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  1. Dec 2015
    1. All of which makes Vint Virga's project — sustaining that illusion, by incremental changes in how the animals are treated — seem more than a little quixotic. Last August, the Costa Rican government announced it was closing all its zoos. The new policy, the government declared, was "no cages." (A court ruling has so far kept the zoos open.) I think we're moving slowly toward the same sensibility. In 25 years, there will likely still be some way for Americans to see exotic animals. But I will be pretty surprised if those places have cages, mirrors, smoke machines, and conference-room tanks for 12,000-pound whales. There may be nature preserves. But it seems to me that we're pretty rapidly reaching the end of the era of the modern urban zoo

      strong concluding paragraph, has sources and evidence

    2. It is hard to avoid the conclusion that in some way the animals understand that the world around them is an artificial one, that these phobias and psychotic episodes represent reactions to that artifice, or subversions of it.

      supporting information

    3. A giraffe who freaks out about men with large cameras, a brown bear whose cage door is the subject of his obsessive compulsive disorder, a 5,000-pound killer whale who shows her trainer who is boss by dragging him underwater for just about as long as he can live, before letting him go

      evidence, sourced

    4. I think these fabrications comprise a great deal of what zoos depend upon, and what has begun to fail: a kind of double illusion, in which the people are convinced that they are seeing animals in something like their natural state and the animals, most of whom have never lived in the wild, are convinced that they are at home

      discrediting counter-argument

      sub-claim

    5. Samuels also visits the set designers who fabricate the present-day exhibit spaces, and learns about the tricks they employ to make the enclosures seem more realistic: smoke machines, "half-slivered" mirrors, native American trees that kind of resemble those in postcard versions of the Congo

      counter-argument

    6. But I found

      unlike the last article, this author uses the conjunction at the beginning of the sentence in a more appropriate way and so far this is the only one I have noticed. the article keeps a semi-formal tone (with small interjections that lighten the mood).

    7. Now we understand that animal cognition and social behavior is for many species pretty sophisticated, and there is a new form of intelligence to define ourselves against: Not what makes us different than a chimpanzee, but what makes us different than Siri? Perhaps this is pushing us toward a closer identification with the animals and helping to shape some of the discomfort with zoos

      sub-claim, possible main point

    8. For a very long post-Enlightenment period, human beings asked themselves what made them different from the apes, and fixed on logic and reason as the highest human characteristics; zoos were a way to engage that question while emphasizing that there was a great distinction indeed.

      veeerrrryyyyy good piece of information, gets the reader thinking and is an attention getter

    9. t got attention mostly for a discovery Samuels made, in the archives, that the leading figure in the early history of the Bronx Zoo was a eugenicist propagandist named Madison Grant who corresponded with Hitler, and saw his work at the Zoo in the same vein, as rescuing the perfect form of a species before it declined. (Grant once exhibited a human pygmy named Ota Benga at the Zoo; crowds of 40,000 greeted Ota Benga by jeering and poking him; eventually, he committed suicide.) The Grant story caught on in part because it highlighted what is anachronistic about zoos.

      connecting reader using a touchy topic

    10. He spends time alone with the giraffe so she might grow comfortable with him, feeds her branches when visitors are around so she grows more comfortable with the scenario. He teaches zoo technicians how to medicate animals without freaking them out. Occasionally, for the most stubborn cases, he prescribes Prozac.

      evidence, crediting subject

    11. But most of the issues are hard to imagine arising in the wild. A brown bear develops a form of obsessive compulsive disorder, repeatedly, almost ritually, smashing his head into a metal door in his enclosure. A harbor seal is uneasy about being treated by the vet

      evidence, sub-claims

    12. though whether that actually happens still seems a little unclear to me — but this was a more modest case, that zoos are doing much less harm to animals than they once did, that they deserve credit for being re-conceived from the zoo animal's point of view. As for what the zoo animal's point of view is, that's the province of Vint Virga, the behaviorist subject of the Times Magazine piece.

