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  1. Apr 2024
    1. Either way, this '5 Ways to Master Your ADHD Strengths Like a Pro' will help you +++

      The 5 Ways to Master your ADHD Strengths Like a Pro I'm going to share with you will help you look at yourself in a whole new light.

    2. You + 5 Ways to Master Your ADHD Strengths like a Pro = everything you need to get started!

      I'd move this entire section to the bottom of the page and add a DOWNLOAD free button as the final push.

    3. A Note From Jacqueline

      I would move this section up right underneath the inclusions.

    4. Ready to feel like you just discovered the operator's manual to yourself?

      What if you finally discovered the operator's manual to yourself?

    5. These three lifestyle activities will help your brain to focus and feel happy every day :)

      They'll help your brain to focus and feel happy every day.

    6. Have you noticed how sometimes a task can take forever, and sometimes you can finish exactly the same task in minutes? That's (in part) due to your body clock.

      I would delete these bits and stick with only the last sentence to make it short and sharp

    7. Your strengths are things you are naturally good at and feel so easy for you,  you presume everyone is good at them (they aren't!) Many things that are considered 'easy' like doing a load of laundry or unpacking a suitcase, are hard for people with ADHD.

      I'd morph these two ideas into one to make it clearer:

      While things considered 'easy' (think doing the laundry) are hard for people with ADHD, things others find incredibly hard come naturally to you.

    8. !

      In terms of the video, LOVE the video and the personal welcome... but is there a way to condense the content a little to make it short and sharp?

    9. FREE MUST HAVE RESOURCE FOR adults living with ADHD

      Now that we've moved the FREE into the button copy, I'd change this to The must-have resource for adults living with ADHD'

    10. P

      I would change the button copy to 'DOWNLOAD FREE NOW'

    1. My mini-course, ‘I’m All Pack! How to pack your suitcase the ADHD-friendly way 🙂 walks you through the 5 steps to packing your suitcase and includes valuable insights, tips, and techniques specifically tailored to help you streamline the packing process. Say goodbye to last-minute scrambles and hello to organized, stress-free trips. Click here to enroll  and embark on your journey of hassle-free packing!”

      How about something like this:

      What if you could take your suitcase-packing skills to the next level?

      With my ADHD-friend step-by-step guide to packing your suitcase, you can say goodbye to last-minute scrambles and hello to organized, stress-free trips today!

      [GET INSTANT ACCESS FOR ONLY 9$]

    1. Who Said You Can't Get Anything Good For Free?

      Mmmmhh... I know what you're trying to do with this statement, but I wonder whether it's actually planting a seed of doubt.

      How about something like...

      "Free resources so good I should charge for them."

    2. Wanna Dive A Bit Deeper?

      I'd slot in a short-and-sharp testimonial section here leading into your 'big ticket' offers.

    3. my main programs

      How about 'best-selling offers' to make it a bit more irresistible?

    4. lessons in th

      I would include the price point in the Button CTA because they're so well-priced and an easy YES.

    5. e so good your kids will BEG you for more!

      Wonder whether it's worth testing how embedding a sign-up form with each of these freebies impacts your list growth and conversion rates?

    6. You can jump to your preference through the buttons over there 👉🏼

      Love that you're giving them the option to jump to exactly what they're after right at the top of the page

  2. Mar 2024
    1. Featured In:

      Consider moving this up so it sits underneath your about section on the Home page. It complements your blurb nicely and builds instant trust. Or you could even move it right to the top underneath the header banner so people know they're in the right place right from the start.

    2. TAKE AN HERB CLASS!

      I'd move this above the testimonials so people don't have to scroll too far before they see how they can work with you

    3. Hi, I'm Mel

      Wonder whether you can display the text next to your photo so you can absorb your genius visually and verbally in one go?

    4. Don't Worry, We Hate Spam Too, & We Believe In The Golden Rule #section-1617688227652 { background-image: url(https://kajabi-storefronts-production.kajabi-cdn.com/kajabi-storefronts-production/file-uploads/themes/2149435096/settings_images/3b270f8-c141-af01-368-88b451e143f_Untitled_design_2_.png); background-position: center; } #section-1617688227652 .section { background-color: ; } #section-1617688227652 .sizer { padding-top: 10px; padding-bottom: 10px; } #section-1617688227652 .container { max-width: calc(1260px + 10px + 10px); padding-right: 10px; padding-left: 10px; } #section-1617688227652 .row { } #section-1617688227652 .container--full { max-width: calc(100% + 10px + 10px); } @media (min-width: 768px) { #section-1617688227652 { } #section-1617688227652 .sizer { padding-top: 150px; padding-bottom: 50px; } #section-1617688227652 .container { max-width: calc(1260px + 40px + 40px); padding-right: 40px; padding-left: 40px; } #section-1617688227652 .container--full { max-width: calc(100% + 40px + 40px); } } #section-1617688227652 .row { -webkit-box-align: stretch !important; -ms-flex-align: stretch !important; align-items: stretch !important; } /* flush setting */ #block-1617688227652_1 { padding: 0; } /* margin settings */ #block-1617688227652_1 { margin-top: 0px; margin-right: 0px; margin-bottom: 0px; margin-left: 0px; } #block-1617688227652_1 .block { /* border settings */ border: 4px solid #ffffff; border-radius: 0px; /* background color */ /* default padding for mobile */ padding: 20px; /* mobile padding overrides */ padding: 0; } @media (min-width: 768px) { /* desktop margin settings */ #block-1617688227652_1 { margin-top: 0px; margin-right: 0px; margin-bottom: 0px; margin-left: -70px; } #block-1617688227652_1 .block { /* default padding for desktop */ /* desktop padding overrides */ padding: 0; } } /* mobile text align */ @media (max-width: 767px) { #block-1617688227652_1 { text-align: ; } } #block-1617688227652_1 .block { display: flex; justify-content: flex-start; } #block-1617688227652_1 .image { width: 100%; } #block-1617688227652_1 .image__image { width: 100%; } #block-1617688227652_1 .image__overlay { opacity: 0; background-color: #fff; } #block-1617688227652_1 .image__overlay-text { color: !important; } @media (min-width: 768px) { #block-1617688227652_1 .block { display: flex; justify-content: flex-end; } #block-1617688227652_1 .image__overlay { opacity: 0; } #block-1617688227652_1 .image__overlay:hover { opacity: 1; } }

      What is the Golden Rule? If this is something other people possibly haven't heard of either, then maybe consider changing it to something like: "Don't worry, we hate spam too. Opt out any time with one click."

