ABOUT ME
Excellent! You did a great job of speaking in your own voice about what makes you unique. You chose some great photos to support your statements.
ABOUT ME
Excellent! You did a great job of speaking in your own voice about what makes you unique. You chose some great photos to support your statements.
grew up in a
am from a
otherwise you grew up growing up which is redundant
Resum
Resume
In your resume, add any scholarly presentations (poster sessions or published research)
During my time at PBPRI, I demonstrated the ability to apply the domain of occupational therapy into all aspects of client care. In evaluating and gathering information, I focused on asking questions in a cautious, respectful way to ensure client-centered care. When intervention planning, I focused on considering client factors, occupations, contexts, performance patterns, and performance skills. When working with one client in particular, I had to consider several factors. This client had muscular dystrophy and was unable to work due to the progression of the disease. The client expressed that she was applying for financial programs but currently relied on family to provide for her needs. She disclosed that their income was limited and that she felt uncomfortable asking for help. Many of my intervention ideas focused on using adaptive equipment for increased engagement in occupations. I had to consider her financial situation prior to recommending several types of equipment that she may not have been able to afford. I spoke with my clinical instructor (CI) about resources for free or discounted equipment. Our clinic was able to provide a free universal cuff that the client used for writing, feeding, and grooming and a button hook for dressing. This client expressed her gratitude as she was able to journal again and wear her favorite shirt with the use of this equipment. We were also able to put the client in contact with a facility that provided free equipment to those in need. By considering her financial situation, I was able to tailor my sessions to providing client-centered care for this client while finding solutions to barriers in occupational engagement. With this client, I had to consider her physical condition, contexts, and financial situation to provide the most beneficial therapy.
This is a good description of addressing the client's needs. You do need to revise some sentences here as almost every sentence begins with "during this..., While at...By considering... With this .... Fewer commas is desirable .
students s
students that I worked with show...
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text, but instead, he
text. Instead he was
activity, however, by taking this risk, we
activity. However, by taking this risk we ....
was able to assist in correcting it as well.
was also able to self-correct.
because of its
due to
situation arises within outpatient clinics often
situation often arises
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see prior comments regarding use of multiple exclamation points
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As this student did not attend the school I was at,
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My CI has commented on my ability to change the activity depending on the direction of the session throughout my time at GMSD and always appears to be impressed.
? My CI seemed to be impressed by my ability to....
As a Level II Fieldwork student,
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Through my consistency at OTF
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Although this sounds like a huge challenge,
Is this relevant? Who are you addressing? Consider starting with This experience taught me.....
to me, but at PBPRI, I no
to me. However, at PBRPI I noticed.....
In reflection, I also acknowledged strengths within my treatment planning.
revise
Through identifying this weakness, I was
By recognizing this weakness I was
weaknesses.
You are using a lot of commas that aren't necessary. Consider revising some sentences to remove pauses and using fewer "during my time at ... and While at...phrases at the beginning of your statements.
When brainstorming treatment session ideas, I preferred
During brainstorming sessions I prefer
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to myself
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strived
strove
schedule of
schedule, picking
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determined progress independently
I (rated/scored) his progress without assistance.
ave become
became (verb tense agreement)
!
You should avoid overuse of exclamation points. One per paragraph is normally the limit.
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occupation-based intervention!
Yes! OT in action. I appreciate the evidence here.
made to
made, and to
strive m
strive to make
My CI and I decided to spend our treatment time introducing a home exercise program, adaptive equipment, and other compensatory strategies for carry over into daily life
include a photo of his HEP or equipment you recommended
PBPRI,
expand acronmy the first time you introduce.
student, so I
student. I
During my rotation, several cultural holidays passed such as Halloween, Thanksgiving, Hanukkah, and Christma
Several cultural holidays passed while I was on this rotation including......
GMSD
When you introduce an acronym you should fully expand it the first time. What does GMSD mean?
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combine my creativity
a Gross Anatomy Teaching Assistant.
as a Gross Anatomy teaching assistant.
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no comma
a second year student of occupational therapy
third year student in the Masters of Occupational Therapy program at the .....
second
third
Explore this portfolio
Olivia, You did a great job of identifying evidence to support all the items on your PDE. My comments are limited but the main thing I would like you to do. Add more artifacts (photos, screenshots) that support your statements and feedback. Otherwise this is very well done!
for
can't end with this (no with, for, or to). Reword the end of the sentence. Example, "we carefully considered the costs and features for each piece of equipment that was submitted to insurance for payment."
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empower
YES!!!!!
need.
screenshot your Ipad with the software open
clients.
a sample letter would be great.
webinars
screenshot a webinar or info page
during their placement.
please add a photo of the binder!
screenshot
screenshot is missing!
nursing setting.
do you have a pic to share or a handout?
and constantly monitored
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I unfortunately was able to witness another therapist use these meetings as excuses not to see every student.
I like your example, but don't end a positive outcome with a a negative statement. Rephrase this and move it back in the paragraph. "We were not required to make up client sessions if there were meetings scheduled during their timeslot. Although some people used this as an excuse to miss sessions, I worked hard to squeeze in every student...
