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    1. eLife Assessment

      This study reports an mRNA-based strategy for restoring sperm motility in a mouse model of monogenic male infertility. The work is technically innovative and potentially valuable, as it demonstrates feasibility of in vivo testicular mRNA delivery without genomic integration of foreign DNA. However, although partial recovery of sperm motility is supported, the evidence for meaningful restoration of fertility remains incomplete, with weak IVF outcomes and difficult-to-interpret ICSI results. In addition, mechanistic questions regarding the persistence of mRNA and the specificity of germ-cell targeting remain insufficiently resolved, limiting the strength of the authors' conclusions.

    2. Reviewer #4 (Public review):

      I maintain that the images in Figure 12 (new Figure 14) do not support the authors' interpretation that 2-cell embryos resulted from in vitro fertilization (IVF) of Amrc-/- rescued sperm. They are clearly not normal 2-cell embryos and instead look very much like fragmented eggs that can be seen occasionally following in vitro fertilization procedures even when that is done with wild type eggs and sperm. The only portion of current Figure 14 that has normal looking 2-cell embryos is in panel 14A4, where wild type B6D2 sperm were used. Even in that panel, there are some fragmented eggs that the authors identify as 2-cell embryos.

      The authors offer the explanation that CD1 eggs fertilized by B6D2F1 hybrid male sperm do not develop beyond the 2-cell stage, citing a 2008 paper published in Biology of Reproduction by Fernandez-Goonzalez et al. I read through that paper very carefully and even had a colleague read through it in case I missed something, but that paper says nothing at all about strain incompatibilities, much less 2-cell arrest due to them. The only crosses done in that paper are CD1 eggs x CD1 sperm and B6D2 eggs x B6D2 sperm, all by intracytoplasmic sperm injection and not standard in vitro fertilization. [Note that the paper does mention performing in vitro fertilization but says nothing about how it was done or what mouse strains were used.] I even searched the literature for information regarding incompatibility between these strains and could find nothing relevant. But even if the authors are correct and there happens to be a strain incompatibility and 2-cell arrest is expected, what the authors are calling 2-cell embryos are clearly not.

      A second explanation offered by the authors is that they used collagenase to remove the cumulus cells and that this may have affected the appearance of the embryos. This technique is actually used to remove both the cumulus cells and the zona pellucida and has been described as a gentler way to do so than other standard methods (hyaluronidase treatment followed by acid Tyrodes to remove the zona pellucida) (Yamatoya et al., Reprod Med Biol 2011, DOI 10.1007/s12522-011-0075-8). I think it is highly relevant to the current study that the method they used to remove cumulus cells also dissolves the zona, either partially or completely. Given that many of the eggs, fragmented eggs, and 2-cell embryos (from the WT sperm) in Figure 14A are lacking a zona pellucida, it seems very likely that many of the eggs were either zona-free or had partial zona dissolution from the start. In fact, the authors state in the Methods section that "Cumulus-free and zona-free eggs were collected..." for how IVF was done. Partial zona dissolution is standard in some protocols for performing IVF using frozen mouse sperm, which usually have much lower motility and overall efficacy than fresh sperm. In any case, it would improve transparency if the manuscript made clear somewhere other than buried in the Methods that the IVF procedure was done on eggs with partially or fully removed zonas, to allow proper interpretation.

      In the rebuttal, the authors go on to state: "To provide additional functional evidence, we complemented the IVF experiments with ICSI using rescued Armc2-/- sperm and B6D2 oocytes, which allowed embryos to develop to the blastocyst stage. In these experiments, 25% of injected oocytes reached the blastocyst stage with rescued sperm compared to 13% for untreated Armc2-/- sperm (Supplementary Fig. 9) These results support the functional competence of rescued sperm and demonstrate partial recovery of fertilization ability following Armc2 mRNA electroporation."

      Their conclusion that the data support partial recovery of fertilization ability following Armc2 mRNA electroporation in my opinion has no basis. This experiment was done only once, and no information is provided regarding how many eggs underwent ICSI or how many reached the blastocyst stage. The authors claim that the rescued sperm were better than the Armc2-/- sperm in producing blastocysts, but this is based on a simple percentage report of 25% vs 13% without any statistical analysis, even on the results from the single experiment presented.

      Overall, the paper shows rescue of some sperm motility by the new method they use, and the new title is therefore appropriate. The authors have also dealt reasonably with many of the original concerns regarding documenting that their methodology was effective in producing protein (at least the GFP marker) in spermatogenic cells. In my view the authors have, however, not shown any indication of functional recovery over what is already known for the knockout sperm, that ICSI can support blastocyst stage embryo development. They also have not, in my view, justified the claims at the end of the abstract "These motile sperm were able to produce embryos by IVF..." and that "...mRNA electroporation can restore...partially fertilizing ability..."

    3. Reviewer #5 (Public review):

      While the study presents an innovative and potentially impactful mRNA-based approach for addressing monogenic causes of male infertility, several significant weaknesses limit the strength of the authors' central conclusions.

      First, the functional evidence for true fertility restoration remains incomplete. Although the authors convincingly demonstrate partial recovery of sperm motility, the downstream reproductive outcomes, particularly for IVF, are weak. Importantly, these concerns are shared by all three reviewers and the former Reviewing Editor, and to my eye they are both thoughtfully articulated and well warranted. The ICSI data show modest improvement, but this rescue is difficult to interpret.

      In parallel, significant mechanistic questions persist regarding the unusually prolonged persistence of naked mRNA and reporter protein expression in germ cells, which is not fully reconciled with established mRNA and protein half-life biology and is supported largely by inference rather than by direct decay measurements.

      Finally, although the authors have conducted additional cellular analyses, concerns about the extent and specificity of germ-cell targeting versus Sertoli-cell expression remain unresolved. Together, these issues do not negate the technical novelty of the work, but they do constrain the confidence with which the current dataset can support the authors' strongest therapeutic claims.

    4. Author response:

      The following is the authors’ response to the previous reviews

      Public Reviews:

      Reviewer #1 (Public review):

      The authors assess the effectiveness of electroporating mRNA into male germ cells to rescue the expression of proteins required for spermatogenesis progression in individuals where these proteins are mutated or depleted. To set up the methodology, they first evaluated the expression of reporter proteins in wild-type mice, which showed expression in germ cells for over two weeks. Then, they attempted to recover fertility in a model of late spermatogenesis arrest that produces immotile sperm. By electroporating the mutated protein, the authors recovered the motility of ~5% of the sperm; although the sperm regenerated was not able to produce offspring using IVF, the embryos reached the 2-cell state (in contrast to controls that did not progress past the zygote state).

      This is a comprehensive evaluation of the mRNA methodology with multiple strengths. First, the authors show that naked synthetic RNA, purchased from a commercial source or generated in the laboratory with simple methods, is enough to express exogenous proteins in testicular germ cells. The authors compared RNA to DNA electroporation and found that germ cells are efficiently electroporated with RNA, but not DNA. The differences between these constructs were evaluated using in vivo imaging to track the reporter signal in individual animals through time. To understand how the reporter proteins affect the results of the experiments, the authors used different reporters: two fluorescent (eGFP and mCherry) and one bioluminescent (Luciferase). Although they observed differences among reporters, in every case expression lasted for at least two weeks. The authors used a relevant system to study the therapeutic potential of RNA electroporation. The ARMC2-deficient animals have impaired sperm motility phenotype that affects only the later stages of spermatogenesis. The authors showed that sperm motility was recovered to ~5%, which is remarkable due to the small fraction of germ cells electroporated with RNA with the current protocol. The sperm motility parameters were thoroughly assessed by CASA. The 3D reconstruction of an electroporated testis using state-of-the-art methods to show the electroporated regions is compelling.

      The main weakness of the manuscript is that although the authors manage to recover motility in a small fraction of the sperm population, it is unclear whether the increased sperm quality is substantial to improve assisted reproduction outcomes. The authors found that the rescued sperm could be used to obtain 2-cell embryos via IVF, but no evidence for more advanced stages of embryo differentiation was provided. The motile rescued sperm was also successfully used to generate blastocyst by ICSI, but the statistical significance of the rate of blastocyst production compared to non-rescued sperm remains unclear. The title is thus an overstatement since fertility was never restored for IVF, and the mutant sperm was already able to produce blastocysts without the electroporation intervention.

      Overall, the authors clearly show that electroporating mRNA can improve spermatogenesis as demonstrated by the generation of motile sperm in the ARMC2 KO mouse model.

      We thank the reviewer for this thoughtful and constructive comment. We agree that our study demonstrates a partial functional recovery of spermatogenesis rather than a complete restoration of fertility. Our main objective was to establish and validate a proof-of-concept approach showing that mRNA electroporation can rescue the expression of a missing or mutated protein in post-meiotic germ cells and result in the production of motile sperm.

      To address the reviewer’s concern, we have the title and discussion to more accurately reflect the scope of our findings. The new title reads:

      “Sperm motility in mice with oligo-astheno-teratozoospermia restored by in vivo injection and electroporation of naked mRNA”

      In the manuscript, we now emphasize that while motility recovery was significant, complete fertility restoration was not achieved. We have also clarified that:

      The 5% recovery in motile sperm represents a substantial improvement considering the small population of germ cells reached by the current electroporation method.

      The 2-cell embryo formation observed after IVF serves as a strong indication of partial functional recovery

      Finally, we now explicitly state in the Discussion that this approach should be considered a therapeutic proof-of-concept, demonstrating feasibility and potential, rather than a fully curative intervention.

      Reviewer #2 (Public review):

      The authors inject, into the rete testes, mRNA and plasmids encoding mRNAs for GFP and then ARMC2 (into infertile Armc2 KO mice) in a gene therapy approach to express exogenous proteins in male germ cells. They do show GFP epifluorescence and ARMC2 protein in KO tissues, although the evidence presented is weak. Overall, the data do not necessarily make sense given the biology of spermatogenesis and more rigorous testing of this model is required to fully support the conclusions, that gene therapy can be used to rescue male infertility.

      In this revision, the authors attempt to respond to the critiques from the first round of reviews. While they did address many of the minor concerns, there are still a number to be addressed. With that said, the data still do not support the conclusions of the manuscript.

      We thank the reviewer for their careful and detailed assessment of our manuscript. We appreciate the concerns raised regarding mRNA stability, GFP localization, and the interpretation of spermatogenesis stages, and we have addressed these points in the manuscript and in the responses below.

      (1) The authors have not satisfactorily provided an explanation for how a naked mRNA can persist and direct expression of GFP or luciferase for ~3 weeks. The most stable mRNAs in mammalian cells have half-lives of ~24-60 hours. The stability of the injected mRNAs should be evaluated and reported using cell lines. GFP protein's half-life is ~26 hours, and luciferase protein's half-life is ~2 hours.

      We thank the reviewer for this important comment. The stability of mRNA-GFP was assessed by RT-QPCR in HEK cells and seminiferous tubule cells (Fig. 5). mRNA-GFP was detected for up to 60 hours in HEK cells and for up to two weeks in seminiferous tubule cells (Fig. 5A). Together, these results suggest that the long-lasting fluorescence observed in our experiments reflects a combination of transcript stability, efficient translation within germ cells and the slow protein turnover that is typical of the spermatogenic lineage.

      (2) There is no convincing data shown in Figs. 1-8 that the GFP is even expressed in germ cells, which is obviously a prerequisite for the Armc2 KO rescue experiment shown in the later figures! In fact, to this reviewer the GFP appears to be in Sertoli cell cytoplasm, which spans the epithelium and surrounds germ cells - thus, it can be oft-confused with germ cells. In addition, if it is in germ cells, then the authors should be able to show, on subsequent days, that it is present in clones of germ cells that are maturing. Due to intracellular bridges, a molecule like GFP has been shown to diffuse readily and rapidly (in a matter of minutes) between adjacent germ cells. To clarify, the authors must generate single cell suspensions and immunostain for GFP using any of a number of excellent commercially-available antibodies to verify it is present in germ cells. It should also be present in sperm, if it is indeed in the germline.

      We thank the reviewer for this insightful comment. To directly address the concern, we performed additional experiments to assess GFP expression in germ cells following in vivo mRNA delivery. GFP-encoding mRNA was injected and electroporated into the testes on day 0. On day 1, testes were collected, enzymatically dissociated, and the resulting seminiferous tubule cell suspensions were cultured for 12 hours. Live cells were then analyzed by fluorescence microscopy (Fig. 10).

      We observed GFP expression in various germ cell types, including pachytene spermatocytes (53,4 %) (Fig 10 A-), round spermatids (25 %) (Fig 10B-E) and in elongated spermatids (11,4%) (Fig 10 C-E). The identification of these cell types was based on DAPI nuclear staining patterns, cell size fig 10 F, non-adherent characteristics, and the use of an enzymatic dissociation protocol.

      Fluorescence imaging revealed strong cytoplasmic GFP signals in each of these populations, confirming efficient transfection and translation of the delivered mRNA. These results demonstrate that the in vivo injection and electroporation protocol enables effective mRNA transfection across multiple stages of spermatogenesis. These results confirm that the injected mRNA is efficiently translated in germ cells at various stages of spermatogenesis. Together, these data validate the germ cell-specific nature of the GFP signal, supporting the Armc2 KO rescue experiments.

      As mentioned previously, we assessed the stability of mRNA-GFP using RT-QPCR in HEK cells and seminiferous tubule cells (see Fig. 5). mRNA-GFP was detected for up to 60 hours in HEK cells and for up to two weeks in seminiferous tubule cells. Together, these results suggest that the long-lasting fluorescence observed in our experiments reflects a combination of transcript stability and local translation within germ cells, as well as the slow protein turnover typical of the spermatogenic lineage.

      Other comments:

      70-1 This is an incorrect interpretation of the findings from Ref 5 - that review stated there were ~2,000 testis-enriched genes, but that does not mean "the whole process involves around two thousand of genes"

      We thank the reviewer for this helpful comment. We agree that our previous phrasing was imprecise. We have revised the sentence to clarify that approximately 2,000 genes show testis-enriched expression, rather than implying that the entire spermatogenic process is limited to these genes. The corrected sentence now reads:

      “Spermatogenesis involves the coordinated expression of a large number of genes, with approximately 2,000 showing testis-enriched expression, about 60% of which are expressed exclusively in the testes”

      74 would specify 'male':

      we have now specified it as you suggested.

      79-84 Are the concerns with ICSI due to the procedure itself, or the fact that it's often used when there is likely to be a genetic issue with the male whose sperm was used? This should be clarified if possible, using references from the literature, as this reviewer imagines this could be a rather contentious issue with clinicians who routinely use this procedure, even in cases where IVF would very likely have worked:

      We thank the reviewer for this important comment. Concerns about ICSI outcomes indeed reflect two partly overlapping causes: the procedure itself (direct sperm injection and associated laboratory manipulations) and the clinical/genetic background of couples undergoing ICSI (especially men with severe male-factor infertility). Large reviews and meta-analyses report a small increase in some perinatal and congenital risks after ART/ICSI, but these studies conclude that it is difficult to fully disentangle procedural effects from parental factors. Importantly, genetic or epigenetic abnormalities in the male (which motivate use of ICSI) likely contribute to adverse outcomes in offspring, while some studies also suggest that ICSI-specific manipulations may alter epigenetic marks in embryos. For these reasons professional bodies recommend reserving ICSI for appropriate male-factor indications rather than as routine insemination for non-male-factor cases

      We have revised the text accordingly to clarify this distinction:

      “ICSI can efficiently overcome the problems faced.  Nevertheless, concerns persist regarding the potential risks associated with this technique, including blastogenesis defect, cardiovascular defect, gastrointestinal defect, musculoskeletal defect, orofacial defect, leukemia, central nervous system tumors, and solid tumors [1-4]. Statistical analyses of birth records have demonstrated an elevated risk of birth defects, with a 30-40 % increased  likelihood in cases involving ICSI [1-4], and a prevalence of birth defects between 1 % and 4 % [3]. It is important to note, however, that the origin of these risks remains debated. Several large epidemiological and mechanistic studies indicate that both the procedure itself (direct microinjection and in vitro manipulation) and the underlying genetic or epigenetic abnormalities often present in men requiring ICSI contribute to the observed outcomes [1, 3] [5, 6] . To overcome these drawbacks, a number of experimental strategies have been proposed to bypass ARTs and restore spermatogenesis and fertility, including gene therapy [7-10].”

      199 Codon optimization improvement of mRNA stability needs a reference;

      We have added the references accordingly: [11-15]

      In one study using yeast transcripts, optimization improved RNA stability on the order of minutes (e.g., from ~5 minutes to ~17 minutes); is there some evidence that it could be increased dramatically to days or weeks?

      We agree with the reviewer that codon optimization can enhance mRNA stability, but available evidence indicates that this effect is moderate. In Saccharomyces cerevisiae, Presnyak et al. (2015) [16] showed that codon optimization increased mRNA half-life from approximately 5 minutes to ~17 minutes, representing a several-fold improvement rather than a shift to days or weeks. Similar codon-dependent stabilization has been observed in mammalian systems, where transcripts enriched in optimal codons exhibit longer half-lives and enhanced translation efficiency [11]; [17]). However, these studies consistently report effects on the scale of minutes to hours. In mammalian cells, the prolonged stability of therapeutic or vaccine mRNAs—lasting for days—is primarily achieved through additional features such as optimized untranslated regions, chemical nucleotide modifications (e.g., N¹-methylpseudouridine), and protective delivery systems, rather than codon usage alone ([18]; [19]).

