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remembered
Tense will affect how it is read
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I knew that none of them were.
To subvert myth -- the narrator realizes his life is connected with the larger floating stories and there wasn't even really a change that signals his realization.
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story about the World Egg,
Myth being told in a fated way -- Myths are accepted as real, or as real as anything else.
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towards the strand of cooking smoke rising from the village
There really isn't intention in his moving; Waking up in different places without explanation of how he got there; There is potential for being moved magically but without explanation is confusing.
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I had known suffering
Narration being jagged and brain trauma -- not a lot of actual emotion and not a lot of contrast. The tone is lacking conceals the horror. Lean more into the physicality which is richer than "I knew suffering"
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fell
Incorporate present tense through all of the "present" narrative? Plane crash has a certain surrealness -- there is a flatness that works fine for folktale but outside of fairy tales there is a lack of tone and contrast.
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plane
Do we know even where the plane is going? Seems to be on a plane for the purpose to be on a plane?
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No one knew if any of it was true, but people loved saying it.
Most of the tension is from the couple's storyline until the narrator fits in the story. The narrator doesn't really seem to deliberately do anything. A "lazy river" type of journey.
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Before the plane
Question about what came before the journey? When did the memory loss begin? How to make the sudden or step-by-step rush-back of memory more clear?
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Remembrance I remember
"I remember" doesn't reveal until very late that this is the narrator's personal lived story
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Mom
There are a LOT of characters?
confusion can be explained by the disorientation of the plane crash.
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I remember
"I remember" help add to the recognition of the different modes of storytelling.
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Tales: Separate origin stories connect together is good.
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My mistake was thinking I could be anythingother than hungry.My mistake was thinking I could be anything other
three lines three different way to interpret. to be anything to be anything other than XXX to be anything other (is this the same as to be anything else? )
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Lying motionless
Accessing memory but failing just like trying to get a glimpse through a curtained window. Lying motionless here and now? Or when every one was afraid? Is the terrible effort the effort to access memory?
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could not get to return
Not just he could not, he could not get to
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attempts
The woods as an action, like a quest where the speaker attempts and works towards a connection.
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lent
strange strange verb here; Lent to whom from the daughter?
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His
First instance of using third person "Him"?
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I looked back and could never quite touch it
Again reference to a memory -- a past that is real but can't be touched
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unfurling
to spread or shake out from a furled state like a sail or a flag
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ived a recall
Again reference to the past
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windy
Strong wind contrasts the stillness of the people. Just because there is movement of the wind does not mean it is not idle. Rather, it enhances it.
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to liaison
Liaison is not really a verb but still one can connect, one can make phonetic connection between words or social connection, often illicit, between peoples. What does this mean?
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could not understand why, corrected or destroyed, I used to be delighted
Such a strange remembrance of the past. "miserable" and "harm" is the result of "correction" or "destruction" of what used to be "delight".
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material, namely miserable, muffled-up
alliteration
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remember present, read to represent a promise
word play
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football field of forest
Alliteration
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pardon
Both as a verb as tomorrow will pardon (whom?) and as an expression of hesitation after a comma.
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reticence
state of being reserved; strained with regard to speaking freely
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you
Confusion over first and second person pronouns. Is the "you" towards the reader?
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