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  1. Apr 2020
    1. life

      lives

    2. o

      comma

    3. A

      is this word meant to be capitalized?

    4. k

      comma

    5. in

      organization

    6. w inco

      low-income

    7. girls

      language

    8. which they are proud of

      of which they were proud

    9. ell rec

      hyphenate

    10. self exploration and in turn self confidence

      I don't see the connection. Please elaborate or rephrase.

    11. providing

      to provide

    12. as well as an example of occupations they can incorporate throughout the rest of their week

      Please rephrase for clarity

    13. 3

      See APA guidelines for numbers in text.

    14. girls

      language

    15. de

      tense

    16. girls

      language

    17. in

      delete word

    18. girls

      "Girls" comes across as condescending

    19. high and low

      What is this?

    20. check in in

      Did you mean to write check-in?

    21. for

      delete word

    22. girls

      were they girls, teens, or mothers? Would it be appropriate to call a mother, "girl"? Is there a better word? students?

    23. end d

      past tense

    24. lead

      led? held? Please keep the sentence in the past, as this time has already passed.

    25. wrapped up/wound up a

      Please try to limit or completely avoid the use of a slash. It is very distracting and halts the flow of the sentence. Choose one or the other.

    26. health and disease/disability prevention.

      supporting one's health and disease? This doesn't make sense. Please revise.

    27. of mine

      implied--delete.

    28. vs.

      please write out the abbreviation

    29. their

      Is this word necessary?

    30. For example collaborating with others, gaining understanding of a client’s occupational engagement, implementing effective interventions, inspiring confidence in others, advocating for clients, representing OT’s perspective in inter-professional situations, contributing to the knowledge base of OT through presenting and/or teaching, and giving constructive feedback.

      This is not a complete sentence.

    31. any of the other tenets addressed throughout the rest of these prompts fall under the umbrella of communication in that one will not be successful in these areas if they are unable to effectively communicate.

      I don't understand this sentence. Is it necessary? If so, please revise for clarity.

    32. I agree. Can you possibly write this in first person, rather than a generalized statement?

    33. was somewhat familiar to me, however, it was not similar to my experience growing up

      I really like how you contrast your own life experiences with the locations in which you found yourself in FW2; but perhaps try to vary the way you write about it--the sentences sound too similar. Was this your intention?

    34. messages

      non-verbal

    35. increase my awareness around

      pay more attention to my use of language

    36. growing up in the city in low income housing and/or underserved communities was not my experience growing up

      Revise for clarity

  2. hannahphillipsot.weebly.com hannahphillipsot.weebly.com
    1. 9 .

      Sensational!

    2. r

      Parenthesize UTHSC here, because you use the acronym further down the page.

    1. me. 

      Good job!

    2. we can always take advantage of our resources and our researching skills to further educate ourselves on topics we are interested in learning more about

      please revise for clarity

    3. a practitioner,  we

      a practitioner= singular Change "we" to I and keep it singular

    4. use to

      remove these words

    5. s

      remove comma

    6. nts

      How exciting! I am jealous!

    7. time

      find a different word here or at the beginning of the sentence

    8. always

      always is synonymous with throughout

    9. oster. 

      This was an outstanding poster presentation, I learned a lot too!

    10. a lot about research and how to conduct my own research w

      rephrase

    11. s

      apostrophe

    12. t are able

      missing word

    13. , you c

      I recommend you change this to a personal reflection and use first-person language

    14. t ce

      hyphen

    15. d b

      hyphenate

    16. great

      opinion

    17. hemiparetic patien

      first-person language

    18. Functional Electrical Stimulation, M

      none of these should be capitalized

    19. post

      after

    20. t

      hyphen

    21. ce b

      hyphenate

    22. hyphen

    23. VA

      acronym alert

    24. scenario gave a

      was of a

    25. and planning and researching

      word order, grammar

    26. te

      delete word

    27. ve

      delete word

    28. hos

      Please post an image without red and blue markups of errors!

    29. assignment

      redundant word

    30. inpatient re

      Please see previous comment about using discussion board posts.

    31. other opinions and points of views from other disciplines

      rewrite this part for clarity

    32. :

      remove colon

    33. CEU

      acronym alert

    1. self ego

      Not sure what this means

    2. or to prevent an unsafe behavior

      not sure how this applies here. Please revise this entire sentence for clarity.

    3. always come

      remove repeated word, and use past tense

    4. self promotion

      not sure how this applies--perhaps explain more? Or rewrite

    5. n the shower

      bathe

    6. my kind patients

      they

    7. n

      Lovely. Go Amanda!

    8. attend

      can you find another word so as not to repeat the same verb in the sentence?

    9. any service activities we were participating in and any upcoming events we were having

      our service activities and upcoming events.

    10. UTHSCs

      acronym and apostrophe

    11. the

      remove word

    12. TNOTA

      acronym alert!

    13. fo

      to teach him; to build within him the capacity; etc.

    14. enough

      delete word

    15. ak

      made

    16. s'

      singluar or plural?

    17. gets

      got

    18. knows

      knew

    19. :

      remove colon

    20. everything there is to know

      Is this true? Do you know everything there is to know?

    21. one

      a

    22. our

      the

    23. out

      our

    24. ent.

      Nice example

    25. comma

    26. functional

      delete the word. Is there a non-functional type of reach?

    27. s

      apostrophe

    28. ,

      remove comma

    29. nt

      session

    30. her

      the dog

    31. hat

      the

    32. CEU

      acronym alert!

    33. ions. 

      Great reflection. This is one of my favorite treatments in the inpatient rehab setting--for just about anyone. Most of the time the patients have been lying on their backs for weeks. There is so much therapeutic benefit to lying in prone. I am so pleased to hear this!

