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  1. Apr 2020
    1. the confidence in himself

      Please rewrite this sentence--possibly break it up, e.g.,

      All he needed was someone to provide him with confidence and reassurance. With this renewed outlook, he realized he could go back to doing things for himself, even with his new disability.

    2. lways constantly

      remove one of these words; they have the same meaning

    3. me",

      All the questions should end with a question mark

    4. w

      capitalize

    5. a

      capitalize

    6. me "h

      me, "How

    7. i'

      capitalize

    8. listic natur

      What a wonderful reflection!

    9. opportunity

      can you find a synonym, so that you don't repeat the same word in the sentence?

    10. s.

      Can you provide one example?

    11. s. 

      Very nice!

    12. F

      lower case

    13. During inpatient rehab, I also incorporated various non-verbal outlets of communicating with patients during my treatment sessions including: providing educational handouts on fall prevention and energy conservation strategies, and educational videos.

      Please break this sentence into two parts for clarity.

    14. outlets of communicating

      outlets? do you mean methods or strategies?

    15. regarding my recommendation for the patient's appropriate discharge recommendation

      Please reword to limit repetition of the same word in a sentence.

    16. patient

      Amanda, decide if you want to use the word patient or client, and be consistent throughout the portfolio.

    17. was able to have

      had--I had the opportunity

    18. CNAs

      spell this out before using an abbreviation; place it in parentheses if you will use it again on this page.

    19. el

      Very nice!

    20. english

      Capitalize

    21. are

      Since this time has passed, please use past tense throughout the portfolio. Thanks!

    1. love O

      Lovely!

    2. for him

      You don't need these words.

    3. tee

      You did a FABULOUS job!

    4. dence.

      Kudos to you, Courtney! Well done!

    5. SLUMS

      Please spell this out the first time prior to using the abbreviation. A hiring manager who is not an OT may read this one day!

    6. nd to be very succ

      Please summarize the discussion board post and reflect on why you chose this as evidence for meeting this criterion.

    7. e risk

      What was at stake?

    8. patient

      Coutney, please choose either client or patient for this entire portfolio for consistency.

    9. From seeing burned clients be painfully bathed and bleached to prevent infection to stretching clients’ skin in order to increase mobility and functionality, I was forced to hold in my emotions and reactions to ensure that the clients were as comfortable as possible.

      Please break this down into shorter sentences.

    10. at.

      Please give an example based on a level 2 FW experience.

    11. is

      Since this time has already passed, please write in past tense.

    12. cover

      past tense

    13. ead

      led

    14. w

      You have me hanging to the edge of my seat!

    15. ffe

      Congratulations Courtney! Mazel Tov!

    16. n me

      Wonderful!

    17. d

      That's great!

    18. It was during the transition from me being an observer during the sessions to be being in charge of the sessions.

      Is this a complete sentence? What happended during the transition?

    19. ngs. 

      Can you give an example?

    20. in having

      to have

    21. on my

      I improved my ability (remove the word on)

    22. in

      about

    1. Furthermore, the rehab manager at the Firefighter Burn Center at Regional One posted relevant and new research articles to an online dropbox to which all rehab members have access to. When I saw that she added an article, I made sure to at least review the title and abstract. This gave me an idea of the information available for later use. 

      This was previously reported

    2. s

      apostrophe

    3. e

      plural

    4. spreading

      to spread

    5. The first being the SMA Southern Region Burn Conference mentioned above.

      This is not a complete sentence. Please revise, or connect to the prior sentence.

    6. nue

      Will you please bold this heading to stand out and conform to the formatting of the other ones?

    7. as!

      Congratulations! Go ahead and say more. This was the first time our department of OT was represented at this conference....etc. etc. etc.

    8. d

      a research poster

    9. als

      Tell me more! How does this relate to the criterion? Why did you choose this excerpt?

    10. lan

      Please provide some type of reflection related to that feedback and relate it to the criterion.

    11. ractice

      This is a good artifact to support the criterion, but you need to provide a rationale for why you chose this piece of evidence. Please reflect, summarize to the reader. I cannot comment on the actual discussion board post since that was previously graded in another course.

    1. as possibl

      Agree! Please provide an example based on your FW2 experience.

    2. I think that it is important to be professional at all times in the workplace. It is because of this that I ensure I am dressed and groomed professionally and that my conversations with both co-workers and clients are appropriate. While it is important to speak at the level of the client and to use vocabulary he/she will understand, it is still essential to do this professionally. I do not believe it is appropriate to use curse words or offensive language even if the client uses it. I do not believe it is professional to speak of my personal life if it is not relevant to the client and his/her situation. Throughout both of my fieldwork experiences, I was able to practice these behaviors and grow to appreciate the tact required to remain professional at all times. 

