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The acronym in parentheses is unnecessary because you don't use it subsequently on the page.
nglish
Capitalize
Below you can read more about it from my discussion post.
Imagine I'm blind and can't read this....please provide a synopsis.
occupational adaptation framework
Capitalize
I utilized built up handles for his toothbrush and hairbrush s
I used foam and elastic wrapping material to build up the handles of his toothbrush and hairbrush. This made the handles easier for him to grasp.
I would have to adapt all of his ADLs
Place the patient in the center of the intervention. As written, you are the one doing the work.
occupational and adaptation framework
Is this the correct name? Also, please capitalize proper names/nouns.
n this screenshot you can see we collaborated on a prevocational goal with the teacher and parents about how this particular student had difficulty with legible handwriting due to decreased visual motor, fine motor, and attention to task
Please break down this sentence into shorter ones. It is difficult to follow.
related services
related service professionals?
IEP
Spell out and place in parentheses in first instance.
Through this contact, I am able to collaborate with caregivers and family to establish and maintain a balance of occupations during their time at Encompass that
Please rewrite for clarity and include the patient at the center.
bility to contact family and caregivers to create a comprehensive occupational profile
Comprehensive occupational profile of the patient.
FWPE
spell out
I was able to achieve his goal
It would be better worded if you focused on him achieving his goal rather than you achieving his goal for him.
sit to stands
er in class.
Great reflection!
stim
jargon
motor stims
Can you reword for clarity without using jargon?
ent as evide
Beautiful!
e
Capitalize
sc
capitalize
OT
This abbreviation needs to be placed in parentheses prior.
b
Capitalize, Bachelor of Science
The purpose of this website is to show my competence on my level 2 fieldworks
The purpose is to show your professional growth as an OT student towards the program's outcomes.
occupational t
Capitalize since you're naming a program. Master of Occupational Therapy
m
Capitalize
(CVA)
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PT
spell out first instance on page
Parents could choose from either center based groups, which consisted of structured teaching in a positive group learning environment in our clinic at the University of Tennessee, Knoxville's campus, or home based services with a focus on family training in settings natural to the children and family.
Break down into shorter sentences.
experience
plural
focusing on optimal grasp, bimanual coordination, and sensory bins.
Sensory bins is an outlier---in the rest of the sentence you describe specific skills.
PLC delivered developmental therapy services in natural environment settings that are individualized to meet the needs of the child and family.
Is the natural environment setting individualized, or is the developmental therapy service individualized? The structure of the sentence makes it unclear.
At th
This is the first time the acronym appears; where did you place it in parentheses earlier on the page?
elopm
Amazing!
During my
Consider changing to..."While providing..."
practice
Provide a synopsis of the example you wrote about in your discussion board entry.
OTA
Spell out
ssio
Provide a brief synopsis of screenshot.
PLC
See earlier comments about parentheses. Not always necessary if not used later on the page.
them
Very touching! Thanks for sharing.
UTHSC
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OT
spell out and then place in parentheses.
, ce
and
Cen
The "READ MORE" button below doesn't take me anywhere.
ha
spelling
evelopme
I LOVE this layout! And I am happy you didn't continue with ALL CAPS FOR EVERYTHING ELSE!
Allison, make sure you use the same size font for each heading of this section. The size of the font in the first heading is smaller.
In ad
spacing
iliar textur
Please provide a specific example. Also, did the interventions work?
le.W
spacing
who don't have the best prognosi
remove this part of the sentence.
independently
Good example.
it is
plural
established
Check alignment for this entire page--everything is centered, whereas in previous sections it was justified to the left.
PEO
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of
connect fou
Capitaize
UE
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FoR
spell out
ecology of human pe
Capitalize
say
Please provide an example to bring this to life.
yahtzee
Capitalize since it is a name
having left neglect.
Is this an accurate diagnosis? Or did he have a left-sided visual field defect?
azed by his progress, and the therapy team now feels a little better about sending this client home. The picture below is the simulated hallway we created.
Great job!
g hom
Was installation of a handrail an option?
wishes
Please give an example.
DME
spell out
I've been able to incorporate these differences into their plans of care.
