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  1. Apr 2023
    1. discovered throughout my rotation and discussed the effects on these new findings, and while also considering how to incorporate other professions.

      discovered. I discussed ....and considered how to incorporate these findings into other professions.

    2. to tie

      incorporate

    3. between

      with

    4. our

      my

    5. As a future occupational therapist, it is our

      "is my" or start with "As future OT practitioners, it is our."

    6. out.

      out?

    7. , because if we

      background. If we

    8. advocate

      advocate for

    9. finally are just at an ends

      finally hit a dead end. or finally reach a dead end.

    10. currently were

      were

    11. Unfortunately

      omit

    12. Even though as an occupational therapist in an outpatient clinic setting I am tasked to base my therapy services on related goals, however if the client and caregiver do not currently maintain a healthy balance within their own basic needs then they will not be able to perform their daily occupations.

      revise. you start a sentence with even though then add a however. Make this into several sentences or reword.

    13. unfortunately

      omit

    14. , but also to

      clients and caregivers

    1. ETHICALLY GROUNDED PROFESSIONALWITH A STRONG OT IDENTITY

      Rachel,

      This entire section is excellent. You did a great job of addressing the prompts and you have no significant grammar errors

    1. for.

      dont end with a proposition

    2. where a minute or rating

      where the 8 minute rule applied or where a complexity rating

    3. thorough chart review

      Yay!

    4. and f

      and as a

    5. models.

      show a picture of a n assessment or tool you used independently

    6. then complete have them complete

      revise

    7. 1x/week

      once a week

    8. at Feltz Therapy Services,

      omit

    9. continuously

      omit

    10. neglected or underrepresented

      do you have a specific case you can share?

    1. giving me

      I was thankful for the chance

    2. y, however

      therapy. However,

    3. factor

      goal

    4. When placed at an inpatient hospital for a clinical rotation there are many different clients that will come in and out,

      revise

    5. higher complexity demanded

      more complex and demanding tasks

    6. In regards to their progress at therapy, it had greatly increased

      Their progress in therapy icreased

    7. motivation

      motivated

    8. roblems, howeve

      problems. However,

    9. client and appropriate

      client, and included appropriate

    10. task, h

      task. However,

    11. from

      on

    12. this

      clarify. the preschool

    13. the long road in

      omit

    14. life, as well

      life. I also had to reassure my PT partner that...

    15. they

      them

    16. was unfortunately very upset by this situation due to being unable

      was upset that he wouldn't be able to...

    17. nstant

      instance

    18. ty, ho

      . However,

    19. pregnant and right after birth was scheduled

      pregnant. Shortly after the baby's due date the client was scheduled....

    20. heavily

      select a more appropriate adjective for late term pregnancy

    21. l, they

      well. They

    22. This inspiration in confidence

      Inspiring confidence

    23. The majority of my role in this setting required for me to provide the confidence

      My role in this setting was to instill confidence in ....

    24. ,

      omit coma

    25. had

      hand

    26. At Encompass Health Inpatient Hospital,

      In my acute rotation

    27. many ranging

      a range of

    28. The main

      A primary

    29. they would apply them better

      to apply them

    30. would

      will

    31. By allowing

      Allowing

    32. participation in their

      omit

    33. Though I am on the path to becoming a trained professional with a deal of understanding the biomechanics complexities that they required in order to achieve their goals, I did include the caregiver in the decision making process for what they believed to be of most value to the client's progress.

      Revise. You arent on a path to be a therapist, you are at the finish line waiting to pass your boards. Star with "Although I have understanding of the ....."

    34. good efforts to their

      progress with their

    35. promote a balance within their development

      I don't understand this? clarify

    36. balance within our occupations

      balance of occupations

    37. LeBonheur Outpatient

      my outpatient fieldwork site

    38. they

      clients

    39. at the time I had scheduled to see them on those particular days.

      state, which varied throughout the day.

    40. them

      the client

    41. cognition

      cognitive

    42. Encompass Health

      my acute rotation

    43. ​There are many key elements that are derived together for a successful therapy journey with one of the most important ones is effective communication between the therapist and client

      verb changes and clarity

    44. to better appreciate these complex influences daily with every patient on my caseload.

      revise

    45. out best that the client

      split. "it worked out for the best. The client started receiving ...."

