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  1. Feb 2019
    1. he speaker Faten Aggad-Clerx states that “stereotypes harm dignity, but the truth of the matter is that stereotypes sell”, this states that stereotypes are easily believed by most.

      edit for comma fault

    2. A genre is a category of artistic composition, they are characterized by similarities in form, style, or subject matter (mainly, what type of text the author is writing). The purpose is the goal that the author is trying to accomplish in his/her writing. The audience are the people that the author writes/addresses to in the story. This essay will describe the genre, purpose, and audience in three different stories and how these three terms can be linked to a theory in writing.

      a good, helpful opening

    3. King, Martin Luther. “Letters from Birmingham Jail.” Web.cn.edu, The Atlantic Monthly, 0AD, web.cn.edu/kwheeler/documents/Letter_Birmingham_Jail.pdf. Clerx, Faten Aggad. “Every 60 Seconds in Africa…” PechaKucha 20×20, 29 Feb. 2016, www.pechakucha.com/presentations/every-60-seconds-in-africa-dot-dot-dot. Anzaldua, Gloria. “How to Tame a Wild Tounge.” Www.everettsd.org, 0AD, www.everettsd.org/cms/lib07/WA01920133/Centricity/Domain/965/Anzaldua-Wild-Tongue.pdf.

      close to MLA format. Make sure to include date of publication and date of access, and alphabetize your list, which should be titled "Works Cited"

    1. 2016 Harvard graduates as well as the friends, faculty, staff, family and alumni in an auditorium in Harvard.

      be more precise: he is speaking to future teachers, right?

    2. Billy Collins, Commencement Address at Colorado College was the second source i picked

      Provide a more helpful topic sentence? In other words, use the terms, genre, audience, purpose in the sentence?

    3. Some of the information the speaker did portray was very interesting to me due to the way that she introduced it to me. As an example when she was explaining the news article titles and who wrote them I was astonished to know what the differences were between two different titles and who had wrote them

      you seem to have lost your focus (which is to analyze the source in terms of its genre, audience, and purpose

    4. Whereas when she would state her hypothesis on the topic she would become more gleeful and smerky with her words and her attitude when she speaks, for example after showing the photo of Europe she would talk about the problems of other countries using “what if?”

      fragment

    5. The genre is a type of writing from an informative report to a blog posting, and each type of writing requires rhetorical moves. Purpose is defined as what you are trying to accomplish in your writing. Finally, the audience is who you are writing for.

      okay: good

    6. Aggad-Clerx, Faten. “PechaKucha 20×20 – Every 60 Seconds in Africa”. PechaKucha 20×20. N.p., 29 Feb. 2016. Web. 10 Feb. 2019. https://www.pechakucha.com/presentations/every-60-seconds-in-africa-dot-dot-dot.

      good MLA form. Just a minor change: put web location in place of the word "web" and before the date of access. Then all is set! Nice.

    1. What is the point you are trying to make or solidify?

      try to be more precise? Purpose refers to what the writing is doing. The poiint or message refers to what the writing is saying.

    2. fast and clear speech that the audience can connect to.

      any particular reason why she would choose this genre for this audience and for this subject?

    3. has chosen Spoken Word Poetry to get his point across clearly; keep the audience involved and captivated

      gppd" any particular reason why spoken word poetry would appeal to his audience?

    4. The three important things to look for when writing is genre, purpose and of finally is audience. The genre is the style or type of writing chosen to accomplish a goal or purpose to a certain audience. The author’s use of genre is to engage and capture the reader or express one’s self beliefs.

      Before getting into your analysis, I might suggest that you define the three terms and then start a new paragraph that looks at use of genre in Livingston

    5. “60 Seconds in Africa”, by Faten Aggad-Clerx (May 10,2015) http://www.pechakucha.org/presentations/every-60-seconds-in-africa-dot-dot-dot “How to Tame a Wild Tongue”, by Gloria Anzaldua (1987 in Boarderlnds /La Fronters) http://www.everettsd.org/cms/lib07/WA01920133/Centricity/Domain/965/Anzaldua-Wild-Tongue.pdf Donovan Livingston, Harvard Commencement Speech (May 25,2016)

      not in MLA format. Start with author's last name, then first name, then title of piece, date of publication, URL, and date of access. Alphabetize the list by author's last name. I'd be glad to help.

