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  1. Oct 2020
    1. Who might the intended audience be? The intended audience is the class of 2008 graduates of Colorado College

      yes! Can you show evidence that Collins is able tg reach out to that audience?

    2. genre of Collins’ address is a graduation speech because e starts off by saying, “President Celeste, Distinguished Faculty, Staff, Parents, Relatives, Friends and, most importantly, the 2008 graduating class of Colorado College”(Collins). Wait but what are its characteristics?

      Good! Don't forget to answer your question! What are the characteristics of the genre?

    3. In his Commencement Address at Colorado College, Collins’ talks about the importance of gratitude saying,

      I might suggest crafting a topic sentence here that expresses the paragraphs main idea. It will help focus your ideas.

    4. To name a few key topics I will be talking about in each of these works are their genres- the category of writing it falls in, audience- who are these authors talking/writing to, and the purpose the author had writing the passage in which I am about to tell you

      helpful but you may need to edit for punctuation

    1. In the text “How to Tame a Wild Tongue,” the writer, Gloria Anzaldua, analyses the differences between Mexican and American culture.

      see above about topic sentence

    2. The genre of the writing is obviously a commencement address because he states that multiple times

      yes: how does he play against the genre?

    3. Martin Luther Kind Jr. wrote his “Letter from Birmingham Jail” in response to criticism against him

      I might revise this sentence so that it serves as a topic sentence.

    4. Purpose, what you want to achieve with this writing. It is important to include all these components in writing because it makes the writing process go along smoothe

      I don't see.a Works Cited list.

      I don't see a postwrite.

    1. The fact that the GENRE (kind of writing), PURPOSE (why do we write), and AUDIENCE (to whom we are writing; who will read what we have written) are always connected gives us a better understanding of how a person can write well. It is also important to understand that writing can be FICTIONAL or NON-FICTIONAL. What compels us to write (are we forced to do it because it is a school assignment or are we writing to satisfy our own ego in the hope that someone will read it and like it, thus fulfilling the constant human need of external approval, much like a kid riding a bike with no hands down the hill, en route to smashing his head in a tree, screaming “Look, mom!”) should also be taken into account before formulating the ultimate guide to successful writing. The theory of writing (or if you will, the theory of literature), is deeply connected with the science of literature. Since Universities became the most important centers of scientific investigation that a process began since the second half of the XIX Century in order to understand the nature and science of literary studies. In Germany there has been since the XIX Century the expression Literaturkritik, a word that refers to judging literary works and their worth. Literaturwissenschaft is the investigation and analysis of Universities using scientific methods and criteria. While one could go on for the length of approximately four weddings and a funeral, I will use a more direct approach thus saving time and three weddings.  Let us start with the formula for academic writing – e.g. an essay on the evolution of linguistics or a PhD Thesis on Clapton’s Chord Progression. It would be NON-FICTIONAL writing, compelled by the need of a good grade (or at least a good enough grade to succeed in the course). The writing MUST be formal. Any jokes and/or vocabulary that do not belong to that register (such as the everyday “heck”, “gosh”, or “ain’t”) would be as welcome as Stewed Beef being served at an Indian party back in New Delhi, or a severe case of presidential flatulence during the State of the Union Address - which, on that particular occasion, would be transmitted live worldwide. An example of this is Martin Luther King Junior’s letter. His writing is very formal and the choice of words is exemplary, like choosing ‘’seldom’’ instead of ‘’rarely’’(pg. 1), or ‘’moratorium’’ instead of ‘’postpone, delay, ban’’.  One uses those words when he wants to show that he can write, or when he wants to impress his future mother-in-law. Or maybe you just had lunch with the Queen.

      Quite thoughtful but I'd like to see you condense this and provide a sharper message

    2. His audience is not limited to the eight clergymen – it will reach, by extension, each and everyone who reads the open letter.

      true but how exactly does he reach out to these clergymen? evidence?

    3. the genre is, in opposition to the previous case, a formal letter that pinpoints problems and tackles them.

      yes--why does King choose the letter genre? Please explain

    4. obviously, Speech based.

      can you be more precise? commencement address and spoken word poem. Please give evidence of Livingston's understanding of these genres.

