third

Update! You're a 3rd year about to graduate!

about to graduate with my Master of Occupational Therapy (capitalized) degree. https://catalog.uthsc.edu/preview_program.php?catoid=45&poid=3842#curriculumsummary

capitalize. Master (not plural--same for your Bachelor degree) of Occupational Therapy degree.

I had no idea! How wonderful!

See previous comment!

This needs to appear in parentheses after the first time you spell it out and before you use it on the page.

past tense

Spell out first time on the page

One piece of advice?

Collaborate on some goals

spell out, otherwise this is jargon

Remove unnecessary words

Spell out since it has not been used on this page

APA. See previous comment

Capitalize each word

please change the verb from was to were, since it refers to multiple people

Please give an example.

Please spell out ADLs.

Need to be spelled out

Wonderful!

Capitalize each word since it is the proper name of the theory. This is also a great example.

Amazing!

Fantastic!

person-first

Use past tense

Bravo!

Capitalize proper names of assessments

lower case

Very interesting! Well done!

APA

Theta

I'm curious as to why some titles are capitalized while others are not.

the

Great reflection

Please include a reference list of works cited.

See previous comment. There appears to be an additional quotation mark in the middle of the title.

not capitalized

You placed one title in quotes but not the other. It might be easier to italicize titles of works.

Check APA

Write in past tense

I am curious if they were referring to both upper and lower limbs?

This word does not belong in the sentence as written

Other way round--spell out first and then place abbreviation or acronym in parentheses

of people with...

Fabulous analysis.

spell out

spell out

capitalize

capitalize

Spell out

spell out

See previous comment

Capitalize since this is the formal name of the FOR

So lovely!

spell out

Sweet picture!

rewrite this section in past tense: "I made an effort to...etc."

Please break this down--very difficult for me to follow.

jargon-can you change this to lay language? Also, when using acronyms or abbreviations, spell out for the first time followed by parentheses.

people with neurological conditions

Were the family taking a more significant role? Or was the client?

typo

possessive

Did you mean "our"?

Change to past tense since this is now in the rear-view mirror.

now third year!

spell out

I don't get it.

Was this previously spelled out and placed in parentheses?

Is this the correct word?

Can you give examples of evaluation and intervention strategies that you implemented?

situations in which she would have

facilitated

used

Please give an example

focused

spell out if not previously placed in parentheses on the page

spell out

Please provide a specific example of how you accomplished this during FW.

Please break down this long sentence.

Please give an example.

Can you provide an example of a specific topic that helped you to better serve your clients?

Expand with a example.

Expand

Provide a synopsis

spell out

Did you do it? Or did you just have the opportunity?

Please provide a specific example.

advocated and justified

spell out

Please elaborate on how this activity helped you to establish or maintain a therapeutic relationship with a client.

applied

Spell out

Amazing! Ikea!

spell out

"Was able to" implies you had the opportunity, but doesn't necessarily mean that you did it. "Shared" is more precise to illustrate that you actually did it.

spell out

This is very general. Can you provide a specific example?

spell out

Please give an example of an instance where this helped you meet the standard.

participated

Made me cry!

unnecessary word

Great example!

Can you provide a specific example?

Can you provide a specific example?

Congratulations! How wonderful!

Person-first language

Use person-first language.

Can you provide a specific example? This is a very generalized statement.

Each day, I reviewed each client's chart and generated treatment ideas for each treatment session.

Could you add to this nice reflection how it is in accordance with AOTA standards?

Not sure this part of the sentence fits.

spell these out.

Lovely! I did this a lot when I saw patient in a similar setting. I was surprised often at how soon they wanted to go back indoors! They often lost their tolerance for being outdoors, became cold very quickly, or couldn't stand the slightest breeze. Interesting what occupational deprivation can do.

hyphenate

remove these words, they are unnecessary

Is this accurate? Sometimes clients will never be fully independent and require supervision.

informed

When you use the phrase "I was able to", you imply that you had the opportunity, but it doesn't necessarily mean that you actually did it. It's clearer if you rephrase and use the correct verb, e.g., "I discussed...etc".

