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  1. Apr 2020
    1. h.

      include a photo of the team, or poster, etc.

    2. One client, in particular, comes to mind to provide a specific example.

      omit

    3. add a pic of your certificate

    1. a lot of her difficulties were behavior-related, as well

      many of her difficulties were behavior-related.

    2. A lot o

      Some of

    3. Houstyn,

      You should list other leadership like RKS as well.

    4. before and he

      before. He

    5. of wearing a jacket during therapy after expressing being cold

      of providing him a jacket when he had expressed being cold so many times before.

    6. time, he

      time he

    7. for

      to

    8. therapy and then it spiraled from there into needing to lay down and over-working himself

      therapy. He would then become focused on lying down and work himself into a state of mental and physical exhaustion.

    9. himself.

      for himself.

    10. became frustrated with us quickly and told us that we didn't have his feelings and

      quickly became frustrated, said we did not care about his feelings, and

    11. adamant on not doing

      adamantly against doing

    12. him and h

      him, and

    13. isn't short of work ethic and is

      wasn't short of work ethic and was

    14. job and they basically made him slow

      job, but his employer pushed him to slow down and retire.

    15. worked 105-hour weeks before

      used to work 105-hour weeks.

    16. visit and would talk to him and to us and they told us how hard of a worker he is

      visit. They would speak with him and they told us that he was a hard worker.

    17. increase

      to increase

    18. the

      omit

    19. Especially for the kiddos with sensory processing dysfunction, there are a lot of preparatory methods and treatment approaches that are beneficial for the kiddos that have

      For children with sensory processing disorder, there are many beneficial preparatory methods and treatment approaches that need to be incorporated into play. ( do not use pet names for clients in documentation)

    20. kiddos

      children (no pet names for clients in professional documents)

    21. Overall, the risk of stepping out and being confident in the knowledge I had was very scary and intimidating, but ultimately successful and rewarding

      revise. possibly " It was scary and intimidating to step out of my comfort zone and trust my knowledge and skills, but ultimately very rewarding....

    22. learned about

      had learned.

    23. diagnosis not

      illness that were not

    24. out" indicating that

      out." This indicated that

    25. c

      to cool

    26. ndifferent, but

      indifferent. But,

    27. past, in other situations,

      past, I

    28. resumed

      returned

    29. client and grown

      client. I had grown to enjoy his company and....

    30. take our attention off of the task at hand and discuss something silly while doing it

      focus on the task at hand and to have a relaxed conversation as well.

    31. limitations that eluded him from the help of others changing his brie

      limitations. He felt uncomfortable needing the help of others to change his briefs.

    32. overstep

      overstep my bounds

    33. and

      or

    34. With that being said, my leisurely approach to

      My focus on self-care and leisure never interfered with my ability....

    35. and know

      and to know

    36. during

      omit

    37. hink it has made me

      feel I have become (tense agreement)

    38. experiences

      experiences, and

    39. sessions and "jumping in" so to speak in their developed routines of coming to therapy and working with their trusted therapist(s). 

      sessions. (revise this last part as it doesn't seem to link to your theme of using your strength of relationship building..)

    40. respect

      trust

    41. quickly

      omit

    42. have

      had

    43. children, but

      children. But,

    44. the

      omit

    45. are so many levels and

      is so much (verb agreement) or simply "is"

    46. you have a different font color in this paragraph (darker) than in your other sections.

      :)

    47. to discuss expectations of each other

      discussing our expectations for each other.

    48. experience, in which it was

      experience. I felt

    49. As evidenced by successful completion and passing grades of both fieldwork responsibilities, I demonstrated the ability to give timely and constructive feedback

      consider. I demonstrated the ability....feedback evidenced by successfully completing and passing both fieldwork rotations. (include a snapshot of one of your feedback forms)

    50. week 3 forms, week 6 forms, midterm, and final evaluation

      consider. "forms at week three, six, mid-term and final evaluation

    1. always

      omit

    2. the most independent she could be when

      the most independent possible when

    3. skill level

      clinical skills needed

    4. about week 4

      By week four, I

    5. severely

      omit. otherwise "had a severe lack of "

    6. unable

      and was unable

    7. , either

      . Either

    8. noticed varying levels of involvement and engagement regarding parents, some being influenced by religious

      noticed the level of involvement and engagement of parents can be influenced by religious or spiritual beliefs.

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    1. RESUME 

      Your resume should be revised. Don't include career goals or objectives. Also GPA and student honors should be moved to the leadership and professional memberships. Add a section for Research/ Scholarship and put your EBP poster/ project in there.

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    1. traveling, and spending times outdoors fly fishing and

      traveling, spending time outdoors, fly fishing, and snow...

    1. He did not get a login since he was only there for two weeks, so I shared mine with him

      This is a major HIPAA violation! You can never share a login or password. Omit this sentence! Consider revising this paragraph to emphasize mentorship and not discussing patient information or data.

    2. the position

      a leadership role and to explain

    3. the

      treatment

    4. responsibility

      fieldwork responsibilities

    5. taught him all the tools I knew for him

      revise( you cant teach tools. you can teach a person to use a tool or to build a tool) possibly " provided him with the tools and resources necessary for him"

    6. ,

      omit

    7. case load

      caseload

    8. with is current caregiver and the patient

      with the patient and his caregiver

    9. After the meeting,

      omit

    10. Usually, OT likes to discharge the

      Normally OT discharges on the same day as PT, but

    11. but if we feel as though there are areas where he/ she can improve, we can keep the patient longer.

      but we can keep them longer if we feel there are areas in which they can still improve.

