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  1. Apr 2018
    1. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wyjd73tUXig​https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9u92gj6WGW8​

      These video clips should be introduced so that we know how they relate to your argument.

    1. poseidon01.ssrn.com/delivery.php?ID=273099104103087083064099092085071023035071009020021045096002001098082110067098084075028001097122048126037065119102114014097120046045033089029073029098089122108110029050052113020030105065082072031071095011102005110101097082004108069116121022013121026&EXT=pdf%2BAmericans%2BHold%2BStrong%2BViews%2BAbout%2BPrivacy%2Bin%2BEveryday%2BLife%3A%2Bwww.pewinternet.org%2F2015%2F05%2F20%2Famericans-attitudes-about-privacy-security-and-surveillance%2Fpi_15-05-20_privacysecurityattd00%2F

      Use the permalink when available, e.g., https://ssrn.com/abstract=2757465

    2. Many companies collect data on individuals from different place on the Internet and it is sometimes referred to as data-mining. Although, Facebook did not intentionally give Cambridge Analytica this information they were not diligent enough to protect their users.

      This is important.

    1. The minimum number of sources was supposed to be seven. Sources should be listed in alphabetical order. Your sources were supposed to be cited in the body of your paper. URLs should be turned into hyperlinks.

    1. When you click on the conversation you are almost forced to watch that persons story whether you want to or not and it runs all the way through your friends who posted that story

      Is it possible that this was an intentional choice to increase story views and time online?

    2. Most would agree that the new interface update isn’t a good idea, and some would say its not bad, and then others like me aren’t bothered by it.

      Source? Is this based on survey or polling data?

    1. spouting lunacy about his pseudo-religion

      This kind of editorializing would normally be considered inappropriate for an academic paper...unless your strategy is to provide evidence as to why it is justified.

    1. public shaming is seen as an effective form of punishment

      Perhaps there is a better location for this photo...although I must say it is a very "colorful" visual aid! :-)

    2. similar

      Actually, it feels like more of the opposite of slacktivism. With slacktivism the individual gets to claim credit by revealing their identity, but does not have to follow through because there is no accounting for their actions.

    1. Firstly in the unsuccessful candidacy of Howard Dean in 2003, and then five years later in the election of the first African American President, Barack Obama, in 2008.

      fragment

    1. It can be good for music taste for example.  With this filter bubble giving you new music on artists that are related to who you are following on twitter or your search results of artists on Google it could have a positive influence.

      Benefits of customization/filtering.

      • Works Cited should be in alphabetical order
      • Some of your sources are not cited in the body of your essay
      • Headings and subheads?
      • The multimedia (slideshare.net presentation) does not add significantly to your essay/argument without text or VO
    1. The biggest and most recent events of social media kind of back firing on an athlete are Donte Divincenzo, Mitchell Trubisky, and Laremy Tunsil.

      Because of the excessive number of errors, there will be no additional editorial remarks after this point.

    2. So there is always a problem when people see something like this and it blew up out of proportion saying that "Kyrie only likes to party with white women". This was just a little problem as Kyrie calmly and quickly responded with a post on his instagram saying that "I was raised by all black women and raised to treat everyone with the same respect, my yacht party was not racist.

      Same as above.

    3. One most recent example is Kyrie Irving of the Boston Celtics was having a yacht party after celebrating his world championship he won with the Cleveland Cavaliers, Kyrie had a video taken of him his friends and all these women.

      Needs to be re-written for clarity and flow.

    4. They know all this stuff is something that they signed up for when they made it that far, but what an athlete didn't sign up for is when they are out with their friends or just out having a good time and someone takes a video of them drinking or partying thats when everyone on social media comes out and tries to blow everything out of proportion even if its just a little thing.

      Beware of run-on sentences and comma splices.

