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  1. Mar 2021
    1. By discussing with the client an appropriate outlet to deal with his emotional frustrations, we were empowering the client to attempt a new way to express his emotions in a more functional, acceptable, and appropriate manner. 

      Please reword. Please also provide a brief synopsis for those who don't want to read the image below.

    2. hroughout my time as a student, one situation that was difficulty to encounter was communicating to clients and family members that a client is not safe to drive after a traumatic brain injury at this time due to Tennessee State Law.

      Please break down this sentence, which is too long.

    3. body part due to his ports

      Rewrite this sentence. Perhaps,

      Because of his ports, he needed to use a different washcloth to clean each part of his body to prevent cross-contamination or infection

    4. I have enjoyed learning from the feedback I received from my fieldwork educators. I enjoyed learning through asking questions to gain knowledge from my educators, and seeking feedback on my performance.

      These two sentences are very long--can you rephrase more simply or succinctly?

    1. I had the privilege of listening to her and a speech therapist present on their findings

      Were they presenting their findings, or were they reporting what they had learned to their colleagues?

    2. gathered research with classmates in order to work together to write the Critically Appraised Topic regarding the use of splints in treating radial nerve palsy in adults

      Please simplify

    3. I provided information regarding safety modifications for their home environment such as removing rugs, increasing lighting, grab bars, and adaptive bathroom equipment based on available research regarding safety.

      Change word order:

      I provided contemporary evidence-based information regarding safety in the home environment, such as removing rugs, increasing lighting, installing grab bars and use of adaptive bathroom equipment.

    1. There is a balance is maintaining client safety, and also wanted to increase the independence of the client and their functional independence scores

      Please reword. Perhaps..

      I needed to balance client safety with facilitating increased independence in mobility. Something along those lines.

    2. Sometimes the decision has to be made if a second assist is needed when transferring a client in order for the client to transfer safely

      Please simplify this sentence, it is very long and wordy. Also, use past tense. Finally, select a different phrase for second assist--it is jargon

    3. Having two therapists working together helped when brainstorming ideas to increase the child’s motivation and participation in order to achieve desired outcomes

      Can you give an example to illustrate?

    4. I had the opportunity to discuss the clients on my caseload during those meetings with the other disciplines

      word order

      I recommend the following:

      During those meetings I discussed the progress of the clients on my caseload.

      Remove the words "had the opportunity" because they are frequently repeated.

    5. I am working to create client-centered interventions for all staff members to use in order to provide benefit to the clients

      Will you be doing this once you graduate, or should you remove this sentence?

    6. This was an organized way for clients to practice identifying dollar bills and coins as well as provide the appropriate amount of money when given an amount

      Rewrite for clarity

    7. hirty minutes later in the day, or we would save some evaluation items for the following day

      How did this relate to advocacy for clients who were neglected or underrepresented?

    8. ecause some of the clients required more assistance in ADLs due to their traumatic brain injury diagnosis, I modified the evaluation process to help advocate for their needs to implement an appropriate evaluation to then provide the best level of care. 

      Please break down this long sentence, it's too long to comprehend.

      You might want to consider positioning this sentence later in the paragraph, because the next sentence paints a good picture of the issue you encountered.

    1. Inspiring confidence is important in order to build a therapeutic relationship with clients and to help maximize function in cl

      Very nice. I like that you described what was in the image of the discussion board below, and it is what I expect from my mentees so that the reader (e.g., a future hiring manager) doesn't have to try and read the image. Basically, by describing what's in the image of the discussion board, you are making it accessible to a reader who can't necessarily see what's in the image (e.g., if someone with low vision was reading the page using a screen reader)

    2. n excerpt from my final performance evaluation from my Level II A fieldwork educator as my evidence for meeting this standard. “Laurel is able to evaluate and analyze all aspects of a patient when completing an assessment in order to determine best course of treatments in order to fully achieve all that the patient needs to.” – Shelby Disler OTR/L

      This is very well written and a good example for this criteria.

    3. t is important to communicate effectively to clients, family members, and staff to help ensure that a client is safe to return home and to increase carryover at home.

      Please provide one example of what you did. Was there a client who was challenging to discharge? What you wrote is wonderful, and has broad generalizations. Make it come to life with an example.

    4. Below is an excerpt from my midterm performance evaluation when working on the brain injury team of an inpatient rehab center.

      Please reflect on a specific example of this criteria, something that happened during your fieldwork.

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    1. s are based on how much time is spent with our clients and the kind of service that is provided. However, even though a client may be receiving occupational therapy and physical therapy services simultaneously, that does not necessarily mean they will be billed for both. It may be more profitable for the institution to do so, but client care and how they are affected is more valuable. If we spend only one unit’s worth of time with the client, instead of charging an occupational and physical therapy treatment/evaluation for each, only one of us will bill for a unit. That way the client is not being unfairly charged for the profit of the institution.