    5. his audience is the class of 2016, family, college teachers

      in some sense, yes, but isn't he really aiming his remarks at teachers of underserved students? How do we know this?

    6. When a writer chooses a genre he does it because of his own preference writing style, that preference a

      yet genres carry their own expectations and rules, no?

    7. Imagine an automobile. Picture it. If you have driven one before, you will be surely imagining its inside by now. The cockpit not only provides you with a comfortable seat but also with the means of driving the said automobile. While there may be those who would feel satisfied by sim

      I applaud your effort to create an analogy. I don't often see students do this. But as we discussed, you may want to trim this, right?

    8. Sources: Collins, Billy. “Billy Collins Commencement Address.”Poet Laureate Billy Collins Gives Brilliand and Witty Commencement Address at Colorado College, 2008, 2013,http://www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Commencement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htm.   Anzaldua, Gloria How to Tame a Wild Tongue. 1987, http://www.everettsd.org/cms/lib07/WA01920133/Centricity/Domain/965/Anzaldua-Wild-Tongue.pdf.   King, Martin Luther. “Letter from Birmingham Jail (1963) Abridged.” Birmingham Jail, 16 Apr. 1963, Birmingham, Alabama.  

      Per MLA, please alphabetize and please list sources/version that we actually used--digital PDF in the case of King.

    1. She discusses the several different types of languages she has picked up over the years and of a secret language “a language of rebellion”, called Pachuco. She was told at a very young age that her language was wrong. But at the end of the excerpt, it is clear that Anzaldua will remain proud and faithful to her language and “will no longer be made to feel ashamed of existing.” Gloria states that she is defined by her language and she feels right to speak Chicanos dialect. But the truth is that she is not accepted by the whites as well as the Hispanic people. Eventually, she realized that she cannot be ashamed of her language. 

      seems more summary than analysis

    2. king out to the class that was graduating in 2016 from Harvard Graduate School of Education

      future educators? Please show how he reaches out to them

    3. In Donovan Livingston, Spoken Word Commencement, Address at Harvard was very touching

      Please revise topic sentence to reflect main idea of paragraph?

    4. he clergymen had written the first letter to Dr. King telling him not to go down to Birmingham because “people would get hurt.” (King Jr, 2020) He addressed this letter for the clergymen by using Biblical references.

      are you discussing his audience here as well? Perhaps you should put this into is own paragraph and show patiently how King reaches out to that audience?

    5. is such an interesting letter.

      "is" needs a subject I'd like you to work on this topic sentence so that it captures the paragraph's main idea

    6. the expectations of the genre and the purpose of your writing will help you find your audience

      This will be worth exploring later, right? not sure what this paragraph is doing here

    7. genre as a type of writing that requires particular rhetorical moves

      you are quoting--please use quotation marks and give page reference. I am concerned that you aren't being transparent.

    8. You need to figure out who exactly you’re trying to reach out to, so they can read it, and you need to figure out how much you want your audience to actually know about you when writing. 

      I don't see a postwrite.

    9. S, Pangambam. “Full Transcript: Donovan Livingston’s Harvard Graduate School of Education Student Speech.” The Singju Post, 12 June 2020, singjupost.com/full-transcript-donovan-livingstons-harvard-graduate-school-of-education-student-speech/. 

      Include Livingston as author?

    1. The third example of literature is Donovan Livingston’s commencement address at Harvard Graduate School of Education

      see earlier comment about crafting topic sentence

    2. writing is a memoir c

      is this your topic sentence? will you be focusing on genre? or should you rephrase the topic sentence to be more inclusive?

    3. Sources “Lift Off.” Harvard Graduate School of Education, www.gse.harvard.edu/news/16/05/lift. Anzaldúa, Gloria. “How to Tame a Wild Tongue”. Borderlands / La Frontera: The New Mestiza. Aunt Lute Books, 2012 Print. “Audience.” Wikipedia, Wikimedia Foundation, 29 Sept. 2020, en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Audience.

