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  1. Apr 2024
    1. rience in the ICU,

      See previous comment

    2. was able to encourage her and provide

      encouraged her and provided

    3. do not do well with wounds

      You were treating a person, not a wound. Can you rephrase?

    4. ADLs.

      spell out

    5. hard times

      Please reflect on a specific example.

    6. nosis

      Can you give an example?

    7. regarding neuro during sessions.

      working with patients who had neurological conditions.

    8. As I am working on my APDE, I am out of town but still prioritizing completing assignments while also spending time with friends

      Write in past tense, and spell out APDE

    9. was able to continue

      continued

    10. ucators.

      Please give a specific example.

    11. Overtime,

      Two separate words

    12. Below is a comment from one of my fieldwork educators about my ability to respond to feedbac

      Please give a specific example. Then, please provide a synopsis of the screenshot.

    13. ICU

      spell out

    1. on ad

      place abbreviation is parentheses here, (AOTA)

    2. AOTA

      spell out

    3. On the left

      On my screen it is above

    4. DME

      spell out

    5. uation.

      Provide a brief synopsis

    6. as able to go over

      reviewed

    7. this is also delaying the head positioning improvements we have made with this particular infant during her long stay in the NICU

      Write in past tense

    1. The next day I surprised him with an (NYT) crossword puzzle

      This is not formatted correctly. Place (NYT) after you spelled it out in the previous sentence, and here remove the parentheses.

    2. to

      comma needed after the word attachment

    3. ensory processing, neurodevelopmental and neuroprotective/neuropromotive treatment, and attachmen

      Make sure to capitalize the names of theories

    4. ence.

      Provide a synopsis here.

    5. overtime

      two separate words

    6. i

      Capitalize

    7. NYT c

      Place in parentheses after you spelled it out in the previous sentence.

    8. DNR

      spell out

    9. arge.

      Write what it said. The reader may not be able to view the image to see its contents.

    10. ent's

      Not sure why this is possessive

    11. mplishment

      Fabulous! I feel so proud to have you as my student.

    12. markers that

      Place a period after the word markers, and start a new sentence with the word That.

    13. FWE

      spell out for the first time on the page, then place in parentheses

    14. tion written by my fieldwork educator

      Provide a synopsis of what it says--the reader shouldn't have to read the image.

    15. t the experience.

      Beautiful.

    16. was able to help

      helped

    17. was able to sit down

      "was able to" tells me that you had the opportunity, but doesn't let me know you actually did it. Consider rephrasing: "I sat down with...and taught her...". One of my first certifications as a newly minted OT was a CIMI--Certified Infant Massage Instructor. I didn't keep it up, though.

    1. of how I identify influenced my life

      Does not make sense

    2. n addition, I conducted a family training session to educate and demonstrate the client's current level of function prior to discharge. I recommended alternative methods and adaptive techniques to promote independence with activities of daily

      This is still very broad. Can you give an example? What was the client's level of function? How much supervision or assistance did they need? What adaptive technique did you suggest?

    3. Specifically, I communicated with my fieldwork educator with both written and verbal communication in daily and weekly check-ins

      This is a general statement. Can you provide one specific example, perhaps related to a client or caregiver?

    4. This tool helped me within my practice to develop self-awareness as a practitioner and consideration of clients' identity wheels.

      I don't understand this--please rewrite for clarity.

    5. agement

      Please elaborate on how this activity helped you to establish or maintain a therapeutic relationship with a client.

    6. was able to apply

      applied

    7. IADL

      Spell out

    8. ence

      Amazing! Ikea!

    9. ADL

      spell out

    10. was able to share

      "Was able to" implies you had the opportunity, but doesn't necessarily mean that you did it. "Shared" is more precise to illustrate that you actually did it.

    11. TN S

      spell out

    12. below

      This is very general. Can you provide a specific example?

    13. PTs, SLP

      spell out

    14. practice

      Please give an example of an instance where this helped you meet the standard.

    15. was able to participate

      participated

    1. The client has not been hunting several times but has succeeded with his new bow setup.

      I don't understand. Please revise.

    2. hemiplegic clients in r

      see previous

    3. or hemiplegic patients d

      patients with hemiplegia--first person language

    4. the UE

      spell out

    5. my MoCA c

      Spell out

    6. nce

      Amazing!

    7. ard

      Fantastic!

    8. hemiplegic patients

      person-first

    9. In my fieldwork placements, I've faced diverse challenges requiring me to step outside my comfort zone and apply my skills confidently

      Use past tense

    10. aining

      Bravo!

    11. maze test, short blessed test, pedal reaction speed test, dynavision reaction speed test, Optec vision assessment, and route finding assessment

      Capitalize proper names of assessments

    12. Clinical Instructors

      lower case

    1. our UTHSC c

      Spell out aconym

    2. nt.

      Put TA in parentheses here

    3. pleted It's Sensory,'but What Is It?,

      Check previous comment--copy the title from the certificate.

