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  1. Apr 2020
    1. t's

      Remove apostrophe

    2. effective and safest

      either change the word safest to safe or preferably reorder the words: ...continue practicing the safest and most effective guidelines in order...etc.

    1. demic

      End quotation marks come before the period. Alternatively, you can get rid of the quotation marks and italicize the word.

    2. "

      See previous comment about quotation marks in block quotes.

    3. on."

      Nice work. For block quotations, you remove the quotation marks. See APA guidelines.

    4. but I trusted my supervisors that they understood the need for students to cease direct clinical care at the site far more than I understood

      ...but I trusted that my supervisors at the site understood the need for students to cease direct clinical care far better than I could.

    5. in

      in skills or of skills?

    6. n m

      Please correct the acronym FWE

    7. career.

      Very nice!

    1. patients

      patients or clients?

    2. m

      Incorrect word use--please remove the word "for"

    3. "

      See previous

    4. ep."

      See previous comment on quotation marks.

    5. esses to f

      Did you draw on your weaknesses? Or recognize them?

    6. VMI and the MVPT.

      Spell these out please.

    7. with different

      clients with different diagnoses--please use person-first language

    8. must be ready to adapt

      True! How does this statement relate to this criterion?

      Can you include a specific example of constructive feedback--not patient status?

    1. During this time I would identify important aspects of the article to determine the reliability and validity of the article to be able to relate it to my specific setting.

      Please rework this sentence.

    2. , w

      Please correct this

    1. rs

      Very nice!

    2. 10 year old

      hyphenate--check APA

    3. -li

      Sometimes you hypenate zip-line and sometimes you don't--please make this consistent in this section. Thanks!

    4. was

      were--resources and equipment are plural

    5. fe

      lives, since you are using plural

    6. o

      please change to past tense since this has already occured.

    7. There were several instances that I took feedback from my fieldwork educators and was intentional in looking for opportunities to change my treatment techniques or behaviors based on what they told me.

      Please revise the sentence for clarity.

    8. but have time to comfortably ask my fieldwork educator questions away from the families to guide my evaluations.

      Revise word order: "...time to ask...questions to guide my evaluations away from the families".

    1. or

      I would recommend that in parentheses you give a brief explanation of what a GG code is. Alternatively, you can remove this reference altogether and simply state the client's ability.

    2. s. I believe this can make a big difference in cultivating hope for getting back to participating in meaningful and healthy occupation

      This is a lovely reflection.

    3. past

      remove this word. It is implied in the phrases "medical history and social history".

    1. ing. I wo

      Very nice!

    2. selected for the session

      planned.

    3. e got ho

      This is much better and easier to read now.

    4. Almost every session that I had with him during his stay in inpatient rehabilitation, we continued to practice hemi-dressing techniques.

      For clarity, please place the second part of the sentence up front. "We continued.....almost every session during his stay".

    5. because

      Is "because" the correct word here?

    6. ..

      Remove one period.

    7. he stroke had also caused deficits in his short term memory and attention causing difficulties with learning new techniques for getting dressed independently.

      You said one thing caused another, then that thing caused something else. It's a hard sentence to follow. Consider breaking down this long sentence into two separate short ones.

    8. at home.

      You can remove these words.

    9. I learned to communicate with more simple and direct statements along with using very concrete words as I found this to be more effective with my clients that were non-verbal.

      Please rephrase this for clarity.

    10. I got the pleasure of working

      I want to caution you about using the phrase "I got the pleasure". When people come in for therapy, they are seeking help and may be in pain. Your statement could potentially be misconstrued and twisted to imply that you derived pleasure from someone else's pain. It will not detract from your APDE if you remove this clause.

    1. value

      Lovely. Can you provide an example from your level 2 FW experiences?

    2. /s

      slash

    3. sts/to

      remove slash

    4. Rep

      not capitalized; spell it out please

    5. ups:

      Nice

    6. To my delight, both groups demonstrated engagement and enthusiasm when it came to selecting affirmations which they related to and even making up their own.

      Rewrite for clarity.

    7. This can be a “hard sell” to teens who may not have a positive self-concept or self-confidence because it may feel silly to say these things or they may not believe some of the statements to be true (yet).

      Please break down this sentence into shorter ones for clarity.

    8. riting/reading/stating positive

      remove slashes. Use commas instead.

    9. lf ta

      hyphenate

    10. ens/te

      and

    11. this

      which?

    12. o le

      hyphenate

    13. lead

      led

    14. S

      SPECTACULAR! This is great!

