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FINDING YOUR VOICE AS AN ARTIST IS A LIFELONG JOURNEY…
Can you speak a little bit to how you go about finding your voice as an artist and speak to some of your milestones on this journey?
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You might also enjoy these podcast episodes, featuring yours truly:
I would turn this into a separate section with 3 columns and the podcast cover art further down on the page just above the 3 offers you're teasing.
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Creativity gives me life.
Can you add a fun feature where you share 'Roben-Marie by Numbers'? How many students? How many artworks you've created? How many members in the Roben's Nest? How many features in publications, etc...
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Oh, and let’s not forget social media!
I would remove this section because it sends people away from your website. You want to conver them to sign up to your list and/or buy from you while here, so sending them to Instagram, etc is making this harder.
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Ready to spark (or re-ignite) your creativity?
Love how this is set up. I would link to your 3 most successful products/offers here. Definitely the membership, then possibly the courses page and your shop page/
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My art has been featured in countless books and industry magazines including Get Messy, Journal It!, The Artist Unique, Creative Lettering Workshop, Art Saves, Exhibition 36, Journal Revolution, A World of Artist Journal Pages, 1000 Artist Journal Pages, "Somerset Studio," "Art Journaling," "Green Craft," "Artist' Cafe," "Artful Blogging," "Legacy," "Somerset Memories," "Somerset Life," "Somerset Apprentice" and "Somerset Gallery."
Is there any way to turn this into a visual and have these icons on your about page rather than a duplicate of the home page icons?
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My most popular posts
Above this section, definitely add a small about blurb that links through to your about page.
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The Membership for Creatives Craving a Cozy Space
I wonder whether you can add a visual here too and a bit more contect from your sales page.
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Blending Abstract is the perfect introduction to mixed media play with pastels, watercolors and pencils, designed for beginners. Check it out now.SALVAGED: A Layered Pieces Journal guides you through building a curated cache of salvaged papers and then creating your own art journal by layering color, paper and texture. Click Here.Free Mixed Media Art Tutorials Find my creative walkthroughs archived here. You will access creative tips, techniques and color filled projects that I am excited to share. There is something for everyone regardless of your preferred medium or experience level. Let’s go!
I would turn this into a 3-column table where you add a visual to each course to add a splash of colour and help people picture what to expect.
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CREATION WITHOUT LIMITATIONS
This would be perfect to set the scene right underneath the header and icon bar.
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You’ve Might’ve Seen Me or Heard Me on…
I would move this up right underneath your header
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Join me for an art retreat in
If feel that a pop up box would be better for announcements like these so you don't have to constantly update your website, and people's attention is drawn to topical things.
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Let’s take that next step together, shall we?
This would make great button copy linking to your membership.
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Your art, your creativity and your story matter.
I feel that this could be deleted.
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My latest creative endeavor is The 100 Day Project.
I would move this project into a separate section because it gets lost here.
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You'll walk away with
I feel like you've covered these elements in previous sections. I wonder whether you could give them ideas around what they can use the finished project for. Gift card, framed artwork, etc.
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this focused mini class
I would switch this for the course name
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What if you could experience a creative WIN today?
I would move this up above the 'who it's for' section
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I would move this sectin underneath the course name graphic with your photo.
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12 x 1:1 60-min coaching sessions with Jacqueline For personalized ADHD strategies tailored to you, your situation and your ADHD to help you succeed.
Can you left-align all these sections? Some are centred, while others are left-aligned.
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are there 2 spaces after this word?
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These are the same 4 Pillars that I teach my 1:1 coaching clients, so they can achieve success in their career and life too. While you may have tried making changes on your own, it can be challenging to know how to apply each of the four pillars into your life, when to adjust your approach within a pillar, or when it’s time to explore a fresh perspective.
I thing this section needs to move up above the testimonial section so it flows on form your about section where you mention the 4 pillars. And, I'd make the first sentence BOLD
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I WANT THIS
Not sure this button clicks to where you want it to click?
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A couple of quick demos
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A couple of quick demos
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Move the Order bump down so the pricing options are shown first
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What people are saying about the VIP Summit Experience
This needs to move down so it sits right above the screenshot testimonials
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I think 30€ is missing from the second row of button copy
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This section looks AWESOME!!!
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Want the bonuses above?Click here to upgrade to the Power Pack for just 50€!
I would add a visual here to draw attention
To access these EXTRA bonuses...
