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    1. ad a speech that was so well put together and it was presented perfectly

      see my earlier comment about need for topic sentences t begin paragraphs

    2. His purpose was to educate his audience on what was happening in the world at the time.

      to educate, yes? about the injustice of legal segregation? Please be precise

    3. Martin Luther King Jr. was one of the most influential people during the time that he was alive. Wh

      new paragraph? pease skip a space Is this your topic sentence? If so, you likely will need to revise it to reflect the man point of the paragraph, no?

    4. In the commencement speeches presented by Martin Luther King Jr, Donovan Livingston, and Gloria Anzaldua

      is this accurate or logical.? Are all three commencement addresses?

    5. hey all had a purpose to write their piece so it had a meaning behind it. The way they all used these writing tactics was unique but they all used them in a way that created an impact.

      I don't see a post write. Nor do I see a Works Cited list.

    1. ng to reach his other people in his clergy. I believe this because he says ” My dear Fellow Clergymen,

      yes--good. But now show how King reaches out to that audience

    2. I believe the genre of this work is that it is a speech.

      more precisely, a commencement speech. Please show how Collins plays with the genre

    3. analyzing three works and how they deal with our key terms.

      rephrase for clarity? I will be analyzing three works through the use of key terms

    1. audience who have experienced similar prejudice and shame for their cultural background

      audience--Chicanas? Angos? try to be precise, okay?

    2. She was told to stay silent and to get rid of her accent in order to fit-in amongst Americans, and was afraid to speak Spanish around Latinos, Hispanics, and even Chicanos, as she grew up being told that Chicano Spanish is “poor Spanish” (Anzaldua). However, she refused to tame her “wild tongue” and fought back against the discrimination, choosing instead to thrive in and appreciate her culture. As she states, “I will no longer be made to feel ashamed of existing. I will have my voice: Indian, Spanish, white. I will have my serpent’s tongue – my woman’s voice, my sexual voice, my poet’s voice. I will overcome the tradition of silence.” (Anzaldua)

      note the summary and long quotation. I'd like to see more analysis and commentary

    3. Another author who presented their writing through a commencement address would be Collins.

      good effort at transition but see my comment above about topic sentences

      Please describe how Collins plays with the genre of the commencement address

    4. riting’s genre as being a motivational speech

      genre: commencement address and spoken word poem purpose: to motivate

      Can you pause to describe the genres and provide evidence for how Livingston exploits each? What makes this a poem, for example? And why did Livingston choose that genre for this event?

    5. For Livingston, he presented his writing through a spoken word commencement address

      Do you mean this to be your topic sentence? In other words will this paragraph focus just on Livingston's choice of genre? If not you likely should revise this first sentence t=to accurately reflect the point of the paragraph?

    6. Three authors that accomplished successful writing and communication by using these elements include Donovan Livingston’s commencement address at Harvard, Billy Collins’ commencement address at Colorado College, and Gloria Anzaldua’s “How to Tame a Wild Tongue”. Within all of these writings, audience, purpose, and genre were all used together in their writing to communicate effectively. 

      This opening paragraph is quite helpful--thanks.

    7. Anzaldúa, Gloria. “How to Tame a Wild Tongue.” 1987. PDF fileLivingston, Donovan. “Donovan Livingston’s Harvard Graduate School of Education Student Speech.” YouTube, uploaded by Harvard Graduate School of Education, 25 May. 2016, www.youtube.com/watch?v=9XGUpKITeJMCollins, Billy. “Commencement Speech Transcript.” Graduation Wisdom, 2 Oct. 2013, www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Commencement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htm.

      close to MLA form Remember to alphabetize by author's last name And for Anzaldua include web address of PDF?

    1. y how he expresses his words making them really want you to keep listening to what he has to say.

      What genres does he choose to write/perform in? evidence?

    2. His audience were the people that were to say get down on themselves a

      Can you be more precise--his audience were these young graduates, right? How does he connect with theme?

