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I would centre this
Coaching Call Transcripts for Easy Reference
This font seems different to the headings above?
These are the same strategies, and practical tools that I teach my 1:1 coaching clients, so they can achieve success in their career and life too. While you might have tried making changes on your own, it’s tough to know which techniques will work for you, when to tweak them or when it’s time to let go and try a brand new strategy.
Can you centre this section on the page and bold the first sentence?
After my diagnosis, I created a system of strategies to support myself. I let go of neurotypical techniques that didn’t suit me. I adapted other techniques so that they truly worked for my brain and worked with my strengths. Then everything changed. Life doesn’t feel like an endless to-do list anymore. These strategies allowed me to be a full time ADHD coach for 19 years ( and counting).
Can you move this text next to the photo of your with your medal at all?
You would love to arrive at work a
Could you structure this section as 4 columns at all? I think it would make it look cleaner.
Let me guess...
I feel like there's something missing over the header image?
Ignite Your Creativity: Dive into 12 weeks of pure artistic discovery Connect with Enthusiastic Artists: Join our vibrant community and fuel your inspiration Maximize your Innate Potential: Discover new techniques and embrace your unique style Return to Play: Innovation through exploration and experimentation Personalized Support: Individual feedback elevates your art Learn on Your Terms: Access course materials whenever inspiration strikes
I think this is too much in the header section. I would remove this section entirely.
As for the button copy, I'd remove Register Here!
I would beef these up in a separate 'this is what you can expect' section underneath your about section.
Do you ever feel like you're sitting on the sidelines, watching other people create beautiful art? Wishing that you could do it, too?
Some of these ideas would be great to the 'right now' section further up on the page
I've spent years honing in on my process for creating art journals that are not only functional but unique works of art. I will teach you the steps that will guarantee results that you will be proud to show off. Through a distinctive process of learning the "rules" and techniques, I will then encourage you to break the rules and make the creation process your own. Intuitive playing and experimentation will become integral parts of your art practice.
I'd try to condense your about section to one visual section on the page. So possibly see how you can move this bit into your 'main' about section
MY PROMISE TO YOU ... By the end of the 12-week BB Art Journals Masterclass you
BB ARt Journal Masterclass will help you...
y you approach art.
I'd then follow it with a paragraph that addresses the right now and how they're currently approaching their art. The frustration of doubting themselves, not knowing where to start, lacking feedback so they know how they can improve, etc...
And then I would introduce your BB Art Journals Masterclass as the solution in the next section.
It's Time to Activate Your Creative Potential: Say Goodbye to Overwhelm and Hello to Confidence!
I would lead with what's possibe here... the dream future!
What if you activated your full creative potential and said goodbye to overwhelm?
Imagine what it would feel like to eliminate the sheer impossible obsticles that have been holidng you back from creating? And you not only started creating consistently, but you could watch your skills grow week by week?
And you could trust your artistic intuition?
Someting like this...
Personalized Support: You're never alone; your teacher is with you every step of the way. Real-Time Interaction: Get answers to your questions promptly with live office hours and co-creates. Collaborative Creativity: Join live co-creates to play and create with fellow artists, sparking inspiration. Supportive Community: Join a positive, encouraging community where both your teacher and peers cheer you on.
This also perfectly lends itself to a clumn-style approach
Option 1: Dive into all the course content (videos, PDFs, guides, etc.) released on April 14th! Take the "choose your adventure" approach: binge-watch the videos or explore modules that interest you the most. Feel free to dive deeper into captivating modules—there's no strict schedule here. My goal is for you to enjoy the journey and find art as an escape from the daily hustle. Option 2: Prefer a community-driven experience? If you are in need of accountability and looking for friends that will help you stay encouraged, this is the path for you! Follow along week by week as I guide you through the modules. This structured approach culminates in creating a stunning art journal. Take advantage of our private group forum, live office hours, and direct feedback sessions for added support and encouragement. Option 3: Can't decide? Opt for a mix of both! Ultimately, it's about what feels right for you. One thing you'll learn early on about me as a teacher, is that I will provide you the tools you need to succeed, but then I will encourage you to discover the path that works best for YOU! With various learning methods, you're sure to find what resonates with you best.