Click here to grab the Power Pack for an extra 50EUR instead!
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Can you include this emoji here to draw attention to this section? 🙅
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I would move the order bump down so it sits underneath the pricing options
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What people are saying about the VIP Summit Experience
This needs to move down to sit right above the screenshot testimonials
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now:
Any way to reduce this statement so it sits on one line? On my screen, now is sitting by itself on the second row.
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Designed by translators, for translators.
Any chance you could move the button up closer to this line so it shows above the fold?
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Recordings of all previous LIVE workshops so you can catch up the previous action!
A little picky, but is it possibly to align this box with the one next to it?
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AI
I'd delete this second robot emoji
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Yay, you made the smart decision to grab the Power Pack!
This one looks GREAT!!! The only thing I'd possibly do to add a visual, is add the membership logo in the header section.
Oh, and check that only the first month is free...
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Choose a pricing option
I would also move the pricing options further up so they come before the order bump
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What people are saying about the VIP Summit Experience
This needs to sit right above the testimonials further down in the cart
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How to
Same for these boxes. They don't quite align at the bottom. Sorry, being 100% picky now ;-)
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or 10 ATA CEPs.)
and this one is slightly bigger than the other 2
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Use it tow
Is it possible to make this box align with the others in this row? It comes in slightly shorter than the others.
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Could you center this section also? It looks a little off as the only left-aligned part.
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I can't mark up buttons so have added the comment here. I it possible to format the button so the words all sit on one line?
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If you’re excited about the AI in Translation Summit, you’ll love the Power Pack!Actionable extra resources, toolkits, prompts and workshops to confidently optimize your work with AI firmly by your side
Is it possible to reduce the width here so the text appears narrower and is easier to read? It can be hard for the reader to digest when they're reading all across a big desktop screen.
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You can purchase Nest Fest as a stand-alone course or join The Roben’s Nest, where you’ll not only get access to all the Nest Fest lessons but also additional short lessons from each of our guest artists. These bonus lessons are released monthly, building on what you learned in Nest Fest. Here's what you can expect: Textile Printing With The Gelli® Plate: Marsha ValkDaily Creative Practice Journal Cover: Andrea ChebeleuEco Dyed Journal: Lisa GoddardPlaster Book Covers: Stephanie LeeAdhesive Nerds Unite: Discover the Foundation of Your Art: Shay MichelleTips, Tricks and Special Gifts - A Window into Wozniak's Watercolor World: Tracey WozniakOil Painting Made Easy: Wendy BrightbillPainted Papers - Pieced and Weaved: Julie HamiltonInky Fun: Roben-Marie SmithCreative Play with Color Pencils and Oil Pastels: Joy Ting Charde Whether you're ready to dive into Nest Fest or eager for a more immersive experience inside The Roben’s Nest, there’s a place for you to spread your creative wings!
I would move this section up much higher on the page right underneath the kind words section.
I would also revamp this section entirely because the lessons are already released (I assume) and ready to watch as soon as they join. So I would say something like: Access additional short sessons from each of the guest artists as well as the othe amazing benefits waiting for you inside the membership.
And then I'd list the sessions as well as the other top-line inclusions of your membership in bullet point format.
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Ready to Keep Growing?
Keep growing with your FREE month inside the Roben's Nest
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and receive ONE MONTH FREE inside the Roben's Nest, the membership .... (valued at $24).
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Price goes up to $37 on November 25.
This exlusive launch offer and pricetag disappear when the timer strikes zero
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I would make this the heading
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I'd change the CTA here too... DOWNLOAD THE DIGITAL VERSION
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I'm curious... are you not able to link to the print version or do you ask them to sign up so you capture their email addresses? If it's a conscious decision to make them sign up, I'd reword the button CTA slightly. GET YOUR EXCLUSIVE LINK TO ORDER... and then the CTA in the pop-up box would be SEND ME THE EXCLUSIVE LINK TO ORDER
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I wonder whether you can include a photo of yourself with the print version in the header so there's a warm smile as soon as they land on the page.
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VIP Day
Can you add a little more detail around how many hours it includes and the outcome of the day?
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12 x Private 1:1 ADHD coaching sessions with Jacqueline! Ongoing support via WhatsApp in between coaching sessions Coaching Call Transcripts It's a Wrap Home Study Course
I would move this up so it's in line with the inclusions in the column on the left. And bold the VIP day inclusion on the left...
