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town that's called
either " a little town in Obion County" or "a little place called Obion County"
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Despite all my concerns
This truly was a very challenging situation. You handled it with grace and poise and made all of the faculty proud. Standing up for yourself is important and you have demonstrated your character throughout the process. Excellent!!
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However,
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As I progressed during my rotation, during the last few weeks
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corrections on
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Welcome
Your third section of professional development (evidence-based scholarly clinician) is not opening (check the link)
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swinging
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when overstimulated
when he appeared to be overstimulated
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comments
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everyone
copy of your request (redacted to deidentify the client)
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doctor. However,
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I gave him a “special” box that he could put the nerf bullet in and allowed it to stay on the table so that he did not feel like it was taken away, but it was no longer going to interfere with his ability to participate.
somehow this reads like you have two subjects (giving a box, describing your rationale for taking the nerf bullet). maybe two sentences or revise
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device. However, he was
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caregivers
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In this profession it is important to always keep the client’s occupation, values and beliefs in mind when creating treatment plans. When completing my adults outpatient rotation I always made sure to ask lots of questions regarding the client’s job and leisure activities to help develop a thorough occupational profile. I would use this information to then create treatment plans that were meaningful to the client. There were also occasions where I would give home exercise programs to clients and if there was an item needed for the exercises that the clinic could not provide, I would work with them to find an item that they had at home that they could use rather than suggesting they go and purchase an item to be respectful of different socioeconomic statuses. Below I have included a screenshot from my final fieldwork performance evaluation from my outpatient adults rotation that shows I received a four on my final for respect for diversity factors.
consider changing you font or line spacing. Yhe letters almost overlap and it looks cramped. Usually we want 1.5 or double-spaced lines.
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care.
include some form of evidence. photo of HEP you used, etc. This will be a general request throughout. We want to see the AE you made , presentations you led or attended, feedback from CIs for each topic or something that supports your story.
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stack 4 or more blocks
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understanding
excellent example here!
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Dynavision
picture of the Dynavision board
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my FWE told me how impressed she was that I was able to do so!
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With lots of generational difference jokes, he
We told lots of generational jokes and he eventually became
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therapist
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I remember after transferring an individual who had a history of spinal stenosis and had undergone a stroke was so surprised I was able to support him enough to complete the transfer.
undergone a stroke that he was so surprised
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he was playin
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Great!! I am proud of you for being an advocate for OT
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Family Guided Routines Based Intervention
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my perspective
this is the point of fieldwork, experience, and training. It is excellent to see you making this connection now. Many practitioners struggle to connect trauma to occupational engagement and performance.
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situation
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With the guidance and close direction of my FWE,
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ethical dilemma
dilemma. an ethical dilemma is when there is are two choices and both will be harmful to a patient (mom and fetus are in distress. Saving mom means abortion, but not providing abortion may be fatal to both)
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even though she was not hurting him with malicious or harmful intent
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distress. This was likely due to
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My level II fieldwork rotations were very different in the sense that age population and diagnoses varied, but were similar in that I utilized appropriate assessments and client interviews to gather information and create plans of care to promote overall health and wellness with the use of activity analysis and occupation- based direct services.
long sentence. maybe shorten or split into two
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functional play skills!
evidence needed (could be simply a play ball)
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praised my consistency
evidence from FWE rating or a copy of the Falls scale
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to be compared with late
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While at Encompass Health, there were several programs that therapists were in charge of (hip fracture, stroke, brain injury, amputation, etc.)
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Maslow's hierarchy
Mikayla,
I am impressed by your empathy and growth in this area. Maybe stick a photo of Maslow's heiarchy as evidence
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plastic dart board
include a photo of a dartboard (maybe even a bullseye!)
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simulated grocery store
photo!
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basic meal planning template
add a snapshot, or photo. Throughout your PDE we wan to SEE some artifact or evidence that you met these criteria. Your grammar has been excellent to this point, so all of my comments have been to include photos, screenshots of feedback, AE you used, etc.
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occupations each day.
evidence (photo, screenshot of CI feedback, etc.)
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play and social interactions.
include some evidence of this (photo of a communication board or you kneeling beside a client, etc.)