    1. Why because in the video Aggad had created, it was saying that people think of Africa as a bad place with a lot of poverty while in some spots of Africa there isn’t much poverty as most people think of outside of Africa

      edit for punctuation

    2. future teachers along with present teachers. From his speech it says “As educators, rather than raising your voices, Over the rustling of our chains,                                                                  Take them off. Un-cuff us. Unencumbered by the lumbering weight                        Of poverty and privilege, Policy and ignorance” (Livingston).

      good and good use of reading for support

    3. In the letter it clearly states in the address “My Dear Fellow Clergymen” (King) and to me that portrays who his audience is in this letter which the clergymen are the people King is writing to in order to get his poi

      good. Now how do we know that he is thinking about these 8 men? How does his approach meet their expectations? Develop your analysis?

    4. The genre of this  would be spoken word poetry

      good--and a commencement address What are the characteristics of a spoken word poem? and a commencement address? Develop your analysis, okay?

    5. hetorical situation is when certain situation occur and communication is involved.

      not sure what your topic situation is for this paragraph: are you focusing on genre?

    6. When a writer considers the rhetorical situation they automatically have an audience they are trying to convey their idea to, however, the concept of genre is more of an underlying idea that the author may not always take into considering when writing their piece.

      edit for comma fault (using comma like period

    7. When you have your genre you basically have the audience in which you are intended to write towards

      This is a key connection that I hope yoiu will discuss later: the link between genre and audience expectations

    8. Composition plays a big role in our everyday life no matter what you do for your career you’re going to be writing something

      note the need for a period between the two thoughts here: edit for punctuation?

    9. Aggad-Clerx , Faten. “Every 60 Seconds in Africa…” PechaKucha 20×20, 29 Feb. 2016, www.pechakucha.com/presentations/every-60-seconds-in-africa-dot-dot-dot. King , Martin Luther. “Martin Luther King Letter from Birmingham Jail.” Letter from Birmingham Jail, 16 Apr. 1963, okra.stanford.edu/transcription/document_images/undecided/630416-019.pdf. Livingston, Donovan. “Lift Off.” Harvard Graduate School of Education, 2016, www.gse.harvard.edu/news/16/05/lift.  

      pretty good MLA form but remember also to include dates of access.

    1. I believe that having all three of those elements will make a successful piece of writing.

      can you say more about the relationship among these terms?

    2. “I remember being caught speaking Spanish at recess – that was good for three licks on the knuckles with a sharp ruler”.

      cite author?

    3. Another reading that corresponds to to what King was addressing is “How to Tame a Wild Tongue” by Gloria Anzaldua.

      I appreciate the transition but might you say more about what the works have in common?

    4. King’s audience is the clergy because he wrote directly to them.

      good--but slow down: how do we know that he is writing to this particular group? How does he adjust his style and content to meet their needs?

    5. The genre of this is a letter. The theme is  “nonviolence” resistance to racism. Martin Luther King Jr. is trying to inform his readers

      okay: yes on all counts but I'd like you to slow your writing and analysis down. Focus on each item and spend time on it. For example, why does King write a letter? what is he trying to do through this genre?

    6. In “Writing in the Works”, Burak and Blau describe genre as “a type of writing that requires particular rhetorical moves” (Blau, Susan, Burak, 3)

      good use of source

    7. The Negro is Your Brother, vol. 212, no. 2, Aug. 1963, pp. 78-88,

      not sure where this info is coming from--use the version from our web page?

    8. ollins, Billy. “Commencement Speech Transcript.” 19 May 2008, Colorado, www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Commencement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htm.

      include date of access

    9. Anzaldua, Gloria. How to Tame a Wild Tongue. Borderlands/La Frontera: The New Mestiza, 1987, pp. 33-45.

      please use the web-based source from our course page?

