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since being in the ICU can be a serious situation
it always is a serious situation....and you already stated this in the first sentence.
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an intimidating
an intimidating what?
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once I begin practicing as an occupational therapist
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the most
as much as possible
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to positively impact my weeks
please clarify or rephrase--I am unclear what this means
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To be occupational therapist, I feel like we have a passion to help people and most of the time we take those struggles home with us. I know how important it is to balance your work life and personal life. I know that it is hard to leave those struggles at work once you get home, but it is important to focus on yourself and your loved ones just like your patients.
Change these to first-person language. Use "I" statements. Speak about yourself, not others
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throughout my rotations
Either remove this or place it at the beginning of the sentence.
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as a
as this was a
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p grow my therapeutic use of self.
what do you mean?
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without being asked
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I know how important it is to help them without being asked
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I was able to use my strength as a servant
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as well as writing up reports
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being a servant
to avoid misinterpretation, consider rephrasing: and having a service-oriented mindset (or something similar).
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after sessions
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is helping me develop the skill as I will need it in the future as a practitioner.
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because she said that she wants
and said she wanted
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than she provided me
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haven’t had
didn't have
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as my instructor for the week
you had a different instructor each week?
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with
within
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was able to talk
talked
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that relate wit
relevant to the setting in which I choose to work.
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y therapeutic use of self
my ability to be therapeutic as a future occupational therapist.
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student
this is confusing--a student in the classroom? or an SLP student?
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went
came
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first-year speech language pathology (SLP).
this does not make sense
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when I worked in the intensive care unit (ICU)
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was able to use
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ply occup
does not make sense. Do you mean that you applied the domain of OT?
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nt info. –
Nice work
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when
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one or several?
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providing assessments to
assessing
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grow my clinical expertise
become better at administering standardized assessments.
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tients
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mobilization early
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mobility rat
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that there was
about
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alongside
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was able to educate
educated
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even if they were on the vent
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for our patients to the doctors
to advocate to the doctors on behalf of our patients to decrease or discontinue sedation so that we could mobilize them.
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was able to explain
explained
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I would explain what happened during our zoom sessions.Â
This sentence seems misplaced, disconnected to the rest, and unnecessary.
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o do things in the future like this program
to participate in programs like these
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well as
as well as improve
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to grow my
to meet new people
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of health on infants children, and adolescents with disabilities.
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LEND
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I had great clinical instructors and looked up to both of them as role models throughout my rotations.
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ring my evaluation as evidence of how I upheld ethics in practice.
this looks like it is part of a different sentence
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Lexie has a great foundation for the code of ethics and federal etc regulations. She adheres to all of these and asks questions when she has them regarding. –
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the Code of Ethics
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code of ethics
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their
the patient if they wanted their guest to stay or leave the room
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would see
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as much as you can
delete--there should be no limit on respecting privacy--"as much as you can" implies there's a limit to the amount of respect you can give someone.
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a skill
it is not a skill, rather, a commitment to a code of conduct.
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hese rule
which rules? The Code of Ethics is a set of values.
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important skill
This is not a skill
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have built
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by the end of my rotation
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different age populations, diagnosis,
people of different ages, diagnoses, cultures...
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was able to use some of my
used some of the
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by the time I finished my fieldwork rotations
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was able to feel
felt
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elay the information clearly for the parents
able to clearly relay the information to the parents.
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It was my responsibility to discuss the progress and goals for their child during occupational therapy services
It was my responsibility to discuss how occupational therapy services related to their child's goals.
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grammar
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hologist
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be able to grow my knowledge in each field
so that I could learn from them
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that I had to interact with
with whom I interacted
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discussion post below,
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to help grow and develop my own knowledge for occupational therapy.
I don't understand this last part of the sentence. Perhaps start a new sentence: It helped me deepen my appreciation for OT (or ST). Not sure what you meant so just throwing out a suggestion.