      Other molecular optimizations that improve in vivo mRNA stability and translation include a poly(A) tail, which binds poly(A)-binding proteins to protect the transcript from 3′ exonuclease degradation and promotes ribosome recycling, and a CleanCap structure at the 5′ end, which mimics the natural Cap 1 configuration, protects against 5′ exonuclease attack, and enhances translational initiation [11-15]. Together, these modifications act synergistically to stabilize the transcript and support efficient translation.

      472-3 The reported half-life of EGFP is ~36 hours - so, if the mRNA is unstable (and not measured, but certainly could be estimated by qRT-PCR detection of the transcript on subsequent days after injection) and EGFP is comparatively more stable (but still hours), how does EGFP persist for 21 days after injection of naked mRNA??

      We thank the reviewer for this important comment. The stability of mRNA-GFP was assessed by RT-QPCR in HEK cells and seminiferous tubule cells (Fig. 5). mRNA-GFP was detected for up to 60 hours in HEK cells and for up to two weeks in seminiferous tubule cells (Fig. 5). Together, these results suggest that the long-lasting fluorescence observed in our experiments reflects a combination of transcript stability, efficient translation within germ cells and the slow protein turnover that is typical of the spermatogenic lineage.

      Curious why the authors were unable to get anti-GFP to work in immunostaining?

      We appreciate the reviewer’s question. We attempted to detect GFP using several commercially available anti-GFP antibodies under various standard immunostaining conditions. However, in our hands, these antibodies consistently produced either no signal or high background staining, making the results unreliable. We therefore relied on direct detection of GFP fluorescence, which provides a more accurate and specific readout of protein expression in our system.

      In Fig. 3-4, the GFP signals are unremarkable, in that they cannot be fairly attributed to any structure or cell type - they just look like blobs; and why, in Fig. 4D-E, why does the GFP signal appear stronger at 21 days than 15 days? And why is it completely gone by 28 days? This data is unconvincing.

      We would like to thank the reviewer for their comments. Figure 3–4 provides a global overview of GFP expression on the surface of the testis. The entire testis was imaged using an inverted epifluorescence microscope, and the GFP signal represents a composite of multiple seminiferous tubules across the tissue surface. Due to this whole-organ imaging approach, it is not possible to resolve individual structures such as the basement membrane or lumen, which is why the signals may appear as diffuse “blobs.”

      Regarding the time-course in Figure 4D–E, the apparent increase in GFP signal at 21 days compared with 15 days likely reflects accumulation and translation of the delivered mRNA in germ cells over time, whereas the absence of signal at 28 days corresponds to the natural turnover and degradation of GFP protein and mRNA in the tissue. We hope this explanation clarifies the observed patterns of fluorescence.

      If the authors did a single cell suspension, what types or percentage of cells would be GFP+? Since germ cells are not adherent in culture, a simple experiment could be done whereby a single cell suspension could be made, cultured for 4-6 hours, and non-adherent cells "shaken off" and imaged vs adherent cells. Cells could also be fixed and immunostained for GFP, which has worked in many other labs using anti-GFP.

      We thank the reviewer for this insightful comment. To directly address the concern, we performed additional experiments to assess GFP expression in germ cells following in vivo mRNA delivery. GFP-encoding mRNA was injected and electroporated into the testes on day 0. On day 1, testes were collected, enzymatically dissociated, and the resulting seminiferous tubule cell suspensions were cultured for 12 hours. Live cells were then analyzed by fluorescence microscopy (Fig. 10).

      We observed GFP expression in various germ cell types, including pachytene spermatocytes (53,4 %) (Fig 10 A-), round spermatids (25 %) (Fig 10B-E) and in elongated spermatids (11,4%) (Fig 10 C-E). The identification of these cell types was based on DAPI nuclear staining patterns, cell size fig 10 F, non-adherent characteristics, and the use of an enzymatic dissociation protocol.

      Fluorescence imaging revealed strong cytoplasmic GFP signals in each of these populations, confirming efficient transfection and translation of the delivered mRNA. These results demonstrate that the in vivo injection and electroporation protocol enables effective mRNA transfection across multiple stages of spermatogenesis.

      These results confirm that the injected mRNA is efficiently translated in germ cells at various stages of spermatogenesis. Together, these data validate the germ cell-specific nature of the GFP signal, supporting the Armc2 KO rescue experiments.

      As mentioned previously, we assessed the stability of mRNA-GFP using RT-QPCR in HEK cells and seminiferous tubule cells (see Fig. 5). mRNA-GFP was detected for up to 60 hours in HEK cells and for up to two weeks in seminiferous tubule cells. Together, these results suggest that the long-lasting fluorescence observed in our experiments reflects a combination of transcript stability and local translation within germ cells, as well as the slow protein turnover typical of the spermatogenic lineage.

      In Fig. 5, what is the half-life of luciferase? From this reviewer's search of the literature, it appears to be ~2-3 h in mammalian cells. With this said, how do the authors envision detectable protein for up to 20 days from a naked mRNA? The stability of the injected mRNAs should be shown in a mammalian cell line - perhaps this mRNA has an incredibly long half-life, which might help explain these results. However, even the most stable endogenous mRNAs (e.g., globin) are ~24-60 hrs.

      We did not directly assess the stability of luciferase mRNA, but we evaluated the persistence of GFP mRNA, which was synthesized and optimized using the same sequence optimization and chemical modification strategy as the luciferase mRNA. In these experiments, mRNA-GFP was detectable in seminiferous tubule cells for up to two weeks after injection. We therefore expect a similar stability profile for the luciferase mRNA. These findings suggest that the prolonged fluorescence or bioluminescence observed in our study likely reflects a combination of factors, including enhanced transcript stability, local translation within germ cells, and the inherently slow protein turnover characteristic of the spermatogenic lineage.

      527-8 The Sertoli cell cytoplasm is not just present along the basement membrane as stated, but also projects all the way to the lumina:

      we clarified the sentence " Sertoli cells have an oval to elongated nucleus and the cytoplasm presents a complex shape (“tombstone” pattern) along the basement membrane, with long projections that extend toward the lumen."

      529-30 This is incorrect, as round spermatids are never "localized between the spermatocytes and elongated spermatids" - if elongated spermatids are present, rounds are not - they are never coincident in the same testis section:

      We thank the reviewer for this important comment and for drawing attention to the detailed staging of the seminiferous epithelium. We agree that the spatial organization of germ cells varies depending on the stage of spermatogenesis. While round spermatids (steps 1–8) and elongated spermatids (steps 9–16) are typically associated with distinct stages, transitional stages of the seminiferous epithelium can contain both cell types in close proximity, reflecting the continuous and overlapping nature of spermatid differentiation (Meistrich, 2013, Methods Mol. Biol. 927:299–307). We have revised the text to clarify this point, indicating that the relative positioning of germ cell types depends on the stage of the seminiferous cycle rather than implying their constant coexistence within the same tubule section.

      Fig. 7. To this reviewer, all of the GFP appears to be in Sertoli cell cytoplasm In Figs 1-8 there is no convincing evidence presented that GFP is expressed in germ cells! In fact, it appears to be in Sertoli cells.

      We thank the reviewer for their observation. As previously mentioned, we have included an additional experiment specifically demonstrating GFP expression in germ cells (fig 10). This new data provides clear evidence that the GFP signal is not restricted to Sertoli cells and confirms successful uptake and translation of GFP mRNA in germ cells.

      Fig. 9 - alpha-tubuline?

      We corrected the figure.

      Fig. 11 - how was sperm morphology/motility not rescued on "days 3, 6, 10, 15, or 28 after surgery", but it was in some at 21 and 35? How does this make sense, given the known kinetics of male germ cell development??

      We note the reviewer’s concern regarding the timing of motile sperm appearance. Variability among treated mice is expected because transfection efficiency differed between spermatogonia and spermatids. Full spermiogenesis requires ~15 days, and epididymal transit adds ~8 days, consistent with motile sperm appearing around 21 days post-injection in some mice.

      And at least one of the sperm in the KO in Fig. B5 looks relatively normal, and the flagellum may be out-of-focus in the image? With only a few sperm for reviewers to see, how can we know these represent the population?

      We thank the reviewer for their comment. Upon closer examination of the image, the flagellum of the spermatozoon in question is clearly abnormally short and this is not due to being out of focus. Furthermore, the supplementary figure shows that the KO consistently lacks normal spermatozoa. These defects are consistent with previous findings from our laboratory [22], confirming that the observed phenotype is representative of the KO population rather than an isolated occurrence.

      Reviewer #3 (Public review):

      Summary:

      The authors used a novel technique to treat male infertility. In a proof-of-concept study, the authors were able to rescue the phenotype of a knockout mouse model with immotile sperm using this technique. This could also be a promising treatment option for infertile men.

      Strengths:

      In their proof-of-concept study, the authors were able to show that the novel technique rescues the infertility phenotype of Armc2 knockout spermatozoa. In the current version of the manuscript, the authors have added data on in vitro fertilisation experiments with Armc2 mRNA-rescued sperm. The authors show that Armc2 mRNA-rescued sperm can successfully fertilise oocytes that develop to the blastocyst stage. This adds another level of reliability to the data.

      Weaknesses:

      Some minor weaknesses identified in my previous report have already been fixed. The technique is new and may not yet be fully established for all issues. Nevertheless, the data presented in this manuscript opens the way for several approaches to immotile spermatozoa to ensure successful fertilisation of oocytes and subsequent appropriate embryo development.

      [Editors' note: The images in Figure 12 do not support the authors' interpretation that 2-cell embryos resulted from in vitro fertilization. Instead, the cells shown appear to be fragmented, unfertilized eggs. Combined with the lack of further development, it seems highly unlikely that fertilization was successful.]

      We thank the reviewer for their careful evaluation and constructive feedback. We appreciate the acknowledgment of the strengths of our study, particularly the proof-of-concept demonstration that Armc2-mRNA electroporation can rescue sperm motility in Armc2 knockout mice.

      Regarding the concern raised by the editor about Figure 12, we would like to clarify two technical points. First, the IVF experiments were performed using CD1 oocytes and B6D2 sperm. Due to strain-specific incompatibilities, fertilization of CD1 oocytes by B6D2 sperm typically does not progress beyond the two-cell stage (Fernández-González [23] et al., 2008, Biology of Reproduction). Therefore, the observation of two-cell embryos represents the expected limit of development in this cross and serves as a strong indication of successful fertilization, even though further development is not possible. Second, the oocytes used in these experiments were treated with collagenase to remove cumulus cells. This enzymatic treatment can sometimes affect the morphology of early embryos, which may explain why the two-cell embryos in Figure 12 appear less regular or somewhat fragmented. We also included a control showing embryos from B6D2 sperm with the same collagenase treatment on CD1 oocytes, which yielded similar appearances (Fig14 A4).

      To provide additional functional evidence, we complemented the IVF experiments with ICSI using rescued Armc2<sup>–/–</sup> sperm and B6D2 oocytes, which allowed embryos to develop to the blastocyst stage. In these experiments, 25% of injected oocytes reached the blastocyst stage with rescued sperm compared to 13% for untreated Armc2–/– sperm (Supplementary Fig. 9) These results support the functional competence of rescued sperm and demonstrate partial recovery of fertilization ability following Armc2 mRNA electroporation.

      We have clarified these points in the revised Results and Discussion sections to emphasize that the IVF data indicate partial functional recovery of rescued sperm rather than full fertility restoration. These clarifications address the editor’s concern while accurately representing the technical limitations of the strain combination used in our experiments.

      Recommendations for the authors:

      Reviewer #1 (Recommendations for the authors):

      Fig 12 and Supplementary Fig 9 are mislabeled in the text and rebuttal.

      We thank the reviewer for pointing this out. We have carefully checked the manuscript and the rebuttal text, and corrected all references to Figure 12 and Supplementary Figure 9 to ensure they are accurately labeled and consistent throughout the text.

      Reviewer #3 (Recommendations for the authors):

      The contribution of the newly added authors should be clarified. All other aspects of inadequacy raised in my previous report have been adequately addressed.

      No further comments.

      We thank the reviewer for noting this. The contributions of the newly added authors have been clarified in the Author Contributions section of the revised manuscript. All other points raised in the previous review have been addressed as indicated.

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    2. Model Discrimination by Segment (ROC AUC)# How well does the model separate UTP from non-UTP customers in different segments? ROC AUC measures the model’s ability to rank-order risk correctly (0.5 = random, 1.0 = perfect). Some sub-sections also include PR AUC (Precision-Recall AUC), which focuses on the model’s performance specifically on the positive (UTP) class – this is particularly informative when the UTP rate is low, as it penalises false positives and false negatives more directly than ROC AUC. Segmentation sourced from int_customer_segmentation, joined as-of deal close date.

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      Dont need to call out model name here either - also as we already discussed tables above can be remove

    4. Cross-Tabulation: Segment x Channel# This heatmap combines segment and sales channel into a single view, showing where bad prediction rates are highest when both dimensions are considered together. Darker cells indicate higher UTP rates among grade A/B deals.

      Can we add sample size in here eg. UTP 25% (1/4) maybe if the sample size is too small, we could remove the chart all together as doesnt add to findings

    5. By Segment (New Business vs Customer Success)

      We need to put these charts (segmentation by sales channel, region ... etc into tab set) Remove the table also Makes it more readable

    6. Key Observations New Business grade B warrants further investigation. At 18.8% UTP (9 of 48 deals), NB grade B performs worse than grades C (9.0%) and D (9.4%). The model labels these customers as “low risk” but almost 1 in 5 default. By contrast, CS grade B is at just 0.9% (1 of 106). The B grade does not appear to provide meaningful risk separation for New Business. D/E-grade UTP reflects UW decisions. Grade E deals are UW overrides; grade D deals are where the model defers to underwriter judgement. The 15-19% UTP rates at D/E should be interpreted accordingly.

      Move the observation above the chart Helps with framing what they are reading in the chart

    7. The out-of-time (OOT) sample covers funded deals from 21 Aug 2024 to 5 Feb 2025 – a period the model never saw during training. The table below summarises the overall population and the subset of “bad predictions” (grade A/B deals that ultimately went UTP within 365 days).

      Rows are deals and UTP rate and the columns are ABCDE Total Remove this table initially above as is repeated below Goal to collapse down the amount of information we share with reader

    8. What Is a “Bad Prediction”?# A bad prediction (false negative) is a deal where: The model assigned a low risk grade (A or B) The customer ended up UTP within 365 days These are the cases where the model got it most wrong – it signalled low risk, the customer was funded, and they defaulted.

      Also could be added to appendix.. Dont really need to explain that again.. Or collapse it..

    9. This analysis is specifically focused on funded deals only. Every deal in this sample was approved and received money, regardless of what the model recommended.

      This is important, as this is introducing a source of bias - part of the scope really

    10. How Model Grades Work# The delinquency model produces a continuous probability score for each deal, estimating the likelihood the customer will become UTP within 365 days. This score is then mapped to a credit grade from A to E, where A is the lowest risk and E is the highest risk. Grades vs Underwriting Decisions# An important distinction: the model grade is a recommendation, not the final decision. The underwriting (UW) team reviews each deal and can approve or decline regardless of the model grade. This means: A customer graded A or B by the model can still go UTP – this is a genuine model failure (a “bad prediction”). The model said they were low risk, UW agreed and funded them, and the customer defaulted. A customer graded D by the model may still be funded. The model cannot reliably separate goods from bads in this band, so underwriters use their own judgement to make the call. A customer graded E by the model who appears in the funded data represents a UW override – the model flagged the highest risk, and the UW team chose to approve anyway.

      Definitions, or appendix. How are they defined.. Isnt really that important right now most people will know what this is (the reader)

    11. Key Questions

      After here, Put a TLDR What are we trying to say here

      Framing the narrative and the outcomes

      Summarise the full analysis very quickly 4/5 sentences to formalise this

      Also answer the key questions within the same block

      and then rename it from key questions to answer the questions in there too

    12. By Sales Channel

      Average lines add no value. Maybe wiskers from Wilson score could be reviewed again. Why do we show them with no data... At least 30 maybe before we can use in analysis

    1. eLife Assessment

      In their study, Scherer and colleagues aim to use analyses of single-cell clones of murine granulocyte monocyte progenitors that are conditionally immortalized, and analyses of neutrophils derived from those clones to characterize an experimental system for studying neutrophil heterogeneity. The multi-omic and functional analyses reported are valuable but the strength of the evidence presented in support of them is incomplete because the study lacks a rigorous demonstration that the neutrophil-like cells that they derive are fully mature neutrophils.

