spoke on behalf of their unique scope of practice
Please find another way to state this
spoke on behalf of their unique scope of practice
Please find another way to state this
each discipline came together
the separate disciplines came together
will
would
ADL
acronym alert, see previous comments
is
was
nt's
Singular or plural? Keep consistent with previous use of the word.
s
apostrphe
ocial worker and case manager
singluar or plural? You mentioned the others as plural, so perhaps for consistency keep the same grammar
r
comma
virus
Another great reflection!
safest
safe or the safest
PPE
acronym
COVID-19
see previous comment
v
a
NOTA, AOTA, and SOTA
See previous comment.
have
was and continue to be
By educating patients on this act and community resources, it allows the patients to know their rights and reach out to organizations that may help them when reintegrating out into the community
Please revise this sentence for clarity. Otherwise great reflection here!
ADA
Acronym/abbreviation alert! Please spell this out the first time you use it, and only parenthesize the acronym if you will use it again in this page. Otherwise, just leave it written out so that the reader doesn't have to try figure out what this means.
sions.
Lovely reflection!
has
remove word
NDT
See previous comment
on clients
Do you do this on clients? Is that the best way to describe it? Please rephrase for clarity and accuracy.
PROM
acronym alert! Spell out the acronym first and parenthesize it after, only if you are going to use it again in this page. If not, just spell it out and don't worry about putting the acronym/abbreviation in parentheses. Consider that the person reading this may have no background in rehabilitation.
.
punctuation--should be a comma
ending
recommended
de
aid
have
Since this time has passed, please use past tense.
s topi
Please summarize why you used this discussion board post as your artifact. You need to include a reflection, not just the evidence. Providing a screenshot of the discussion board is akin to presenting raw data in a study. You need to give an analysis of why you chose this particular piece of evidence.
main jobs as occupational therapists is to find what motivates that perso
Please consider rewriting this for clarity.
the confidence in himself
Please rewrite this sentence--possibly break it up, e.g.,
All he needed was someone to provide him with confidence and reassurance. With this renewed outlook, he realized he could go back to doing things for himself, even with his new disability.
lways constantly
remove one of these words; they have the same meaning
me",
All the questions should end with a question mark
w
capitalize
a
capitalize
me "h
me, "How
i'
capitalize
listic natur
What a wonderful reflection!
opportunity
can you find a synonym, so that you don't repeat the same word in the sentence?
s.
Can you provide one example?
s.
Very nice!
F
lower case
During inpatient rehab, I also incorporated various non-verbal outlets of communicating with patients during my treatment sessions including: providing educational handouts on fall prevention and energy conservation strategies, and educational videos.
Please break this sentence into two parts for clarity.
outlets of communicating
outlets? do you mean methods or strategies?
regarding my recommendation for the patient's appropriate discharge recommendation
Please reword to limit repetition of the same word in a sentence.
patient
Amanda, decide if you want to use the word patient or client, and be consistent throughout the portfolio.
was able to have
had--I had the opportunity
CNAs
spell this out before using an abbreviation; place it in parentheses if you will use it again on this page.
el
Very nice!
english
Capitalize
are
Since this time has passed, please use past tense throughout the portfolio. Thanks!
e
Lovely
rs
use an apostrophe, same as Master's
s
Lovely
a re
as a reflection
love O
Lovely!
for him
You don't need these words.
tee
You did a FABULOUS job!
dence.
Kudos to you, Courtney! Well done!
SLUMS
Please spell this out the first time prior to using the abbreviation. A hiring manager who is not an OT may read this one day!
nd to be very succ
Please summarize the discussion board post and reflect on why you chose this as evidence for meeting this criterion.
e risk
What was at stake?
patient
Coutney, please choose either client or patient for this entire portfolio for consistency.
From seeing burned clients be painfully bathed and bleached to prevent infection to stretching clients’ skin in order to increase mobility and functionality, I was forced to hold in my emotions and reactions to ensure that the clients were as comfortable as possible.
Please break this down into shorter sentences.
at.
Please give an example based on a level 2 FW experience.
is
Since this time has already passed, please write in past tense.
cover
past tense
ead
led
w
You have me hanging to the edge of my seat!
ffe
Congratulations Courtney! Mazel Tov!
n me
Wonderful!
d
That's great!
It was during the transition from me being an observer during the sessions to be being in charge of the sessions.
Is this a complete sentence? What happended during the transition?
ngs.
Can you give an example?
in having
to have
on my
I improved my ability (remove the word on)
in
about
Furthermore, the rehab manager at the Firefighter Burn Center at Regional One posted relevant and new research articles to an online dropbox to which all rehab members have access to. When I saw that she added an article, I made sure to at least review the title and abstract. This gave me an idea of the information available for later use.
This was previously reported
s
apostrophe
e
plural
spreading
to spread
The first being the SMA Southern Region Burn Conference mentioned above.