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Here's what you get when you enroll in Untapped Brilliance Success Coaching 12 x Private 1:1 ADHD coaching sessions with Jacqueline! ($4500 Value) Ongoing support via WhatsApp in between coaching sessions ( Priceless!!) Coaching Call Transcripts ($600 Value) It's a Wrap Home Study Course ($247 Value)
I would centre this
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Coaching Call Transcripts for Easy Reference
This font seems different to the headings above?
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These are the same strategies, and practical tools that I teach my 1:1 coaching clients, so they can achieve success in their career and life too. While you might have tried making changes on your own, it’s tough to know which techniques will work for you, when to tweak them or when it’s time to let go and try a brand new strategy.
Can you centre this section on the page and bold the first sentence?
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After my diagnosis, I created a system of strategies to support myself. I let go of neurotypical techniques that didn’t suit me. I adapted other techniques so that they truly worked for my brain and worked with my strengths. Then everything changed. Life doesn’t feel like an endless to-do list anymore. These strategies allowed me to be a full time ADHD coach for 19 years ( and counting).
Can you move this text next to the photo of your with your medal at all?
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You would love to arrive at work a
Could you structure this section as 4 columns at all? I think it would make it look cleaner.
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Let me guess...
I feel like there's something missing over the header image?
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Ignite Your Creativity: Dive into 12 weeks of pure artistic discovery Connect with Enthusiastic Artists: Join our vibrant community and fuel your inspiration Maximize your Innate Potential: Discover new techniques and embrace your unique style Return to Play: Innovation through exploration and experimentation Personalized Support: Individual feedback elevates your art Learn on Your Terms: Access course materials whenever inspiration strikes
I think this is too much in the header section. I would remove this section entirely.
As for the button copy, I'd remove Register Here!
I would beef these up in a separate 'this is what you can expect' section underneath your about section.
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Do you ever feel like you're sitting on the sidelines, watching other people create beautiful art? Wishing that you could do it, too?
Some of these ideas would be great to the 'right now' section further up on the page
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I've spent years honing in on my process for creating art journals that are not only functional but unique works of art. I will teach you the steps that will guarantee results that you will be proud to show off. Through a distinctive process of learning the "rules" and techniques, I will then encourage you to break the rules and make the creation process your own. Intuitive playing and experimentation will become integral parts of your art practice.
I'd try to condense your about section to one visual section on the page. So possibly see how you can move this bit into your 'main' about section
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MY PROMISE TO YOU ... By the end of the 12-week BB Art Journals Masterclass you
BB ARt Journal Masterclass will help you...
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y you approach art.
I'd then follow it with a paragraph that addresses the right now and how they're currently approaching their art. The frustration of doubting themselves, not knowing where to start, lacking feedback so they know how they can improve, etc...
And then I would introduce your BB Art Journals Masterclass as the solution in the next section.
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It's Time to Activate Your Creative Potential: Say Goodbye to Overwhelm and Hello to Confidence!
I would lead with what's possibe here... the dream future!
What if you activated your full creative potential and said goodbye to overwhelm?
Imagine what it would feel like to eliminate the sheer impossible obsticles that have been holidng you back from creating? And you not only started creating consistently, but you could watch your skills grow week by week?
And you could trust your artistic intuition?
Someting like this...
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Personalized Support: You're never alone; your teacher is with you every step of the way. Real-Time Interaction: Get answers to your questions promptly with live office hours and co-creates. Collaborative Creativity: Join live co-creates to play and create with fellow artists, sparking inspiration. Supportive Community: Join a positive, encouraging community where both your teacher and peers cheer you on.
This also perfectly lends itself to a clumn-style approach
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Option 1: Dive into all the course content (videos, PDFs, guides, etc.) released on April 14th! Take the "choose your adventure" approach: binge-watch the videos or explore modules that interest you the most. Feel free to dive deeper into captivating modules—there's no strict schedule here. My goal is for you to enjoy the journey and find art as an escape from the daily hustle. Option 2: Prefer a community-driven experience? If you are in need of accountability and looking for friends that will help you stay encouraged, this is the path for you! Follow along week by week as I guide you through the modules. This structured approach culminates in creating a stunning art journal. Take advantage of our private group forum, live office hours, and direct feedback sessions for added support and encouragement. Option 3: Can't decide? Opt for a mix of both! Ultimately, it's about what feels right for you. One thing you'll learn early on about me as a teacher, is that I will provide you the tools you need to succeed, but then I will encourage you to discover the path that works best for YOU! With various learning methods, you're sure to find what resonates with you best.
