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Once there is an order for an OT evaluation, I visit patients to
Use past tense
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ROM and MMT
If not previously spelled out, please do so
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occasionally I would have the opportunity to do a treatment with that patient/client
not sure what you mean--you had enough time left over after the evaluation to perform treatment? Otherwise I don't understand. Please clarify
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plural
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tmeal!
This is a great example.
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rapy
should this be plural, therapies?
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My CI had a sensory integration certification and working with the kiddos in the clinic, I desired more training in that area.
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opic.
Please provide synopsis.
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means, the
resulted in the children having
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become integrated, many of the problems we saw in children become resol
past tense
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MORO, ANTR, TLR,
Moro reflex is named for the person who first described it, and therefore is a proper noun. The others are acronyms--please spell out. Please correct Moro in the remainder of this section.
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vidence-based practice was utilized in the outpatient pediatric setting where I completed my Level II fieldwork through a major focus on evaluation of primitive reflexes and creating intervention treatments designed to facilitate the integration of primitive reflexes in young children.
This is a very long sentence--can you break it up?
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PEDS
is this an acronym? or abbreviation? please clarify
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have
remove the word--the portfolio should be presented in past tense. By the time you show it to a potential employer, all of the events will have taken place in the past and you will no longer be a student.
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sion
Please provide an example. It's not good enough to state that you met the standard; you have to specify how you met it.
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—Dennis Prager
Is this a quote? If so, place in quotation marks.
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opic.
Provide a synopsis--see previous comment regarding use of images with text.
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care.
This is wonderful
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CU and CVICU
Please spell out acronyms.
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ssion
This is a broad generalization--can you provide a specific example?
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nd languag
Please provide an example of how you met this standard.
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ol. 74
Where will I find these references located on your website? Perhaps include them at the bottom of the section, before the next item.
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It is easy to disregard some patients as complainers, but when our goal is to address the whole person, I believe I did that by advocating for his meals to be adjusted so that he could heal and move on to the next level of care.
This sentence needs to be revised--the last part doesn't make sense.
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several many
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efor
You write so well
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OT
acronym alert! Spell it out the first time followed by parentheses
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IV
spell it out
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commands
not sure I understand what you meant--barriers?
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ROM
spell out acronym/abbreviation first time and place in parentheses if you will continue to use going forward.
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him
the patient
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you
me
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Brilliant!
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Please provide a synopsis. Imagine the person reading this was using a screen reader and the image was inaccessible. What should the reader expect to find out from the image?
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Is there a way you can create headings on the actual pages of each of the competency areas? i.e., this one should have the heading "Occupation and Client-Centered Practitioner"
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his/he
their
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on the
them about the
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For these clients,
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he/she
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plural
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UE
see previous comment
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ADL
acronym--should be spelled out beforehand followed by parentheses
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CVA
acronym
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acute care/ outpatient
simplify, perhaps "hospital setting"
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very da
one word
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Punctuation.
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the therapist
one or many?
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he food trucks that he was going to have
rephrase for clarity
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TBI
acronym alert!
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3 step
three-step
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"
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Capitalize
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my caseload were non-verbal
non-verbal what?
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knew the information more than what I was giving myself credit for
Try to be more concise, e.g., : I knew more than I thought, I just had to...
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I had the opportunity to make significant growth with my communication skills
write more concisely
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his/h
see previous
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is/her
their
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despite
this word, "despite", indicates that diversity factors are negative. Is that what you intended to imply?
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cenario:
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I was able to use my innovation skills to utilize this information
This does not make sense--that you used your innovation skills to use the information
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this was not one my stro
grammar
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this weakness
plural
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Below
To the left
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advocate
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plural
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plural
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upheld
maintained
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capitalize
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capitalize
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had the opportunity to hold
held
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UTHSC
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Active
Make sure there's enough room above each title (heading)--check spacing above and below. The heading looks like it belongs to the paragraph above rather than the one below, because of the larger spacing between the heading and the next paragraph.
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treat specific areas
were you treating areas? Or treating people? Can you rephrase for clarity?
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l competent and confident to me a entry- level practitioner.
some words don't make sense
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lunch brea
Very nice example, very proud of you!
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pocketing his food
not sure what you mean--putting food into his pockets, or are you describing swallow strategy? Make sure a reader can discern!
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completed set up assistance
jargon
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sitting beside him that had not been touched
reorder phrases
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my client’s life
one or many?
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were non-compliant
this can come across as judgmental--can you rephrase?
