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  1. Apr 2024
  2. paytonljohnston.weebly.com paytonljohnston.weebly.com
    1. observation

      Plural

    2. multitude of diagnoses

      I understand what you are trying to convey but think of person-first language. People with varied diagnoses....etc.

    3. Bachelors

      Singular

    1. ractions.

      Please provide a synopsis

    2. g and buttoning.

      Provide a synopsis. Blur out the name of your classmate.

    3. es. This was an area I wanted to grow in clinical confidence. The lower image shows how I productively grew and developed my therapeutic skills

      Please provide a synopsis

    4. mstack

      Give a little more detail so the reader doesn't have to try reading the "raw data" in the image.

    5. tioners.

      If you were a manager at Erlanger, how would you feel if you came across the image below on the internet?

    1. See post below for details on the integration of theory in clinical practice

      Provide the synopsis of the post here.

    2. cognitive behavioral therapy

      Capitalize name of theory

    3. The image below describes this encounter and how I incorporated a return to work task in our therapy session

      Needs a bit more description and synopsis--otherwise the reader needs to read the image, and you don't want to make the reader have to do that!

    4. M

      No need to capitalize

    5. (ROM)

      Not necessary unless used again on the page (it is not)

    1. erapists.

      Can you think of a specific example in which you used these resources during FW?

    2. s m

      Wonderful example!

    3. ay.

      See previous comments about images of discussion board posts.

    4. I kept a notebook filled with notes and would often confer with my fieldwork educator about the evidence I found and asked their opinion on how they approach different evaluations based on the patient's level of functioning

      Please shorten this.

    1. out the session.

      See previous comments about examples and expectations of using screenshots of your discussion posts.

    2. mor

      Provide a synopsis of the image. Don't expect the reader to have to read through all your discussion board posts for the salient points.

    3. I specified what goal was addressed and whether it needed a different grading so the next session would have a starting point or if a different therapist treated the client, they would have an idea of client participation during treatment session

      Please shorten this sentence. Also, provide an example, as well as a synopsis of the image below.

    4. levels of function.

      This is too general. Please provide a specific example and describe the image.

    5. al need.

      Can you provide a specific example? And explain the image.

    6. lls.

      Please describe what the image is saying.

    7. I fulfilled my commitment by stepping up and getting the kids the treatment they needed despite not being able to have their full time seen by their regular occupational therapist by incorporating them into my other caseload.

      Can you break down this long sentence into shorter sentences please? It's hard tfollow.

    8. milies.

      This is lovely!

    1. overall participation of session

      Grammar

    2. utions.

      See previous comment about providing a specific example.

    3. ow a

      This is general--please provide a specific example.

    4. hey may have about what the session will look like and what my clinical judgement

      This is good, but very general. Please provide a specific example. And please describe the artifact.

    5. with

      unnecessary word

    6. a co-trea

      This is jargon. Is there a better way to phrase this?

    7. re they will be transitioning to (inpatient rehab, skilled nursing facility, palliative care, etc.

      See previous comment

    8. ed

      See previous comment.

    9. nt facility

      Explain what the image is below. Image a person who is blind using a screen reader to access your website. They would not be able to read the image. You need to explain what it is and provide a brief synopsis.

  3. lauraot.weebly.com lauraot.weebly.com
    1. y name is Laura Mendez and I am from Little Rock, Arkansas! I am a second year master's of occupational therapy student and I am approaching my level II fieldwork rotations.

      This is lovely. Consider rewording it to reflect the past tense--by the time you graduate and potentially use this to showcase your achievements to a potential employer, this will be long ago. Also, it is a Master of Occupational Therapy program.

    1. I am a 2nd year maste

      Please update this to reflect the present time. Also, it is a Master of Occupational Therapy degree.

    1. include

      past tense

    2. change

      chance?

    3. Many members in this group are sensory seeking and need to work on something while they are learning about coping skills

      past tense

    4. lead

      past tense

    5. nt’

      not possessive

    6. lient’s f

      not possessive

    7. Min-Mod A fro

      spell out

    8. p’

      not possessive

    9. y are d/c.

      spell out

    10. We had a productive conversation about how his rehab team is working hard to help him and that even though we can’t feel the pain he is feeling, we know he is motivated and trying the hardest he could

      Please use past tense

    11. arised,

      grammar

    12. ling him I have been a student here for eight weeks, he reported that he thought I had been working here and reported I had the confidence and attitude of an OT practitioner.