I would definitely turn this into a 3-colum section with a matching icon/graphic for each
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I would move this section right underneath the header
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Discover Confidence Through Creativity:
Find confidence through creativity in this 12-week art adventure, and FINALLY embrace your unique style
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Have you check out my new FREE art course??
Next up, I would explore your courses. A headling like 'This is how you can create with me'. And then a short blurb that sets the scene for your classes and courses. Possibly mention accessible, mix of free and paid, fun, colourful and easy-to-follow here. Maybe a mockup of some of your creations next to the blurb. And then a button that reads something like [START CREATING]
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How to Use Le
When it comes to your freebie sign-up... I would leave it as as separate section at the bottom of the page, but also have a banner at the top of your page that links to a pop up where people can sign up so it's always visible.
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New on the Blog
Love the blog section! Could you possibly rename it into something like 'The latest tips & tutorials'.
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Check out my other classes that are available to watch now!
I know you're 'big' on YouTube, so why not have a section that inviges people to subscribe to your YouTube channel linking to your 3 most popular videos and a main button underneath that reads [SUBSCRIBE NOW]
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I’m Brooke!
I would start with a big, bold banner above the fold that leads with a simple statement around what you do. Something like: Fun courses, classes & inspiration for newbie & seasoned artists. Also add a bright, bold button that links through to your courses page [JOIN A CLASS]
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Right underneath, I would have an 'as featured by & seen in banner' where you hightlight any amazing features you've had since starting out.
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Next up, I'd slot in a short and sharp intro paragraph that sets the scene for your unique approach to art, and what makes it so appealing for your community.
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Until recently I didn’t think I deserved to claim the title of “Artist” because in school we were taught that artists had to be able to draw realistically. I didn’t fit that mold - so just another reason to add to the list of why I felt like I didn’t fit in. My journey to claiming that title has been long and at times difficult. (We are our own worst critics, amiright?) But I can now confidently say, that when someone asks me that dreaded question, “What do you do?” I can proudly say, without hesitation, “I am an Artist.”Maybe you can relate to my story? I would love for you to join me wherever you may be in your artistic journey. Whether you are discovering art for the first time or you’ve been around the block a time or two. Welcome. I am so thankful to have you here.
I would keep your about section on the Home page short and intriguing so people click through to your about page to find out more. I would focus on this part of your story here, and then invite them to click through to your about page where you go into more detail. The button can read something like: EXPLORE MY ARTISTIC JOURNEY
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What about changing this to Hi, I'm Jacqueline Sinfield?
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Make simple lifestyle changes to minimize the negative aspects of ADHD Create an environment that encourages you to focus Identify and begin achieving your life goals
Could you turn this into a 3-column section with a matching icon so it pops more?
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This practical ADHD-friendly book explores the 11 steps that help adults with ADHD successfully tame their symptoms.
I would bold this sentence
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oday.
Could you add a button here that links up to the options section on your sales page for those who are ready to buy?
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courage others to as well. 😉
Underneath the video, I'd include a snapshot of the projects you've committed to without linking to other places on your website (because you want to keep readers here). Maybe one image with a mention of the project name and year?
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Grab your FREE copy of The 100 Day Project Workbook and Tracker today!
Digital or print? The choice is yours!
And then I'd display 2 columns with mockups underneath giving people the ability to choose.
For digital it could read something like: Get instant FREE access to a digital download for you to print at home.
For the print version it could read something like: Get your luxurious hard copy delivered right to your doorstep in a matter of days.
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Here’s What’s Included:
I would create a brand new video to embed right above the inclusion section where you talk through your experience with the challenge, and talk through the free digital or paid print options. Why not showcase a printed journal in the video so people can see what it looks like? I'd also take the opportunity to introduce yourself here for context. Unerneath the video, I'd also include logos of where you've been featured in relation to this concept.
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Workbook Page Thumbnails
Underneath the thumbnail section, I would include an FAQ section addressing the differences between the digital delivery and the phyiscal delivery to make it crystal clear. And then finish with a repetition of the 2-column section giving people the option to choose digital or paid printed.
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Take a look at the whole Workbook and Tracker
If you show a hard copy of the tracker in your video, then I'd skip this section and simply leave the thumbnail section you currently have.
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What is The 100 Day Project?
Move this one right underneath the header section for people who come to you vie a Google Search.