    46. up, however

      up. However,

    47. service and this greatly renders

      service that greatly hindered

    48. brachial plexus that

      brachial plexus injury that

    49. Even when these patients are able to attend a session, does not mean they do not have other socio-cultural factors that will influence their engagement as some of them come from a lower education background

      revise

    50. speak

      speaking

    51. This population has to choose some days which are the most important things in their day to day lives and

      This population may be struggling.....

    52. Bonheur Outpatient Clinic

      avoid using site specific information. Say instead: during my outpatient pediatric rotation, during my inpatient acute rotation, etc.

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    1. hope to work in a setting that I can excel myself.

      plan to work in a setting where I can excel.

    1. OCCUPATION AND CLIENT-CENTERED ​​PRACTITIONER

      Rachel, Throughout the PDE I would like to see a few artifacts. These can be photos, pieces of equipment, copies of handouts, etc. that support your fieldwork stories

    2. is important to be able to modify the information gathered not just during the initial evaluation, but in the following treatment sessions, to continue to implement interventions that are appropriate and challenging to the patient.

      maybe two sentences? this is choppy

    3. create activities

      I want to see this! Do you have a pic?

    4. collaborated

      collaborate

    5. might have some

      may have

    6. potentially

      potential

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    1. As I complete my Level II Fieldwork Rotations,

      this is unnecessary as they are already finished. Just state I am interested in ...

    1. She became extremely nervous when I mentioned standing up and reported that she was unable to do so but I explained to her that we would not let her do anything she could not handle but it is important to begin moving as soon as possible.

      make this 2 sentences

    2. ef

      affects

    3. During my Level II B rotation at West Florida Hospital

      throughout the APDE, avoid using specific site info. Say during my acute care rotation, during my pediatric outpatient rotation , etc

    1. information.

      I am proud of you! This is a great example of how students can be teachers.

    2. thorough chart review

      Yes!!!!

    3. level II fieldwork A experience at Tennova North Knoxville Medical Center, I

      acute care rotation, I

    4. with treating clients have challenges with sensory processing

      revise

    1. extremely

      omit

    2. with discussing

      discussing

    3. Since this was the case with pediatrics,

      you talk about acute, then pivot back to pediatrics without defining what "this" means

    4. than the client

      omit

    5. In my Level II fieldwork A acute care, I

      In my first fieldwork I

    6. can have an impact on their children significantly

      can have a significant impact on their children

    7. treatment

      session

    8. treatments

      co-treatments

    9. Level II fieldwork experience at Blount Memorial pediatric outpatient clinic

      outpatient pediatric rotation

    10. gave me

      gain

    11. of which

      One of these relationships was with a .....

    12. Since growing up in Knoxville, I have had relationships with a variety of people over the years but when I moved back, I decided it would be in my best interest to rekindle the relationships with people that I know in the field of rehabilitation.

      revise as two sentences

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    1. RESUME

      your resume is good. You do need to clean up the alignment in a couple of places where your margins are different.

    1. ractice

      document

    2. rotation at Simple Strokes.

      outpatient pediatric rotation

    3. There,

      omit

    4. hands, the biomechanical approach was primarily used

      hands primarily used the biomechanical frame of reference

    5. separately

      omit

    6. UTHSC students consistently seem more prepared

      you should be proud of this. you are the reason this occurs!

    7. During my time at Simple Strokes, I had the opportunity to co-treat with PTs.

      In outpatient pediatrics I

    8. board with certain shaped holes

      show me! post a picture

    9. hand therapy

      how did you advocate for her? did you go to the ins co. , physician, case manager?

    10. about a women that I shared about

      revise the wording

    1. For

      Again here we need evidence from fieldwork. It can be an inservice or handout from a presentation you attended or led. Also any supervision of another student, tech, or OTA .

    2. goal.

      Good!