    2. Reviewer #1 (Public Review):

      The heterogeneity within the neutrophil population is becoming clear. However, it was not clear if neutrophil progenitors are also heterogenous. Because neutrophils are short-lived, it is technically challenging to tackle the question. This study used a system to isolate and expand clonal neutrophil progenitors (granulocyte-monocyte progenitors; GMPs) to achieve molecular and functional profiling. In the study, transcriptional profiling was performed by RNAseq and ATACseq. Functional assays were performed ex vivo to examine phagocytosis, ROS production, NET formation, and neutrophil swarming using Candida albicans, as well as C. glabrata and C. auris. The strengths of this study include the use of the neutrophil clone system to track GMPs developing into neutrophils. The clone-based approach made it possible to evaluate the functions of multiple neutrophil subpopulations. Limitations of this study include the dependency on ex vivo approaches and the modest degree of heterogeneity within presented neutrophils. Nevertheless, the finding - the heterogeneity of neutrophils can be traced back to the GMP stage - is significant.

    3. Reviewer #2 (Public Review):

      The stated goal of the authors is to establish and characterize an experimental system to study neutrophil heterogeneity in a manner that allows for functional outcomes to be probed. To do so, they start with murine GMPs that are conditionally immortalized by ER-HoxB8 expression and make single-cell clonal populations to ask whether those GMPs or neutrophils derived by differentiating such clonal GMPs harbor heterogeneity. At a conceptual level, this is an innovative approach that could shed light on mechanisms of neutrophil heterogeneity that have been described in both health and disease. They perform bulk multi-omics and functional analyses of both the clonal GMPs and neutrophil-like cells, including transcriptional and epigenetic profiling. However, the major weakness of the study is that the authors do not provide rigorous or convincing data that the cells they derive are truly mature neutrophils. To the contrary, the neutrophil-like cells lack Ly6G expression and so the authors fall back on using CD11b as the primary marker for delineating neutrophils; however, CD11b is expressed by both myeloid progenitors and some premature and mature myeloid lineages that are not neutrophils. They acknowledge this shortcoming, but they make an assumption that Ly6G expression is the only way in which the cells they derive are different from primary neutrophils without presenting any evidence indicating such. The authors use only SCF during the maturation of ER-HoxB8 GMPs into leukocytes, rather than including other cytokines such as G-CSF (or use in vivo maturation) that could have better-induced differentiation and maturation into granulocytes/neutrophils. The authors did not use their transcriptional analyses to further establish that the cells they derive from ER-HoxB8 GMPs are similar/different from primary murine neutrophils. Unfortunately, this shortcoming means that all of the analyses of neutrophil-like cells derived from clonal GMPs may or may not represent the transcriptional, epigenetic, etc. profile of a true mature neutrophil. It is also not rigorously addressed whether what they call PMNs derived from clonal GMPs are a transcriptionally uniform population or if they harbor heterogeneity within the bulk population. Overall, while conceptually intriguing and in pursuit of an experimental system that would be impactful for the field, the study as performed has critical flaws.

    4. Author response:

      Reviewer #1 (Public Review):

      The heterogeneity within the neutrophil population is becoming clear. However, it was not clear if neutrophil progenitors are also heterogenous. Because neutrophils are short-lived, it is technically challenging to tackle the question. This study used a system to isolate and expand clonal neutrophil progenitors (granulocyte-monocyte progenitors; GMPs) to achieve molecular and functional profiling. In the study, transcriptional profiling was performed by RNAseq and ATACseq. Functional assays were performed ex vivo to examine phagocytosis, ROS production, NET formation, and neutrophil swarming using Candida albicans, as well as C. glabrata and C. auris. The strengths of this study include the use of the neutrophil clone system to track GMPs developing into neutrophils. The clone-based approach made it possible to evaluate the functions of multiple neutrophil subpopulations. Limitations of this study include the dependency on ex vivo approaches and the modest degree of heterogeneity within presented neutrophils. Nevertheless, the finding - the heterogeneity of neutrophils can be traced back to the GMP stage - is significant.

      Reviewer #2 (Public Review):

      The stated goal of the authors is to establish and characterize an experimental system to study neutrophil heterogeneity in a manner that allows for functional outcomes to be probed. To do so, they start with murine GMPs that are conditionally immortalized by ER-HoxB8 expression and make single-cell clonal populations to ask whether those GMPs or neutrophils derived by differentiating such clonal GMPs harbor heterogeneity. At a conceptual level, this is an innovative approach that could shed light on mechanisms of neutrophil heterogeneity that have been described in both health and disease. They perform bulk multi-omics and functional analyses of both the clonal GMPs and neutrophil-like cells, including transcriptional and epigenetic profiling. However, the major weakness of the study is that the authors do not provide rigorous or convincing data that the cells they derive are truly mature neutrophils. To the contrary, the neutrophil-like cells lack Ly6G expression and so the authors fall back on using CD11b as the primary marker for delineating neutrophils; however, CD11b is expressed by both myeloid progenitors and some premature and mature myeloid lineages that are not neutrophils. They acknowledge this shortcoming, but they make an assumption that Ly6G expression is the only way in which the cells they derive are different from primary neutrophils without presenting any evidence indicating such. The authors use only SCF during the maturation of ER-HoxB8 GMPs into leukocytes, rather than including other cytokines such as G-CSF (or use in vivo maturation) that could have better-induced differentiation and maturation into granulocytes/neutrophils.

      Thank you. Of note, reviewer #1 also commented on the question of including other cytokines during the neutrophil differentiation process. We have included our response to reviewer #1 below, which includes the use of GM-CSF and IL-4.

      “We have now demonstrated enhanced Ly6G expression with GM-CSF and IL-4 treatment in a new Supplementary Figure 1.

      GMPs were washed out of estradiol-containing media and placed in fresh media containing 10 ng/ml GM-CSF and/or 1 ng/ml IL-4 for four days. Cells were collected and stained with CD117 (APC), F4/80 (AlexaFluor 488), Ly6G (PE), and CD11b (BV421). Neutrophil clones were run in biological triplicates, and undifferentiated GMPs were included as a negative control.

      GMPs stain as CD117POS / F4/80NEG / Ly6GNEG / CD11bNEG, indicating they are immature. The clones removed from estradiol differentiate and lose their CD117 expression. The mature cells remain F4/80NEG, as expected for mature neutrophils.

      The addition of GM-CSF to the media led to a significant increase in the expression of Ly6G. The addition of both GM-CSF + IL-4 did not further increase the proportion of Ly6G+ cells, and we have altered our statement slightly in the main text to reflect this finding (line 139).”

      The authors did not use their transcriptional analyses to further establish that the cells they derive from ER-HoxB8 GMPs are similar/different from primary murine neutrophils. Unfortunately, this shortcoming means that all of the analyses of neutrophil-like cells derived from clonal GMPs may or may not represent the transcriptional, epigenetic, etc. profile of a true mature neutrophil.

      Thank you. The ER-Hoxb8 system has been well-characterized by many authors at the function and at the transcriptional level, confirming that the cells highly reflect that same gene expression pattern as mature neutrophils. This was actually recently reviewed by Lail et al. (Traffic, 2022, PMID: 36117140). In terms of our analysis, we used transcriptional profiling to examine heterogeneity between different single-cell clones and not to re-validate the similarity with primary neutrophils.

      It is also not rigorously addressed whether what they call PMNs derived from clonal GMPs are a transcriptionally uniform population or if they harbor heterogeneity within the bulk population.

      Thank you. The reviewer poses an interesting, albeit challenging, question of whether even a single GMP clone can differentiate and result in mature neutrophil heterogeneity. To address this would require single cell sequencing of the resulting cells which we did not perform. We relied on single cell subcloning of the immature granulocyte monocyte progenitors to ensure a genetically identical clonal population. This was then additional confirmed by the retroviral insertional analysis. These analyses confirmed the clonal nature of our starting population, from which we posed the question of as whether the neutrophils derived from these clonal GMPs resulted in mature cells with consistent functional heterogeneity, which was indeed the case.

      Overall, while conceptually intriguing and in pursuit of an experimental system that would be impactful for the field, the study as performed has critical flaws.

    1. One of the principal factors making personal identities complex today is the participation in online communities.

      My first online community was Myspace. I was so excited about talking to strangers on that platform. Looking back, I can see that it was quite terrifying for me as a teenager to have been talking to strangers in an online chat room. This connects with the reading on age an online spaces.

    1. In the US and India, for example, "Chinese" food is very popular, but differs markedly from what is found in China.

      In our Chinese class, we go to a local Chinese restaurant. The food, however, is very different then the food in China.

    2. In formally colonized nations, the language of the colonizer acquired a hegemony over the local languages, which continued even after the colonizer had left.

      In Macau, where I was born, we have Macanese. It's a combination of a colonizer language; Dutch--combined with Tagalog, Hindi, Chinese and others. This blend brought a continuation of a colonizer's language long after the Macau's successful resistance against them.

    3. One of the ways that as individuals we can contribute to understanding and tolerance towards other cultures is to engage in critical reflectivity, (Prayer, 1993), a practice often used in education and workplace settings.

      I think that a lot of people's acting out comes from an insecure sense of identity. This process could be very helpful.

    4. In addition to seeking out opportunities for gaining knowledge about other cultures, what is also needed is to engage with others in a spirit of openness and curiosity.

      College is a great place to learn how to engage with other people in a. positive way. The stories we exchange and the friendships we make can be the stepping stones to future cultural experiences,

    5. We can overcome the distortion of the "single story", as Nigerian novelist Chimamanda Adichie puts it, in a number of ways (Adichie, 2009).

      This author advocates pluralism as an antidote to the single story.

    1. 12.3. Evolution in social media# Let’s now turn to social media and look at how evolution happens there. As we said before, evolution occurs when there is: replication (with inheritance), variations or mutations, and natural selection, so let’s look at each of those.

      This section explains how social media content spreads in ways similar to biological evolution. Posts are copied and shared (replication), often changed through replies, quote tweets, or remixes (variation), and then selectively amplified based on human reactions, money, or platform algorithms (selection). Together, these forces shape which ideas go viral and which disappear, showing that platform design plays a powerful role in guiding online culture.

    1. 11.1. What Recommendation Algorithms Do# When social media platforms show users a series of posts, updates, friend suggestions, ads, or anything really, they have to use some method of determining which things to show users. The method of determining what is shown to users is called a recommendation algorithm, which is an algorithm (a series of steps or rules, such as in a computer program) that recommends posts for users to see, people for users to follow, ads for users to view, or reminders for users.

      Recommendation algorithms decide what we see on social media based on our past behavior, such as what we like, click, or spend time looking at. While this can make feeds feel personalized and engaging, it can also limit what we are exposed to and reinforce habits or interests without us realizing it, especially since these algorithms are usually hidden from users.

    1. One of the issues with which microcultures often have to contend is language. The major institutions of a country – schools, government, industry – use predominantly or exclusively the language of the dominant culture.

      As we've seen in many issues of power and privalege, language has been the medium that parties have either communicated or miscommunicated about their future.

    2. Cultural identities are dynamic and can change with one's ongoing life experiences.

      An example of this is my mother when she married someone from Russia. Her culture literally changed to part-Russian, however us kids could not understand this. She would come back to the US from Russia speaking the language and with all sorts of Russian trinkets for us. We weren't sure what to think. I can see however that her cultural identity was shifting.

    3. oday, part of that process may well happen virtually, through online social networks and media. More exposure to different kinds of people does not necessarily mean acceptance of growing social diversity.

      I've seen this in other countries where American tourists will self segregate rather than work within the local population. A great first step towards that goal is the acquisition of language. This lets the listener know that you care about their culture and want to get to know them.

    1. As a result of this tender of the palm-beach, what has been the return?

      This sentence should be "As a result of this tender of the palm-branch, what has been the return?" I think palm-beach was a predictive text error?

    1. It is too rash, too unadvised, too sudden; Too like the lightning, which doth cease to be

      A similie is used. Lightning is bright but short-lived, and Juliet senses their love is intense, but could burn out or explode (perhaps foreshadowing as well).

    2. With love's light wings did I o'er-perch these walls;

      A metaphor is used to describe love as wings. Romeo feels powerful and fearless because of love.

    3. What's in a name? that which we call a rose 890By any other name would smell as sweet;

      A rose would smell the same no matter its name. Juliet believes labels shouldn’t define someone.

    4. Now old desire doth in his death-bed lie,

      Romeo’s old love (Rosaline) is described like it’s dying. This shows how quickly his feelings change.

    1. For example, we used the concept of mole fraction to describe the partial pressure of a gas, where the partial pressure was the mole fraction times the total pressure, but that told you nothing about how close the molecules were to each other

      I don't think I understand the mole fractions use, I assumed it would describe the moles of a substance compared to the other moles within a solution or compound. How exactly is this related to pressure?

    1. Voice refers to elements of the author’s tone, phrasing, and style that are recognizably unique to her or him

      When writing it is important to have tone in your writing. It sets up the mood, vibe, and tone.

    2. Content may consist of examples, statistics, facts, anecdotes, testimonies, and observations, but no matter the type, the information must be appropriate and interesting for the audience and purpose.

      When writing an essay it is important to write proper information, but keep it interesting for the audience so they would want to pay attention. Follow what your audience wants to read about to keep their attention.

    3. If you want to brag about a good grade, you may write the post to please family members. If you want to describe a funny moment, you may write with your friends’ senses of humor in mind.

      You must always keep your audience in mind, even if its not a important paper you are writing.

    1. Our highest priority will be to avoid wasting author time. We’re very cognizant from first-hand experience that poor conversion quality, perhaps requiring back-and-forth with the author, is very unpleasant and a huge time suck.

      I suspect this is much less of an issue in the days of Claude

    2. Following acceptance, authors may pass their manuscript to the journal in any reasonable format (LaTeX or markdown preferred; Word and PDF acceptable).The document will be published in a “web-first” format, such as the Distill version of R Markdown.This allows reflowable text and mobile readability.We currently do not plan to support interactive content, as we do not think the large effort is worth the modest benefit.

      You don't have to host -- why not just evaluate and curte?

      Or you can have a compromise -- a 'traditional summary' in the journal, linking to the interactive version created by the author, the latter being the canonical one

      NB, I think interactive content is high value, but the authors can produce it, especially given Claude code etc

    3. The review process will be done using a manuscript in PDF format, which can be generated by the authors using whatever software they prefer (e.g., LaTeX). This avoids wasting the time of authors of papers that are later rejected.

      Not sure you even need pdf -- markdown should be acceptable, for example

    4. The journal Alignment will be a fast and rigorous venue for theoretical AI alignment—research on agency, understanding, and asymptotic behavior of advanced and potentially self-modifying synthetic agents

      Definitely theoretical alignment, not AI governance?

    5. Many potential criticisms of papers are “NP” (can be checked easily), so credentials of reviewer should be irrelevant

      I see that as a reasonable sterile manning of what PREreview is doing. In contrast The Unjournal we look for legible signs of expertise when we source and commission evaluators, although we do also encourage in a separate "independent evaluation" mode (which has had very little takeup)

    6. If confidential: Massive reviewer effort (the report) boiled down to a single bit (!)

      Yeah, that's the most obvious limitation of the journal system. That's why we say "publicly evaluate and rate, don't accept/reject"

    7. . Our bet is that we can could unify and expand the field of alignment by establishing a legitimate academic journal with an unorthodox review pipeline.

      There are some costs here -- maybe you can have your thing ALSO be an overlay journal Publish-review-curate thing, at least for those interested

    8. Since they are regarded as informal by institutional academia, time spent on such outputs is dead time, from the perspective of institutional research performances indicators and career progressio

      This is big -- and something Unjournal is also hoping to remedy in a sense

    9. Our experimental solution to address this problem is to publish each accepted paper with a “reviewer abstract”.  Its main goal is to help a potential reader decide — on the paper’s merits — if the paper is worth reading.

      I like this idea. We ask for "abstracts" too but I particularly like the way you have phrased it, targeted at a potential reader

    10. We think it’s very reasonable to spend an average of ~$3k per paper on reviewer payments.

      We spend less on the 'evaluators' but something of this magnitude including eval manager time and my own time etc.

    11. We intend to experiment with LLM recommendations to surface candidates that might not be salient to the editors.

      We have experience with this and I can sugggest some good tools

    12. Author identity known to reviewers

      This would not work well in situations I'm familiar with. Need to provide the opportunity for single-blind review, especially if there is some meaningful rating or filtering. Otherwise you just get back-slapping

    13. If a submission is published in the journal, the AF post is updated to reflect this, and the reviewer abstract is added. The reviewer abstract can be upvoted on AF, with the reviewers with AF accounts who sign the abstract receiving karma as appropriate.

      Why filter rather than just rate and sort? ... and let users choose how to filter?

    14. Journal Not Conference

      OK, your situation is rather different than for Unjournal -- I guess you are trying to build credibility and institutional structure for a new and fledgling tield

    15. We are tentatively planning on making the journal archival, meaning that publication there constitutes the “version of record”, in contrast to a workshop publication. (Preprints of course are allowed.)

