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Please provide a synopsis. Imagine the person reading this was using a screen reader and the image was inaccessible. What should the reader expect to find out from the image?
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Is there a way you can create headings on the actual pages of each of the competency areas? i.e., this one should have the heading "Occupation and Client-Centered Practitioner"
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his/he
their
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on the
them about the
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For these clients,
Remove this clause
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he/she
they
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is
plural
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is/he
their
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they
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UE
see previous comment
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ADL
acronym--should be spelled out beforehand followed by parentheses
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CVA
acronym
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acute care/ outpatient
simplify, perhaps "hospital setting"
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very da
one word
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Punctuation.
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or
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the therapist
one or many?
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he food trucks that he was going to have
rephrase for clarity
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TBI
acronym alert!
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3 step
three-step
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"
remove additional space
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Capitalize
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my caseload were non-verbal
non-verbal what?
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knew the information more than what I was giving myself credit for
Try to be more concise, e.g., : I knew more than I thought, I just had to...
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I had the opportunity to make significant growth with my communication skills
write more concisely
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his/h
see previous
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is/her
their
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despite
this word, "despite", indicates that diversity factors are negative. Is that what you intended to imply?
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cenario:
Please provide a synopsis
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I was able to use my innovation skills to utilize this information
This does not make sense--that you used your innovation skills to use the information
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this was not one my stro
grammar
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this weakness
plural
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Below
To the left
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advocate
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plural
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plural
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upheld
maintained
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capitalize
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capitalize
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had the opportunity to hold
held
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UTHSC
acronym alert
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Active
Make sure there's enough room above each title (heading)--check spacing above and below. The heading looks like it belongs to the paragraph above rather than the one below, because of the larger spacing between the heading and the next paragraph.
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treat specific areas
were you treating areas? Or treating people? Can you rephrase for clarity?
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l competent and confident to me a entry- level practitioner.
some words don't make sense
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lunch brea
Very nice example, very proud of you!
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pocketing his food
not sure what you mean--putting food into his pockets, or are you describing swallow strategy? Make sure a reader can discern!
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completed set up assistance
jargon
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sitting beside him that had not been touched
reorder phrases
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my client’s life
one or many?
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were non-compliant
this can come across as judgmental--can you rephrase?
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t’s
remove apostrophe
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“ no hitting” or “ good hands”
spacing with quotation marks
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use my expertise i
does this belong?
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In this population, it is of upmost importance to act accordingly
Please clarify
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ASD
acronym
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unprofessional response
by whom? or to what?
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“ T
spacing
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“ I
spacing
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One day, I went to get the client so that she could transition from her PT session
not sure what this means. Also, make sure that PT is previously written out in full
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make
made
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defensive
do you mean offensive?
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would have a poor attitude
this is a judgmental statement about the patient, please rephrase and give an example of what she did to illustrate your point
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used a technique frequently
frequently used a technique
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spacing
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in both settings? Including the peds setting? Not sure if this is accurate....perhaps rephrase.
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allowed them to be
they became
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ar
past tense
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can
could
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plete (
past tense
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t’s
if you are talking about many clients, the apostrophe should be moved to the end of the word after the s
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his/her
their
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of
remove word
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have
had--use past tense
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as been
was
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th, 2021:
Mazel tov! What a great accomplishment! I wish I had known you were there--I also participated. GREAT JOB!
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to
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and included
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What a great quality, to always find the golden egg amongst the wreckage.
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sions
What a great story. I also hope she took some pain medication before you saw her again!
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people with
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feedback.
Thanks for sharing your vulnerability (in the image).
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nals. Below is the title
I love that you did this--so proud of you!
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AOTA
has the acronym appeared prior?
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ts
apostrophe needed
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therapy
remove word
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t
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set
Provide a synopsis
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Occupational Thera
no need to capitalize
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ice
Please provide a synopsis--see previous comments
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this supportive
which supportive evidence? Perhaps state more plainly, "By appraising the evidence, I was able to determine..."
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of
or may not
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my
the treatments that followed.
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lies
apostrophe needed--possessive
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were
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2 year old
2-year-old
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within
of
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CVA patients
preferable to use person-first language
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With
During
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s”
punctuation needed here
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of c
people with
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research specific diagnoses
was this research? Or were you looking up information, familiarizing yourself?
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This
What does "this" refer to?