I educated

Briefly provide a synopsis so that the reader doesn't need to look for the information in the image. "Pictured below is a comment from my fieldwork educator explaining my progress with communicating the OT process, as well as my exemplary performance score for articulating the value of OT"

Was the child developing OT skills, or other skills, like play skills, fine motor skills, or even developmental milestones?

lower case

Me

resemble means that they look similar to....but these are the real thing!! I think you need a different verb. Perhaps the sentence can read, "These handwritten personable cards are evidence of the impact I made at each facility".

Mazeltov! That's so wonderful!!!! Hooray!

Please rewrite for clarity--I think there are a few extra unnecessary words here.

Capitalize

See previous comment

capitalize as it's the name of a technique

Can you think of a specific instance to illustrate integration with patient values?

spell out

This should come the first instance you use the abbreviation, which is in the first clause in the first sentence.

spell out

On my screen it is above

spell out

Provide a brief synopsis

reviewed

Write in past tense

comma needed after the word attachment

Make sure to capitalize the names of theories

Provide a synopsis here.

two separate words

Capitalize

Place in parentheses after you spelled it out in the previous sentence.

spell out

Write what it said. The reader may not be able to view the image to see its contents.

Not sure why this is possessive

Fabulous! I feel so proud to have you as my student.

Place a period after the word markers, and start a new sentence with the word That.

spell out for the first time on the page, then place in parentheses

Provide a synopsis of what it says--the reader shouldn't have to read the image.

Beautiful.

helped

"was able to" tells me that you had the opportunity, but doesn't let me know you actually did it. Consider rephrasing: "I sat down with...and taught her...". One of my first certifications as a newly minted OT was a CIMI--Certified Infant Massage Instructor. I didn't keep it up, though.

Lovely page! Are your FW educators cool with being named?

This is beautiful, however, needs to be rewritten to reflect past tense.

encouraged her and provided

You were treating a person, not a wound. Can you rephrase?

spell out

Please reflect on a specific example.

Can you give an example?

working with patients who had neurological conditions.

Write in past tense, and spell out APDE

continued

Please give a specific example.

Two separate words

Please give a specific example. Then, please provide a synopsis of the screenshot.

spell out

I learned or I learnt about

capitalize

Six of my classmates and I conducted.... OR Along with six classmates, I conducted... OR Together with six classmates, I conducted....

past tense

Provide synopsis. Imagine the reader is blind and cannot access the image.

Can you give an example of one way in which you altered your treatment plan for a child with this diagnosis?

Here is an example similar to my first comment: instead of "we were able to try on the device"--meaning that you had the opportunity, say instead "we tried on the device". The latter tells me what you did, the former tells me only that you were given the opportunity, but not necessarily that you took it. Let me know if this makes any sense.

jargon

When you write "I was able to...." it leaves the reader wondering if you actually engaged in the activity. The mere fact that you had the opportunity doesn't necessarily tell the reader that you DID do the activity. Think about what you are trying to convey with precision: you can write "I participated in many inservice opportunities". Can you tell the difference?

This is a side comment: when talking about your work with others, it is customary to include oneself last, i.e., you could rephrase this as "The physical therapist and I did not change....etc." This is just a suggestion for a more conventional style--putting others first before yourself in a sentence.

Provide synopsis

plural = sections

Capitalize formal names of sections

Provide synopsis

spell out

was

for me to become

After

What does it say? Provide a synopsis please!

explained

Please rewrite for clarity: I don't understand what you meant.

See previous

Not sure what you mean by this.

See previous comment on use of acronyms or abbreviations.

Don't assume the reader knows this acronym

Spell out first time and place in parentheses

Kudos! Lovely example to illustrate this criterion.

Please provide a specific example.

Provide a synopsis--see previous similar comment.