I'm curious... are you not able to link to the print version or do you ask them to sign up so you capture their email addresses? If it's a conscious decision to make them sign up, I'd reword the button CTA slightly. GET YOUR EXCLUSIVE LINK TO ORDER... and then the CTA in the pop-up box would be SEND ME THE EXCLUSIVE LINK TO ORDER

I wonder whether you can include a photo of yourself with the print version in the header so there's a warm smile as soon as they land on the page.

Can you add a little more detail around how many hours it includes and the outcome of the day?

I would move this up so it's in line with the inclusions in the column on the left. And bold the VIP day inclusion on the left...

I would centre this

This font seems different to the headings above?

Can you centre this section on the page and bold the first sentence?

Can you move this text next to the photo of your with your medal at all?

Could you structure this section as 4 columns at all? I think it would make it look cleaner.

I feel like there's something missing over the header image?

I think this is too much in the header section. I would remove this section entirely.

As for the button copy, I'd remove Register Here!

I would beef these up in a separate 'this is what you can expect' section underneath your about section.

Some of these ideas would be great to the 'right now' section further up on the page

I'd try to condense your about section to one visual section on the page. So possibly see how you can move this bit into your 'main' about section

BB ARt Journal Masterclass will help you...

I'd then follow it with a paragraph that addresses the right now and how they're currently approaching their art. The frustration of doubting themselves, not knowing where to start, lacking feedback so they know how they can improve, etc...

And then I would introduce your BB Art Journals Masterclass as the solution in the next section.

I would lead with what's possibe here... the dream future!

What if you activated your full creative potential and said goodbye to overwhelm?

Imagine what it would feel like to eliminate the sheer impossible obsticles that have been holidng you back from creating? And you not only started creating consistently, but you could watch your skills grow week by week?

And you could trust your artistic intuition?

Someting like this...

This also perfectly lends itself to a clumn-style approach

I would definitely turn this into a 3-colum section with a matching icon/graphic for each

I would move this section right underneath the header

Find confidence through creativity in this 12-week art adventure, and FINALLY embrace your unique style

Next up, I would explore your courses. A headling like 'This is how you can create with me'. And then a short blurb that sets the scene for your classes and courses. Possibly mention accessible, mix of free and paid, fun, colourful and easy-to-follow here. Maybe a mockup of some of your creations next to the blurb. And then a button that reads something like [START CREATING]

When it comes to your freebie sign-up... I would leave it as as separate section at the bottom of the page, but also have a banner at the top of your page that links to a pop up where people can sign up so it's always visible.

Love the blog section! Could you possibly rename it into something like 'The latest tips & tutorials'.

I know you're 'big' on YouTube, so why not have a section that inviges people to subscribe to your YouTube channel linking to your 3 most popular videos and a main button underneath that reads [SUBSCRIBE NOW]

I would start with a big, bold banner above the fold that leads with a simple statement around what you do. Something like: Fun courses, classes & inspiration for newbie & seasoned artists. Also add a bright, bold button that links through to your courses page [JOIN A CLASS]

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Right underneath, I would have an 'as featured by & seen in banner' where you hightlight any amazing features you've had since starting out.

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Next up, I'd slot in a short and sharp intro paragraph that sets the scene for your unique approach to art, and what makes it so appealing for your community.

I would keep your about section on the Home page short and intriguing so people click through to your about page to find out more. I would focus on this part of your story here, and then invite them to click through to your about page where you go into more detail. The button can read something like: EXPLORE MY ARTISTIC JOURNEY

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What about changing this to Hi, I'm Jacqueline Sinfield?

Could you turn this into a 3-column section with a matching icon so it pops more?

I would bold this sentence

Could you add a button here that links up to the options section on your sales page for those who are ready to buy?

Underneath the video, I'd include a snapshot of the projects you've committed to without linking to other places on your website (because you want to keep readers here). Maybe one image with a mention of the project name and year?

Digital or print? The choice is yours!

And then I'd display 2 columns with mockups underneath giving people the ability to choose.

For digital it could read something like: Get instant FREE access to a digital download for you to print at home.

For the print version it could read something like: Get your luxurious hard copy delivered right to your doorstep in a matter of days.

I would create a brand new video to embed right above the inclusion section where you talk through your experience with the challenge, and talk through the free digital or paid print options. Why not showcase a printed journal in the video so people can see what it looks like? I'd also take the opportunity to introduce yourself here for context. Unerneath the video, I'd also include logos of where you've been featured in relation to this concept.

Underneath the thumbnail section, I would include an FAQ section addressing the differences between the digital delivery and the phyiscal delivery to make it crystal clear. And then finish with a repetition of the 2-column section giving people the option to choose digital or paid printed.

If you show a hard copy of the tracker in your video, then I'd skip this section and simply leave the thumbnail section you currently have.

Move this one right underneath the header section for people who come to you vie a Google Search.

I wonder whether displaying the sections in 5 colums with a number icon above makes it easier to digest and understand?