    15. ties/skills

      choose one or both, remove slash

    16. Sort ser

      citation

    17. Activity Card Sort

      citation needed

    18. ort

      assessment decks.

    19. etting.

      Lovely example!

    20. nd even addressed thorough wiping.

      addressed what? Please rephrase for clarity

    21. parameter

      perimeter

    22. very good

      being an attentive listener

    23. client to

      which one?

    24. this client

      him

    25. ryout aq

      two words

    26. Au

      remove capitalization

    27. greatly

      how do you know this?

    28. fi

      spelling

    29. , and

      Period. Start a new sentence.

    30. Cerebral Palsy w

      remove capitalization

    31. I had the unique opportunity

      Find another phrase or remove it. You can say, On my second...I observed and practiced aquatic therapy...

    32. cate/col

      choose one

    33. d/

      slash

    34. at he does not

      past tense

    35. port/advo

      choose one or both

    36. a huge

      please use professional language

    37. ven being in t

      how do you know this?

    38. So t

      The mother

    39. To make matters more complicated, the parents have a history of domestic violence

      Rewrite for clarity and remove bias.

    40. Unfortunately, the parents do not see eye to eye on the services their son should receive

      Remove bias. Use past tense.

    41. just

      remove bias. State the facts without including your judgment. You can say, the student and his mother attended the interview. The father, who had 50% custody, was not present.

    42. served as a wonderfully involved advocate

      this is very biased language. Please reword.

    43. services

      where?

    44. ,

      period.

    45. dle scho

      hyphenate

    46. activities dire

      capitalize

    47. known as “the president”

      by whom? Was this person indeed known as the President, or just by this client? Is this relevant? Be careful not to sound like you are making fun of the client.

    48. activities director

      capitalize

    49. activities director of the skilled nursing facility as the president and

      Use appropriate capitalization please

    50. ltzheimer

      spelling

    51. p

      capitalize

    52. activities direc

      capitalize

    53. find a man (who we will call Mr. X)

      This does not sound professional. I would suggest rewording as follows: I went to find Mr. Jones in the cafeteria (not his real name to respect his confidentiality) to let him know I was ready....etc. I walked up to him and said, "Hello Mr. Jones", etc...

    54. nt

      Nice. Is there an example?

    55. reviewing

      word choice?

    56. this is something

      what is?

    57. nds

      Lovely, well done!

    58. 1

      APA

    59. dwork:

      Summarize for the reader.

    60. was looking to develop my skills in

      wanted to develop.

    61. hat

      Very nice reflection

    62. I had the opportunity

      Perhaps try to find another phrase or eliminate it. You use it very often throughout the portfolio.

    63. ns/situa

      choose one

    64. hold space for our clients

      What does this phrase mean?

    65. hold space

      this is jargon. Please describe using lay language.

    66. ur

      my

    67. our

      my

    68. W

      Who?

    69. what she was talking about

      who was talking? The student or the educator? Please be more specific

    70. SAT

      acronym alert! Please write this out and place the acronym in parentheses if you are going to continue using it

    71. unfortunat

      remove bias

    72. In these situations, it’s not always necessary to find/point out the silver lining or put a positive spin on it.

      Please reword

    73. at-risk youth

      Please use first-person language, and specify what type of risk

    74. ,

      remove

    75. ty bas

      hyphenate

    76. ns/deadli

      get rid of the slash. Choose one.

    77. is

      was?

    78. A specific instance in which I gave constructive and timely feedback was in a conversation in which I felt that expectations of me as a student were unclear and therefore I was letting the other individual down when I had not even realized they had this specific expectation.

      I am having difficulty following this sentence. Can you reword for clarity please?

    1. hera

      Nice!

    2. The picture below is of a technique used as a cue to prevent foot drop practiced on my foot:

      The picture below is of a technique practiced on my foot, of tape used as a cue to prevent food drop.

    3. T

      t

    4. tape children

      is there a better way to phrase this? Did you tape children? Or did you learn to apply tape to support various anatomical structures? Please be more selective in your word choices.

    5. See question 9 under Leader Change Agent for video presentation of my final project of my second Level II Fieldwork experience, question 11 under Leader Change Agent for presentation on attending the 2019 annual AOTA Conference as the Assembly of Student Delegates Representative, and question 2 under ​Ethically Grounded Professional with Strong OT Identity for information on evidence-based practice research project

      Imagine that a hiring manager was reading this portfolio. Would you want to send that person to different locations in your portfolio? Would you want to go hunting after information on other pages if you were the reader? I recommend you briefly summarize these in this section.

    6. therap

      Please describe it using words, for those who might have trouble viewing this image.

