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  1. Apr 2021
    1. Meyer, Susan

      is this reference cited in the body of your essay?

    2. connect

      connected

    3. endless all

      insert ;

    4. ipads

      iPads

    5. Nice job and well-written. You incorporated the three PK links, formatted the page and your references section appropriately, and cited your sources. You might have wandered away a bit from your thesis with the emphasis on e-commerce, but by connecting it to social media marketing and advertising you created some context for your argument.

    6. such as being influenced

      ?

    7. The survey reported that

      redundant

    8. must now switch gears to cater to the ever growing digital market

      interesting to note that just today I saw a report that Netflix is already having to "switch gears" to adapt to the DECREASING number of subs/hours viewed because of the "opening up" of covid lockdowns...what goes up can just as quickly come down...unless you think that digital media consumption habits will be changed forever because of the pandemic

    9. stay home

      stay-at-home (?)

    10. down(AJMC)

      needs a space

    11. soil, since

      probably best to insert period here

    12. Abstract

      This first paragraph doesn't feel like an abstract, but rather an introduction to the covid pandemic and its current status.

    13. From people working at home and students being educated from their households to even trying to find the slightest bit of entertainment when everything is closed, the global pandemic has made it so that the digital media world is a necessity to function within even the smallest of tasks in our newfound society.

      Since we didn't have the benefit of posting the thesis and sources to Bb > discussion forum, I'm assuming this is the thesis statement. You might take one more step and declare that because of the increasing necessity of digital media, it is time for congress to classify broadband internet, and social media platforms, as public utilities...thus making their regulatory framework consistent with other utilities. This would have implications for Section 230 and the protection of free speech.

    1. insinuated that the opposing party was trying to “steal” the election

      this has been a consistent argument made by losing candidates for decades, even centuries...including by Hillary Clinton in 2016 and continuing for years, even after Russian collusion was dismissed, and Stacey Abrams continuing to declare that the 2018 gubernatorial election was stolen...why the sudden interest in silencing the speaker, even if the statement is false...we tolerate lies by politicians all the time (because the alternative requires some way to determine what is true...and trust in a system to declare what is and isn't open to debate) with the expectation that the American public can and will make up their own minds about who to believe

    2. correct information

      And ultimately you're okay giving Twitter the authority to decide what information is "correct"? And if you're okay with Twitter's ownership today, what if they go off the rails and begin squashing speech that you support? Are you okay with that possibility?

    3. this class

      what class?

    4. References
      • references should be alphabetical order by last name, and formatted using either APA or MLA style
      • none of these references are cited in your essay
    5. Trump was not denied his right to freedom of speech, he was denied use of social network platforms for violating their user guidelines

      how do you respond to Jack Dorsey's statement that it “sets a precedent I feel is dangerous: the power an individual or corporation has over a part of the global public conversation...having to take these actions fragment the public conversation.”

    6. moderate content that is posted daily

      this paper probably needs a more thorough analysis of Twitter's "glorification of violence" policy since that was the premise of the Trump ban...that and his tweet that said he would not be attending the inauguration...see https://techcrunch.com/2021/01/08/why-twitter-banned-president-trump/

    7. making it to where he could not get out

      preventing him from expressing

    8. These sites do not have an age limit for creating accounts

      actually most do have age requirement (13 years) to comply with COPA

    9. this

      Section 230?

    10. reliable

      responsible

    11. shouldn’t be happening

      ?

    12. Twitter is also used by almost everybody else with access to a smartphone not just in the U.S, but the world

      about 22% of US adults use Twitter, out of 85% who own a smart phone

    13. sights

      sites, or better yet, platforms

    14. So much so, that a majority of our younger generations even base their lives around these companies
    15. continued to blossom into the spectrum of the internet

      ?

