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  1. Apr 2020
    1. had several worries in my head about whether or not I was going to be able to prove my abilities in enough time to

      worried whether I would have time to prove my abilities in order to

    2. but also using the strengths of my team members.

      omit (you can make another sentence if you want to discuss taking advantage of the strengths of other team members)

    3. if it was a Friday and I was traveling home and I found that I reached my goal of documenting with minimal errors as I had discussions with my educator and reviewed my midterm evaluation.

      this is a fragment.

    1. practice and not only assist us with the evaluation, but it would also guide our practice for writing

      practice. The OTPF not only guided our evaluation, but also guided our intervention choices, and our goal writing for ....

    2. I was assisting with an evaluation with my fieldwork educator and in the department where my fieldwork educator worked, we mostly treated children 13 years of age or younger.

      In the pediatric clinic we primarily treat children 13 years of age or younger.

    3. I can use my knowledge of all the skills an activity addressed when I used it on my pediatric rotation and use it with an adult to address the skills the client is having difficulty with.

      I can take the activity analysis skills I used on my pediatric rotation and use those skills to address adult skills deficits.

    4. There were several articles to represent some of the interventions used in practice and some of the strategies that were consistently used in the facility,

      Simplify. There were research articles regarding best practice interventions and evidence-based strategies that were....

    5. patients may not even know what a stroke is or a lot of times, when someone

      many patients don't understand the meaning of the work stroke. When a patient has a stroke, some cognitive deficits can occur, so ...

    1. the amount of toys available to use for therapy was very limited and I had to still effectively provide treatment for the child by using creativity.

      there were few toys available to use, and I had to be creative in order to provide effective treatment.

    2. There are several ways I plan to fulfill commitments in my future as a practitioner such as being a life long learner and keeping up with continuing education hours even if that means taking courses after I have met the criteria for the number of hours I am expected to get.

      revise. This is too long a sentence. You could simply start with "I plan to be a lifelong learner and I am committed to learning about my profession, even if that means taking...

    3. is writing a progress note

      Makensie, I begin to struggle here with your train of thought. You start with this "writing a progress note" as advocacy. Then you describe insurance denying visits due to lack of progress (that is a valid decision unless there are unusual circumstances). You then make their case by stating family and client non-compliance with therapy. Your better argument here would be 1. client has need 2. services can be helpful 3. how you modified POC to increase compliance 4. why further services are cost-effective long-term (more independent, fewer hosp stays) Also, you shift from past to present tense through the end of the paragraph.

    4. insurance was reluctant to approve her for visits because they say she isn't making progress.

      her insurance company kept denying additional visits due to lack of progress.

    5. s it correlated with the child's age level.

      clarify? was the child given the assessment because it was age appropriate? were the results that the child scored age appropriate?

    6. Unfortunately, on multiple occasions, we are

      We are often put... (unfortunately) is a victimizing word here where you appear to be disadvantaged. Quite the opposite, you are the advocate!

    1. However, you become very optimistic and appreciative

      It is unclear how you become optimistic. Do you mean "You learn to appreciate the individual and understand their lifestyle choices."?

    1. evel II Fieldwork Experience EncompassHealth RehabHospital—North|Memphis, TN | Inpatient Rehab| January-March2020 High Hopes Pediatric Therapy | Monroe, LA| Pediatric Outpatient | September-December2019LevelI Fieldwork Experience Therapy Hut | Cordova, TN | Pediatric Outpatient| September 2018•Implemented pediatric OT evaluation, therapeutic stretching techniques, and the Peabody Developmental Motor Skills assessment. St. Francis Hospital | Memphis, TN | Inpatient Acute|March2019

      make a single heading "Clinical Experience" then list in reverse order by date (newest first)

    1. to best support the needs of these clients, however, would consider the population.

      unclear. revise this and fix/remove the fragment "would consider the population"

    2. When working with the pediatric population, there often wasn't research pertaining specifically to this population when dealing with medically complicated clients.

      revise. perhaps "There was a lack of research data related to pediatric clients with medical complexity"