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  1. Apr 2023
    1. Even though it would not harm the clients or insurance companies, I felt that it would give an unrealistic reflection of how productive I was being during the day and could also lead to bad habits in other settings.

      This is excellent. It is important to maintain honesty and integrity in all situations and billing fraud is a serious crime, regardless of the amount.

    2. Actively participates in leadership or supportive roles in local, state, and/or national associations.

      include an artifact of a copy of your AOTA or TNOTA cards

    3. Level II A

      omit

    4. recently

      omit

    5. FWE

      as above

    6. Takes risks to maximize outcomes.

      include an artifact here. A picture of a lfexor tendon blocking splint or a picture of a postsurgical scar would be effective

    7. FWE

      fieldwork educator

    8. Level II B

      omit

    9. Level II A Fieldwork at NMMC,

      acute care rotation

    10. experience

      encounter

    11. FWE

      spell out

    12. During my level II fieldwork at North Mississippi Medical Center (NMMC) in Tupelo, MS.

      Don't include the actual site name and location. Stay generic "my acute hospital rotation"

    13. conditions, and at first, I was intimidated

      conditions. At first I was intimidated.

    14. confidence in myself to where I was presenting

      confidence in myself to present myself......

    15. at NMMC

      omit

    16. level II fieldwork in Tupelo, MS

      acute care rotation

    17. ometimes that

      clarify. "that" do you mean some things will be out of your control? If so revise.

    18. FWE

      spell out

    19. Demonstrates the ability to give constructive and timely feedback.

      good! This is another place where an artifact or picture would enhance the description. This is really more for aesthetics so that the overall Weebly is attractive.

    1. OT; therefore, I

      "OT. Therefore, I also"

    2. Level II B fieldwork

      see above

    3. Level II B Fieldwork.

      here and throughout the Weebly, say "my hand rotation" or "my acute rotation" as level IIB doesn't mean anything to other readers. It is and sounds like professional jargon.

    4. Collaborates with clients and caregivers in establishing and maintaining a balance of pleasurable, productive, and restful occupations to promote health and prevent disease and disability.

      this is a great example. It would be good to add a picture of a task he performed or of a person hitting a backhand playing pickleball (can be a stock photo).

    5. of.

      don't end a sentence with a preposition

    6. AOTA FWPE

      see above

    7. RN, MD, SLP, PT, OTA, PTA,

      spell out or revise Registered Nurse (RN) or nursing, Medical Doctor (MD) or physicians, etc.

    8. had the opportunity to have near constant practice with

      I continuously practiced

    9. ROM/strength

      spell out acronmys the first time they are used ie. Range Of Motion (ROM).

  2. morganmillsfuturemot.weebly.com morganmillsfuturemot.weebly.com
    1. because I value the short gift of life,

      revise. It reads as " a short gift" instead of the precious or wondrous or other term .

  3. Jun 2022
    1. AOTA and TNOTA

      post a snapshot or pic of your OTA or TNOTA membership cards

    2. I was

      omit

    3. dailywith

      daily with

    4. It has

      It had

    5. I usually don't respond to this behavior or

      omit. You say I don't respond, then you say you respond.

    6. have.

      give a specific example as evidence

    7. The slower paced and the positive environment and fieldwork

      The slower pace, positive environment, and supportive fieldwork educator....

    8. I would make a list of bullet points to refer to during times of unease and stress during my acute care fieldwork to refer to in between patients as needed

      I made a list........as needed.

    9. is

      was (verb agreement)

    10. than work

      include a photo of you performing a fun activity

    11. more

      omit this word

    12. One of the critiques in particular

      One critique included

    13. remains to be a skill I strive to work on

      are skills I am still working to master.

    1. best available external clinical evidence.

      Rachel,

      Here we are looking for an example where you used research to inform your practice. The example of the Qigong article would be appropriate here.

    2. continuing education classes

      post a certificate or handout from one of these

    1. example home exercise program

      great!! please post a photo or copy of the HEP

    2. google translate

      capitalize. also, show a screenshot of the app as your evidence

    1. ,

      no comma

    2. active and he will still be able to participate any most activities, but

      active, that he will still be able to participate in most activities, but it

    3. more.

      please post a pic of a checklist or activity you did with the patients (can be stock photos or images if you didn't have a picture from the facility)

    4. For the front and CSU unit, many patients came in with

      Many patients in the Front and CSU units had depression, bipolar disorder, or schizophrenia ...

    5. patient may

      patients

  4. Apr 2022
  5. shelbyot.weebly.com shelbyot.weebly.com
    1. Resume

      Education and fieldwork rotations should be listed with the current or most recent item first and older items below (newest to oldest).

