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  1. Apr 2020
    1. All the social determinants of health became very apparent on their impact on this

      The impact of social determinants of health were very apparent with this population.

    1. Overall, incorporating sensory interventions into treatment has shown functional outcomes. Nevertheless, best clinical judgement should be used when to integrating it into practice

      consider moving this. It fits nicely after " discredited the interventions. Overall, incorporating sensory interventions into treatment has shown functional outcomes. Nevertheless, best clinical judgement should be used when to integrating it into practice." then simply delete the next sentence that starts "However, ..." senetence.

  2. julistolpmann.weebly.com julistolpmann.weebly.com
    1. Working with the patients came natural because I can relate to the clients.

      Suggest "Working with clients came naturally, as I can relate to many types of people".

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  4. lawsone0802.weebly.com lawsone0802.weebly.com
    1. resume

      This should look like a single paragraph. You may want to crop the lines on your picture as they are close to your text. Your resume is impressive. Well done!

    1. has allowed me to experience right from wrong and the steps needed to resolve the issue. 

      allowed me to practice problem solving and decision making skills in real life situations.

    2. The code of ethics provides guidelines for making correct choices when resolving ethical dilemma, and guideline principles in order to practice at the expected standard

      consider revising as you state "guidelines and guideline principles" in the same sentence.

    1. Knowing your weaknesses is equally important in order to understand how you function

      consider moving this sentence down in the paragraph. perhaps after .....complements on my ability to connect and build rapport with clients. Knowing your weaknesses is equally important in understanding how you function, as I have struggled with confidence in my skills and knowledge.

    2. It is very helpful in times of uncertainty and allowing students to target their goals and responsibilities

      This part is not clear "how it (feedback) helps target responsibilities". Do you mean....Feedback is helpful to allow students to target their own goals and creates a sense of personal accountability in times of uncertainty. ?

    3. with important cues for effectively providing you with information or critiquing your progress.

      consider revising. Verb and tense are not in agreement and there is not a good flow to the sentence. Perhaps, ...feedback to your fieldwork educator, and will help critique your own performance and progress.

    1. .

      In your cited example the number 5 appears (this was from that assessment). Can you edit the image to remove the number as it looks visually confusing. It is between your # 3 and #4 criterion.

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    1. It was not until my college years when I was introduced to the amazing profession of occupational therapy, and I became very interested to learn more. 

      you are switching verb tenses multiple times. Consider revising the sentence or making verb tenses agree.