. The phone. The nap. A trap. 她心里清楚。那通电话。那场小憩。是个陷阱。MARGOT (V.O.)  玛戈特(画外音)I wasn't hunting her. She was hunting me.

      inner monologue

    4. MARGOT  玛戈特We're... colleagues.  我们是……同事

      We're ...more than just colleagues.后紧接Margot 的inner monologue:当然了,我们是死对头

    5. MARGOT  玛戈特Nobody knows this. The back of my left knee. That's where I'm most ticklish.

      改成,对,我还告诉你一个小秘密,我左膝后侧那个地方最怕痒了

    1. SEBASTIAN (V.O.)  塞巴斯蒂安(原声)That's the back he gave me. Ten years from now, at my window. 他就是这样背对着我的。十年后,在我窗前。SEBASTIAN (V.O.)  塞巴斯蒂安(原声)One tug. Me, naked in his bed. And he picks the younger me. 轻轻一拉。我赤身裸体地躺在他的床上。而他选中的,却是我年轻时的样子

      Inner monologue

    2. MILO (V.O.)  《米洛》(原声版)He's still dreaming my name. 他仍在梦中呼唤我的名字。MILO (V.O.)  《米洛》(原声版)One tug, and he sees who's in my bed. Tonight ends there.

      我是在做梦吗?我的男朋友躺在这里,他只要一醒过来就能看到十年后的自己,我居然还......

    3. MILO, eyes closed, braces both hands on SEBASTIAN's chest and sinks deeper with every stroke. His sweat-slick thighs clamp SEBASTIAN's waist. He's shaking at the edge.

      改成两个激烈的缠吻,摩擦吧,然后颤抖

    4. MILO sinks down onto him, slow, until there's nothing left between them. Then he rocks his hips, faster and faster. The Bed creaks with every roll.

      在被子下,并且动作幅度不要那么大,唯美一点

    5. SEBASTIAN (V.O.)  塞巴斯蒂安(原声)Forty hours awake. Nothing wakes him. 已经连续醒着四十小时了。无论什么都叫不醒他。SEBASTIAN (V.O.)  塞巴斯蒂安(原声)Except one tug on that sleeve.

      inner monologue,并且改成:除非有人把他推醒

    6. SEBASTIAN (V.O.)  塞巴斯蒂安(原声)You should go. Now.  你应该走了。现在就走。SEBASTIAN (V.O.)  塞巴斯蒂安(原声)He hasn't slept facing me in years.

      inner monologue

    7. MILO rests his forehead against YOUNG SEBASTIAN's. 米洛将额头抵在年轻的塞巴斯蒂安的额头上。MILOThe ceiling light at home's been dead for months. 家里的吸顶灯已经坏了好几个月了。

      亲昵地依偎着

    8. SEBASTIAN pulls open the Bottom Drawer. He lifts out a Faded Hoodie, washed almost white, and a Prototype Wristband stamped CRANE LABS. He shrugs off his suit jacket and pulls the Faded Hoodie over his head. 塞巴斯蒂安拉开最底层的抽屉。他取出一件褪色的连帽衫——洗得几乎发白了——以及一条印有“CRANE LABS”字样的原型腕带。他褪下西装外套,将那件褪色的连帽衫套在头上。He snaps the Prototype Wristband onto his left wrist. 他将原型腕带“咔嗒”一声扣在左腕上。SEBASTIAN (V.O.)  塞巴斯蒂安(原声)One day. Ten years back. That exact day. 某一天。十年前。就是那天。SEBASTIAN (V.O.)  塞巴斯蒂安(原声)Six a.m. sharp, it drags me home. 早上六点整,它把我拖回了家。His thumb presses down on the Prototype Wristband.

      改成,S叹了口气,没看那份文件,拉开抽屉,取出连帽衫,穿上,将VO改成直接说出来的形式:回到十年前的那一天吧;回到我们最相爱的时候,我才能知道这些年我做错了什么

    9. LDER MILO  年长的米洛Separation papers. I already signed. 离婚协议书。我已经签了。SEBASTIAN doesn't touch them. 塞巴斯蒂安不碰它们。OLDER MILO twists the wedding ring off and presses it down onto his own signature.