    3. In the Billy Collins commencement speech it was open to everyone to pretend to know more than you do, specifically how in the world you got to the point in life of where you are now

      I'd like to see you revise this to make it a more helpful and meaingful topic sentence, suing our key terms

    4. The intended audience of MLK’s commencement speech was the fellow clergy because he wrote specifically to them.

      you seem to have said this no? I sense the need for a sharper focus and organziation in this paragraph

    5. Martin Luther King Jr uses ethical and emotional appeals, and figurative language, as well as reasoning to appeal to his audiences effectively.

      can you elaborate and show how King connects with his audience?

    6. An audience is a group of readers who reads a particular piece of writing and react during and after reading or listening to the piece of writing. An author’s purpose is his reason for or intent in writing. An author’s purpose is to persuade the reader, or even inform the reader.

      good, helpful definitions and opening paragraph

    7. genre is a category of artistic composition, which is characterized by similarities in form, style, or subject matter

      good definition: your words? if you are quoting a source, please use quotation marks and cite source

    8. The main types of literature that they used were genre, audience, and purpose.

      instead of types of literature let's call these useful tools for writers, okay?

    9. The purpose of your piece which contains the genre as well is the writing itself and whatever you just wrote, that is what the audience will be reading when you are finished

      I see no Works Cited list nor a postwrite.

    1. His audience is to whom he is addressing his letter- his fellow clergymen. King begins his letter with “My Dear Fellow Clergymen” (King 1). This address shows who the audience is

      yes--good. Please give additiona evidence showing how King reaches out to this audience

    2. writing an informational letter

      okay--please spend time describing the traits of the genre and give reasons as to why King chose the genre?

    3. Collins writes this speech in hopes to inspire

      is this about purpose? do you want to use that term to help guide your reader? want to break this long paragraph up?

    4. what genre this commencement address belongs to, it is key to recognize that this is a spoken piece. Therefore it is considered a

      okay--good. Now describe the typical trairts of the genre and show how Collins plays with those cliches

    5. ollins spoke the complex language of young adults and was fluent.

      yes--please show how he connects with the audience (you seem to do so later in the paragraph. Want to move that part earlier?

    6. Billy Collins is a prime example of knowing who your audience is.

      if this is your topic sentence for the paragraph then the whole paragraph is about audience?

    7. More specifically: the structure of the text, or the way the work is getting to the audience, through a blog, speech, or a book.

      not quite a sentence

    8. Collins, Billy. “Commencement Address .” Poet Laureate Billy Collins Gives Brilliand and Witty Commencement Address at Colorado College, 2008, www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Commencement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htm.

      good form but list needs to be alphabetized and you are missing a source, right?

    9. Determining the genre of the piece helps to reach the audience in the best way. Obtaining these factors and implementing them make a piece of literature successful.  

      I don't see a postwrite.

    1. ing to tell someone how to pronounce her name because she didn’t sound american enough. Although when it comes to speaking Spanish or to her culture and the people in it she also doesn’t fit in ver

      seems mostly summary rather than analysis Have you analyzed the source's genre?

    2. nuckles with a sharp ruler. I remember being sent to the comer of the classroom for “talking back” to the Anglo teacher when all I was trying to do was tell her how to pronounce my name. “If you want to be American, speak ‘American.’ If you don’t like it, go back to Mexico where you belong.”  (Gloria Anzaldua). Also on page nine paragraph three in “How to Tame a Wild Tongue” she says “I will no longer be made to feel ashamed of existing. I will have my voice: Indian, Spanish, white. I will have

      I see a lot of quoting but not much analysis and reflection on your part: please stay focused on your task at hand--to analyze the source for genre, audience, and purpose

    3. While Donovan Livingston was in high school for his end of the year speech he wanted to do a poem but his teacher said if he was to do that she would cut him mic,

      see my earlier comment about the need to start paragraphs with topic sentences

    4. he wanted to focus on the evil of segregation because of how bad Birmingham was out of all the states.

      you seem to be summarizing his message rather than analyzing his understanding of genre, audience,and purpose

    5. in the letter King directs his attention to eight clergymen

      okay--good. Youve identified his immediate audience. Can you now give evidence as to how he reaches out that audience?

