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  1. Apr 2021
    1. seen that

      saw it

    2. hen you place something of value onto one's treatment, their participation increases.

      Use first-person language.

    3. It also became a great activity to write out grandkids names and send them a picture for my older adult

      Rewrite. Hard to comprehend.

    4. e suction toys

      I see what you are trying to say but it's requiring me to re-read and re-read to understand. Please rephrase this sentence for clarity.

    5. t was a great activity for kids to learn how their letters

      grammar--something might be missing in this sentence.

    6. wit

      during

    7. patient was getting

      plural

    8. atient's

      plural = patients'

    9. sis

      plural

    10. OCP

      explain, or describe differently. Imagine that a hiring manager is reading your website--which is not unlikely!!

    11. There are many different diagnoses that come in and out of the therapy gym each day

      Nope. People come in an out. Change to person-first language! You were treating people, not diagnoses!

    12. was a bundle of nerve

      Place this clause at the start of the sentence for clarity

    13. (IRF),

      unnecessary since you don't use the acronym again. Only place the abbreviation in parentheses if you plan to use it going forward, otherwise, just spell it out.

    14. As I mentioned,

      Unnecessary

    15. ollaborate with

      discuss? talk about? debate? converse?

    16. One of the more beneficial workshops I had the opportunity to be apart of were Journal Club Meetings.

      Rephrase. Perhaps:

      Participating in Journal Club meetings was beneficial to me as a student.

    17. It was

      What was?

    18. We

      Who?

    19. e

      they

    20. They

      Meetings

    1. of the da

      Nice job!

    2. cond reason being that if they are unable to interpret their instructions, it could affect their dignity which is a core value in the AOTA Code of E

      Rephrase for clarity

    3. One reason being that if they can't read or understand the instructions, this could put them at risk at home for safety.

      Rephrase for clarity

    4. is

      was

    5. means that my patient needs to be able to und

      past tense

    6. helps you underst

      past tense; first person

    7. ere

      past tense

    8. ilit

      Describe artifact

    9. WED

      acronym alert

    10. pediatric caseload

      a caseload of pediatric patients--after all, you were treating the patients, not the caseload.

    11. treat a full case load

      you were treating people on your caseload, you weren't treating the caseload.

    12. and do so

      redundant

    13. (PEO)

      no need to place in parentheses if you are not going to make use of the acronym going forward

    14. it

      not sure what "it" refers to. Rephrase

    15. it was always

      what does "it" refer to? rephrase

    16. fluctuate from

      rephrase

    17. it

      what is "it"

    18. HSC.

      describe artifact

    19. s that they both put

      for putting an

    20. or

      to

    21. bout

      remove word

    22. Something that

      Remove words

    23. UTHSC

      acronym

    24. nt

      facility

    25. y. 

      Nice reflection. Please describe artifact below.

    26. pull suction toy

      one or many? grammar

    27. our

      ours

    28. PT

      acronym

    29. effec

      affect

    30. Covid

      See this website for the correct way to reference the pandemic virus

    31. cally. 

      Great

    32. OT and their ADL st

      acronyms

    33. th

      work

    34. I'm so thankful to be in a position where I can make efforts to help those who aren't able to help themselves just yet. 

      Past tense. Also, please provide a synopsis of the artifact below

    35. post d

      this is jargon. Perhaps--life after discharge

    36. he

      I anticipated he would need

    37. exponentially better than he was

      Rephrase

    38. t's like you hear of this existing, but it was if I didn't believe it.

      Reword. Grammar

    39. eet. I

      both, or one?

    40. nd it resulted

      resulting

    41. e d

      of

    1. profi

      Provide example from FW

    2. mind.

      ? mine? If so, reword--advocating for others is my passion

    3. ttle

      Please provide a synopsis of the artifact below.

    4. nd hope

      Example?

    5. the increase in determination

      in whom? the kids or adult clients?

    6. could do it.

      do what?