      This is a replica of the previous two criteria

    3. I think that it is important to be professional at all times in the workplace. It is because of this that I ensure I am dressed and groomed professionally and that my conversations with both co-workers and clients are appropriate. While it is important to speak at the level of the client and to use vocabulary he/she will understand, it is still essential to do this professionally. I do not believe it is appropriate to use curse words or offensive language even if the client uses it. I do not believe it is professional to speak of my personal life if it is not relevant to the client and his/her situation. Throughout both of my fieldwork experiences, I was able to practice these behaviors and grow to appreciate the tact required to remain professional at all times.

      This is a replica of the previous criteria.

    4. mes

      Can you give an example?

    5. re

      Can you provide a specific example?

    6. and/o

      Choose one--it flows better.

    7. t

      I am so proud of you. Do you have a photo? What about sharing the title of your presentation, along with a synopsis of its contents?

    8. or him

      Please provide a reflection, or a summary as to why you chose this discussion board post and how it relates to this criterion.

    1. uffs.

      This is wonderful! How does it relate to application of theory?

    2. practice.

      This is a heartwarming post. However, it is an artifact from another course--one on which I cannot comment. Please summarize in the form of a reflection why you chose this post and how it connects to the criterion. (It is a perfect example).

    3. pe

      Can you provide an example of this from your FW2?

    4. nts. 

      Do you have an example of this from one of your fieldwork 2 experiences?

    5. lead

      led

    1. lients

      Throughout the portfolio, decide if you want to refer to clients or patients, and stay consistent!

    2. are unable

      cannot

    3. how addr

      to

    4. provided

      did you provide it to him, or show it to him? I am asking because you use this verb frequently in this paragraph.

    5. provided

      gave

    6. evaluated

      determined?

    7. ect

      etc.

    8. wheelchair bound.

      I have heard from a wheelchair user, who is also a physiatrist, that he abhors the term "wheelchair bound". He says he is by no means bound, cuffed, or otherwise tied to a wheelchair.

    9. dere

      See prior comments. It's like referring to an illustration or a table or a figure. You first write about what that illustration contains, and the reader can choose to either look at it for more information, or move on.

    10. rapy

      Beautiful!

    11. ere.

      This is a beautiful reflection

    12. low an

      See previous comment

    13. ee belo

      Lauren, please summarize these blog posts that were already submitted for a grade. You can certainly leave the blog posts for reference, but the reader (e.g., a hiring manager or a recruiter) may not want to go through the "raw data".

    14. d t

      a team?

    15. te

      Should this be in past tense?

    16. luati

      Lovely; succinctly written.

    1. See my blog post

      Please summarize

    2. me

      Very nice

    3. as the patient was going to be a total transfer

      Please revise this part of the sentence or remove it completely. The patient was not a transfer. The patient required assistance to transfer.

    4. demonstrating more than normal confusion

      more confused than normal

    5. and get into place

      this part of the sentence can be removed for clarity

    6. lined the wheelchair up

      positioned the wheelchair

    7. evaluated

      determined

    8. mod

      Please provide a reflective summary of the post.

    9. me take steps tow

      Please write a brief reflection, summary of the discussion board post.

    10. Finally, I educated the staff about about the time the splint should be left on for and the skin checks that should happen before and after the splint application

      Please revise the sentence for clarity

    11. nt

      Please revise this sentence to make sense!

    12. ain w

      maintain what?

    13. the geriatric in t

      missing words!

    14. ce

      Lovely

    15. at-risk children

      first-person language

    16. in mi

      in the Midsouth.

    1. continue to develop participation in continuing education

      Is there a clearer way to convey this?

    2. ur mentor wanted to learn more about the evidence that supported the Sequential Oral Sensory (SOS) feeding approach and  if they should continue using this feeding therapy in their pediatric outpatient clinic based on available research.

      Break this down into shorter sentences for clarity.

    3. pply.

      apply what?

    4. is

      it ?

    5. presented to

      presented what?

    6. arge

      Great reflection!

    7. See th

      Please write a reflective summary.

    8. ead the

      Please summarize, provide a reflection

    9. se

      Great

    10. ents and gestures which often become smaller, unsteady, and affects their ability to get around and complete functional tasks.

      Reword this sentence to make sense.

    11. changes in an individual's brain affects 

      grammar

      changes affect or change affects

    1. for

      in

    2. tient over t

      Please summarize.

    3. marketing chair

      capitalize

    4. masters

      Master's or Master-level

    5. tivities of daily livi

      Please summarize.