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t’s
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“ no hitting” or “ good hands”
spacing with quotation marks
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use my expertise i
does this belong?
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In this population, it is of upmost importance to act accordingly
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ASD
acronym
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unprofessional response
by whom? or to what?
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“ T
spacing
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“ I
spacing
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One day, I went to get the client so that she could transition from her PT session
not sure what this means. Also, make sure that PT is previously written out in full
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make
made
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defensive
do you mean offensive?
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would have a poor attitude
this is a judgmental statement about the patient, please rephrase and give an example of what she did to illustrate your point
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used a technique frequently
frequently used a technique
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n ,
spacing
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es
in both settings? Including the peds setting? Not sure if this is accurate....perhaps rephrase.
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allowed them to be
they became
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past tense
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can
could
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past tense
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t’s
if you are talking about many clients, the apostrophe should be moved to the end of the word after the s
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his/her
their
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of
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have
had--use past tense
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as been
was
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th, 2021:
Mazel tov! What a great accomplishment! I wish I had known you were there--I also participated. GREAT JOB!
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into
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nclu
and included
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What a great quality, to always find the golden egg amongst the wreckage.
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sions
What a great story. I also hope she took some pain medication before you saw her again!
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people with
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feedback.
Thanks for sharing your vulnerability (in the image).
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nals. Below is the title
I love that you did this--so proud of you!
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AOTA
has the acronym appeared prior?
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ts
apostrophe needed
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therapy
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set
Provide a synopsis
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Occupational Thera
no need to capitalize
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ice
Please provide a synopsis--see previous comments
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this supportive
which supportive evidence? Perhaps state more plainly, "By appraising the evidence, I was able to determine..."
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of
or may not
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my
the treatments that followed.
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lies
apostrophe needed--possessive
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were
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2 year old
2-year-old
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within
of
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CVA patients
preferable to use person-first language
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With
During
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s”
punctuation needed here
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of c
people with
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research specific diagnoses
was this research? Or were you looking up information, familiarizing yourself?
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This
What does "this" refer to?
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utilizing new research
unclear--you were using new research, or looking up information? Please clarify this phrase.
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his/her
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he/she can be
they could be
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hyphenate
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potentially
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while utilizing
you're not using a service model, rather, you're functioning within a service model
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Although the ultimate goal
Not sure what you mean here...the ultimate goal of what?
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NDT
acronym alert
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their
whose?
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settings worked within the hospital
not sure what this means
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the opportunity
me
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curri
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tional th
Provide a synopsis so the reader doesn't have to read through the discussion post.
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there
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were self-pay
this is jargon, find another way to describe
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CI
acronym
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he/she
they
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Due to this
Therefore
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he opportunity
opportunities (you discuss multiple occasions)
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officer
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where?
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BS
spell this out, and place in parentheses if you talk about it again.
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nal.
What you wrote is very important. Can you make a clearer connection to the standard? How does this attitude demonstrate that you maintained values over self-promotion or profit?
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Very important!
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This child had a visual perception goal that we were working on with a puzzle.
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when he came to school.
redundant
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cutting circles, triangles as well as drawing those shapes
reword in the correct sequence of events
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my
the
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the
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navigate any precautions
this is jargon--would the average reader understand what you meant?
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learned that safety is the utmost importance, however many patients come to the hospital to have orthopedic surgeries done
Why is this a contradiction? Rephrase for clarity please
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ha
Good work
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in pediatrics
in my pediatric rotation
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Sweet
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did a great at
a great what?
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to be
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I absolutely LOVE Arkansas! I have not been to Petit Jean State Park in about 15 years....time to go back! Little Rock is a fun small town. I'm so glad you went exploring. The slide show is great!
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I took
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Lovely reflection
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PICC lines, IV lines, oxygen needs, Foley catheters, and procedures such as PEG
lots of acronyms here! Is there a way to rewrite without all the abbreviations and acronyms?
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performing safe
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grammar
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I also struggled with intervention planning regarding having enough ideas and activities to pull from if a session did not go the way that I had planned
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my
my?
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was able to learn
learnt
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client who we wanted to promote coordination
client in whom we wanted to promote coordinated movements.
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perform
do
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them
headphones
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W
You both wore the headphones?
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more than
was the first goal to reach ten minutes, or exceed ten minutes?
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different desired aspects
don't understand what this means
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iLs (Integrated Listening Systems)
reverse
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hyphenate
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was able to learn
learnt
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was able to help contribut
contributed
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h.
research study
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was able to finish
completed
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on Excel
in a spreadsheet
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