    16. Many questioned if twitter had the power to do so, and if it was a violation of 1st amendment rights. To that I say, welcome to this term paper

      this is where your thesis statement should be presented

    17. simple as that

      that was a long paragraph...would benefit from division into sections and sub-sections

    18. www.nbcnews.com/politics/2020-election/we-won-trump-spreads-misinformation-about-2020-election-during-final-n1252802

      hypertext link

    19. theconversation.com/no-twitter-is-not-censoring-donald-trump-free-speech-is-not-guaranteed-if-it-harms-others-153092

      this should be a hypertext link

    1. Great job Raena...really nice overview of some of the salient issues facing the next generation of AI developers and users. Also, great use of multimedia elements and links to PK pages/topics.

    2. assistant

      assistants (?)

    3. While artificial intelligence can deepen human interactivity, connection, and opportunity, it has the potential to be damaging on an individual and societal level.

      aha, the thesis statement...this paragraph might make more sense at the very beginning, with the section about history following

    4. References

      excellent job with references, in-text citations, and formatting

    1. This is a fairly simplistic introduction to some of the arguments raised by the application of media effects theory to violent video game play by young people. One of the arguments, that sane people can separate game play from reality, could be negated as VR immersion erases the line between virtual and real reality...and that could be an interesting topic for future discussion.

    2. even though the psychological science does not agree

      I'm not convinced that you made the case for this statement...you've raised questions, but did you disprove the accusations?

    3. for any sane human

      what do we do about the "insane" segment of the population?

    4. that

      who

    5. correlated together when explaining their effect on the world, this does not mean that it directly is responsible for or impacts the final result of what happens

      this would be a good place to address the correlation v causation issue...you begin to do that in the next sentence, but it benefit from additional development

    6. According to the Wall Street Journal,

      This video seems to make a pretty strong case for parental concern over exposure to violent video games...but you don't respond with a convincing counter-argument

    7. many people argue that this immersion in virtual violent scenarios can actually lead to real world violence even though I do not agree

      Is this your thesis statement? If so it should probably include a brief statement referencing the basic reason for your disagreement.

    8. biggest question that still remains to this day is if there is any psychological effect that violent video games have on a person’s violent tendencies

      perhaps the question is more nuanced than that...at what age (level of maturation) are the risks of harmful psychological effects reduced to a level that is acceptable for healthy socialization?

    9. the main reason that kids are so aggravated after these games is due to their prefrontal cortex not being fully developed and this triggers outbursts of anger within children and young adults.

      this again raises the question, at what age is video video game exposure safe?

    10. they awaken natural senses in our brain that respond to violence or life threatening situations and therefore releases chemicals in our brain similar to if we were actually in those situations

      we also have natural inclinations (survival instincts?) to lie, cheat and steal...should those also be promoted as video game themes in the interest of engaging the player?

    11. Do violent video games actually negatively impact children and young adults who spend their time playing these games?

      okay, we're well into the paper, time to start providing answers instead of questions

    12. insane

      slang

    13. and

      beware of run-on sentences....best to replace the and here with a period

    14. different genres of video games for players to access

      this set-up for the video that follows could have been a bit more detailed...for example, you could have mentioned that X-number of top-10 arcade games in the video below contained extensive and graphic violence.

    15. VR.

      are there two other links to PK Scalar pages?

    16. dimensional

      dimensionally

    17. References

      References should be listed in alphabetical order by author's last name. Also, each of these sources should be cited in the body of your essay using standard in-text citation formatting, e.g. "words, words, words" (Ebersole, 2021, p.#).

    18. Douglas Gentile

      Douglas Gentile (cited in Yenigun)

    19. N.

      ?

    1. cancel culture has gone too far now and has cancelled too many cultural products and created a toxic internet environment

      thesis statement?

    2. ordinary individual

      see note above about celebrities

    3. celebrities

      later on you make the case for why cancelling is particularly harmful to ordinary folks

    4. leading to a bigger mob mentality

      perhaps this is the link to the class topic (interactivity)...since online activism and anonymity make it easier to coordinate opposition to a thing/person...but if so, this needs to be developed

    5. being behind a screen

      anonymity (?)

    6. owners

      owners'

    7. majority decision

      does it come down to democracy and rule of the majority?