    4. e palm.

      Very interesting! Well done!

    5. "Wrist opener splint: An effective way to treat chronic wrist flexion contracture." by Chen et al. T

      APA

    6. Thea

      Theta

    7. LGBTQIA+ and occupational deprivation, gun violence and school shooting epidemic

      I'm curious as to why some titles are capitalized while others are not.

    8. and school

      the

    9. motivations.

      Great reflection

    10. work

      Please include a reference list of works cited.

    11. 'It's Sensory,' but What Is It?',

      See previous comment. There appears to be an additional quotation mark in the middle of the title.

    12. Spinal cord

      not capitalized

    13. 'Forgotten Aspects of Stroke Recovery and How to Treat Them' and Sex-Positive Communication about Sexual Health between the Client and the OT Practitioner,

      You placed one title in quotes but not the other. It might be easier to italicize titles of works.

    14. Bodison and Parham's

      Check APA

    1. for NDT

      spell out

    2. At Pi Beta Phi, we have weekly Patient Care Conferences (PCC) meetings where all rehabilitation team members come together to discuss client outcomes, care plans, and progress toward goals. It allows us to promote crossover between therapy sessions and builds a more unified team approach to client care. Below I have included a picture of a screenshot from a discussion post where I discuss these meetings.

      Write in past tense

    3. They were interested in placing the affected limb on the vibration plate while weight-bearing and completing a functional task with the non-affected limb

      I am curious if they were referring to both upper and lower limbs?

    4. In

      This word does not belong in the sentence as written

    5. WBV (whole-body vibration)

      Other way round--spell out first and then place abbreviation or acronym in parentheses

    6. on of neurological conditions

      of people with...

    7. risis

      Fabulous analysis.

    8. CEU

      spell out

    1. Moel,

      typo

    2. UE and LE

      spell out

    3. Based on the motor skill acquisition and learning theory

      capitalize

    4. motor skill acquisition

      capitalize

    5. BOT-3.

      Spell out

    6. PDSM-5

      spell out

    7. occupational adaptation model, the motor skill acquisition frame of reference, and learning theory

      See previous comment

    8. social participation

      Capitalize since this is the formal name of the FOR

    9. activity.

      So lovely!

    10. ADL and iADL

      spell out

    11. es.

      Sweet picture!

    12. I have made an effort to reduce negative self-talk among clients in my treatment sessions.

      rewrite this section in past tense: "I made an effort to...etc."

    13. I also have utilized the facility dog in treatment sessions with clients struggling with self-motivation to allow clients feeling guilty about the level of assistance their loved ones have to give to act as caretakers during the session.

      Please break this down--very difficult for me to follow.

    14. post-CVA

      jargon-can you change this to lay language? Also, when using acronyms or abbreviations, spell out for the first time followed by parentheses.

    15. neurological c

      people with neurological conditions

    16. his family feel more comfortable taking on a more significant role during craft fairs

      Were the family taking a more significant role? Or was the client?

    17. safey

      typo

    18. clients

      possessive

    19. out

      Did you mean "our"?

    1. a FEES w

      spell out

    2. DME

      spell out

    3. rewards I earned

      I don't get it.

    4. HEP

      Was this previously spelled out and placed in parentheses?

    5. with

      Is this the correct word?

    6. vement.

      Can you give examples of evaluation and intervention strategies that you implemented?

    7. situations that she would have

      situations in which she would have

    8. facilitate

      facilitated

    9. was able to utilize

      used

    10. en’s goals.

      Please give an example

    11. was able to focus

      focused

    12. PT

      spell out if not previously placed in parentheses on the page

    13. FEES

      spell out

    1. I gathered additional resources and sought feedback from the therapy director when completing recommendations to clients and caregivers.

      Can you give a specific example? This is very general.

    2. Specifically, I discussed the potential challenges of telehealth to foster the same level of connection as in-person services within the pediatric population

      Expand--this is still very vague

    3. n addition, I addressed the ways occupational therapists can collaborate with these professionals

      This is still very vague. Please provide a specific example.

    4. teem

      spelling

    5. actitioner.

      Expand with a example.

    6. a pediatric OT lens

      Expand

    7. isciplines

      Provide a synopsis

    8. ABA

      spell out

    9. was able to observe

      Did you do it? Or did you just have the opportunity?

    10. rocess.

      Please provide a specific example.

    11. was able to advocate and justify

      advocated and justified

    12. DME

      spell out

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    1. I'm a second-year

      Update! You're a 3rd year about to graduate!

  3. emmahilliardot.weebly.com emmahilliardot.weebly.com
    1. bout to graduate with my Master in occupational therapy

      about to graduate with my Master of Occupational Therapy (capitalized) degree. https://catalog.uthsc.edu/preview_program.php?catoid=45&poid=3842#curriculumsummary

    2. masters in occupational therapy

      capitalize. Master (not plural--same for your Bachelor degree) of Occupational Therapy degree.