      discrediting counter-argument

    13. Zoos have changed incredibly in the past thirty years," a second-generation zoo director named Mark Reed tells Halberstadt. "These days, moats and glass have replaced cages; there are education departments and conservation initiatives. And full-time vets, antibiotics and better diets have doubled and in some cases tripled animals’ life spans in captivity.” Zoo advocates tend to argue that exhibiting animals leads to a stronger conservation movement

      counter-argumenet

    14. Soon, state legislators in California and New York introduced bills making it illegal to keep orcas in captivity. SeaWorld's profits took a hit; CNN and the Times started musing about its long-term viability as a business; protests mounted. But the case against SeaWorld always seemed a little narrowly construed. If it was an abomination to keep a killer whale in a tiny cage, then why was it okay to keep a polar bear in a similarly restrictive enclosure? Sure, SeaWorld's marketing is particularly crass, but if the basic problem is that intelligent, social animals are being kept in inhumane conditions that may be driving them insane, then shouldn't that same principle apply to other species, too? It's hard to think that SeaWorld should be put out of business and not have complicated thoughts about the National Zoo. You can't just stop at the orca; you've got to consider the orangutan

      evidence, connect reader

    15. hat film's subject is Tillikum, a 12,000-pound male killer whale who had been for years a star attraction at Sea World, a celebrated run that ended when he attacked and killed his trainer immediately following a live show.

      evidence, sourced

      connecting reader

    16. One long-term 1983 study of animal mortality at the San Diego Zoo found cannibalism and infanticide, widespread malnutrition, and frequent deaths from tranquilizer use. (An online summary is included in the essay here.

      sourced, evidence

      sub-claim

    1. A more united Earth

      Is this "chapter" the end? If so, this is a poor conclusion. It goes on like a main point until the last two paragraphs. The last paragraph would make a good ending to the article, but there should be a conclusion either added before or right in front of it. Another option is to leave that "chapter" ended and begin a new one for the conclusion.

    2. The internet has no president or parliament. It has no armies or central bank.<img class="progressiveMedia-noscript js-progressiveMedia-inner" src="https://cdn-images-1.medium.com/max/800/1*AezeNHPJR50wa5LAVVhltA.jpeg">Concept for the International Flag of Planet Earth. This ain’t happening anytime soon.But these are the wrong things to look for. The institutions of the future bear little resemblance to the past, because we are dealing with a new form of human community.

      This is a poor opening for a thesis. It is confusing, especially first read. "Okay, cool, internet = no president, Parliament, army, or bank, but don't look for those? Why would I look for those? You brought it up, I wouldn't have even really thought of that. What does that have to do with institutions? Why did we just go from internet to institution?? What's going on??"

      If "The internet has no president or parliament. It has no armies or central bank. But these are the wrong things to look for." is going to be explained later on, then it needs to go after whatever point he is making about the "new form of human community."

      It is just thrown in. If I did this in middle school, I would be told to move it or delete it. Reading ahead, I do not even see where it would be explained before the next "chapter." The point I think he is trying to make is that we should be looking at the institutions as those that run them, but if that is really the case he needs to just rearrange this section and reword those two sentences.

    3. And even if other causes attract less attention, fundraising and awareness campaigns for global issues from climate change to Ebola all depend on the internet

      very debatable opinion

      counter argument could use this

      • why not media? why not introduce them in schools? why does all fundraising and awareness solely depend on the internet?
    4. n 2008, a 33 year-old engineer called Oscar Morales created a Facebook page, One Million Voices Against FARC, to protest against the Colombian terrorist group. Over the next month, hundreds of thousands of people from around the world Liked his page and joined his movement. And in February 2008, millions of people marched in more than 100 cities worldwide to demand that FARC come to the negotiation table. They did

      connect reader, evidence

    5. The extraordinary story of Abdul, the Syrian refugee, is repeated almost daily thanks to online communities. In July, donations poured in for a Filipino schoolboy pictured doing his homework on the streets. A crying Greek pensioner, unable to withdraw money during the debt crisis, was sponsored by a generous Australian. A New York bus monitor received more than $700,000 from 30,000 people in 84 countries after a YouTube video showed her being bullied

      evidence, sourced

      ***are the sources really credible? Many are just pictures or news articles. If the sources are not credible, then it can make the article less/not credible

    6. And far from simply generating empathy, the internet is mobilizing action.There are countless examples, large and small, of what this looks like.