I would definitely turn this into a 3-colum section with a matching icon/graphic for each
NCE a year
I would move this section right underneath the header
Discover Confidence Through Creativity:
Find confidence through creativity in this 12-week art adventure, and FINALLY embrace your unique style
Have you check out my new FREE art course??
Next up, I would explore your courses. A headling like 'This is how you can create with me'. And then a short blurb that sets the scene for your classes and courses. Possibly mention accessible, mix of free and paid, fun, colourful and easy-to-follow here. Maybe a mockup of some of your creations next to the blurb. And then a button that reads something like [START CREATING]
How to Use Le
When it comes to your freebie sign-up... I would leave it as as separate section at the bottom of the page, but also have a banner at the top of your page that links to a pop up where people can sign up so it's always visible.
New on the Blog
Love the blog section! Could you possibly rename it into something like 'The latest tips & tutorials'.
Check out my other classes that are available to watch now!
I know you're 'big' on YouTube, so why not have a section that inviges people to subscribe to your YouTube channel linking to your 3 most popular videos and a main button underneath that reads [SUBSCRIBE NOW]
I’m Brooke!
I would start with a big, bold banner above the fold that leads with a simple statement around what you do. Something like: Fun courses, classes & inspiration for newbie & seasoned artists. Also add a bright, bold button that links through to your courses page [JOIN A CLASS]
...
Right underneath, I would have an 'as featured by & seen in banner' where you hightlight any amazing features you've had since starting out.
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Next up, I'd slot in a short and sharp intro paragraph that sets the scene for your unique approach to art, and what makes it so appealing for your community.
Until recently I didn’t think I deserved to claim the title of “Artist” because in school we were taught that artists had to be able to draw realistically. I didn’t fit that mold - so just another reason to add to the list of why I felt like I didn’t fit in. My journey to claiming that title has been long and at times difficult. (We are our own worst critics, amiright?) But I can now confidently say, that when someone asks me that dreaded question, “What do you do?” I can proudly say, without hesitation, “I am an Artist.”Maybe you can relate to my story? I would love for you to join me wherever you may be in your artistic journey. Whether you are discovering art for the first time or you’ve been around the block a time or two. Welcome. I am so thankful to have you here.
I would keep your about section on the Home page short and intriguing so people click through to your about page to find out more. I would focus on this part of your story here, and then invite them to click through to your about page where you go into more detail. The button can read something like: EXPLORE MY ARTISTIC JOURNEY
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Jacqueline Sinfield
What about changing this to Hi, I'm Jacqueline Sinfield?
Make simple lifestyle changes to minimize the negative aspects of ADHD Create an environment that encourages you to focus Identify and begin achieving your life goals
Could you turn this into a 3-column section with a matching icon so it pops more?
This practical ADHD-friendly book explores the 11 steps that help adults with ADHD successfully tame their symptoms.
I would bold this sentence
oday.
Could you add a button here that links up to the options section on your sales page for those who are ready to buy?
courage others to as well. 😉
Underneath the video, I'd include a snapshot of the projects you've committed to without linking to other places on your website (because you want to keep readers here). Maybe one image with a mention of the project name and year?
Grab your FREE copy of The 100 Day Project Workbook and Tracker today!
Digital or print? The choice is yours!
And then I'd display 2 columns with mockups underneath giving people the ability to choose.
For digital it could read something like: Get instant FREE access to a digital download for you to print at home.
For the print version it could read something like: Get your luxurious hard copy delivered right to your doorstep in a matter of days.
Here’s What’s Included:
I would create a brand new video to embed right above the inclusion section where you talk through your experience with the challenge, and talk through the free digital or paid print options. Why not showcase a printed journal in the video so people can see what it looks like? I'd also take the opportunity to introduce yourself here for context. Unerneath the video, I'd also include logos of where you've been featured in relation to this concept.
Workbook Page Thumbnails
Underneath the thumbnail section, I would include an FAQ section addressing the differences between the digital delivery and the phyiscal delivery to make it crystal clear. And then finish with a repetition of the 2-column section giving people the option to choose digital or paid printed.
Take a look at the whole Workbook and Tracker
If you show a hard copy of the tracker in your video, then I'd skip this section and simply leave the thumbnail section you currently have.
What is The 100 Day Project?
Move this one right underneath the header section for people who come to you vie a Google Search.
Section One | Project Details and Tips
I wonder whether displaying the sections in 5 colums with a number icon above makes it easier to digest and understand?
