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  1. Apr 2020
    1. Good examples from YouTube about misuse and mis-labeling of the Italian hospital footage. Also, good job embedding the YouTube clips with cue points to take us directly to the shots in question.

    1. This is explained in an article named Six Way Social Media Negatively Affects Your Mental Health by Sabrina Bar for the Independent website, in which she states in a study that

      replace with, "According to Bar,"

    2. “The more we use social media, the less happy we seem to be. One study a few years ago found that Facebook use was linked to both less moment-to-moment happiness and less life satisfaction—the more people used Facebook in a day, the more these two variables dropped off. The author suggests this may have to do with the fact that Facebook conjures up a perception of social isolation, in a way that other solitary activities don’t.”

      The presence of "the author suggests" indicates that Walton was quoting another study. If so, that should be the source of your quote.

    3. if not used right

      "if not used right" seems like an unnecessary qualifier

      couldn't this be said about any product or service? "If not used right, (insert most anything) problems can arise..."

    4. low self-esteem, and increases in depression or anxiety.

      Again, do not just link to YouTube videos...provide context and explain what this particular video contributes to your argument, then provide the embed code so that the reader can click play and not leave your website.

      Also, all multimedia sources, e.g. this TEDTalk, should be listed in your references at the end of your essay.

    5. “because the artificial blue light given off by smartphones activates arousing neurons in the brain. Hence, these chemicals disrupt the body’s ability to produce melatonin, a sleep-inducing hormone.”

      Actually, the article at https://www.newportacademy.com/resources/well-being/technology-and-sleep-deprivation/ or the research published by Nature (see https://www.nature.com/articles/497S13a) would have been a better source for this citation than the one used.

    6. mental health issues

      instead of linking to YouTube videos they should be embedded

      also, embedded videos need to be contextualized...you need to explain why this video segment is being included and to what video content the reader/viewer should pay attention...you need to connect the video content to your argument

    7. www.independent.co.uk/life-style/health-and-families/social-media-mental-health-negative-effects-depression-anxiety-addiction-memory-a8307196.html

      URLs should be hyperlinks

    1. And it is unfair to forcefully take information of anyone who doesn’t want their privacy being disrespected.

      Since many of these services are being provided at no-charge to users, why not just ask users who are uncomfortable with the idea of algorithms to not use the service? No one is being forced to contribute their data to these companies.

    2. Algorithms will learn your different views and incorporate them into what you consume on a personal level.

      This would be a great place to introduce the concept of "filter bubbles."

    3. Believing people should receive compensation for their contributions they are submitting which in part is ultimately granting businesses more revenue.

      sentence fragment

    4. unknowingly

      Actually they are "knowingly" collecting data...but without the users' knowledge. Of course, whether algorithms are capable of "knowing" anything is up for debate...but of course I assume you mean the authors/owners of said algorithms.

    5. Today algorithms have adapted and artificial intelligence (AI) has served as a new operation to their equations that equals YOU.

      Meaning of this sentence is unclear.

    6. a procedure for solving mathematical problems that involve finding the greatest common divisor in finite number sequences with repetition of operation

      source?

    1.  The 65-year-old Turing Test is successfully passed if a computer is mistaken for a human more than 30% of the time during a series of five-minute keyboard conversations.

      The use of present tense in this sentence feels awkward.

    2. They simply swap out control for regulate and there is a completely new sentence.

      Maybe they thought this is how one avoids plagiarism (just a little professorial humor there...very little)!

    1. “TikTok has a bit of a complicated history. It's owned by a parent company called ByteDance, which is from China. ByteDance is one of the most valuable startups in the world. It's thought to be worth about $75 billion, which is massive. There are definitely concerns in the US about TikTok being a Chinese app that has become hugely popular in America, and, frankly, that's probably a mix of Americans being worried that their own homegrown companies, like Facebook, Google, etc., being outdone by a Chinese firm, but secondarily, you know, this concern feeds into the wider backdrop of the US-China trade war.”

      This lengthy quote feels like it repeats the points you made in the paragraph above.

    2. The app Musical.ly was an app that was similar to TikTOK because the company out of Beijing China ByteDance bought Musical.ly and exported the server data to China, the rebranded the app as TikTok and imported all the users from Musical.ly and used the users of ByteDance to push the new app for use in the United States, this push started out with cringe cosplay videos, and people dancing and has now morphed into the platform we see it as today.

      Be careful of run-on sentences.

    3. which could lead us to war in the long run.

      Couldn't any public post on any social media platform run this same risk? Why is the data storage location the critical factor? Perhaps you're getting there, but I haven't seen the evidence yet.

    1. https://wakelet.com/wake/0962d66d-afac-4357-8e6f-d0b0de855670https://www.bbc.com/news/technology-52157202https://www.cnet.com/news/with-coronavirus-hoaxes-flooding-social-media-governments-scramble-to-fight-misinformation/

      these citations do not comply with APA style

    2. Many companies have gone virtual allowing social media to be a necessary part for them to keep their business running in a way that employees are not at risk of contracting the virus to one another and others being in a work environment. The same is for schools, they are using different media platforms to communicate with students, hold lectures, meetings, and other operations that are usually done Face to Face. One industry being affected by Coronavirus is the book or literacy industry. According to Jim Milliot, the combination of limits on the size of public gatherings and a reluctance to travel led to most all author tours and events being canceled. B&N, for example, canceled all events through April 30. That left publishers to scramble to arrange virtual tours for its authors.