      Great. Please write in past tense.

    13. nd make s

      past tense

    14. . I answer client’s and

      past tense

    15. Even though I would some time after fieldwork planning groups and individual interventions

      Grammar

    16. goals

      You already provided this as an example in another section. Can you be more specific with something you worked on, aside from documentation?

    17. my strengths for the week

      Please rephrase. Confusing.

    18. ang

      spelling

    19. was Max A

      The patient required maximal assistance. The patient wasn't maximal assistance.

    20. y providing this feedback, I am ensuring the client’s safety and that they are able to get the most out of their individual or group th

      Write in past tense please.

    21. I also have as

      Use past tense.

    22. I have corrected

      Use past tense

    23. nt’

      Not possessive

    1. CEU

      spell out

    2. EBP

      spell out

    3. ided.

      Please be more specific about how the spinning wheel related to the specific criteria of contributing to the knowledge base of OT practice.

    4. orks.

      Please provide a specific example to illustrate.

    5. LB dressing at d/c (wearing d

      spell out

    6. I made sure to center my group interventions based on the client’s goals to ensure that they gained coping skills, anger management, problem solving, identifying triggers, and community based skills based on client factors and performance skills.

      Please rephrase for clarity and try to avoid repetitive words, e.g., made sure & ensure; coping skills & performance skills & community based skills. It is difficult to follow this sentence.

    7. nt’s

      not possessive

    8. NAMI and SAMHSA, to

      spell out

    9. rvention.

      Give an example of a credible source--e.g., a reference.

    10. is is a pi

      In my browser, the picture appears above the number 1, before the description.

    11. DME

      spell out

    1. t will need at discharge

      past tense

    2. educate t

      past tense

    3. While at Regional One, a client reported that he was going to sell his medication once he was discharged. I educated him on that being illegal and he reported that he was joking with me. I did not want to take the chance, so I reported this news to my educator. She reported that the rehab team, including the pharmacist and doctor, was aware and that this was not the first time he mentioned this. Katie Heismann, OTR/L reports "Rachel adheres to AOTA's code of ethics and also adheres to any safety protocols."

      can you find a synonym for the verb "report"? You use it repetitively in this section.

    4. was

      were

    5. clients and to put the

      she wanted you to put them on personal items, or did not want you to do that? I don't understand the syntax.

    6. ’s

      not possessive

    7. clien

      Give example. This is very broad and vague.

    8. or’

      not possessive

    9. nt’s

      not possessive

    10. CGT

      ?

    11. rs

      Nice

    12. SNF

      See previous comments about acronyms

    13. ADL

      spell out before using for the first time

    14. I have been able to communicate

      Write in past tense.

    15. se of the activity.

      What you described here does not relate to the professional community, but rather to your patients. The prompt is about your colleagues in the profession.

    16. gave

      is this the right verb?

    17. ADL

      spell out

    18. GTs, nurses, and RT to

      spell out. Don't know what these mean.

    19. LMHS

      See previous comments about abbreviations. When used the first time on a page, spell out before placing in parentheses, ONLY if you are going to use it again on then page. Otherwise don't bother with the abbreviation in parentheses.

    1. rou

      Nice!

    2. ps

      Nice!

    3. cator.

      See previous comment

    4. R/L.

      Please provide a brief synopsis of the contents of the image.

    5. cked up all of the rods and that I did minimal effort to help ensure she felt successful and to maintain our therapeutic relationship.

      This is a nice reflection but does not answer the prompt about application of theory. What theory did you use to design your intervention?

    6. each domain works together to positively or negatively impact health

      This is also a bit confusing. Perhaps a picture or diagram of the 8 dimensions of wellness would help here.

    7. otivation and attendance in group decreased,

      Was this for the particular client, or in general?

    8. One client was feeling discouraged one week and felt as though she would never get discharged and that she learned all the skills in OT.

