I would move this section up so it sits right underneath the introduction paragraph

could this live on a separate page?

When it comes to features and podcast interviews, possibly group them onto a separate page 'Features'. That's where you could also include an invite to reach out for collaboration opportunities

When it comes to giveaways or events you're a part of, is it possible to have pop ups on your website at all? Or you could add a banner at the top of your page so it's not a part of your regular home page.

I would also have a look at your general navigation to make it easy for people to check out all your offers. Rather than listing them all on the home page, I'd build and 'everything' page where you touch on all your workshops and courses, and people can click through to the individual offers from there.

In this paragraph, I would set the scene for what people expects but leave who you are for your about section. I'd explore the power of healing through creativity, and how everything you do is centered around this idea

Insert screenshots/feedback from past attendees

Also, will there be a replay if they can't make it live? If so, I'd mention it at the bottom of the page and add another bright yellow button to secure their spot.

Can you add a trust bar underneath this section? As featured by

Join 6000+ other physicians and APPs who have already benefited from this training...

How many?

I'd insert LIVE in here to make it clear it's happening live

I would add screenshots of feedback from others who have watched/attended this session above the buttion. Something like: Here's what other physicians had to say about this session

I would remove this link from the tripwire page because it distracts from the main CTA. I'd link to the workbook in the confirmation email.

can you define this in terms of hours/quantitiy?

can you add a brief explanation here so people know what they're looking at?

where we cover xyz

Underneath this section, I'd include something like this:

While this membership is a brand new space, I'm not new to facilitating communities.

Here's a small sample of feedback from inside those experiences:

and then grab screenshots from past challenges, events, etc that speak to your level of support and guidance and community

I would add a final 'imagine if''section here.

This is where you acknowledge how they're currently approaching their art practice... in isolatin, overthinking, wondering how others approach creativity, not sure whether to start.

And you paint a picture of what's possible inside the Collective. You could catch up when it suits you from the comfort of your home with your new creative besties. Take imperfectly perfect action with fresh inspiration, have gentle accountability to make time for yourself and your practice. etc

And then I'd follow that up with another join now section with the 3 tiers and buttons.

Other questions that come to mind: Can I upgrade or downgrade later? What if I get overwhelmed by everything? Is this only for experienced artists?

Choose the experience that works best for you

Commit to lasting momentum

Secure founders pricing

Develop your flow

Get creating right away

Make immediate

member-only

add LIVE?

Can you add LIVE in here? or does it make the heading too long?

exclusive to members

what exactly does that mean? I'm sure it's clear to you, but I'm picturing printables the members have created? Is that it?

Can you call it your typical month? Just to make it clear that's what expects them every month?

What about 'Let perfection get in the way' so you don't repleat struggle?

if this is the lowest price they'll see, make sure you mention that

Ongoing access to a Private Online Creative Community with LIVE Zoom sessions

ongoing access

Is this the only time they'll see this offer? If so, you could mention that.

Can you be more specific here and give quantities or elaborate a little on what that includes?

Is this video broken down into bite-sized chapters at all? If so, I'd touch on it here as 'easy to follow'

Ongoing might be another alternative for lifetime

could you go with pre-recorded here?

Can you break this out visually because it gets lost in this formatting

I wonder whether you can make this a standalone idea and bold it.

One-time payment

For transparency, and to prime attendees that there will be a pitch, you could add: "A special Slumber Party The Roben's Nest offer if you choose to continue with us."

On another note... you could totally extend the special annual offer to existing members too (so they don't feel short-changed). And existing annual members could receive a special surprise bonus for being annual members.

I would add this in here: After that, you can choose to continue as a full Nest member or your access simply ends – no automatic charges.

Possibly add 'Yours to keep' underneath this heading?

I would make it clear underneath the button that this is a one-time payment.

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I'd move this underneath the stunning photo of you in a standalone section.

I would move this underneath the Virtual Creative Slumber Party, and have a button underneath "Join the Party for $15"

what you need to succeed:

I would also add the bullet point list on the video page here to futher clarify why it's worth their time:

You'll Walk Away With: Understanding the charting narratives & mindsets that are getting in your way New charting narratives & mindsets that empower you to get your work done My 4-step framework that you can apply to your situation to finish your charting at work Tips to get through your charting faster The opportunity to join a proven charting program if you need more help

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I would add a thumbnail of the video below to spark intrigue.

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I wonder whether you can change the layout here so it's a 4-column design with a matching icon for each idea?

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your personal

You can end this vicious cycle today... with the 3-Step Charting Clarity Method below

Trust me when I say: You're not alone!

I've worked with xxxx+ physicians and APPs, and most have never been taught how to...