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RESUME
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national associations
show a few certificates here.
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happy medium.
this is a hard skill to master. good job!
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as successful
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nighttime extension splint
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One specific client
I had one specific client
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workplace.
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remember working with a student in the school system, and
had a student who did not want to....
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it can show
you can show it
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in replacement of honest
as a replacement for honesty.
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so I always made physical activity a priority sometime
mentally. I make physical activity a priority in my day.
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Being aware of this weakness allowed me to grow in that moment and help form me into an OT who this may not be a weakness for long
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She knows her anatomy and implements that into her evaluation process. Megan quickly understood the purposes of special testing for the wrist and shoulder. She is able to perform special tests on patient's wrists to determine what may be the cause of their pain.”
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Exceptional. Applies immediately and never needs repeating”
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constructive
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At the end of both rotations, I provided my educators with feedback they could use for future students. At the end of my last rotation,
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During my level 2 fieldwork rotations, I have been
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presenting an Inservice
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“Megan has a good understanding of basing intervention plans around the patient’s occupation”. My other fieldwork educator in the school system stated, “Megan is very client centered in her approach”.
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Indiana Hand Protocol, the Diagnosis and Treatment Manual for Physicians and Therapists, and the Hand and Upper Extremity Rehabilitation books
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the best care
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Megan is very advanced in her understanding of the evaluation process. Hand therapy is a specialized field and there is a lot to learn. Megan quickly understood the purposes of special testing for the wrist and shoulder. She is able to perform special tests on patient's wrists to determine what may be the cause of their pain. She is utilizing protocols and research to determine progression of treatment plans.”
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professionalism
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once told me about clients writing performance evaluations during their treatment sessions writing
told me that during their evaluation session a client wrote
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educators saying, “Megan is dependable and prepared. She has had to show a tremendous amount of flexibility these last six weeks and has taken on the challenges given to her” on one occasion.
educators stating on one occasion "Megan....to her".
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conveying the best needs for my clients to ensure
conveying the needs of my clients and to ensure
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meetings. Because
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Megan has had the opportunity to work with a variety of cultural, beliefs, and socioeconomic backgrounds. She treats all with dignity and respects and invests time in understand what is important and valuable to others”
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that was also productive for her to continue to promote
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story about animals
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Megan is able to use a variety of models to support a child”.
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He is so knowledgeable about animals, and I have used animals show how, some way in every session because it motivates him.
I don' t understand this sentence?? revise . He is knowledgeable about animals. I used them in every session because it motivated him.
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A lot of students we have, we are just working on engagement with them.
We work on engagement with a lot of students.
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confidence and just might be
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I have always wanted to provide anyone I am around with
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Megan is very good at communication in both verbal and nonverbal manners. It has been noted from staff she works with her pleasant nature. She has even communicated in Spanish with a patient and his family”
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lifespan.
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Excellent! You did a great job of speaking in your own voice about what makes you unique. You chose some great photos to support your statements.
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grew up in a
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In your resume, add any scholarly presentations (poster sessions or published research)
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During my time at PBPRI, I demonstrated the ability to apply the domain of occupational therapy into all aspects of client care. In evaluating and gathering information, I focused on asking questions in a cautious, respectful way to ensure client-centered care. When intervention planning, I focused on considering client factors, occupations, contexts, performance patterns, and performance skills. When working with one client in particular, I had to consider several factors. This client had muscular dystrophy and was unable to work due to the progression of the disease. The client expressed that she was applying for financial programs but currently relied on family to provide for her needs. She disclosed that their income was limited and that she felt uncomfortable asking for help. Many of my intervention ideas focused on using adaptive equipment for increased engagement in occupations. I had to consider her financial situation prior to recommending several types of equipment that she may not have been able to afford. I spoke with my clinical instructor (CI) about resources for free or discounted equipment. Our clinic was able to provide a free universal cuff that the client used for writing, feeding, and grooming and a button hook for dressing. This client expressed her gratitude as she was able to journal again and wear her favorite shirt with the use of this equipment. We were also able to put the client in contact with a facility that provided free equipment to those in need. By considering her financial situation, I was able to tailor my sessions to providing client-centered care for this client while finding solutions to barriers in occupational engagement. With this client, I had to consider her physical condition, contexts, and financial situation to provide the most beneficial therapy.