      Bad idea IMO ... although these concerns may vary by field

    16. Public review avoids this, but introduces additional problems due to lack of confidentiality: less honest, more combative and defensive conversations between authors and reviewers. Public review also produces an artifact that is poorly suited to a reader because the c

      anonymous public review exists

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    1. Chapter 1: Introduction to College Writing at CNM This textbook was designed for English 1110 and 1120, Composition I and Composition II, respectively. If you are enrolled in one of these courses, you may be nearing the end of your studies at Central New Mexico Community College (CNM), you may be just starting your studies at CNM, or you may have already taken this class but didn’t finish. The reality is every English 1110 and 1120 course at CNM contains a diverse range of students. If you are enrolled in English 1110 or 1120 at CNM, you are likely a resident of New Mexico (NM). You might have gone to an elementary or secondary school here. You might feel like a part of the unique culture here in NM. Wherever you started, we welcome you to CNM! The graphic below lists the outcomes for English 1110 and 1120, which will be introduced by your instructor and included in your syllabus. Course Outcomes: Composition I & II Composition I: English 1110 Analyze communication through reading and writing skills. Employ writing processes such as planning, organizing, composing, and revising. Express a primary purpose and organize supporting points logically. Use and document research evidence appropriate for college-level writing. Employ academic writing styles appropriate for different genres and audiences. Identify and correct grammatical and mechanical errors in their writing. Composition II: English 1120 Analyze the rhetorical situation for purpose, main ideas, support, audience, and organizational strategies in a variety of genres. Employ writing processes such as planning, organizing, composing, and revising. Use a variety of research methods to gather appropriate, credible information. Evaluate sources, claims, and evidence for their relevance, credibility, and purpose. Quote, paraphrase, and summarize sources ethically, citing and documenting them appropriately. Integrate information from sources to effectively support claims and for other purposes ( to provide background information, evidence/examples, illustrate an alternative view, etc.). Use an appropriate voice ( including syntax and word choice). Did You Know Being a CNM student means that you are enrolled at the largest post-secondary institution in the state. CNM offers resources that can help you not only with your studies but also with managing your responsibilities as well. In this textbook, we’ll cover the conventions of writing, and we’ll also cover some of the resources available to you as a CNM student. And since this book is free and available on the internet, you can keep it…forever! This textbook is an Open Educational Resource (OER) text, which means it was created using free and available sources on the Internet, namely eight different open access books. Our compiled textbook will shift between free, outside writing resources and the plural first pronoun voice, or the we voice, signaling the English teachers who compiled and developed sections of the text. Throughout this text, the writers–all CNM English faculty, some of whom are still paying back student loans–are the we who compiled this textbook. We did so because we believe that a college education should be engaging, enlightening, informative, life-affirming, worldview-upturning and affordable. We believe it shouldn’t cost money to learn how to write, and that is why we are making this book available to you. This project also would not have happened without the support of CNM’s OER initiative and Liberal Arts administration. This textbook will cover ways to communicate effectively as you develop insight into your own style, writing process, grammatical choices, and rhetorical situations. With these skills, you should be able to improve your writing talent regardless of the discipline you enter after completing this course. Knowing your rhetorical situation, or the circumstances under which you communicate, and knowing which tone, style, and genre will most effectively persuade your audience, will help you regardless of whether you are enrolling in history, biology, theater, or music next semester–because when you get to college, you write in every discipline. To help launch our introduction this chapter includes a section from the open access textbook Successful Writing. As you begin this chapter, you may wonder why you need an introduction. After all, you have been writing and reading since elementary school. You completed numerous assessments of your reading and writing skills in high school and as part of your application process for college. You may write on the job, too. Why is a college writing course even necessary? It can be difficult to feel excited about an intro writing course when you are eager to begin the coursework in your major (and if you are an English major, let your teacher know so you can talk about your future education plans). Regardless of your field of study, honing your writing skills—plus your reading and critical-thinking skills—will help you build a solid academic foundation. In college, academic expectations change from what you may have experienced in high school. The quantity of work you are expected to complete increases. When instructors expect you to read pages upon pages or study hours and hours for one particular course, managing your workload can be challenging. This chapter includes strategies for studying efficiently and managing your time. The quality of the work you do also changes. It is not enough to understand course material and summarize it on an exam. You will also be expected to seriously engage with new ideas by reflecting on them, analyzing them, critiquing them, making connections, drawing conclusions, or finding new ways of thinking about a given subject. Educationally, you are moving into deeper waters. A good introductory writing course will help you swim. Infographic comparing various aspects of high school and college, adapted from “Chapter One” of Successful Writing, 2012, used according to Creative Commons 3.0 cc-by-nc-sa. Seeking Help Meeting College Expectations Depending on your education before coming to CNM, you will have varied writing experiences as compared with other students in class. Some students might have earned a GED, some might be returning to school after a decades-long break, and still other students might either be graduating high school, or be freshly graduated. If the latter is the case, you might enter college with a wealth of experience writing five-paragraph essays, book reports, and lab reports. Even the best students, however, need to make big adjustments to learn the conventions of academic writing. College-level writing obeys different rules, and learning them will help you hone your writing skills. Think of it as ascending another step up the writing ladder. Many students feel intimidated asking for help with academic writing; after all, it’s something you’ve been doing your entire life in school. However, there’s no need to feel like it’s a sign of your lack of ability; on the contrary, many of the strongest student writers regularly seek help and support with their writing (that’s why they’re so strong). College instructors are familiar with the ups and downs of writing, and most colleges have support systems in place to help students learn how to write for an academic audience. The following sections discuss common on-campus writing services, what to expect from them, and how they can help you. Tutoring Center CNM students have access to The Learning and Computer Center (TLCc), which is available on six campuses: Advanced Technology Center, Main, Montoya, Rio Rancho, South Valley, and Westside. At these writing centers, trained tutors help students meet college-level expectations. The tutoring centers offer one-on-one meetings, online, and group sessions for multiple disciplines. TLCc also offers workshops on citing and learning how to develop a writing process.   CNM’s Ace Tutoring Lab provides students with resources and support for their academic needs. Student-Led Workshops Some courses encourage students to share their research and writing with each other, and even offer workshops where students can present their own writing and offer constructive comments to their classmates. Independent paper-writing workshops provide a space for peers with varying interests, work styles, and areas of expertise to brainstorm. Writing in drafts makes academic work more manageable. Drafting gets your ideas onto paper, which gives you more to work with than the perfectionist’s daunting blank screen. You can always return later to fix the problems that bother you. Communicating in a College Course Communication courses teach students that communication involves two parties—the sender and the receiver of the communicated message. Sometimes, there is more than one sender and often, there is more than one receiver of the message. The main purpose of communication whether it be email, text, tweet, blog, discussion, presentation, written assignment, or speech is always to help the receiver(s) of the message understand the idea that the sender of the message is trying to share. This section will focus on electronic communication in a college course. Email or message An email or message sent to your instructor is often the result of a question you may have. Many students think contacting their instructor shows that they weren’t paying attention or that they are the only student did not understand something, so they often keep quiet and go on trying to do work that they do not understand. Other students think that their teacher is their own private tutor, so they email or message the teacher several times a day to ask questions that likely have answers in the syllabus and in the learning module instructions. Both of these behaviors are unhelpful and frustrating to the students and the instructor. On the other hand, avoid monopolizing your teacher’s email inbox with dozens of emails and messages per week and expecting her to respond immediately. Nobody enjoys having their inbox blown up with multiple messages by the same person. Try to remember your instructor will likely have many other emails from administrators, staff, and other students. Avoid sending harsh or demanding emails or messages when you are panicked, frustrated, or angry. Walk away from your computer and return at a later time when you feel calmer. Then re-read the instructions, or syllabus, or the course materials you find confusing, and if you still cannot find the answer because it is not there, definitely email or message your instructor. Tips for Emailing Your Instructor Be polite: Address your professor formally, using the title “Professor” or “Instructor” with their last name. Depending on how formal your professor seems, use a salutation (“Dear” or “Hello” followed by your professor’s name/title (Dr. XYZ, Professor XYZ, etc.) Pose a question. Clearly introduce the purpose of your email and the information you are requesting. If you are not asking a specific question, be aware that you may not receive a response to your email. Be concise. Instructors are busy people, and although they are typically more than happy to help you, kindly get to your point quickly. Sign off with your first and last name, the course number, and the class time. This will make it easy for your professor to identify you. Do not ask, “When will you return our papers?” If you MUST ask, make it specific and realistic (e.g., “Will we get our papers back by the end of next week?”). Most Instructors teach multiple classes and could have hundreds of assignments to grade. Do not ask your Instructor if you missed anything important when you were absent. Instructors work diligently to design their coursework, so asking if any of that content was important can be considered rude or dismissive of their hard work. Instead ask if missed anything that was not included on the course schedule. Creating an appropriate tone can feel overwhelming. We know that all emails should be polite, and emails to your instructor may be more formal or professional. Not all Instructors will expect formal emails, but it’s important to remember that your instructor is not your friend and that an email or message is not a text message. It is not appropriate to send an informal or colloquial message and to assume your instructor is your friend or acquaintance and that an email or message is the same as text message. Sample Email to an Instructor Subject: English 1110 Section 102: Absence Dear/Hello Professor [Last name], l was unable to attend class today, so I wanted to ask if there are any handouts or additional assignments I should complete before we meet on Thursday? I did review the syllabus and course outline, and I will complete the quiz and reading homework listed there. Many thanks, [First name] [Last name]   Communication on Public Discussion Boards Whenever you are being asked to communicate or post in a discussion forum or other communication mode, you need to ask yourself if there will be one recipient or several. In other words, who will be your readers? Is the forum private so that only your instructor or only a group of classmates or only a specific classmate can see it or is it public so that everyone, all of your classmates and your instructor can see your post? Check the forum to which you are posting for these settings. The discussion board is a public forum, so you might have a broad audience. Create a post according to the recipient(s). It is nice to address a classmate by name if you are responding to a specific person in a discussion forum.

      post to the whole class

    1. As you increase the pressure of a gas, the collision frequency increases and thus the solubility goes up, as you decrease the pressure, the solubility goes down..

      Would this mean that in a closed system a substance with a lower boiling point and higher vapor pressure would have an increased solubility

    2. When a gas phase molecule hits the surface of a liquid it may be deflected back into the gas or dissolved into the solution, in the latter case becoming a solute particle. If a dissolved molecule reaches the surface of the liquid, a fraction will have enough kinetic energy to escape, and so particles are being exchanged across the liquid/gas boundary all the time. When the rate at which the gas phase particles enter and leave are equal you have a dynamic equilibrium, where the concentration in each phase becomes a constant value. The solubility is a measure of the concentration of the dissolved gas particles in the liquid and is a function of the gas pressure. As you increase the pressure of a gas, the collision frequency increases and thus the solubility goes up, as you decrease the pressure, the solubility goes down..

      Discribes areas effect on pressure, and shows how increasing pressure effects solubility

    1. I think scheduling your reading would take the most time because you would have to know your future plans beforehand and what time and when you want to do it, early or late, etc.

    1. saturated solution it does not dissolve, typically falling to the bottom as a precipitate

      I thought a percipient was caused when two valuable compounds form an insoluble solid within an aquias solution. Is a percipient any sold within an aquias solution?

    1. eLife Assessment

      This important study tackles an interesting aspect of fungal physiology: how a mitochondria-associated gene influences production of the secondary metabolite DON and fungicide sensitivity. The authors have improved the manuscript and the supporting evidence is convincing, although some uncertainties remain around descriptions of the methods.

    2. Reviewer #1 (Public review):

      Summary:

      In their study the authors investigated the F. graminearum homologue of the Drosophila Misato-Like Protein DML1 for a function in secondary metabolism and sensitivity to fungicides.

      Strengths:

      Generally, the topic of the study is interesting and timely and the manuscript is well written, albeit in some cases details on methods or controls are missing.

      Weaknesses:

      However, a major problem I see is with the core result of the study, the decrease of the DON content associated with deletion of FgDML1: Although some growth data are shown in figure 6 - indicating a severe growth defect - the DON production presented in figure 3 is not related to biomass. Also, the method and conditions for measuring DON are not described. Consequently, it could well be concluded that the decreased amount of DON detected is simply due to a decreased growth and specific DON production of the mutant remains more or less the same.

      To alleviate this concern, it is crucial to show the details on the DON measurement and growth conditions and to relate the biomass formation on the same conditions to the DON amount detected. Only then a conclusion as to an altered production in the mutant strains can be drawn.

      Comments to the revised manuscript:

      The authors carefully revised the manuscript and provided explanations for methods in several cases. However, there are still some problems - probably due to misunderstanding - that need revision.

      (1) A major problem of the first version of the manuscript was the lack of appropriate description of biomass analysis and the consideration of the respective results for evaluation of production of DON and other metabolites. Although the authors provide some explanation in the response to reviews, I could not find a corresponding explanation or description in the manuscript. It is not sufficient to explain the problem to me, but a detailed explanation and description of the method has to be provided in the manuscript along with the definition of one "unit of mycelium". It is still not entirely clear to me what such a "unit of mycelium" is.

      Please clarify this and any other uncertainties that were commented on by me and other reviewers in the manuscript, not only in the response to reviews. Also adjust the reference list accordingly.

      (2) Another problem was, that the authors considered FgDML1 a regulator of DON production. As mentioned by me and reviewer 3, FgDML1 is crucial to numerous functions in F. graminearum and its lack causes a plethora of problems for fungal physiology. Hence, although it is clear that the lack of FgDML1 causes alterations in DON production, it is not appropriate to designate this factor as a "regulator".<br /> It seems to me that the authors are afraid that if FgDML1 would not be a "regulator" that this would decrease the value of their study, which is not the case. This is a matter of correct wording. Therefore, please revise the wording accordingly, starting with the title:

      ...FgDML1 impacts DON toxin biosynthesis...

      Moreover, for sure the manuscript might benefit from more detailed description of the whole cascade leading from FgDML1 to DON biosynthesis and production of the other metabolites that change upon deletion. Such explanation can help the reader grasp the relevance of FgDML for regulatory processes as well as on more general versus specific effects.

    3. Reviewer #2 (Public review):

      Summary:

      The manuscript entitled "Mitochondrial Protein FgDML1 Regulates DON Toxin Biosynthesis and Cyazofamid Sensitivity in Fusarium graminearum by affecting mitochondrial homeostasis" identified the regulatory effect of FgDML1 in DON toxin biosynthesis and sensitivity of Fusarium graminearum to cyazofamid. The manuscript provides a theoretical framework for understanding the regulatory mechanisms of DON toxin biosynthesis in F. graminearum and identifies potential molecular targets for Fusarium head blight control. The paper in innovative, but there are issues in the writing that need to be added and corrected.

      Comments on revisions:

      The author has addressed my questions.

    4. Author response:

      The following is the authors’ response to the original reviews.

      Reviewer #1:

      Summary:

      In their study, the authors investigated the F. graminearum homologue of the Drosophila Misato-Like Protein DML1 for a function in secondary metabolism and sensitivity to fungicides.

      Strengths:

      Generally, the topic of the study is interesting and timely, and the manuscript is well written, albeit in some cases, details on methods or controls are missing.

      Weaknesses:

      However, a major problem I see is with the core result of the study, the decrease in the DON content associated with the deletion of FgDML1. Although some growth data are shown in Figure 6, indicating a severe growth defect, the DON production presented in Figure 3 is not related to biomass. Also, the method and conditions for measuring DON are not described. Consequently, it could well be concluded that the decreased amount of DON detected is simply due to decreased growth, and the specific DON production of the mutant remains more or less the same.

      To alleviate this concern, it is crucial to show the details on the DON measurement and growth conditions and to relate the biomass formation under the same conditions to the DON amount detected. Only then can a conclusion as to an altered production in the mutant strains be drawn.

      We appreciate it very much that you spent much time on my paper and give me good suggestions, we tried our best to revise the manuscript. I have revised my manuscript according to your suggestions. The point to point responds to the reviewer’s comments are listed as following. Our method for DON quantification was based on the amount per unit of mycelium. After obtaining the absorbance value from the ELISA reaction, the concentration of DON was calculated according to a standard curve and a formula, then divided by the dry weight of the mycelium to obtain the DON content per unit of mycelium, with the results finally expressed in µg/g.

      (1) Line 139f

      ... FgDML1 is a critical positive regulator of virulence ....

      Clearly, the deletion of FgDML1 impacts virulence, but it is too much of a general effect to say it is a regulator. DML1 acts high up in the cascade, impacting numerous processes, one of which is virulence. Generally, it has to be considered that deletion of DML1 causes a severe growth defect, which in turn is likely to lead to a plethora of effects. Besides discussing this fact, please also revise the manuscript to avoid references to "direct effects" or "regulator".

      Thank you very much for your advice. Our method for determining the amount of DON is based on the amount of mycelium per unit. After obtaining the absorbance value through Elisa reaction, we calculate the concentration of DON toxin according to the established standard curve and formula. Then, we divide it by the dry weight of mycelium to obtain the DON toxin content per unit mycelium, and finally present the results in µg/g. In summary, we conclude that the decrease in DON production by ΔFgDML is not due to slower hyphal growth, but rather a decrease in the ability of unit hyphae to produce DON toxins compared to the wild type. Given the decrease in DON toxin synthesis caused by FgDML1 deficiency, we believe that using a regulator is reasonable.

