With PT, we helped
The PT and I helped
With PT, we helped
The PT and I helped
is when I was when I was
was
have before because I have
have otherwise, because I had
hospital
hospital,
to
into
2nd
second
have a unique perspective with
develop a unique relationship with
of
during
balance a
schedule a
time
time effectively.
with
omit
overall
omit
With
By doing
much opportunity
many opportunities
my weakness
one of my weaknesses (object/predicate agreement)
After working on this a week
A week later,
Late on in my
During my
hrough
at
After observing my first week, I advocated for my developed skills from previous rotations and provided feedbac
After observing for one week, I felt confident in my treatment skills and I provided feedback to my instructor that ....
With this information and the underserved population I frequently worked with (children 6-12 with a TBI), I decided to do my inservice on developing a Disorders of Consciousness (DoC) program for pediatric populations.
reverse this. Start with I decided to do.....populations based on this information and knowing the needs of the underserved....TBI).
I did my rotation at
where I completed my internship had...
And often, these
These patients often wait...
or
and
s
are
although out
although it is typically out of... (some OT's have advanced training on SCI or pulmonary units)
educate
educate clients
Through the pediatric hospital I did my second level II rotation at, the provided monthly CEU's during lunch
The pediatric hospital, where I completed my second level II rotation, offered monthly CEU courses during lunch.
.
Good!
making, from the client, caregivers, and using my clinical expertise.
making, incorporating the client's and caregiver's needs and using my clinical expertise.
This variety of exposure helped me to accurately discharge plan, seeing first hand the level of care provided, and helped me to gather a tool-box to carry over services to a variety of settings
This is another sentence with multiple different subjects. Please revise. perhaps "Having first hand exposure to these diverse settings helped me to create effective discharge plans and added new knowledge and skills to my OT tool-box".
see
see and
about it
omit ( about it)
,
.
incase
in case
strengths, however
strengths. However,
well as
was (verb ageement)
successful, however
successful. However,
transfers in order to only receive periodic help with ADLs and family hasn't been
transfers, she would only have periodic help with ADL's, and her family had not been educated on ...
discussed
discuss
.
Kelsi,
You could also add any inservices you provided on your clinicals.
population is underrepresented when it comes to adapting to meet their individual needs.
consider: population with special needs is underrepresented.
Through
By
MMT
simplify- "strength"
Through
During
and
MMT strength and measure ROM
often with
for
this is an essential skil
home, so it is essential to address.....
With often only seeing
We often see
hopefully helps
can help
the more likely a client is
the client is more likely to
accustom
accustomed
.
Yay! a functional home program!!!!
seeing him a couple days and
After a few days of me asking...
with
"and" or "resulting in"
Because this individual made such an impact on my life, I have recently started working with local homeless organizations and educating on specific needs for the special needs homeless population and problem solving ways to get the resources for proper preventative care for this population.
this is a very long sentence. Consider revising it into two smaller sentences. perhaps end the first around homeless organizations. also watch for changes in verb tense.
but
, but
situations
situation.
about a subject
the client on a topic or strategy,
on
the client on
injuries, simply just were
injuries simply were
a special interests of
I have special interests in pediatrics and in home modification. OR I am most interested in the field of pediatrics and performing home modifications.
myself
I
She is only 59 years old with cognition intact and well enough aware to know she was not being treated with respect or taken care of fully
revise, this sentence is not well constructed.
staff
assistant.
for anything because we are
because we are often
and
, and
in which we would go
where we went
deficits, though she had
deficits.She maintained a positive attitude and a strong spirit.
and admire so many
learn to appreciate people.....
sessions all along, and will continue
sessions. (omit this last part) Add a statement or picture evidence.
and
omit
always
always being
One opportunity I found on numerous occasions to advocate for and represent the unique perspective of occupational therapy was when
I had opportunity on numerous occasions to advocate for and represent the unique perspective of occupational therapy when.....
a push
encouragement
may or may not ever go through myself
may not ever experience or understand.
Throughout these
Through these
FWEd
use "CI" throughout the section.
o
omit "so"
mind: a 64 year-old man with dementia and I believe depression
mind, a 64 year old gentleman with dementia and depression.
I
to
life
In both my fieldwork experiences and in my personal life,
.
did you complete an inservice? maybe a sentence or two about that and a pic.
h.
include a photo of the team, or poster, etc.
One client, in particular, comes to mind to provide a specific example.
omit
.
add a pic of your certificate
a lot of her difficulties were behavior-related, as well
many of her difficulties were behavior-related.
A lot o
Some of
.
Houstyn,
You should list other leadership like RKS as well.
before and he
before. He
of wearing a jacket during therapy after expressing being cold
of providing him a jacket when he had expressed being cold so many times before.
time, he
time he
for
to
therapy and then it spiraled from there into needing to lay down and over-working himself
therapy. He would then become focused on lying down and work himself into a state of mental and physical exhaustion.
himself.
for himself.
became frustrated with us quickly and told us that we didn't have his feelings and
quickly became frustrated, said we did not care about his feelings, and
adamant on not doing
adamantly against doing
him and h
him, and
isn't short of work ethic and is
wasn't short of work ethic and was
job and they basically made him slow
job, but his employer pushed him to slow down and retire.
worked 105-hour weeks before
used to work 105-hour weeks.