    1. I rarely felt guilty assisting patients with whatever it was that they asked within reason because I always viewed it as “well what if this was my mother/father/brother” I know that I would want a healthcare provider to just go one step further with their care to make my loved one feel a little more at ease. 

      end with within reason. I always viewed this as "...". I know

    2. times. That’s where all their belongings are,

      times, as this is where their belongings are and this is where they sleep.

    3. behavior, a couple times though

      behavior a few times though, I

    4. those professions as a whole, but I did witness few members of each profession sort of

      other professions, but some seemed almost robotic when...

    5. members.

      maybe share a screenshot of feedback from a CI

    6. perspective almos

      perspective with was almost.....she wasn't alone.

    7. I had

      I only had

    8. physically watch caregivers relax

      I watched caregivers visibly relax

    9. Sara Stedy.

      post a photo

    10. Though the reward of a patient being grateful for the opportunity to move around out of their bed significantly outweighed the strenuous amount of labor I would perform for their benefit.  

      fragment

    11. tension.

      share a joke as evidence

    12. weeks and it was

      weeks. They said "So

    13. commitments.

      show a photo of a workout activity here

    14. This was my favorite part- when you get home- you’re

      My favorite part was that when you get home you're

    15. spirits, I

      spirits and I

    16. egan going after the workday

      started going after the end of the workday.

    17. The start of all major life changing events can really send a person spiraling quite quickly

      A life changing event can quickly cause a person's life to spiral out of control.

    18. My strength for both sites and

      A strength for both sites, and

    19. me

      omit

    20. handling/communicating/challenging

      handling and communicating with challenging children. OR handling, communicating with, and challenging children.

    21. management patient’s

      manage the patient's

    22. half, I

      half. I

    23. rarely believe

      struggle to believe

    24. session inste

      session. Instead, I

    25. then would

      and would then

    26. wasn’t not

      was not or wasn't

    27. For weeks

      For many weeks or For several weeks

    28. seeked

      sought

    29. s

      12-weeks by maintaining

    30. stronger

      into strengths.

    31. notes, s

      notes. She

    32. All around

      omit

    33. for her that will help her help her

      revise. this is 3 hers and 2 helps in 8 words.

    1. well-informed

      post a pic or description of PANDAS

    2. c

      the children

    3. to do

      to continue to do

    4. day and that

      day. That

    5. did my own research in my free time

      I had time to do my own research when the

    6. ,

      no comma

    7. still becoming known to doctors to diagnosis.

      revise

    8. r), th

      r). This

    9. /

      / or anything

    10. ednesday, so my

      Wednesday. My instructor

    11. the kids to the other students.

      other students about their clients.

    12. professions. I was

      professions, I

    13. c

      had observed the children

    14. for varying weeks at a time

      omit

    15. could and then see as much movement from the patient that they would allow at the time

      could, and then observe them perform as many occupations as possible in the time allotted.

    16. all

      structures". All of these put

    17. It was my job as an OT to gather as much helpful

      to gather relevant information about the patient, so that when an OTA

    18. clinical evidence

      add a photo of a sliding board

    19. they

      she

    20. Since I have a Bachelor of Science degree in Exercise Science and have spent a lot of time working out in the gym;

      not needed in this sentence.

    21. was having a progress note coming up. T

      had a progress report due.

    22. research medication discovery of Zolgensma

      discovery of the research medication Zolgensma,

    23. an evidence based approach to practice.

      post a safety protocol ar fall risk sheet as evidence

    24. he nursing staff will

      how much assistance the client would need to be able to safely transfer back to bed.

    25. would perform

      performed

    26. for when they leave

      omit

    27. and though I’m sure they wouldn’t not want to hear about how tired they are going to feel once they leave.

      fragment. Start another sentence or omit

    28. mainly

      primary ?

    29. ity, b

      opportunity. But still I

    30. where

      were

    31. heavily stumbled upon my

      struggled with my

    32. ues; h

      techniques. However,

    33. causing them to cut it off

      and need to be cut

    34. an s

      beautician. She

    35. ut it s

      it, some

    36. by the end of it

      omit

    1. /o

      restroom and by only

    2. /me

      possible, by me

    3. I talk about how I usually was met with a negative response from most of my patients initially, but then after explaining to them what OT truly focuses on and the things we could work on simply in their room. T

      about how I would often experience a negative response when first approaching the client, but their demeanor would change once I explained what OT was and how I could help them.

    4. our conversations education the patient they would

      our conversation regarding AE education, the patient would

    5. d; in

      planned. Instead, we

    6. Though in the moment I would become extremely agitated, hindsight 20/20 being so adjusted to being adjustable is a skill I now have.

      this is three fragments . Revise for clarity. In hindsight, these experiences taught me to be adaptable.