    1. Billy Collins establishes his audience with his first remarks in his speech when he says “I am going to speak for 13 minutes. I think you deserve to know that this will be a finite experience. It is well-known in the world of public speaking that there is no pleasure you can give an audience that compares to the pleasure they get when it is over, so you can look forward to experiencing that pleasure 13 minutes from now. All the pre-law students just looked at their watches” (Collins 1).

      good use of reading

    2. All authors of these writings have a specific audience they want to reach out to.

      I like the structure that you are sticking to in this draft

    3. Using images and words within a presentation of the slide show, allows her to try and interest or even provide the presentation to be more appealing to her targeted audience.

      good

    4. Aggad-Clerx, Faten. “Every 60 Seconds in Africa.” PechaKucha Presentation, 29 Feb. 2016, www.pechakucha.com/users/faten-aggad-clerx.   Collins, Billy. “Commencement Speech.” Commencement Speech Transcript, Poet Laureate, www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Comm ncement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htm.   Livingston, Donovan. “Lift Off.” Harvard Graduate School of Education, 25 May 2016, www.gse.harvard.edu/news/16/05/lift.

      close to MLA formatting Please include dates of access

    1. ment speech, Kingston uses vivid imagery as well as an abundance of astrological connections such as “I look each of my students in the eyes, And see the same light that aligned Orion’s Belt”(4) it’s without a doubt a poem as well.

      what is the focus of this paragraph? genre? please use the term and spend more time?

    2. Collins does this in a manner so articulate that any and all humor ultimately pertains to his overall message.

      please comment on audience and genre

    3. Anzaldua’s purpose for writing this piece is to inform those that are Spanish speaking, as well as those who are outcasts living along the border of the United States.

      good--quote for support?

    4. community, she does not sugar coat for the reader, she speaks in great detail of wanting the reader to feel her pain throughout the reading.(

      edit for punctuation

    5. Kingston, Donovan, director. Lift Off. YouTube, YouTube, 25 May 2016, www.youtube.com/watch?v=9XGUpKITeJM.

      check accuracy of author's name, include date of access

    6. Collins, Billy, director. Poet Laureate. Six Rules of Success | Graduation Speech 2009 | Arnold Schwarzenegger, 19 May 2008, www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Commencement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htm.

      double check URL and include date of access and accurate title

    7. Anzaldúa, Gloria. “How to Tame a Wild Tongue”. Borderlands / La Frontera: The New Mestiza. Aunt Lute Books, 2012. Print.

      please use the web-based source on our course page

    8. How are my transitions? If you had no knowledge of the four elements of writing, did this piece help you understand them?

      I like these questions

    1. Anzaldua’s genre is a story within her autobiography. “How to tame a Wild Tongue” is an excerpt from Boderlands, La Frontera, which Anzaldua wrote about herself. For example, when Anzaldua stated “I remember being caught speaking Spanish at recess – that was good for three licks on the knuckles with a sharp ruler,”(34) she is talking about herself.

      good

    2. These three elements are key in finding the rhetorical situation of any composition.

      This is a helpful. introductory paragraph--good Remember to skip lines between paragraph for your reader's sake

    3. Clerx, Faten A. “Every 60 Seconds in Africa…” PechaKucha 20×20, Maastricht, 29 Feb. 2016, www.pechakucha.com/presentations/every-60-seconds-in-africa-dot-dot-dot. Collins, Billy. Six Rules of Success | Graduation Speech 2009 | Colorado College, www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Commencement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htm. February 5th 2019

      pretty good MLA form but remember to include dates of access for each

    1. Gloria Anzaldua’s How to Tame a Wild Tongue is an autobiography of the challenges of being bilingual. In her memoir, she brings up quite a few personal stories that paint a picture for the audience to truly understand their connection. She wanted to express to them that hiding your knowledge of your language no matter the level is extremely demoralizing on your self-esteem and on the other hand how strong and resilient they are as a people. Anzaldua’s passage is similar to Livingston in the way that they both feel unheard and belittled but just being who they are. Both have the purpose to motivate their audience to be who you are, don’t dim your light so others won’t feel uncomfortable. Aggad-Cerxs and Anzaldua’s are alike in that they both state facts as to why the stereotypes that were being learned and taught for so many years are false and why we need to make a change when perceiving other who aren’t like us. Livingston and Aggad-Cerxs writings are both spoken by them and are more recent than Anzalduas.  

      not sure of the focus of this paragraph--shouldn't it focus on Anzaldua, first on her purpose, then on her genre, and finally on her audience, as you do the others? This seems rushed to me

    2. I believe that her audience is focused more on the western youth population since most of the media coverage is produced by the west and becau

      yes: European and American youth?

