The definition of wheel-chair accessible seemed to differ which surprised me since in the past I've thought everything has a standard it must uphold to in order to be considered ADA accessible.
Consider rephrasing for clarity.
The definition of wheel-chair accessible seemed to differ which surprised me since in the past I've thought everything has a standard it must uphold to in order to be considered ADA accessible.
Consider rephrasing for clarity.
it raining
the rain
easy
easily
The first takeaway that stuck with me was the fact that with any type of inclement weather, that affects the racers using chairs exponentially worse than those running.
Difficult to understand this sentence--consider rephrasing.
his in lieu
is this the right phrase? "In lieu of" means "instead of".
airs
possessive
During the race, it is explained as a smooth and relatively flat course.
I wasn't sure of the meaning of this sentence.
ble
Lovely!
access them.
lovely essay!
OT,
spell out. Check APA guidelines for use of acronyms/abbreviations.
UTIs
spell out
hange
I love the passion in your writing!
these individual's
Please consider naming them--the phrase "these people" or "these individuals" can be de-personalizing, especially if the author were to read your blog post (in the past I have shared them). I know you mean it in a kindhearted way; but I wanted to point this out to you. See this article:
exert
excerpt
they were
who were?
life.
Interesting points!
uals
individuals' or individual's
in the since
in the sense?
exert
excerpt
ocument
Thanks for providing two options for your PDP hours. I am unsure if the downloaded file is as updated as the direct link, which I could not access.
In the spreadsheet, please capitalize the first word in the third column (Description of the event)--some of the rows are not appropriately capitalized.
This
It is...
This
It is important...
Seeking feedback can also assist in enhancing rapport building skills
Please clarify
er
centered
By seeking feedback, this helps
Consider rephrasing for clarity:
Seeking feedback helps enhance many...
edical terminolo
Perhaps also studying medical terminology?
This helps the language
Clarify please
to use
Needs to understand medical terms written in a record
is en
This competency ensures....
This
It is important...
ngaging in open class discussions
Do you a speaker, or are you a listener? Do you pay attention to the frequency in which you engage in discussions? This may help you be more self-reflective.
enhance my client interviewing skills t
How?
spend time reflecting on my ow
How?
reflect on
How?
ach state
Lovely essay!
wing
wind?
One large and scary challenge was the sidewalk that was set in the course was very narrow,
Check grammar
2
two (see APA)
pi.
If you're interested, I can share some pictures of the work they were doing at the facility where I volunteered in Israel.
hool and
End the sentence and start a new one.
2020
Congratulations! This is an impressive accomplishment!
EALP (Equine Assisted Learning & Psychotherapy)
Reverse order--see APA guidelines for acronyms/abbreviations.
OT
See APA guidelines for correct acronym/abbreviation use on a page.
ist
plural
apist
plural
this competency
These are 4 separate competencies. Please see previous comments.
tionship
How can you improve your written communication skills?
What can I do to achieve this competency during the program ?
Not sure why this is here
on it
Elaborate, or tie to the next sentence.
AOTA and TNOTA
Check APA for abbreviationsss/acronyms
nge Agent
Please separate each competency reflection. See previous comments.
itself. I
This sounds like a passive approach--is there something you can do proactively?
Ensuring that all my work is completed on time and accurately to the best of my abilities
Incomplete sentence.
Also when I show up I am prepared for my daily tasks
Incomplete sentence
student preparing to enterin
Please separate out each competency and use each one as a heading under which you elaborate. Thanks.
tity
Decide if you will capitalize each word or not--the formatting of this heading is inconsistent
on the different culture
Is it enough to learn about other cultures?
seen
Great point!
culture c
plural
ed Practitioner
Please respond to each competency rather than all three at once. Please see my previous suggestion to use Grammarly or other program to help identify any spelling or grammar errors.
uring this race this is exactly what the wheelchair runners did
Can you elaborate why? What happened that they needed to modify their plan?
t
Period. Start a new sentence.
ters
writer's
Which I think it very important imagine trying to maneuver in your whe
Incomplete sentence. Check spelling.
Which I believe is interesting and also inclusive
Incomplete sentence
ngs
Lovely!
By improving my communication skills while also building interpersonal relationships.
This is an incomplete sentence.
Ot
Check APA
leisure I like to engage in focusing on my art, specifically I do acrylic painting. I also enjoy cooking for my family, enjoying nature, or taking walks in the park.
Please consider using Grammarly or other spell- and grammar-checking programs. Grammarly can help identify spelling and grammar errors before you publish your work. It can help you polish your website and other written work.
ns !
remove space before exclamation mark
UTHSC.
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Individuals with injuries, disabilities, developmental disorders, mental health issues etc.
This is an incomplete sentence.
among
across
st
plural
Occupational Therapist
remove capitalization.
O
remove capitalization
ician
Please elaborate.
s before class
Is that it? What if there are no pre-class assignments?