    6. For example in the “letter from Birmingham jail” we are told on page one paragraph three “I am in Birmingham because injustice is here.”

      I wonder if you want to start a paragraph, especially a first body paragraph with "For example." I'd like to see you use a topic sentence that prepares your reader for the main idea of the paragraph, okay? I suggest using our three terms and naming King's "Letter."

    7. Genre being the type of text they are writing, audience being the people they were trying to reach, and purpose what they are trying to accomplish.

      good definitions--but note that these are not sentences, right?

    1. Her purpose of this reading was to say that no matter what ethnicity or culture you are, be proud of who you are and to not let the inequality and discrimination affect you.

      you seem to be merging purpose with message no?

    2. Commencement address hi

      he draws on two genres: commencement speech and spoken word performance. Please spend time analyzing each and offering evidence in support?

    3. This quote shows how we were all born differently so embrace yourself. Throughout his speech he tries to inspire people to use your voice. Look past the injustice in the school system and reach goals. He also says:

      I'd like to see less summary or paraphrase and more analysis?

    4. don’t waste even more time worrying about the things on your “To Do” list” (Collins). In this quote he explains how no one is worried about what you didn’t get to do in your future, they only will remember what you did so focus on the present. He also said “When your time is done, you will not be remembered for what clothes you wore or what kind of car you drove.”(Collins). I thought this quote was super important because this affects our time now, even though the speech was spoken more than a decade ago.  I

      you seem to be summarizing and quoting but not staying true to your analysis, I believe.

    5. the genre is a commencement address. .Unlike many other commencement addresses, he tells the students and staff to not focus on the future but to focus on the present instead.

      okay--good. How does he play with the genre's cliches?

    6. Next, in the Billy Collins’ Commencement Address, he was speaking to many

      please revise this topic sentence to make it more helpful and meaningful for your reader?

    7. intended audience was supposed to be eight Clergymen from the south.

      is this meant as your topic sentence? Is the whole paagraph to focus on King's understanding of his audience/ Please provide evidence of King's connecting with this particular audience

    8. King, Martin Luther. “Martin Luther King Jr.’s Letter From Birmingham Jail.” Letter from a Birmingham Jail [King, Jr.], www.africa.upenn.edu/Articles_Gen/Letter_Birmingham.html.

      date of publication?

    9. Billy Collins’ Commencement Address at Colorado College.” Poet Laureate Billy Collins Gives Brilliand and Witty Commencement Address at Colorado College, 2008, www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Commencement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htm.

      author's last name first, then first name.

    10. Anzaldua, Gloria. “How to Tame a Wild Tongue .” How to Tame a Wild Tongue, www.everettsd.org/cms/lib07/WA01920133/Centricity/Domain/965/Anzaldua-Wild-Tongue.pdf.

      year of original publication?

    1. King uses pathos to evoke strong emotion in the clergymen to prov

      good. Can you provide additional evidence as to how King connects with this particular audience?

    2. ad an understanding in his piece, and he spoke in a way that was powerful, full of intent, and respectful. In the troublesome, oppressive times h

      slow down and focus on the analysis--first of genre--why did he choose this genre? What does it mean to write in it? Evidence?

    3. n this piece, and it is evident because to get his point across to the graduates, he writes in a humorous way. For example, Collins says “I think you deserve to know that this will be a finite experience. It is well-known in the world of public speaking that there is no pleasure you can give an audience that compares to the pleasure they get when it is over, so you can look forward to experiencing that pleasure 13 minutes from now.

      good use of source

    4. but he plays with this genre by adding elements

      please elaborate and give evidence on how he plays with the genre: what are the typical traits of the commencement genre?

    5. he genre is a commencement address, the audience is the graduates, and the purpose is to educate and inspire the graduates to live in the moment

      good, clear and informative topic statement

    6. Collins, Billy. “Billy Collins Commencement Speech”. 19 May 2008. https://www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Commencement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htm Accessed 29 Sept. 2020. King, Martin Luther, Jr. “Letter from Birmingham Jail (1963) [Abridged]”. 16 April 1963. https://liberalarts.utexas.edu/coretexts/_files/resources/texts/1963_MLK_Letter_Abridged.pdf Accessed 29 Sept. 2020. Livingston, Donovan. “Lift Off”. 25 May 2017. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9XGUpKITeJM Accessed 29 Sept. 2020.

      good MLA form--no need for bullets

    1. While on the topic of racism, Gloria Anzaldua writes a different type of piece to bring knowledge to the public

      new paragraph? Is the topic going to be genre?

