See comment from last time and please correct grammar.

Only place the acronym in parentheses if you intend to use it again on the page. Did you?

see my previous comment

1. Please adjust font size for consistency.
2. also went over the progress they had made (past tense)

see previous comment. This should be past tense.

COVID-19

person-first. Please see previous comment

hyphenate decision-making

other

my

meant it was important

Please make a comment about the image below from your discussion board post. What does it say?

Please cite according to APA

please correct grammar.

I have commented on this twice before, please correct

please spell out an abbreviation and follow with parentheses since you use it again on the page.

choose one word or the other

The correct way to reference this is COVID-19. Sorry I didn't pick up on this earlier.

At my first one

check font size

See previous comment

See previous comment

the patient was safe and allowed

See my previous comment

This is a difficult sentence to understand.

Perhaps

I created three sensory bags that could be placed in bins of various sizes. Each bag had small items according to a theme, such as a season or a holiday. The therapist could select the sensory bag based on the interests and goals of the child.

please write out the number--see APA formatting guidelines if you aren't sure.

recommended building up the handles of her utensils

She was the first client with whom I worked independently.

alcoholism AND depression

See my previous comment

the client's

correlates

Please correct this--see my previous comment about using acronyms

correct the grammar error

Keep font size consistent

did not hold

when touching or interacting with them. Perhaps provide an example in the previous sentence?

Several of the kids on my caseload during my second FW placement were sensitive to wet textures, like a wet washcloth, and had goals to become less hesitant when touching or interacting with them.

calm

I am not sure what this means. Do you mean that you identified lack of knowledge on sensory processing as a weakness, and you spent time learning about it to develop your skills? Please rephrase.

missing word--an

While at my FW placement at AN inpatient psych facility

Can you simplify for clarity? her attention was limited?

past tense

Rework this sentence for clarity; use past tense

Provide a synopsis to the reader who cannot see what it says or doesn't want to have to read it

remove

daily opportunities

plural

can you be more specific and descriptive?

remove words

remove

remove comma, insert with whom

the

Nice job!

acronym

these

What were you familiar with?

Start a new sentence. Grammar

me use

Please rephrase, grammar

on assertiveness

which handout?

Start a new sentence

rephrase. Perhaps, I led an assertiveness training group with fifteen clients.

this was a skill lacking in many of the clients in this setting

See previous comment

acronym

Grammar

Both the child and his mother wanted

12-year old child with cerebral palsy on my caseload

Assume the reader of this website is blind and using a screen reader. The image would be inaccessible and you would have to provide a brief explanation of the image.

What was the outcome?

implemented

was

what does this refer to? Mindfulness. or attending a workshop?

Simplify for clarity.

After evaluating a child, I planned and implemented

or

After reviewing the child's evaluation, I planned and implemented...

past tense--was

remove capitalization

Start a new sentence.

This is very difficult to understand. Can you simplify? I found out what he liked doing and incorporated those activities into therapy, to increase his engagement throughout the session.

learning about his love...

leading to more productive lives (plural, since you are talking about many patients)

by allowing them

comfort

Hmm...I'd avoid this because imagine if you applied for a job there and one of the hiring managers wore their stickers???

Can you think of a better (less snarky) way to write about this experience?

my successful relationship-building...

just something to briefly explain the artifact.

This is such a great story!!! Thanks for elaborating!!! :-)

showing how my confidence improved, particularly when discussing the benefits of occupational therapy with clients (or something along those lines)

Please provide a brief synopsis

hyphenate

apostrophe is missing

I know you spelled this out on a previous page, but since you have not yet used it on this page, it needs to be spelled out (or discarded). Also, provide a brief synopsis of what it says, for someone who cannot see the image.

Plural. You're discussing the whole cohort, we understand the value.....

Spell it out here since you have not yet used it on this page.

virtual (rather than using the brand name Zoom)

grandkids' names

reasons (plural)

This also meant that my patient needed to understand the information. Remove the words "to be able"

A little more description please!