    5. It’s Better For You It’s Better For The Planet & It’s Better For Your Wallet

      Love this concept!

      Can you possibly turn it into 3 colums introduced by a heading "It's better for..." and then have an icon to go with each term (you, planet, wallet)? It makes it easier to digest when scrolling

    6. You’re Probably Here Because

      I'd turn this into a somewhat cheeky heading like...

      I have a sneaking suspicion you're here because.

      It sounds less salesy and more in line with your fun/cheeky personality.

    7. Moms

      I feel like this needs an adjective of some sort. Is there a term that applies to all moms inside your programs and membership? One term all of them can relate to?

    8. Without

      I'm not so sure about the first button they see on your website linking to a pop-up. Can you possibly turn the pop-up into a separate section on your home page underneath the above-the-fold header?

    1. Follow the Discerning Parenting Podcast.Join our students-only Facebook group.

      Can you turn this into 2 columns with an icon/photo for each and a button linking to the Facebook page and your podcast?

    2. Click the link below to access your course.

      I'd remove this and steer people to the emails they'll receive so they don't click the link below before having their login details

    3. Here's what to do next:

      I'd include something like this...

      "Keep an eye out for 2 emails: --> One with the subject line: "How to access your new courses" This email includes instructions to set your personal login details for your Learning Portal --> One with the subject line: "XYZ" This email is my official welcome to the course and runs you through everything you need to know

    1. IF YOU SELECT THIS OPTION, YOUR PAYPAL ACCOUNT WILL BE CHARGED WITH $7.

      Maybe something like: "Add this amazing toolkit to your free course for only $7!"

      I think that's clear enough.

    2. Don't miss this amazing offer!

      How about something like "Want even more strategies?"

    3. What's Included in this Course

      Can you have a short intro here that goes into the format of the course? Is it videos? workbooks? etc?

    4. Pull out an amazing

      Love the space for testimonials

    5. This course is for parents who may have experienced fear-based or authoritarian parenting - or who are surrounded by people who believe in these parenting strategies, and want to break free from the fear, stress, and guilt, so they can have a healthier and more positive relationship with their kids.

      I'd break this down into a separate section with heading "Who is this course designed for?"

    6. Dr. Victoria is a pediatrician specializing in child development and behavior, parent coach, author, speaker, podcast host, and mom. It's her mission to help loving parents like you release your parenting guilt and break free from from the fear-based parenting you may have experienced.

      Can you include a short mention here of how many parents and carers you have supported over the years as part of your programs and courses?

    7. This short course will help you uncover hidden trauma that may be getting in the way of your parenting. You'll break free from fear-based parenting practices and start your healing journey, so you can build a happier relationship with your child.

      Often it comes down to hidden trauma that's getting in the way of your parenting.

      This short course will help you break free from fear-based parenting practices and start your healing journey, so you can build a happier relationship with your child.

    8. It's NOT because you're a bad parent!

      Outbursts like these DON'T happen because you're a bad parent!

    9. Ever wonder why you lose it and yell at your kids when they misbehave, even if you don't mean to?

      Have you ever lost it and yelled at your kids when they played up even though you totally didn't mean to?

    10. GET THIS

      I'd change this to:

      "FREE with the Joyful Mamas, Joyful Kiddos Bundle - ONLY until 24 April"

  3. Feb 2024
    1. Are You Ready To Transform Your Family’s Health?

      Transform your family's health just like these clever mommas

    2. Ready To Feel Confident With  Your Natural Remedies

      This is a replica of the section above. I wonder whether you have another angle you could use here so you're not repeating yourself?

    3. Ready To

      Again, rephrase it so it's not about being ready:

      " Imagine being the Queen of Confidence when it comes to natural remedies and waving underwhelming and overpriced drug store visits goodbye."

    4. Peak Of  What’s On T

      Love this!

    5. Medicine Makin’ Mixology Formula so you can master herbal formulations that work! ($497 value)

      I'm tempted to move this inclusions list (because it's so detailed) further down on the sale page where people are ready to get into the nitty gritty.

    6. Are You Ready To

      Rephrase this to 'what if...'. Because hardly anyone is ready to take action. ;-)

    7. Who Am I To Share This With You?

      You could totally slot in a logo bar underneath 'featured by/trusted by' to reinforce that you know your stuff!

    8. But Only If You’re Ready To Make Medicine So Tasty Your Picky Kids Beg You For More!

      I'm tempted to get rid of this because it sounds super salesy. BUT... it's GOOD, which means you can totally repurpose this along the lines of 'If you're ready to make medicine so tasty your picky kids beg you for more...

      ...then join today and SAVE $100!'

      You could even slot this in as a CTA in the blue section underneath

    9. Start Building Your Own

      I would totally open the sales page with this super strong section and move this up above the mockup/inclusions part.

    10. Today

      I know you talk about the course in great detail in the webinar, but I'd slot in the program promise here together with the course name.

      Some people might not watch right to the end so a quick reminder of the promise doesn't go astray.

    11. for a limited time

      I know you said your countdown timer is playing up, but I'd be more specific here around how long this class is available to view.

    12. How To Make Her

      Loooove all this!!!

    1. Choose The Apothecary Momma Plan That Works For You

      Join month-to-month without lock-in contract

    2. e pla

      Insert logo bar for features

    3. And

      Change this to 'And inside the Apothecary Momma Mentorship, I'm going to teach you how to do the very same'

    4. And Now I Want To Help You Do The Exact Same!

      I'd move this section up underneath the one with the photo of your daughter because it's the logical next step to introduce the solution

    5. Wh

      This top section is missing a strong above-the-fold opener. A section that's initially visible as you land on the page.

      I'd remove the banner at the top and turn the statement on it into a page title over the image of the flower.

      Something like:

      What if you knew how to feel happier and healthier naturally?

      Let's give you the confidence to see the benefits of herbal remedies for your family

      BUTTON: Join Apothecary Momma Today

      And then you'd follow up with the bullet point list in a separate visual section

    6. (even if your family doesn’t really believe in this herbalism stuff) and experience results like these mommas?

      remove the brackets and question mark

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      remove the brackets and question mark

    8. & I’ve got the testimonials to prove it!

      I'd remove this because it creates a little doubt

    9. And You Can Join Us For The Year For Just $490

      I know you're trying to steer them towards the annual membership... but could you lead with the monthly price tag here to make the mental hurdle even lower?