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to benefit both occupational therapy and speech therapy
to benefit therapy, or benefit the patient? Or lead to better outcomes for the student?
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School Bas
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serve
Lovely
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I showed what all he could now
rather rephrase to show what the patient could do, rather than what you did (since he is the one who did the work)
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plan
level
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have not been
had not been
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one
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this patient during rounds
was he there? Were you reviewing the patient, or reviewing the information?
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MVC
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one of our patients
a patient
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During rounds
Since you are referring to a specific case, write, During one of our rounds
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and what their goals were
delete, otherwise it sounds as though they didn't know what their goals were to begin with, which negates a client-centered plan of care.
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herapeutic relationships better
better therapeutic relationships
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using
did you use or consider client factors?
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was able to talk
talked
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what evaluations
of the appropriate assessments and interventions I needed to perform.
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hat would be more appropriate than others
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was able to create
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was able to gain
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By developing a long-term plan, it helped him understand the importance of preventing another injury to his abdomen
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he had
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was able to
listened
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promote health and prevention
what is health and prevention? Please clarify or use different words.
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d a
is a skill
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diverse
well-versed
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I worked with the parents to develop an Individualized Education Plan (IEP) and get permission to evaluate their child
Reorder--didn't you first get permission to evaluate before developing the plan?
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was able to provide
provided
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peech Language Pathologist (SLP), Physical Therapist
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ith
one or many? if singular, use the word "a"; if plural, then specify speech language pathologists, physical therapists, etc.
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to integrate it into our practice.
unnecessary part of the sentence--doesn't make sense here
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We would integrate sessions that pertained to what they wanted to be able to do once they left the hospital.
Rephrase. Perhaps, we would focus our treatments on...
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through their own language
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plain
in their language
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slate.
FYI (you didn't do anything wrong--this is just FYI) the law requires a translator be present in person or via phone (i.e., a real person, not an app). It is possible your CI didn't know.
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1. Appr
See my comment on the page labeled Professional Development
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ent
See if you can eliminate this as a web page and rather use the heading as a menu item for the four pages under this heading--otherwise there's nothing here to see
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Reframe in the past tense.....by the time you send this to a potential employer, you will have graduated.
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ome!!
This is wonderful. I think you can combine this page with the About Me page to make the portfolio a little more concise, but you don't have to.
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7 4 7Â
Not sure you need the "Contact" page at the end--it's a fillable form and you've already provided the information here.
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EA L L I S O N . N A N C E @ I C L O U D . C O M
Very impressive!
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oner.
Please use an example to explain how.
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A, 1993
Place reference at the end of this paragraph.
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ted
So proud of you!
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Microaggressions and implicit biases within the professional setting.
see previous comment
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among
among or within?
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TSU
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He also had poor coping strategies when it came to losing a game or trouble completing a task.
Rephrase: the end clause is misplaced
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w. I
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e asked
I can't help feeling nosy about the outcome: did she indeed have conversion disorder? Was she able to get any better?
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ROM
Acronym--please spell out or make sure it is already spelled out previously
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senting
Great example, great reflection.
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COTAD
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d, and giv
Can you give a specific example from your FW experiences?
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ed.
I can only imagine....it's such a tough start to the program! But you did it!
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WOW!! How come I didn't know any of this? Mazel tov. I am so proud of you!
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weakness
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pic.
showing how I improved....etc.
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as well.
Great reflection. I really am enjoying reading this portfolio.
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the more I was...
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This is a great reflection
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So proud of you!
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Microaggressions and implicit biases within the professional setting
Capitalize each word in a title
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CEU
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Stellar!
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BSC
acronym
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te
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eel relaxed and provide encouragement
change order
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moderate complexity patients
person-first language
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DME
acronym--has this been previously spelled out?
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ADLs for
unnecessary
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Once there is an order for an OT evaluation, I visit patients to
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ROM and MMT
If not previously spelled out, please do so
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