024
Excellent record--keep up the good work!
Make sure you capitalize appropriately (beginning of sentences in the third column, Description of Event).
solv
What resources do you plan to use? Please elaborate
t's
Grammar
r
Do you currently have any service positions? If so please write about them. If not, what are you planning in the near future?
car
What is the connection?
This is important for me as an OT student to enter the field because
This part of the sentence is unnecessary--consider removing
day l
Please elaborate
e
What happens when the opposite occurs? When someone misinterprets your non-verbal communication?
This is important because
Consider removing this part of the sentence.
ity
Nice section
sips
Did you mean dips?
Additionally, the duration of the marathon being on a sidewalk is problematic for someone in a wheelchair because their chair is wider than that of an average runner and takes up almost the entirety of the sidewalk.
This is a very long sentence--consider breaking it down into shorter chunks.
I am eager to gain more experience and exposure to these different specialties to discover where my strengths and interests align most closely with the needs of my future client
Long sentence--please break it up into shorter structures.
that
remove this word
OT
Check APA regarding use of acronyms and abbreviations.
OT
Spell out first time. Please see APA guidelines for acronyms and abbreviations.
UTHSC
Spell out
an OT.
Nice!
ompetency is important because it challenges self-learning and seeking knowledge, which will help me know how to answer questions from future
Please rephrase for clarity.
AOTA, TNOTA, SOTA, RKS,
spell out
leadership or supporting positions prepares me to advocate for the policies and procedures that adhere best to client
Please rewrite for clarity.
This competency is important because
You can remove this first part of the sentence.
ask
ask for and receive
This competency is important because as an OT
You can remove this first part of the sentence.
Being able to have a balance of verbal and non-verbal cues adds value to communication skills and the client's comfortability factor.
Please rephrase for clarity. Perhaps remove the first few words "Being able to...". Here is a suggestion:
"I value having good verbal and non-verbal communication skills because they can make a client feel more comfortable".
uch as what our class did with the speech pathology students at the University of Memphis.
Start a separate sentence. What did you do? Don't leave the reader hanging....!
what we contribute to multiple settings,
rephrase.
Occupational The
no need to capitalize
IPE
Spell out
to thrive and build a good relationship
The group builds a good relationship? Please clarify
ivities.
There is a 10-nautical mile race in Millington in June every year. It is the only race I am aware of that has a wheelchair division. If you are interested in adaptive sports, you can contact them to see if there are volunteer opportunities.
achieve
achieve a goal achieve a dream
and put effort into additional programs like sports
what put effort? Perhaps make this a separate sentence.
also had a presentation to present at th
simplify: the men gave a presentation at the Rehabilitation Hospital...
ace.
Lovely summary
I understand that people do not want to receive special treatment because of their disability so others attempt to adhere to those wishes, but that does not mean that people’s needs should be disregarded
See previous comment
hat people are not the most considerate of people in
Rephrase to avoid repeating the word "people"
from the marathon was because it seemed longer due to the uphill terrain.
rephrase for clarity. Did you mean that the 26.2 mile route of the marathon seemed longer due to the uphill terrain?
t OTs Provide Encouragement Advocacy Problem-Solving SkillsLeadershipServic
I love this but can barely read it--can you modify for readability?
a realm that aids people in their daily life activities and goals as we strive to help people return back to their independence, cope with their new normal, or help them try new things to satisfy the meaning of what matters most to them in their life.
Break down this sentence--it is very long and confusing.
Occupational Therapy e
no need to capitalize
MOT
spell out
OT
Spell out. Please see APA guidelines for acronyms and abbreviations.
research based interventions on their own
Not sure what you mean here. Please clarify.
TA and RKSTC within UTHSC
acronyms
It is important to view feedback as constructive and helps us to serve our client's and coworkers best
Grammar
consideration outside of ourselves
I am unfamiliar with this phrase
interprofessionals
? What are interprofessionals?
I will represent occupational therapy with respect and the ability to articulate it's purpose effectively.
Break this into two distinct sentences.
his competency is important because in a professional setting, such as a job where I will be getting paid and clients are waiting to be seen, it is important to arrive prepared and ready for my client to receive best care.
Shorten this sentence or break it up into smaller chunks.
I recognize as an OT many of our minds work differently an
What do you mean?
prospective
Did you intend this word (future-oriented, forward-looking)? Or perspective (point of view)?
COTAD
Spell out
fro
Read books? Watch foreign movies? Ted talks? Many resources in the world.
ain understa
Read books? Watch foreign movies? Ted talks? Many resources in the world.
It is important for me to look further into my client interactions both by what they are communicating as well as what their body language is telling me.
Can you shorten or simplify this sentence? It is long and difficult to follow
estricted
Many races don't even have a wheelchair division.
e talked about how the desire to get out there and race greatly outweighed the pain of doing it in a non-race chair may cause the next day
Grammar needs correction
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I"d love to learn more about you.