    34. s

      on my caseload

    35. my

      remove word--they didn't belong to you

    36. to them

      delete words

    37. than

      from what

    38. ike

      delete word

    39. By getting them into different positions such as prone, or quadruped on the mat, it really helped facilitate weight bearing through all four extremities and increased core and scapular strength needed for bed mobility and ADLs

      Please revise this long sentence for clarity and accuracy.

    40. sis. 

      Nice reflection

    41. that

      delete word

    42. what the situation may be

      the situation.

    43. ns

      apostrophe

    44. everyday

      Nice

    45. We always had an ongoing playful competition between our PT we were paired with and my educator and I involving who could be the patients "favorite therapist

      I think I understand what you are trying to get at; can you please reword for clarity

    46. you are

      I was

    47. spinal cord injury patients

      first person language

    48. TR/

      Very nice!

    49. F

      f

    50. c

      pieces of

    51. ts were in that we treated,

      the patients that we treated were in

    52. ar! 

      Fabulous!

    53. have

      delete word

    54. ce

      experienced similar things as I did.

    55. erstand

      understood where I was coming from

    56. o grateful that I had these students to go through this experienc

      grateful I went through this experience with these students

    57. s

      apostrophe

    58. socializing with each other, and just enjoyed

      socializing, enjoying (use same tense)

    59. past

      delete word

    60. daily.

      redundant

    61. everyda

      separate words

    62. colon

    63. ss

      addresses

    64. F

      f

    65. going into evaluations

      Is there another way to say this? Would a hiring manager who was not a therapist understand this phrase?

    66. evaluation

      remove this word or find a different one, so as not to repeat the same word. Perhaps "cheat sheet"?

    67. MMT, ROM, o

      Abbreviation alert!

    68. Fieldwork

      Lovely! Perhaps order them with FW A first followed by FW B.

    69. have

      remove

    70. can

      could

    71. want

      wanted

    72. e

      comma

    73. am

      was

    74. s,

      remove comma

    75. lways immediately receptive

      Can you find another way to say this?

    76. nal need

      I agree!

    77. in order to prevent my patients from losing trust in me and in order to preserve my overall confidence level

      Turn this into a new sentence and reword.

    78. provide

      providing

    79. affects

      affected

    80. the patient lose trust in me

      Is this a fact, or is this your projection/fear? Did a patient ever say this to you? I completely understand your point of view, but this is conjecture. Perhaps there is a better way to describe this, rather than making an assumption about the patient's response?

    81. often times

      remove these words, they are redundant since you already said "sometimes" earlier in the sentence.

    82. when I am away from the patient

      Please find another way to say this--I think you mean that you didn't want to receive the feedback in front of the patient, right?

    83. d g

      my

    1. do. 

      Very nice. What was your educator's reponse?

    2. ,

      semi-colon

    3. c

      needed to

    4. e

      Please summarize the discussion board post--it is fine to refer to it, but I can't comment on it since it was already graded for another course.

    5. ,

      remove comma

    6. s

      insert comma

    7. ,

      remove comma

    8. in

      to

    9. vely. 

      Nice reflection. Example?

    10. different diagnoses and conditions

      first person language

    11. SCI

      see previous comment about abbreviations/acronyms

    12. everyday

      separate words

    13. d bel

      Nice

    14. F

      f

    15. and completed

      completed what?

    16. ,

      semi-colon

    17. spinal cord injury patients

      Can you provide a specific example rather than making a generalized statement? You can start the sentence by including the phrase, "For example, ..."

    18. spoke on behalf of their unique  scope of practice

      Please find another way to state this

    19. each discipline came together

      the separate disciplines came together

    20. will

      would

    21. ADL

      acronym alert, see previous comments

    22. is

      was

    23. nt's

      Singular or plural? Keep consistent with previous use of the word.

    24. s

      apostrphe

    25. ocial worker and case manager

      singluar or plural? You mentioned the others as plural, so perhaps for consistency keep the same grammar

    26. r

      comma

    27. virus

      Another great reflection!

    28. safest

      safe or the safest

    29. PPE

      acronym

    30. COVID-19 

      see previous comment

    31. v

      a

    32. NOTA, AOTA, and SOTA

      See previous comment.

    33. have

      was and continue to be

    34. By educating patients on this act and community resources,  it allows the patients to know their rights and reach out to organizations that may help them when reintegrating out into the community

      Please revise this sentence for clarity. Otherwise great reflection here!

    35. ADA

      Acronym/abbreviation alert! Please spell this out the first time you use it, and only parenthesize the acronym if you will use it again in this page. Otherwise, just leave it written out so that the reader doesn't have to try figure out what this means.

    1. sions. 

      Lovely reflection!

    2. has

      remove word

    3. NDT

      See previous comment

    4. on clients

      Do you do this on clients? Is that the best way to describe it? Please rephrase for clarity and accuracy.

    5. PROM

      acronym alert! Spell out the acronym first and parenthesize it after, only if you are going to use it again in this page. If not, just spell it out and don't worry about putting the acronym/abbreviation in parentheses. Consider that the person reading this may have no background in rehabilitation.

    6. .

      punctuation--should be a comma

    7. ending

      recommended

    8. de

      aid

    9. have

      Since this time has passed, please use past tense.

    10. s topi

      Please summarize why you used this discussion board post as your artifact. You need to include a reflection, not just the evidence. Providing a screenshot of the discussion board is akin to presenting raw data in a study. You need to give an analysis of why you chose this particular piece of evidence.

    11. main jobs as occupational therapists is to find what motivates that perso

      Please consider rewriting this for clarity.