    6. dual goals

      Please summarize

    7. that

      and demonstrated that

    8. as mom

      a

    9. Even though she gave me the opportunity to express my discomfort and request her presence, I decided this was a good opportunity to build upon what I had learned and challenge myself to meet with the patient's family along with the other interdisciplinary team.

      Please break this sentence down into shorter ones. Thanks

    10. w

      You have a lot for which to be proud!

    11. ioner. 

      I am curious to know what the goals for his treatment were. Sometimes clients with dementia cannot express their own goals and prefer to isolate and retreat. What were his caregivers wishes? I am curious to know what the point of OT was for him.

    12. When a professional meets a patient in that state of elevation, it only serves to exasperate it.

      Can you find a better way to phrase this?

    13. elevated

      Is this a common term? Is the person elevated, or their mood?

    14. ,

      Looks like there's an extra space here

    15. is

      was

    16. remind

      reminded

    17. It depends on the response of the therapist to either increase or diffuse tension.

      Can you reword this? Perhaps...

      The therapist, in her response, can increase or diffuse the tension

      Or something along those lines.

    18. This

      It

    19. I’m learning to feel more comfortable with this learning process required to make this leap and portray confidence with the skills I do have.

      Please break down this complex sentence!

    20. ce

      Lovely pictures! Thank you for sharing!

    21. help

      past tense

    22. lend

      lead?

    23. words and explains

      past tense

    24. reference

      refer to

    25. was receiving

      received

    26. reference

      can you find a synonym so that you don't repeat the same word in the sentence?

    27. knowledge of a growth area

      do you mean this was an identified weakness?

    28. acquisition to

      not sure I understand what you mean. Do you mean flexibility to learn multiple templates and note-taking systems?

    29. is

      was

    30. Field Work Educator

      In the previous criterion you gave the acronym in parentheses but you didn't capitalize the title--keep them consistent! You can use the acronym here.

    31. In addition to this, I studied other resources at home including things to evaluate in those who had undergone a stroke and reviewed manual muscle testing, range of motion measurements, and assessments such as the Berg Balance Scale.

      Can you break down this sentence? It's long and difficult to follow.

    32. with

      in

    33. correlated

      related

    34. one of the

      a

    35. COTA

      Should this also be plural, i.e., COTAs? Not sure.

    1. hospital

      This is an example of a good summary of what you wrote on your discussion board.

    2. "During this level II fieldwork, I was faced with an ethical dilemma in regards to the coronavirus. While the hospital knew the virus was beginning to spread nationally, it had not reached Arkansas yet. However, they still had to make the difficult decision to suspend students' clinical rotations in hopes of reducing spread of the virus to patients, families, and necessary staff. This was very upsetting for me and difficult to imagine not finishing out my rotation for many reasons. Not only was I worried about not completing the fieldwork for graduation purposes, but I loved this clinical site and really didn't want to leave. I still had two weeks left for the rotation, but I trusted my supervisors that they understood the need for students to cease direct clinical care at the site far more than I understood. It was then revealed that there were confirmed cases at the hospital. While this is a national pandemic, I didn't realize the full severity of the virus until it reached my clinical site."

      See previous comments about using long quotes of your own work.

    3. the credit we deserve as OTs

      Can you give an example?

    4. locally

      is this word necessary?

    5. for

      remove the word for

    6. as the

      I served in the role of Vice Chair of the R....

    7. "While on this rotation at Arkansas Childrens Hospital, I have been on the burn unit for 4 weeks. While being on this unit, I have recognized the distinct value OT has with these clients. Often, many providers turn to the OT first when considering grafting needs, splinting needs, positioning of the patient, surgery, and more before looking for further assistance. However, this has not always been the case with OTs in burn rehabilitation. My supervisor explained how she often had to fight for her role on the unit until she earned the respect of the team and they understood her unique training with not only anatomy and physiology of the body but how this new injury can affect ADLs, social skills, and psychological care. I have taken this information and used it when I treat my clients with burn injuries. I am better able to explain why we do what we do during treatment sessions and relate that back to their overall function and how they will reintegrate back into the community. This has definitely been an interesting population to work with as I have learned to consider how this new injury will completely change their life from now on and how every aspect of the OTPF can be utilized to ensure that this person is able to be as independent as possible and return to functional living."

      Please provide a summary, and correct the formatting.

    8. sticky notes

      can you think of a generic way to describe this?

    9. narios

      Great example!

    10. care.

      Great example!

    11. reaching

      achieving better range of motion

    12. tilize

      use

    13. pros

      benefits

    14. cons

      dangers, or risks

    15. IF

      acronym

    16. her

      unnecessary word

    17. She had previously had to have multiple

      She had previously undergone multiple digit amputations

    18. BUE, and BLE.

      Acronym alert!