    3. effects

      impacts

    4. andouts and protocols

      please post one as evidence

    5. for additional exercise

      omit

    6. e

      care,

    7. Southern Hand Center

      my outpatient pediatric rotation

    8. it help the child to not regress as much.

      revise

    9. flare

      flare up

    10. I used used the information I learned with the patient I encountered.

      ? revise

    11. Invests in the acquisition of evidence through participation in workshops, continued education and pursuit of additional degrees.

      this is good, but we are specifically looking at what you did during fieldwork to meet this prompt. Did you give an inservice , attend a class, of create a handout with evidence in a condition or intervention.

    1. her her

      to the mother

    2. Additionally, I was able to clients through my advocacy for them when neede

      ? revise

    3. seem as if they hav

      seems as if it has

    4. For individuals at the Simple Strokes, my

      My role

    5. new diagnosis as their lives

      new diagnosis and their life

    6. tasks with ease

      show an example of the splint

    7. atera

      collateral

    8. Southern Hand Center

      outpatient pediatrics

    9. appropriately.

      professionally.

      This is a good piece of evidence!

    10. humor to diffuse tension.

      a more specific example would be good here

    11. at Simple Stroke

      omit

    12. with.

      dont end a sentence with a preposition

    13. anywhere from

      omit

    14. By the last four weeks of my fieldwork, I had taken on the full student caseload, including evaluations and documentation, without requiring my fieldwork educators to edit/make corrections for grammar or language.

      revise as two sentences

    15. I then made changed according

      made changes

    16. In the future of my OT career, I

      As an OT I will....

    17. including

      and

    18. it makes me

      use "I" instead

    19. Traditionally

      is this a tradition?

    1. use deep pressure

      use of deep pressure

    2. gai

      gain

    3. throughout

      you have used this twice in the same sentence. revise or change the word

    4. Considers client motivation when using occupation based intervention to maximize functional independence.

      include an artifact like a visual schedule here

    5. At Southern Hands,

      In my outpatient pediatric rotation

    6. PAMS

      spell out any acronyms when they are first introduced

    7. Additionally, during my rotation at Simple Strokes outpatient pediatrics

      During my outpatient pediatrics rotation

      dont identify specific clinics in the APDE

    8. Communicates effectively with a wide range of clients, peers, and professionals both verbally and non-verbally.

      can you give a specific example of when you used nonverbal communication with a client?

    9. verbal and nonverbal

      verbally and nonverbally

    10. Most commonly seen are lateral epicondylitis, carpal tunnel syndrome, and DeQuervain’s tenosynovitis.

      fragment. please revise

    1. By being

      Being

    2. take

      receive or process

    3. heir

      the

    4. During my level II B fieldwork experience in Pediatrics at Blount Memorial,

      revise

    5. Ever sinc

      After I implemented

    6. thoroughly

      effectively

    7. level II fieldwork B experience at Blount Memorial

      rotation in a pediatric...

    8. with

      at

    9. inspiration, and confidence with empathy and perseverance

      revise. Do you mean inspiration and confidence can come through empathy and perseverance?

    10. from me

      omit

    11. From starting out sessions with significant

      revise this

    12. Over the period of a couple weeks,

      Over time her independence....

    13. Level II A

      I will not highlight all of these, but remove them throughout the APDE.

    14. word

      words

    15. HEP

      Home Exercise Program (HEP) the first time you use an acronym.

    16. level II fieldwork B

      omit

    17. Once

      After

    18. bathroom, and I suddenly sprang

      bathroom. I sprang into action

    19. injury to

      omit

    20. fieldwork at Tennova North Medical Center in Knoxville, TN,

      During my other fieldwork I was ....

    21. Blount Memorial Pediatric

      Throughout the APDE you need to avoid identifying your fieldwork sites. You can say " my acute care fieldwork, my outpatient fieldwork, but don't identify by name or specific location.

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    1. I am starting my level II fieldwork rotations soon in acute care and early intervention back in my hometown, Knoxville, TN, and I can't wait for all my new adventures!

      all of the PDE should use past tense verbage: I completed, I performed, I observed, I taught, etc.

    2. two year

      first two years

    3. second

      third

    4. ,

      .