      (2) Line 143

      Please define "toxin-producing conditions".

      Thank you very much for your advice. We have accurately defined the conditions for toxin-producing conditions in the manuscript' toxin-inducing conditions '(28°C, 145 ×g, 7 days incubation)' (in L163-164)

      (3) Line 149

      A brief intro on toxisomes should be provided in the introduction to better integrate this into the manuscript's results.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We have added corresponding content about toxin producing bodies in the introduction section 'The biosynthesis of DON entails a reorganization of the endoplasmic reticulum into a specialized compartment termed the "toxisome" (Tang et al., 2018). The assembly of the toxisome coincides with the aggregation of key biosynthetic enzymes, which in turn enhances the efficiency of DON production. Concurrently, this compartmentalization serves as a self-defense mechanism, protecting the fungus from the autotoxicity of TRI pathway intermediates (Boenisch et al., 2017). The proteins TRI1, TRI4, TRI14, and Hmr1 are confirmed constituents of this structure(Kistler and Broz, 2015; Menke et al., 2013).' (in L86-93)

      (4) Line 153

      DON production decreases by about 80 %, but not to 0. Consequently, DML1 is important, but NOT essential for DON production.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We have made changes to the wording of the corresponding sections based on your suggestions. 'FgDML1 is essential for the biosynthesis of the DON toxin. '(in L161)

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      Please provide a reference for FgDnm1 being critical for mitochondrial fission and state whether such an interaction has been shown in other organisms.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We have made changes to the wording of the corresponding sections based on your suggestions. 'FgDnm1 is a key dynamin-related protein mediating mitochondrial fission(Griffin et al., 2005; Kang et al., 2023), suggesting that FgDML1 may form a complex with FgDnm1 to regulate mitochondrial fission and fusion processes. To our knowledge, this is the first report documenting an interaction between DML1 and Dnm in any fungal species, including model organisms such as S. cerevisiae. This novel finding provides new insights into the molecular mechanisms underlying mitochondrial dynamics in filamentous fungi. '(in L277-283)

      (6) Line 178

      Please specify whether Complex III activity was related to biomass and provide a p-value or standard deviation for the value.

      Thank you very much for your question. The activity determination of complex III was completed using a complex III enzyme activity kit (Solarbio, Beijing, China) (Li, et al 2022; Wang, et al 2022). Take 0.1 g of standardized mycelium as the sample for the experiment. Given that the mycelium has been homogenized, we believe that there is no necessary correlation between the activity and biomass of complex III. And we also refined the specific measurement steps in the article. ' Briefly, 0.1 g of mycelia was homogenized with 1 mL of extraction buffer in an ice bath. The homogenate was centrifuged at 600 ×g for 10 min at 4°C. The resulting supernatant was then subjected to a second centrifugation at 11,100 ×g for 10 min at 4°C. The pellet was resuspended in 200 μL of extraction buffer and disrupted by ultrasonication (200 W, 5 s pulses with 10 s intervals, 15 cycles). Complex III enzyme activity was finally measured by adding the working solution as per the manufacturer's protocol. Each treatment group contains three biological replicates and three technical replicates. '(in L511-517)

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      (7) Line 185

      Albeit this headline is a reasonable hypothesis, you actually did not show that the conformation is altered. Please reword accordingly.

      Please also add references for cyazofamid acting on the QI site versus other fungicides acting on the QO site.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We have made changes to the wording of the corresponding sections based on your suggestions. 'Overexpression of FgQCR2, FgQCR8, and FgQCR9 may alters the conformation of the QI site, resulting in reduced sensitivity to cyazofamid. '(in L212-213). For fungicides targeting Qi and QO sites, we have added corresponding descriptions in the respective sections 'Numerous fungicides have been developed to inhibit the Qo site (e.g., pyraclostrobin, azoxystrobin)(Nuwamanya et al., 2022; Peng et al., 2022) and the Qi site (e.g., cyazofamid)(Mitani et al., 2001) of the cytochrome bc1 complex. '(in L327-329)

      (8) Line 200

      This section on growth should be moved up right after introducing the mutant strain.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We have advanced the part of nutritional growth and sexual asexual development before DON toxin to promote better reading and understanding. We arranged the sequence in the previous way to emphasize the new discovery between mitochondria and DON toxin. We found a significant decrease in DON toxin in ΔFgDML1, defects in the formation of toxin producing bodies, and downregulation of FgTRis at both the gene and protein levels. In summary, we believe that the absence of FgDML1 does indeed lead to a decrease in the content of DON toxin, and FgDML1 plays a regulatory role in the synthesis of DON toxin. In addition, our measurements of DON toxin, acetyl CoA, ATP and other indicators are all based on the amount per unit hyphae, excluding differences caused by hyphal biomass or growth. We have further refined the materials and methods to facilitate better reading and understanding.

      (9) Line 203

      "... significantly reduced growth rates ..."

      This is not what was measured here. Figure 6A shows a plate assay that can be used to assess hyphal extension. In the figure, it is also visible that the mycelium of the deletion mutant is much denser, maybe due to increased hyphal branching. Please reword.

      Additionally, it is important to include a biomass measurement here under the conditions used for DON assessment. Hyphal extension measurements cannot be used instead of biomass.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We have made changes to the wording of the corresponding sections based on your suggestions. 'The ΔFgDML1 strain displayed a distinct growth phenotype characterized by retardation in radial growth and the formation of more compact, denser hyphal networks on all tested media compared to the PH-1 and ΔFgDML-C strains. '(in L136-138).

      (10) Line 217

      Please include information on how long the cultures were monitored. Given the very slow growth of the mutant, perithecia formation may be considerably delayed beyond 14 days.

      Thank you very much for your advice. Based on your suggestion, we have extended the incubation time for sexual reproduction to 21 days to more accurately evaluate its sexual reproduction ability. Our results show that even after 21 days, Δ FgDML1 still cannot produce ascospores and ascospores, which proves that the absence of FgDML1 does indeed cause sexual reproduction defects in F. graminearum.

      Author response image 1.

      Discussion

      (11) Please mention your summary Figure 8 early on in the discussion, and explain conclusions with this figure in mind. Please avoid repetition of the results section as much as possible.

      Also, please state clearly what was already known from previous research and is in agreement with your results, and what is new (in fungi or generally).

      Thank you very much for your advice. Based on your suggestion, we mentioned Fig8 earlier in the first half of the discussion and provided guidance for the following text. We also conducted a more comprehensive discussion by analyzing our research results and comparing them with previous studies. 'Our study defines a novel mechanism through which FgDML1 governs mitochondrial homeostasis. We demonstrate that FgDML1 directly interacts with the key mitochondrial fission regulator FgDnm1 and positively modulates cellular bioenergetic metabolism, as evidenced by elevated ATP and acetyl-CoA levels (Fig. 8). '(in L250-253). 'The Misato/DML1 protein family is evolutionarily conserved from yeast to humans and plays a critical role in mitochondrial regulation. In S. cerevisiae, DML1 is an essential gene; its deletion is lethal, while its overexpression results in fragmented mitochondrial networks and aberrant cellular morphology, underscoring its necessity for normal mitochondrial function (Gurvitz et al., 2002). Similarly, in Homo sapiens, the homolog Misato localizes to the mitochondrial outer membrane, and both its depletion and overexpression are sufficient to disrupt mitochondrial morphology and distribution (Kimura and Okano, 2007). '(in L241-244).

      (12) Line 262ff

      Please specify if this interaction was shown previously in other organisms and provide references.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We have clearly stated in the corresponding section that the interaction between FgDML and FgDnm is the first reported, and to our knowledge, no relevant reports have been found in other species so far. ' Notably, FgDML1 was found to interact with FgDnm1 (Fig. 5E), FgDnm1 is a key dynamin-related protein mediating mitochondrial fission(Griffin et al., 2005; Kang et al., 2023), suggesting that FgDML1 may form a complex with FgDnm1 to regulate mitochondrial fission and fusion processes. To our knowledge, this is the first report documenting an interaction between DML1 and Dnm in any fungal species, including model organisms such as S. cerevisiae. This novel finding provides new insights into the molecular mechanisms underlying mitochondrial dynamics in filamentous fungi. '(in L276-283)

      (13) Line 287ff

      There is no result that would justify this speculation. Please remove.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We have modified the corresponding wording in the corresponding section. 'In conclusion, our findings suggest that the overexpression of assembly factors FgQCR2, FgQCR7, and FgQCR8 in ΔFgDML1 potentially modifies the conformation of the Qi site, which specifically modulates the sensitivity of F. graminearum to cyazofamid. '(in L352-355)

      Materials and methods

      (14) A table with all primer sequences used in the study and their purpose is missing. For every experiment, the number of technical and biological replicates needs to be stated.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We have presented all the primers used in this study in Supplementary Table 1 (in Table S1) .We added the number of technical and biological replicates in the material and method descriptions for each experiment. 'For each sample, a total of 200 conidia were counted. The experiment included three biological replicates with three technical replicates each.'(in L434-436). 'Each treatment group contains three biological replicates. '(in L444-445). 'Each treatment group contains three biological replicates and three technical replicates. ' (in L463-464). 'Each treatment group contains three biological replicates and three technical replicates. '(in L474-475). 'Each treatment group contains three biological replicates. '(in L483). 'Each treatment group contains three biological replicates and three technical replicates.'(in L501-502). 'Each treatment group contains three biological replicates and three technical replicates. '(in L516-517). 'The experiment was independently repeated three times. '(in L533-534).

      (15) Line 369ff

      Please provide final concentrations used for assays here.

      Thank you very much for your advice. The final concentration has been displayed in the Figure (in Fig6. A, B) (in Fig. S3). And we have provided supplementary Table 2 to reflect the concentration in a more intuitive way.(in Table. S2)

      (16) Line 383

      Please provide a reference or data on the use of F2du for transformant selection and explain the abbreviation.

      Thank you very much for your advice. Based on your suggestion, we have provided the full name and references of F2du. 'Transformants were selected on PDA plates containing either 100 μg/mL Hygromycin B (Yeasen, Shanghai, China) or 0.2 μmol/mL 5-Fluorouracil 2'-deoxyriboside (F2du) (Solarbio, Beijing, China)(Zhao et al., 2022). '(in L405-407).

      (17) Line 407

      Please provide a reference for the method and at least a brief description.

      Thank you very much for your advice. Based on your suggestion, we have added references and provided a brief introduction to the method. 'As previously described (Tang et al., 2020; Wang et al., 2025), Specifically, coleoptiles were inoculated with conidial suspensions and incubated for 14 days, while leaves were inoculated with fresh mycelial plugs and incubated for 5 days, followed by observation and quantification of disease symptoms. DON toxin was measured using a Wise Science ELISA-based kit (Wise Science, Jiangsu, China) (Li et al., 2019; Zheng et al., 2018). '(in L466-471)

      (18) Line 414ff

      Also, here, the amount of biomass has to be considered for the measurement to be able to distinguish if actually less of the compounds were produced or if the effect seen was merely due to an altered amount of biomass present.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We believe that biomass is not within the scope of our measurement indicators, as we have measured and calculated based on unit hyphae. Therefore, we have ruled out experimental bias caused by a decrease in biomass.

      RNA and RT-qPCR

      (19) Line 461

      When the strains were transferred to AEA medium, was the biomass measured, at least wet weight, and in which culture volume was it done? It makes a big difference if the amount of (wet) biomass dilutes a small amount of fungicide-containing culture or if biomass is added in at least roughly equal amounts in sufficient growth medium to ensure equal conditions.

      Thank you very much for your question. Our sample processing controlled the wet weight of the samples before dosing, ensuring that the wet weight of the mycelium obtained from each sample before dosing was 0.2g. The mycelium was obtained through AEA with a volume of 100mL. This ensured consistency in the initial biomass between groups before dosing, and also ensured the accuracy of the drug concentration.

      (20) Line 466

      Please provide the name and supplier of the kit.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We have added corresponding content in the corresponding location. 'Mycelium was collected and total RNA was extracted following the instructions provided by the Total RNA Extraction Kit (Tiangen, Beijing, China).' (in L523-524).

      (21) All primer sequences must be provided in a table.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We have presented all the primers used in this study in Supplementary Table 1. (in Table S1).

      (22) For RT qPCR it is essential to check the RNA quality to be sure that the obtained results are not artifacts due to varying quality, which may exceed differences. Please state how quality control was done and which threshold was applied for high-quality RNA to be used in RTqPCR (like RIN factor, etc).

      Thank you very much for your question. We performed stringent quality control on the extracted total RNA. First, a micro-spectrophotometer was used to measure RNA concentration and purity, confirming that the A260/A280 ratio was between 1.8 and 2.0 and the A260/A230 ratio was greater than 2.0, indicating good RNA purity without significant protein or organic solvent contamination.Subsequently, verification by agarose gel electrophoresis revealed distinct 28S and 18S rRNA bands, demonstrating good RNA integrity and absence of degradation.

      Author response image 2.

      (B): Minor Comments:

      (1) Please increase the font size of the labels and annotations of the figures; it is hard to read as it is now.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We have increased the size of annotations or numerical labels in the corresponding images for better reading.

      (2) Throughout the manuscript: Please check that all abbreviations are explained at first use.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We have checked the entire text to ensure that abbreviations have their full names when they first appear.

      (3) I do hope that the authors can clarify all concerns and provide an amended manuscript of this interesting story.

      Thank you very much for your advice. Sincerely thank you for your suggestions and questions, which have been very helpful to us.

      Reviewer #2:

      The manuscript entitled "Mitochondrial Protein FgDML1 Regulates DON Toxin Biosynthesis and Cyazofamid Sensitivity in Fusarium graminearum by affecting mitochondrial homeostasis" identified the regulatory effect of FgDML1 in DON toxin biosynthesis and sensitivity of Fusarium graminearum to cyazofamid. The manuscript provides a theoretical framework for understanding the regulatory mechanisms of DON toxin biosynthesis in F. graminearum and identifies potential molecular targets for Fusarium head blight control. The paper is innovative, but there are issues in the writing that need to be addressed and corrected.

      We appreciate it very much that you spent much time on my paper and give me good suggestions, we tried our best to revise the manuscript. I have revised my manuscript according to your suggestions with red words. In the response comments, to highlight the specific positions of the revised parts in the manuscript with red line number. The point to point responds to the reviewer’s comments are listed as following.

      Weaknesses:

      (1) The authors speculate that cyazofamid treatment caused upregulation of the assembly factors, leading to a change in the conformation of the Qi protein, thus restoring the enzyme activity of complex III. But no speculation was given in the discussion as to why this would lead to the upregulation of assembly factors, and how the upregulation of assembly factors would change the protein conformation, and is there any literature reporting a similar phenomenon? I would suggest adding this to the discussion.

      Thank you very much for your advice. Based on your suggestion, we have added content related to the assembly factor of complex III in the discussion section and made modifications to the corresponding wording. 'Previous studies have reported that mutations in the Complex III assembly factors TTC19, UQCC2, and UQCC3 impair the assembly and activity of Complex III (Feichtinger et al., 2017; Wanschers et al., 2014). '(in L345-347). 'In conclusion, our findings suggest that the overexpression of assembly factors FgQCR2, FgQCR7, and FgQCR8 in ΔFgDML1 potentially modifies the conformation of the Qi site, which specifically modulates the sensitivity of F. graminearum to cyazofamid. '(in L352-355).

      (2) Would increased sensitivity of the mutant to cell wall stress be responsible for the excessive curvature of the mycelium?

      Thank you very much for your question. We believe that the sensitivity of ΔFgDML1 to osmotic stress is reduced, which may not be related to hyphal bending, as shown in the Author response image 3. During the conidia stage, ΔFgDML1 cannot germinate in YEPD, while the application of 1M Sorbitol promotes its germination. But it is caused by internal unknown mechanisms, which is also the focus of our future research.

      Author response image 3.

      (3) The vertical coordinates of Figure 7B need to be modified with positive inhibition rates for the mutants.

      Thank you very much for your advice. The display in Figure 7B truly reflects its inhibition rate. In the Δ FgDML1 mutant, when subjected to osmotic stress treatment, the inhibition rate becomes negative, indicating that the colony growth is greater than that of the CK. Therefore, the negative inhibition rate is shown in Figure 7B.

      (1) In Figure 1B, Figure 3C, and Figure 6C, the scale below the picture is not clear. In Figure 5D, the histogram is unclear, and it is recommended to redraw the graph.

      Thank you very much for your advice. The issue with the above images may be due to Word compression. We have changed the settings and enlarged the images as much as possible to better display them.

      (2) The full Latin name of the strain should be used in the title of figures and tables.

      Thank you very much for your advice. Based on your suggestion, we have used the full names of the strains appearing in the title of figures and tables.

      (3) Proteins in line 117 should be abbreviated.

      Thank you very much for your advice. Based on your suggestion, we have abbreviated the corresponding positions. 'The DML1 protein from S. cerevisiae was used as a query for a BLAST search against the Fusarium genome database, resulting in the identification of the putative DML1 gene FgDML1 (FGSG_05390) in F. graminearum. '(in L118-120).

