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plans of care
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on my clients' caseload
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Great job! I am so proud of you!
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kinesio-tape
how to apply kinesiotape
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and remain a lifelong learner
so that I can remain...
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presentations
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he first assignment given to us was to perform research on a case study to find and present on the effects of lateral epicondylitis and the use of therapeutic activities and thermal modalities vs. only using thermal modalities while treating this client.
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py.
Can you give an example?
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their
my clients'
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een us.
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xternal clinical evidence
what is external clinical evidence?
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to the client
this comes earlier in the sentence, after the word effective
I believe the electrical stimulation intervention was more effective for the client because....
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hat I be
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affective
effective
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E-stim
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E-stim vs. E-stim
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EBP c
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best available external clinical expertise
how is this different from what you just wrote?
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Throughout my entir
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Acronym. How interesting, though!
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have had
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have sat
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lovely reflection
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ant, but
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of 2019-20
So proud of you for this!
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outreaching
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I was always in communication with organizations within the Memphis community to grow outreach
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d I created:
BRILLIANT! BRILLIANT! BRILLIANT!!!!!
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Frozen
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I LOVE this! So creative and fun!
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Frozen characters
characters from the movie
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which is her absolute favorite movie,
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it contained
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or my clients to use and
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It was usually based around being an upper extremity exercise group
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of this is while on fieldwork at an inpatient rehab facility,
One example was during my first week at an inpatient rehab facility when I worked with a client who had recently experienced a stroke.
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such as going on and being taken off of ECMO
no idea what this is. Perhaps start a new sentence here and continue her story.
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Bei
Is this the same size font as the previous paragraph? it looks smaller, but perhaps it's just me and my computer and my glasses.
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of self.
I'm sorry you had these experiences, but I'm thankful too. I've experienced rejection and humiliation by my clients and their family members too. Trust that you have the best of intentions and their best interests at heart. You're right--these things do pass, and you do grow from them. I really appreciate your frankness in this reflection.
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and/or
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have had
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I was able to get
I experienced
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I witnessed
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fun
Lovely reflection
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ieldwork instructor
Is this the same as the previously mentioned clinical instructor?
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the appropriate therapeutic use of self to use with certain client
Simplify.
When determining how to work with certain clients.
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hroughout my entire life
Either "throughout my life" or "My entire life"
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alth as well.
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o help clear my mind
you already wrote this earlier, it is redundant
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nowing my weakness in documentation wasn't enough, so I made a point to target this skill and tackle it with practice, and I am getting better each and every day
I'm not sure what you meant by the phrase, "knowing my weakness in documentation wasn't enough"
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on,
This needs to be a period
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about documentation
place earlier in the sentence, see previous comment
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let my concerns be made known
made my concerns about documentation known
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clinical instructor
is this the same as FWI? if so, please be consistent throughout portfolio
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I made goals throughout each fieldwork experience for me to aim towards achieving
rewrite--perhaps, I made myself goals for each FW experience and held myself accountable to achieving them
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promoting
providing?
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FWI
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ba
Nice. Can you provide a specific example?
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disheartening
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lf, h
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something such as
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I somewhat felt bad
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targets
promotes?
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collaboratio
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has bee
was
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resistive exercise bands (this is a brand name)
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ADLs.
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do the rickshaw
"do the rickshaw" is a very specific phrase which outsiders would not understand...can you elaborate for the reader who may not be an OT or PT familiar with an inpatient environment?
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VID.
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wheel-chair bound fo
Personally I am not a fan of the phrase "wheelchair bound" after hearing the perspective of a physician in a wheelchair. He'd ask --"am I bound? tied up?" I could hear from his point of view that the phrase conjures up helplessness. Perhaps there's a better phrase?
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utilizing his motivation during occupation-based and client-centered interventions
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lping.
Great example!
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or:
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attempt
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is easy, however, this patient is
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lowering his prognosis tremendously
can you rephrase? Perhaps, reducing (or lowering) his life expectancy?
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While on my level II fieldwork at Arkansas Children's Hospital, I had a 4-year old cardiac patient who loved to communicate through silly words and songs so that's how I learned to communicate with her, however, when communicating with her mom, I was more professional, but also demonstrated more understanding and patience, spoke in laymen's terms, and demonstrated non-verbal listening techniques due to how emotional she was seeing her child in the hospital.
This is well written and a wonderful example, however, it is a very very very long sentence. Can you break it up for improved readibility?
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cardiac patient
person first language
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d/o
a slash slows the reader and reduces reading fluency and comprehension. Choose one word
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Can you provide an example?
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Your layout looks fantastic. I appreciate the effort you put into the appearance of the website.
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in our paperwork period
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and as I was beginning to transfer her from the wheelchair to the toilet I realized she had a fear of falling and was holding onto the armrests/me and she had no motor control of her lower extremities combined with her poor seated balance it was not safe for me to transfer her independently onto the toilet.
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before moving to the shower portion of the evaluation
getting into the shower
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I was completely independent
I treated clients independently
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only if you will use the acronym on the remainder of this page.
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had the opportunity
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t on!
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then she “made”
making
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She would refuse therapy to lay in bed and sleep all day
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sweet, but
does activity tolerance contradict being sweet?
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he best way I have found to empower clients is to find out what motivates them
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are just a few of the options
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create or design.
"Come up with" sounds haphazard.
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g the food
I love this picture. Please make sure to provide a statement that it was taken with permission of Kids Unlimited and the legal guardians of the children shown in the picture.
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s he was ate
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the approach
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I had the opportunity
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and to be kind to him
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who was difficult
this is very judgmental. Was he difficult? Or could he have been angry, depressed, and hating life because he was in hospital? Could he have been confused? Please rephrase
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behaviors
attitudes toward therapy
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to those who
and others
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It ranged from people who
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personalities
no, there were people with a variety of personalities
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with
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Peabody
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have
practice?
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herefore
and consequently refused to participate in the evaluation
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and which I found confusing at times
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nterventions especially sensory,
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pportunity to live in my hometown again and another city not far where I had the chance to reconnect with old friends since I had been living in Memphis for two years pri
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have fun
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identity as fieldwork can be exhausting at times
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