    8. cancel culture has gone too far

      you've provided several examples of cancels that have backfired, but how does one determine what is TOO far?

    9. were not illegal to own

      well, that's a good thing, right?

    10. has maybe branched too far

      how is this not a subjective assessment...just your opinion?

    11. cancel culture has gone too far now

      is there a specific turning-point that you can reference? when did it cross the line?

    12. out-lash

      ?

    13. for the internet

      for society (?)

    14. that

      who

    15. What is cancel culture and where did it come from?

      If this is your thesis statement, it should be a statement and not a question, and should be introduced at the end of your introductory paragraph. Also, I'm not sure how this essay topic addresses issues specific to our class topic of interactivity/social media.

    16. Shank

      Neither is this source cited

    17. Nguyen, Brandon

      This source is not cited in your essay

    18. Works Cited

      You didn't post your thesis and sources in the Bb Discussion Forum so I was unable to provide two sources for you to include.

    1. 500 known videos from Trump supporters

      were these protesters/rioters, by your definition, citizen journalists? See https://apnews.com/article/capitol-siege-media-journalism-riots-social-media-70192823f35380b860b6f2708904bc5c

    2. Very thought-provoking thesis. I would have liked to see more emphasis on the way that social media platforms have become the de facto gate-keepers for citizen journalists and their posts.

    3. tragedy that happened to George Floyd. These were exposed on camera

      the smart phone cameras that witnessed the apprehension and death of Floyd told an important part of the story, but it wasn't the whole story...which is why we still need professional journalists who are willing to do the research (on and off of social media) to uncover the full story

    4. Journalists have a set of suggested standards

      So, if doing journalistic work makes one a journalist, what standard is required when it comes to knowing and applying the SPJ Code of Ethics? What percent of citizen journalists know about or think about the SPJ code? And what percent of those agree that it should be the standard for their work? The loss of standards (or the perception thereof) has caused a loss of trust. See more at https://www.americanpressinstitute.org/publications/reports/survey-research/trust-journalism-values/

    5. gone

      been swept (?)

    6. can help eliminate false narratives since the story is told from different angles

      not sure that I follow the logic here

    7. That’s where the gap becomes bigger between the two.

      again, this is an important report on the matter of public perception of journalism: https://www.americanpressinstitute.org/publications/reports/survey-research/trust-journalism-values/

    8. we can see that the profession is not fading away, but giving the opportunity to anyone with a smart device the ability to communicate what’s going on

      if anyone with a smart device is a journalist, then the profession of journalism (by definition) is fading away

      e.g., the profession of travel agent has disappeared because everyone was given the tools and access to book his/her own travel

    9. which is accurate reporting

      again, even an unedited video recording can fail to deliver the truth

    10. first hand

      first-hand

    11. pointing finger situation

      isn't social media where much of this finger-pointing happens?

    12. 65% of traditional news reporters use platforms such as Facebook and LinkedIn for story research

      this is not universally accepted as a positive development

    13. the main source of breaking news

      source or distribution channel?

    14. , standards  are set to

      are:

    15. work by

      follow (?)

    16. Sources

      I see only 1 of the 2 suggested sources (posted to Bb forum)

    17. https://www.archives.gov/founding-docs/constitution-transcript

      these should be hypertext links

    1. Good job overall. Could there be a technological solutions to the problem, e.g. software that will indicate if AI has been used to modify pixels? I see one link to a PK presentation...did I miss the other two?

    2. References

      requirement for minimum of 7 references

    3. www.vsinghbisen.com/technology/what-is-deepfake-know-everything-about-this-ai-based-technology

      these should be hypertext links

    4. revenge porn is completely banned, however, the law does not surround anything that has been faked.

      ?

    5. California and Virginia due include faked deep fake media to the public still.

      not sure what this means

    6. due

      do or delete

    7. another popular video

      would have been great to have embedded this video below this paragraph

    8. deep fakes must go through a series of training technology

      ?