      冷漠、无情的态度

    10. MILOBossy tonight.  今晚有点爱发号施令。SEBASTIAN sinks his hips lower. MILO arches off the Bed to meet him.

      这时候milo可以光着膀子,穿着裤子,并且借位描述,不要描述成直接性行为。

    11. In the pitch-dark Studio, a man's weight pins MILO to the Bed. One Strip of Light from the Window crosses the floor and stops at the edge of the mattress.

      也不能完全漆黑,属于光线昏暗,只有窗外射进去的月光

    1. LUCIAN (V.O.)  卢西恩(画外音)More than one man fishes in the dark. More than one man has a scarred wrist. 不止一个男人在黑暗中钓鱼。不止一个男人手腕上有疤痕。LUCIAN (V.O.)  卢西恩(画外音)

      inner monologue

    2. LUCIAN reaches over the Fish Basket and clamps a hand around NOAH's left wrist.

      改成,看到一道疤痕的影子一闪而过,仿佛发现了什么新大陆似的,抓住诺亚的左腕

    3. LUCIAN does not let go. He stares at the black cuff, buttoned tight over the wrist. 卢西恩没有松手。他盯着那只紧扣在手腕上的黑色袖口。A servant passes the Kitchen Door. NOAH holds still. LUCIAN's eyes stay on the cuff.

      他满怀兴趣地盯着,刚想抬手将袖口撩上去看看有什么,一名仆人此时却进来,Lucian才放下手

    4. He lifts NOAH's left wrist off the burlap and presses his mouth to the scar. 他将 NOAH 的左腕从麻布上抬起来,将嘴唇贴在那道疤痕上。

      很怀疑的神态

    5. Their thrusts turn faster, rougher, out of control. With each one, flour lifts off the sacks and drifts down over two sweat-slick backs.

      不要直接描述成抽插,描述成接吻,亲脖子、喉结等亲密动作

    6. LUCIAN  卢西恩Last night I had a man in my mill. In the pitch dark. 昨晚,我磨坊里来了一个男人。当时漆黑一片。NOAH stares at the fish. 诺亚盯着那条鱼。LUCIAN  卢西恩He bit his lip rather than make a sound. He shook under me all night long. 他咬住嘴唇,生怕发出声响。整晚,他在我身下瑟瑟发抖。LUCIAN lifts a fish, inspects it, drops it back. 卢西恩捞起一条鱼,仔细端详了一下,又把它放回水里。LUCIAN  卢西恩Best night I've had in Ashcombe. 这是我在阿什科姆度过的最棒的一个夜晚。He finally looks at NOAH, from his buttoned cuffs to his black coat. 他终于打量起诺亚来,从他扣得严严实实的袖口一直看到那件黑色大衣。LUCIAN  卢西恩A poor widower like you, Mr. Fairley? You're not fit to touch him.

      对话改成:LUCIAN 卢西恩 I had company last night. 昨晚有人陪我。

      NOAH stares at the fish. 诺亚盯着那条鱼。

      LUCIAN 卢西恩 A beautiful one. She bit her lip rather than make a sound. 是个美人。她宁可咬着嘴唇,也不肯出一点声音。

      LUCIAN lifts a fish, inspects it, drops it back. 卢西恩拎起一条鱼,仔细看了看,又扔了回去。

      LUCIAN 卢西恩 Best night I've had since London. 这是我离开伦敦以来最美妙的一夜。

      He finally looks at NOAH, from his buttoned cuffs to his black coat. 他终于抬眼看向诺亚,从他扣得严严实实的袖口,一直看到那件黑色外套。

      LUCIAN 卢西恩 And you? A year in black, and still sleeping alone. 你呢?穿了一年黑衣,还是一个人睡吧。

      LUCIAN 卢西恩 Of course you are. Who would touch a widower like you? Not even in the dark.