    12. meetings, his

      meetings, the PT stated that they were ...

    13. One occasion when I faced with an ethical dilemma was on my first rotation. 

      I was faced with an ethical dilemma during my first rotation.

    14. in practice.

      either "during fieldwork" or simply end with "well."

    15. WILL

      If you do this (all caps) then it would be bold type as well.

    16. ,

      omit comma

    17. helps me

      allows me time to

    18. ,

      omit comma

    19. the

      a

    20. I will present the schedule on Monday to my educator to see if approves of the changes

      Did she approve? This should be your final reflection of the fieldwork experience.

    21. followed by discussing

      and discussed

    22. In addition,

      omit.

    23. rehabilitation evaluation

      what is this? a discipline? nursing? CNA or PCA?

    24. llness

      illnesses

    25. strived to

      strove to

    26. OT.

      Good job!

    27. are living with untreated

      have untreated

    28. ent, ma

      omit comma

    29. health care

      healthcare

    30. unjust.

      is unjust.

    31. als, d

      delete comma

    32. he did, I plan t

      he had, I planned to

    33. still treated

      often treated

    34. progresses

      progress

    35. they

      they have

    36. hat majority

      that the majority

    37. the receive different privileges depending on the level.

      privileges are dependent on their behavioral level.

    38. because majority of the time they will be written up or disciplined

      or they will receive a written warning or be disciplined by losing a .......

    39. th

      The

    40. yelling at and insulting the patients, on

      yelling at and insulting patients on more than one occasion.

    41. OF the

      with

    42. Theraputics

      Therapists

    43. disregarded

      marginalized

    1. Majority

      The majority

    2. are

      were

    3. the

      "all the" OR "all my"

    4. During the evaluation,

      Remove

    5. am

      was

    6. majority

      the majority

    7. to

      to empower the caregiver to reinforce the skills and knowledge the client has learned into everyday occupations.

    8. and they understand the client’s relationships outside of therapy.

      caregiver. I don't understand this last part..... consider revising.

    9. spend majority

      spend the majrity

    10. to strive

      omit

    11. in,

      in. I

    12. also

      omit "also"

    13. one day this client demonstrated abnormal behavior than his usual bubbly self

      a client who was usually bubbly demonstrated abnormal behavior.

    14. e, I

      challenge as I could

    15. influences

      influence

    16. income

      ability to generate income

    17. constraint

      strain

    18. All the social determinants of health became very apparent on their impact on this

      The impact of social determinants of health were very apparent with this population.

    1. key note

      keynote

    2. aloud

      allowed

    3. OTA

      AOTA, reading AJOT, and

    4. g s

      forming, so

    5. the

      what they heard from

    6. ,

      omit comma

    7. Overall, incorporating sensory interventions into treatment has shown functional outcomes. Nevertheless, best clinical judgement should be used when to integrating it into practice

      consider moving this. It fits nicely after " discredited the interventions. Overall, incorporating sensory interventions into treatment has shown functional outcomes. Nevertheless, best clinical judgement should be used when to integrating it into practice." then simply delete the next sentence that starts "However, ..." senetence.

    8. at b

      at the benefits of

    9. an

      delete "an"

    10. Patient

      Educate patient on

    11. .

      WOW! This is excellent, Juli. You really captured this experience in your weebly!

    12. expertise’s and client

      expertise and client-centered

    13. strived

      strove

    14. it in

      it as individualized

    15. and

      and in order to

    16. strived

      strove

    17. the

      omit "the"

    18. cultivated an educational discussion

      (fostered or generated) a scholarly discussion

    19. ?It covered

      valid?, which covered

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    1.  history

      has a

    2. Working with the patients came natural because I can relate to the clients.

      Suggest "Working with clients came naturally, as I can relate to many types of people".

    3. a

      being a

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    1. I

      You may want to start with " Hi! My name is Juli Stolpmann and I am....."

    1. the care that an OT has for

      how an OT cares for their patients.

    2. are

      be

    3. don’t

      not

    4. set me back in my studies and my time

      was a setback in my studies,

    5. so h

      so I had

    6. none essential

      non-essential

    7. tail

      omit

    8. then just hearing they were great, they had

      than just hearing that they were great because they had to....

    9. positivity and showing love and friendship to others, but also

      positivity, showing love and friendship to others, and allowed them ...

    10. meditation is and what it’s used for. I also allowed

      meditation is and what it is used for, and I allotted time for discussion on how to....

    11. reoccurring

      recurring

    12. ,

      delete

    13. Without approval I had to hope

      I had to trust

    14. ,

      delete comma

    15. a cognitive level that they

      their cognitive level so that they

    16. still

      delete

    17. groups, all of

      groups with different

    18. penitents i

      patients

    19. ,

      delete

    20. well, and would be sure to note

      well and noted any sexual behaviors.

    21. . However,

      advantage of, however he was

    22. also

      delete

    23. major line

      time that he had crossed the line.

    24. any

      any further

    25. out,

      delete

    26. ,

      delete comma

    27. advantages

      advances

    28. composer

      composure

    29. ,

      delete comma

    30. throughout

      throw

    31. gras,

      Gras

    32. o

      alleviating anger from opposing opinions, and to ...

    33. relieve a client from feeling upset

      to relieve a client's distress about....

    34. assisted me lead

      continued to assist me with another group for a few week, because...