      Past tense. Can you provide a specific example of an instance when this happened during your rotation?

    2. It is not uncommon to have a client not look particularly enthused to see the therapy team walk into the room. Nevertheless, by the end of the session, clients almost always claim they feel better and are glad they participated in the session.

      Past tense, please write your own experience, not a generalization. Please provide an example.

    3. so it is important to help your client’s through it with verbal encouragement and compassion, while simultaneously being mindful of their limitations and boundaries

      separate this sentence from previous

    4. Experiencing negative emotions is inevitable and being able to set aside one’s personal feelings to maintain a professional demeanor will allow one to best serve the client’s needs in the moment

      Can you change this general statement into a personal statement? Changing it to a personal statement shows deeper reflection on the impact of the experience on your own life.

    5. are visitation restrictions, and medical professionals are the extent of socialization the clients receive. Gifting a good laugh or smile is an accomplishment and can make a positive difference in the clients’ day.

      Past tense.

    6. During my free time, I play soccer competitively, read books and poetry, and spend time with loved ones

      Did you do this throughout your rotation? If so, can you state this in past tense, and state that you did these things while on rotation?

    7. owever, in occupational therapy, sometimes the feedback comes from the clients themselves. According to a Google search, feedback can be defined as “information about reactions to a product, a person's performance of a task, etc. which is used as a basis for improvement.” Therefore, a client’s own reaction or performance serves as feedback and imposes moments of self-reflection. Whether done in the moment during a therapy session or after it is over, every interaction can be taken as an opportunity for growth and learning!

      Can you provide an example of an instance in which you received feedback from a client? What happened next?

    1. n occupational therapy, it is virtually universal across settings to use occupation as a means to the end.

      Please elaborate and provide a stronger connection to the previous paragraph and ideas.

    2. In the school system, my supervisor encouraged me to do research and what kind of interventions are evidence-based and which ones are not as well-supported (e.g., hand over hand, weighted vests)

      Please rewrite this sentence for clarity. The examples are good. Please elaborate on what is written in the screenshot.

    1. low I have provided a screenshot of a discussion board describing our justification for billing of services within the school system.​

      Good. However, imagine that someone cannot see the image. Briefly describe what the image is telling the reader (provide a synopsis), so that the reader doesn't have to try to decipher what's in the image.

    2. The principle of nonmaleficence is one that I thought would not be often consciously thought of until I arrived to my acute care setting. Seeing patients in critical conditions after the onset of an illness or injury sometimes means they are experiencing high levels of pain and discomfort. While early mobilization can reap positive benefits, it is more important to consider the client’s level of tolerance and willingness to participate. Otherwise, we are placing a negative impact on the client’s wellbein

      This is a good example to illustrate your points above, but please rewrite in your own voice and use past tense.

    3. During both Level II fieldwork rotations, I took the initiative in not only discussing every session with my supervisor(s), but also made a point to explicitly ask for constructive criticism in order to facilitate my professional growth

      Please simplify or break down this sentence--it is too long.

    4. Fortunately,

      This sounds very judgmental--as if PTs are never mindful of the role of OT. What if the hiring manager reading this portfolio was a PT--how do you think that person would feel reading this statement?

    5. the common impression is that we will be going for a walk and generally moving with therapy during the session.

      Please use past tense, otherwise this statements sounds like a statement of fact, an immutable truth.

    6. ​Part of our evaluations and treatments across settings is educating the client on the role of OT

      Not really part of an evaluation. More of an educational intervention. Please rephrase

    7. I had the opportunity to treat individuals who were homeless, struggled with substance abuse, and even inmates.

      I am certain you didn't mean to, but when you write you "had an opportunity" to treat certain individuals, it can come across as opportunistic. You might be better off with a factual statement, e.g., In the acute care setting I treated patients who are commonly neglected or underrepresented, including those who were homeless, incarcerated, or were substance users.

      Something along those lines. Try to keep it neutral.

    8. ​​Healthcare professionals should implement non-discriminatory practice, including clients within neglected or underrepresented populations.

      Please check grammar and re-write.

    1. owever, in the acute care setting, one can say that the rehabilitative frame of reference is commonly used

      Be careful of using generalized statements of opinion. Consider writing of your experience. To do so, write this sentence in past tense, because this is what you observed. Perhaps... During my acute care rotation, I observed the Rehabilitative Frame of Reference most commonly used....or something along those lines. Also, make sure you Capitalize the Names of the Frames of Reference.