      These need to be placed beside each other. Having both of these sentences separated from one another loosens the meaning both are trying to convey, because when you are reading and something is "returned"/a new paragraph, you are going to mentally put a pause/break in between. Putting in that break is going to make us subconsciously prepare us for a topic change.

    7. Where mass movements once stood for local or national interests, now online communities are moved by global interests far beyond people’s immediate lives and communities.

      needs revision

      connecting reader

      ***the longer I read this, the grumpier I get. I already had decided the author was not credible with the first conjunction thing, but it progressively got worse. I have been reading sections to my cousin and she's making the same "ew" faces that I am making.

    8. ound. But th

      This is literally making me upset.

      I understand that it is acceptable and is not incorrect to start a sentence with a conjunction, but this is just ugly. Yes, they are two clauses and it is broken up properly. If you are going to start a sentence with a coordinating conjunction you need to make sure that whatever you are writing is not going to sound all cut-up, choppy, ugly, and please, for the love of Whoever, do not do it in a formal essay/article/whatever. I keep seeing this all throughout the article and his credibility keeps dropping every single time. I have been trying not to highlight every single one (this is the last time I am going to point it out), but it is driving me nuts!

    9. First, the internet is changing the way the world thinks.In 1938, British Prime Minister Neville Chamberlain famously declared German aggression towards Czechoslovakia as “a quarrel in a faraway country between people of whom we know nothing.”Prague is less than 800 miles from London.Today, planetary scale internet services allow us to connect with people everywhere to a degree never previously possible.

      Weird transition, awkward to read first time. Needs to be more "flow-y" so to speak

    10. As the internet drives social and economic progress, it strengthens the middle class in all nations and brings them into a global middle class, connected by shared tools and knowledge.

      assumption, debatable

      no sources and since this is a topic that should have a citation to show how it drives, strengthens, and brings, and connects, not credible

    11. On August 25, a Syrian refugee was photographed selling pens on the streets of Beirut, clutching his sleeping daughter.

      attention getter, connecting with the reader

      Using a sentence like this will trigger emotion in most people and will also draw in the reader. It is interesting and the media under also helps connect the reader emotionally.

    12. As the internet drives social and economic progress, it strengthens the middle class in all nations and brings them into a global middle class, connected by shared tools and knowledge. And as the international community descends into chaos, a rising planetary community is changing lives and communities everywhere — and bringing the world together

      thesis/main claim

  2. Nov 2015
    1. Which means that the central illusion of the zoo is no longer holding. The animals know.

      I found this interesting, because he explains how animals are starting to think which you don't really think about when you think about the animals at the zoo.

    2. That film's subject is Tillikum, a 12,000-pound male killer whale who had been for years a star attraction at Sea World, a celebrated run that ended when he attacked and killed his trainer immediately following a live show.

      It's a credible source and also a secondary.

    3. But there are advantages to being in zoos, from the animal's perspective — safety, mostly, and access to medical care, and the presence of a team of trained professionals who work very hard to entertain and engage you

      Throwing a bit of counter argument in the middle of the evidence he uses to argue his points that modern zoos may soon be a thing of the past. This counter-argument would be the exact idea I would ask the author. My general opinion is that zoos operating with the purpose of rehabilitating injured or sick animals, and zoos with a high release rate, are beneficial to society and the animals they serve.

    4. A giraffe develops a compulsive fear of men with large cameras. Halberstadt writes, "Disorders like phobias, depression and OCD, documented at zoos, don’t appear to have analogues among animals living in the wild."

      The assumption that mental disorders aren't present in wild animals is false. There have been documented cases of wild animals with PTSD and other related mental illnesses. It stands to mention , though, that the reason we don't see many of them might be because they simply can't survive with that condition. Animals in zoos may have an advantage, then, by receiving proper care and medication for it.

    5. Now we understand that animal cognition and social behavior is for many species pretty sophisticated, and there is a new form of intelligence to define ourselves against: Not what makes us different than a chimpanzee, but what makes us different than Siri?

      This could be a rhetorical strategy. Made me think.