When it comes to the video, does your vido hosting platform allow you to add a thumbnail? If so, I would create a thumbnail that says: 'Your charting personality results are in...'overlayed over the video so it creates an element of intrigue, and convinces people to watch.

High-Performers in Overdrive like you... Finish your notes and respond to ever message Are on top of...

Same comment for this video. I'd add a thumbnail with a teaser of their personality reveal

Quick-Fix Technicians like you... Finish notes fast - but not always confidently

The truth is: Speed...

growth paths

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I like the concept of growth paths.

Join a a private, encouraging online community space to share your art, reflections, and questions.

I wold move this up above the FAQs so people don't miss this part.

I feel like this is doubling up with the 'No art experience is needed' statement underneath. I would remove this one because we've mentioned it's free. You could move this down on the page so it sits in the section 'A creative space just for you'

I would move this section up above the section that comes before it so you're telling readers earlier what they'll get

This is your personal invitation to a workshop sampler...

I would remove this to keep it nice and succinct

Can you add a button underneath the title? 'Sign up free now'

Can you add a bullet point list here of everything they get so it's easy to scan?

Is it worth mentioning to scroll down to access the course immediately? I would have missed that the course access is at the bottom of this page

ongoing?

ongoing might be better?

I would delete this sentence and start with a reminder of what they're getting

I like this angle from the report: 'This isn’t just another membership! insiders is your new professional circle, tech lab, and peer advisory board all in one.'

As for the button... change the CTA to: "Take charge today!" and add 'Cancel anytime' underneath again. And possibly change the button CTA to: Step up today!

all-in-one support hub

Add a button underneath this sentence: 'Join 450+ language pros today!' underneath: Cancel anytime. 30-Day Money Back Guarantee!

For the button below: Change the CTA to 'Leverage the all-in-one support hub now!' underneath: Cancel anytime. 30-Day Money Back Guarantee.

For the button underneath: change the CTA to 'Set your Growth Path today'. Underneath, add 'Cancel anytime. 30-Day Money Back Guarantee.

Add a button above this section underneath the blue columns. "Start growing with insiders". Underneath add 'Cancel anytime. 30-Day Money Back Guarantee.

If you wanted to move the button above the fold, could you revamp this section. Rather than have it at the top of the page, add the insiders logo underneath the 'Join ... ' lead-in statement. And then have the 'Current member? Login' underneath the button. That would move the important copy and button above the fold, and still give members the option to login in.

I think we've covered the insant wins, and the broader transformation long-term sufficiently.

remove this... and as for the button copy: Start from just 25€/month. Add underneath: Cancel anytime! 30 Day Money Back Guarantee!

I like Lizzy's suggestion to add a 'trust bar' but make it about inclusions. I'd slot it in here: 🧠 Growth Paths 🎧 Private Podcast 💬 Live Webinars 🧑‍🤝‍🧑 Networking 🛠 Tutorials 🔓 50+ Hour Replay Vault

all-in-one support hub

I like the concept of 'support hub' because it alludes to insiders being the ONE destination they need. I'm not sure about adding 'skills, strategy and support' into it though. What about 'Join the all-in-one support hub for innovative language professionals'?

Unleash your earning potential with up-to-date tech tutorials, expert webinars, and the support of a global community of 450+ pros who just get it.

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I'd reword this slightly so it doesn't sound repetitive: With this checklist you will:

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Turn this into a sub-heading so it pops more

I would add another extra section above your Meet the Host section. A section that speaks to ... After this event you'll have: Fresh, proven strategies... more confidence to take action... a plan you can make your own... pair this with visual icons so these short-and-sharp ideas really pop.

I would move this section underneath the FAQs

Possibly remove this and focus on the event promise instead.

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I would consider makign this your section-starting hero one-liner!

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and step away from the unfulfilling and unprofitable systems, tools and strategies that have been letting you down!

we will

I would break this out into a separate heading so it really pops.

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Can you break this out into a separate section, and start it with a heading: What you actually need right now: followed by a column design

possibly delete this to shorten the intro

Can you give some tangible examples here that membership site owners can relate to? It'll show that you know what you're talking about, and make people nod along right from the start.

start using effective strategies that help you and your students right now.

instant access to

all these amazing time-savers and learning-boosters

ready-to-use resources, templates and printables

Start the school year even more confidently when you upgrade your ticket.

become a more effective reading teacher for good!

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I'd move the video into this section

I'd move this section right underneath the promise section so you finish on an invite rather than an invite to reach out to you.

Can you add a section where you share why some of the members joined so others can relate to it? If you have an intake form, can you ask the question what made them join and ask for permission to share their feedback?