    3. Safari Park,

      I had no idea! How wonderful!

    4. OT

      See previous comment!

    5. UTM

      This needs to appear in parentheses after the first time you spell it out and before you use it on the page.

    1. to name to consistently name

      Remove unnecessary words

    2. ROH

      Spell out since it has not been used on this page

    3. European journal of phys

      APA. See previous comment

    4. Occupational therapy international,

      Capitalize each word

    1. ecology of human performance

      Capitalize each word since it is the proper name of the theory. This is also a great example.

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    1. I am a second-year occupational therapy student and am about to start my level II fieldwork rotations for the next 6 months. My first rotation is at a pediatric outpatient clinic in Melbourne, FL. My second rotation will be in a neurology clinic in Nashville, TN.

      Change to past tense since this is now in the rear-view mirror.

    1. This demonstrated growth in applying the domain of occupational therapy throughout the therapy process.

      Please provide a specific example of how you accomplished this during FW.

    2. The following images were from fieldwork placement B in outpatient pediatrics from the screening and evaluation section of the AOTA final rating one 3s for proficient and the remainder of 4s for exemplary performance.

      Please break down this long sentence.

    3. I was able to integrate this information to incorporate caregiver education within the sessions

      Please give an example.

    4. ve my clients.

      Can you provide an example of a specific topic that helped you to better serve your clients?

    1. k."

      Made me cry!

    2. have

      unnecessary word

    3. come

      Great example!

    4. respec

      Can you provide a specific example?

    5. others.

      Can you provide a specific example?

    6. tation.

      Congratulations! How wonderful!

    7. with max assist and dependent transfers

      Person-first language

    8. max assist and dependent clients

      Use person-first language.

    1. arge.

      Can you provide a specific example? This is a very generalized statement.

    2. I was able to chart review each clien

      Each day, I reviewed each client's chart and generated treatment ideas for each treatment session.

    3. acements

      Could you add to this nice reflection how it is in accordance with AOTA standards?

    4. so that other professionals could contribute their services to the client’s unique care

      Not sure this part of the sentence fits.

    5. SLP, PT, MD, and NP

      spell these out.

    6. hine

      Lovely! I did this a lot when I saw patient in a similar setting. I was surprised often at how soon they wanted to go back indoors! They often lost their tolerance for being outdoors, became cold very quickly, or couldn't stand the slightest breeze. Interesting what occupational deprivation can do.

    1. ion b

      hyphenate

    2. I have been able

      remove these words, they are unnecessary

    3. not going to be safely independen

      Is this accurate? Sometimes clients will never be fully independent and require supervision.

    4. was able to inform

      informed

    5. I was able to

      When you use the phrase "I was able to", you imply that you had the opportunity, but it doesn't necessarily mean that you actually did it. It's clearer if you rephrase and use the correct verb, e.g., "I discussed...etc".

    6. I was able to assist with educating

      I educated

    7. Pictured below is a comment from my fieldwork educator explaining my progress with communicating the OT process, as well as my performance score for articulating the value of OT

      Briefly provide a synopsis so that the reader doesn't need to look for the information in the image. "Pictured below is a comment from my fieldwork educator explaining my progress with communicating the OT process, as well as my exemplary performance score for articulating the value of OT"

    8. child’s growth in OT skills.

      Was the child developing OT skills, or other skills, like play skills, fine motor skills, or even developmental milestones?

    1. In

      lower case

    2. Myself

      Me

    3. esemble

      resemble means that they look similar to....but these are the real thing!! I think you need a different verb. Perhaps the sentence can read, "These handwritten personable cards are evidence of the impact I made at each facility".

    4. ea

      Mazeltov! That's so wonderful!!!! Hooray!

    5. We came up with a solution of rotating during the day where when I would document the session I observed her treat, I would document the session and vice versa - when I’m treating, she would document.

      Please rewrite for clarity--I think there are a few extra unnecessary words here.

    1. kangaroo

      Capitalize

    2. kangaroo care

      See previous comment

    3. kangaroo care

      capitalize as it's the name of a technique

    4. CU.

      Can you think of a specific instance to illustrate integration with patient values?

    5. CE

      spell out

    6. neonatal intensive care unit (NICU)

      This should come the first instance you use the abbreviation, which is in the first clause in the first sentence.

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    1. NCES

      Lovely page! Are your FW educators cool with being named?

  6. paytonljohnston.weebly.com paytonljohnston.weebly.com
    1. am blessed to say, I am currently a second-year occupational therapy student completing my two 12-week level II rotations. My first rotation is at Encompass Health Inpatient Rehabilitation Hospital in Memphis, TN, and my second rotation is at Baptist Memorial Hospital for Women in the NICU, also located here in Memphis, TN. I am so excited to complete my final fieldwork placements for completion of the MOT program at UTHSC.

      This is beautiful, however, needs to be rewritten to reflect past tense.