trust, allowing
trust, which allowed
trust, allowing
trust, which allowed
built
formed
s, ai
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prioritize
prioritized
out, hi
omit the comma
core,
core stability,
clients’ f
client's
Majority
The majority
are
were
the
"all the" OR "all my"
During the evaluation,
Remove
am
was
majority
the majority
to
to empower the caregiver to reinforce the skills and knowledge the client has learned into everyday occupations.
and they understand the client’s relationships outside of therapy.
caregiver. I don't understand this last part..... consider revising.
spend majority
spend the majrity
to strive
omit
in,
in. I
also
omit "also"
one day this client demonstrated abnormal behavior than his usual bubbly self
a client who was usually bubbly demonstrated abnormal behavior.
e, I
challenge as I could
influences
influence
income
ability to generate income
constraint
strain
All the social determinants of health became very apparent on their impact on this
The impact of social determinants of health were very apparent with this population.
key note
keynote
aloud
allowed
OTA
AOTA, reading AJOT, and
g s
forming, so
the
what they heard from
,
omit comma
Overall, incorporating sensory interventions into treatment has shown functional outcomes. Nevertheless, best clinical judgement should be used when to integrating it into practice
consider moving this. It fits nicely after " discredited the interventions. Overall, incorporating sensory interventions into treatment has shown functional outcomes. Nevertheless, best clinical judgement should be used when to integrating it into practice." then simply delete the next sentence that starts "However, ..." senetence.
at b
at the benefits of
an
delete "an"
Patient
Educate patient on
.
WOW! This is excellent, Juli. You really captured this experience in your weebly!
expertise’s and client
expertise and client-centered
strived
strove
it in
it as individualized
and
and in order to
strived
strove
the
omit "the"
cultivated an educational discussion
(fostered or generated) a scholarly discussion
?It covered
valid?, which covered
history
has a
Working with the patients came natural because I can relate to the clients.
Suggest "Working with clients came naturally, as I can relate to many types of people".
a
being a
I
You may want to start with " Hi! My name is Juli Stolpmann and I am....."
the care that an OT has for
how an OT cares for their patients.
are
be
don’t
not
set me back in my studies and my time
was a setback in my studies,
so h
so I had
none essential
non-essential
tail
omit
then just hearing they were great, they had
than just hearing that they were great because they had to....
positivity and showing love and friendship to others, but also
positivity, showing love and friendship to others, and allowed them ...
meditation is and what it’s used for. I also allowed
meditation is and what it is used for, and I allotted time for discussion on how to....
reoccurring
recurring
,
delete
Without approval I had to hope
I had to trust
,
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a cognitive level that they
their cognitive level so that they
still
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groups, all of
groups with different
penitents i
patients
,
delete
well, and would be sure to note
well and noted any sexual behaviors.
. However,
advantage of, however he was
also
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major line
time that he had crossed the line.
any
any further
out,
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,
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advantages
advances
composer
composure
,
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throughout
throw
gras,
Gras
o
alleviating anger from opposing opinions, and to ...
relieve a client from feeling upset
to relieve a client's distress about....
assisted me lead
continued to assist me with another group for a few week, because...
pool,
delete comma
patients
patient's
nearby
near
ended up traveling
treveled
crucial
essential
frequency of
patient's
implementing
integrating
evidence based
evidence-based
patients
patient's
was invaluable, for me and to bring back to
proved invaluable to me and my fieldwork site.
use,
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equipment, while also
equipment and with the quality of the product produced for the client.
amount of
delete
, a
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did
had done or were in denial....
separate
understand (otherwise revise to separate their actions from their needs)
patients
patient's
towhy
to why
was
could be
clients. However, they really
clients, however they get
the best answer for her
her own best answer.
example
example,
first
first,
home made
homemade
also
delete
bitten open
badly wounded
wood worked
wood-worked
resume
This should look like a single paragraph. You may want to crop the lines on your picture as they are close to your text. Your resume is impressive. Well done!
client centered
client-centered
your
subject agreement. (our)
are are
typo
For those of you who are unfamiliar with occupational therapy (OT), it's
( simplify. ) Occupational therapy (OT) is a type of rehabilitation...