    9. For example, the face of the president, and can slowly improve the realism of the synthetically generated faces.

      sentence fragment

    10. generative adversarial networks

      this should probably have been introduced when you mentioned GAN several paragraphs earlier

    11. use the actor's identity in someone else’s body

      are you trying to say that this process resulted in the mapping of Cage's face onto video of another person's body, aka the "face swap" technique mentioned in the following paragraph?

    12. used to be curated

      ?

    13. refer two faces

      ?

    14. comply

      compile (?)

    15. This allowed the technology to exist before the Reddit page and new creations like Style GAN

      ?

    16. the phrase “deep fake” was coined in late 2017 by a user of Reddit

      citation?

    17. The controversy of deep fake technology leads to nothing but harm to people and the society they live in with fake news, counterfeit information, misleading photos, and videos.

      Is this your thesis statement?

    1. Overall a good introduction to the issues surrounding anonymity in social media spaces, with good examples specific to professional sports. Still curious as to whether you think the pro athlete twitter users are somehow worthy of specific standards...or if these observations should be applied universally. Good use of multimedia, hyperlinks, and incorporation of PK links.

    2. online anonymity can have more of an upside than you think

      re-reading your previous paragraphs, you seem to make a more convincing argument for the downside than the upside

    3. The downside to that would be that maybe there are certain people that don’t fit your online aesthetic or agree with your persona online.

      shouldn't this be in your previous paragraph?

    4. Twitter

      not sure that you made a case here for why Twitter specifically...your argument could be applied to any social platform

    5. aurora

      aura

    6. anonymity is not all sunshine and rainbows, and can have dark tendencies.

      this phrase should conclude the upside argument as you transition to the downside

    7. deindividualization

      more commonly, deindividuation

    8. will now possibly be at risk

      if Bottini was posting inside info, medical info, and other controversial information should Twitter bear any responsibility for giving her a platform?

    9. accounts is that it

      plural > singular

    10. like this

      ? first time an NBA GM resigned?

    11. video below showcases Durant admitting the use of burners

      good set up of the embedded video

    12. athletes

      athlete's

    13. Where the use of burner accounts on both Twitter and Instagram ignited the findings that exposed the name of the said account held by Durant on Instagram.

      sentence fragment

    14. accounts

      account's

    15. Durant’s brother tagged him in a photo as “quiresultan”

      sounds like most anyone could have figured that one out

    16. quiresultan

      if this is the account name, use @quiresultan

    17. Normally online sleuths get a bad rap

      this needs a transition to set up your shift to talking about exposing burner account owners

    18. unpopular opinion

      this would have been a good place to mention cancel culture

    19. really has no combatants

      ?

    20. milkshake ducks

      I think we're going to need a definition here (or at least a link)

    21. players and coaches

      celebrities, players and coaches, athletes...I understand that you are focusing on college and pro athletes, but I'll be interested to see if your observations apply equally to ordinary twitter users?

    22. The anonymous world of Twitter burner accounts has led to controversy and distrust with certain figures on the platform

      congrats, you are one of the few who followed instructions to include your thesis statement at the end of your introduction! :-)

    23. how

      delete

    24. Introduction

      the style guide/example specified H3 for headings, and H4 for subheadings

    1. Sources

      MLA = Works Cited APA = References Also, none of these references are cited in the essay

    2. Social media will allow to form a relationship that will be between the users.

      Brianna, the lack of clarity and failure to clearly communicate is making it impossible for me to determine what you're trying to say...let alone whether you are constructing a valid argument for your thesis; "Twitter is the future when it comes to news delivery sources." I will continue to read your essay, but cannot continue to provide annotations because I am finding it impossible to understand what you have written.

    3. Body

      ?

    4. But the user generated content that will encourage decision-making and be able to make posts or tweets.
    5. Abstract

      not sure that the following paragraph is truly an abstract of your paper

    6. The results that are indicating the regional media that are different in Twitter usage from both the local and national media.

      not sure what you're trying to say here

    7. looking at the tweets of nine news organizations during the last 4-month period that depends on how the individuals, links, news headlines

      this does not make sense...needs to be edited for clarity

    8. the study

      what study? did you intend for there to be an in-text citation here, or link to a particular study?