    2. n. King was one of the leading people advocating for change. In this letter, racism is brought up in comparison to other issues by saying, “We should never forget that everything Adolf Hitler did in Germany was “legal” and everything the Hungarian freedom fighters did in Hungary was “illegal.” It was “illegal” to aid and comfort a Jew in Hitler’s Germany.” (King, 18)

      I sense a loss of focus: weren't you going to analize King'e use of the letter genre?

    3. On the other hand, there are completely different types of writing like Martin Luther King Jr’s Letter from Birmingham Jail

      do you want to create a new paragraph?

    4. f this is Martin Luther King Jr’s Letter from Birmingham Jail in which he directs the letter to the clergymen at the time

      yes--good. Now you've started your analysis in your intro paragraph. Did you mean to do this? And if this is the start of your analysis shouldn't you provide evidence? Or is this section meant to be a transition to the next section? I'm confused.

    5. Poet Laureate Billy Collins Gives Brilliand and Witty Commencement Address at Colorado College, 2008, www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Commencement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htm.  Anzaldua, Gloria. How to Tame a Wild Tongue , www.everettsd.org/cms/lib07/WA01920133/Centricity/Domain/965/Anzaldua-Wild-Tongue.pdf.  Letter from a Birmingham Jail [King, Jr.], www.africa.upenn.edu/Articles_Gen/Letter_Birmingham.html. 

      not in MLA format

    1. Disruptive. Talkative. A distraction. With a passion that transcends the confines of my consciousness — Beyond your curriculum, beyond your standards. I stand here, a manifestation of love and pain, With veins pumping revolution. I am the strange fruit that grew too ripe for the poplar tree. I am a DREAM Act, Dream Deferred incarnate. I am a movement — an amalgam of memories America would care to forget My past, alone won’t allow me to sit still.

      I would discourage long quotations but certainly I would ask you to spend a good deal of time commenting on the significance of a quotation like this.

    2. ) Throughout the speech, he really had all the aspects that a good speech has. He also really knew who his audience and what his purpose was. He knew that he needed to real in the graduates and give them advice as they go on.

      you really need to spend more time analyzing each of these aspects and providing evidence in support. See how thin and rushed this is?

    3. t park that has just been advertised on television, and see the tears welling up in her little eyes when she is told that Funtown is closed to colored children, and see the depressing clouds of inferiority begin to form in her little mental sky, and see her begin to distort her little personality by unconsciously developing a bitterness toward white people; when you have to concoct an answer for a five-year-old son who is asking in agonizing pathos: “Daddy, why do white people treat colored people so mean?” when you take a cross country drive and find it necessary to sleep night after night in the uncomfortable corners of your automobile because no motel will accept you;” (King)

      This long passage, as beautiful as it is, blurs your focus in this paragraph: what are you trying to show?

    4. His genre is touched

      can you say more about the genre and its typical qualities?Slow your analysis down? I may suggest to do so by breaking up these paragraphs

    5. Billy Collin’s speech that he gave at Colorado University was very insightful and had a lot of good advic

      Would you consider revising this to make a more proper topic sentence?

    6. Livingston, Donovan.  “Lift Off” . 25 May 2017. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9XGUpKITeJM King, Martin Luther, Jr. “Letter from Birmingham Jail (1963) [Abridged]” . 16 April 1963. https://liberalarts.utexas.edu/coretexts/_files/resources/texts/1963_MLK_Letter_Abridged.pdf Collins, Billy. “Commencement Speech”. 19 May 2008. https://www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Commencement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htm

      pretty good form--please alphabetize

    1. He says this as a piece of life advise to give to the newly graduated students who may feel how fleeting and overwhelming it is to focus on the present.

