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  1. Apr 2024
  2. Oct 2017
    1. Indeed, Roberts-Miller lays out the features of demagoguery in her Denver talk, “Rhetoric and Demagoguery” and article, “Characteristics of Demagoguery,” paying more attention to the inaccuracies of how it has historically been defined in the first. Specific features of demagoguery Roberts-Miller identifies and discusses can be found in Taste of Country’s YouTube video, “Megan Linsey Kneels After Anthem: Who’s With Her?”

      Nice work. You lay out RM's main claims and key concepts and successfully apply them to your target text. I was impressed with how precisely you capture RM's argument and how well you find examples in the Linsey video comments.

    2. One of the main claims Roberts-Miller asserts in her Denver talk is that people traditionally have failed to deliberate about and settle upon improved policy in times of great dissention, such as when slavery existed (3-5). Instead, people have separated and reduced themselves into two distinct camps: an “ingroup” which they are a part of and an “outgroup” which represents the opposing (and inferior) view (3-5). Instead of debating what should be done about the situation at hand, these groups of people engage in a verbal and/or written fight about their group superiority, and this is the type of rhetoric that demagoguery incorporates (5).

      This is a wonderful distillation of RM's central claim.

    1. Overall, both Miller and Shieh make frequent use of logos and pathos in their respective articles. However, often the appeals to logic are incomplete or the conclusions derived from them lack logic themselves. Also, the word choice the authors make to appeal to the reader’s emotions actually work to erode their arguments in some instances.

      I really enjoyed reading this. Your analysis and evaluation of both texts is intelligent, thoughtful, and thorough. Impressive.

    2. the way Miller presents this statistic is questionable, as it sounds like a generalization that lacks specific crucial details.

      My own reading of the original source supports your hunch.

    3. She does not mention specifically what she means by this idea of youth constructing their own spaces, but she does allude to the importance and usefulness of having a basic understanding of code to build a website in her anecdote about MySpace’s early days (182). Though I think trying to get all youth to learn some code and build a site via that code might be too idealistic and impractical, I agree with Boyd’s overall idea that youth need to gain more understanding of what goes on behind the scenes of technological systems so they will gain greater power over them

      The same thought occurred to me. Research on "PLNs" or personal learning networks addresses much of what Boyd talks of. I was surprised she did not mention this.I agree the MySpace example is interesting but does not exactly provide a blueprint for the kind of instruction we need.

    4. Especially when individuals are young, but throughout their lives, they need to safeguard their information and not share too much of their identity with the world, so that they are not put in harm’s way.

      Adults too, as the recent Equifax disaster suggests.

    1. Indeed, in her chapter “Are Today’s Youth Digital Natives?” Boyd makes some claims that people should really pay heed to, such as the claim that algorithms that power search engines contain biases, Wikipedia is valuable for gaining an understanding of how knowledge is established, and labels can have different implications than people intend. Her overarching argument in this text is that the term “digital natives” masks the lack of in-depth digital knowledge teens actually possess, but her solutions for helping teens gain the digital prudence and skills they need are not thorough enough and are thus not helpful.

      Another model post. This is smart, thorough and detailed, and it is always grounded in careful textual analysis. This was a pleasure to read.

    2. Are the sources listed? and Does the site end in edu? which help point to more credible sites), though overall, I believe this criteria could have been more thoroughly expanded and focused on in my education.

      That is good to hear. This could mean things are changing, and Boyd's concerns are being addressed, she overstates the problem, or your education has been more sophisticated than most.

    3. will note the parts of Boyd’s text I found most intriguing and note what I feel are her most important claims. I will also list some problems Boyd associates with the rhetoric of “digital natives” and assess her solutions, evaluate her suggestions for helping youth become digitally literate, and discuss whether she leaves out anything important.

      Nice statement of purpose/metadiscourse.

    1. (“Sundiata: Two Versions” 449). This phrase incorporates repetition of the short “i” sound in “Tis” and “thickener,” repetition of the “th” sound in “the” and “thickener,” and repetition of the “gr” in “grown” and “grave

      Yes, although because it is in translation it's hard to know how much these aspects of the language can be analyzed in such terms.

    2. Sundiata is additive, aggregative, repetitive, and overall rather formulaic. Such features ultimately help carve out a rhythm within the story. This rhythm imprints the story into the griot’s memory and allows him to continuously repeat it over time and pass it on to members of the culture and other storytellers.  

      [My previous comments seem to be missing. Here are some new ones] Homework assignment one is excellent. Demonstrates good understanding of Ong’s key concepts, and outstanding application to the Sundiata text. Your work on aggregative and additive language, parallelism, redundancy, formulas and repetition is outstanding. I am particularly impressed by the quality of close textual analysis – detailed, sophisticated, developed. Nice work!