    6. Zoo advocates tend to argue that exhibiting animals leads to a stronger conservation movement, though whether that actually happens still seems a little unclear to me — but this was a more modest case, that zoos are doing much less harm to animals than they once did, that they deserve credit for being re-conceived from the zoo animal's point of view.

      Here he is trying to discredit the information presented by this section.

    7. Last August, the Costa Rican government announced it was closing all its zoos. The new policy, the government declared, was "no cages." (A court ruling has so far kept the zoos open.) I think we're moving slowly toward the same sensibility.

      Examples of why we might approach the closing of all zoos

    8. A giraffe who freaks out about men with large cameras, a brown bear whose cage door is the subject of his obsessive compulsive disorder, a 5,000-pound killer whale who shows her trainer who is boss by dragging him underwater for just about as long as he can live,

      I've never thought of this killer whale situation in this way before. This is very interesting.

    9. I think these fabrications comprise a great deal of what zoos depend upon, and what has begun to fail: a kind of double illusion, in which the people are convinced that they are seeing animals in something like their natural state and the animals, most of whom have never lived in the wild, are convinced that they are at home.

      another claim made by the author

    10. A couple of years ago, the essayist David Samuels published a long piece in Harper's on the Bronx Zoo. It got attention mostly for a discovery Samuels made, in the archives, that the leading figure in the early history of the Bronx Zoo was a eugenicist propagandist named Madison Grant who corresponded with Hitler, and saw his work at the Zoo in the same vein, as rescuing the perfect form of a species before it declined.

      This statement made really affects the reader's emotions strongly by bringing up the concept of Hitler and this woman treating these animals in a Hitler way.

    11. "Zoos have changed incredibly in the past thirty years," a second-generation zoo director named Mark Reed tells Halberstadt. "These days, moats and glass have replaced cages; there are education departments and conservation initiatives. And full-time vets, antibiotics and better diets have doubled and in some cases tripled animals’ life spans in captivity.”

      Here the author provides a source that counter argues the previously stated information about animals living shorter lives and going crazy in zoos.

    12. Sure, SeaWorld's marketing is particularly crass, but if the basic problem is that intelligent, social animals are being kept in inhumane conditions that may be driving them insane, then shouldn't that same principle apply to other species, too? It's hard to think that SeaWorld should be put out of business and not have complicated thoughts about the National Zoo. You can't just stop at the orca; you've got to consider the orangutan.

      I think this is one of the author's main claims. I think he is trying to make the point that you can't just apply one moral concept to one particular animal.

    13. But there are advantages to being in zoos, from the animal's perspective — safety, mostly, and access to medical care, and the presence of a team of trained professionals who work very hard to entertain and engage you — and the disadvantages of being an animal in a place like the National Zoo have not always seemed to outweigh the security. In retrospect, you can see a form of anti-zoo sentiment building, reflected in films like

      begins to form a counter-argument here about the main claim he talks about

    14. (the zoo eradicationists tend to cite a somewhat melodramatic Rilke poem about a panther caged in a Paris zoo: "It seems to him there are / a thousand bars; and beyond the bars no world"),

      The author connects to a poem used by zoo eradicationists to give the reader an bit of background to the topic he is about to discuss.

    15. Soon, state legislators in California and New York introduced bills making it illegal to keep orcas in captivity. SeaWorld's profits took a hit; CNN and the Times started musing about its long-term viability as a business; protests mounted. But the case against SeaWorld always seemed a little narrowly construed.

      I find the source credible and it does bring to my attention that the matter of animals in captivity is now being taken seriously by politicians also.

    1. And some of the most powerful institutions of global collaboration are built on the power of the crowd — with weak hierarchies and emphasis on individuals choosing how to contribute to shared missions.

      Evidence for the community claim? The internet is great at boosting our intrinsic motivation because it gives the individual a lot of control over what they see, what they hear, and what they share.

    2. And the internet itself mobilized using hashtags such as #refugeeswelcome and #refugeecrisis, raising funds for refugees and fighting intolerance against them.

      Hashtags seem to be increasing In importance every day. I think of them as the “catchy jingle” of our time. Hashtags make an issue “trendy,” which comes with its own share of criticism. However, online, word travels much faster when summed up in a hashtag than it does written out in articles, such as this one. And this one isn’t even that long! There’s a lot to be said about how patience is dwindling and we’re becoming dependent on instant gratification, but there’s also a lot to be said for how much good has come of the hashtag.