    7. NOAH (V.O.)  《诺亚》(原声版)That voice. Viscount Thorne. 那声音。索恩子爵。NOAH (V.O.)  《诺亚》(原声版)One word, and he knows who steals his eels. 只需一句话,他就知道是谁偷了他的鳗鱼。

      改成inner monologue

    8. NOAH slips through the Mill Door in his black coat. He feels his way across the floor toward the Wheel Race, both hands out in the dark.

      加上一句inner monologue:都怪可恶的禁渔令,希望这里没人,不然我可糟了!

    9. His gaze travels down NOAH's chest. It stops between his legs, where the wet cloth clings tight. It hides very little, and what it shows is large.

      加了一句咽了下口水

    10. Their thrusts turn faster, rougher, out of control. With each one, flour lifts off the sacks and drifts down over two sweat-slick backs.

      改成两个人律动的动作,避开直接的抽插动作

  2. Nov 2026
    1. ROWAN reaches into the inner pocket of his Suit Jacket. He draws out an Old Keycard printed 1708 and presses it into ELI's palm. 罗万把手伸进西装外套的内口袋,掏出一张印有“1708”字样的旧门禁卡,塞进了伊利的掌心。ELI's eyes never leave ROWAN's face. ELI 的目光始终没有离开 ROWAN 的脸。ROWAN slides the Old Keycard back out of ELI's hand. As it turns, the back shows a stamp: RENEWED JAN 05. He slips it into his inner pocket. 罗万从伊利手中轻轻抽回那张旧门禁卡。卡片翻转时,背面印着一个戳记:2005 年 1 月续期。他将卡片塞进了内口袋。

      改成,Rowan想将门禁卡从口袋里掏出来,卡都快掏出一半了,看着Eli的脸犹豫片刻还是塞回去了。

    2. ETHAN  伊桑To win back the guy who slept with you and ran by morning. 如何赢回那个和你上过床,却在天亮前就跑了的男人。

      Ethan 戏谑地对Eli说:别以为我看不出来你想赢回那个睡完你就一声不吭地跑了的人!

    3. ETHAN  伊桑New plan. Before winter break ends, Dad gives you dating lessons. 新计划。在寒假结束之前,爸爸会教你约会技巧。

      这里改成对他俩说,寒假结束前,爸,你必须得教会Eli约会技巧!

    4. ELI stands just inside the Kitchen Doorway, staring past the Kitchen Island. His right hand is jammed in his jeans pocket, fist tight around the Silver Cufflink.

      前面加上画面引退,Ethan打了个响指,唤醒刚刚走神的Eli

  3. Oct 2026
    1. No one will ever call you names again.

      改成这个世界上再也不会有人骂你了,后面加:chase癫狂的内心独白: No one in the world will ever bully and be obsessed with you anymore

    2. Ethan bares his teeth and bites down hard on Chase's lower lip until the skin splits.

      不要这样说,就说伊森紧闭上下唇,但是chase顽固地想要用舌头撬开

    1. He lowers his hand, pulls out his phone, and opens the burner account. He types: "Tomorrow's gonna be the worst day of my life."

      后面加:chase的内心活动:"Tomorrow's gonna be the worst day of my life.

    1. Ethan's face instantly burns. He sits bolt upright, his hand flying to cover the chain at his waist. Gritting his teeth, he types: "Wanna see more? Say please."

      画面转到伊森宿舍。后面加:伊森咬牙切齿的内心独白:Wanna see more? Say please

    2. In the high-rise, Chase reads the reply and laughs through his nose, one corner of his mouth curling up. He types: "Shame. It'd look even better with someone pulling on it."

      后面加:chase(内心独白):Shame. It'd look even better with someone pulling on it.

    1. Chase lunges, slamming Ethan hard against the cold tiled wall. Pinned against the tile, Ethan's head is wrenched back by a bruising jaw grip. Chase drags his bare thumb across Ethan's wet bottom lip and forces it deep into Ethan's mouth.

      这里的动作是,左手拽头,右手拖住伊森的下巴,大拇指摩挲伊森的下唇,然后将拇指探进去,还在里面搅了搅。