    7. e pretended to be our own superhero, saving the day as we propelled ourselves on the scooter boards and flew across the trampoline for proprioceptive and vestibular inpu

      who is "we"? Are you referring to you and your FWE, or to the child? Please clarify

    8. that

      remove word

    9. the

      grammar

    10. no matter what you have to do to get there.

      use I statements, and past tense

    11. h bite. S

      Can you give a specific example with one child?

    12. g

      creating what?

    13. Pinteresting

      don't assume every reader will know what this means--can you clarify, or find a better description?

    14. der

      disorders

    15. er w

      hyphenate for clarity

    16. 2

      two (see APA for guidelines about using numerals or words)

    17. se,

      courses

    18. by

      in

    19. your s

      for your own

    20. know

      knew

    21. can't

      couldn't

    22. did swing

      swung

    23. use e

      used

    24. acting out of

      behaving with

    25. here's a time and a place for it all, but whatever you need to do to avoid spilt milk is always the best method in my book.

      Rework this sentence. Great reflection.

    26. can not.

      cannot

    27. e alt

      of

    28. ad.

      Provide synopsis of artifact below.

    29. you too have success

      refer to yourselff

    30. you see

      I saw

    31. evel II fieldwork is when you really start to see a difference in your abilities and therefore your confidence.

      Talk about yourself and in past tense

    32. these things

      what things?

    33. This

      It

    34. NBCOT q

      Acronym

    35. mpleted.

      Great. Provide synopsis of artifact.

    36. ADLs

      acronym

    37. onversation piece

      conversations

    38. want to

      past tense

    39. e to demonstrate is getting lost in conversation with my patient

      past tense

    40. ass

      passed

    41. ad the opportunity to teach

      taught

    42. th

      lengthy?

    43. is

      past tense--was

    44. l and a

      Start a new sentence. I immediately adapted....follow with a specific example from your FW experience and don't forget to mention the artifact as well.

    45. its

      it was

    46. g cl

      a

    47. have become

      became

    48. hen t

      Remove the word Then

    49. ven minima

      not sure what you mean here---minimal response can be positive if previously there was none

    50. even

      remove word

    51. t'

      remove apostrophe

    52. I think this question is speaking to feedback from a professor or fieldwork educator, but

      Unnecessary here. You can remove all of these words.

    53. ack. 

      Please provide a synopsis of the artifact below.

    54. I was presented with several scenarios in learning from my fieldwork educator that weren't exactly the type of model that I learn best from

      Rephrase for clarity

    55. this

      What does "this" refer to?

    1. Creating rapport upfront leads to your patient cooperating and participating in the plan of care you create.

      past tense; also, find a synonym for the word "create" as you used it at the beginning and end of this sentence.

    2. ADL

      acronym

    3. We

      I

    4. we determine

      I determined

    5. we observe

      I observed

    6. worked every time.

      Love this! See previous comment about the photo and make sure that anyone reading your website knows they were taken and posted with permission.

    7. of

      for

    8. ore.

      Great activity!

    9. all was

      were all

    10. determine their emotion

      each of their emotions

    11. contained pages

      not sure what "containted pages" means

    12. This

      What?

    13. at home.

      Fantastic!

    14. involved patient

      involved in what way?

    15. sfers.

      Great! I love the photos--make the statement that they were taken with permission. Also, mention to the reader what the artifacts below are.

    16. OT

      acronym alert...have you already told the reader what this stands for?

    17. this

      what is "this" referring to?

    18. getting to

      remove words

    19. make therapy play

      turn therapy into play

    20. and

      Start a new sentence

    21. had the opportunity to

      worked

    22. t Frozen

      for someone reading this who is unfamiliar with the movie, perhaps you can rephrase, 'my 90-year old patients were much less about the movie Frozen and much more...

    23. rformanc

      Fabulous reflection. Alex, what is the image below? Does it relate to this criteria? If so, please provide a brief synopsis to the reader.