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Section One | Project Details and Tips
I wonder whether displaying the sections in 5 colums with a number icon above makes it easier to digest and understand?
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Plan, Track and Reflect
Planning, Tracking and Reflecting made easy
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The 100 Day Project Workbook and Tracker*- Over 65+ Pages -
Elevate your 100 Day Project Experience with the 65+-page Workbook and Tracker | Available in Digital & Print
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binge-watch.
Could you add the cover shot for your 3 most popular YouTube videos here for people to click on?
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could you add starting from $xx here?
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There are over 15 freebies in the archives waiting for you to download. (You'll put in your email address, but don't worry you won't be added to the list again. My system just needs to know who to send the download to)
Could you use trigger links here to introduce the 3 most popular ones and allow them to get them straight to their inbox with one click?
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Growing up, I was always creative.
Do you have a snap of you as a child creating that you could include here?
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Great subject line!
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Could you link up a few of your most popular videos/blog posts here to showcase the quality of what they can expect?
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I get the opportunity to collaborate with
This is where I introduce you to
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I'll be in your inbox more often during these launches. Don't worry you can always opt out of those specific emails when the time comes.
Love this!
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I launch a new class
Expect something new
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I'd keep this all in one sentence
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My goal is to provide valuable content that connects on a personal level and an artsy one
I usully jump between personal snippets and artsy gems.
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I'd stay away from the term newsletter and change it to 'emails from me'. I reckon newletter sounds outdated because, let's face it, hardly anyone wants constant sales pitches in their inbox... and that's what comes to mind when I hear newsletter ;-)
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I'd keep it short and sharp and delete this intro
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Take a look 👀
Love the format of the image section
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Make sure the CTA button mentiones the price because it's such a no-brainer
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I know you are probably wondering what BB RingDex is all about and what youʼll learn in this course. Let's get into it— there is SO much goodness waiting for you!
I'd totally remove this and get straight into it
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A few of my favorites. These are a few Youtube Lives I did that I think you'll enjoy.
Why don't you position this section as a collection of your AND your community's favourites, and include a subtle mention of your membership and our best-selling low-ticket course?
I'd reword the intro to "Let's start with a few of my community's (and my) favourites"
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Can you add a sentence here around the idea of how many people roughly you have 'connected with' over the years? That could look like this: Since {year}, that's seen xxxx+ art curious humans experience my courses and community.
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Seriously! I would like to know more about you. This is the part where we "connect" so share some fun tidbits about yourself with me. Just hit reply!
Can you possibly encourage a reply here with the promise to send them access to an exclusive class they can't get anywhere else? I reckon it will skyrocket your responses and help you build connections
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Can you link up the Roben's Nest here?
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our times a year.😂
So do I haha
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We have art in common,
That's a solid foundation, but let me share a little more about me so we can take this email relationship from stranger to online friend.
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Let’s make something beautiful together.
Can you move this into a separate line?
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Love the new look and feel of this section
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Can you highlight some key words here?
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over 5,000 students have joined my classes - here's what a few have said:
Loooove!!!
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Start this section with this verb
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I'd start this section with a verb too
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Wondering... is it possible at all to make the colourful border around the white box slightly bigger?
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Can you potentially reduce the column width here so it doesn't sprawl as far across the screen?
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IN SIX MONTHS:
Six months from now
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In a month you will have
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AS SOON AS YOU JOIN:
As soon as you join you can
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I'm more successful at not judging my work as harshly as I normally would.
I'd put all these in quotation marks
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Can you make this all capitals?
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Create a tactile, layered journal with collage. This course invites you to embrace upcycling while creating meaningful art that tells your unique story.
Looove the little blurbs!
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We’re waiting for you with open arms and paint-splattered aprons!
I'd drop this down into the next line also
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beginners are not just welcome, they’re celebrated! 🎉
Can you drop this into the line below and make it bold so it really stands out?
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Although creative souls, like you, have more info at our fingertips than ever before (thanks, Internet) true community can be hard to find. The Roben's Nest is your well-deserved break to nurture your creative soul and reconnect with fellow makers in a joyful, judgment-free, and FUN online haven. Whether you’re searching for fresh inspiration, craving deeper creative connection, or needing a gentle push to dive into your craft, you belong here. Here, you’ll find the support, motivation, and creative confidence to explore without pressure, experiment freely, and truly enjoy the process of making art.