This is not a complete sentence. Please revise, or connect to the prior sentence.
nue
Will you please bold this heading to stand out and conform to the formatting of the other ones?
as!
Congratulations! Go ahead and say more. This was the first time our department of OT was represented at this conference....etc. etc. etc.
d
a research poster
als
Tell me more! How does this relate to the criterion? Why did you choose this excerpt?
lan
Please provide some type of reflection related to that feedback and relate it to the criterion.
ractice
This is a good artifact to support the criterion, but you need to provide a rationale for why you chose this piece of evidence. Please reflect, summarize to the reader. I cannot comment on the actual discussion board post since that was previously graded in another course.
as possibl
Agree! Please provide an example based on your FW2 experience.
I think that it is important to be professional at all times in the workplace. It is because of this that I ensure I am dressed and groomed professionally and that my conversations with both co-workers and clients are appropriate. While it is important to speak at the level of the client and to use vocabulary he/she will understand, it is still essential to do this professionally. I do not believe it is appropriate to use curse words or offensive language even if the client uses it. I do not believe it is professional to speak of my personal life if it is not relevant to the client and his/her situation. Throughout both of my fieldwork experiences, I was able to practice these behaviors and grow to appreciate the tact required to remain professional at all times.
This is a replica of the previous two criteria
I think that it is important to be professional at all times in the workplace. It is because of this that I ensure I am dressed and groomed professionally and that my conversations with both co-workers and clients are appropriate. While it is important to speak at the level of the client and to use vocabulary he/she will understand, it is still essential to do this professionally. I do not believe it is appropriate to use curse words or offensive language even if the client uses it. I do not believe it is professional to speak of my personal life if it is not relevant to the client and his/her situation. Throughout both of my fieldwork experiences, I was able to practice these behaviors and grow to appreciate the tact required to remain professional at all times.
This is a replica of the previous criteria.
mes
Can you give an example?
re
Can you provide a specific example?
and/o
Choose one--it flows better.
t
I am so proud of you. Do you have a photo? What about sharing the title of your presentation, along with a synopsis of its contents?
or him
Please provide a reflection, or a summary as to why you chose this discussion board post and how it relates to this criterion.
uffs.
This is wonderful! How does it relate to application of theory?
practice.
This is a heartwarming post. However, it is an artifact from another course--one on which I cannot comment. Please summarize in the form of a reflection why you chose this post and how it connects to the criterion. (It is a perfect example).
pe
Can you provide an example of this from your FW2?
nts.
Do you have an example of this from one of your fieldwork 2 experiences?
lead
led
lients
Throughout the portfolio, decide if you want to refer to clients or patients, and stay consistent!
are unable
cannot
how addr
to
provided
did you provide it to him, or show it to him? I am asking because you use this verb frequently in this paragraph.
provided
gave
evaluated
determined?
ect
etc.
wheelchair bound.
I have heard from a wheelchair user, who is also a physiatrist, that he abhors the term "wheelchair bound". He says he is by no means bound, cuffed, or otherwise tied to a wheelchair.
dere
See prior comments. It's like referring to an illustration or a table or a figure. You first write about what that illustration contains, and the reader can choose to either look at it for more information, or move on.
rapy
Beautiful!
ere.
This is a beautiful reflection
low an
See previous comment
ee belo
Lauren, please summarize these blog posts that were already submitted for a grade. You can certainly leave the blog posts for reference, but the reader (e.g., a hiring manager or a recruiter) may not want to go through the "raw data".
d t
a team?
te
Should this be in past tense?
luati
Lovely; succinctly written.
ffer.
This is lovely and so cheerful!
E
Looks great!
See my blog post
Please summarize
me
Very nice
as the patient was going to be a total transfer
Please revise this part of the sentence or remove it completely. The patient was not a transfer. The patient required assistance to transfer.
demonstrating more than normal confusion
more confused than normal
and get into place
this part of the sentence can be removed for clarity
lined the wheelchair up
positioned the wheelchair
evaluated
determined
mod
Please provide a reflective summary of the post.
me take steps tow
Please write a brief reflection, summary of the discussion board post.
Finally, I educated the staff about about the time the splint should be left on for and the skin checks that should happen before and after the splint application
Please revise the sentence for clarity
nt
Please revise this sentence to make sense!
ain w
maintain what?
the geriatric in t
missing words!
ce
Lovely
at-risk children
first-person language
in mi
in the Midsouth.
continue to develop participation in continuing education
Is there a clearer way to convey this?
ur mentor wanted to learn more about the evidence that supported the Sequential Oral Sensory (SOS) feeding approach and if they should continue using this feeding therapy in their pediatric outpatient clinic based on available research.
Break this down into shorter sentences for clarity.
pply.
apply what?
is
it ?
presented to
presented what?
arge
Great reflection!