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utilizing new research
unclear--you were using new research, or looking up information? Please clarify this phrase.
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remove space
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mproved
grammar
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his/her
their
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he/she can be
they could be
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hyphenate
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potentially
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while utilizing
you're not using a service model, rather, you're functioning within a service model
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Although the ultimate goal
Not sure what you mean here...the ultimate goal of what?
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NDT
acronym alert
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their
whose?
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settings worked within the hospital
not sure what this means
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the opportunity
me
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curri
Provide a synopsis so the reader doesn't have to read the image.
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tional th
Provide a synopsis so the reader doesn't have to read through the discussion post.
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here
there
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were self-pay
this is jargon, find another way to describe
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CI
acronym
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he/she
they
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Due to this
Therefore
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he opportunity
opportunities (you discuss multiple occasions)
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spell out the first time followed by parentheses
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officer
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here
where?
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BS
spell this out, and place in parentheses if you talk about it again.
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nal.
What you wrote is very important. Can you make a clearer connection to the standard? How does this attitude demonstrate that you maintained values over self-promotion or profit?
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Very important!
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This child had a visual perception goal that we were working on with a puzzle.
Use more concise language.
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when he came to school.
redundant
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cutting circles, triangles as well as drawing those shapes
reword in the correct sequence of events
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my
the
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my
the
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navigate any precautions
this is jargon--would the average reader understand what you meant?
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learned that safety is the utmost importance, however many patients come to the hospital to have orthopedic surgeries done
Why is this a contradiction? Rephrase for clarity please
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ha
Good work
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in pediatrics
in my pediatric rotation
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Sweet
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did a great at
a great what?
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to be
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I absolutely LOVE Arkansas! I have not been to Petit Jean State Park in about 15 years....time to go back! Little Rock is a fun small town. I'm so glad you went exploring. The slide show is great!
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I took
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Lovely reflection
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PICC lines, IV lines, oxygen needs, Foley catheters, and procedures such as PEG
lots of acronyms here! Is there a way to rewrite without all the abbreviations and acronyms?
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performing safe
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Start a new sentence
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grammar
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I also struggled with intervention planning regarding having enough ideas and activities to pull from if a session did not go the way that I had planned
Rephrase for clarity
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my
my?
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was able to learn
learnt
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client who we wanted to promote coordination
client in whom we wanted to promote coordinated movements.
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perform
do
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them
headphones
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You both wore the headphones?
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more than
was the first goal to reach ten minutes, or exceed ten minutes?
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different desired aspects
don't understand what this means
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iLs (Integrated Listening Systems)
reverse
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hyphenate
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was able to learn
learnt
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was able to help contribut
contributed
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h.
research study
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was able to finish
completed
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on Excel
in a spreadsheet
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During my time in my didactic coursework
While I attended classes on campus
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the equipment.
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orthopedic patients
take away orthopedic. Use person first language. Patients who have had total hip...etc..
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if a patient was appropriate
No! Don't use judgmental language to describe the patient! The patient is always appropriate, but the conditions may not be!!!
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ROM
Have you spelled this out previously and placed in parentheses?
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MMT
Have you spelled this out previously and placed in parentheses?
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iADLs
Have you spelled this out previously and placed in parentheses?
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ADLs
Have you spelled this out previously and placed in parentheses?
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I learned how to do this efficiently while also creating a picture of a patient to display in a formal evaluation note to write goals and to recommend a discharge placeme
This is a long sentence with many components, and I don't understand it...please revise for clarity.
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important
Avoid repeated use of the word
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suffered a massive
evaluative language
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extensor muscle belly
There are several--simplify--extensors
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I had a patient during my time in outpatient who had
Simplify
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erio
Was this okay with her parent?
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What I decided to try was
I decided to try food items, specifically
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this child
her
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no comma necessary
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past tense
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her eating of non-food items
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Great!
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that had PHI
this needs to come before "each day".
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on
using (I am picturing you sitting on top of a computer!!!)
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have included
Here is
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HIPAA
acronym alert
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evaluate appropriate patients
Is it the patient that needs to be appropriate, or the referral?
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a minimum
of what?
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patient because they are inappropriate
rephrase. It's not that the patient was inappropriate. The referral was inappropriate.
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bereaved
bereaved indicates death....did he die? Is there another more appropriate word?
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t,
remove comma
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I really appreciate how you captioned the images
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Very nice!
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