I'd center this section
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3 Simple Steps to better skin
Can you add some before/after shots or user-generated content?
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New staple product in my routine!
I would move the reviews panel further up on the page
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Perfectly invisible on all skin tones, leaves no residues or flashback.Smooths and refines the appearance of pores and fine lines for an impeccable finish.Brightens and evens out skin tone, effectively reducing the appearance of dark spots.Absorbs instantly, offering a weightless feel under makeup without any pilling.Provides deep hydration without a greasy feel, maintaining skin’s moisture balance.Fresh and revitalizing application experience, entirely free from any scent.
I would turn these AMAZING benefits into an emotive introduction blurb. They are what's going to sell your product!
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expatbusinessinabag.com expatbusinessinabag.com
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This is my first time launching
I'd make this section easier to read and less wordy. Also, can you add the price of NOT joining in here to give them a gentle nudge? I'd also add an inclusion table again at the bottom of the sales page
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Accountability got me to get my website done after sitting on the domain for over a year.
Is this bit meant to be a repeat of further up on the page?
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Testimonials
Can you scatter individual reviews/testimonials throughout the sales page rather than bunching them up in one section? It means people don't accidentally scroll past.
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How the ETA Club Works
Again, try to format it in a way that makes it easier to digest this information. I'd steer towards a brief paragraph for each inclusion outlining it in more detail
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Here’s exactly what you’ll get:
I would make this section easier to digest by turning it into columns with matching icons/mockups as well as adding the 'so what' to each inclusin
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This email got me started! “Bit*h, how are you turning up to parties, galas, lunches and still making more money that I am?”I received this from a friend who reads all my posts and shares some love on my stories; someone with whom I catch up with every summer when I’m back in England.
Love how you're introducing the origin of this concept. I would add a section about you here. Who you are, why you're perfectly positioned to support them, and touch on accountability being the one thing that got you to where you are today
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Real Accountability – I help
I'd turn these bullet points into a paragraph that touches on why this concept works. And I would remove the individual buttons
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Discover a Real (aka the ETA Club) Solution:
This is a great third section. It's the solution to their current approach. Introduce the membership here with a big, bold promise while touching on the structure/format.
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If you’ve been
This is a great second section of this sales page. It's addressing what they're currently trying to do unsuccessfully.
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Does any of this sound like you?
I would start with a section here that speaks to what's possible. .. the ultimate dream rather than the struggles. That way you're starting on a positive note and what's possible.
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nt Plan
I would link these buttons up to the inclusins section on this page rather than to the checkout because people haven't had a chance to learn more about the program yet
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Coaching with actual accountability is the fastest way I know to get clients incredible results! This is how, in 60 minutes, I get clients from ‘overwhelmed’ to‘I get it — and I got it done!’ If you are ready to go from being confused about how to market and sell to clear daily action tasks with the support to finally see a higher return on effort… then this is for you!Join the Entrepreneurs Take Action Club and achieve the big goal we will set together in 26 weeks…or get your money back.
Start with the big, bild promise here. What are members going to achieve by joining?
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rnventingnursing.com rnventingnursing.com
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Move this right underneath the main header for instant trust and credibility
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straight
Make sure you move this one up right underneath your about blurb
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Oh my days...
I'd move this further up on the page just below the choose your own adventure section
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with...
Choose your own adventure:
Can you add your course here?
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I'M ALL ABOUTProtecting__________________i'll show you howYOU WHILE BUILDING YOUR SUCCESSFUL HOME health NURSING REPUTATION + career your way.you while building your successful home health nursing reputation + career your way.just so we're super clear...<img src="//static.showit.co/200/QP_6psQnT8qnDmcUMSgM1w/105115/7.png" class="se-img" alt="" title="7"/>
Let's protect you while...
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www.bbhenrystudio.com www.bbhenrystudio.com
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Limtied Time Offer ends on October 5th
Add a timer here
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Ready to transform your creative chaos? I invite you to join BB RingDex today and start creating your tactile ring journal.
same, I'd delete this
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Ready To continue your creative journey?
delete this
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Get instant access for $47 now
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Imagine this:
Turn this into a sub-heading
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Picture yourself flipping through the pages of your completed RingDex, each one filled with carefully curated materials that tell your unique story. It’s about transforming your supplies and previous artworks into a piece of art that you’ll be proud to show off, celebrating the joy of seeing your creativity come to life in a tangible, beautiful way.