Planning, Tracking and Reflecting made easy

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Could you add the cover shot for your 3 most popular YouTube videos here for people to click on?

could you add starting from $xx here?

Could you use trigger links here to introduce the 3 most popular ones and allow them to get them straight to their inbox with one click?

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Do you have a snap of you as a child creating that you could include here?

Great subject line!

Could you link up a few of your most popular videos/blog posts here to showcase the quality of what they can expect?

This is where I introduce you to

Love this!

Expect something new

I'd keep this all in one sentence

I usully jump between personal snippets and artsy gems.

I'd stay away from the term newsletter and change it to 'emails from me'. I reckon newletter sounds outdated because, let's face it, hardly anyone wants constant sales pitches in their inbox... and that's what comes to mind when I hear newsletter ;-)

LOL :)

Funnily enough, on the other side of that bridge was one of

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I'd keep it short and sharp and delete this intro

Love the format of the image section

Make sure the CTA button mentiones the price because it's such a no-brainer

I'd totally remove this and get straight into it

Doors are wide open for my...

Why don't you position this section as a collection of your AND your community's favourites, and include a subtle mention of your membership and our best-selling low-ticket course?

I'd reword the intro to "Let's start with a few of my community's (and my) favourites"

Can you add a sentence here around the idea of how many people roughly you have 'connected with' over the years? That could look like this: Since {year}, that's seen xxxx+ art curious humans experience my courses and community.

Can you possibly encourage a reply here with the promise to send them access to an exclusive class they can't get anywhere else? I reckon it will skyrocket your responses and help you build connections

Can you link up the Roben's Nest here?

So do I haha

That's a solid foundation, but let me share a little more about me so we can take this email relationship from stranger to online friend.

Can you move this into a separate line?

Love the new look and feel of this section

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Can you highlight some key words here?

Loooove!!!

Start this section with this verb

I'd start this section with a verb too

Wondering... is it possible at all to make the colourful border around the white box slightly bigger?

Can you potentially reduce the column width here so it doesn't sprawl as far across the screen?

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Six months from now

In a month you will have

As soon as you join you can

I'd put all these in quotation marks

Can you make this all capitals?

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Looove the little blurbs!

I'd drop this down into the next line also

Can you drop this into the line below and make it bold so it really stands out?

I'd center this section

Can you add some before/after shots or user-generated content?

I would move the reviews panel further up on the page

I would turn these AMAZING benefits into an emotive introduction blurb. They are what's going to sell your product!

I'd make this section easier to read and less wordy. Also, can you add the price of NOT joining in here to give them a gentle nudge? I'd also add an inclusion table again at the bottom of the sales page

Is this bit meant to be a repeat of further up on the page?

Can you scatter individual reviews/testimonials throughout the sales page rather than bunching them up in one section? It means people don't accidentally scroll past.

Again, try to format it in a way that makes it easier to digest this information. I'd steer towards a brief paragraph for each inclusion outlining it in more detail

I would make this section easier to digest by turning it into columns with matching icons/mockups as well as adding the 'so what' to each inclusin

Love how you're introducing the origin of this concept. I would add a section about you here. Who you are, why you're perfectly positioned to support them, and touch on accountability being the one thing that got you to where you are today

I'd turn these bullet points into a paragraph that touches on why this concept works. And I would remove the individual buttons

This is a great third section. It's the solution to their current approach. Introduce the membership here with a big, bold promise while touching on the structure/format.

This is a great second section of this sales page. It's addressing what they're currently trying to do unsuccessfully.

I would start with a section here that speaks to what's possible. .. the ultimate dream rather than the struggles. That way you're starting on a positive note and what's possible.

I would link these buttons up to the inclusins section on this page rather than to the checkout because people haven't had a chance to learn more about the program yet

Start with the big, bild promise here. What are members going to achieve by joining?

Move this right underneath the main header for instant trust and credibility

Make sure you move this one up right underneath your about blurb

I'd move this further up on the page just below the choose your own adventure section

Choose your own adventure:

Can you add your course here?

Let's protect you while...

Especially

Add a timer here

same, I'd delete this

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Get instant access for $47 now

Turn this into a sub-heading

I reckon get rid of this because there's too much copy in one section

Can you add a matching icon to each idea and turn this into one row with 5 columns?

Can you split this section into 2 separate ones. One here and one further up on the page?

I would add this to the 'what you get' section further up on the page

Can you turn this into a sub-heading?

I'd change the button copy to Join BB RingDex for $47 now

I reckon this makes a FABULOUS sub-heading... I'd open the paragraph with this as the big, bold sub-heading because it draws people in.

I'd in 'exactly'

I'd move this section up above the 'this is for you if' section

Only until October 5

I'd move this bit above the timer

But only until this timer strikes zero

price it will ever be

I'd mention the price on the button for those ready to invest... it's a no-brainer pricetag. Get Instant access for $47

I'd get rid of this bit

Love this intro all about making the reader feel heard and seen. What if you open it with something like: Finding you here checking out this brand new resource tells me a few things about you: Your creative space is likely overflowing withpapers... You're a passionate artist ... And at some stage, you have stared at your art stash wondering...