      (4) The sentence in lines 187-189, which is supposed to introduce why the test is sensitive to the three drugs, is currently illogical.

      Thank you very much for your advice. Based on your suggestion, we have made modifications to the corresponding sections. 'Since Complex III is involved in the action of both cyazofamid (targeting the QI site) and pyraclostrobin (targeting the QO site), the sensitivity of ΔFgDML1 to cyazofamid and pyraclostrobin was investigated. ' (in L214-216).

      (5) The expression of FgQCR2, FgQCR7, and FgQCR8 was significantly upregulated in ΔFgDML1 at transcription levels. Do FgQCR2, FgQCR8, and FgQCR9 show upregulated expression at the protein level?

      Thank you very much for your question. Based on your suggestion, we evaluated the protein expression levels of FgQCR2, FgQCR7, and FgQCR8 in PH-1 and ΔFgDML1, and we found that the protein expression levels of FgQCR2, FgQCR7, and FgQCR8 in ΔFgDML1 were higher than those in PH-1. (in Fig. 6F).

      (6) In Figure 7B, it is recommended to adjust the position of the horizontal axis labels in the histogram.

      Thank you very much for your advice. Based on your suggestion, we have made modifications to the corresponding sections.(in Fig. 7B)

      (7) There are numerous errors in the writing of gene names in the text. Please check the full text and change the writing of gene names and mutant names to italic.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We have checked the entire text to ensure that all genes have been italicized.

      (8) All acronyms should be spelled out in figure and table captions. e.g., F. graminearum.

      Thank you very much for your advice. Based on your suggestion, we have used the full names of the strains appearing in the title of figures and tables.

      (9) In line 492, P should be lowercase and italic.

      Thank you very much for your advice. Based on your suggestion, we have made adjustments to the corresponding content.

      Reviewer #3:

      Summary:

      The manuscript "Mitochondrial 1 protein FgDML1 regulates DON toxin biosynthesis and cyazofamid sensitivity in Fusarium graminearum by affecting mitochondrial homeostasis" describes the construction of a null mutant for the FgDML1 gene in F. graminearum and assays characterising the effects of this mutation on the pathogen's infection process and lifecycle. While FgDML1 remains underexplored with an unclear role in the biology of filamentous fungi, and although the authors performed several experiments, there are fundamental issues with the experimental design and execution, and interpretation of the results.

      Strengths:

      FgDML1 is an interesting target, and there are novel aspects in this manuscript. Studies in other organisms have shown that this protein plays important roles in mitochondrial DNA (mtDNA) inheritance, mitochondrial compartmentalisation, chromosome segregation, mitochondrial distribution, mitochondrial fusion, and overall mitochondrial dynamics. Indeed, in Saccharomyces cerevisiae, the mutation is lethal. The authors have carried out multi-faceted experiments to characterise the mutants.

      Weaknesses:

      However, I have concerns about how the study was conceived. Given the fundamental importance of mitochondrial function in eukaryotic cells and how the absence of this protein impacts these processes, it is unsurprising that deletion of this gene in F. graminearum profoundly affects fungal biology. Therefore, it is misleading to claim a direct link between FgDML1 and DON toxin biosynthesis (and virulence), as the observed effects are likely indirect consequences of compromised mitochondrial function. In fact, it is reasonable to assume that the production of all secondary metabolites is affected to some extent in the mutant strains and that such a strain would not be competitive at all under non-laboratory conditions. The order in which the authors present the results can be misleading, too. The results on vegetative growth rate appeared much later in the manuscript, which should have come first, as the FgDML1 mutant exhibited significant growth defects, and subsequent results should be discussed in that context. Moreover, the methodologies are not described properly, making the manuscript hard to follow and difficult to replicate.

      We appreciate it very much that you spent much time on my paper and give me good suggestions, we tried our best to revise the manuscript. I have revised my manuscript according to your suggestions with red words. In the response comments, to highlight the specific positions of the revised parts in the manuscript with red line number. The point to point responds to the reviewer’s comments are listed as following.

      For weaknesses,we arranged the sequence in this way to emphasize the novel discovery between mitochondria and DON toxin. We found a significant decrease in DON toxin in Δ FgDML1, defects in the formation of toxin producing bodies, and downregulation of FgTRis at both the gene and protein levels. In summary, we believe that the absence of FgDML1 does indeed lead to a decrease in the content of DON toxin, and FgDML1 plays a regulatory role in the synthesis of DON toxin. In addition, our measurements of DON toxin, acetyl CoA, ATP and other indicators are all based on the amount per unit hyphae, excluding differences caused by hyphal biomass or growth. We have further refined the materials and methods to facilitate better reading and understanding.

      (1) Lines 37-39: The disease itself does not produce toxins; it is the fungus that causes the disease that produces toxins. Moreover, the disease symptoms observed are likely caused by the toxins produced by the fungus.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We have made modifications to the wording of the corresponding sections. 'Studies have shown that increased DON levels are positively correlated with the pathogenicity rate of F. graminearum.'(in L36-37).

      (2) Lines 82-87: While it is challenging to summarise the role of ATP in just a few words, this section needs improvement for clarity and accuracy. Additionally, I do not believe that drawing a direct link between mitochondrial defects and toxin production is an appropriate strategy in this case.

      Thank you very much for your advice. Based on your suggestion, we have added corresponding descriptions in the corresponding positions to provide more information on the relationship between ATP and toxins, in order to better prepare for the following text. 'Pathogen-intrinsic ATP homeostasis is recognized as a critical, rate-limiting determinant for toxin biosynthesis. Previous studies indicate that dual-target inhibition of ATP synthase (AtpA) and adenine deaminase (Ade) by a specific small-molecule probe effectively depletes intracellular ATP, consequently suppressing the synthesis of key virulence factors TcdA and TcdB transcriptionally and translationally(Marreddy et al., 2024). The systemic toxicity of Anthrax Edema Toxin (ET) is primarily attributed to its catalytic activity, which depletes the host cell's ATP reservoir, thereby triggering a bioenergetic collapse that culminates in cell lysis and death(Liu et al., 2025). '(in L78-86).

      (3) Lines 125-126: The manuscript does not clearly describe how subcellular localisation was determined. This methodology needs to be properly detailed.

      Thank you very much for your advice. The subcellular localization was validated through co-localization analysis with MitoTracker Red CMXRos, a mitochondrial-specific dye. The observed overlap between the FgDML1-GFP signal and the mitochondrial marker confirmed mitochondrial localization. Based on these results, we determined that FgDML1 is definitively localized to the mitochondria.We have incorporated this description in the appropriate section of the manuscript. 'Furthermore, subcellular localization studies confirmed that FgDML1 localizes to mitochondria, as demonstrated by colocalization with a mitochondria-specific dye MitoTracker Red CMXRos (Fig. 1B). '(in L125-127).

      (4) Regarding the organisation of the Results section, it needs to be revised. While I understand the authors' intention to emphasise the impact on virulence, the results showing how FgDML1 deletion affects vegetative growth, asexual and sexual reproduction, and sensitivity to stressors should be presented before the virulence assays and effects on DON production. Additionally, the authors do not provide any clear evidence that FgDML1 directly interacts with proteins involved in asexual or sexual reproduction, stress responses, or virulence. Therefore, it is misleading to suggest that FgDML1 directly regulates these processes. The observed phenotypes are, rather, a consequence of severely impaired mitochondrial function. Without functional mitochondria, the cell cannot operate properly, leading to widespread physiological defects. In this regard, statements such as those in lines 139-140 and 343-344 are misleading.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We have adjusted the order of the images based on your suggestion, placing the characterization of ΔFgDML1 in nutritional growth, sexual reproduction, and other aspects before DON toxin. And we have made adjustments to the corresponding statements. 'These findings demonstrate that FgDML1 is a positive regulator of virulence in F. graminearum. '(in L140-141).

      (5) Lines 185-186: The authors do not provide sufficient evidence to support the claim that FgQCR2, FgQCR8, and FgQCR9 overexpression is the main cause of reduced cyazofamid sensitivity. Although expression of these genes is altered, reduced sensitivity may result from changes in other proteins or pathways. To strengthen this claim, overexpression of FgQCR2, 8, and 9 in the wild-type background, followed by assessment of cyazofamid resistance, would be necessary. As it stands, there is no support for the claim presented in lines 329-332.

      Thank you very much for your advice. To establish a causal link between the overexpression of FgQCR2, FgQCR7, and FgQCR8 and the observed reduction in cyazofamid sensitivity, we first quantified the protein levels of these assembly factor. Western blot analysis confirmed their elevated expression in the ΔFgDML1 mutant compared to the wild-type PH-1. We further generated individual overexpression strains for FgQCR2, FgQCR7, and FgQCR8 in the wild-type PH-1 background. Fungicide sensitivity assays revealed that all three overexpression mutants displayed significantly reduced sensitivity to cyazofamid compared to the parental strain. These genetic complementation experiments confirm that upregulation of FgQCR2, FgQCR7, and FgQCR8 is sufficient to confer reduced cyazofamid sensitivity.We have incorporated these explanations and provided supporting images in the appropriate section of the manuscript. 'To further clarify whether the upregulated expression of FgQCR2, FgQCR7, and FgQCR8 genes affects their protein expression levels, we measured the protein levels. The results showed that the protein expression levels of FgQCR2, FgQCR7, and FgQCR8 in ΔFgDML1 were higher than those in PH-1(Fig. 6F). Subsequently, we overexpressed FgQCR2, FgQCR7, and FgQCR8 in the wild-type background, and the corresponding overexpression mutants exhibited reduced sensitivity to cyazofamid(Fig. 6E). '(in L205-211)(in Fig. 6E, F)

      (6) Lines 187-190: This segment is confusing and difficult to follow. It requires rewriting for clarity.

      Thank you very much for your advice. Based on your suggestion, we have made corresponding modifications in the corresponding locations. 'Since Complex III is involved in the action of both cyazofamid (targeting the QI site) and pyraclostrobin (targeting the QO site), the sensitivity of ΔFgDML1 to cyazofamid and pyraclostrobin was investigated. ''(in L214-216)

      (7) Lines 345-346: The authors state that in this study, FgDML1 is localised in mitochondria, which implies that in other studies, its localisation was different. Is this accurate? Clarification is needed.

      Thank you very much for your question. In previous studies, the localization of this protein was not clearly defined, and its function was only emphasized to be related to mitochondria. Whether in yeast or in Drosophila melanogaster. (Miklos et al., 1997; Gurvitz et al., 2002)

      Miklos GLG, Yamamoto M-T, Burns RG, Maleszka R. 1997. An essential cell division gene of drosophila, absent from saccharomyces, encodes an unusual protein with  tubulin-like and myosin-like peptide motifs. Proc Natl Acad Sci 94:5189–5194. doi:10.1073/pnas.94.10.5189

      Gurvitz A, Hartig A, Ruis H, Hamilton B, de Couet HG. 2002. Preliminary characterisation of DML1, an essential saccharomyces cerevisiae gene related to misato of drosophila melanogaster. FEMS Yeast Res 2:123–135. doi:10.1016/S1567-1356(02)00083-1

      Material and Methods Section

      (8) In general, the methods require more detailed descriptions, including the brands and catalog numbers of reagents and kits used. Simply stating that procedures were performed according to manufacturers' instructions is insufficient, particularly when the specific brand or kit is not identified.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We have added corresponding content based on your suggestion to more comprehensively display the reagent brand and complete product name. 'Transformants were selected on PDA plates containing either 100 μg/mL Hygromycin B (Yeasen, Shanghai, China) or 0.2 μmol/mL 5-Fluorouracil 2'-deoxyriboside (F2du) (Solarbio, Beijing, China)(Zhao et al., 2022). ' (in L405-407). 'DON toxin was measured using a Wise Science ELISA-based kit (Wise Science, Jiangsu, China) (Li et al., 2019; Zheng et al., 2018) '. (in L469-471)

      (9) Line 364: What do CM and MM stand for? Please define.

      Thank you very much for your advice. Based on your suggestion, we have made modifications in the corresponding locations. 'To evaluate vegetative growth, complete medium (CM), minimal medium (MM), and V8 Juice Agar (V8) media were prepared as described previously(Tang et al., 2020). '(in L385-387)

      Generation of Deletion and Complemented Mutants:

      (10) This section lacks detail. For example, were PCR products used directly for PEG-mediated transformation, or were the fragments cloned into a plasmid?

      Thank you very much for your question. We directly use the fused fragments for protoplast transformation after sequencing confirmation. We have clearly defined the fragment form used for transformation at the corresponding location. 'The resulting fusion fragment was transformed into the wild-type F. graminearum PH-1 strain via polyethylene glycol (PEG)-mediated protoplast transformation. '(in L403-405).

      (11) PCR and Southern blot validation results should be included as supplementary material, along with clear interpretations of these results.

      Thank you very much for your advice. In the supplementary material we submitted, Supplementary Figure 2 already includes the results of PCR and Southern blot validation.(in Fig. S2)

      (12) There is almost no description of how the mutants mentioned in lines 388-390 were generated.

      Thank you very much for your advice. Based on your suggestions, we have added relevant content in the appropriate sections to more comprehensively and clearly reflect the experimental process. 'Specifically, FgDML1, including its native promoter region and open reading frame (ORF) (excluding the stop codon), was amplified.The PCR product was then fused with the XhoI -digested pYF11 vector. After transformation into E. coli and sequence verification, the plasmid was extracted and subsequently introduced into PH-1 protoplasts. For FgDnm1-3×Flag, the 3×Flag tag was added to the C-terminus of FgDnm1 by PCR, fused with the hygromycin resistance gene and the FgDnm1 downstream arm, and then introduced into PH-1 protoplasts. The overexpression mutant was constructed according to a previously described method. Specifically, the ORF of FgDML1 was amplified and the PCR product was ligated into the SacII-digested pSXS overexpression vector. The resulting plasmid was then transformed into PH-1 protoplasts (Shi et al., 2023). For the construction of PH-1::FgTri1+GFP and ΔFgDML1::FgTri1+GFP, the ORF of FgTri1 was amplified and ligated into the XhoI-digested pYF11 vector as described above. The resulting vectors were then transformed into protoplasts of PH-1 or ΔFgDML1, respectively.'(in L413-426).

      Vegetative Growth and Conidiation Assays:

      (13) There is no information about how long the plates were incubated before photos were taken. Judging by the images, it appears that different incubation times may have been used.

      Thank you very much for your advice. Due to the slower growth of ΔFgDML1, we adopted different incubation periods and have supplemented the relevant content in the corresponding section. 'All strains were incubated at 25°C in darkness; however, due to ΔFgDML1 slower growth, the ΔFgDML1 mutant required a 5-day incubation period compared to the 3 days used for PH-1 and ΔFgDML1-C. '(in L490-493).

      (14) There is no description of the MBL medium.

      Thank you very much for your advice. Based on your suggestion, we have supplemented the corresponding content in the corresponding positions. 'Mung bean liquid (MBL) medium was used for conidial production, while carrot agar (CA) medium was utilized to assess sexual reproduction(Wang et al., 2011). '(in L387-389).

      DON Production and Pathogenicity Assays:

      (15) Were DON levels normalised to mycelial biomass? The vegetative growth assays show that FgDML1 null mutants exhibit reduced growth on all tested media. If mutant and wild-type strains were incubated for the same period under the same conditions, it is reasonable to assume that the mutants accumulated significantly less biomass. Therefore, results related to DON production, as well as acetyl-CoA and ATP levels, must be normalised to biomass.

      Thank you very much for your question. We have taken into account the differences in mycelial biomass. Therefore, when measuring DON, acetyl-CoA, and ATP levels, all data were normalized to mycelial mass and calculated as amounts per unit of mycelium, thereby avoiding discrepancies arising from variations in biomass.

      Sensitivity Assays:

      (16) While the authors mention that gradient concentrations were used, the specific concentrations and ranges are not provided. Importantly, have the plates shown in Figure 5 been grown for different periods or lengths? Given the significantly reduced growth rate shown in Figure 6A, the mutants should not have grown to the same size as the WT (PH-1) as shown in Figures 5A and 5B unless the pictures have been taken on different days. This needs to be explained.

      Thank you very much for your question. Due to the slower growth of ΔFgDML1, we adopted different incubation periods and have supplemented the relevant content in the corresponding section. 'All strains were incubated at 25°C in darkness; however, due to ΔFgDML1 slower growth, the ΔFgDML1 mutant required a 5-day incubation period compared to the 3 days used for PH-1 and ΔFgDML1-C. '(in L490-493).

      (17) Additionally, was inhibition measured similarly for both stress agents and fungicides? This should be clarified.

      Thank you very much for your question. We have supplemented the specific concentration gradient of fungicides. 'The concentration gradients for each fungicide in the sensitivity assays were set up according to Supplementary Table S2. '(in L493-494)(in Table. S2).