    9. The news values as a theoretical framework

      ?

    10. the

      a (?)

      Twitter is one of many channels for content dissemination

    11. By:

      delete

    12. link.gale.com/apps/doc/A626971499/OVIC?u=usc&sid=OVIC&xid=65bdf67a

      this should be a hypertext link

    13. https://www.cnet.com/news/twitter-ceo-jack-dorsey-explains-his-vision-for-social-medias-future/

      this should be a hypertext link

    1. Not sure why, but the images are not showing up for me.

      A little slow out of the gate, but overall good overview of the advantages provided by interactivity. Thought you might go on to address AR/VR/XR since you seem to be very interested in the possibilities they provide.

    2. media

      medium

    3. all filler no killer

      hadn't heard that one before...but I'm going to have to find an opportunity to use it now!

    4. Stafford

      Stanford Research Institute

    5. is differently all due to

      ?

    6. Sources

      APA = References Also, I don't see either of the sources that I recommended to you

    1. Should people be forgiven after being cancelled?

      Great question for another paper. Another question...should they be forgiven instead of being cancelled? Or, should people only be cancelled if they refuse to accept responsibility or ask for forgiveness?

    2. Great topic but I feel like you drifted away from your focus on social media archives, and the ease with which our digital footprints are so easily traced...and how that contributes to the practice of cancel culture.

    3. Cancel culture is not considered bad but it is also not considered good.

      actually, I think it is considered both bad and good, by different groups at different times

    4. or making a change with it

      are you sure?

    5. blizzum

      bosom

    6. break

      berate

    7. had

      expressed (?)

    8. A letter posted by Harper’s Magazine

      I feel like this needs more explanation. Because of the number and status of those who signed the letter, and how they were, in turn, cancelled for signing the letter, this is a critically important document that needs to be understood to fully grasp this subject.

    9. many would forget, but people will always find that information

      it's probably worth noting that celebrity, fame, popularity, controversy, etc. makes digital dumpster diving more likely to happen...with my low-key lifestyle I'm probably safe from having my online past exposed and used against me knocks on wood

    10. Many user generated content can contain information that is also damaging. This could be a bad review, negative blog, or anything that brings notice to a brand or person. User generated content can be very persuasive to other people making them believe what they see online. It’s hard to get away from that in the social media world.

      not sure what point you're trying to make with this paragraph since all social media (with the exception of embedded ads) is user generated

    11. Social media archives can come back and haunt someone especially if that information is not what someone represents today. This could cause career changes and humiliation.

      perhaps you're getting there...but I'd like to see you address the difference between cancel culture and consequence culture (if there is a difference) and why consequences can be good in so far as they discourage bad behavior from continuing even while cancelling can be unfair or even counterproductive

    12. that someone tweeted

      unnecessary

    13. Anything can be found in social media as far back as it will go.

      this statement is both obvious and, at the same time, not entirely true...and as such should be revised to be more clear

    14. allowing people to film whatever they like

      social media platforms have provided distribution and promotion channels for videos...they didn't facilitate permission per se

    15. References

      I don't see the sources that I posted in response to your thesis statement in the discussion forum

    16. way

      slang

    1. Good job with formatting, incorporation of multimedia elements, and hypertext links to PK, sources, and references. And well-written too!

    2. References

      one reference short of the required 7...also, should be in alphabetical order

    3. Many NFT transactions send a stronger economic signal to the miners which may lead to increased emissions

      everyone should watch the following video

    4. send them their royalties in seconds

      resistance will come from the fact that fortunes are made by financial institutions holding onto funds for even short periods of time

    5. have less value

      again, I would like to have some information about the following video clip. (interesting, btw) what does this video clip demonstrate? what should I watch/listen for?