Plan, Track and Reflect
Planning, Tracking and Reflecting made easy
The 100 Day Project Workbook and Tracker*- Over 65+ Pages -
Elevate your 100 Day Project Experience with the 65+-page Workbook and Tracker | Available in Digital & Print
binge-watch.
Could you add the cover shot for your 3 most popular YouTube videos here for people to click on?
ccess.
could you add starting from $xx here?
There are over 15 freebies in the archives waiting for you to download. (You'll put in your email address, but don't worry you won't be added to the list again. My system just needs to know who to send the download to)
Could you use trigger links here to introduce the 3 most popular ones and allow them to get them straight to their inbox with one click?
in the archives
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Growing up, I was always creative.
Do you have a snap of you as a child creating that you could include here?
As promised
Great subject line!
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Could you link up a few of your most popular videos/blog posts here to showcase the quality of what they can expect?
I get the opportunity to collaborate with
This is where I introduce you to
I'll be in your inbox more often during these launches. Don't worry you can always opt out of those specific emails when the time comes.
Love this!
I launch a new class
Expect something new
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I'd keep this all in one sentence
My goal is to provide valuable content that connects on a personal level and an artsy one
I usully jump between personal snippets and artsy gems.
→ Newsletters
I'd stay away from the term newsletter and change it to 'emails from me'. I reckon newletter sounds outdated because, let's face it, hardly anyone wants constant sales pitches in their inbox... and that's what comes to mind when I hear newsletter ;-)
y 2.7 seconds.
LOL :)
When we crossed that bridge, we were actually on our way to one of
Funnily enough, on the other side of that bridge was one of
, which is 12 feet
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only seven and a half feet wide, compared to the
just over half the
There are a lot of art courses out there, so
I'd keep it short and sharp and delete this intro
Take a look 👀
Love the format of the image section
button
Make sure the CTA button mentiones the price because it's such a no-brainer
I know you are probably wondering what BB RingDex is all about and what youʼll learn in this course. Let's get into it— there is SO much goodness waiting for you!
I'd totally remove this and get straight into it
Today is THE DAY that the doors swing
Doors are wide open for my...
A few of my favorites. These are a few Youtube Lives I did that I think you'll enjoy.
Why don't you position this section as a collection of your AND your community's favourites, and include a subtle mention of your membership and our best-selling low-ticket course?
I'd reword the intro to "Let's start with a few of my community's (and my) favourites"
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Can you add a sentence here around the idea of how many people roughly you have 'connected with' over the years? That could look like this: Since {year}, that's seen xxxx+ art curious humans experience my courses and community.
Seriously! I would like to know more about you. This is the part where we "connect" so share some fun tidbits about yourself with me. Just hit reply!
Can you possibly encourage a reply here with the promise to send them access to an exclusive class they can't get anywhere else? I reckon it will skyrocket your responses and help you build connections
teaching
Can you link up the Roben's Nest here?
our times a year.😂
So do I haha
We have art in common,
That's a solid foundation, but let me share a little more about me so we can take this email relationship from stranger to online friend.
Let’s make something beautiful together.
Can you move this into a separate line?
No mor
Love the new look and feel of this section
your artistic story
bold
feeling guilty about your supplies
bold
feeling overwhelmed
bold
something unique
bold
overflowing
Can you highlight some key words here?
over 5,000 students have joined my classes - here's what a few have said:
Loooove!!!
stitching
Start this section with this verb
Repurpose
I'd start this section with a verb too
what
Wondering... is it possible at all to make the colourful border around the white box slightly bigger?
Findi
Can you potentially reduce the column width here so it doesn't sprawl as far across the screen?
Then
Delete this :)
IN SIX MONTHS:
Six months from now
IN A MONTH YOU:
In a month you will have
AS SOON AS YOU JOIN:
As soon as you join you can
I'm more successful at not judging my work as harshly as I normally would.
I'd put all these in quotation marks
only
Can you make this all capitals?
using
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Create a tactile, layered journal with collage. This course invites you to embrace upcycling while creating meaningful art that tells your unique story.
Looove the little blurbs!
We’re waiting for you with open arms and paint-splattered aprons!
I'd drop this down into the next line also
beginners are not just welcome, they’re celebrated! 🎉
Can you drop this into the line below and make it bold so it really stands out?