Briefly describe

Provide a synopsis for someone who cannot see the image.

Provide a synopsis for someone who can't see the image.

led

Since you didn't use the acronyms CLOF and PLOF after this sentence, placing them in parentheses was not necessary and inaccurate.

There's a word missing--of--should read determine each of their emotions.

Fantastic!

I forgot to tell you to place the word "Frozen" in quotation marks

provide a brief synopsis:

Below is a comment....which demonstrates my respect for all clients I encountered during my fieldwork (or something along those lines)

He and I

Acronym. Even if you've spelled this out on another page, you need to spell it out again. You should spell out an acronym on each web page, followed by the abbreviation in parentheses if you intend to use it going forward on this page.

discuss

please simplify. They shared what they had learnt in the course they attended.

See previous comment

please see previous comment

picked

simplify

taught him to use

plural?

remove

could

wouldn't

wanted

past tense

simplify this sentence: make the home safer

acronym

please correct to past tense

all of these? I don't really think this part of the sentence is necessary--it sounds very contrived

2020

were

I don't understand what you intend by "how they are affected"

change

change

See previous comment on correctly referencing the pandemic

Please write in past tense

Please write this in past tense

Lovely

were you assessing vision, or assessing visual screenings? please correct!

Is this a different example? If so, please clarify

See this website about referencing the pandemic

these are all standardized assessments. Can you clarify, or reword, or provide other examples?

This clause at the end of the sentence confuses me. Was the purpose of the HEP to prepare for future sessions? The clause seems unnecessary to me.

Nothing below....only the following criterion. You may want to relocate the screenshot here

Please see previous comments. These are not examples of therapeutic activities. Handwriting is an example; swinging; coloring; finger painting; threading beads....all of these are examples. Please change for clarity and accuracy

Please use APA formatting guidelines.

Please use APA

this is not an example of therapeutic activities

this is not an example of therapeutic activities

plural

please write this out

remove apostrophe

acronym

The only reason to place the acronym ior abbreviation n parentheses is when you will reuse it going forward. Since this is the end of the page, there is no need to place the abbreviation in parentheses--for this and the following.

please change to past tense

Lovely!

acronym. Please spell out in the first instance, and if you intend to use again going forward, place in parentheses.

Acronym. If you don't intend to continue using it on the page, spell it out (without the acronym in parentheses).

Abbreviation in parentheses is appropriate if you continue to use it, but you didn't, so delete the abbreviation. It's unnecessary.

wheelchair is one word, without a hyphen. Sorry I didn't catch this previously.

past tense, see previous comment

Lovely

space needed after period

remove the word has

was. Please correct to past tense

take out the word "a"

past tense

spelling

Punctuation--you need a space after the period

became more confident

who gave me opportunities to gain confidence by practicing communicating with family members

told this

talking==try to vary the words used; communication is repeated several times here

change word order, position this word after "to"

I stated I felt ready to independently perform

Nice example!

see previous comment

sounds strange. Perhaps "We decided to ignore"

negative behaviors to increase participation? I don't understand. Perhaps "to increase participation" needs to be removed from the sentence for clarity.

punctuation typo

See previous comment. Not everyone might know what Kroger means.

I don't understand who "their" is referring to--the facility? clients with TBI? Still unclear to me

third

Please see previous comment from March 17--correct to third

acronym...sorry I missed this one before

Lovely

Nice

plural

Lovely, thanks for including this!

Plural--see previous comment from March 14

Great. Provide a synopsis of the image.

Please describe the artifact, the situation that was being described.

Can you provide a brief example to support this?

Can you give an example?

you discussed a person, not an example. Please rephrase, and provide a synopsis of the artifact.

typo

unnecessary clause

comma

Reword

with

about

did you just want to, or did you actually develop it?

word order= this word comes after shoes

worked