You're referring to special rate here. Is this a limited-time offer or is it available at this pricetag all the time? If it's the lowest price it'll ever be, I'd mention that. If it's 97$ all the time, I'd remove the special rate mention.

As for the button copy: Embark on this 6-week journey now

With this testimonial section... can you somewhat change the format so it doesn't take up that much sales page real estate? Also, do you have student artworks you could add or screenshots of aha-moments from within the community?

Again, can you break this up into 3 columns side by side and add an image or graphic for each?

I would move this section further up on the page right underneath the section where you speak to the 8000 students you've supported to date.

This inclusions section definitely needs to be built out: If I understand correctly from the FAQ section, while the course is pre-recorded and self-paced, it also gives students access to 6 weeks of LIVE Zoom sessions. That's huge!

I would create a column-style section here where you match each important inclusion with an icon/a graphic.

And clearly spell out what's included: Ongoing access to 3 hours of pre-recorded workshops 6 weeks of LIVE Zoom sessions to co-create, ask questions and connect with other creatives A detailed supply list to make sourcing what you need easy A private online community to share wins and your creations Instructions on mixed media techniques such as stencilling, silhouettes and layering The Creative Well with activities and meditations to spark inspiration and support your creative flow

I find the font somewhat hard to read on this dar background. Could you go with another solid colour here?

When it comes to the storytelling component of this sales page, I feel like you need to lead in with 'what's possible' first. Can you add a pargraph that speaks to "What if...?".

And then introduce this course as the solution.

'Soulful Stories helps you tap into the restorative power of art."

Join the immersive 6-week art experience and transform your emotions & experiences into stunning works of art.

As for the button copy: Get started right now for $97

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Can you move the graphic into the blue box so it takes up less screen space?

The screenshot testimonial section is visually stronger, so I'd switch the two

This needs to move out of the white box right underneath the section heading. Possibly in yellow or another bright colour so it pops?

I would remove this here, because it does't look as impressive as with summits where you have $$$ in contributor bonuses also.

Plus, I would reduce the size of the video underneath also

Reduce the width of this section, and reduce the font size of the yellow section

Move the graphic right underneath this page title so there's a visual that grabs attention

Reduce the width and make the yellow Plus: part smaller

I find the screenshot testimonials furhter down on the page more powerful... can you possibly swap them with this section?

Can you pop the Bootcamp graphic into this box to reduce the scroll here?

This needs to pop more. I'd take this section out of the white box and pop it above... possibly in yellow?

I think there's a little too much text above the fold. I would move the product mockup below this header so there's a visual right away.

I reckon you can get rid of this sentence.

Can you come up with a fun icon/graphic so this one really pops and stands out?

Make sure your bios are formatted the same. One is centred, one is left-aligned

I would again reduce the width here, if possible, so you don't have to read edge to edge

If you make the change above, I'd delete 'And' here.

What about ... 'And you could' instead so it doesn't start with the same structure as the sentence above?

I wonder whether you can add a visual here. I know moving the logo into this blue section is tricky, because it's blueish, but what about a mockup of all the speaker photos? I think it needs a visual of some sort between the date and the byline underneath.

Possibly reduce the width of this title so you don't have to read from screen edge to screen edge.

I wonder whether you can update the layout so these all display on one line.

I'd remove this because it, while important, distracts from the program promise

I would centre all of this

Let's make your website

I find this somewhat hard to understand. What about...

What if your dream clients magically found you when they're ready to buy

instead of relying on an unpredictable algorithm and content that vanishes overnight?

across 5 targeted days

50$

I'd possibly move this section above your about section because you otherwise have two sections about the inclusions righ after each other

Add another line underneath: SAVE $50

I would mention the pre-sale bonus here too.

This is the program to show you

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Stop sitting on the

But not at this price!

purchasing via this option means I'll have to give you manual access after your purchase and there might be a slight delay in receiving your login details.

same suggestion here around the intro lines

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Love the mix of images and gifs here

And then have an intro line here: Get exclusive access to:

Potentially add an intro line here such a: Learn everything about:

I would flip these around so you lead in with the inclusion and follow it with the 'so what?'

I would bold this line

I wonder what it would look like to add emojis against some of these statements to grab the eye?

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Love the animation here :)

I would totally mention the 50$ here so it's crystal clear

Can you potentiall bold this?

I would insert screenshot testimonials from students that possibly speak to your support/guidance

Can you add a recently purchased by widget possibly? I know it's included in my Countdown Timer subscrition, but I'm sure there are other tools that offer this.! https://elfsight.com/sales-notification-widget/

Possibly add another screenshot testimonial section here with 3 REALLY awesome screenshots/feedback pieces?

Can you add up here how many people roughly have already joined? Something like...

Join xxxx+ fellow creatives who have already signed up!