      I'd also include that it's month-to-month without lock in contract

    10. Build Your Confidence Keeps You Accountable To Your Learning You Have A Clinical Herbalist At The Ready To Answer Your Most Important Questions Personalized Guidance Backed By Scientific Research & over 20 Years Experience Real-Time Clarification Up-To Date Info

      I know you're working with busy moms... have you considered including a private podcast feed with all the replays for people who miss the live sessions?

    11. Is Broken Down Into Easy To Navigate Sections

      I would remove this also because the three columns speak to how it's structured

    12. The Apothecary Momma Course Deep Dive Herbal Workshops Ongoing Support

      I'd remove this because it seems like a double up. You're covering all 3 inclusions in great detail below

    13. h

      Add a question mark here

    14. (even if your family doesn’t really believe in this herbalism stuff)

      I would remove the brackets and the question mark at the end

    15. y

      What's the 'so what?' in this statement? What are the tangible benefits you can add to the end of this promise?

      ...so you are healthier and happier naturally? ...so you become the healthiest, happiest version of yourself naturally?

      Just trying to make you think. :)

    16. herbal mentorship

      I assume it's all science-based? If so, maybe slot this in here to again build trust

    17. The Herbalist's Path Podcast

      Do you have any impressive stats to share? Again, we want to build trust in your 'expertise'.

    18. I’ve run a successful

      For how long? Can you include the number of years here to show that you've been around for a while?

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      Can you make this section REALLY specific by sharing actual things they can do based on the results you've seen from your members?

      Think... Treat your xyz with xxx instead of xxx Prove your mother in law wrong Cancel your recurring doctor's appointments

    20. She’s

      Same for this one... make it plural to line up with the several reviews above

    21. This Momma

      I'd make this plural because you're sharing several ;-)

    22. You Caught That Right?

      This heading looks like a button. Is there any other way to format it so people don't confuse it for a button?

  4. Jan 2024
    1. Instant access to the full 168-minute recording of The Bonus Hour workshop so you can watch it again and again The workshop in bite-sized ADHD-friendly video lessons so that you can take it step by step and never feel overwhelmed Printable and digital worksheets so you can document exactly how to create a Bonus Hour in your day. Workshop slides which are perfect if you want a quick visuals-only review. The complete transcript of the workshop, if reading is your preferred learning style

      I would bold the key inclusion in each bullet point to help people skim read... so you'd bold

      instant access to the recording bite-sized ADHD-friendly video lessons printable and digital worksheets Workshop slides Complete transcript

    2. This workshop gives adults living with ADHD do-able techniques to get more done in less time, so they have a BONUS hour every day!

      I think we can make this opening statement more powerful by starting with the mind-blowing result of this workshop. Something like:

      Free up a BONUS hour in your day (in bold and big)

      with do-able techniques that see you do MORE in less time

      (I'd leave the ADHD out because you mention it in the graphic below)

    3. Ready to sign up for The Bonus Hour workshop?

      I'd reword this slightly because people rarely feel ready ;-)

      Something like: Are you already mapping out your bonus hour each day?

    4. Hi! I am Jacqui! I have been an ADHD coach for the last 17 years, and have a neurodiverse brain like you! Because we live in a world that isn't designed for our brains, many things take me longer than the average person.So I am always on a quest to get more done in less time without affecting my standards or feeling stressed.I discovered The Bonus Hour when me and my fiance moved in together. Living together was a super happy thing, but I had to figure out how to incorporate a 1-hour commute into my day.. I didn't want to stop doing anything so I went back to basics, picked out the ten techniques I knew worked best, and created my bonus hour! I was able to keep all the things that were important to me and the commute was no longer a concern. .section--1674583445547 { /*============================================================================ #Background Color Override ==============================================================================*/ background: #f9f9f9; } .section--link_list.section--dark.section--1674583445547 a, .section--link_list.section--light.section--1674583445547 a, .section--blog_posts.section--dark.section--1674583445547 a, .section--blog_posts.section--light.section--1674583445547 a, .section--feature.section--dark.section--1674583445547 a, .section--feature.section--light.section--1674583445547 a { } Fast forward to June 2022. I started to train for my first-ever marathon (42.2 Km, 26 miles) I needed 1 hour a day for the training, so I recommitted to those ten techniques (the ones I'll be sharing in The Bonus Hour Workshop) and used my Bonus hour to run...because that's fun for me! Clients have used their Bonus Hours to start a business, declutter their house, read novels again-- you can use yours for whatever is important to you!

      I would move this section above the inclusions so people are introduced to you earlier on the page.

    5. Here's what you will learn inside  The Bonus Hour Workshop!

      I would formally introduce the workshop title and promise here. Something like:

      Introducing

      The Bonus Hour

      A pre-recorded Workshop that will free up precious time in your life each and every day and show you...

    6. But what if you could do that next best thing? Get more done in less time? So that you have time to spare.. a BONUS hour! Then you can intentionally use it to do some of those important-to-you-activities.

      I would suggest removing the BONUS image and including this section as text only underneath the subheading above. It's easier to digest that way.

    1. he audio version too, so you can listen conveniently on the go.

      I'd definitely turn this feature into its own inclusion. As busy parents, a private podcast is super handy!

    2. Each month, we’ll take a deep dive into one topic that’s a challenge for the current members of the club. Here are some examples:

      I'd move this further down on the page underneath your bio.

      I'd also be somewhat more specific and lead with a bullet point list of tangible topics so people can picture how practical they are.

    3. Your safe space The Discerning Parent’s Club is your sanctuary from judgment and doubt, offering a community of parents with shared values, and expert guidance to help you confidently navigate the ups and downs of raising children.  If you’re struggling with behavior challenges, or you’re worried your child might have language or developmental delays or learning struggles, parenting interventions are key in helping your child thrive. The Discerning Parent’s Club is also designed to be an accessible way to receive this parenting support.

      I'd move this up above the values section to set the scene

    4. Your bridge to confident parenting – the Discerning Parent’s Club

      This is where I'd add a dedicated section introducing the Membership as the solution with a bold tagline.

      I'd then follow with this section outlining the values behind the club ideally with a matching icon for each idea so it's easier to digest. In 4 columns next to each other

    5. You need more than just the cookie-cutter advice that’s all over Instagram or Tiktok. (“Three tantrum busting tips that work every time!”) If we miss the big picture or the real reasons (which would be different from one child to another!), we’ll just be setting up ourselves to be frustrated over and over again.