    3. if more people were connected in developing countries, 160 million people could escape poverty, 140 million new jobs be created and 600 million children receive education.

      I think this is a very, very good point to bring into discussion. Education has insane potential to expand via the internet. Increasing availability and access to the internet could quite literally change the world as we know it.

    4. The internet is the largest community in history — as big as the global population in 1960

      Seems like one of his major points in writing this article. The internet has created a community of communities, in a sense. It's one of the few places where anybody (with access), regardless of race/religion/points of view, can come together and collaborate.

    5. The internet is uniting the world. And it’s going to change all our lives.

      Somebody shared a link to an article about Essena O'Neil to our Diigo group, I think it was Alex? This phrase (and the article itself, really) sums up my counter-argument for Essena's social media comments. She spoke so heavily about how social media destroyed her life by making her restrict calories and retake photos a million times to get "the look," and from her perspective I can see how she says social media is a parasite. But it can also do so much good, because it unites the world. We wouldn't know nearly as much as we do now about what's going on with the BLM movement, with feminism. I don't think our would be nearly as involved in politics as we are now if it weren't for social media. I don't think social media is a parasite, but we need to use it for the right purposes.

    6. Throughout history, the middle class has been the greatest driver of social, economic and political change. The middle classes are opposed to the inequitable concentration of power and resources, against violence, and supporters of civil liberties and the rule of law.

      Agreeing with Jon, mostly. This is a good example of an unsupported claim. How does one make such a sweeping claim about "the middle classes" without supporting evidence?

      It feels like the author knew that the middle class enjoys most the benefits of connectivity and had to find a way to address that. Without addressing that key fact, the argument falls flat. But, again, without a link to some supporting evidence, the whole claim is weak.

    7. When you look at today’s headlines, it’s easy to scoff at the idea that the world is coming together, or the internet has a meaningful role to play. How does a post or a Like stack up against the armies of ISIS, or a column of Russian tanks?

      A nod to the counterargument. That is, the author at least mentions that there is potentially another side to this argument.

    8. [Source: Facebook]

      The growth of a group over time on a trending social media outlet is a poor way to judge change in unity. He could have made a point about how the number of Facebook users has changed over time, then compared that change to the relative change in certain groups.

    9. Europeans demanded action

      I believe action would have been demanded regardless whether social media played a part in it. The author makes the statement as if social media was the reason for the unity, where the reason for unity was actually the crisis itself in this situation.

    10. millions rallied online

      One of the points that he could have used is how speed of information has helped unite the world. They used to have telethons to support international causes. Through the Internet and connected media, "telethons" can be conducted instantly and broadcast widely, further uniting the people through causes.

    11. And an internet that connects the middle classes is immensely powerful.Throughout history, the middle class has been the greatest driver of social, economic and political change. The middle classes are opposed to the inequitable concentration of power and resources, against violence, and supporters of civil liberties and the rule of law.

      The author doesn't state how the connection of the middle class is "immensely powerful". Also, his point about the middle class driving change is arguable as well. His last sentence is quite a generalization.

    12. Today, 3 billion people have access to the internet. Hundreds of millions of people are now part of online communities. Around 1.5 billion people use Facebook, more than a billion people use Google and 900 million people use WhatsApp.Admittedly, more than 4 billion people aren’t online. Right now the middle classes enjoy most of the benefits of connectivity. But that doesn’t lessen the internet’s impact.The internet is the largest community in history — as big as the global population in 1960. It crosses every border and culture. And enough people are connected that the internet has become a planetary infrastructure for communications and collaboration. The tools and knowledge of one nation now belong to all nations.

      The author uses a lot of evidence here, with no source listed. Although all of these statements may very well be true, without a reference it negates the credibility.

    13. ople coming together in new and different ways

      Another good point that could use some scholarly articles. We have gotten to where we are as humans because we are constantly improving and adapting to change. The internet is another adaptation we have to learn to use successfully. There must be some good articles on this...

    14. The institutions of the planetary community undoubtedly remains its weakest aspect. But we are making progress. Every day, millions of people around the world are working together to advance global interests as part of a common human infrastructure. As billions more people join the internet over the coming years, the online community will continue to grow in size and sophistication.