    6. easy definition

      "easy" as in, I understand all the words in the following sentence...but not so easy when trying to understand the technology behind it

    7. first blockchain by Satoshi Nakamoto

      would like to have a little bit more setup for the video to follow

    8. not a token that is unable to grow fungi

      nice!

    1. PechaKucha Presentations

      The intent here was to have these terms reference in the body of your paper, not as a list at the end.

    2. http://web.a.ebscohost.com.ezproxy.csupueblo.edu/ehost/detail/detail?vid=12&sid=d3a453d2-9481-4e70-a59e-fe1d59de9e20%40sessionmgr4007&bdata=JnNpdGU9ZWhvc3QtbGl2ZSZzY29wZT1zaXRl#AN=135551229&db=aph

      ebscohost links require the reader to have an account and password for access. The proper link to provide is a DOI (Digital Object Identifier) link.

    3. needs to be a system implemented that helps people avoid these scenarios

      So, this raises the issue of anonymity online. Should social media platforms allow for anonymous accounts, or should there be a requirement to register with some form of official ID?

    4. VPN

      This should be defined the first time you use it.

    5. They might be saying it's to come and visit you

      ?

    6. two headed

      two-headed

    7. Where recipients would receive a message from a “Nigerian Prince” asking for money to help them build something beneficial for their city or village.
    8. teenager

      I think he was expecting a woman in her 20s. Teenager makes it sounds creepier than it was.

    9. eyes, was

      ?

    10. person

      "catfishing" is a verb, so it would have to describe an act or behavior. A person who engages in "catfishing" is someone who "creates a false profile..."

    11. cases being reported in the late 90’s

      this would be a great place for an in-text citation to your source for this info

    12. catfishing

      Do you know where the term came from? It's origin story is explained at the end of the documentary Catfish. https://www.imdb.com/title/tt1584016/

    13. However, some people use their ability to remain in the shadows in order to manipulate other users, more commonly referred to as catfishing. This paper will explain what catfishing is, why people catfish, and how to spot someone who may be a potential catfish.

      good intro

    14. Spencer, except for your links in the Sources section you missed out on the opportunity to be a multimedia/interactive digital resource. Where are the embedded images and videos? How about linking terms in the body of your paper to resources, including PK pages? I see that you listed several PK terms at the end, with links, but these were supposed to be incorporated in the body of the paper.

    1. Thomas, this feels so much like a traditional "paper" and not an interactive digital resource. Where are the links, the embedded images and videos, the hypertext paths to PK topics? From the assignment..."Because this is an electronic document and not a "paper," you should incorporate multi-media elements (images, graphics, animations, videos, etc.) that serve to support your argument."

    2. While social media is used everyday to pass time, the connections between social media and academics can be seen affecting students performance in the classroom. Over the past 25 years, technology in every realm that involves human interaction has improved in all aspects that can be measured. Throughout those 25 years, studies have been conducted showing the effects on students and academic performances social media has had on these students. In the paragraphs to come, I will be presenting studies and evidence to solidify these claims based on science and social influence presented. What started out as a hobby for some computer literate people has become a social norm and way of life for people from all over the world (Boyd. 2007).

      This should be indented so that we know where the abstract starts and stops. Typically one does not use first person, e.g., "I will..." in a scholarly essay. Also, this feels more like an introduction than an abstract.

    3. dishonesty

      I stopped annotations at this point.

    4. This brings the

      The

    5. they

      the authors?, researchers?, tech workers? Who are they?

    6. hanging with friends

      Isn't this also very likely social media time?

    7. but when 98% of college and high school students use more than 1 form of social media, the attention to detail to what’s more important is skewed

      Not sure what you mean by this.

    8. 1

      one

    9. external research which can involve using social media

      Not sure that social media is a great source for external research.

    10. most amount of students using interactive media and social media

      I'm not sure that I believe this without a citation. Middle schoolers may have you beat!

    11. see’s

      sees

    12. The gap between social media and knowledge that should be learned in school is so far separated it brings a separation of interest with students. 

      Not sure what this means.