      This opening paragraph seems a little too long and only skims on the bigger picture your audience needs to see the benefits of your membership.

      I'd focus here ONLY on the problems (cookie-cutter advice, no availability with an expert, needing help when it's most urgent) and the dream they're aspiring to (and expert on call, proven strategies, connecting with fellow parents, etc).

      All the references to the membership, etc I'd move further down on the page.

    6. You don’t need more advice. You need solutions that understand the heart of the problem.

      I would split this statement up into 2 parts and modify them slightly.

      "Here's the thing... You don't need more advice.

      You need to get to the core of YOUR child, family and problems."

      this speaks to the many elements that play into parenting dilemmas.

    7. FOR PARENTS OF KIDS AGE 12 AND BELOW

      I'd remove this and include it in the big, bold tagline for your membership further down on the page.

      I'd also remove the image mentioning the club name completely so your opening question can shine on its own.

      There seems to be too much going on up here

    8. Get the help you need for your parenting challenges – from tantrums, developmental and language delays, managing screen time, school readiness, helping your child learn, and more.

      I'd integrate the peace and positivity here in the subheading.

      Something like:

      Find peace and positivity in your parenting in the one-stop hub for research-based expert support when you need it most.

      I would leave the details on what's inside until later on the sales page.

    9. Go from yelling, tears, and frustration to peace and positivity

      This title sounds a little full-on for me. It focuses on the negatives rather than the positives.

      I'd flip it around so it sparks hope. Something like:

      "What if you could parent without constant yelling, tears or tantrums?"

  5. Dec 2023
    1. Next Steps!

      Ready to get started?

      Book an initial 1-hour 1:1 coaching session with me so we can make sure this program is what can get you the best results right now.

      This one-off session is your opportunity to get a feel for my coaching style and allows us to explore how ADHD shows up for you, and the first steps you can take to see shifts.

      Once you're ready to join, I'll deduct your one-off session fee from the Untapped Brilliance coaching package. (make this bold)

    2. 3 Months membership to The Untapped Brilliance Club

      BONUS: 3 months inside The Untapped Brilliance Club (usually $297 USD)

      The membership to give you immediate access to my complete course library so you can deep-dive into the common challenges people living with ADHD face each and every day.

      Also get access to unlimited body double sessions with me and fellow ADHDers for real-time accountability as you implement new strategies.

    3. This helps to build stronger relationships and avoids misunderstandings, hurt feelings and fallouts.

      So you can build stronger relationships minus the misunderstandings, hurt feelings or fallouts

    4. If so, The Untapped Brilliance Signature Coaching Program can help!

      This is where we introduce the solution:

      Introducing Untapped Brilliance

      Your chance to make REAL progress towards living confidently with ADHD in only 6 weeks.

      As part of this highly personalised 1:1 coaching program, we'll help you:

    5. Don’t Worry if You Aren’t There Yet!

      This is the start of a new visual section.

      This is where we're talking to where they are right now and what's currently holding them back from reaching that dream future.

      Something like:

      Does this ☝️ sound like a sheer impossible fantasy right now?

      And your daily life feels more like a hurricane.

      You feel... - on the sidelines of your life - like you're falling behind more and more each day - frustrated that your ADHD gets in the way of tapping into your MANY talents and smarts

      And while you know you need to step out of your comfort zone to get a handle on your ADHD symptoms...

      ...you can't seem to make any progress on your own.

    6. As long as you are open to trying to new things, coaching is helpful whatever your age.

      Add another booking button underneath the FAQ section so people can book in their initial consultation.

      Something like:

      If you're ready to see REAL shifts in your day-to-day life with ADHD, then this is the moment to take action

      [booking button]

    7. Jacqueline has worked in health care for over twenty years. In England, she trained and worked as a registered nurse and obtained a bachelor’s degree in psychology before m

      Generally, edit this so it's in the first person rather than the third person. It makes it more personal.

    8. Jacqueline Sinfield

      This section moves up above your story.

      And I'd change the heading to:

      Hi, I'm Jacqueline Sinfield

    9. The Untapped Brilliance Signature Coaching Program is perfect for you if…

      I'd move this section above the 'Next steps' section so people have a good idea whether this program is perfect for them.

    10. 3 Months membership to The Untapped Brilliance Club ( usually $297 USD)

      I would remove this section from the inclusions and only have the section below where you talk about the membership.

    11. This helps you to feel supported throughout the whole coaching program. You can reach out any time you have a victory to share or hit a stumbling block. When I introduced email support in between coaching sessions, client success increased substantially – even with clients who didn’t actually email! Just knowing that they had the option made them feel that I had their back and helped them to take action.

      So you feel supported for the entire 6 weeks. Reach out to share wins or whenever you hit a stumbling block for my personalised support, coaching and encouragement.

    12. Within 24 hours of each coaching session I will email you coaching notes of the key points we talked about and action steps. Even clients who take notes during the coaching session find these super helpful.

      So you don't have to take notes and can immerse yourself fully in our session. Expect the notes in your inbox within 24 hours of the session.

    13. Personalized Coaching notes emailed to you after each Coaching Session

      Personalized coaching notes after each session

    14. Video calls (rather than the telephone), if at all possible, allow me to see you and your facial expressions, notice your body language and feel your energy.

      So we can explore your weekly priorities together and I can pick up the cues from your facial expressions, energy and body language

    15. Six 60-minute Coaching Sessions via  Zoom

      I would again add icons to each of these inclusions and display them in a grid so there are 2 or 3 next to each other in each row.

    16. The work we do together is customized and personal to you. We will be using The Untapped Brilliance Signature Coaching Program. However, the amount of time we spend on each topic will depend on your current priorities, challenges and stage of life.

      I'd shorten this section to make it easier to digest.

      Something like:

      Across our 6 weeks together, we'll design a custom plan tailored to your current priorities, challenges and stage of life.

      While structure is helpful, Untapped Brilliance is designed fluid so we can adapt to your ever-changing needs as we explore your symptoms and goals together.

    17. Personalized To YOU!

      Everything we do is personalized to YOU!

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      I'd shorten this slightly:

      The common aspects of life with ADHD we can explore:

    19. ‘personal success system.’

      Can you add another section below this one where you explore your 'personal success system'?

      You mention it several times and it sounds like it's a foundation of your coaching program.

      Can you come up with a graphic in Canva that showcases the elements of this system at all?