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Remove if not needed.
Hospitals, Schools, Skilled Nursing Facilities, Clinics, Home Health, Academia, Early Intervention, Mental Health, etc.
unnecessary capitalization
Occupational T
No need to capitalize....find another way to emphasize, e.g., using a different font, or bold, or all caps?? Just a suggestion
p=sharing
Please provide access! Thanks!
ons.
Perhaps talk about COTAD Chapter here?
g for feedback will help me focus on area
grammar, sentence structure
ofess
Tell me about how verbal and non-verbal communication plays into this?
ssignments including communicating when circumstances prevent attendance or in making up missed assignmen
Can you include information related to this portion of the prompt?
OTPF-4
spell out
his competency is important for me as an OT student preparing to enter the field
Can you reword this so that it is not a repeat of the previous paragraph?
MOT/S
Check rubric requirement for landing/welcome page
his summer I enjoyed learning about the benefits of what Rylie would benefit from OT
Revise for clarity.
Occupational T
lower case
families
Revise sentence structure: I will advocate for OT for families with children with disabilities who struggle....
s child.
Please revise grammar.
s
capitalize
PT, OT,
see previous comment regarding acronym/abbreviation.
Speech
speech therapy (no capitalization)
G
does this need to be capitalized?
has
current or past?
OT s
Spell out any acronyms or abbreviations and place in parentheses if you are going to use later on the page, e.g., My name is Raven and I'm an occupational therapy (OT) student.
UTHSC
Spell out first time. Only use parentheses if you will use the acronym again on the page. Check APA for more details.
A), gra
and
and
at?
ds
friends'
This is another level of consideration wheelchair users must face in daily life, especially racing, is where they will be and what they will do if a tire on their wheelchair becomes damaged (ensuring they have the capability and means to change it independently if help is not available as well).
Grammar.
signs) must
signs), which must be even more challenging
It is a small, natural, human trait we all do
Not sure what this meant
This was truly an inspiring story.
So glad you found value in this assignment! You write so well. Thank you.
I needed to correct pelvic rotations or obliquity, I would also aid with that. This allows for proper spinal curvatures in their re
Excellent
anterior aspect of the spine and stretching of the posterior aspect.
Which muscles would tighten and which would become stretched?
ility
Flattened lumbar curve; exaggerated kyphotic thoracic curve; spine is rotated to the right; left scapula protracted, upwardly rotated and slightly elevated
laterally tilting to
Do you mean that her spine is laterally flexed to the left? "Tilt" is typically used to describe the pelvis.
how to use objects around them to reduce the strain of lifting their own body wei
Not sure what you mean here and how this relates to body mechanics.
more weight on his pelvis.
Leaning forward reduces weight on pelvis, leading to strain on the back muscles (erector spinae) which contract to counteract the force of gravity.
on joint
Which joints? What type of force?
piecing
piercing?
anterior
posterior
elevating his pelvic
?
thoracic spinal co
What is going on with the spinal curves? Cervical? Thoracic? Lumbar? Are the neutral, flattened, or exaggerated?
n
Punctuation
s extending
flexing his trunk
umbar role
?
ition. If
And position of the left UE.
oint alignment,
I am concerned about the position of the left GH joint; if this position was prolonged with the humerus hanging over the back of the chair, it would compress the axillary artery along with the brachial plexus, leading to injury.
ead.
The spine is rotated to the left as well
a rolling chair, it is less stab
Good point
murs are flexed and internally rotated. Her scapulae are retracted, and her humeri are extern
Good observations!
rotated posteriorly
I don't understand. Did you mean tilted posteriorly? Rotation implies a direction (right or left).
aptive equipment, such as a laptop stand or raising desk which brings the computer to eye level and prevents the client from hunching ove
Excellent!
pper b
And lower back due to the flattened lumbar curve!
o her poor postur
Good analysis!
e free for movement
To move, the upper extremities have to overcome the friction from contact with the surface.
eah's base of support is relatively large and consists of the points of contact between the chair, her feet on the ground, and her hands resting on the des
Yes! More points of contact results in more stability.
gio
what about the cervical region?
emurs are in a neutral
femurs are flexed?
head is tilted
Head is thrust forward
hips forward without a tilt.
Did you mean to say the pelvis is neutral? I don't understand what "hips forward" meant.
but since she is able to use her laptop, her upper extremities are free to move.
I don't understand this part of the sentence.
Her wrists are resting on the tabletop, providing additional points of stability via contact with a stable surface.
creen.
When the head is thrust forward, it results in exaggerated cervical hyperextension...contradicting your previous analysis that her back is mostly straight
femurs are parallel to the ground, and half of her femurs are on the stool
Femurs are flexed and slightly externally rotated.
vate
Agree
ght forward hunch
Scapulae are slightly protracted and elevated. Don't know what forward hunch means in terms of scapulae.