      This is a long sentence that confused me, especially the final clause about learning skills in OT. Please rewrite for clarity.

    9. aw the jar in the therapy room as well as the clients

      Word order. This is a lovely activity.

    10. they

      who?

    11. promote activity to promote

      grammar--promote to promote

    12. ELMHS

      Spell out. If used again, place acronym in parentheses.

    13. ROH

      Spell out before using acronym

  4. Apr 2023
  5. chubbardot.weebly.com chubbardot.weebly.com
    1. Bachelor of science

      The entire name of the degree needs to be capitalized

    1. kids

      "this kid" "our kids" --comes off casual, unprofessional, and almost condescending. It can also become dehumanizing. Be more sensitive in this paragraph. It's a great story.

  6. chubbardot.weebly.com chubbardot.weebly.com
    1. e

      Add a space before Level 1 FW experience

      Under professional work experience, write out technician

  7. Mar 2023
  8. apthefutureot.weebly.com apthefutureot.weebly.com
    1. independent way

      is independence the goal? or meaningful engagement? Just something to think about. Not everyone wants to be independent in all occupations--there is often a trade-off between the energy required and expended to perform something independently versus saving the energy for something more important

  9. Apr 2022
    1. selves

      Nice

    2. t

      plural

    3. we would like to evaluate him for our services

      he could benefit from OT services

    4. once I graduate

      place these words after "I hope"

    5. les

      past tense

    6. would not benefit myself.

      did not benefit me

    7. as able to provide

      gave

    8. t

      plural

    9. with

      in

    10. g

      comma

    11. up

      us

    12. to improve his condition

      place this after the words "work on"

    13. ask h

      plural

    14. ss

      lost

    15. specific diagnosis/disability

      perhaps state: having an illness or experiencing a traumatic event can be

    16. ist

      plural

    17. eekly.

      This is fantastic! Such a cute picture!

    18. you

      I

    19. the way I did

      my

    20. able to be

      delete

    21. d re

      were

    22. would even do

      He even did a little dance

    23. on it

      on it was

    24. for the next time we saw him

      place this at the end of the sentence, and drop "for"

    25. was able to talk

      talked

    26. from

      after

    27. She would advocate with the medical team on research and study’s done for patients on the vents and early intervention therapy.

      Rephrase

    28. and low sedations

      this should come after the words "early intervention"

    29. with

      throughout

    30. show

      demonstrate

    31. ’s

      the position of the apostrophe when plural is after the s

    32. most

      most or all? I can't think of a single profession where it is not vital to behave professionally--can you?

    33. a

      delete

    34. since being in the ICU can be a serious situation

      it always is a serious situation....and you already stated this in the first sentence.

    35. e

      plural

    36. by

      through

    37. an intimidating

      an intimidating what?

    38. once I begin practicing as an occupational therapist

      place this at the end of the sentence

    39. the most

      as much as possible

    40. to positively impact my weeks

      please clarify or rephrase--I am unclear what this means

    41. To be occupational therapist, I feel like we have a passion to help people and most of the time we take those struggles home with us. I know how important it is to balance your work life and personal life. I know that it is hard to leave those struggles at work once you get home, but it is important to focus on yourself and your loved ones just like your patients.

      Change these to first-person language. Use "I" statements. Speak about yourself, not others

    42. throughout my rotations

      Either remove this or place it at the beginning of the sentence.

    43. as a

      as this was a

    44. p grow my therapeutic use of self.

      what do you mean?

    45. n

      without being asked

    46. I know how important it is to help them without being asked

      delete--you just stated this in the previous sentence

    47. I was able to use my strength as a servant

      Please rephrase

    48. as well as writing up reports

      how is this related in the sentence? Please rephrase for clarity

    49. being a servant

      to avoid misinterpretation, consider rephrasing: and having a service-oriented mindset (or something similar).

    50. after sessions

      place this at the end of the sentence

    51. is helping me develop the skill as I will need it in the future as a practitioner.

      past tense

    52. because she said that she wants

      and said she wanted

    53. is

      past tense

    54. than she provided me

      place this clause after the word "help"

    55. haven’t had

      didn't have

    56. as my instructor for the week

      you had a different instructor each week?