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  1. Apr 2021
    1. based on the growing number of university students that the driving factor for students to become so reliant on social media and interactive media is the easy access and functionality of these said platforms

      This is an incoherent phrase. Are we to be concerned that social media is easy to access and provides functionality?

    2. Citations

      MLA = Works Cited, APA = References All sources should contain hypertext links to actual online sources. Sources should be listed in alphabetical order by authors' last names. I found no in-text citations for these sources.

    1. Good overall summary of dangers of body image expectations caused by mass media. However, I would like to have seen more evidence presented as to the particular dangers posed by interactive/social media. What is it about the form and function of social media that makes the issue much more problematic than it has been for users of legacy media? I also expected you to address the effect of AR and filters, e.g. in Snapchat, on young women's expectations of the perfect selfie, and how some women are have botox treatments and even surgery to try to replicate the "filter" look.

    2. We have the power to create a world that everyone feels comfortable living in. Especially marketing platforms with huge audiences, they have the reach to change the narrative. Yet they choose to sell insecurities by promoting unattainable bodies. “Young people dominate the social media scene. And brands should become aware of the impact body image ads could have on teenagers and young adults” (Pascual).


      Not sure why this section is set off with horizontal rule tags. I was expecting this to be a pull quote.

    3. A new generation

      If this is an important video clip why not embed the video so that it can be played in the document? Also, it could have used a bit of an introduction so that we understand how these testimonials serve your argument.

    4. Instagram banned users under 18 years old from seeing such ads because of potential harm.

      This would seem to suggest that interactivity (the ability of IG to target ads to specific demos) is actually part of the solution. The same ad in a non-interactive medium, e.g. magazine, would not be restricted to readers of a certain age.

  2. Mar 2021
  3. Apr 2020
    1. Some people believe social media is manipulated by algorithms developed by huge corporations, which limit users' options for control to a binary choice: to use or not use their service. (Although I do appreciate your optimism!)

    2. Instead of embedding entire citations in your text, use an in-text citation, e.g. (Waldman, 2016) and then the reader can consult the References or Works Cited list at the end of the document.

    1. The essay should use headings to provide structure and organization, and as an aid to readers. Also, embedded media content should have context provided by text that explains how the media contributes to your position/argument.

    1. You didn't post your thesis and sources to the Bb Discussion Forum so I was unable to provide assistance in the early stages of this assignment...and the result is that your thesis and supporting evidence are lacking focus and clarity.

    2. developing unhealthy diets and lack of exercise that also leads to diseases

      I don't see the connection between "filling the gaps" and developing poor dietary and exercise habits.

    3. DiRenzo, 2020

      You have given a lot of attention to this source (DiRenzo) which is about negative health effects related to social media use...but that is tangential to your thesis, which is about the danger of filling small moments of time (gaps) by engaging with social media. It feels like you're not staying focused on your thesis.

    4. 1 out of 4 ratios of car accidents occurs by texting and driving. Texting and driving have led to 1.6 million crashes and 6000 deaths that occur yearly across the US.

      citation?

    5. social media, self-defining feedback, and self-esteem feedback

      again, this needs context and explanation...what are self-defining feedback and self-esteem feedback?

    1. how long it takes to grow a following via social media versus the usual promoting a record label would do

      I think you should research how much more difficult and expensive it was to promote a new artist BEFORE social media. The time and effort that was required to build an audience was HUGE compared to what is possible today.

    2. “Although you can get customers to buy quality wares and influence sales of products provided by your brand, it might take some time before you can build your online reputation, your influence as a musician, and a long-term loyal fan base.This means that although you’ll be investing a lot of time, effort and even money, it is unlikely for you to just shoot up the ranks overnight. In fact, no social media marketing strategy can make you popular overnight which means you must keep your professional social media marketing game up.” (Chifley, 2018).

      block quote

    3. “ We all start somewhere. It starts with a camera we got for Christmas, a piece of software that came with our laptop, or for many, including myself, guitar lessons. Whatever the medium, there is an in point that starts us down a creative path in media. The way we learn to work with that first medium can profoundly influence how we approach working with all media. Formative influences are, well, formative.”