      Good sub-claim but maybe could add evidence. Scholarly research on the future direction of the internet and more details on how much progress we really are making. It's a logical argument but it would be stronger with evidence. Also I just really like this paragraph. What I liked best about this article is it made me feel so positive about the internet. It made me see the good that is happening and made me feel hopeful that this good will only grow as the internet itself does.

    15. simply generating empathy, the internet is mobilizing action.

      Hm. In that last part I don't know if I saw his argument for the internet generating empathy or if it was more elaborating on the connections that are formed. Can we really say that is what is happening here in these cases? That empathy is being generated, or is there something else going on that is resulting in people showing so much support (emotionally, financially, whatever) to people in other places?

      ---Rereading this, this comment seems cold. Maybe someone will understand what I'm trying to say. I just feel like that's a strong thing to say, that the internet is generating empathy. I don't know...

    16. A century ago, Britain and France were lobbing shells at German soldiers on the frontlines of Europe. Today, online friendship networks tie together millions of Brits, French and Germans, and countless other peoples with historical enmity.

      I don't really understand what he's saying here. Is he saying these people are friends now because of the internet? Or that they wouldn't be if it weren't for the internet.

    17. of an astronaut on the International Space Station, join a UN aid worker in a refugee camp in South Sudan, or follow the lives of people from Gaza to Tokyo.

      Here he uses evidence to back up his point about the internet reaching so many people. He is using current events which I don't think would work as a primary source but are effective since they tie to real life events.

  3. Oct 2015
    1. Everyone connected is part of the next chapter in the story of humanity. All of us have a chance to write it together. A united Earth is coming.

      The author did an incredible job with this argument and it was very persuasive. He used secondary evidence for his main claim and brought up many examples of the internet bringing the world together and making a difference. Everyone is connected through the internet and people coming together and using social media to make a huge difference. I remember in elementary school, everyone struggled raising money going door to door. The internet makes everyone in the world aware of things going around everywhere and trying to help. Everyone has a chance to make a difference thanks to the technology and internet.

    2. In 2014, the ALS ice bucket challenge became a global phenomenon, with more than 17 million videos watched on Facebook by more than 440 million people — and more than $100 million raised. And even if other causes attract less attention, fundraising and awareness campaigns for global issues from climate change to Ebola all depend on the internet.

      Evidence(secondary)(credible)/sub-claim how the internet is used to bring the whole world together and make a difference. I remember this challenge, because all my friends and family participated in it and all donated money. It wouldn't have been possible without the internet!

    3. Where mass movements once stood for local or national interests, now online communities are moved by global interests far beyond people’s immediate lives and communities. There are no more faraway countries.

      Sub-claim how the world is coming together and the internet making that possible.

    4. The extraordinary story of Abdul, the Syrian refugee, is repeated almost daily thanks to online communities. In July, donations poured in for a Filipino schoolboy pictured doing his homework on the streets. A crying Greek pensioner, unable to withdraw money during the debt crisis, was sponsored by a generous Australian. A New York bus monitor received more than $700,000 from 30,000 people in 84 countries after a YouTube video showed her being bullied.

      Evidence the author are examples of people helping out around the world. The evidence used is secondary, since they are all articles.

    5. When you look at today’s headlines, it’s easy to scoff at the idea that the world is coming together, or the internet has a meaningful role to play.

      I think the author is trying to make this as a main claim. Many headlines do point out how the world is coming together and people are making a difference by using the internet to like raising money for a family in need. Or to help a community.

    6. Abdul’s story seems a rare story of hope. But the extraordinary thing is that it’s just one example of a much larger global shift taking place today.

      Something so small can become so big via social media and the amount of great human beings we still have out there in the world! I can only hope that so many more people will use social media to spread positive messages throughout the World.

    7. But look beyond the flashpoints of today — and the community of nations — and a very different world comes into sight.

      Telling us not to see groups as nations, but to see groups as the people united over a certain cause or call to action. For example, the LGBT community, the communities sponsoring the countries affected by war, drought, and famine, the communities of people that are able to actually form communities because of the internet.