      If you google 'framework graphics' there is a whole bunch of examples popping up, and I'm sure Canva has a ton of templates for frameworks.

      All I would do is add another section with:

      My Personal Success System unpacked

      {a brief intro explanation and the graphic}

    20. Why Me?

      I would bring your about section from the bottom of the page above this section. It set the scene for your professional background before you dive into your personal story in this section

    21. A natural side effect to all this is an increase in your confidence and self-esteem. You are finally seeing progress in the areas of your life that you have been wanting for years.  And you start to trust yourself again.

      So you finally start to trust yourself again and show up confident each and every day

    22. A simple mindset shift can make a huge improvement to your day to day performance.

      So you see huge improvements in your day to day performance

    23. Each person has a unique blend of ADHD characteristics . When you have a deep understanding of your ADHD you feel incredibly empowered. Plus, it allows you to treat and manage your ADHD more effectively than ever before.

      So you have a deep understanding of your unique blend of ADHD and feel empowered!

    24. To help you treat and manage your ADHD symptoms naturally. These steps can be done in addition to ADHD meds, or on their own if you don’t take any medication.

      So you know how to treat and manage your ADHD symptoms naturally on top of your ADHD medications or instead of!

    25. And develop time management skills to overcome the classic ADHD stumbling blocks such as arriving late, procrastinating and last minute panics before deadlines.

      So you have tangible time management skills that mean you arrive on time (every time) without procrastinating or last minute panic attacks

    26. 1. Set Clear Goals.

      I would add icons to each of these ideas so it's easier for your customers to digest.

      Love that you have a 'so what' linked to each idea already!

    27. Imagine waking up to the first ring of your alarm clock feeling rested and motivated to get out of bed straight away. In fact, you even have a tingle of excitement about the day ahead. As you pull your covers back and swing your legs out of bed, you have a sense of direction and quiet confidence that you have a handle on this day… and every day.

      I'd turn this into a separate opening section speaking to the dream future they're working towards.

      Something like:

      BoldWhat if you woke up feeling rested and organized, ready to take on your day? Bold

      Imagine you could pull back your covers with a sense of direction that you have a handle on this day... and every day.

      You could: {bullet point list of their biggest desires}

      i.e. arrive in the office on time because you're laser focussed

    28. ADHD Coaching That Revitalizes Your Life

      This is now redundant because we created the heading above :)

    29. Signature Coaching Program

      I'd turn this heading into an explanation combined with the promise.

      Something like:

      The 6-week 1:1 Coaching Program to give you the tools, strategies and systems to confidently revitalize & organize your life with ADHD

    30. Untapped Brilliance

      I'd make this the Standout Page Title followed by the explanation of what Untapped Brilliance is.

    1. Have you ever thought to yourself...

      Slightly tweaking this one to make it work with the updated heading and bring it back to the planning challenge.

      Seeing you take part in the planning challenge, I bet you've thought to yourself at some point:

      "I'd love to feel prepared rather than fly by the seat of my pants."

      "I wish I could streamline things for less chaos and more focus on the things that matter most."

      "I want to control my life rather than my life controlling me."

      "I'd love to no longer stress about everything and accomplish my goals with ease."

      I have reduced the number of bullet points to make it feel less overwhelming and easier to digest.

    2. Good news!

      The great news? Turning all these dreams into reality is easier than you think.

    3. Imagine how you'd  feel if  organized planning was an ongoing part of your life!

      I'd open this page with a question to help people reflect such as:

      What if you could make easy organisation and planning an ongoing part of your life?

  6. Nov 2023
    1. Have a plan for 2024! Having a plan gives you a sense of confidence and calm. You know you have time to do the things that are most important to you.

      I'd streamline these statements again to make them consistent in format and easier to digest.

      Something like:

      Have a plan for 2024

      For 12 months of calm confidence and plenty of time for the things most important to you

      Have taken action on your plan

      For increased trust in yourself from day 1 of the challenge that sees you energized and supported

      Feel motivated

      With real strategies to help you follow through with your plans until they're completed

      As Doctor Russel Barkley says: "ADHD is less about attention, and all about motivation."

    2. During our challenge I'll give you:

      This is the perfect 2nd section that goes into the HOW.

      I'd lead in with the first bullet point idea as the lead heading though. Something like this:

      Ready to explore the 5 easy steps to plan your year? (even if you hate planning or have never managed to stick to a plan in the past)

      During our 5 days together, you'll discover:

      • The secret to prioritizing as an adult with ADHD
      • How to stay excited and motivated to stick to your plan throughout the year
      • Tips & tricks to plan efficiently even if you don't know how long a project will take
      • How to incorporate plans that are important to you (but don't come with a deadline)
      • And much more!
    3. Ready to plan your 2024?The Challenge starts on Monday December 4th

      I'd get them to reflect on what's possible as the final push on the registration page. Something like:

      What if you knew how to plan your most accomplished year yet across 5 intentional days?

      Grab your FREE ticket to the ultimate planning challenge today.

      We start on Monday, December 4th.

    4. You + The 5-day planning challenge

      I'd make this the strong opening paragraph that sets the scene. Love the opening heading!

    5. By the end of this FREE 5 day challenge you will

      I'd move this paragraph underneath your bio to finish with impact showing them where they can be after this challenge.

    6. I help talented adults with ADHD (like you) manage their symptoms so they can succeed in all areas of life, including careers, studies, homelife, and relationships.

      Can you slot in here how many people you have coached over the years to give your bio even more impact?

      Something like:

      Since xxxx (the year you started out in coaching), I have supported xxx+ talented adults like you with ADHD manage your symptoms so you can succeed in all areas of life, including your career, studies, homelife and relationships.

    7. A Note From Jacqueline

      I'd change this to Hi, I'm Jacqueline to make it more personal. :)

    8. e said about past Pla

      This one is great and in the perfect spot. :)

    9. Maybe you think that planning leads to failure and disappointment so its something you would rather not do Or that planning a whole year feels daunting. Or maybe you can create a good plan but can never follow through with it and end up feeling bad. Either way, this five-day planning challenge shows you an ADHD Friendly way to plan your year so that you can accomplish more than you thought possible and feel really proud of yourself.

      And I'd tidy this paragraph up slightly so it's easier to read... something like this scannable bullet point list:

      Maybe you think that...

      • Planning only leads to failure and disappointment (so you simply don't bother) OR

      • Mapping out your entire year feels daunting OR

      • You love a good plan but never follow through (and end up feeling terrible about it)

      Either way, this FREE 5-day planning challenge introduces you to an ADHD-friendly way to plan your year so you feel accomplished and get more done than you ever thought possible!

