Give the full name here. Don't assume someone reading this knows what you are referencing

practice?

and consequently refused to participate in the evaluation

past tense

were

past tense

being a

and which I found confusing at times

rephrase. Perhaps I learnt so much about sensory interventions

Rephrase this long sentence and pay attention to grammar.

start a new sentence

have fun

Shorten the sentence of break it down.

Such a lovely picture! Thanks for sharing!

Break down this sentence

my confidence

reword, grammar is incorrect.

find an alternative word to "communicate" so that you are not repeating the same word in the sentence.

remove comma

remove

Start a new sentence.

performing a squat pivot

disagree. Blocking knees is unsafe. Perhaps you meant "supporting knees from buckling"?

reword

safely moving a person

remove

Start a new sentence.

practicing

some time

reword.

from a bed to another surface such as a wheelchair, shower bench, or anywhere else.

Provide an example

Rephrase--don't quite understand

This font looks a lot different than the previous pages.

rephrase.

missing word

New sentence. She shared

acronym

rephrase

space

nice

rephrase

completed

grammar

that state......provide a narrative summary of the image

past tense

can you rephrase? completed the client interview with input from relevant others?

an

plural

that was

Can you give an example?

acronym

remove slash and rephrase

remove. redundant.

remove words

Although the family meetings were different in the two settings, they both included.....

past tense

Perhaps you should mention this first. The progress seems to be more important first, followed by a review of use of equipment, don't you think? It also relates to putting the person first, before equipment.

what do you mean? Would someone who was not an OT understand this sentence?

remove these words

see previous

use a word instead of the slash

past tense

remove these words. It is redundant and it is understood you were a student on rotation.

with whom I worked.

At

Provide a synopsis for those who cannot see what you wrote or do not want to read the discussion board.

Person-first language please

See prior comment

See previous comment

person first language. You work with people!

what is? Perhaps start a new sentence.

what do you mean? Involved with what? Is this the best description?

use person-first language

Clients with spinal cord injuries.

acronym

attended

See this reference:

Please update your spelling on this page and on other pages where it is referenced!

Can you provide a specific example? Also, please describe the artifact to the reader.

Acronym alert

Start a new sentence.

start a new sentence.

the movie

What does this mean?

the movie "Frozen".

Break down this very long sentence. Also, assume someone who is blind is reading this portfolio. Provide a synopsis of the image below in your narrative.

See previous comment about acronyms. Spell out followed by parentheses but only if you will continue to use the acronym on this page.

Reword. This sounds a lot like what you'd write in a medical record. Assume the reader is your hiring manager who is not a therapist.

worked.

Try to refrain from repeatedly using the phrase "I had the opportunity"

Grammar. Reword so that you don't repeat the word "rather"

This is jargon. How else could you describe this?

Break this down. Also the word "suffered" may come across as patronizing even though I am sure it is not your intent.

Perhaps I worked with a lady with alcoholism and depression. She had an extreme fear...

Break down this sentence. Nice reflection.

Break down this very long sentence into shorter components.

were

Acronym--please spell out. If you intend to use this acronym again on this page, then place the acronym in parentheses.

Provide an example as evidence.

was not

reword

Good information, but can you shorten the sentence or break it down? Shorter sentences are easier to understand and are more readable. Can you provide a specific example from your FW experience?

with whom

therapy

Very nice

was

to improve

create

Reword. Perhaps..

treat people of all ages from diverse backgrounds, ethnicities, religions, political ideologies, and other walks of life.

Not sure I said it correctly either.

Describe the artifact below

See previous comment

Please simplify, and see if you can find a synonym for the word "time" so that you don't repeat it so frequently in the sentence

treatment session

planned activity

not sure what you meant to convey here--not sure this clause is needed either

remove word extra as it sounds like it was unnecessary, extraneous

other rehab team member

a nurse

instances

acronym

write in past tense, since this was an experience in the past.

Please rewrite for clarity

grammar. What do you mean by "we do"?

hyphenate

Where is this quote taken from? Please cite and reference accordingly

Please provide a synopsis and assume the reader does not have the time to read the image below, or assume the reader is blind and cannot tell what's in the image. Summarize.

s

s

why is the font size different?

were you at a rotation or a site?

see previous comment

see previous comment

see previous comment

which setting?

Please break down this long sentence.

At my or During my

you didn't treat the caseload. You treated the children on your caseload

five

by

At my

nice.

Describe the artifact

Check language. Did you observe documentation skills? Various ways of documentation skills?

acronym

with

you didn't work with a diagnosis--you worked with a person who had a diagnosis

Break down this long sentence

acronym

Acronym

reviewed the charts of

did--past tense

word order...review charts

Perhaps you strive for? The words you chose don't make sense.

I really like how you use specific examples for many of these criteria.

safely

if you use the word "even", it implies a comparison with something else, so it needs to be followed by the clause beginning with the word "than". Try to rework this sentence.

person

meant

Break down this sentence.

this clause is misplaced.

three

created

bags and bins

When you use a slash, it slows down the reader and makes it more halting and more difficult to understand.

Is there another way to say this? The sentence doesn't sound right.

don't understand

see previous comment

this is an incomplete sentence.

Acronym alert. For every new page in your portfolio, make sure you first spell out the acronym. If you intend to use it further along on this page, then immediately place in parentheses.

Separate sentence.

see previous comment about repetition of the phrase "I had the opportunity"

place comma here

remove comma

separate words

third

Lovely. I really enjoyed scrolling through the pictures (of course I stopped at the Route 66 half marathon picture and was envious)!! I also enjoyed reading this introduction. You write well.

Was the physical therapy assistant conducting an evaluation?

asked

assistance (not assist)

he reported that

see prev

OK to place parentheses if you will use the abbreviation moving forward, otherwise, discard

past tense

This is a very generic statement. Can you rather provide a specific example of something that happened on FW, to illustrate this point?

Good reflection

I am not sure this example is relevant to the criterion of providing constructive and timely feedback. Please provide a more appropriate example.

See comment following--I am not sure you addressed it in your revisions.

Please reword

change to I am

which one below?

This is also a frame of reference and needs to be capitalized

See comment about parentheses

Parentheses only needed if you are going to use this abbreviation going forward. Did you?

Here, as well as on the previous page, you don't need to capitalize Frame of Reference. Just the actual one by name (e.g., Rehabilitative, Biomechanical, Developmental, etc.)

Please provide a specific example

Not sure I get what this means. Please explain. You use the word "point" in the next session, and it is confusing.

Please provide a specific example for this section.

remove word

please correct the end of the sentence. See previous comments.

..."and what they experienced". Remove the word "have"

past tense

past tense

past tense

I found (remove the word "have")

I am still worried that this sentence comes across as unintentionally accusatory. What I hear when I read this, is that you didn't see the FOR being used. However, Pamela, that doesn't mean that they weren't being used. Perhaps the therapist weren't explicit about it, but I am pretty confident they knew what they were doing--and had a goal in mind. Remember, the Biomechanical FoR seeks improvements in physical functions (ROM, strength, etc.) and the Rehabilitative FoR seeks improvements in ability to engage in occupations. I have no doubt that the therapists were working towards those ends. There must be a better way you can phrase this. I made a suggestion previously.

Lovely reflection. Thank you.

Please provide a synopsis of the image below. Pretend someone with low vision is screen-reading your portfolio and cannot access the picture of the discussion board post.

The only reason to place the abbreviation in parentheses is if you are going to use it again moving forward. Did you?

This is a great reflection!

Is there a better way to phrase this? Ultimately, you are providing wound care to a patient with a wound, not to the wound itself.