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I had multiple opportunities at Encompass Health to lead these sessions and was able to improve each time with recommendations for the client and answering the many questions they would have.
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confidence in myself
my confidence
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just getting to know them as a person
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communicate to the clients and their caregivers effectively their plan of care
find an alternative word to "communicate" so that you are not repeating the same word in the sentence.
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(such as maximum – dependent assistance)
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which I
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squat pivots
performing a squat pivot
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blocking knees
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just transferring
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safely moving a person
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the rest of my time there
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and she re-educ
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to practice
practicing
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of our blocked student learning
some time
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bed to wheelchair/toilet/shower bench/mat or anywhere els
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from a bed to another surface such as a wheelchair, shower bench, or anywhere else.
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ators.
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I told both I’m a visual learner where they are verbally explaining and demonstrating at the same time then I like to be a hands-on learner.
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Upon
This font looks a lot different than the previous pages.
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I had the opportunity to
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ry so
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SOS
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had the opportunity to discuss
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had the opportunity to complete
completed
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that have benefited me
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Not only are formal assessments completed but also clinical observations of their behavior and interests
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client (sometimes family) interview
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UTHSC
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ents/family memb
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and have continued practicing during fieldwork
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to be used
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Although both family meetings were different
Although the family meetings were different in the two settings, they both included.....
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progress they've made since evaluation day
Perhaps you should mention this first. The progress seems to be more important first, followed by a review of use of equipment, don't you think? It also relates to putting the person first, before equipment.
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went over adaptive equipment if applicable
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they may have
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ily/c
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as a studen
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I worked with
with whom I worked.
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Please see below for further detail:
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ul of Covid clients
Person-first language please
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Covid
See prior comment
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Covid
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all diagnose
person first language. You work with people!
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is also individualized to each client
what is? Perhaps start a new sentence.
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as they can be very involved
what do you mean? Involved with what? Is this the best description?
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Spinal Cord Injury client
use person-first language
Clients with spinal cord injuries.
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SCI
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ad the opportunity to attend
attended
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Covid-19
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ns.
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MOHO
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and d
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d Froz
the movie
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he was my first independent sessio
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rozen
the movie "Frozen".
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She wrote a very sweet note on her discharge day to tell us how thankful she was that I took the time to listen to her concerns and gave her the confidence to advocate for herself and that I believed in her when she didn't at the time
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ADLs
See previous comment about acronyms. Spell out followed by parentheses but only if you will continue to use the acronym on this page.
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e began with her tolerating time in the standing frame and worked our way up to becoming independent in transferring herself and independent in all ADLs
Reword. This sounds a lot like what you'd write in a medical record. Assume the reader is your hiring manager who is not a therapist.
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had the opportunity to work
worked.
Try to refrain from repeatedly using the phrase "I had the opportunity"
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rather use a bed pan rather than moving to the toile
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dependent x2
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I worked with a lady who suffered from alcoholism, depression, and had an extreme fear of falling due to becoming very weak in her lower extremities and falling multiple times at her previous location.
Break this down. Also the word "suffered" may come across as patronizing even though I am sure it is not your intent.
Perhaps I worked with a lady with alcoholism and depression. She had an extreme fear...
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s and th
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During treatment sessions, we focused on increasing his endurance and strength in his upper extremities in order to achieve those goals and due to limited visitation hours because of Covid-19 there were many phone calls made to his spouse at the end of the day to keep her updated on his progress and plan of care
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CVA
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autions.
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may not be
was not
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and daily we would communicate daily
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When it came to written instructions such as home exercise programs or discharge instructions I used pictures that were easy to follow and used a translator to ensure the written instructions were in their preferred language
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and treat many people from a diverse background ranging from across the lifespan, ethnicities, religion, politics, and all walks of life.
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treat people of all ages from diverse backgrounds, ethnicities, religions, political ideologies, and other walks of life.
Not sure I said it correctly either.
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lso, there were times I checked with the rehab techs to see if my client (if appropriate) could be placed in a therapy group sometime during the day to make up for the time
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Now, other times if I missed the 45 minutes or any other time and was not able to make it up I would put the time missed on the board so other therapists, if they had time, could pick up minutes with the client so he/she would not get behind in therapy.