      Please follow MLA format I see only two of our sources here

    1. The audience this is for is the unknown. The people that are oblivious to this and only have tunnel vision. This could also be just your everyday person that is going about their lives not knowing what is happening behind the scenes.

      please be more precise--Chicanas? Anglo's? Spanish speakers? All?

    2. to the clergymen about the concerns has with America or more specifically, eight white religious leaders. It w

      yes--good. How does he reach out to that audience, exactly? Please show

    3. he genre could be stated as a journal entry or just something for the American people to hear. T

      genre is letter--why does he choose to write in that genre?

    4. Martin Luther King Jr.’s Letter from Birmingham Jail really brings out the horror in America back in the time of segregation.

      transition? topic sentence?

    5. he audience he is focused and designed his speech on is about young kids at a graduating level

      yes: provide evidence of how he reaches out to that audience?

    6. is to step to a college level on thinking and talking to these kids that are about to enter the world.

      not quite purpose: to inspire? to teach? try to be more precise and accurate

    7. King, Martin Luther, Jr. “Letter from Birmingham Jail (1963)[Abridged]” . 16 April 1963. http://okra.stanford.edu/transcription/document_images/undecided/630416-019.pdf Collins, Billy “Commencement Address” (2008) http://okra.stanford.edu/transcription/document_images/undecided/630416-019.pdf Anzaldua, Gloria “How to tame a wild tongue” (2019) https://www.everettsd.org/cms/lib07/WA01920133/Centricity/Domain/965/Anzaldua-Wild-Tongue.pdf

      pretty close to MLA remember to alphabetize the list

    1. Capturing his audience with the highs and lows of a story of struggle and the strength to over come, was so eloquently spoken.

      did you want to discuss audience here?

    2. peech would be placed in a genre

      Can you spend time discussing the genre or genres that Livingston deploys, drawing from the poem for evidence?

    3. In all three of these writing styles I come to believe they had completely different genres

      Now may I assume that this entire paragraph will focus on the use of genre in these authors?

    1. Collins’ purpose was to show students that their future should not be a concern that they need to focus

      try to separate purpose from message, okay?

    2. King decided to write a letter w

      please linger here: why did he choose to write a letter instead of an essay? What does a letter do or what features does it have?

    3. The pieces that will be used to analyze for this assignment are Martin Luther King Jr’s “Letter from Birmingham Jail,” Billy Collins’ commencement address, and Gloria Anzaldua’s “How to Tame a Wild Tongue.” These pieces have vital purposes for their intended audience in a way that speaks to them directly and shows them they are not alone in their world.

      good, clear thesis and opening statement

    4. Anzaldua, Gloria. How to Tame a Wild Tongue. 1987, www.everettsd.org/cms/lib07/WA01920133/Centricity/Domain/965/Anzaldua-Wild-Tongue.pdf. Collins, Billy. “Billy Collins Commencement Address.” Poet Laureate Billy Collins Gives Brilliant and Witty Commencement Address at Colorado College, 2008, 2013, www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Commencement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htm. King, Martin Luther. “Letter from Birmingham Jail (1963) [Abridged].” Birmingham Jail, April 16th. 1963, Birmingham, Alabama. https://liberalarts.utexas.edu/coretexts/_files/resources/texts/1963_MLK_Letter_Abridged.pdf

      Good MLA form

    1. By addressing them in a calm manner, he is easing them into his argument with respect which makes them more likely to understand and engage. His tone shifts from calm to passionate and reflective when he is urging the audience to understand the reasoning behind his efforts and hoping to move them to action. Dr. King makes an appeal to his readers’ hearts and minds while alluding to the moral authority of the Christian tradition, t

      yes--good. Note his audience are clergymen. How does he reach out to them exactly?