    19. While at the facility, I came across a client with schizophrenia who expressed he had feelings for me. This particular client had returned to the unit a few times in the matter of a couple weeks. During his last admission, the patient told an interviewer that he had gotten an OT student pregnant and he was going to marry her. As I was reading the patient's chart and came across this section, I was startled at the delusions this man was experiencing and very anxious about how to handle this situation. Our professors in the past have given us many options on how to handle a situation like this, however, all situations are different and the types of clients who express these feelings will be different. In this case, the patient has a mental health diagnosis with serious delusions and I needed to make sure I was very clear with our therapist-client relationship boundaries. During his stay, the patient asked to sit down with me and continued on to tell me how he felt about me. I immediately responded by explaining that I was part of his medical team and that any sort of relationship between the two of us outside of the hospital would be inappropriate as my job was to ensure he was receiving the best health care possible while he was at the facility. After this conversation, the first thing I did was notify my supervisor. She expressed that she was glad that I came to her with this and if the patient continued to escalate she would help me figure out the next step."

      See my previous comment about using your previous work and formatting it.

    20. I encountered clients with varying mental health difficulties

      I am not sure this is relevant information.

    21. c

      Nice!

    22. ire

      past tense

    23. are

      were

    24. My feelings towards this fieldwork experience felt very different from my last. At the start of my last rotation, I felt very nervous and unprepared for what was to come in those 12 weeks. However, at the start of this rotation, I felt eager and excited to learn all that there was to offer at this site. I had improved my confidence in my skill set from my first rotation and just couldn't wait to see where it led while at this pediatric hospital/unit. With this excitement, I wanted to set very high, yet achievable, goals for myself to ensure my preparedness to transition to entry-level practitioner at the end of the rotation. I met my short term goals while I was on the burn unit of the hospital where I fabricated 2 different types of splints independently, completed independent research over several articles for an evidence-based practice project, and was able to complete treatment plans with assistance from my supervisor. For the remainder of my rotation, I was located on the CVICU, where the clients were in more critical condition. For my long-term goals, I wanted to focus on completing each day as if I was an independent practitioner. This goal would come to be very difficult to reach as I was only able to spend two weeks on the unit, due to the way students rotate between units as well as the scare of the coronavirus. This unit also requires very specialized clinical practices, such as feeding with very critical infants. While I did not feel independent on the CVICU, I did feel independent while on other units of the hospital. For example, while on the inpatient rehab unit of the hospital, I was able to independently complete thorough chart review, plan treatment sessions, write appropriate goals, write evaluation and reassessment documentation, interact with families and staff on the unit, as well as determine if treatment sessions were appropriate based on lab values or prior procedures completed. I felt very confident in my skills on this unit that I could participate as an independent occupational therapy practitioner." 

      Consider summarizing this, since you already were graded on this discussion board post. Instead of reposting it here, it is better if you make it optional for the reviewer (or anyone reading this portfolio going forward) by putting this entire quote into a box, as you might a figure or an illustration. That's the purpose of the block quote in APA. At the very least please reformat according to APA.

    25. client's

      apostrophe use: one or many?

    26. students are expected to know only be knowledgable i

      ???

    27. these

      remove this word

    28. have

      remove

    29. is

      Nice!

    30. have

      see previous comment

    31. have

      see prior comment

    32. have

      remove the word have

    33. and weakness

      did you also use your weaknesses? How so?

    34. bring my

      draw on my

    35. while in the field that majority of settings uti

      Please reword. Did you mean...

      During my clinical experiences I recognized that most of the sites used a team-based approach ?

    36. my need to find common ground in conflict, finding potential and opportunity in all situations, and my drive to solve problems for everyday situations in the field not only promoted me to become a better student practitioner, but also a better team player.

      Please correct the grammar in this sentence and revise the sentence structure for clarity.

    37. I learned to utilized

      grammar

    38. we

      I

    39. have seen

      saw

    40. the

      to support the

    41. have been

      was

    42. ione

      Can you give an example of how it was useful? Did you have an opportunity to modify your behavior in response to feedback?

    43. is form

      The signature is visible and potentially recognizable!

    44. really

      Unnecessary word

    45. If there was a case, that I had been working with the client more often than physical therapy, I would be able to provide insight on activities the client enjoys while also including any ideas or activities they needed to work on during the session

      Is this hypothetical, or did this happen? If the latter, please provide an example and rewrite for clarity. Thanks!

    46. ursing

      are you talking about professions or professionals? Nursing is a profession, while SLPs are professionals...be aware not to mix the two