Although creative souls, like you, have more info at our fingertips than ever before (thanks, Internet) true community can be hard to find. The Roben's Nest is your well-deserved break to nurture your creative soul and reconnect with fellow makers in a joyful, judgment-free, and FUN online haven. Whether you’re searching for fresh inspiration, craving deeper creative connection, or needing a gentle push to dive into your craft, you belong here. Here, you’ll find the support, motivation, and creative confidence to explore without pressure, experiment freely, and truly enjoy the process of making art.
I'd center this section
3 Simple Steps to better skin
Can you add some before/after shots or user-generated content?
New staple product in my routine!
I would move the reviews panel further up on the page
Perfectly invisible on all skin tones, leaves no residues or flashback.Smooths and refines the appearance of pores and fine lines for an impeccable finish.Brightens and evens out skin tone, effectively reducing the appearance of dark spots.Absorbs instantly, offering a weightless feel under makeup without any pilling.Provides deep hydration without a greasy feel, maintaining skin’s moisture balance.Fresh and revitalizing application experience, entirely free from any scent.
I would turn these AMAZING benefits into an emotive introduction blurb. They are what's going to sell your product!
This is my first time launching
I'd make this section easier to read and less wordy. Also, can you add the price of NOT joining in here to give them a gentle nudge? I'd also add an inclusion table again at the bottom of the sales page
Accountability got me to get my website done after sitting on the domain for over a year.
Is this bit meant to be a repeat of further up on the page?
Testimonials
Can you scatter individual reviews/testimonials throughout the sales page rather than bunching them up in one section? It means people don't accidentally scroll past.
How the ETA Club Works
Again, try to format it in a way that makes it easier to digest this information. I'd steer towards a brief paragraph for each inclusion outlining it in more detail
Here’s exactly what you’ll get:
I would make this section easier to digest by turning it into columns with matching icons/mockups as well as adding the 'so what' to each inclusin
This email got me started! “Bit*h, how are you turning up to parties, galas, lunches and still making more money that I am?”I received this from a friend who reads all my posts and shares some love on my stories; someone with whom I catch up with every summer when I’m back in England.
Love how you're introducing the origin of this concept. I would add a section about you here. Who you are, why you're perfectly positioned to support them, and touch on accountability being the one thing that got you to where you are today
Real Accountability – I help
I'd turn these bullet points into a paragraph that touches on why this concept works. And I would remove the individual buttons
Discover a Real (aka the ETA Club) Solution:
This is a great third section. It's the solution to their current approach. Introduce the membership here with a big, bold promise while touching on the structure/format.
If you’ve been
This is a great second section of this sales page. It's addressing what they're currently trying to do unsuccessfully.
Does any of this sound like you?
I would start with a section here that speaks to what's possible. .. the ultimate dream rather than the struggles. That way you're starting on a positive note and what's possible.
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I would link these buttons up to the inclusins section on this page rather than to the checkout because people haven't had a chance to learn more about the program yet
Coaching with actual accountability is the fastest way I know to get clients incredible results! This is how, in 60 minutes, I get clients from ‘overwhelmed’ to‘I get it — and I got it done!’ If you are ready to go from being confused about how to market and sell to clear daily action tasks with the support to finally see a higher return on effort… then this is for you!Join the Entrepreneurs Take Action Club and achieve the big goal we will set together in 26 weeks…or get your money back.
Start with the big, bild promise here. What are members going to achieve by joining?
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Move this right underneath the main header for instant trust and credibility
straight
Make sure you move this one up right underneath your about blurb
Oh my days...
I'd move this further up on the page just below the choose your own adventure section
with...
Choose your own adventure:
Can you add your course here?
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Especially
Limtied Time Offer ends on October 5th
Add a timer here
Ready to transform your creative chaos? I invite you to join BB RingDex today and start creating your tactile ring journal.
same, I'd delete this
Ready To continue your creative journey?
delete this
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Get instant access for $47 now
Imagine this:
Turn this into a sub-heading
Picture yourself flipping through the pages of your completed RingDex, each one filled with carefully curated materials that tell your unique story. It’s about transforming your supplies and previous artworks into a piece of art that you’ll be proud to show off, celebrating the joy of seeing your creativity come to life in a tangible, beautiful way.