    10. way

      The video is referring to making a plan for 2023, but I'm sure you're onto that. ;-)

    11. This planning challenge is for people with ADHD who want to create a plan for 2024 that they can follow and complete!

      Because this is an explanation of what this challenge is, I'd change it up to make it sound more enticing. Really speaking to the promise of this challenge:

      The FREE 5-day event for people with ADHD like you ready to create an easy-to-follow plan for 2024 that sees you succeed

    12. Register for

      I'd switch register out for 'Join me in' to make it somewhat more inviting and personal.

    1. To hang out with other readers, make friends, discuss the book, share your wins as you start implementing the steps, and ask me any questions!I'll be hosting a few fun events in there, too.When you get a copy of your book, email me your receipt, and we'll give you the secret link :)

      This is your opportunity to connect with other readers and like-minded people ready to discuss the book, share your wins and ask any questions. I also put on fun events from time to time!

      Simply email a copy of the receipt to [email address] to receive the VIP invite.

    2. My other concern was that I couldn’t check in with every reader (like I can with clients) to help them implement actions to see results. I hoped readers would keep Untapped Brilliance by their side as a daily reminder to take action and not tucked away on a bookcase. That concern quickly evaporated when I started getting messages like this! “…this book is never far from my side to refer back to and get me back on track. There are truly so many valuable pieces of information that make a difference in everyday life.”

      I would reword this paragraph so it links in with the new heading:

      Absolutely!

      This book is designed to support you with daily reminders to take action, and to keep going.

      I might not be able to support you 1:1, but the practical tips and action steps inside Untapped Brilliance will support you every step of the way.

    3. Would people get the similar results to my in-person clients?

      I would turn this into the section heading in a slightly edited fashion. Something like:

      Will this book get me actual results?

    4. As a first time author, it was hard to release Untapped Brilliance into the world. I was used to interacting with my clients one-on-one; and now, I had to let Untapped Brilliance take over.

      I'm tempted to remove this because it's somewhat irrelevant to the sales page. Up to you :)

    5. It's available in 3 formats. Paperback Kindle  PDF version

      I would incorporate this into the heading below. Something like:

      Get your own copy now in 3 convenient formats

    1. 6 courses that target specific ADHD challenges that can get in your  way of running an effective and profitable business.

      With this heading? Are all the courses specific to running a business with ADHD or are these applicable to all aspects of life?

      If so, I'd change it to something like: 6 actionable courses to support you with ADHD-specific challenges in all facets of life.

    2. Hey there,

      I'd add a short intro paragraph before your story that touches on their current reality.

      Something that speaks to...

      Living with ADHD can feel like an uphill battle.

      You're constantly faced with [list of tangible daily problems they're facing].

      What if I told you there's a viable alternative and a way of life that makes you feel accomplished and successful... despite your ADHD?

    3. Guided Tour

      I'd turn this into an inclusion too and word it something like this:

      Personal Guided Tour with Jacqueline

      I want you to get the most out of this experience. That's why you get a guided tour from me showing you through all the amazing features as soon as you join.

    4. 8 Week Planning Workshop

      Is it worth making including this 8-week planning workshop in the inclusion section with a short blurb like this:

      Join me every 8 weeks (you guessed it) as I show you how to plan efficiently with ADHD for the next 2-odd months ahead. Then use the tools & resources inside the Club to help you make them happen!

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      I would remove this section because you already broke it down further up on the page.

    6. (part 2)

      I'd remove this mention also

    7. Here's what Part 1, The Untapped Brilliance Roadmap looks like...

      I'd simplify this heading and call it 'The Untapped Brilliance Roadmap'

    8. The Road Map in The Untapped Brilliance Club is my complete proven step by step system to create a productive and organized life…one day at a time. It's a step by step system, all the guess work has been removed for you. It includes everything you need to know to have a successful day. It starts in the morning with a morning routine that has items to help your ADHD brain focus and concentrate for the rest of the day. It also covers how to arrive at work and appointments on time, how to feel motivated without a pressing deadline, how to stop procrastinating and what to do so you feel accomplished at the end of every day.

      I would move this section further down on the page where you break down your roadmap and make it somewhat easier to digest. Something like:

      Create a productive and organized life with my step-by-step system that removes the guesswork and provides you with everything you need to have a successful day.

    9. During that time I have heard many stories like George’s.

      Has this section moved since you first added it to your course page? This reference seems out of place here... or is it referring to an amazing testimonial that used to sit right at the top of your sales page?

    10. Play to Win!

      I would move this section further down the page right underneath the sign-up section so it presents people with this month's topic. It distracts from the hero message at the top of the page.

    11. You're getting a lot with this membership, and sometimes making decisions on what to do, when, is the most difficult part of transforming your life! It can be helpful to told 'Here's what to focus on this month,' and you know you are taking positive steps towards managing your ADHD.That's exactly what the theme of the month does. There's a new theme on the 1st of every month, with small actionable steps.

      Same for this one:

      Take targeted, positive steps towards managing your ADHD with exciting monthly themes. Let's explore specific, actionable steps you can take to see BIG results each and every month!

    12. This Facebook group is just for members of The Untapped Brilliance Club.  Whether you are celebrating wins, asking for support around a challenge, staying on track with your habits or simply  want to connect with other smart, funny, kind and motivated people living with ADHD who ‘get’ you. I’ll be there once a day answering your questions so that you feel supported in your journey.

      Same for this one:

      Join our member-only Facebook Group to celebrate your wins, stay on track and connect with other smart, kind and motivated people living with ADHD who get you. You also get daily access to me for ongoing support on your journey!

    13. Many people with ADHD find it easier to focus on a task, or do a task they have been resisting, when they are working with an accountability partner. In The Untapped Brilliance Club,  there’s an amazing feature where you can book 50 or 25 minute  accountability  sessions with another member of the Untapped Brilliance Club.  There’s  no limit on how many of these  sessions you book each week. Which means,  whatever country or time zone you are in, there will be someone else to virtual-work alongside,  so that you are both getting your things done!  Body double sessions help you to beat  procrastination and increase focus, which means when you use this feature you will get more done than ever before.

      Beat procrastination and increase focus with unlimited accountability sessions with another Untapped Brilliance Club member. Virtual-work alongside each other to beat your ADHD and get things done!