    7. isk yo

      See previous comment

    8. dent

      Since this discussion board post was graded for another course, I can't comment on it in the context of this portfolio. It is okay to use the image of the discussion board as an artifact, but you have to provide a summary and reflection of why this example shows that you met this criterion.

    9. UTHSC

      Some of these are relevant to the criterion and others are courses that you were required for the program. I would recommend that you provide only those for which you went above and beyond, that were not requirements of your didactic curriculum.

    10. AOTA CE's Health Through Horticulture: Gardening as an Occupational Therapy Intervention & Local IS Global: Occupational Therapy in U.S. Refugee Communicates and Abroad

      I can't tell if this is a sentence or a caption.

    11. ed/trai

      slash

    1. d from

      Can you provide an example based on your experiences in level 2 FW?

    2. My favorite part of the project was helping the young girl to pick out fabric and make her own curtains to go around her top bunk bed with the goal of decreasing symptoms of anxiety by providing a space of her own away from her younger siblings

      Please break down this sentence into shorter parts for clarity.

    3. ontaking

      ? do you mean undertaking?

    4. wonderful

      be careful using subjective language. I am certain it felt good to provide a clean and safe space; try to use objective language. Imagine if the person reading this was the client.

    5. 5

      APA

    6. (2015). American Journal of Occupational Therapy, 69(Suppl. 3

      Please use correct APA formatting

    7. s’s,

      Remove apostrophe and additional letter

    8. ne on one

      hyphenate

    9. Bart

      I believe this should be ALL CAPS since it is an acronym

    10. (SF

      where have you described this acronym before?

    11. ow

      hyphenate

    12. ity ba

      hyphenate

    13. rapist.

      Nice!

    14. ts/pr

      see previous comment

    15. eal

      Lovely!

    16. /s

      see previous comments

    17. n/c

      see previous comments

    18. erests/occupa

      choose one of these words

    19. e

      past tense

    20. n’s,

      Why is there an apostrophe here?

    21. rap

      what kind?

    22. Wrap aro

      hyphen

    23. wrap around

      Wrap-around should be hyphenated.

    24. ptomology

      symptoms, or episode of

    25. 8 year old

      hyphenate

    26. .,

      check APA formatting guidelines.

    27. t cardi

      see prior comment

    28. g

      assessment? There seems to be a missing word here

    29. st cardiac

      hyphenate

    30. set out to delve

      delved

    31. pre and post

      hyphenate pre- and post-

    32. appropriate assess

      The word "appropriate" seems out of context. Would one ever select an inappropriate assessment?

    33. partnered

      Use a synonym, since you already used this verb in the preceding sentence. Alternatively, change the preceding sentence.

    34. partner with Le

      Please revise for accuracy. Did you partner with the hospital, or with a practitioner?

    35. these youth.

      Please use a different description so as not to sound condescending.

    36. orting/advoc

      see previous comments

    37. who

      that

    38. 6 w

      hyphenate

    39. due to losing her phone

      this doesn't make sense in the context of the first part of the sentence, please rephrase

    40. y

      hyphenate

    41. As

      Since

    42. 5

      see previous comment, refer to APA

    43. w i

      hyphenate, and be consistent throughout portfolio

    1. See question 9

      Question 9?

    2. s

      comma

    3. for

      delete word

    4. In my project, I was discussing the use of a Pediatric Activity Card Sort (ACS) as an assessment (or an intervention) and the ways in which administering the ACS provides an opportunity for the clinician to ask follow up questions about the child’s level of independence and identifying strengths or barriers to their engagement.

      Please break down this sentence to shorter parts.

    5. tor

      Please provide an example from your FW2 experiences--what did you do to earn this praise from your FW educator?

    6. The following blog post is an example of an assignment in which I considered the client’s motivation while aiming to maximize her functional independence:

      Please find an example from your level 2 FW experiences. This assignment was already graded and is not relevant to this APDE.

    7. on both ends

      what do you mean by this?

    8. essions/grou

      choose one. See prior comment

    9. alendar/desk/resources

      see previous comment regarding slash use in sentences, which halts the reader and stops the flow of reading.

    10. instil

      American spelling is instill.

    11. e

      Can you provide an example to support this statement?

    12. To elaborate,

      Is this an elaboration, or did you mean to write something like "therefore" or "thus"?

    13. remain

      am constantly

    14. (verbal & non-verbal)

      Rather than use parentheses, can you possibly rewrite this, e.g., "Effective verbal and non-verbal communication skills are essential...etc."

    15. n

      plural

    16. ’s

      one or many?