      In this paragraph you use adjustable, but I think the better word is adaptable

    7. k,

      omit comma

    8. It was after this event when I knew in my gut that I truly can

      After this event I knew in my gut that I could

    9. Had I not entered the room, attempted to arouse this patient, and the guest to see something was wrong from the patient not arousing, none of us know how it could’ve turned out in a different scenario.

      revise. You switch from your action to the visitors response, to speculation about the situation. If your point is that this could have been a negative outcome just say that.

    10. e, a

      omit comma

    11. cried and cried

      cry and cry

    12. since the code team arrived, and I

      once the code team arrived. I knew

    13. ,

      happened and she

    14. ,

      omit comma

    15. Unfortunately, things would go wrong for me too. P

      For example, a patient's

    16. He appeared asleep, so I announced my presence, I turned on the lights, I called his name out slowly getting louder in my voice projection, I performed sternal rubs and was about to apply a cold washcloth to his head to help wake this gentleman up.

      this is two or three different sentences in one

    17. Again though, with more

      With each mistake came more opportunities to learn, and I grew more sure of myself.

    18. ight my wrong

      correct my mistake.

    19. would ask

      asked

    20. , it’s

      subsided. It's

    21. 0

      say "no" or "zero"

    22. , so that my patients knew that I meant business when it was time to work.

      level. the rest is a fragment

    23. sweater

      sweatier

    24. hey tell me

      and they are telling me

    25. So, for

      For years

    26. school s

      school, society

    27. e s

      complete OT school

    28. f, get out of your comfort zone, and with a preplanned end date in sit

      challenge yourself and get out of your comfort zone.

    29. reason,

      reason. I

    30. tion, t

      rotation. This

    31. Represents the unique perspective

      you are talking about advocacy, but the prompt is about you modeling or talking about the distinctiveness of OT. Maybe you could share how you spoke to a MD or other provider about discharge plans or some unique skill OT brings to the team.

    32. was complete with

      had completed

    33. ns if a doctor were to interrupt

      evaluations, if a doctor were to interrupt, some

    34. box

      I would like to see a pic of this too!

    35. mid-sizes

      mid-sized

    36. p, n

      up and nail

    37. p, t

      top. They

    38. DIY Therapy Carrots.

      post a picture of a therapy carrot please!

    39. life, t

      life. There

    40. Having the patient repeatedly perform certain self-care tasks helps solidify his ability to care for himself regardless of how much or how little the caregivers assist.

      this is a fragment

    41. constantly

      regularly

    42. no matter how frequently he doesn’t show up

      omit

    43. simply

      omit

    44. Granted I do not know what exactly is happening behind closed doors, but I do know that I saw enough evidence for major red flags to be shown.

      careful here. This is close to an accusation of incompetence by CPS. Better to stay objective. "Because I felt strongly about these red flags, I talked at length..."

    45. does not appear to ever

      doesn't take

    46. I believed that

      remove this. "this was great since there were likely..."

    47. board post asking about an ethical dilemma we encountered during the two 12-week rotations

      board post describing an ethical dilemma I encountered during fieldwork. (always stay with the singular first person) This is your unique story!

    1. directions are tasks therefore we were left to only provide sensory input.

      directions and we were only able to focus on sensory input.

    2. and surprisingly weather played a part too.

      schedules. Surprisingly, weather played a part too.

    3. challenging to find the just right challenge

      difficult to find the just right challenge

    4. site, becoming proficient at challenging the patients here was a greater challenge surprisingly.

      site. This second part needs revision. Make an new sentence that clarifies what you are trying to say.

    5. patient.

      include some evidence in each section when possible. These can be fieldwork evaluation comments, photos or charts, AE, or similar artifacts

    6. ,

      omit comma

    7. So,

      So we

    8. that we tested the reflexes on, and he was positive for most of them.

      that tested positive for most of these reflexes.

    9. our

      omit

    10. here the

      there, the

    11. encountered while

      worked with

    12. OT and PT would then discuss what they

      The PT and I would then discuss what we individually....

    13. most of the time

      Start the sentence "Most of the time I would.....

  6. shelbyot.weebly.com shelbyot.weebly.com
    1. I just completed my two 12-week Level 2 rotations one is in an inpatient acute care setting and the other is an outpatient pediatric clinic. One of these I am overjoyed to experience and the other terrifies me, but I know that I will be a better/stronger OT when it's all said and done. I am very proud to reflect on how I have changed and grown at end of these two rotations

      you switch back and forth between past, present, and past tense in the same paragraph. Switch to all past tense for clarity since these experiences are over.