I'm currently in my second year of a 2 1/2 year program,
I am in my final semester and plan......
w
When
has allowed me to experience right from wrong and the steps needed to resolve the issue.
allowed me to practice problem solving and decision making skills in real life situations.
The code of ethics provides guidelines for making correct choices when resolving ethical dilemma, and guideline principles in order to practice at the expected standard
consider revising as you state "guidelines and guideline principles" in the same sentence.
, therefore
. Therefore,
setting
settings.
years
years of age.
and
and in all settings.
and
during
the norm
normal
, buildin
and building
a
delete "a"
portion to
courses and put into practice.
any other than a liquid
anything other than liquids.
, however
must. However, she
interventions
deficits.
along side
alongside
doing so.
so doing.
and a
and I
occupational
as an occupational
esearch
a literature search
Majority
The majority
learned a large amount
I learned a great deal
continued
continuing
any area
one or more
ncrease individual’s
increase an individual's
, therefore
life. Therefore,
.
Ashten,
This is solid evidence. Could you attach a copy of the citation or a picture of the abstract from the article?
is
is a
to provide
in order to find
additional research
a literature search
experienced
treated
Majority
The majority
as
that we have as
relationship
either: building relationships or building a relationship.
assured her to tend to client.
reassured her, so she could tend to her client.
aims
aimed (verb agreement)
over
delete "over"
the
that
My
The
classmates we
my fellow classmates were
shuts
shut
behaviors
our behaviors also
your
our
these
our
r is
is the best
making
to make
this
that
being
to be
it
delete "it"
continued
have continued
that I fell in love with.
that I love.
regarding
to run
physically healthy
your physical health
serves
verb tense (served)
Knowing your weaknesses is equally important in order to understand how you function
consider moving this sentence down in the paragraph. perhaps after .....complements on my ability to connect and build rapport with clients. Knowing your weaknesses is equally important in understanding how you function, as I have struggled with confidence in my skills and knowledge.
we were to take
we took
is different based on personalities
has a different personality
It is very helpful in times of uncertainty and allowing students to target their goals and responsibilities
This part is not clear "how it (feedback) helps target responsibilities". Do you mean....Feedback is helpful to allow students to target their own goals and creates a sense of personal accountability in times of uncertainty. ?
with important cues for effectively providing you with information or critiquing your progress.
consider revising. Verb and tense are not in agreement and there is not a good flow to the sentence. Perhaps, ...feedback to your fieldwork educator, and will help critique your own performance and progress.
needs, therefore, we
needs. Therefore, we
for
of
where
when
, h
directed. However, fieldwork
the
a
evaluates individuals regarding
emphasizes assessment of physical parameters such as
evidence to support the
and on evidence to support treatment techniques.
engage
to engage
successful treatment
then a successful treatment outcome
this requires the client to provide quality effort
client's must provide quality effort to maximize their recovery.
us
OT
has
a trait of every OT practitioner.
.
In your cited example the number 5 appears (this was from that assessment). Can you edit the image to remove the number as it looks visually confusing. It is between your # 3 and #4 criterion.
the
that
ages 6 months to 80+
across the lifespan, ranging from six months to over eighty years of age.
other
multiple
to
remove "to"
diversity of individuals
diverse population of individuals
a
aware of and understanding
enough
delete" enough"
Association and
Association. I held
(verb tense switch between I am and held)
shadowing occupational therapists...
you want to clarify that for the reader
It was not until my college years when I was introduced to the amazing profession of occupational therapy, and I became very interested to learn more.
you are switching verb tenses multiple times. Consider revising the sentence or making verb tenses agree.
an
as
engrained
ingrained
interesting for the amount of people who have
interesting how many people asked me