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This is really beautiful; can you provide a specific example? The entire passage is rather broad. Lovely, but broad and general. Looking forward to reading about a specific instance.
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ce in someone's life.
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es. This was an area I wanted to grow in clinical confidence. The lower image shows how I productively grew and developed my therapeutic skills
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If you were a manager at Erlanger, how would you feel if you came across the image below on the internet?
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See post below for details on the integration of theory in clinical practice
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cognitive behavioral therapy
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The image below describes this encounter and how I incorporated a return to work task in our therapy session
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I kept a notebook filled with notes and would often confer with my fieldwork educator about the evidence I found and asked their opinion on how they approach different evaluations based on the patient's level of functioning
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out the session.
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I specified what goal was addressed and whether it needed a different grading so the next session would have a starting point or if a different therapist treated the client, they would have an idea of client participation during treatment session
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levels of function.
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al need.
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I fulfilled my commitment by stepping up and getting the kids the treatment they needed despite not being able to have their full time seen by their regular occupational therapist by incorporating them into my other caseload.
Can you break down this long sentence into shorter sentences please? It's hard tfollow.
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overall participation of session
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hey may have about what the session will look like and what my clinical judgement
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re they will be transitioning to (inpatient rehab, skilled nursing facility, palliative care, etc.
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y name is Laura Mendez and I am from Little Rock, Arkansas! I am a second year master's of occupational therapy student and I am approaching my level II fieldwork rotations.
This is lovely. Consider rewording it to reflect the past tense--by the time you graduate and potentially use this to showcase your achievements to a potential employer, this will be long ago. Also, it is a Master of Occupational Therapy program.
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I am a 2nd year maste
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Many members in this group are sensory seeking and need to work on something while they are learning about coping skills
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We had a productive conversation about how his rehab team is working hard to help him and that even though we can’t feel the pain he is feeling, we know he is motivated and trying the hardest he could
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ling him I have been a student here for eight weeks, he reported that he thought I had been working here and reported I had the confidence and attitude of an OT practitioner.
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Even though I would some time after fieldwork planning groups and individual interventions
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goals
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my strengths for the week
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y providing this feedback, I am ensuring the client’s safety and that they are able to get the most out of their individual or group th
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I made sure to center my group interventions based on the client’s goals to ensure that they gained coping skills, anger management, problem solving, identifying triggers, and community based skills based on client factors and performance skills.
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While at Regional One, a client reported that he was going to sell his medication once he was discharged. I educated him on that being illegal and he reported that he was joking with me. I did not want to take the chance, so I reported this news to my educator. She reported that the rehab team, including the pharmacist and doctor, was aware and that this was not the first time he mentioned this. Katie Heismann, OTR/L reports "Rachel adheres to AOTA's code of ethics and also adheres to any safety protocols."
can you find a synonym for the verb "report"? You use it repetitively in this section.
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se of the activity.
What you described here does not relate to the professional community, but rather to your patients. The prompt is about your colleagues in the profession.
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cked up all of the rods and that I did minimal effort to help ensure she felt successful and to maintain our therapeutic relationship.
This is a nice reflection but does not answer the prompt about application of theory. What theory did you use to design your intervention?
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each domain works together to positively or negatively impact health
This is also a bit confusing. Perhaps a picture or diagram of the 8 dimensions of wellness would help here.
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otivation and attendance in group decreased,
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One client was feeling discouraged one week and felt as though she would never get discharged and that she learned all the skills in OT.
This is a long sentence that confused me, especially the final clause about learning skills in OT. Please rewrite for clarity.
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aw the jar in the therapy room as well as the clients
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Bachelor of science
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independent way
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To be occupational therapist, I feel like we have a passion to help people and most of the time we take those struggles home with us. I know how important it is to balance your work life and personal life. I know that it is hard to leave those struggles at work once you get home, but it is important to focus on yourself and your loved ones just like your patients.
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is helping me develop the skill as I will need it in the future as a practitioner.
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