OTL/R
OTR/L
potential.
a picture of the schedule or a photo of sample equipment would be good here (could even be a stock phot if it matches something you did or could provide
A
Fieldwork A, I
consult and collaborate
(:
During
Joe, Although I do have suggestions and comments in this section, I want to tell you this is exactly the type of content we want to see. Personal examples, stories and reflections of your experiences. Great!!
you
a picture of the adaptive pencil would be a nice addition here.
transportation.
excellent example! this is what OT IS!
,
no comma here
My
Very nice. The photos match the content and your love for therapy is evident.
second
third. You started in Jan 2020.
Uncle
uncle - don't use cap on this unless this is your name, i.e. they call me Uncle.
second
third
parade.
As before, a picture of yourself in the parade or a photo of participants would fit well here. In general please include more photos, documents, etc. Your writing and grammar are excellent throughout!
Collaborates
Show some evidence of collaboration
-verbally
Please add a screenshot of your rating. In general, we want to see some pictures, screenshots, or attached documents in your sections. Not every section has to have this, but most should.
iPad with Language Line Solutions
A photo of the iPad you used would work well here.
friends.
Olivia, This section is well done. Since you have a photo of you and your fur baby you might want to give him(her?) a shout out!
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Emily,
This is very well done! I did notice that you do not have a link to your resume . Please add a tab at the top of your PDE and include the resume there. Awesome job!
is
will be
progress
to progress
together.
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Sometimes, in a student-mentor dynamic, it can be intimidating to provide feedback because the mentor seems like they know so much more than the student, due to having more clinical experience and practice.
consider revising as 2 sentences. You could end with feedback. The mentor seems...
clients.
Emily,
This is an opportunity to advocate to congress about the evidence and your (and other providers) concerns.
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I like these interventions!
children’s
the child's
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good problem solving!
explained
explained what we would be doing
For example, during my initial evaluation when I went to introduce myself to one of these clients, he was convinced
When I went to introduce myself to one client, he was convinced
throughout our sessions
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Resume
don't include a personal statement or observation hours in your resume
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ry to
omit "try to"
The clients I have seen become
I have seen some clients become
s.
show a link to a fact or tip sheet
n.
picture?
IPR with HH and Hom
write out these before you abbreviate. If you only use them once then abbreviations and acronyms aren't appropriate.
so
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Of course I grew frustrated and impatient, but I had to remain calm maintain
It was frustrating, but I maintained calm and professional throughout the session.
Despite her consistent refusal and inappropriate things she said to me that I may not have agreed with, I remained professional with this patient
Despite her constant resistance and the the inappropriate things she said, I remained professional.
with and provides
and who provides
I would want or I would
that I would want or would expect of someone treating one of my family members.
; however,
SNF. However,
made
made to get her to participate.
,
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among this patient’s abilities
between the client's abilities and her performance.
the more anxious she gets her O2 sat would drop significantly
her oxygen sats would drop significantly when she became anxious.
began
begun
negatives into a positive or humorous situation
turn negatives into positives, and find humor in uncomfortable or difficult situations.
y, a
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; however,
school. However,
kiddos
don't use euphemisms like kiddo, sweetie, honey, etc. These are demeaning and not appropriate for professional documentation
This meant adapting to and keeping up with the fast paced environment of the acute care setting. This includes seeing patients efficiently with evaluations, treatments, and documentation; as well as effective communication between multi-disciplines and families of the clients I work with daily. This also entails handling the patient's lines. At this time, I feel like I have met my goals, but progress can still be made. More experience will only further enhance my skills.
revise and shorten. If the sentence doesn't relate to the prompt then it isn't needed
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Conventionally,
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continued education
do you have an example of training you completed on your rotations?
endured
completed
mentoring students, performing research, publishing, presenting and/or teaching
evidence for this section should come from your FWE. Did you train CNA's or OT students? Did you conduct inservices?
ion, intervention, and
evaluation and evidence-based interventions and task modifications
external clinical evidence
these are evidence based interventions, but you article is an article on stroke stats and not intervention techniques. please revise
During my time at the University of Tennessee Health Science Center, I attended many Journal Club Roundtable Meetings held on behalf of Pi Theta Epsilon (PTE). These meetings entail open discussion of one journal article each month where students are encouraged to participate in the discussion, and review the chosen article. One meeting in particular, they held a session about utilizing APA format and how to cite correctly. I appreciated this experience and grew as I continued to attend these meetings. I will continue to grow in hopes of cultivating a strong identity as an evidence-based practitioner.
your evidence should be based on your fieldwork experiences, not on your didactic work
Every day someone is in the hospital, lying in a bed, their bodies are getting weaker. The way the client's body was functioning prior to admission into the hospital, is not the same anymore.
how is this relevant o your example? omit or revise
autonomously and effectively in a broad array of service models
You should have evidence that states how you functioned in different models, not just one setting.
responsibility for professional behavior and growth
how did you grow as a professional? Please clarify
During my time at Baptist Memorial Hospital, for my Level II B fieldwork rotation, I had the opportunity to see a variety of healthcare professionals fulfill their commitments to clients each day. In particular, healthcare practitioners engage in ethically grounded practice. Therapists carry around clipboards with their notes taken from chart reviewing, evaluations, and interventions. When we set our clipboards down, we always make sure to flip them over so that patient information is not easily available for others to see. This is just one of the many ways ethically grounded practice is practiced at my fieldwork site.
this prompt is for professional obligation to the community. These are things like inservices, trainings, and participation in state and national organizations.