      Complex III Enzyme Activity:

      (18) A more detailed description of how this assay was performed is needed.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We have provided further detailed descriptions of the corresponding sections. 'Briefly, 0.1 g of mycelia was homogenized with 1 mL of extraction buffer in an ice bath. The homogenate was centrifuged at 600 ×g for 10 min at 4°C. The resulting supernatant was then subjected to a second centrifugation at 11,000 ×g for 10 min at 4°C. The pellet was resuspended in 200 μL of extraction buffer and disrupted by ultrasonication (200 W, 5 s pulses with 10 s intervals, 15 cycles). Complex III enzyme activity was finally measured by adding the working solution as per the manufacturer's protocol. '(in L511-517)

      (19) Were protein concentrations standardised prior to the assay?

      Thank you very much for your question. Protein concentrations for all Western blot samples were quantified using a BCA assay kit to ensure equal loading.

      (20) Line 448: Are ΔFgDML1::Tri1+GFP and ΔFgDML1+GFP the same strain? ΔFgDML1::Tri1+GFP has not been previously described.

      Thank you very much for your question. These two strains are not the same strain, and we have supplemented their construction process in the corresponding section. 'For the construction of PH-1::FgTri1+GFP and ΔFgDML1::FgTri1+GFP, the ORF of FgTri1 was amplified and ligated into the XhoI-digested pYF11 vector as described above. The resulting vectors were then transformed into protoplasts of PH-1 or ΔFgDML1, respectively. '(in L423-426)

      (21) Lines 460 and 468: Please adopt a consistent nomenclature, either RT-qPCR or qRT-PCR.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We have unified it and modified the corresponding content in the corresponding sections. 'Reverse Transcription Quantitative Polymerase Chain Reaction (RT-qPCR) was carried out using the QuantStudio 6 Flex real-time PCR system (Thermo, Fisher Scientific, USA) to assess the relative expression of three subunits of Complex III (FgCytb, FgCytc1, FgISP), five assembly factors (FgQCR2, FgQCR6, FgQCR7, FgQCR8, FgQCR9), and DON biosynthesis-related genes (FgTri5 and FgTri6). '(in L526-531)

      (22) Lines 472-473: Why was FgCox1 used as a reference for FgCytb? Clarification is needed.

      Thank you very much for your question. FgCytb (cytochrome b) and FgCOX1 (cytochrome c oxidase subunit I) are both encoded by the mitochondrial genome and serve as core components of the oxidative phosphorylation system (Complex III and Complex IV, respectively). Their transcription is co-regulated by mitochondrial-specific mechanisms in response to cellular energy status. Consequently, under experimental conditions that perturb energy homeostasis, FgCOX1 expression exhibits relative, context-dependent stability with FgCytb, or at least co-varies directionally, making it a superior reference for normalizing target gene expression. In contrast, FgGapdh operates within a distinct genetic and regulatory system. Using FgCOX1 ensures that both reference and target genes reside within the same mitochondrial compartment and functional module, thereby preventing normalization artifacts arising from independent variation across disparate pathways.

      (23) Lines 476-477: This step requires a clearer and more detailed explanation.

      Thank you very much for your advice. We provided detailed descriptions of them in their respective positions. 'For FgDnm1-3×Flag, the 3×Flag tag was added to the C-terminus of FgDnm1 by PCR, fused with the hygromycin resistance gene and the FgDnm1 downstream arm, and then introduced into PH-1 protoplasts. '(in L417-419). 'The FgDnm1-3×Flag fragment was introduced into PH-1 and FgDML1+GFP protoplasts, respectively, to obtain single-tagged and double-tagged strains. '(in L541-543)

      Western blotting:

      (24) Uncropped Western blot images should be provided as supplementary material.

      Thank you very much for your advice. All Western blot images will be submitted to the supplementary material package.

      (25) Lines 485-489: A more thorough description of the antibodies used (including source, catalogue number, and dilution) is necessary.

      Thank you very much for your advice. The antibodies used are clearly stated in terms of brand, catalog number, and dilution. We have added the dilution ratio. 'All antibodies were diluted as follows: primary antibodies at 1:1000 and secondary antibodies at 1:10000. '(in L550-551)

      (26) The Western blot shown in Figure 3D appears problematic, particularly the anti-GAPDH band for FgDML1::FgTri1+GFP. Are both anti-GAPDH bands derived from the same gel?

      Thank you very much for your advice. We are unequivocally certain that these data derive from the same gel. Therefore, we are providing the original image for your inspection.

      Author response image 4.

    1. While strongly defending his actions in the press, Coler also acknowledged that public perception was an Issue.

      This line pretty much sums up the political reality of public management. Martinez is telling reporters that what looks like “bureaucratic comfort” can’t be defended if it clashes with public expectations. Even if a decision is technically allowed or operationally convenient, it can still look wrong.

    2. him for acquiring a full-size car for official use, instead of the subcompact required under s...:te law, and for using it to drive from his home to work (Coler, the Times wrote, did not own his own car)

      This car detail is a classic public management optics problem. A big theme is that agencies run on legitimacy and trust, not just results. A full-size car instead of the legally required subcompact is a small thing, but it signals rule-bending and privilege.

      Once HRS was under a scandal spotlight, people interpreted everyday choices in the most negative way. That’s basic organizational behavior: attribution bias. Instead of seeing a situational explanation, observers treat it as a character issue. In a crisis, these easy-to-picture “compliance” stories stick more than complicated program wins.

    3. This car detail is a classic public management optics problem. A big theme is that agencies run on legitimacy and trust, not just results. A full-size car instead of the legally required subcompact is a small thing, but it signals rule-bending and privilege.

      Once HRS was under the scandal spotlight, people interpreted everyday choices in the most negative way. That’s basic organizational behavior: attribution bias. Instead of seeing a situational explanation, observers treated it as a character issue. In a crisis, these easy-to-picture “compliance” stories stick more than complicated program wins.

    4. Yet the favorable view of Coler and his agency changed abruptly in the wake of a notorious and fatal incident of child abuse in which HRS appeared culpable. In the view of Coler and other observers of his administration, the incident was a watershed, setting off a wave of criticism

      This is the classic shift from “performance narrative” to “accountability narrative.” Once the child’s death becomes the frame, every normal administrative detail reads like evidence. It’s less about what’s objectively important and more about what feels symbolically damning in a crisis.

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      Reply to the reviewers

      Reviewer #1 (Evidence, reproducibility and clarity (Required)):

      Summary: This manuscript reports the identification of putative orthologues of mitochondrial contact site and cristae organizing system (MICOS) proteins in Plasmodium falciparum - an organism that unusually shows an acristate mitochondrion during the asexual part of its life cycle and then this develops cristae as it enters the sexual stage of its life cycle and beyond into the mosquito. The authors identify PfMIC60 and PfMIC19 as putative members and study these in detail. The authors at HA tags to both proteins and look for timing of expression during the parasite life cycle and attempt (unsuccessfully) to localise them within the parasite. They also genetically deleted both gene singly and in parallel and phenotyped the effect on parasite development. They show that both proteins are expressed in gametocytes and not asexuals, suggesting they are present at the same time as cristae development. They also show that the proteins are dispensible for the entire parasite life cycle investigated (asexuals through to sporozoites), however there is some reduction in mosquito transmission. Using EM techniques they show that the morphology of gametocyte mitochondria is abnormal in the knock out lines, although there is great variation.

      Major comments: The manuscript is interesting and is an intriguing use of a well studied organism of medical importance to answer fundamental biological questions. My main comments are that there should be greater detail in areas around methodology and statistical tests used. Also, the mosquito transmission assays (which are notoriously difficult to perform) show substantial variation between replicates and the statistical tests and data presentation are not clear enough to conclude the reduction in transmission that is claimed. Perhaps this could be improved with clearer text?

      We would like to thank the reviewer for taking the time to review our manuscript. We are happy to hear the reviewer thinks the manuscript is interesting and thank the reviewer for their constructive feedback.

      To clarify the statistical analyses used, we included a new supplementary dataset with all statistical analyses and p-values indicated per graph. Furthermore, figure legends now include the information on the exact statistical test used in each case.

      Regarding mosquito experiments, while we indeed reported a reduction in transmission and oocysts numbers we are aware that this effect might be due to the high variability in mosquito feeding assays. To highlight this point, we deleted the sentence "with the transmission reduction of [numbers]...." and we included the sentence "The high variability encountered in the standard membrane feeding assays, though, partially obstructs a clear conclusion on the biological relevance of the observed reduction in oocyst numbers"

      More specific comments to address: Line 101/Fig1E (and figure legend) - What is this heatmap showing. It would be helpful to have a sentence or two linking it to a specific methodology. I could not find details in the M+M section and "specialized, high molecular mass gels" does not adequately explain what experiments were performed. The reference to Supplementary Information 1 also did not provide information.

      We added the information "high molecular mass gels with lower acrylamide percentage" to clarify methodology in the text. Furthermore, we extended the figure legend to include all relevant information. Further experimental details can be found in the study cited in this context, where the dataset originates from (Evers et al., 2021).

      Line 115 and Supplementary Figure 2C + D - The main text says that the transgenic parasites contained a mitochondrially localized mScarlet for visualization and localization, but in the supplementary figure 2 it shows mitotracker labelling rather than mScarlet. This is very confusing. The figure legend also mentions both mScarlet and MitoTracker. I assume that mScarlet was used to view in regular IFAs (Fig S2C) and the MitoTracker was used for the expansion microscopy (Fig S2D)? Please clarify.

      We thank the reviewer for pointing this out - this was indeed incorrectly annotated. We used the endogenous mito-mScarlet signal in IFA and mitoTracker in U-ExM. The figure annotation has now been corrected.

      Figure 2C - what is the statistical test being used (the methods say "Mean oocysts per midgut and statistical significance were calculated using a generalized linear mixed effect model with a random experiment effect under a negative binomial distribution." but what test is this?)?

      The statistic test is now included in the material and method section with the sentence "The fitted model was used to obtain estimated means and contrasts and were evaluated using Wald Statistics". The test is now also mentioned in the figure legend.

      Also the choice of a log10 scale for oocyst intensity is an unusual choice - how are the mosquitoes with 0 oocysts being represented on this graph? It looks like they are being plotted at 10^-1 (which would be 0.1 oocysts in a mosquito which would be impossible).

      As the data spans three orders of magnitude with low values being biologically meaningful, we decided that a log scale would best facilitate readability of the graph. As the 0 values are also important to show, we went with a standard approach to handle 0s in log transformed data and substituted the 0s with a small value (0.001). We apologize for not mentioning this transformation in the manuscript. To make this transformation transparent, we added a break at the lower end of the log‑scaled y‑axis and relabelled the lowest tick as '0'. This ensures that mosquitoes with zero oocysts are shown along the x‑axis without being assigned an artificial value on the log scale. We would furthermore like to highlight that for statistics we used the true value 0 and not 0.001.

      Figure 2D - it is great that the data from all feeding replicates has been shared, however it is difficult to conclude any meaningful impact in transmission with the knock-out lines when there is so much variation and so few mosquitoes dissected for some datapoints (10 mosquitoes are very small sample sizes). For example, Exp1 shows a clear decrease in mic19- transmission, but then Exp2 does not really show as great effect. Similarly, why does the double knock out have better transmission than the single knockouts? Sure there would be a greater effect?

      We agree with the reviewer and with the new sentence added, as per major point, we hope we clarified the concept. Note that original Figure 2D has been moved to the supplementary information, as per minor comment of another reviewer.

      Figure 3 legend - Please add which statistical test was used and the number of replicates.

      Done

      Figure 4 legend - Please add which statistical test was used and the number of replicates.

      Done. Regarding replicates, note that while we measured over 100 cristae from over 30 mitochondria, these all stem from the same parasite culture.

      Figure 5C - the 3D reconstructions are very nice, but what does the red and yellow coloring show?

      Indeed, the information was missing. We added it to the figure legend.

      Line 352 - "Still, it is striking that, despite the pronounced morphological phenotype, and the possibly high mitochondrial stress levels, the parasites appeared mostly unaffected in life cycle propagation, raising questions about the functional relevance of mitochondria at these stages." How do the authors reconcile this statement with the proven fact that mitochondria-targeted antimalarials (such as atovaquone) are very potent inhibitors of parasite mosquito transmission?

      Our original sentence was reductive. What we wanted to state was related to the functional relevance of crista architecture and overall mitochondrial morphology rather than the general functional relevance of the mitochondria. We changed the sentence accordingly.

      Furthermore, even though we do not discuss this in the article, we are aware of mitochondria targeting drugs that are known to block mosquito transmission. We want to point out that it is difficult to discern the disruption of ETC and therefore an impact on energy conversion with the impact on the essential pathway of pyrimidine synthesis, highly relevant in microgamete formation. Still, a recent paper from Sparkes et al. 2024 showed the essentiality of mitochondrial ATP synthesis during gametogenesis so it is very likely that the mitochondrial energy conversion is highly relevant for transmission to the mosquito.

      Reviewer #1 (Significance (Required)):

      This manuscript is a novel approach to studying mitochondrial biology and does open a lot of unanswered questions for further research directions. Currently there are limitations in the use of statistical tests and detail of methodology, but these could be easily be addressed with a bit more analysis/better explanation in the text. This manuscript could be of interest to readers with a general interest in mitochondrial cell biology and those within the specific field of Plasmodium research. My expertise is in Plasmodium cell biology.

      We thank the reviewer for the praise.

      Reviewer #2 (Evidence, reproducibility and clarity (Required)):

      Major comments: 1) In my opinion, the authors tend to sensationalize or overinterpret their results. The title of the manuscript is very misleading. While MICOS is certainly important for crista formation, it is not the only factor, as ATP synthase dimer rows make a highly significant contribution to crista morphology. Thus, one can argue with equal validity that ATP synthase should be considered the 'architect', as it's the conformation of the dimers and rows modulate positive curvature. Secondly, while cristae are still formed upon mic60/mic19 gene knockout (KO), they are severely deformed, and likely dysfunctional (see below). Thus, I do not agree with the title that MICOS is dispensable for crista formation, because the authors results show that it clearly is essential. So, the title should be changed.

      We thank the reviewer for taking the time to review our manuscript.

      Based on the reviewers' interpretation we conclude the title does not come across as intended. We have changed the title to: "The role of MICOS in organizing mitochondrial cristae in malaria parasites"

      The Discussion section starting from line 373 also suffers from overinterpretation as well as being repetitive and hard to understand. The authors infer that MICOS stability is compromised less in the single KOs (sKO) in compared to the mic60/mic19 double KO (dKO). MICOS stability was never directly addressed here and the composition of the MICOS complex is unaddressed, so it does not make sense to speculate by such tenuous connections. The data suggest to me that mic60 and mic19 are equally important for crista formation and crista junction (CJ) stabilization, and the dKO has a more severe phenotype than either KO, further demonstrating neither is epistatic.

      We do agree with the reviewer's notion that we did not address complex stability, and our wording did not make this sufficiently clear. We shortened and rephrased the paragraph in question.

      The following paragraphs (line 387 to 422) continues with such unnecessary overinterpretation to the point that it is confusing and contradictory. Line 387 mentions an 'almost complete loss of CJs' and then line 411 mentions an increase in CJ diameter, both upon Mic60 ablation. I do not think this discussion brings any added value to the manuscript and should be shortened. Yes, maybe there are other putative MICOS subunits that may linger in the KOS that are further destabilized in the dKO, or maybe Mic60 remains in the mic19 KO (and vice versa) to somehow salvage more CJs, which is not possible in the dKO. It is impossible to say with confidence how ATP synthase behaves in the KOs with the current data.

      We shortened this paragraph.

      2) While the authors went through impressive lengths to detect any effect on lifecycle progression, none was found except for a reduction in oocyte count. However, the authors did not address any direct effect on mitochondria, such as OXPHOS complex assembly, respiration, membrane potential. This seems like a missed opportunity, given the team's previous and very nice work mapping these complexes by complexome profiling. However, I think there are some experiments the authors can still do to address any mitochondrial defects using what they have and not resorting to complexome profiling (although this would be definitive if it is feasible):

      i) Quantification of MitoTracker Red staining in WT and KOs. The authors used this dye to visualize mitochondria to assay their gross morphology, but unfortunately not to assay membrane potential in the mutants. The authors can compare relative intensities of the different mitochondria types they categorized in Fig. 3A in 20-30 cells to determine if membrane potential is affected when the cristae are deformed in the mutants. One would predict they are affected.

      Interesting suggestion. As our staining and imaging conditions are suitable for such analysis (as demonstrated by Sarazin et al., 2025, https://www.biorxiv.org/content/10.1101/2025.11.27.690934v1), we performed the measurements on the same dataset which we collected for Figure 3. We did, however, not detect any difference in mitotracker intensity between the different lines. The result of this analysis is included in the new version of Supplementary figure S6.

      ii) Sporozoites are shown in Fig S5. The authors can use the same set up to track their motion, with the hypothesis that they will be slower in the mutants compared to WT due to less ATP. This assumes that sporozoite mitochondria are active as in gametocytes.