    1. Just a couple of quick comments:

      • I didn't see evidence that giving to ALS resulted in reduced funding for other medical charities.
      • You are correct to note the link between the ALS Challenge and slacktivism...but this might be one of the more positive stories that fits that label.
      • Format for references doesn't follow established formatting guidelines.
    2. want their money to make a bigger difference in the world they must donate to the organizations that need the most support

      This argument assumes that donations can affect change. If heart disease is largely hereditary, and also affected by diet, donations to organizations doing research may not be as effective as donations to diseases that may have greater potential for the discovery of a cure.

    1. On average, the women described themselves as 8.5 pounds thinner in their profiles than they really were. Men fibbed by 2 pounds, though they lied by a greater magnitude than women about their height, rounding up a half inch (apparently every bit counts).

      interesting

    1. Several times you make mention of the small number of people affected by this disorder, but your thesis statement argues that this is a growing problem. Not sure what your real position is about how critical this problem is.

    2. Just because a small number of people are really impacted by this new disorder doesn’t mean all people in the gamming community are subjects in which they are impacted

      This is not a logical counterargument.

    3. Note: Its important to understand that this definition was recently defined in the 11th draft Revision of International Classification of diseases (ICD-11). The International Classification of Diseases (ICD) is the basis for identification of health trends and statistics globally and the international standard for reporting diseases and health conditions. It is used by medical practitioners around the world to diagnose conditions and by researchers to categorize conditions.

      Not sure why this paragraph begins with the "Note:" identifier.

    4. “... defined in the draft 11th Revision of the International Classification of Diseases (ICD-11) as a pattern of gaming behavior (“digital-gaming” or “video-gaming”) characterized by impaired control over gaming, increasing priority given to gaming over other activities to the extent that gaming takes precedence over other interests and daily activities, and continuation or escalation of gaming despite the occurrence of negative consequences. For gaming disorder to be diagnosed, the behavior pattern must be of sufficient severity to result in significant impairment in personal, family, social, educational, occupational or other important areas of functioning and would normally have been evident for at least 12 months.”

      Lengthy quotes (over 40 words) should be indented. Also, which source should be credited with this quote?

    1.  www.slate.com/blogsthe_world2014/05/20the_depressing_reason_why_hashtag_campaigns_like_stopkony_and_bringbackourgirls.html

      this should be turned into a hyperlink...and your other links are incomplete

    1. It is so because, their bodies and brains give out a great deal of improvements daily.

      ?

      Because of the large number of errors, I am going to conclude commenting/correcting writing mechanics at this point in the essay.

    1. Even though the point was to prove that this was legitimate news, because of the overlaying fact that there is all this false news, everything is questioned. 

      good observation

    1. Anita Sarkeesian, who is most well known for her controversial 'Tropes vs Women in Video Games' series (Romano, 2014). 

      You could use another sentence here to set up the video that follows.

    2. This same defensive hostility is spilling into GamerGate, as women starting to enter the Gaming Community is being perceived as a threat by some particularly out of touch and sexist males, as their call for equal representation 'threatens' the space that these men have had to themselves for so long.

      be careful of which tense you are using

    1. if I recall correctly, the research from those groups indicated a wide gap between people with or without access to higher education when it comes to those who fall for fake news.

      Yes, you do, in fact, recall correctly!

  2. Mar 2018
    1. Third Person Effect takes on the role that the ones who see the gun violence are now influenced and want to that change. Which then causes the issue with the people who stay the same and don't want the change. 

      This raises an interesting point as it relates to the gun violence/control debate. Like our fear of media's affect on others, many in the public believe that others cannot be trusted with guns...but they are able to have/use guns safely.

    1. Growth of media concentrationGrowing global information economyDecline of public sector mass mediaGrowing problems of information inequality

      this would be a good place for a bullet list

    1. Opinion

      Okay, if you go with a question that asks for the respondent's opinion at least you can provide rational by which we would know whether it is an informed opinion. What are key terms and concepts that connect agency to social forces?