This is a good description of addressing the client's needs. You do need to revise some sentences here as almost every sentence begins with "during this..., While at...By considering... With this .... Fewer commas is desirable .
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was able to assist in correcting it as well.
was also able to self-correct.
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because of its
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situation arises within outpatient clinics often
situation often arises
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My CI has commented on my ability to change the activity depending on the direction of the session throughout my time at GMSD and always appears to be impressed.
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Although this sounds like a huge challenge,
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to me. However, at PBRPI I noticed.....
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In reflection, I also acknowledged strengths within my treatment planning.
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Through identifying this weakness, I was
By recognizing this weakness I was
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weaknesses.
You are using a lot of commas that aren't necessary. Consider revising some sentences to remove pauses and using fewer "during my time at ... and While at...phrases at the beginning of your statements.
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When brainstorming treatment session ideas, I preferred
During brainstorming sessions I prefer
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I (rated/scored) his progress without assistance.
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occupation-based intervention!
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made to
made, and to
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My CI and I decided to spend our treatment time introducing a home exercise program, adaptive equipment, and other compensatory strategies for carry over into daily life
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PBPRI,
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student, so I
student. I
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During my rotation, several cultural holidays passed such as Halloween, Thanksgiving, Hanukkah, and Christma
Several cultural holidays passed while I was on this rotation including......
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GMSD
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a Gross Anatomy Teaching Assistant.
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a second year student of occupational therapy
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Olivia, You did a great job of identifying evidence to support all the items on your PDE. My comments are limited but the main thing I would like you to do. Add more artifacts (photos, screenshots) that support your statements and feedback. Otherwise this is very well done!
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can't end with this (no with, for, or to). Reword the end of the sentence. Example, "we carefully considered the costs and features for each piece of equipment that was submitted to insurance for payment."
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empower
YES!!!!!
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need.
screenshot your Ipad with the software open
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clients.
a sample letter would be great.
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webinars
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during their placement.
please add a photo of the binder!
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screenshot
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nursing setting.
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I unfortunately was able to witness another therapist use these meetings as excuses not to see every student.
I like your example, but don't end a positive outcome with a a negative statement. Rephrase this and move it back in the paragraph. "We were not required to make up client sessions if there were meetings scheduled during their timeslot. Although some people used this as an excuse to miss sessions, I worked hard to squeeze in every student...
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a picture of the schedule or a photo of sample equipment would be good here (could even be a stock phot if it matches something you did or could provide
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Joe, Although I do have suggestions and comments in this section, I want to tell you this is exactly the type of content we want to see. Personal examples, stories and reflections of your experiences. Great!!
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transportation.
excellent example! this is what OT IS!
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Very nice. The photos match the content and your love for therapy is evident.
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third. You started in Jan 2020.
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Uncle
uncle - don't use cap on this unless this is your name, i.e. they call me Uncle.
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parade.
As before, a picture of yourself in the parade or a photo of participants would fit well here. In general please include more photos, documents, etc. Your writing and grammar are excellent throughout!
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Collaborates
Show some evidence of collaboration
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-verbally
Please add a screenshot of your rating. In general, we want to see some pictures, screenshots, or attached documents in your sections. Not every section has to have this, but most should.
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iPad with Language Line Solutions
A photo of the iPad you used would work well here.
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friends.
Olivia, This section is well done. Since you have a photo of you and your fur baby you might want to give him(her?) a shout out!
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Emily,
This is very well done! I did notice that you do not have a link to your resume . Please add a tab at the top of your PDE and include the resume there. Awesome job!
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Sometimes, in a student-mentor dynamic, it can be intimidating to provide feedback because the mentor seems like they know so much more than the student, due to having more clinical experience and practice.
consider revising as 2 sentences. You could end with feedback. The mentor seems...
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Emily,
This is an opportunity to advocate to congress about the evidence and your (and other providers) concerns.
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I like these interventions!
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