For my inservice project, I decided to create a document with translated English to Spanish medical terms and phrases that could be used in evaluations and treatment sessions. This document may serve as a beneficial communication tool for therapists to utilize with clients who are Spanish speaking. This tool is to serve as an additional, more efficient, tool and not in place of interpreters.
you switch verb tenses several times. decided (past) may serve (future) and to serve(present) please clarify as one tense. Also don't split your paragraphs. I would like to see a picture of this sheet. In general, please include more pictures or examples to support your evidence
are
were verb agreement
PLOF in ADL/IADL,
you should write these abbreviations our the first time they are used (PLOF)
We utilized theraband and items with twist tops for the client to manipulate
the prompt is to consider motivation by using OCCUPATION_BASED intervention. These are exercises and activities. Please give an example of occupation-based tasks
precautions.
this entire section should be a single paragraph
I had to educate the patient and her spouse on spinal precautions; as well as how to adhere to them while engaging in functional tasks. During the evaluation I provided education as well as a handout regarding spinal precautions, including things he could do and things he should avoid for 6-8 weeks.
you basically say the same thing twice. shorten or revise. Also, you state the client is a "he" and it should be "she"
;
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Me and another student
Another student and I
utilizing, there is
utilizing it
g; h
challenging. However,
setting we
setting,
, as well as
using
;
,
ask the client is
asked the client was
(past tense verb agreement through this paragraph)
like
chose
rotation, in the acute care setting, we perform
rotation in the acute care setting, we performed
second
third
second y
third
you
to
rn m
learn from my
from
since
One example of how I was able to empower one my clients was a
I was able to empower a client who ...
off.
did you take a picture of the orthosis you made?
words
satisfaction with her progress
even constructive a dynamic, static progressive
a custom made dynamic/static-progressive
I believe this is an example of the confidence I bring to each treatment session with each client. I believe this shows my functional self-confidence and self-assurance when working with each client.
repeat sentences. revise or omit one.
I was working at
where i was working
way.
great examples!
Quickly after my observation,
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positive and applicable
restate. How is the response to the inservice " applicable"?
I was also able to present this information and educate
I provided an inservice on this topic to current
While completing my first level II fieldwork in an inpatient psychiatric unit, I was able to present and educate a variety of healthcare professionals on the importance of assertiveness training. I accomplished this through presenting an inservice presentation about assertiveness training for healthcare professionals working in an inpatient psychiatric settin
this is the same sentence restated. omit one
An example of this is provided from my discussion boards from my fieldwork rotation in hand therapy. Below, I describe working with an individual who is a blackjack dealer. I was able to gather this information from the initial evaluation. From that point, we set goals she would like to accomplish, her main goal being returning to work full time/full duty. After her goals were set, I was able to implement occupational therapy interventions with her during each session. All in all, this client was very pleased with her progress and was highly complimentary of our services.
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each of
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suggest - insert a scenario where you dealt with an ethical dilemma
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suggest - insert a photo or screenshot of the AE being used
Similar to the other student,
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I attempted to encourage this group member that this time would be different, we were available to help him, if he wanted.
different. I told him that we were available to help him if he wanted.
treatment after treatment
treatment so many times.
One group member I vividly remember expressed during
I vividly remember that one group member expressed
n in
in an inpatient
functional use of her hand in a rapid time
rapidly regain functional use of her hand.
job, however,
job. However,
.
do you have a picture of the prosthesis you were recommending?
inspire
teach
One example of this topic I experienced while completing my first Level II fieldwork rotation in an inpatient psychiatric setting. I lead
start the sentence with "While completing... setting, I lead"
I found this to be empowering, because with simple, yet effective group discussions, these clients were able to change their mindset, thus altering their engagement in meaningful occupations.
revise. I like this example and it is profound but you have too many commas. consider two or more sentences.
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where I lead
in i
in an individual's
she expressed to me how difficult it had been because she was unemployed secondary to her injuries, did not have adequate income to pay for medical care, and was uninsured, so she could not receive adequate treatment for her health problem
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problems, and she e
problems. She
on
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second
third
second
third
2nd
third
would be guaranteed to acquire the level of care she needs
would receive the assistance she needed.
reliable and I k
reliable. I knew
, however
profession. However, on occasion
to
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identified
referenced
answers, however, there
answers, and there
therapy, however, was
therapy. However, I was
and e
and to evolve
continual barriers in
continued barriers to
as
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While collaborating with PT, I brought this to attention that the
I brought this to the attention of the PT that the patient...
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Great! Well done!
nd
and can ultimately
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medications and living situations,
youth, however
youth. However,
I was working within a college town which brought people from all over, as well as being able to serve the surrounding rural areas
revise - this is not clear.