I reckon get rid of this because there's too much copy in one section
Give those beautiful handmade papers and collage fodder a home Turn that collection of vintage ephemera into something more than just a drawer full of memories Bring those forgotten fabric scraps to life in your journal Use those paints and writing tools to add personal touches and depth to your pages Incorporate previous artworks, and give them new life by blending them with fresh ideas
Can you add a matching icon to each idea and turn this into one row with 5 columns?
Here's what my students are saying:
Can you split this section into 2 separate ones. One here and one further up on the page?
Supportive Community
I would add this to the 'what you get' section further up on the page
BB RingDex is different
Can you turn this into a sub-heading?
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I'd change the button copy to Join BB RingDex for $47 now
You love creating, but let's face it
I reckon this makes a FABULOUS sub-heading... I'd open the paragraph with this as the big, bold sub-heading because it draws people in.
This class is just what you need if:
I'd in 'exactly'
You'll walk away with
I'd move this section up above the 'this is for you if' section
Limtied Time Offer ends on October 5th
Only until October 5
LimitedTime Offer $77 $47
I'd move this bit above the timer
Buy now and get access to the class content instantly
But only until this timer strikes zero
available price
price it will ever be
st.
I'd mention the price on the button for those ready to invest... it's a no-brainer pricetag. Get Instant access for $47
Got an overflowing stash?
I'd get rid of this bit
Is your creative space overflowing with papers, embellishments, and art supplies that you’ve collected over the years? Maybe it started with a few choice pieces—some vintage ephemera here, a few handmade papers there, and a handful of fabric scraps tucked into a drawer—but now, your collection has grown into a colorful, chaotic treasure trove of artistic potential. You’re a passionate artist, driven by the thrill of discovering new materials and the joy of crafting something unique. But let’s be honest—I know I’m not alone when I say that all that passion can sometimes turn into a pile of unfinished projects and unused materials. It’s easy to feel overwhelmed by the sheer amount of stuff you’ve gathered, and even easier to feel guilty about it. Sound familiar? If you’ve ever found yourself staring at your art stash, wondering how you’ll ever use everything—how you’ll ever turn it into something cohesive—you’re not alone. Many creatives face this same struggle: the desire to create something meaningful, yet the challenge of actually bringing it all together.
Love this intro all about making the reader feel heard and seen. What if you open it with something like: Finding you here checking out this brand new resource tells me a few things about you: Your creative space is likely overflowing withpapers... You're a passionate artist ... And at some stage, you have stared at your art stash wondering...
But what if you could take all those beautiful supplies and finally give them the home they deserve? A place where each piece plays a part in telling your unique artistic story. That’s exactly where BB RingDex comes in.
I would turn this paragraph into a standalong section that pops! And make the last sentence stand out separately too...
Are you ready to join other creatives like you who are ready to be inspired and encouraged in a fun and supportive community?
I'd change this to a decision-inviting statement. Something like: This is your chance to join creatives just like you ready to be inspired and encouraged to create.
Local connections. Find other members near you, plan meetups, swaps, or live call art sessions. There’s a forum dedicated to helping you make these connections—building a global yet wonderfully personal community.
Underneath this section, I'd include a separate section that showcases some of the tangible transformations/wins/mindset shifts that popped up in your survey. I would add them in 2 rows with 5 columns each where you add an icon to each tangible win so it's easy for people to digest.
This is a space where
I would move this section underneath the Nest Fest bonus
really learning a lot! -Stacey Vicari
Just before the final invite, I'd insert a section that speaks to immediate, short-term and long-term wins. You'd structure it in 3 columns titled As soon as you join..., In a month..., in 6 months... That's where you outline what they can achieve/experience/feel at each stage. It's super powerful and hopefully invites readers to opt for the annual membership because you highlight the long-term transformation.
In Their Own Words...
Can you replace the written testimonials with the screenshot testimonals you scratched from the section further up on the page?
ET.
same button copy feedback
Get IMMEDIATE ACCESS to all of these courses as soon as you join!
I would combine this section with the membership-exclusive courses so it's all in one
ET.
Same again for the button copy
BETH MCWILLIAMS
I love the videos!!! And I'd be tempted to get rid of the written testimonials underneath
SKINNY MINI JOURNAL
Can you add a tiny blurb explanation for each course here? Super short to give it some context.
Here's a peek at some of the exclusive courses inside...
PLUS get exclusive access to 6 courses ONLY available to the Roben's Nest members:
The Roben’s Nest comes with…
What you can expect inside the Roben's Nest each month...