Sounds a bit strange. Do you incorporate a difference into a plan of care? Or do you incorporate their lifestyle preferences into their plan of care?
er all w
We encounter people from all walks of life
stan
? staff?
routine
plural
focused on
described
each
Capitalize
I was able to direct the f
I directed the first...
This program was handed down to CNA's and activity directors to implement increased activity and social participation among the residents on the weekends.
Long sentence--break down into shorter ones.
information
Nice. Please provide a specific example.
may have
had
Provi
Increase spacing here to match previous bulleted paragraph, and to separate from previous topic.
who aren't the most reliable historians.
who may not be reliable historians at that point in time.
FWEd
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BP
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frame conducive for slide-boar
called a drop-arm frame
us si
hyphenate
L arm and R l
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WB
jargon--spell out
light
Nice example! Do you have one from FW?
TN
spell out or place in parentheses in the prior paragraph.
too
spelling
UTHSC
spell out the first time on the page
being
Please provide at least one specific example from each FW placement to illustrate the Code of Ethics in action. This paragraph is an introduction to the topic.
so ofte
Please provide at least two examples of advocating for your clients--one from each setting. This paragraph is a good introduction.
ADL's
spell out, not possessive
OT, PT, SLP
spell out
OT
spell out for the first time, then place in parentheses if used subsequently
ght be
hyphenate
extensive
find a synonym. Lengthy?
history
plural
We must abide by each principle during the time we spend with our clients and beyond.
Sometimes there are conflicting principles (like in the situation you described above). Please expand.
AOTA
Please spell out
I was able to respect my boundaries without denying him treatment.
This was indeed an easy fix. You were able to avoid difficult conversations. What would you have done if there wasn't another therapist? Did you treat one of the other therapist's patients to help lessen her caseload? I would like more information on this. There is very little reflection here. Were there other situations you encountered where boundaries were violated? Or did it occur only once in 6 months?
ool ap
hyphenate
Jordan
comma
have
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what we have learned about pediatric interventions in OT school
"...the pediatric interventions we learned about in OT school". Start a new sentence.
have
delete
Monica
Nice synopsis.
diagnoses
and multi diagnoses.
also has
delete
include
past tense
come
past tense
have
delete
has
delete
as well as
Start a new sentence
have
delete
ocus on.
Good article! Did the patient have a prosthetic limb?
ed ba
hypenate
in
with
In the comment below, I used my clinical experience and knowledge on when the best time would be to remove a student from a classroom for a session when it would benefit them.
Please break this down. It's difficult to understand, particularly the end of the sentence.
needs
needed
are able to give
gave
safe for school
hyphenate between each word
over and under reactive
place a hyphen after the words over and under
is
was
and had to research prior to providing
remove
have
delete
staying self-regulated during school hours
self-regulation during school hours.
school appropriate
appropriate for school
have had to provide
provided
Encompass
Fabulous. Good work!
tic tac toe
Tic-Tac-Toe
ended up creating
made
had the opportunity to create
created
her to start remaking connections from her movements to her brain.
"...allow her brain to reform connections resulting from the movement of her affected extremity."
was using
used
where we completed a simple meal prep activity standing
"...where we stood to prepare a meal." End sentence and start a new one.
have
delete
have
delete
have
delete
r
on what?
impact
past tense
as well as p
Start a new sentence.
offered for her through a scholarship I receive
confusing
was able to share
shared
Steven's
not possessive
have had the opportunity to share
delete all of these words and change to "shared"
This really helped my learning and ability as a future occupational therapist as I was able to receive feedback immediately after doing something well or receive constructive feedback on something I needed more help with.
Break this down into shorter sentences.
I implemented the weekly feedback as I felt that went well on my first level II fieldwork
Please rewrite for clarity.
nto my sessions.
Nice synopsis!
have also grown in my ability to give feedback through all of the class evaluations we have done throughout occupational therapy school which has allowed me to more confidently give feedback to my classroom and fieldwork educators in regards to what is most beneficial to me.
Please break this up into shorter sentences.
Another situation I encountered that was stressful
Another stressful situation I encountered was while attempting to administer...
ut this inciden
Please write out a synopsis of the evidence below.
handwriting without tears
Capitalize, as this is the name of the instrument.
why it was unsafe for her to stan
Was it unsafe for her to stand, or was it the hospital policy? Did she have a fall risk assessment in her medical record?
bipolar disorder that was not mentioned in the admission information which explained why she acted this way.