I reckon get rid of this because there's too much copy in one section
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Give those beautiful handmade papers and collage fodder a home Turn that collection of vintage ephemera into something more than just a drawer full of memories Bring those forgotten fabric scraps to life in your journal Use those paints and writing tools to add personal touches and depth to your pages Incorporate previous artworks, and give them new life by blending them with fresh ideas
Can you add a matching icon to each idea and turn this into one row with 5 columns?
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Here's what my students are saying:
Can you split this section into 2 separate ones. One here and one further up on the page?
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Supportive Community
I would add this to the 'what you get' section further up on the page
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BB RingDex is different
Can you turn this into a sub-heading?
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I'd change the button copy to Join BB RingDex for $47 now
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You love creating, but let's face it
I reckon this makes a FABULOUS sub-heading... I'd open the paragraph with this as the big, bold sub-heading because it draws people in.
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This class is just what you need if:
I'd in 'exactly'
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You'll walk away with
I'd move this section up above the 'this is for you if' section
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Limtied Time Offer ends on October 5th
Only until October 5
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LimitedTime Offer $77 $47
I'd move this bit above the timer
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Buy now and get access to the class content instantly
But only until this timer strikes zero
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available price
price it will ever be
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st.
I'd mention the price on the button for those ready to invest... it's a no-brainer pricetag. Get Instant access for $47
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Got an overflowing stash?
I'd get rid of this bit
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Is your creative space overflowing with papers, embellishments, and art supplies that you’ve collected over the years? Maybe it started with a few choice pieces—some vintage ephemera here, a few handmade papers there, and a handful of fabric scraps tucked into a drawer—but now, your collection has grown into a colorful, chaotic treasure trove of artistic potential. You’re a passionate artist, driven by the thrill of discovering new materials and the joy of crafting something unique. But let’s be honest—I know I’m not alone when I say that all that passion can sometimes turn into a pile of unfinished projects and unused materials. It’s easy to feel overwhelmed by the sheer amount of stuff you’ve gathered, and even easier to feel guilty about it. Sound familiar? If you’ve ever found yourself staring at your art stash, wondering how you’ll ever use everything—how you’ll ever turn it into something cohesive—you’re not alone. Many creatives face this same struggle: the desire to create something meaningful, yet the challenge of actually bringing it all together.
Love this intro all about making the reader feel heard and seen. What if you open it with something like: Finding you here checking out this brand new resource tells me a few things about you: Your creative space is likely overflowing withpapers... You're a passionate artist ... And at some stage, you have stared at your art stash wondering...
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But what if you could take all those beautiful supplies and finally give them the home they deserve? A place where each piece plays a part in telling your unique artistic story. That’s exactly where BB RingDex comes in.
I would turn this paragraph into a standalong section that pops! And make the last sentence stand out separately too...
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www.robenmariestudio.com www.robenmariestudio.com
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Are you ready to join other creatives like you who are ready to be inspired and encouraged in a fun and supportive community?
I'd change this to a decision-inviting statement. Something like: This is your chance to join creatives just like you ready to be inspired and encouraged to create.
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Local connections. Find other members near you, plan meetups, swaps, or live call art sessions. There’s a forum dedicated to helping you make these connections—building a global yet wonderfully personal community.
Underneath this section, I'd include a separate section that showcases some of the tangible transformations/wins/mindset shifts that popped up in your survey. I would add them in 2 rows with 5 columns each where you add an icon to each tangible win so it's easy for people to digest.
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This is a space where
I would move this section underneath the Nest Fest bonus
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really learning a lot! -Stacey Vicari
Just before the final invite, I'd insert a section that speaks to immediate, short-term and long-term wins. You'd structure it in 3 columns titled As soon as you join..., In a month..., in 6 months... That's where you outline what they can achieve/experience/feel at each stage. It's super powerful and hopefully invites readers to opt for the annual membership because you highlight the long-term transformation.
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In Their Own Words...
Can you replace the written testimonials with the screenshot testimonals you scratched from the section further up on the page?
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ET.
same button copy feedback
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Get IMMEDIATE ACCESS to all of these courses as soon as you join!
I would combine this section with the membership-exclusive courses so it's all in one
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ET.
Same again for the button copy
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BETH MCWILLIAMS
I love the videos!!! And I'd be tempted to get rid of the written testimonials underneath
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SKINNY MINI JOURNAL
Can you add a tiny blurb explanation for each course here? Super short to give it some context.
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