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  1. Feb 2018
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    1. The National Research Council (NRC) committee has relayed information suggesting that areas of concentrated incarceration typically lie in minority districts and are “among the most economically and socially disadvantaged sections of U.S. cities” (Crutchfield).

      This is plodding. Clean this whole paragraph up and SAY SOMETHING.

    2. These assumptions come from the following findings: in their research, 13% of drug users and sellers are African American, 17% are Latino, and 65% are white. Yet, 50% of those imprisoned for drug crimes are people of color. For non-violent, minor crimes, minority peoples are more commonly imprisoned than white people in America.

      Again, you alluded to this earlier , but are only actually saying it now. Say it once.

    3. This research, collected by Robert Crutchfield, a sociology professor at the University of Washington, and Gregory Weeks, a retired judge of the Superior Court of North Carolina,

      Just cite the research, bios are not necessary

    4. A study published by The Sentencing Project, an advocacy group aimed at prison reform, based upon U.S. Census and Bureau of Justice Statistics, clearly depicts the imbalance of white, African American, and Latino detainees: according to its findings, African Americans are incarcerated 5.1 times the rate of white people and Latinos are incarcerated 1.4 times the rate of white people (Nellis 3).

      You are in the evidence part of the essay, yet you are working through definitions from the introduction. Say this once, say it early, and move on.

    5. Police officers and their internalized bias, skewed policy such as the anti-drug act, there are countless issues within American society today responsible for racial disparity

      the more times you say "many, many" and "countless" the more times I think you don't know what you are these issues at all.

    6. This became the turning point for mass incarceration to come and also exemplified the level of discriminatory policy consistent with the U.S. criminal justice system.

      Make this sentence better.

    7. This absolutist vision that the court systems in America typically maintain likely stems from history

      Usually "history" refers to a long time ago. This time, it refers to 34 years. Why?

    8. The United States, possessing one of the most harsh, restrictive sentencing systems in the world views minor, non-violent crimes as worthy of years in prison, whereas other countries never ignore extenuating circumstances such as mental illness or addiction when issuing jail time.

      I disagree. How do you know this? Seriously, where does sentencing in the US fall comparatively.

    9. In today’s state prisons, there are drastically unwarranted racial disparities that can only be the cause of a deep structural racism in both policy and action.

      "result", also what is action in this context?

    10. Internalized prejudice towards African Americans, Latinos, and other peoples of color have resulted in mass incarceration of minorities,

      flesh this out. Is this true? I disagree. Cite.

    1. his sort of blatant monetary influence in the justice system removes agency from people like Kalief Browder on a class scale, undermining the very principles of life liberty and equality provided for in the constitution.

      The evidence you provide doesn't hold up this humungous last sentence.

    2. However, not having enough money to pay for bail should not be the “particular circumstances,” under which society commits the accused to an unhealthy system that threatens their livelihood.

      Re-work, I don't understand this sentence.

    3. The deleterious effects of pretrial detention, consistently encourage many defendants to simply plead guilty.

      This doesn't make sense, why would people agree to prison to avoid the deleterious effects of prison?

    4. The increased rates of self harm and suicidal acts prove Browder’s case to be anything but anomalous

      I disagree. Mental health issues, self-harm and suicide are not the same thing.

    5. Of the approximately thirteen thousand people awaiting trial in New Jersey Jails in 2013, five thousand were there “solely due to their inability to meet the terms of bail

      Why is New Jersey, in particular, relevant here?

    6. In May of 2010, police officers responding to a 911 call about a stolen backpack stopped and arrested Kalief Browder and his friend.

      Can you begin this in a more compelling way?