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treatment session
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shower for the client
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(as it's different compared to the home)
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extra
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another person on the rehab team
other rehab team member
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ursin
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t Encompass Health in the Inpatient Rehab setting it is crucial the clients there receive their daily expected 3 hours of therapy to meet insurance/billing standards and to ensure they are receiving the best therapy to return to independence.
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populations we do
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Occupational therapy personnel shall demonstrate a concern for the well-being and safety of the recipients of their services".
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Please read below a time I applied beneficence to everyday practice with a client
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OTA Code of Ethics includes 7 values: Altruism,
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h rotations
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treat the caseload i
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reating the caseloa
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this
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because of Covid
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treating the caseload independently
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able to observe various ways of implementing interventions, interacting with clients, and documentation skills.
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OT
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and
with
you didn't work with a diagnosis--you worked with a person who had a diagnosis
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Since there were two of us (my CI and I) we were doubled most of the day, which was unexpected and a little nerve wrecking but it ended up being a great day and I had the opportunity to work with new people and diagnoses I may not have otherwise.
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chart reviewed
reviewed the charts of
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chart review,
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deliver professional behavior and growth
Perhaps you strive for? The words you chose don't make sense.
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oal
I really like how you use specific examples for many of these criteria.
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even safer with the grab bars
safely
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One aspect I really enjoyed about Encompass Health is how their therapists are separated into “pods” or “teams” which makes for easier communication between the rehabilitation team in terms of client care – their daily progress in functional, mental, and physical status.
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and holiday bins as well
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3
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was able to create
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bags and bins
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he was extremely grateful for not only focusing on her physical health but also overall wellbeing
Is there another way to say this? The sentence doesn't sound right.
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advocate for her to the rest of her rehabilitation team
don't understand
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had the opportunity
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and her emotional/mental health.
this is an incomplete sentence.
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ADL
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and due to the fire in her apartment she was now homeless and had lost everything
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ad the opportunity to work
see previous comment about repetition of the phrase "I had the opportunity"
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Lovely. I really enjoyed scrolling through the pictures (of course I stopped at the Route 66 half marathon picture and was envious)!! I also enjoyed reading this introduction. You write well.
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o-evaluations would be very short. I would communicate with the physical therapist or physical therapist assistant to talk about who should charge for the unit.
Was the physical therapy assistant conducting an evaluation?
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would ask
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Even something as seemingly small as expressing gratitude to clients for taking the time to collaborate and work with us can go a long way
This is a very generic statement. Can you rather provide a specific example of something that happened on FW, to illustrate this point?
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fter talking with her to provide some words of encouragement and positivity,
I am not sure this example is relevant to the criterion of providing constructive and timely feedback. Please provide a more appropriate example.
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n system.
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been placing
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TA,
which one below?
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velopmental
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Parentheses only needed if you are going to use this abbreviation going forward. Did you?
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Frame of Reference
Here, as well as on the previous page, you don't need to capitalize Frame of Reference. Just the actual one by name (e.g., Rehabilitative, Biomechanical, Developmental, etc.)
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onal
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was at a poin
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have
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who
..."and what they experienced". Remove the word "have"
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can use
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is experiencing difficulties, we can grade the activity up or dow
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ate functional activities that are
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I found (remove the word "have")
I am still worried that this sentence comes across as unintentionally accusatory. What I hear when I read this, is that you didn't see the FOR being used. However, Pamela, that doesn't mean that they weren't being used. Perhaps the therapist weren't explicit about it, but I am pretty confident they knew what they were doing--and had a goal in mind. Remember, the Biomechanical FoR seeks improvements in physical functions (ROM, strength, etc.) and the Rehabilitative FoR seeks improvements in ability to engage in occupations. I have no doubt that the therapists were working towards those ends. There must be a better way you can phrase this. I made a suggestion previously.
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Lovely reflection. Thank you.
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This is a great reflection!
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wound care to potentially gruesome wounds
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tion. For children with a diagnosis where it was unlikely that a skill would develop, I utilized a rehabilitative approa
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and
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increasing
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em.
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teria.
This is lovely, however can you illustrate the point with a concrete example from your experience?
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