    24. rehab.

      So wonderful that you got to collaborate with a dietitian.

    25. has

      past tense

    26. this

      not sure what "this" is referring to

    27. we've

      I'd

    28. influences were involved i

      In his past he was involved in

    29. majorly encompassed

      composed mainly

  2. otalexmiller.weebly.com otalexmiller.weebly.com
    1. ofession itself.

      This is such a beautiful reflection, Alex. Makes my heart swell with pride and gratitude.

    2. MOT

      acronym=spell out in the first instance, and if you intend to use going forward, place in parentheses.

    1. e, too

      Can you provide an example of an occasion where this worked?

    2. I needed to be confident in how the activities I chose were addressing the child's goals to discuss this with the parent.

      Rephrase

    3. ay.

      Can you give an example?

    4. to efficiently complete

      on efficiently completing

    5. this

      it

    6. e to this

      see previous comment

    7. discussed this

      rephrase--here is the third time you used the word "this" in two sentences--it becomes difficult to understand what "this" is referring to

    8. this

      it

    9. eviewing

      use a synonym so that you don't repeat the same word twice in the sentence

    10. During one session within a busy day

      Can you rephrase for clarity?

    11. tay

      Nice example. What happened next?

    12. For the group members' growth, asking follow up questions and providing comments on their sharing allowed them to further reflect and develop necessary skills to utilize in their recovery and post-discharge

      Shorten, simplify, or break up this long sentence

    13. 12 weeks

      12 week rotation

    14. at inpatient psychiatric

      at an inpatient psychiatric facility

    1. day

      Can you give a specific example?

    2. ement.

      Describe it

    3. helps to

      helped me

    4. described below

      Provide a synopsis.

    5. and how

      Start a new sentence

    6. Mr. J diligently took notes throughout my groups on things I discussed and what other group members shared.

      Reword, or break down for clarity

    7. The example used above

      Perhaps reword.

      The image above is a screenshot from a blog post in which I discussed the impact of leisure activities on the overall mood of two patients. Etc. Etc. Etc.

    8. they can use similar activitie

      who can use? the therapists or the patients?

    9. n o

      with

    10. ons

      did you communicate with a profession or a professional?

    11. o.

      Provide a synopsis of the artifact, so that a person who cannot view the image knows what it tells about you. Also, can you give a specific example?

    12. are

      were

    13. age

      remove word

  3. kayleestem-ot.weebly.com kayleestem-ot.weebly.com
    1. e

      Great pictures, so wonderful to see your smiling shining face!

    2. find joy in finding

      use a synonym for the word "find" so that you don't repeat yourself

    3. r

      hyphenate

      under- and uninsured

    4. e

      past tense

    5. I begin my Level II Fieldwork experiences.

      Perhaps this sentence needs to be removed since this is no longer relevant, it is in the past.

    6. OT

      don't use any acronyms before you have spelled them out first, then placed in parentheses--only if you intend to use the acronym going forward on this page. Acronyms should be written out on each page at the first instance used followed by parentheses but only if the acronym will be used again on the page.

    7. second

      third

    8. B.S.

      Bachelor of Science

    1. benefit.

      Very thoughtful post!

      You are correct--you weren't in the room during the evaluation, and there could have been other effects of medication, delirium, weakness, disorientation, post-surgery anesthesia, etc. which might have explained the lower scores compared to the following day.

    2. G

      spell out

    3. FIM

      spell out

    4. n-p

      see previous

    5. uctor:

      please provide a synopsis

    6. hs

      use full word

    7. but not limited to

      unnecessary clause

    8. IVs,

      intravenous lines

    9. are attached to multiple lines

      use lay terminology

    10. is

      was

    11. post evaluation

      what do you mean? Use lay terms, not jargon

    12. in-p

      see previous

    13. at its cor

      remove, it's redundant

    14. bases

      foundations

    15. tenants

      tenets