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very honest by saying
honestly say
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I have found that I have been
I have been
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Further, I feel as though
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was
it was
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safely, therefore every minute counts of the 3 hours of therapy.
safely. Therefore, every minute of their three hours of therapy matters.
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For my pediatric rotation specifically, several of our clients
Many of our pediatric clients
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and
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sessions, so when I am documenting,
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the amount of toys available to use for therapy was very limited and I had to still effectively provide treatment for the child by using creativity.
there were few toys available to use, and I had to be creative in order to provide effective treatment.
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job and with
job. With
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one picture link is broken.
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oming and I feel as though as I continue with my practice, I will continue to grow in the professional aspect
coming. I feel I will continue to grow in the ....
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very natural
naturally (adverb agreement)
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b
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patients
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Also, every
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all
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she
the PT? or the fieldwork educator?
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I took over my fieldwork educator's caseload so
"After I took over my fieldwork educator's caseload, I communicated and ..."
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enew these memberships every year and
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as I complete my final fieldwork rotation as well as when I enter into my practice
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There are several ways I plan to fulfill commitments in my future as a practitioner such as being a life long learner and keeping up with continuing education hours even if that means taking courses after I have met the criteria for the number of hours I am expected to get.
revise. This is too long a sentence. You could simply start with "I plan to be a lifelong learner and I am committed to learning about my profession, even if that means taking...
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medica
the healthcare professions. or in our profession.
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is writing a progress note
Makensie, I begin to struggle here with your train of thought. You start with this "writing a progress note" as advocacy. Then you describe insurance denying visits due to lack of progress (that is a valid decision unless there are unusual circumstances). You then make their case by stating family and client non-compliance with therapy. Your better argument here would be 1. client has need 2. services can be helpful 3. how you modified POC to increase compliance 4. why further services are cost-effective long-term (more independent, fewer hosp stays) Also, you shift from past to present tense through the end of the paragraph.
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insurance was reluctant to approve her for visits because they say she isn't making progress.
her insurance company kept denying additional visits due to lack of progress.
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the deficits listed above
his deficits.
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and it
. It was
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s it correlated with the child's age level.
clarify? was the child given the assessment because it was age appropriate? were the results that the child scored age appropriate?
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doesn't mean they wouldn't benefit
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evaluations because when
evaluations. When you perform...
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Unfortunately, on multiple occasions, we are
We are often put... (unfortunately) is a victimizing word here where you appear to be disadvantaged. Quite the opposite, you are the advocate!
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because she was able to understand
, because she understood
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while standing at t
on the mat
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of how MOHO is used is
when MOHO was used was when
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thing,
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and on most days, we
stroke. Most days we would ....
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she had a goal set based on her evaluation to address visual memory,
her treatment goal was focused on visual memory,
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and I
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to
in order to
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and as we know, play is a child's
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and he
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activities he did that became much easier for him after his
activities that became easier for him as his ....
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my sessions with him, I would try to
During our sessions I would repeat...
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to give them
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questions and
questions. She thanked me....
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had
supervised
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questions,
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another therapist other than my fieldwork educato
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is, for example, I had a
was the
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educators, as well as other team members, know
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together, so this occupation was
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because he talked with me about
and he told me
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how he wanted
his desire to
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about
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caregivers and it seems as though several
caregivers. However, some clients....
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is something that is so
are
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as
as a result of my advocacy. (omit " her therapy session ended and i left the room.)
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, she
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verbalize things
consider. "convey information"
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and feel
and I feel
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nd
and with clients
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However, you become very optimistic and appreciative
It is unclear how you become optimistic. Do you mean "You learn to appreciate the individual and understand their lifestyle choices."?
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environment so,
environment. So,
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the different cultures each client represents.
how culture influences each client differently.
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experience
experience,
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evel II Fieldwork Experience EncompassHealth RehabHospital—North|Memphis, TN | Inpatient Rehab| January-March2020 High Hopes Pediatric Therapy | Monroe, LA| Pediatric Outpatient | September-December2019LevelI Fieldwork Experience Therapy Hut | Cordova, TN | Pediatric Outpatient| September 2018•Implemented pediatric OT evaluation, therapeutic stretching techniques, and the Peabody Developmental Motor Skills assessment. St. Francis Hospital | Memphis, TN | Inpatient Acute|March2019
make a single heading "Clinical Experience" then list in reverse order by date (newest first)
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on
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Objective
Career objectives should not be in a resume
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Project
Label this section Scholarship/ Research
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provide
become
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with hopes to contribute research in future conferences, specifically on my
and I plan to conduct and present research on DoC programs at future conferences.