      have you discussed the genre, yet? I really can't tell

    2. His audience is graduate students at Colorado College. In the beginning, Collins is very clear as to introduce what he is speaking about, as well as how long his speech will last. He uses humor to relate and intrigue his listeners. “There is no pleasure you can give an audience that compares to the plea

      good use of source

    3. Billy Collins speech is an inspiring read, something almost anyone could take from

      see my earlier comment about setting up a topic sentence

    4. By writing this he shows his understanding of sincerity and relation he has with the clergymen since they are men of Christian faith. He does this many times in his letter by referring to biblical teachings such as Apostle Paul by saying, “and just as the Apostle Paul left his village of Tarsus and carried the gospel of Jesus Christ to the far corners of the Greco-Roman world, so am I. compelled to carry the gospel of freedom beyond my own home town. Like Paul, I must constantly respond to the Macedonian call for aid.

      good use of source So this paragraph focuses on King's audience?

    5. While Martin Luther King Jr. wrote to his clergymen from jail, in response to judgement of the nonviolent protests that occurs in Birmingham, Alabama in 1963

      Please revise so that this becomes a helpful topic sentence. It's a fragment right now and doesn't point toward the main idea of the paragraph does it?

    6. All three authors are speakers, therefore the genre of their writing is speech. B

      is this accurate? Note the comma fault--commas being used as period

    7. Collins, Billy. “Billy Collins Poet Laureate Colorado College, May 19, 2008.” Poet Laureate Billy Collins Gives Brilliand and Witty Commencement Address at Colorado College, 2008, 19 May 2008, www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Commencement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htm. King, Martin Luther. Letter from Birmingham Jail. 1963, okra.stanford.edu/transcription/document_images/undecided/630416-019.pdf.

      missing a source?

    8. Once you know who your audience will be and what your purpose is, it is up to you to decide what genre of literature you use to create successful content for your message.

      I don't see a postwrite

    1. his quote reveals the intended audience of the letter as those who disapprove of his work and begins to shed light on the purpose of this writing. The purpose being, to explain

      focus? is this paragarph about purpose? audience?

    2. The purpose of Collins’s address is to instill the sentiment that time is a precious thing

      try to be more precise: you seem to confuse purpose with message

    3. his line with the quotes mentioned earlier without a doubt shows this speech was meant for a more mature and educated audience.

      can you be more precise? it's meant for these graduates, right? Can you show how he connects with them?

    4. genre is a speech as it shows characteristics that can be thought-provoking

      Can you say more about what we expect from the commencement genre?

    5. One example of these concepts coming together is shown in Billy Collin’s commencement address to the 2008 graduating class of Colorado College.

      What is your focus in this paragraph? Perhaps you can revise the topic sentence to give your reader some help? Is it genre?

    6. Finally, purpose, is the reason an author writes. For example with the protests going on throughout the US a journalist might look to these events for inspiration to write and express their thoughts and ideas on the matter. All of these concepts are essential in writing a literary body of work to identify the feeling it is trying to convey, to whom the writing is trying to reach, to the reason why the author writes. Sometimes these concepts even overlap one another. To reuse a previous example a story in the genre of horror, it’s purpose is to scare and make the reader uneasy and it’s for these characteristics most books in the horror genre are me

      This opening paragraph is helpful

    1. an audience who relates to what she has gone through because they are going through the same, unlike her King writes to people who don’t see like him and people who may not understand what he’s going through, in this instance its white people in power in the United States that have control over certain laws and regulations. ” I came across your recent statement calling our present activities “unwise and untimely.” Seldom, if ever, do I pause to answer criticism of my work and ideas … But since I feel that you are men of genuine good will and your criticisms are s

      who is his intended audience, exactly? the 8 clergy, right? How does he connect with them? Show?

    2. n for the essay genre, the essay genre is used to make a point about something important. She’s writes about her experiences

      so the genre is essay and autobiography?