Can you really say the reason she acted that way was due to being bipolar? Is it not possible, she was irritable following surgery, not having bathed for several days, being in an unfamiliar environment, feeling exposed and vulnerable without clothing, etc.? I think it's important you found out about her additional diagnosis, but be cautious about making inferences. Would you write this in the medical record?
get the client changed into more comfortable clothes
This makes it sounds as though you did all of the work and the patient was entirely passive. How can you word it to convey patient participation?
a patient with
remove
diagnosis
plural: diagnoses
As we are in the healthcare field
Unnecessary part of the sentence.
rationale
rational
UTHSC
Spell out the first time on the page, followed by parentheses.
therapists
Imagine I could not access the images below--describe what they are about.
Below I have attached a discussion post I wrote about my experience with advocacy while placed at Memphis-Shelby County Schools.
Place this sentence after the first paragraph where you discuss advocating for pediatric clients.
bout how
Start a new sentence: I explained how...
nce
End sentence and start a new one.
at that point
These words are redundant.
s as they a
Start a new sentence.
The most ethical treatments for occupational therapists to provide in the schools is to collaborate with the teacher to provide suggestions to support a student's learning as well as pushing in to the classroom to provide suggestions to the student and teacher based on the student's performance of the classroom activity.
Please break this down into two or even three sentences.
procession
processing?
clinic base
insert a hyphen
s therapists, we legally did all we could do by providing education to the family as he was past his length of stay date and discharging him into the least restrictive environ
This too is a very long and difficult to understand sentence. Break it down.
Eventually, he ended up being discharged due to having an outside appointment and his family was required to pick him up from his appointment so he was able to discharge home
Break up this sentence to make it easier to read. Eventually, he ended up being discharged due to having an outside appointment. His family was required....
have seen
saw
AOTA
Kindly spell out
set my boundary to
This part of the sentence is redundant.
School
Schools? (plural?)
to the cohort following mine as I believed that it was something important for them to recognize and understand prior to fieldwork
Break this long sentence into two shorter ones.
presented
gave
Sometimes we have to encounter very hard things and we need to set boundaries for ourself to maintain in order to protect our own mental health
Difficult sentence to follow--please shorten for clarity.
st job.
Summarize artifacts below.
I appreciated my fieldwork educator taking the time out to give me written notes to look into as it will help refine me for when I am entry level, as I want to bring out the best of my clinician abilities
Rewrite for clarity.
ROM
Reason for parentheses?
TNOTA
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ciplinary
discipline
This workshop consisted of Q&A's from other speech language pathologists (SLPs) and OT's in the area that served for the pediatric community and utilized feeding therapy for their clients
Very difficult sentence to understand--please break it down into shorter sentences.
of me
It's customary to place yourself last in the sentence, not first.
ue patient challenges
Amazing!
life
Summarize the artifact below.
I utilized neuroplasticity principles that my fieldwork educator educated me on to guide upper extremity
Rewrite for clarity:
I utilized neuroplasticity principles for upper extremity interventions.
Start a new sentence about the types of interventions.
My FWE taught me about FES and task-specific training based on research supporting motor recovery. Additionally...
.
Amazing!
As an occupational therapy student, I frequently shared my experiences at UTHSC on social media, using my platform to advocate for the profession and
Should this section have its own heading?
at home
This is brilliant.
fieldwork
plural or fieldwork placements
ssible
Provide a synopsis for someone who cannot see the image.
repare
preparing
UTHSC
Spell it out
nt living
Beautiful. Needs synopsis of screenshot.
ROM)
This and MMT--no need to place in parentheses if not subsequently used.
(PLC),
unnecessary to place in parentheses if not subsequently used.
vities.
Again, this is beautifully written. Provide a summary of the screenshot below, which is also a good example of what you wrote about.
ground.
Pinal, this is so beautifully written. The image below needs an explanation. Although I can read it, imagine if someone was using a screen reader and the image was inaccessible. What does the image say? Summarize it as your "evidence".