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proceeding Vice President by
incoming Vice President, and by
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the most
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concerns and
concerns. I took time to go over.....
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we would work so closely
Because we frequently worked together, I was able to provide feedback....
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co-treat and having
co-treat. Having
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and
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interventions, however
interventions and modified them to be
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a high level of evidence, however was
high level evidence, however it was
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to best support the needs of these clients, however, would consider the population.
unclear. revise this and fix/remove the fragment "would consider the population"
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evidence based
evidence-based
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When working with the pediatric population, there often wasn't research pertaining specifically to this population when dealing with medically complicated clients.
revise. perhaps "There was a lack of research data related to pediatric clients with medical complexity"
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return an outcome
recovery
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place
place,
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to
in order to
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many of our patients were in, however,
of these patients. However,
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provided
allowed me to complete
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as an OT
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pants
pants,
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bathroom and with each step,
bathroom, and with each step she
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With PT, we helped
The PT and I helped
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is when I was when I was
was
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have before because I have
have otherwise, because I had
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hospital
hospital,
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develop a unique relationship with
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much opportunity
many opportunities
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my weakness
one of my weaknesses (object/predicate agreement)
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After working on this a week
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Late on in my
During my
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After observing my first week, I advocated for my developed skills from previous rotations and provided feedbac
After observing for one week, I felt confident in my treatment skills and I provided feedback to my instructor that ....
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With this information and the underserved population I frequently worked with (children 6-12 with a TBI), I decided to do my inservice on developing a Disorders of Consciousness (DoC) program for pediatric populations.
reverse this. Start with I decided to do.....populations based on this information and knowing the needs of the underserved....TBI).
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I did my rotation at
where I completed my internship had...
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And often, these
These patients often wait...
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although it is typically out of... (some OT's have advanced training on SCI or pulmonary units)
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educate
educate clients
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Through the pediatric hospital I did my second level II rotation at, the provided monthly CEU's during lunch
The pediatric hospital, where I completed my second level II rotation, offered monthly CEU courses during lunch.
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Good!
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making, from the client, caregivers, and using my clinical expertise.
making, incorporating the client's and caregiver's needs and using my clinical expertise.
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This variety of exposure helped me to accurately discharge plan, seeing first hand the level of care provided, and helped me to gather a tool-box to carry over services to a variety of settings
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see
see and
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about it
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incase
in case
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strengths, however
strengths. However,
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well as
was (verb ageement)
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successful, however
successful. However,
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transfers in order to only receive periodic help with ADLs and family hasn't been
transfers, she would only have periodic help with ADL's, and her family had not been educated on ...
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discussed
discuss
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Kelsi,
You could also add any inservices you provided on your clinicals.
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population is underrepresented when it comes to adapting to meet their individual needs.
consider: population with special needs is underrepresented.
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often with
for
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this is an essential skil
home, so it is essential to address.....
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With often only seeing
We often see
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hopefully helps
can help
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the more likely a client is
the client is more likely to
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accustom
accustomed
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Yay! a functional home program!!!!
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seeing him a couple days and
After a few days of me asking...
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with
"and" or "resulting in"
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Because this individual made such an impact on my life, I have recently started working with local homeless organizations and educating on specific needs for the special needs homeless population and problem solving ways to get the resources for proper preventative care for this population.
this is a very long sentence. Consider revising it into two smaller sentences. perhaps end the first around homeless organizations. also watch for changes in verb tense.
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but
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situations
situation.
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about a subject
the client on a topic or strategy,
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on
the client on
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injuries, simply just were
injuries simply were
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a special interests of
I have special interests in pediatrics and in home modification. OR I am most interested in the field of pediatrics and performing home modifications.
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She is only 59 years old with cognition intact and well enough aware to know she was not being treated with respect or taken care of fully
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staff
assistant.
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for anything because we are
because we are often
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and
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in which we would go
where we went
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deficits, though she had
deficits.She maintained a positive attitude and a strong spirit.
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and admire so many
learn to appreciate people.....
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sessions all along, and will continue
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and
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always being
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One opportunity I found on numerous occasions to advocate for and represent the unique perspective of occupational therapy was when
I had opportunity on numerous occasions to advocate for and represent the unique perspective of occupational therapy when.....
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a push
encouragement
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may or may not ever go through myself
may not ever experience or understand.
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Throughout these
Through these
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mind: a 64 year-old man with dementia and I believe depression
mind, a 64 year old gentleman with dementia and depression.
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In both my fieldwork experiences and in my personal life,
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One client, in particular, comes to mind to provide a specific example.
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a lot of her difficulties were behavior-related, as well
many of her difficulties were behavior-related.
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A lot o
Some of
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