visit and would talk to him and to us and they told us how hard of a worker he is
visit. They would speak with him and they told us that he was a hard worker.
increase
to increase
the
omit
Especially for the kiddos with sensory processing dysfunction, there are a lot of preparatory methods and treatment approaches that are beneficial for the kiddos that have
For children with sensory processing disorder, there are many beneficial preparatory methods and treatment approaches that need to be incorporated into play. ( do not use pet names for clients in documentation)
kiddos
children (no pet names for clients in professional documents)
Overall, the risk of stepping out and being confident in the knowledge I had was very scary and intimidating, but ultimately successful and rewarding
revise. possibly " It was scary and intimidating to step out of my comfort zone and trust my knowledge and skills, but ultimately very rewarding....
learned about
had learned.
diagnosis not
illness that were not
out" indicating that
out." This indicated that
c
to cool
ndifferent, but
indifferent. But,
past, in other situations,
past, I
resumed
returned
client and grown
client. I had grown to enjoy his company and....
take our attention off of the task at hand and discuss something silly while doing it
focus on the task at hand and to have a relaxed conversation as well.
limitations that eluded him from the help of others changing his brie
limitations. He felt uncomfortable needing the help of others to change his briefs.
overstep
overstep my bounds
and
or
With that being said, my leisurely approach to
My focus on self-care and leisure never interfered with my ability....
and know
and to know
during
omit
hink it has made me
feel I have become (tense agreement)
experiences
experiences, and
sessions and "jumping in" so to speak in their developed routines of coming to therapy and working with their trusted therapist(s).
sessions. (revise this last part as it doesn't seem to link to your theme of using your strength of relationship building..)
respect
trust
quickly
omit
have
had
children, but
children. But,
the
omit
are so many levels and
is so much (verb agreement) or simply "is"
.
you have a different font color in this paragraph (darker) than in your other sections.
:)
to discuss expectations of each other
discussing our expectations for each other.
experience, in which it was
experience. I felt
As evidenced by successful completion and passing grades of both fieldwork responsibilities, I demonstrated the ability to give timely and constructive feedback
consider. I demonstrated the ability....feedback evidenced by successfully completing and passing both fieldwork rotations. (include a snapshot of one of your feedback forms)
week 3 forms, week 6 forms, midterm, and final evaluation
consider. "forms at week three, six, mid-term and final evaluation
always
omit
the most independent she could be when
the most independent possible when
skill level
clinical skills needed
about week 4
By week four, I
severely
omit. otherwise "had a severe lack of "
unable
and was unable
, either
. Either
noticed varying levels of involvement and engagement regarding parents, some being influenced by religious
noticed the level of involvement and engagement of parents can be influenced by religious or spiritual beliefs.
RESUME
Your resume should be revised. Don't include career goals or objectives. Also GPA and student honors should be moved to the leadership and professional memberships. Add a section for Research/ Scholarship and put your EBP poster/ project in there.
traveling, and spending times outdoors fly fishing and
traveling, spending time outdoors, fly fishing, and snow...
He did not get a login since he was only there for two weeks, so I shared mine with him
This is a major HIPAA violation! You can never share a login or password. Omit this sentence! Consider revising this paragraph to emphasize mentorship and not discussing patient information or data.
the position
a leadership role and to explain
the
treatment
responsibility
fieldwork responsibilities
taught him all the tools I knew for him
revise( you cant teach tools. you can teach a person to use a tool or to build a tool) possibly " provided him with the tools and resources necessary for him"
,
omit
case load
caseload
with is current caregiver and the patient
with the patient and his caregiver
After the meeting,
omit
Usually, OT likes to discharge the
Normally OT discharges on the same day as PT, but
but if we feel as though there are areas where he/ she can improve, we can keep the patient longer.
but we can keep them longer if we feel there are areas in which they can still improve.
meetings, his
meetings, the PT stated that they were ...
One occasion when I faced with an ethical dilemma was on my first rotation.
I was faced with an ethical dilemma during my first rotation.
in practice.
either "during fieldwork" or simply end with "well."
WILL
If you do this (all caps) then it would be bold type as well.
,
omit comma
helps me
allows me time to
,
omit comma
the
a
I will present the schedule on Monday to my educator to see if approves of the changes
Did she approve? This should be your final reflection of the fieldwork experience.
followed by discussing
and discussed
In addition,
omit.
rehabilitation evaluation
what is this? a discipline? nursing? CNA or PCA?
llness
illnesses
strived to
strove to
OT.
Good job!
are living with untreated
have untreated
ent, ma
omit comma
health care
healthcare
unjust.
is unjust.
als, d
delete comma
he did, I plan t
he had, I planned to
still treated
often treated
progresses
progress
they
they have
hat majority
that the majority
the receive different privileges depending on the level.
privileges are dependent on their behavioral level.
because majority of the time they will be written up or disciplined
or they will receive a written warning or be disciplined by losing a .......
th
The
yelling at and insulting the patients, on
yelling at and insulting patients on more than one occasion.
OF the
with
Theraputics
Therapists
disregarded
marginalized
from now
later.
the
tools
if I a
if I had
,
.
upholding
holding
Majority
The majority
at rural
at the fact that it was such a rural location.
experiences. I
experiences, I
same as he is aging well into his 50’s
same. He was well over fifty years old.
humor, a
humor was when a client
not typically jump in and immediately make
not blindly jump in and make
life
life,