      Not sure how these paragraphs relate to your thesis

    3. devices

      Not sure what we're to do with this video feed from Time magazine. It needs context...you need to tell us what we're looking at, and why it is placed here in this spot in the body of your paper. Is it an example of true or false statements from the POTUS and VPOTUS? Is it an example of the kind of news stories that you saw on your social media feed?

    4. Social media can be an outlet for news but can be overwhelmed with non-credible information.

      Typically your first paragraph will end with your thesis statement, or a version of it.

    5. Your paper needs additional headings to provide structure, and as an aid to readers. You also need space before headings and paragraphs to provide some separation.

    1. https://www.chicagotribune.com/suburbs/post-tribune/opinion/ct-ptb-davich-pew-research-factual-versus-opinion-statements-st-0127-story.html

      URLs should be hypertext

  2. Feb 2020
    1. This is a sample showing how you might format your multimedia term paper. The Title is automatically a level 1 header (large and bold). The section headings are formatted using H3 and subheads are H4. Images and image descriptions can be added to illustrate ideas mentioned in the body text. Quotes can be formatted as "pull-quotes" to draw attention. Hypertext links (see paragraph one) can link to website URLs or PK Presentations in Scalar. References can be hyperlinked to the original sources on the internet.

  3. Apr 2019
    1. Sources

      You were supposed to have a minimum of 7 sources, at least three of which were scholarly/peer-reviewed, and formatted using current standards, e.g. MLA or APA. Also, these sources should have been cited in the body of your paper...and of these only MLK quote was quoted (but not cited).

    2. bs long drawn out stories about how truly sorry they are and this is not the person they want to be seen as and blah blah

      avoid colloquialism and slang in academic writing

    3. The opening section (I'm going with paragraphs since you didn't include section headings) should conclude (not begin) with your thesis statement. Unfortunately your thesis statement does not establish a connection to any topic addressed in this class, and interactive media is not addressed until the fifth paragraph (where you mention social media and public shaming).

    1. References

      You were supposed to have a minimum of seven sources, and three of those were to be scholarly/peer-reviewed. Also, you were to use MLA or APA formatting for the list of references/sources. URLs should be hyperlinks. Also, all sources should be cited in the body of the paper.

    2. I believe that for now the rating system the Entertainment Software Rating Board has provided the consumers over the last 24 years should be kept in place it helps control what games get played by which age and it censors what goes into games.

      Finally...the thesis statement. But why here near the end of the paper? And why followed with a rebuttal?

    3. Entertainment Software Rating Board

      You are about 750 words into your essay before you address the focus of your paper...the ESRB ratings system. The history of video games doesn't provide much important background or lay a foundation for your thesis statement and could be eliminated.

    4. The first console that you could buy games and trade for was the Nintendo NES. Even though the console was about a foot and a half wide and weighed about 5 pounds it was loved by many. Games like Super Mario and Bubble Bobble were played by many kids and adults across the world.

      The first section should close with your thesis statement.

    1. Amanda Levendowski, a clinical teaching fellow at NYU’s law school questions AI further asking, “What does it mean for a journalist to obtain data both legally and ethically? Just because data is publicly available does not necessarily mean that it’s legally available, and it certainly doesn’t mean that it’s necessarily ethically available” (Lichterman). Levendowski continued by asking what being public means, citing the differences in public information disclosed on different social media platforms and the difference between a public account or a private account. “What does it mean when you feel comfortable disclosing personal information on a dating website versus your public Twitter account versus a LinkedIn profile? Or if you choose to make all of those private, what does it mean to disclose that information?”

      I think this graph needs a bit more explanation to connect the privacy concern to AI

    2. Artificial intelligence will revolutionize journalism, but it will not be able to replace journalists. AI journalism is capable of writing about governmental announcements and statistics, it will allow journalists the freedom to report on news with more depth.

      Good job!

    1. Work Cited:

      You were supposed to have a minimum of seven sources, and three of those were to be scholarly/peer-reviewed. Also, all sources should be cited in the body of the paper.

    2. In this paper it will be explained and discussed why streaming platforms that host UGC should not be liable for the type of content that is posted on their site/platform. Content should be self-regulated by companies rather than the government so that the market (users, advertisers, and creators) can determine what content is appropriate.

      Good job with the thesis statement!

    1. The issue with all these incidents happening is that states and the government aren’t doing much to punish these offenders and these situations keep on occurring. These officers are getting away with murder. How can anyone be cool with this happening? Sure this paper may be one sided but how can anyone condone to the police actions and be okay with these injustices?

      Your conclusion should address interactive media and how it pertains to the issue rather than addressing police behavior and injustice. We understand that police are capable of injustice and that it happens, but the focus of your paper is how social media/interactive media is addressing the problem by using the power of recording, viral sharing and public shaming. The conclusion is where you make your closing argument...but instead you used it to re-litigate the problems that social media sharing is helping to address.