See th
Please write a reflective summary.
ead the
Please summarize, provide a reflection
se
Great
ents and gestures which often become smaller, unsteady, and affects their ability to get around and complete functional tasks.
Reword this sentence to make sense.
changes in an individual's brain affects
grammar
changes affect or change affects
for
in
tient over t
Please summarize.
marketing chair
capitalize
masters
Master's or Master-level
tivities of daily livi
Please summarize.
dual goals
Please summarize
that
and demonstrated that
as mom
a
Even though she gave me the opportunity to express my discomfort and request her presence, I decided this was a good opportunity to build upon what I had learned and challenge myself to meet with the patient's family along with the other interdisciplinary team.
Please break this sentence down into shorter ones. Thanks
w
You have a lot for which to be proud!
ioner.
I am curious to know what the goals for his treatment were. Sometimes clients with dementia cannot express their own goals and prefer to isolate and retreat. What were his caregivers wishes? I am curious to know what the point of OT was for him.
When a professional meets a patient in that state of elevation, it only serves to exasperate it.
Can you find a better way to phrase this?
elevated
Is this a common term? Is the person elevated, or their mood?
,
Looks like there's an extra space here
is
was
remind
reminded
It depends on the response of the therapist to either increase or diffuse tension.
Can you reword this? Perhaps...
The therapist, in her response, can increase or diffuse the tension
Or something along those lines.
This
It
I’m learning to feel more comfortable with this learning process required to make this leap and portray confidence with the skills I do have.
Please break down this complex sentence!
ce
Lovely pictures! Thank you for sharing!
help
past tense
lend
lead?
words and explains
past tense
reference
refer to
was receiving
received
reference
can you find a synonym so that you don't repeat the same word in the sentence?
knowledge of a growth area
do you mean this was an identified weakness?
acquisition to
not sure I understand what you mean. Do you mean flexibility to learn multiple templates and note-taking systems?
is
was
Field Work Educator
In the previous criterion you gave the acronym in parentheses but you didn't capitalize the title--keep them consistent! You can use the acronym here.
In addition to this, I studied other resources at home including things to evaluate in those who had undergone a stroke and reviewed manual muscle testing, range of motion measurements, and assessments such as the Berg Balance Scale.
Can you break down this sentence? It's long and difficult to follow.
with
in
correlated
related
one of the
a
COTA
Should this also be plural, i.e., COTAs? Not sure.
ME
Love this, particularly the slide show!
e
Where? Memphis? Martin? Chatt? Knox?
more!
Lovely and cheerful landing page!
hospital
This is an example of a good summary of what you wrote on your discussion board.
"During this level II fieldwork, I was faced with an ethical dilemma in regards to the coronavirus. While the hospital knew the virus was beginning to spread nationally, it had not reached Arkansas yet. However, they still had to make the difficult decision to suspend students' clinical rotations in hopes of reducing spread of the virus to patients, families, and necessary staff. This was very upsetting for me and difficult to imagine not finishing out my rotation for many reasons. Not only was I worried about not completing the fieldwork for graduation purposes, but I loved this clinical site and really didn't want to leave. I still had two weeks left for the rotation, but I trusted my supervisors that they understood the need for students to cease direct clinical care at the site far more than I understood. It was then revealed that there were confirmed cases at the hospital. While this is a national pandemic, I didn't realize the full severity of the virus until it reached my clinical site."
See previous comments about using long quotes of your own work.
the credit we deserve as OTs
Can you give an example?
locally
is this word necessary?
for
remove the word for
as the
I served in the role of Vice Chair of the R....
"While on this rotation at Arkansas Childrens Hospital, I have been on the burn unit for 4 weeks. While being on this unit, I have recognized the distinct value OT has with these clients. Often, many providers turn to the OT first when considering grafting needs, splinting needs, positioning of the patient, surgery, and more before looking for further assistance. However, this has not always been the case with OTs in burn rehabilitation. My supervisor explained how she often had to fight for her role on the unit until she earned the respect of the team and they understood her unique training with not only anatomy and physiology of the body but how this new injury can affect ADLs, social skills, and psychological care. I have taken this information and used it when I treat my clients with burn injuries. I am better able to explain why we do what we do during treatment sessions and relate that back to their overall function and how they will reintegrate back into the community. This has definitely been an interesting population to work with as I have learned to consider how this new injury will completely change their life from now on and how every aspect of the OTPF can be utilized to ensure that this person is able to be as independent as possible and return to functional living."
Please provide a summary, and correct the formatting.
sticky notes
can you think of a generic way to describe this?
narios
Great example!
care.
Great example!
reaching
achieving better range of motion
tilize
use
pros
benefits
cons
dangers, or risks
IF
acronym
her
unnecessary word
She had previously had to have multiple
She had previously undergone multiple digit amputations