    3. Aggad-Cerxs genre, photojournalism is perfect because it is based on reporting current events through pictures to potentially anyone who will watch and listen. Using imagines to tell a story helps in keeping the audience intrigued and curious as to what is going to be told about the image

      good

    4. A commencement speech is typically full of inspiration, motivation and a few jokes are thrown in and they almost always have a metapho

      what is the focus of this paragraph?

    5. great fit for student graduation in this generation because that age group thrives off of performances that are inclusive yet powerful.

      good

    6. What makes his speech distant from other is Livingston’s commencement speech was told as spoken word

      okay, good--so here your focus is on genre?

    7. When he speaks he isn’t speaking to just student graduating, he is speaking to future teachers

      okay good--so the focus of this paragraph is on his audience?

    8. Livingston wanted to let his audience know its okay to motivate b

      I'm not sure what the focus of this paragraph is, to be honest: genre, purpose?

    9. I will show how they shed light to our strong biased belief of the American standards

      keep the focus on the terms, okay? the rhetorical situation faced by each writer than the mere message only

    10. This way you will be better equipped to present your purpose, reach your chosen audience and gives justice to our selected genre.

      I don't see a post write. I don't see a list of Works Cited.

    1. By voiceless, I mean those who are oppressed by their language.

      be precise: who are we talking about? Chicanas who live on the border of languages, customs cultures

    2. In Donovan Livingston’s Commencement Address, he makes a direct statement to the audience i

      yes: but see my comment above about topic sentences

    3. In Billy Collins Commencement Address, he starts of immediately by being very direct stating “I am going to speak for 13 minutes.” (Collins). Its a perfect way to state your audience.

      do you want to stay with this topic sentence? I ask because it gives the impression that the entire paragraph will focus on audience

    4. y directly stating how long his speech is going to be he makes it clear that he understands his audience. Collins knows what it  was like to be a graduate, an

      good

    5. The purpose is, however obvious, the reason for your writing. It’s the part of writing you want your audience to get from your writing.

      try to be more precise? Purpose refers to what the writing is doing

    6. Anzaldúa, Gloria. “How to Tame a Wild Tongue”. Borderlands / La Frontera: The New Mestiza. Aunt Lute Books, 2012. Print.

      please include web address, as I believe you got this on the web And alphabetize bye author's last name

    7. Six Rules of Success | Graduation Speech 2009 | Arnold Schwarzenegger, Colorado College, 10 Feb. 2013, www.graduationwisdom.com/speeches/0135-Billy-Collins-Gives-Brilliant-Witty-Commencement-Speech-Address-At-Colorado-College-2008.htm.

      not in MLA format: please start with author's last name and include date of access

    1. PechaKucha because it enabled her to get her point across in a timely manner while still providing enough information without it getting overwhelming

      for what audience?

    2. he purpose of this text is to encourage those who are considered different for speaking a different language than those around them, or for speaking with an accent.

      okay: good

    3. the genre is best described as an autobiography

      good but note that as a topic sentence this leads your reader to assume that the entire paragraph will be about genre right?

    4. Anzaldua, Gloria. How to Tame a Wild Tongue. www.everettsd.org/cms/lib07/WA01920133/Centricity/Domain/965/Anzaldua-Wild-Tongue.pdf Aggad-Clerx, Faten. “Every 60 Seconds in Africa…” PechaKucha 20×20, www.pechakucha.com/presentations/every-60-seconds-in-africa-dot-dot-dot. Livingston, Donovan. “Lift Off.” Harvard Graduate School of Education, www.gse.harvard.edu/news/16/05/lift.

      close to MLA just remember her to include dates of publication and dates of access. And remember to use quotation marks around the titles of essays or speeches.

    1. audience is young and that they don’t want somebody preaching to them. By using spoken word which is sometimes rhythmic he was able to keep eyes on him and his audience was ready to hear what he had to say next.

      very nice

    2. Which is the reason she gave such vivid details like switching from English to Spanish throughout the text and also differentiating the ways that chicanos dialect change in different regions.

      fragment

    3. By using the genre of autobiography she was able to get her readers to relate to the things she went through even if they hadn’t become been through the same things she has. Autobiographies are

      good point

    4. Livingston’s Purpose for “Lift Off” was to inspire educators to spark a change

      good topic sentence--might you work on a transition as well?