    2. Finally, the rhetorical situation in this speech is about what the graduates will do with this new perspective. Will they embrace every day like it’s their last? Will they appreciate everything life is offering? Or will they let life pass them by without even realizing? Billy Collins leaves this choice in the hands of the graduating class along with personal stories and knowledgeable insight into “the real world”. The problem addressed in this situation is the need to slow down enough to appreciate the beauty of life and remember your experiences rather than racing through and looking back to find that you have made no memories and have had no memorable experiences in your life. Billy Collins perfectly executed rhetorical situation in his speech. After hearing his speech, even though I was not the intended audience for his speech it changed my perception of my own life. I have come to realize that life is not about having a timeline. I have learned not to compare my life with others, and to go at my own pace. Even though I may feel behind in life because all of my friends have careers, are married, have families, and some have their very first home. Instead of comparing and wishing I had the same, I try and take it day by day, and focus on my goals while also experiencing the pleasures life has to offer. Traveling and making memories, making new connections, and spending what little time I may have left with my family is how I choose to slow down and not rush things. I have my whole life ahead of me, I do not need to get everything done at once.

      not sure what this paragraph is adding

    3. believe he drew upon his understanding of audience by understanding that these college graduates would not appreciate sitting through an hour long speech

      good--please provide evidence showing how he reaches out to that audience

    4. However, if you were told to deliver a commencement speech to a group of college graduates, it would be easier to write your speech knowing the age of the audience, their educational level, as well as the purpose of what you would be speaking about.

      not sure that this follows from an understanding of genre

    5. hat being said, purpose can go hand in hand with the audience.             Purpose is defined according to dictionary.com as “the

      I appreciate the effort at transition

    6. I will first begin with an introduction of the definitions to the key terms I will be discussing, starting with the audience

      you seem to be in control from the start--good

    7. Billy Collins commencement speech-https://www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Commencement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htmDonovan Livingston’s commencement speech-https://www.facebook.com/watch/?v=10153893399331387Martin Luther King Jr’s Letter from Birmingham Jail-http://okra.stanford.edu/transcription/document_images/undecided/630416-019.pdf

      not bad MLA form but you will need to include date of publication and begin with author's last name with the list alphabetized

    1. She explained how, “at Pan American University, I and all Chicano students were required to take two speech classes. Their purpose: to get rid of our accents.”(Pg.34), w

      I think you need a topic sentence

    2. The genre is a Commencement Address.

      Why not put this into its own paragraph and comment in more detail on Collins' use of the genre? How does he play against genre expectations?

    3. n writing, audience, genre, and purpose are clear components to a complete, clean, and well thought out piece of writing. I have chosen to analyze the Billy Collins, Commencement Address at Colorado College, Martin Luther King Jr.’s “Letter from Birmingham Jail” and Gloria Anzaldua, “How to Tame a Wild Tongue”. The author’s choice of audience, genre and purpose will drive my analysis of the three readings but, before getting into the analysis, I want to discuss purpose, genre, and audience.

      a clear and helpful introduction

    4. I feel as though each other has a firm grasp on their genre, audience and purpose and they all have a complete, clean, and well thought out piece of writing.

      I don't see a list of Works Cited. Nor do I see a postwrite.

    1. The genre is a book

      can you be more precise? it's an article or chapter but isn't it an autobiography? an essay? a combination of the two, with poetry there as well? Slow down your analysis, okay?

    2. The audience is the Clergymen because he was writing back to them

      yes but linger here for more analysis: how does he reach out to this group, exactly?

    3. The genre is a letter,

      good Can you pause here to do more analysis: why a letter? or. what is there about a letter that is different from other genres? what are the expectations for the genre?

    4. The genre, purpose, and the audience all work together to relay the message to the students in a way they will understand and remember through their lives.

      okay--this seems to be your topic sentence. Want to start with it? Then I suggest you analyze the source using these terms. I'm sensing mostly summary in this paragraph.

    5. read a speech he wrote to the graduating class of 2008 at Colorado College.

      I wonder if your topic sentence could point more directly to the main idea of the paragraph

    1. The audience Donovan reaches is anyone that is listening, whether it’s the students, faculty, parents or people at home :   

      please try to be more precise: his intended audience are teachers and their underserved students, no?

    2. Livingston then talks about his purpose which is that he hopes everyone will not be bound by chains of typical teaching.

      try to separate purpose from message?

    3. And again the genre of a memoir or diary

      you are right to see a mix of genres but I wonder why you don't focus on genre in one place rather than scatter your observations through the paragraph?