      Long quotes (i.e., block quotes) should be off-set, see https://courses.lumenlearning.com/styleguide/chapter/mla-block-quotations/

    4. “Years ago, before Apple Music and Spotify, music consumers had to rely heavily on CD’s, cassettes, records, top charts, newspapers, and the radio to access music. Today this scene is much different. With the power of social media and the internet, literally in the palm of our hands at all times, we can get access to music in the matter of seconds. Digital music downloads replaced buying physical albums, music videos on YouTube replaced music television such as MTV, and social media sites, like Instagram and Twitter, and trending topics replaced the record labels having to create a musician’s fame. Just as the Internet gave us YouTube, digital downloads, and worldwide trending topics, it has also gifted us with the biggest craze in music: streaming.” (LeDoux, 2017). 

      block quote

    5. “Through the click of a button, fans can retweet a status, or comment on an artists latest Instagram post, breaking down the barrier that lies between artists and those who listen to their music. Fans can use social media to create videos, websites, artwork and fan pages that they can then post and share online, asserting their own power and influence.” (Saunderson, 2017)

      block quote

    6. But anyways, we took the idea of being connected by the internet very seriously, and it resulted in the illegal downloading and dispersion of songs and digital content. 

      Are you suggesting that this was a good thing?

    7. Have you ever had a busy week and by Thursday afternoon you already wish it was 5 o’clock Friday? And to be bullied publicly without being able to respond is terrible.

      non sequitur

    8. And then I got older

      Is this after you began your recording career?...because it sounds like you're still in HS. I'm having a difficult time following the timeline.

    1. who previously may not have had a voice, had the opportunity to speak up and show their support

      not clear what exactly what changed and where hashtags fall in the causal chain of events...needs more development to clarify how identity politics benefitted from #hashtagging

    1. I'm not sure how the dog cartoon contributes to your essay. It may have fit better earlier when you were talking about the way that anonymity empowers abusive online behavior.

    2. Realistically speaking, anyone with internet access can be “the press” with a simple post to social media or a review left on the internet.

      Is this your opinion, or are you saying that this opinion is widely held?

    3. let's look here

      Good video, but why not embed in the body of the essay...perhaps in the section where you address NYT v Sullivan? Also, it could benefit from a bit more context/setup.

    1. how violent video games are considered to have a weaker aggression affect than television, non-human characters, violence across all three medias, when violence is controlled how it affects all three conditions, and interactivity doesn’t affect the player.

      this is a confusing sentence

    1. https://adoption.com/wiki/Using_Social_Media_for_Contact_With_Birth_Families#Using_Social_Media_in_Search_and_Reunion

      References do not follow any citation standard, e.g. APA or MLA. Also, URLs should be hyperlinks.

    1. This technology is just too new to see any correlation with negative mental health issues as of now. It seems as if the only use for this tech at the moment is for helping those with mental health issues to be treated in almost real life sessions being controlled through pre set programs on a computer. 

      I sounds like you've moved away from your thesis.

    1. These places are targeted for adults and don’t have much social media presence and i believe that if they had a social media presence and that they targeted teens as well it would be a better target for anger management and for adrenaline addicts. This would possibly change the number of crimes committed and might lead to a lower crime rate. 

      This appears to be a bold statement with little support. Your use of the phrase "I believe..." is occasionally permissible in a concluding statement, but not in other contexts.

    2. If students were to create social media campaigns for the war against drugs and crimes as a project for each year of high school they would be more aware of the consequences of those actions and be less likely to commit those crimes and do those drugs that they report on.

      evidence? citation?

    3. If this was used more, and more interactively, and had a bigger social media influence

      This statement sounds like you are saying, "if it were more effective it would be more effective."

    1. while some levels of citizen journalism is good

      It may have been a good idea to cite, early on, some notable successes, e.g. the Arab Spring and the Green Revolution.

    1. know who they want to reach and exactly how to reach them.

      So you've correctly observed which marches receive coverage by particular partisan outlets. It would be interesting to see how the other (less partisan) media outlets frame their coverage (and how much coverage they give) for these two events.