Hear from happy members...
I would reduce it to the 6 most impactful testimonials here so people don't get lost. 3 rows are perfect to view on a desktop screen.
ET
Same comment for the button copy as per above
open arms and paint-splattered aprons!
Can you add a photo of you with a paint-splattered apron here to spice things up and add some fun?
You love creating but feel stuck and need support to reignite your spark. You’re seeking fresh inspiration, accountability, and the confidence to create consistently. You’re eager to explore new mediums and techniques in a welcoming, encouraging environment. You want to learn new skills without the stress of spending a fortune on courses. You’re ready to leave behind online overwhelm and step into a real, nurturing community. You want to enjoy the creative process fully and feel proud of every step in your artistic journey You’re craving connection with fellow creatives who understand and share your passion. Your inner muse is ready to break free from the comfort zone, play without pressure, and truly believe in your art.
I would shrink the list down to the 5 most commen denominators to make it easier to digest. Also, I'd move the you into the heading so you start each bullet point idea with a verb. Can you have a look through your survey responses to see whether there are any priceless expressions that make this section feel really tangible?
Monthly Community Membership
I'd remove this because you're mentoning the monthly membership nature of the offer above
The Roben’s Nest, a monthly membership led by artist Roben-Marie Smith, is your go-to community for free-spirited creatives of all levels—beginners are not just welcome, they’re celebrated!
I would turn this into a standalone statement underneath this section so it can pop and stand out. It's easy to miss within this paragraph.
Take a break to nurture your creative soul and reconnect with fellow makers in a joyful, judgment-free, and FUN online haven.
This is where you introduce the Roben's Nest. Start the sentence with 'The Roben's Nest is your well-deserved break to nurture... this speaks to the mindset that a lot of women think they don't deserve time to themselves from yoru survey
Although creative souls have more info at our fingertips than ever before (thanks, Internet) true community can be hard to find.
And make this the subheading. It hits home!!! Possibly add 'like you' in there.
A Cozy Corner for Creative Confidence, Connection and Community!
I'd remove this line
Doors Close August 31 @ 9:00PM ET.
On the second button, can you add "(get 2 months free)"?
Who this course is designed for:
I would insert a 'what you'll walk away with' section here first.
Something like...
This isn't just any course. It sets you up for creative success!
Spark your ideas Learn the steps Source your materials Silence your inner critique Take it from idea to finished project
Hey, you made it all the way down here, so before you go, why not take a chance on making art for yourself. Enjoy theBring some joy into your life! No risk, no obligation, just a chance to make something with your hands! And it's FREE...
If you're after a fun creative project that you ACTUALLY take from idea to custom art journey, then get FREE instant access now.
And I'd make the button somewhat less doubtful ;-) SIGN ME UP NOW
I would love to join you on your artistic journey. Whether you are discovering art for the first time or you’ve been around the block a time or two.
In this section, can you touch on how many students you have supported to date to build trust? 5000+ students for example.
I would also include a logo bar here if you've been featured in media or publications.
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I'd streamline this bullet point section and reduce it to the top 5 points. And reword the heading to something like...You'll love this FREE mixed media art course if you:
Take a closer look at the flip book you'll be creating!
I love this video and would move it up right underneath the "what you'll walk away with" section. What if you reworded the heading to something like: Sign up to this FREE course now to create your very own version of this beauty:
Can you believe all of these lessons are yours to enjoy for FREE?
I'd start a separate visual section here that sparks the reader's imagination. Something like...
Imagine getting your hands on EVERYTHING it takes to create a custom art journal.
And then you can have the visuals of what's included with a little blurb about each step. What if?
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My questions right off the bat here... is this course really only free for a limited time? If it's always free, I'd suggest removing it to keep it genuine and build trust in your brand. I'd consider replacing this intro with a killer statement that converts people instantly. Something like: Create your very own AMAZING flip book from start to finish with this FREE step-by-step video guide
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Hey, I’m Roben-Marie!
Can you add a logo bar here underneath your bio "as featured in"?
Get ready to elevate your art projects with unique and vibrant textures.
I'd make this stand out as a heading:
Elevate your art projects with unique and vibrant textures
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What if you could...
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I gotcha' covered.