I would turn this paragraph into a standalong section that pops! And make the last sentence stand out separately too...

I'd change this to a decision-inviting statement. Something like: This is your chance to join creatives just like you ready to be inspired and encouraged to create.

Underneath this section, I'd include a separate section that showcases some of the tangible transformations/wins/mindset shifts that popped up in your survey. I would add them in 2 rows with 5 columns each where you add an icon to each tangible win so it's easy for people to digest.

I would move this section underneath the Nest Fest bonus

Just before the final invite, I'd insert a section that speaks to immediate, short-term and long-term wins. You'd structure it in 3 columns titled As soon as you join..., In a month..., in 6 months... That's where you outline what they can achieve/experience/feel at each stage. It's super powerful and hopefully invites readers to opt for the annual membership because you highlight the long-term transformation.

Can you replace the written testimonials with the screenshot testimonals you scratched from the section further up on the page?

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I would combine this section with the membership-exclusive courses so it's all in one

Same again for the button copy

I love the videos!!! And I'd be tempted to get rid of the written testimonials underneath

Can you add a tiny blurb explanation for each course here? Super short to give it some context.

PLUS get exclusive access to 6 courses ONLY available to the Roben's Nest members:

What you can expect inside the Roben's Nest each month...

I would reduce it to the 6 most impactful testimonials here so people don't get lost. 3 rows are perfect to view on a desktop screen.

Same comment for the button copy as per above

Can you add a photo of you with a paint-splattered apron here to spice things up and add some fun?

I would shrink the list down to the 5 most commen denominators to make it easier to digest. Also, I'd move the you into the heading so you start each bullet point idea with a verb. Can you have a look through your survey responses to see whether there are any priceless expressions that make this section feel really tangible?

I'd remove this because you're mentoning the monthly membership nature of the offer above

I would turn this into a standalone statement underneath this section so it can pop and stand out. It's easy to miss within this paragraph.

This is where you introduce the Roben's Nest. Start the sentence with 'The Roben's Nest is your well-deserved break to nurture... this speaks to the mindset that a lot of women think they don't deserve time to themselves from yoru survey

And make this the subheading. It hits home!!! Possibly add 'like you' in there.

I'd remove this line

On the second button, can you add "(get 2 months free)"?

I would insert a 'what you'll walk away with' section here first.

Something like...

This isn't just any course. It sets you up for creative success!

Spark your ideas Learn the steps Source your materials Silence your inner critique Take it from idea to finished project

If you're after a fun creative project that you ACTUALLY take from idea to custom art journey, then get FREE instant access now.

And I'd make the button somewhat less doubtful ;-) SIGN ME UP NOW

In this section, can you touch on how many students you have supported to date to build trust? 5000+ students for example.

I would also include a logo bar here if you've been featured in media or publications.

I'd streamline this bullet point section and reduce it to the top 5 points. And reword the heading to something like...You'll love this FREE mixed media art course if you:

I love this video and would move it up right underneath the "what you'll walk away with" section. What if you reworded the heading to something like: Sign up to this FREE course now to create your very own version of this beauty:

I'd start a separate visual section here that sparks the reader's imagination. Something like...

Imagine getting your hands on EVERYTHING it takes to create a custom art journal.

And then you can have the visuals of what's included with a little blurb about each step. What if?

My questions right off the bat here... is this course really only free for a limited time? If it's always free, I'd suggest removing it to keep it genuine and build trust in your brand. I'd consider replacing this intro with a killer statement that converts people instantly. Something like: Create your very own AMAZING flip book from start to finish with this FREE step-by-step video guide

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Can you add a logo bar here underneath your bio "as featured in"?

I'd make this stand out as a heading:

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What if you could...

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I can't seem to see the photo you've included here, but I assume it alludes to something like: This FREE course is perfect for you if...

I would remove the mini about section from here and leave it to the about section towards the bottom of the page. What I would include here is a photo of you possibly painting or in your studio.

I would move this banner right underneath the above the fold section, especially if you plan to drive cold traffic from Pinterest to this landing page

I would move this up underneath the inclusions section

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I'd remove this and lead with your bio

What if you played without rules and trusted the process?

I would include one student creation and one student testimonial in the PS to convince them to check it out right now.

Something like PS. If you're tempted to put off this creative journey until later, then let this incredible creation convince you otherwise. Now's always the best time to be creative!

Underneath this sectin, I would add an icon bar that speaks to your unique points of difference: hand-painted, hand-stitched, 100% bespoke, recycled, carbon-offsetting, etc (and you can totally repurpose this icon bar on your product pages) It's an easy way for people to understand what you stand for and what to expect

Underneath your about section, I'd inclue a 'featured and trusted by' logo bar. It seems that you have worked with a number of recoginsable organisations and media outlets. I would let people know about the amazing brands you've worked with.

I would move this up towards the top of your page. Right underneath your bestsellers