  3. Sep 2017
    1. Sundiata is additive, aggregative, repetitive, and overall rather formulaic. Such features ultimately help carve out a rhythm within the story. This rhythm imprints the story into the griot’s memory and allows him to continuously repeat it over time and pass it on to members of the culture and other storytellers.

      This is really impressive. Your analysis of repetition, redundancy, formulaic language, epithets, and aggregative style is very strong. You make wonderful use of textual evidence and read both texts with care and insight.

      Great work!

    2. e three times he tries to do this, the description reads: “He put his right hand o’er his left,/And upwards drew himself/And upwards drew himself” or some slight variation of this (“Sundiata: Two Versions” 449-450). Through these similar descriptions, the audience can see that Sundiata is attempting the same action over and over again (with unsuccessful results the first two times and successful results the third time), and also through them, as at other points throughout the narrative, the griot must remember less words overall.

      Good - like the way you consider both the mnemonic and dramatic/aesthetic dimensions of the performance.

    3. Sundiata successfully walks with the help of a staff, his mother runs toward him gleefully, and the narration reads: “Running, his mother came forward,/And clasped his legs/And squeezed them,/ And squeezed them” (“Sundiata: Two Versions” 450-451). Two different past-tense verbs are used (clasped and squeezed) that both end in -ed, and they are both used with introductory “ands.” This parallel structure is rhythmically pleasing and congruent, which allows the griot’s mind to retain the phrases without much effort

      This is good, careful, incisive close reading.

    4. Sundiata, both of which add rhythm to the story, enhance the griot’s ability to recall it.

      Excellent paragraph- gets to the heart of Ong's concepts and their realization in the Sundiata text.

    5. Sundiata, which relays the tale of the Manding Empire’s founder (“Sundiata: Two Versions” 443). A specific version of Sundiata by John William Johnson is a record of a griot’s performance of the tale that was preserved without alteration for a Western audience (“Sundiata: Two Versions” 443). This analysis will examine Johnson’s version of Sundiata and Ong’s features of “Orally Based Thought and Expression” that it satisfies.

      Another great metadiscourse section

    6. ral-a large following may end up being needlessly frustrating and hard to control. It would be fascinating to see if any studies have been done on what number of followers is most manageable.

      Great discussion and analysis of Thompson. Keep it up! This is thoughtful, comprehensive, and smart.

    7. claiming “conversation works best when it’s smaller” and “conversation doesn’t scale” (80). He specifically cites YouTube and Newspapers as having so many people contributing to their comments sections that they easily

      Great analysis of Thompson's argument!

    8. Thompson states, but writing digitally puts our thinking in order even more successfully due to the “audience effect” (5

      Nicely put.

    9. f Thompson had explained how exactly he had come to that 36 million book estimate, however, his ethos would be strengthened and his claim more persuasive. H

      Agree entirely. This seemed sloppy and a little fishy.

    10. Lunsford is a professor at a well-respected college a

      Yes, it doesn't get more prestigious than Stanford.

    11. more “writing” and “production” instead of just “reading” and “consumption”

      Yes, this is central to Thompson's argument, and key to changes in mass literacy.

    12. This response will include a summary and evaluation of and some reflection on Thompson’s main claims and rebuttals in his “Public Thinking” piece. It will also contain a brief discussion of certain intriguing parts of Herrick’s “An Overview of Rhetoric.”

      Nice metadiscourse section

    1. It would be fascinating to see if any studies have been done on what number of followers is most manageable.

      Great discussion and analysis of Thompson. Keep it up! This is thoughtful, comprehensive, and smart.

    2. ge groups of people, claiming “conversation works best when it’s smaller” and “conversation doesn’t scale” (80). He specifically cites YouTube and Newspapers as having so many people contributing to their comments sections

      Great analysis of Thompson's argument!

    3. f Thompson had explained how exactly he had come to that 36 million book estimate

      Agree entirely. This seemed sloppy and a little fishy.

    4. Lunsford is a professor at a well-respected college

      Yes, it doesn't get more prestigious than Stanford.

    5. “writing” and “production” instead of just “reading” and “consumption”-

      Yes, this is central to Thompson's argument, and key to changes in mass literacy.

    6. This response will include a summary and evaluation of and some reflection on Thompson’s main claims and rebuttals in his “Public Thinking” piece. It will also contain a brief discussion of certain intriguing parts of Herrick’s “An Overview of Rhetoric.”

      Nice overview of your analysis.