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You're probably wondering about which paper to print these onto, right
In case you're curious about the best papers to print these onto, I've got you covered:
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Nothing in the Getaway Pod XTD has been left to chance. With solar panels to keep you powered up, an ensuite shower and toilet tent for convenience and a wrap-around awning to rival the best of them, this 4wd camping trailer means business.
Function over form, the details that matter.
Every detail has is designed to maximise the space, experience and creature comforts. From reverse cycle aircon to the luxury kitchen or from the king size bed with dual doors to the generous 870 litre storage space.
A compact lightweight teardrop camper designed to tow on the back of most cars, you’ll never know how you travelled without it. Featuring luxurious amenities including a flat screen TV, king-size bed, gourmet kitchen with all the bells and whistles, an ensuite toilet and shower, plenty of storage, air-conditioner and a wrap-around awning, it’s the ultimate holiday accommodation you’ve been looking for, in moveable form.
Getaway Pod was started by two Aussie cousins who searched for an adventure solution that would perfectly blend their desire for creature comforts and extreme adventures.
The Getaway Pod is the compact lightweight 4wd camping trailer that ticked all their boxes.
ideal for off-road adventures
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Manufactured in australia
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compact lightweight teardrop camper
replace with: compact & lightweight teardrop 4wd camping trailer
You’ve just discovered a lighter, simpler, easier way to travel, with the Getaway Pod XTD.
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Safe and lightweight towing (say goodbye to heavy caravans!) Built tough, the Getaway Pod XTD is ideal for off-road adventures.
Replace this with: Ready to explore the lighter, simpler & easier way to travel?
Effortless luxurious holidays, anytime, anywhere.
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I'm thrilled to invite you to join me inside my FREE mixed media art course, 'Good and Plenty Painted Papers'.
Get ready to pull up a chair to my art table, where we'll make magic happen. I can't wait to guide you to your very own stash of colorful painted papers that make the perfect backgrounds for your art journals, collages, and so much more.
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•You feel a bit stuck and are looking for fresh inspiration.
I can't seem to see the photo you've included here, but I assume it alludes to something like: This FREE course is perfect for you if...
I'm a mixed media artist and dedicated art instructor, and I teach both seasoned and beginner artists to embrace the creative process without fixating on perfection, all while enjoying the journey.
I would remove the mini about section from here and leave it to the about section towards the bottom of the page. What I would include here is a photo of you possibly painting or in your studio.
As Seen in...
I would move this banner right underneath the above the fold section, especially if you plan to drive cold traffic from Pinterest to this landing page
AND THESE AWESOME BONUSES ARE ALSO INCLUDED:
I would move this up underneath the inclusions section
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I'd remove this and lead with your bio
Play Without Rules and Trust the Process
What if you played without rules and trusted the process?
HERE are the directions for logging into Simplero to access the classroom if you’re having trouble.
I would include one student creation and one student testimonial in the PS to convince them to check it out right now.
Something like PS. If you're tempted to put off this creative journey until later, then let this incredible creation convince you otherwise. Now's always the best time to be creative!
people in your life
Underneath this sectin, I would add an icon bar that speaks to your unique points of difference: hand-painted, hand-stitched, 100% bespoke, recycled, carbon-offsetting, etc (and you can totally repurpose this icon bar on your product pages) It's an easy way for people to understand what you stand for and what to expect
With your carefully chosen words typed by Dorothy my vintage typewriter
Underneath your about section, I'd inclue a 'featured and trusted by' logo bar. It seems that you have worked with a number of recoginsable organisations and media outlets. I would let people know about the amazing brands you've worked with.
About Blue Stiggy
I would move this up towards the top of your page. Right underneath your bestsellers
Give a Truly Thoughtful + Personal Gift
I would lead in with a short blurb about your truly unique concept. Something that draws people in and intrigues them to learn more.
Truly Thoughtful + Personal + Eco Conscious Stationery
This line shows as the Title of your website. So I assume you have optimised your home page for the SEO keyword 'eco conscious stationery'. If that's the case, I would flip it around so you lead in with your keyword and follow it up with 'Truly Thoughtful + Personal'
Join at the founding member price of $17 /month005Day(s):00Hour(s):50Minute(s):
Move this further down underneath the Membership introduction
Weekly journaling PromptsCommunity of like-minded People
I would be a bit more specific here around the inclusions. List them out in both columns as bullet points as a handy recap.