Even here, though, schools’ performance is mediocre and unlikely to meaningfully improve. Schools have been trying to overcome reading, writing and math deficits among underperforming students for decades.
I think the argument would improve greatly if statistics were included here. Statistics to prove school performance is mediocre would improve the argument greatly since that is a premise of the argument.
My work focuses on tests of adult knowledge — what adults retain after graduation. The general pattern is that grown-ups have shockingly little academic knowledge. College graduates know about what you’d expect high school graduates to know; high school graduates know about what you’d expect dropouts to know; dropouts know next to nothing
Week 11- In this paragraph the author mentions that their work consists of collecting data and makes a claim based off that data but does not provide the readers with it. I believe that the argument would be much stronger if supporting data was shown.
Her opposition to police and prison starts with the experiences of marginalized people, who have to deal with police and carceral violence every day.
Although I know this from a first hand experience and experience of family members, I think statistics on incarcerated people would benefit the article.
If someone who has never researched this topic reads this, they wouldn't truly understand the gap between marginalized people incarcerated and those not.
Another good statistic that could be used is the recent amount of people that have been released early or with certain crimes being decrimalized and what groups those are.
Black people, 32 percent of the population in Chicago, account for 72 percent of police stops, according to ACLU of Illinois data.
I believe this is a great use of statistics in an argument like this. It instantly responds to the statement said before and shows how even though black people take up such a small percent of Chicago, they are the most stopped.
Causal inference isn’t what you think it is. (n.d.). LSHTM. Retrieved June 26, 2020, from https://www.lshtm.ac.uk/newsevents/events/causal-inference-isnt-what-you-think-it