    14. Twice a month there  are live group coaching calls with me (Jacqueline).  During  these 1 hour calls, you can get coached on any  ADHD related challenges that you are facing, and get help personalizing the course content to your life.  Bonus workshops happen often, too! You can join live, watch the replays, or (very convenient!) listen to replays on your device with our members-only podcast.

      I'd also shorten this to something like:

      Get personal support from me for your ADHD-related challenges and course-specific questions in our fortnightly live coaching calls. Join live, watch the replays or tune in via your private podcast feed on the run.

    15. When you enroll in The Untapped Brilliance Club you  receive immediate access to the complete online course library (with training lessons, worksheets, and slides).  Each course does a deep-dive into common challenges that people with ADHD face.  These include mastering your inbox, decluttering your home,  running a successful business, and being able to focus. You can binge watch it all, take it one step at a time, or simply refer to the relevant lessons  when you hit a road bump and want the practical tools and techniques to get you unstuck.

      I'd also shorten this. Something like:

      Get immediate access to my complete online course library that explores the most common challenges for people like you living with ADHD and sets you up with practical tools and techniques to get unstuck.

    16. This includes 7 modules (47 short training video lessons and worksheets) with all the essentials you need to manage your ADHD. The exact tools  to give you the biggest results, so that you are in control of your day,  feel organized , productive, AND can accomplish everything you know you are capable of.

      I would shorten this up also. Something like:

      Feel organized, productive AND accomplished with a crystal clear 7-module roadmap to help manage your ADHD and get you BIG results.

    17. You will always have someone who understands you

      I would shorten this list of bullet points to make it easier to read (even skim-read). Something like:

      You will always have someone to... * Talk through a problem * Give you proven ADHD-related advice * Support you with encouragement or a confidence boost * Keep you company through hard or scary tasks * Celebrate wins (big or small) * Care about you (genuinely!)

      Someone to provide a safe space that sees you and others like you build a life you love and thrive without letting your ADHD get in the way.

  7. Sep 2023
    1. October 23-26, 2023

      The must-attend virtual event specifically designed for aspiring and seasoned homesteaders

    2. Here are the amazing speakers you’ll hear from at the Homestead Livestock Summit:

      Can you be more specific when it comes to classifying and introducing your speakers. Are they experts in their field? Are they award-winning, published authors, etc?

    3. First, this summit was created specifically for homesteaders that are ready to raise their own animals for food. This isn't general advice for any farmer or homesteader out there. Every single presentation is specialized for the animals that you’re raising, making it a whole lot more impactful.Secondly, our goal isn't to add more to your plate. All of the topics are hand-picked to be specific and actionable. You won't find general, run-of-the-mill advice here. You'll learn real steps you can take to start raising animals for food on your farm. After the summit, you'll leave with advice that you can use to simplify what you're already doing and work towards your goals.

      Can you turn some of these points of differences into icons that make them easy to take in?

      Specialised advice, Easy to implement. Hand-picked topics. Specific & actionable strategies. Simplify what you're already doing.

    4. I have the unique perspective of doing both.

      Love how you've presented your perspective as unique!

    5. have delicious home-raised meat to put on your dinner table each night instead of bland, flavorless meat with endless additives raise livestock at home so you can stop stressing over the ever-increasing price of meat, milk, and eggsfeel confident making homemade cheese and dairy instead of spending hours and tons of money on homemade cheeses or butter at the local farmer's marketexplore other livestock options, like quail, honeybees, turkey, and even buffalo so that you can make the most out of your farm and even turn a profitunderstand the logistics of raising livestock like the type of fencing, housing, and space your animals will need so you don't spend hours chasing loose pigs around the neighborhood (I've been there)

      can you lead with the obstacles/pain points in this section and move the desires into the next one? It seems more organic to tease everything they're struggling with right now, and then speak to the desired outcomes in the next section.

    6. during this free virtual event!

      and make it a financially & personally rewarding experience

    7. sleep soundly at night knowing that your chickens and poultry are safe

      I find this section somewhat hard to digest. Can you investigate smart formatting that bolds the first section of each idea and treats the rest as a by-line (making it easier to get the main idea)?

    1. Amazing and Easy to Create Holiday Projects!

      Learn from 25+ experts and take your cricut carfting skills to the next level for your best holiday craft seasion yet

    2. October 12th - 14th, 2023

      Insert:

      The 3-day virtual summit for new and experienced cricut crafters

    3. This Summit will bring you easy crafts you can make for your holiday season - including SVGs, Sublimation, Heat Transfer Vinyl, and a lot more!

      I'd add in some of the personable snippets from your Beets Makes website about page. No need to mention what the summit delivers, but instead share a little about your motivation, how you support crafters outside of the summit, and what excites you about cricut.

    4. FAQ

      Before you get into the FAQs, I'd explore everything that makes your summit different to all others in your space, and worth attending. Really go into detail as to what makes it different. Is it the format of the presentations? Is it the presenters? Is it the never-been-done-before projects?

    5. what

      the AMAZING

    6. Meet the Speakers

      I'd move the speaker section underneath your about section and the details section to give the event context first

    7. 24+ projects with 24 experts over 3 days will teach you makes that you can use to create easy and amazing holiday crafts.

      Move this into a separate section about your summit.

      During the Holiday Crafts Summit, you'll explore 24+ projects with ...

    8. The Holiday Crafts Summit Was Created to Help You Enjoy the Holiday Season!

      Replace the current heading with something like: You dream of a way to actually enjoy crafting during the holiday season!

      And then move this statement towards the bottom of this section leading into the details of the summit.

    9. You can have all these things. The best part: I've got something to help.

      This doesn't fit here either following on from the struggles.

      Something like: Imagine a day where cricut crafting felt easy!

    10. What you really want is to... - Have Easy Instructions -- Get Step-by-Step Guidance - - Access Free Downloadables -- Get Ideas for a Variation of Crafts -- Save Time on Your Holiday Makes -

      I'd move this into the next section and focus on the struggles here instead (the ones you explore in the section below).

    11. SVG's, Sublimation and HTV projects

      25+ expert speakers helping you make this holiday crafting season your best one yet.

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      I'd insert a separate line about the nature of the event, and who it's for:

      The FREE must-attend online event for nursing educators ready for more creativity and motivation in the classroom

    2. .

