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  1. Apr 2025
    1. I utilized  built up handles for his toothbrush and hairbrush s

      I used foam and elastic wrapping material to build up the handles of his toothbrush and hairbrush. This made the handles easier for him to grasp.

    2. n this screenshot you can see we collaborated on a prevocational goal with the teacher and parents about how this particular student had difficulty with legible handwriting due to decreased visual motor, fine motor, and attention to task

      Please break down this sentence into shorter ones. It is difficult to follow.

    3. Through this contact, I am able to collaborate with caregivers and family  to  establish and maintain  a balance of occupations  during their  time at Encompass   that

      Please rewrite for clarity and include the patient at the center.

    1. The purpose of this website is to show my competence on my  level 2 fieldworks

      The purpose is to show your professional growth as an OT student towards the program's outcomes.

    1. Parents could choose from either center based groups, which consisted of structured teaching in a positive group learning environment in our clinic at the University of Tennessee, Knoxville's campus, or home based services with a focus on family training in settings natural to the children and family.

      Break down into shorter sentences.

    2. PLC delivered developmental therapy services in natural environment settings that are individualized to meet the needs of the child and family.

      Is the natural environment setting individualized, or is the developmental therapy service individualized? The structure of the sentence makes it unclear.

    1. evelopme

      I LOVE this layout! And I am happy you didn't continue with ALL CAPS FOR EVERYTHING ELSE!

      Allison, make sure you use the same size font for each heading of this section. The size of the font in the first heading is smaller.

    1. I've been able to incorporate these differences into their plans of care.

      Sounds a bit strange. Do you incorporate a difference into a plan of care? Or do you incorporate their lifestyle preferences into their plan of care?

    1. This program was handed down to CNA's and activity directors to implement increased activity and social participation among the residents on the weekends.

      Long sentence--break down into shorter ones.

    1. We must abide by each principle during the time we spend with our clients and beyond.

      Sometimes there are conflicting principles (like in the situation you described above). Please expand.

    2. I was able to respect my boundaries without denying him treatment.

      This was indeed an easy fix. You were able to avoid difficult conversations. What would you have done if there wasn't another therapist? Did you treat one of the other therapist's patients to help lessen her caseload? I would like more information on this. There is very little reflection here. Were there other situations you encountered where boundaries were violated? Or did it occur only once in 6 months?

    1. In the comment  below, I used my clinical experience and knowledge on when the best time would be to remove a student from a classroom for a session  when it would benefit them.

      Please break this down. It's difficult to understand, particularly the end of the sentence.

    1. This really helped my learning and ability as a future occupational therapist as I was able to receive feedback immediately  after  doing something well  or receive constructive feedback on something I needed more help with.

      Break this down into shorter sentences.

    2. have also grown in my ability to give feedback through all of the class evaluations we have done throughout occupational therapy school  which has allowed me to more confidently give feedback to my classroom and fieldwork educators in regards to what is most beneficial to me.

      Please break this up into shorter sentences.

    3. bipolar disorder that was not mentioned in the  admission information which explained why she acted this way.

      Can you really say the reason she acted that way was due to being bipolar? Is it not possible, she was irritable following surgery, not having bathed for several days, being in an unfamiliar environment, feeling exposed and vulnerable without clothing, etc.? I think it's important you found out about her additional diagnosis, but be cautious about making inferences. Would you write this in the medical record?

    4. get the client changed into more comfortable clothes

      This makes it sounds as though you did all of the work and the patient was entirely passive. How can you word it to convey patient participation?

    1. Below I have attached a discussion post I wrote about my experience with advocacy while placed at Memphis-Shelby County Schools.

      Place this sentence after the first paragraph where you discuss advocating for pediatric clients.

    2. The most ethical treatments for occupational therapists to provide in the schools is to collaborate with the teacher to provide suggestions to support a student's learning as well as pushing in to the classroom to provide suggestions to the student and teacher based on the student's performance of the classroom activity.

      Please break this down into two or even three sentences.

    3. s therapists, we  legally did all we could do by providing education to the family  as he was past his length of stay date and   discharging him into the least restrictive environ

      This too is a very long and difficult to understand sentence. Break it down.

    4. Eventually, he ended up being discharged due to having an outside appointment  and his family was required to pick him up from his appointment so he was able to discharge home

      Break up this sentence to make it easier to read. Eventually, he ended up being discharged due to having an outside appointment. His family was required....

    5. to the cohort following mine as I believed that it was something important for them  to recognize and understand prior to fieldwork

      Break this long sentence into two shorter ones.

    6. Sometimes we have to encounter very hard things and we need to set boundaries for ourself to  maintain in order to protect our own mental health

      Difficult sentence to follow--please shorten for clarity.

    1. I appreciated my fieldwork educator taking the time out to give me written notes to look into as it will help refine me for when I am entry level, as I want to bring out the best of my clinician abilities

      Rewrite for clarity.

    2. This workshop consisted of Q&A's from other speech language pathologists (SLPs) and OT's in the area that served for the pediatric community and utilized feeding therapy for their clients

      Very difficult sentence to understand--please break it down into shorter sentences.

    3. I utilized neuroplasticity principles that my fieldwork educator educated me on to guide upper extremity

      Rewrite for clarity:

      I utilized neuroplasticity principles for upper extremity interventions.

      Start a new sentence about the types of interventions.

      My FWE taught me about FES and task-specific training based on research supporting motor recovery. Additionally...

    1. As an occupational therapy student, I frequently shared my experiences at UTHSC on social media, using my platform to advocate for the profession and

      Should this section have its own heading?

    1. ground.

      Pinal, this is so beautifully written. The image below needs an explanation. Although I can read it, imagine if someone was using a screen reader and the image was inaccessible. What does the image say? Summarize it as your "evidence".