    4. purpose she is trying to get across to the audience is that people who speak a different language other than English is being robbed of it.

      try to keep purpose and message separate?

    5. Anzaldua, Gloria. How to Tame a Wild Tongue. , n.d.. Print. King, Martin L. Letter from Birmingham Jail. London: Penguin, 2018. Print. Livingston, Donovan/ M. W. F. R. W. Lift Off: From the Classroom to the Stars. Random House Inc, 2017. Print.

      Not bad MLA form but I'd like you to list the actual versions that we used--the digitial rather than print.

    1. He continues to convey the need to act now, stating for too long they have been told to wait, because of this or that.  He is telling the Clergymen in Alabama that he will not wait for a time when it is convenient for the government, they have waited long enough

      you are summarizing his message rather than analysing his rhetoric, right?

    2. Anzaldúa, Gloria  “How to Tame a Wild Tongue,” in Borderlands: The New Mestiza – La Frontera, (San Francisco: Aunt Lute Book Company, 1987)

      pretty close to MLA--just remember to use the actual source in front of you--in this case the digital or pdf

    1. King is addressing the clergy men as this is his anticipated audience as they were who his letter was addressed too.

      good. Can you show evidence of how he reaches out to that audience?

    2. Genre being the term we use for categorization of works of writing; that can be separated by particular style, form, subject matter, etc.

      I like the definition but note the sentence fragment, here and elsewhere

    3. King, Martin L. Letter from Birmingham Jail. San Francisco: Harper San Francisco, 1994. Print

      please list the source that you actually used--digital source

    4. (n.d.). Retrieved from https://www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Commencement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htm

      not in MLA format

    1. The intended audience for this letter was the Birmingham clergymen who posted a letter where they complained about the actions of Dr. King.

      good--show evidence of how he reaches out to that particular audience?

    2. In Martin Luther King’s “Letter from Birmingham Jail” the main focus is related to the segregation of the Afro-American population and very important points are mentioned such as the need of the peaceful provocation, the Church’s attitude towards social injustices, etc

      Please revise topic sentence/transition to reflect the core idea of your paragraph?

    3. hat is part of understanding what genre this text is, and the way I look at it I believe it is sort of an emotional and reflective autobiography since she talks about the struggles in her life and she starts by showing how harsh things were but she starts becoming more hopeful as long as the time goes b

      Can you be more precise as to genre? autobiography? essay? poetry?

    4. think she wanted to not just target literary scholars but also send a message to people who have experienced alienation, and also Spanish speakers along with non-Spanish speakers because there are a lot of them in America.

      Can you be more precise: Anglos and Chicanas?

    5. This assignment has been very challenging and required me to use the knowledge I gained in high school with the Socratic Seminars and some short discussions we had in class. I organized my essay by authors because I thought it would be easier to mention everything about that specific piece in a whole paragraph. Is there anything specific that I should elaborate? Did I include everything required?

      helpful but try to slow things down a bit, okay? Elaborate, especially on the choices you made

    6. King, Martin L. Letter from the Birmingham Jail. San Francisco: Harper San Francisco, 1994. Print. Anzaldua, Gloria. “How to Tame a Wild Tongue.”Fifty Great Essays. Boston: Pearson, 2011. Collins, Billy. “Billy Collins’ Commencement Address at Choate-Rosemary Hall.”

      not quite MLA form. Please list actual sources that you used--digital sources

    1. An example of his picture painting description is “When you take a cross country drive and find it necessary to sleep night after night in the uncomfortable corners or your automobile because no motel will accept you; when you are humiliated day in and day out by nagging signs reading “white” and “colored;” when your first name becomes “nigger” and your middle name becomes “boy” (however old you are)…” (King). In this quote you can see how King utilized audience, purpose and genre in his delivery. He could’ve easily said “When you go on a road trip and aren’t allowed in the motels; when you have to follow the “white” and “colored” signs; when you get called horrible names everyday.” Instead King knew the letter was directed towards white Clergymen needing to see through the eyes of an African American dealing with unjust prejudice. So King brought deep true to life details into his letter to describe how it feels in or

      not sure what this has to do with genre