    3. chapter of their life, Guidance and inspiration. “Time, on the other hand, is composed of moments. And by arresting one of those moments, by concentrating fully on it, by smashing it under the intensity of your gaze.”(

      focus on purpoe, okay? you seem to confuse purpose with mesaage

    4. Collins also clearly identifies his audience when saying a statement like that, he knows he’s talking to recent college graduates who are relaxed and excited, but most importantly he knows they will understand and relate with the joke

      okay good

      btw note how you use commas like periods

    5. Him saying this shows you how unique he is as a writer and how flexible he can be within his genre. Y

      Doesn't this show how well he understand his audience? Please rephrase your comment?

    6. dress at Colorado College, Martin Luther King Jr. “Letter from Birmingham Jail”, and Gloria Anzaldua, “How to Tame a Wild Tongue”. All three of these pieces perfectly demonstrate the proper use of genre, audience, and purpose. To further understand these subjects were going to look at each piece individually and analyze the genre, audience, and purpose of each

      helpful--thanks

    7. Anzaldúa, Gloria. “How to Tame a Wild Tongue”. Borderlands / La Frontera: The New Mestiza. Aunt Lute Books, 2012. Print.

      not bad form but please use the versions that we use in class--digital, here and for Collins

    8. This assignment reminded me about when I write the three short assignments, those assignments helped me to understand genre, audience, and purpose. This assignment was different from the short assignments because it allowed me to connect all three of the themes together. I drew upon my knowledge from the short assignments to better write this essay.

      please finish, okay? What choices did you make when drafting/revising? What questions do you have about your draft right now? Slow down?

    1. Gloria Anzaldua’s audience is most likely people outside of her ethnic group such as Chicanos. Chicanos are children in Spanish, the Chicanos weren’t treated that good and they couldn’t speak more then one language, unless something bad would happen.

      yes: but I sense a loss of focus in this paragraph: is it about audience? purpose?

    2. Gloria Anzaldua was born in 1942 in the Rio Grande Valley of South Texas. Anzaldua is trying to spread positive words but not only does she explore this but she also delves into topics such as racism, and sexism.

      you need a topic sentence, no?

    3. In “How to Tame a wild tongue” written by Gloria Anzaldua which she analyzes the social and cultural differences between Mexican culture and American culture and ho

      not sure what the focus of this paragraph here is: genre? yet you mention that only at the end?

    4. The genre is in opposite to the previous case which is a formal letter that explains problems and fixes them.

      can you say a bit more about what is special about the letter genre?

    5. Continuing in Martin Luther King’s letter also shows genre, purpose, and audience.

      you may have to tweak this transition to make it grammatical

    6. . Livingston reaches an audience by getting the teachers and students attention while talking about the change of education. Donovan states tha

      good

    7. The genre is the speec

      perhaps you can be more explicit? the genre is both a commencement speech and a spoken word poem. Please provide evidence from the speech that he understand each genre.

    8. Luther King Jr. “Letter from Birmingham Jail” and, Donovan Livingston’s.

      to be consistent you should give just the authors' names or authors and titles of works.

    9. Writers make all kinds of choices and judgements based on what many textbook calls the “rhetorical situation”,  they select a  genre in which to compose, they aim to reach a particular audience, and they write with a particular purpose in mind, among other choices.

      You know you are quoting, right? Please punctuate as a quotation (and cite source).

    10. Blau, Susan, and Kathryn Burak. Writing in the Works. Fourth ed., Cenage Learning, 2016

      please alphabetize and include place of publication

    11. King, Martin Luther. “Letter to Birmingham.” Received by Bishop C. C. J. Carpenter, Bishop Joseph A. Durick, Rabbi Milton L. Grafman, Bishop Nolan B. Harmon, Rev. George H. Murray, Rev. Edward Ramage, Rev. Earl Stallings, Birmingham City Jail, 16 Apr. 1963, Birmingham, Alabama. Livingston, Donovan, director. Donovan Livingston’s Harvard Graduate School of Education Student Speech. Youtube, Harvard Graduate School of Education, 25 May 2016, youtu.be/9XGUpKITeJM.

      I see two out of the three sources here.

    1. In conclusion, I think that King, Collins and Anzaldua all used a different genre to connect with their audience and deliver them a message with a strong purpose.

      can you say more as to your Theory of Writing?