      Learn xx+ game-changing active learning techniques from industry experts to boost your nursing student engagement AND motivate you to step up as the education leader in your space

    3. Why the Innovative Nurse Educator Summit? This event values innovation and experimentation. We need to investigate new approaches to how we teach future nurses. Students continue to have difficulty connecting theory to practice and are entering the profession unprepared to make clinical decisions. We can change how we teach, moving away from memorization for a test and toward connecting theoretical knowledge to the patient’s care.The Innovative Nurse Educator Summit offers educators tools to effectively transition students to active participants in learning, using proven teaching strategies that encourage engagement and give you the practical tools to lead an active learning classroom with confidence.

      I would move this section underneath the Meet the Speaker section

      I'd also make it crystal clear what makes your summit different all the other summits they've possibly attended on this topic

    4. After signing up, you will have the option to decide if you would like to earn continuing education credits. There are a total of 9 credits available.

      Can you elaborate on this idea? I assume this is your paid upgrade, but I'd make it a little clearer what the credits include

    5. You can access the summit content from anywhere with internet access.

      How long will they have access for?

    6. This is similar to a flipped classroom model. You will first have time to learn the foundational content at your own pace. Then, through the live session, you will have the opportunity to implement, take action and start building the active learning lesson.

      Can you include here the benefit of having the summit spread out over 2 weeks? They're busy, and it takes time to digest the learnings as part of their busy educator lives

    7. The Details

      Can you reword this slightly to hook people in this section and make them read it?

      What to expect at this Event

    8. As a new educator,

      Love this section, I would just include a reference to your business, and how you support nurse educators outside of this summit

    9. Bring patient care to the classroom.

      The same goes for the other ideas in this section. I'd combine them into one sentence as body copy.

    10. Keep your students active, engaged, and invested in their learning.

      I find the formatting somewhat overwhelming in this section. Can you make this heading a part of the body copy below and combine it into one?

      "Keep your students active, engaged and invested in their learning even during a 3-hour session."

    11. .

      How are they currently trying to make their content stick?

      Can you add a bullet point list here of things they're currently doing?

    1. master the Cricut Design Space Software.

      Can you elaborate on the transformation that comes from mastering the software? What they really want isn't mastering the software, they want the results that come with it.

      Is it creating with ease? Is it creating quickly? Is it bringing their ideas to life without stress and overwhelm?

    2. What makes this event unique is that we will show the full process from start to finish! We are going to show you how to use the software as well as try to finish the project. Our friendly and knowledgeable instructors will show you how to use the Cricut Design Space software, so you can create all sorts of amazing crafts. By the end of the event, you'll feel confident and ready to use the Cricut Design Space all on your own, like a pro. Join us for this special event and let your creativity shine!

      This section really only needs a short and sharp sentence about the nature of the speakers, what makes them experts, and how they will support your summit attendees.

    3. The Cricut Design Space Jumpstart is a special 4-day event made just for Cricut Crafters who want a better understanding of how to use the Cricut Design Space software.

      Move this one into the section above and really hone in on who your ideal summit attendee is. You can use the current struggles and the things they hope for from further up on your page as inspiration.

    4. The Cricut Design Space Jumpstart is a special 4-day event made just for Cricut Crafters who want a better understanding on how to use the Cricut Design Space software.

      I have a feeling there might be other summits about cricut out there. Do they need another generic cricut event talking about basic things?

      You don't need another event touching on the basics of cricut.

      Thankfully, this summit is anything but basic.

      We'll take you through the full process from start to finish using the no.1 cricut software so you can confidently design AND create your next project in no time.

    5. What makes this event unique

      Really hone in on the unique nature of your summit here.

      Is it the only summit that specifically teaches everything about design space? Is it the only event specifically designed for cricut crafters?

      Make this headline really strong and compelling so your summit becomes the must-attend event.

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      Seeing that you don't have your bio yet, I'd touch on why you had the idea for this event, how it's relevant to what you do, and touch on your personal journey (and frustrations) with cricut

    7. We'll help you overcome these challenges and more to ensure a smooth and successful journey in mastering the Cricut Design Space software.

      Can you change this up slightly so it speaks to the transformation. Something like:

      We'll take you from frustrated and overwhelmed to the calm and collected cricut crafter who can bring ideas to life with ease.

    8. You Don't Even Know What Cricut Design Is.

      Is this really a struggle?

    9. Struggling With

      Change this idea up slightly so it's consistent with the format of the other ideas. You're struggling with...

    10. What You'll Gain from This Event: You will get comprehensive tutorials on using the Cricut Design Space software. You'll master the essential tools and features inside of Design Space. You'll learn how to import and manipulate images and fonts. You will get step-by-step guidance for creating stunning Cricut projects. Plus you get to connect with a community of like-minded crafters and some of your favorites too!

      Move this bullet point list further down on the page underneath the 'how would it feel' section because it doesn't sit right in this section.

    11. Discover the endless possibilities of the Cricut Design Space software! Are you a beginner in the world of Cricut Design Space? Are you eager to learn how to use the powerful Cricut Design Space software? Then this amazing (and free) 4-day event was designed to empower and inspire crafters just like you. Reserve your spot now for this FREE event!

      This section needs to speak to some of the misconceptions your summit attendees might be having right now, and how they're currently trying to get around the questions, roadblocks and obstacles holding them back from creating with ease.

      something like:

      Designing and bringing your dream cricut creations to life takes a whole lot more than your creativity.

      I know you're doing your best to navigate your machine, software and the many moving pieces that go with it...

      ...but you're still a long way from being the confident cricut crafter you aspire to be.

      Really hone in on the tangibles obstacles and hurdles in this section.

    12. [SUMMIT GOAL]

      Again, really think about why attendees need to master this system, and what the outcomes will be. Make it tangible!

    13. Cricut Crafters

      Can you be more specific here? Is it for beginners only or aspiring and experienced cricut crafters?

    14. Master Cricut Design Space In This Free Virtual Event!

      Have a think about the 'what's in it for them?'. Why is it beneficial for them to use Cricut Design Space? What are the outcomes? What becomes easier/better/a no-brainer once you know how to use Cricut Design Space?

      Something like:

      Let's demystify Cricut Design Space together so you can finally start crafting with joy, confidence and ease.

    1. I'd change this to read 'at 50% off' to make it crystal clear

    2. Save 96% for the next few minutes!

      I'd move the timer from underneath the video to this spot because it fits nicely with the 96% savings promise

    3. handmade gifts you’ve always wanted to make!

      I would make this more tangible also and add some more variation. Possibly speaking to actually taking their gifts from idea to actual gift!