      While theoretically plausible and informative, we currently do not know the relevance of mitochondrial energy conversion for general sporozoite biology or specifically features of sporozoite movement. Given the required resources and time to set this experiment up and the uncertainty whether it is a relevant proxy for mitochondrial functioning, we argue it is out of scope for this manuscript.

      iii) Shotgun proteomics to compare protein levels in mutants compared to WT, with the hypothesis that OXPHOS complex subunits will be destabilized in the mutants with deformed cristae. This could be indirect evidence that OXPHOS assembly is affected, resulting in destabilized subunits that fail to incorporate into their respective complexes.

      While this experiment could potentially further our understanding of the interaction between MICOS and levels of OXPHOS complex subunits we argue that the indirect nature of the evidence does not justify the required investments.

      To expedite resubmission, the authors can restrict the cell lines to WT and the dKO, as the latter has a stronger phenotype that the individual KOs and conclusions from this cell line are valid for overall conclusions about Plasmodium MICOS.

      I will also conclude that complexome/shotgun proteomics may be a useful tool also for identifying other putative MICOS subunits by determining if proteins sharing the same complexome profile as PfMic60 and Mic19 are affected. This would address the overinterpretation problem of point 1.

      3) I am aware of the authors previous work in which they were not able to detect cristae in ABS, and thus have concluded that these are truly acristate. This can very well be true, or there can be immature cristae forms that evaded detection at the resolution they used in their volumetric EM acquisitions. The mitochondria and gametocyte cristae are pretty small anyway, so it not unreasonable to assume that putative rudimentary cristae in ABS may be even smaller still. Minute levels of sampled complex III and IV plus complex V dimers in ABS that were detected previously by the authors by complexome profiling would argue for the presence of miniscule and/or very few cristae.

      I think that authors should hedge their claim that ABS is acrisate by briefly stating that there still is a possibility that miniscule cristae may have been overlooked previously.

      We acknowledge that we cannot demonstrate the absolute absence of any membrane irregularities along the inner mitochondrial membrane. At the same time, if such structures were present, they would be extremely small and unlikely to contain the full set of proteins characteristic of mature cristae. For this reason, we consider it appropriate to classify ABS mitochondria as acristate. To reflect the reviewer's point while maintaining clarity for readers, we have slightly adjusted our wording in the manuscript, changing 'fully acristate' to 'acristate'.

      This brings me to the claim that Mic19 and Mic60 proteins are not expressed in ABS. This is based on the lack of signal from the epitope tag; a weak signal is detected in gametocytes. Thus, one can counter that Mic19 and Mic60 are also expressed, but below the expression limits of the assay, as the protein exhibits low expression levels when mitochondrial activity is upregulated.

      We agree with the reviewer that the absence of a detectable epitope‑tag signal does not definitively exclude low‑level expression, and we have therefore replaced the term 'absent' with 'undetectable' throughout the manuscript. In context with previous findings of low-level transcripts of the proteins in a study by Lopez-Berragan et al. and Otto et al., we also added the sentence "The apparent absence could indicate that transcripts are not translated in ABS or that the proteins' expression was below detection limits of western blot analysis." to the discussion. _At the same time, we would like to clarify that transcript levels for both genes fall within the

      To address this point, the authors should determine of mature mic60 and mic19 mRNAs are detected in ABS in comparison to the dKO, which will lack either transcript. RT-qPCR using polyT primers can be employed to detect these transcripts. If the level of these mRNAs are equivalent to dKO in WT ABS, the authors can make a pretty strong case for the absence of cristae in ABS.

      We appreciate the reviewer's suggestion. As noted in the Discussion, existing transcriptomic datasets already show detectable MIC19 and MIC60 mRNAs in ABS. For this reason, we expect RT-qPCR to reveal low (but not absent) levels of both transcripts, unlike the true loss expected to be observed in the dKO. Because such residual signals have been reported previously and their biological relevance remains uncertain, we do not believe transcript levels alone can serve as a definitive indicator of cristae absence in ABS.

      They should highlight the twin CX9C motifs that are a hallmark of Mic19 and other proteins that undergo oxidative folding via the MIA pathway. Interestingly, the Mia40 oxidoreductase that is central to MIA in yeast and animals, is absent in apicomplexans (DOI: 10.1080/19420889.2015.1094593).

      Searching for the CX9C motifs is a valuable suggestion. In response to the reviewer´s suggestion we analysed the conservation of the motif in PfMIC19 and included this in a new figure panel (Figure 1 F).

      Did the authors try to align Plasmodium Mic19 orthologs with conventional Mic19s? This may reveal some conserved residues within and outside of the CHCH domain.

      In response to this comment we made Figure 1 F, where we show conserved residues within the CHCH domains of a broad range of MIC19 annotated sequences across the opisthokonts, and show that the Cx9C motifs are conserved also in PfMIC19. Outside the CHCH domain, we did not find any meaningful conservation, as PfMIC19 heavily diverges from opisthokont MIC19.

      5) Statistcal significance. Sometimes my eyes see population differences that are considered insignificant by the statistical methods employed by the authors, eg Fig. 4E, mutants compared to WT, especially the dKO. Have the authors considered using other methods such as student t-test for pairwise comparisons?

      The graphs in figures 3, 4 and 5 got a makeover, such that they now are in linear scale and violin plots (also following a suggestion from further down in the reviewer's comments). We believe that this improves interpretability. ANOVA was kept as statistical testing to assure the correction for multiple comparisons that cannot be performed with standard t-test. A full overview of statistics and exact p-values can also be found in the newly added supplementary information 2.

      Minor comments: Line 33. Anaerobes (eg Giardia) have mitochondria that do produce ATP, unlike aerobic mitochondria

      We acknowledge that producing ATP via OXPHOS is not a characteristic of all mitochondria-like organelles (e.g. mitosomes), which is why these are typically classified separately from canonical mitochondria. When not considering mitochondria-like organelles, energy conversion is the function that the mitochondrion is most well-known for and the one associated with cristae.

      Line 56: Unclear what authors mean by "canonical model of mitochondria"

      To clarify we changed this to "yeast or human" model of mitochondria.

      Lines 75-76: This applies to Mic10 only

      We removed the "high degree of conservation in other cristate eukaryotes" statement.

      Line 80: Cite DOI: 10.1016/j.cub.2020.02.053

      Done

      Fig 2D: I find this table difficult to read. If authors keep table format, at least get rid of 'mean' column' as this data is better depicted in 2C. I suggest depicted this data either like in 3B depicting portion of infected vs unaffected flies in all experiments, then move modified Table to supplement. Important to point out experiment 5 appears to be an outlier with reduced infectivity across all cell lines, including WT.

      To clarify: the mean reported in the table indicates the mean per replicate while the mean reported in figure 2C is the overall mean for a given genotype that corrects for variability within experiments. We agree that moving the table to the supplementary data is a good idea. We decided to not include a graph for infected and non-infected mosquitoes as this information would be partially misleading, highlighting a phenotype we argue to be influenced by the strong variability.

      Fig. 3C-G: I feel like these data repeatedly lead to same conclusions. These are all different ways of showing what is depicted in Fig 2B: mitochondria gross morphology is affected upon ablation of MICOS. I suggest that these graphs be moved to supplement and replaced by the beautiful images.

      Thank you for the nice comment on our images. We have now moved part of the graphs to supplementary figure 6 and only kept the Relative Frequency, Sphericity and total mitochondria volume per cell in the main figure.

      Line 180: Be more specific with which tubulin isoform is used as a male marker and state why this marker was used in supplemental Fig S6.

      We have now specified the exact tubulin isoform used as the male gametocyte marker, both in the main text and in Supplementary Fig. S6. This is a commercial antibody previously known to work as an effective male marker, which is why we selected it for this experiment. This is now clearly stated in the manuscript.

      Line 196 and Fig 3C: the word 'intensities' in this context is very ambiguous. Please choose a different term (puncta, elements, parts?). This is related to major point 2i above.

      To clarify the biological effect that we can conclude form the measurement, we added an explanation about it in the respective section of the results, and we decided to replace the raw results of the plug-in readout with the deduced relative dispersion.

      Line 222: Report male/female crista measurements

      We added Supplementary information 2, which contains exact statistical test and outcomes on all presented quantifications as well as a per-sex statistical analysis of the data from figure 4. Correspondingly, we extended supplementary information 2 by a per-sex colour code for the thin section TEM data.

      Fig. 4B-E: depict data as violin plots or scatter plots like Fig. 2C to get a better grasp of how the crista coverage is distributed. It seems like the data spread is wider in the double KO. This would also solve the problem with the standard deviation extending beyond 0%.

      We changed this accordingly.

      Lines 331-333: Please clarify that this applies for some, but not all MICOS subunits. Please also see major point 1 above. Also, the authors should point out that despite their structural divergence, trypanosomal cryptic mitofilins Mic34 and Mic40 are essential for parasite growth, in contrast to their findings with PfMic60 (DOI: https://doi.org/10.1101/2025.01.31.635831).

      This has been changed accordingly.

      Line 320: incorrect citation. Related to point 1above.

      Correct citation is now included in the text.

      Lines 333-335. This is related to the above. Again, some subunits appear to affect cell growth under lab conditions, and some do not. This and the previous sentence should be rewritten to reflect this.

      This has been changed accordingly.

      Line 343-345: The sentence and citation 45 are strange. Regarding the former, it is about CHCHD10, whose status as a bona fide MICOS subunit is very tenuous, so I would omit this. About the phenomenon observed, I think it makes more sense to write that Mic60 ablation results in partially fragmented mitochondria in yeast (Rabl et al., 2009 J Cell Biol. 185: 1047-63). A fragmented mitochondria is often a physiological response to stress. I would just rewrite as not to imply that mitochondrial fission (or fusion) is impaired in these KOs, or at least this could be one of several possibilities.

      The sentence has been substituted following the indication of the reviewer. Though we still include the data of the human cells as this has also been shown in Stephens et al. 2020.

      Line 373: 'This indicates' is too strong. I would say 'may suggest' as you have no proof that any of the KOs disrupts MICOS. This hypothesis can be tested by other means, but not by penetrance of a phenotype.

      Done

      Line 376-377; 'deplete functionality' does not make sense, especially in the context of talking about MICOS subunit stability. In my opinion, this paragraph overinterprets the KO effects on MICOS stability. None of the experiments address this phenomenon, and thus the authors should not try to interpret their results in this context. See major point 1. Other suggestions for added value

      We removed the sentence. Also, the entire paragraph has been shortened, restructured and wording was changed to address major point 1.

      1) Does Plasmodium Sam50 co-fractionate with Mic60 and Mic19 in BN PAGE (Fig. 1E)

      While we did identify SAMM50 in our BN PAGE, the protein does not co-migrate with the MICOS components but instead comigrates with other components of a putative sorting and assembly machinery (SAM) complex. As SAMM50, the SAM complex and the overarching putative mitochondrial membrane space bridging (MIB) complex are not mentioned in the manuscript, we decided to not include the information in the figure.

      Reviewer #2 (Significance (Required)):

      The manuscript by Tassan-Lugrezin is predicated on the idea that Plasmodium represents the only system in which de novo crista formation can be studied. They leverage this system to ask the question whether MICOS is essential for this process. They conclude based on their data that the answer is no, which the authors consider unprecedented. But even if their claim is true that ABS is acristate, this supposed advantage does not really bring any meaningful insight into how MICOS works in Plasmodium.

      First the positives of this manuscript. As has been the case with this research team, the manuscript is very sophisticated in the experimental approaches that are made. The highlights are the beautiful and often conclusive microscopy performed by the authors. Only the localization of Mic60 and Mic19 was inconclusive due to their very low expression unfortunately.

      The examination of the MICOS mutants during in vitro life cycle of Plasmodium falciparum is extremely impressive and yields convincing results. Mitochondrial deformation is tolerated by life cycle stage differentiation, with a modest but significant reduction of oocyte production, being observed.

      However, despite the herculean efforts of the authors, the manuscript as it currently stands represents only a minor advance in our understanding of the evolution of MICOS, which from the title and focus of the manuscript, is the main goal of the authors. In its current form, the manuscript reports some potentially important findings:

      1) Mic60 is verified to play a role in crista formation, as is predicted by its orthology to other characterized Mic60 orthologs.

      2) The discovery of a novel Mic19 analog (since the authors maintain there is no significant sequence homology), which exhibits a similar (or the same?) complexome profile with Mic60. This protein was upregulated in gametocytes like Mic60 and phenocopies Mic60 KO.

      3) Both of these MICOS subunits are essential (not dispensable) for proper crista formation

      4) Surprisingly, neither MICOS subunit is essential for in vitro growth or differentiation from ABS to sexual stages, and from the latter to sporozoites. This says more about the biology of plasmodium itself than anything about the essentiality of Mic60, ie plasmodium life cycle progression tolerates defects to mitochondrial morphology. But yes, I agree with the authors that Mic60's apparent insignificance for cell growth in examined conditions does differ with its essentiality in other eukaryotes. But fitness costs were not assayed (eg by competition between mutants and WT in infection of mosquitoes)

      5) Decreased fitness of the mutants is implied by a reduction of oocyte formation.

      While interesting in their own way, collectively they do not represent a major advance in our understanding of MICOS evolution. Furthermore, the findings bifurcate into categories informing MICOS or Plasmodium biology. Both aspects are somewhat underdeveloped in their current form.

      This is unfortunate because there seem to be many missed opportunities in the manuscript that could, with additional experiments, lead to a manuscript with much wider impact. For me, what is remarkable about Plasmodium MICOS that sets it apart from other iterations is the apparent absence of the Mic10 subunit. Purification of plasmodium MICOS via the epitope tagged Mic60 and Mic19 could have verified that MICOS is assembled without this core subunit. Perhaps Mic60 and Mic19 are the vestiges of the complex, and thus operate alone in shaping cristae. Such a reduction may also suggest the declining importance of mitochondria in plasmodium.

      Another missed opportunity was to assay the impact of MICOS-depletion of OXPHOS in plasmodium. This is a salient issue as maybe crista morphology is decoupled from OXPHOS capacity in Plasmodium, which links to the apparent tolerance of mitochondrial morphology in cell growth and differentiation. I suggested in section A experiments to address this deficit.

      Finally, the authors could assay fitness costs of MICOS-ablation and associated phenotypes by assaying whether mosquito infectivity is reduced in the mutants when they are directly competing with WT plasmodium. Like the authors, I am also surprised that MICOS mutants can pass population bottlenecks represented by differentiation events. Perhaps the apparent robustness of differentiation may contribute plasmodium's remarkable ability to adapt.

      I realize that the authors put a lot of efforts into their study and again, I am very impressed by the sophistication of the methods employed. Nevertheless, I think there is still better ways to increase the impact of the study aside from overinterpreting the conclusions from the data. But this would require more experiments along the lines I suggest in Section A and here.

      We thank the reviewer for their extensive analysis of the significance of our findings, including the compliments on our microscopy images and the sophisticated experimental approaches. We hope we have convincingly argued why we could or could not include some of the additional analyses suggested by the reviewer in section 1 above.

      With regard to the significance statement, we want to point out that our finding that PfMICOS is not needed for initial formation of cristae (as opposed to organization thereof), is a confirmation of something that has been assumed by the field, without being the actual focus of studies. We argue that the distinction between formation and organization of cristae is important and deserves some attention within the manuscript. The result of MICOS not being involved in the initial formation of cristae, we argue to be relevant in Plasmodium biology and beyond. As for the insights into how MICOS works in Plasmodium we have confirmed that the previously annotated PfMIC60 is indeed involved in the organization of cristae. Furthermore, we have identified and characterized PfMIC19. These findings, we argue, are indeed meaningful insights into PfMICOS.

      Reviewer #3 (Evidence, reproducibility and clarity (Required)):

      Summary:

      MICOS is a conserved mitochondrial protein complex responsible for organising the mitochondrial inner membrane and the maintenance of cristae junctions. This study sheds first light on the role of two MICOS subunits (Mic60 and the newly annotated Mic19) in the malaria parasite Plasmodium falciparum, which forms cristae de novo during sexual development, as demonstrated by EM of thin section and electron tomography. By generating knockout lines (including a double knockout), the authors demonstrate that knockout of both MICOS subunits leads to defects in cristae morphology and a partial loss of cristae junctions. With a formidable set of parasitological assays, the authors show that despite the metabolically important role of mitochondria for gametocytes, the knockout lines can progress through the life stages and form sporozoites, albeit with diminished infection efficiency.

      We thank the reviewer for their time and compliment.

      Major comments:

      1) The authors should improve to present their findings in the right context, in particular by:

      (i) giving a clearer description in the introduction of what is already known about the role of MICOS. This starts in the introduction, where one main finding is missing: loss of MICOS leads to loss of cristae junctions and the detachment of cristae membranes, which are nevertheless formed, but become membrane vesicles. This needs to be clearly stated in the introduction to allow the reader to understand the consistency of the authors' findings in P. falciparum with previous reports in the literature.

      We extended the introduction to include this information.

      (ii) at the end to the introduction, the motivating hypothesis is formulated ad hoc "conclusive evidence about its involvement in the initial formation of cristae is still lacking" (line 83). If there is evidence in the literature that MICOS is strictly required for cristae formation in any organism, then this should be explained, because the bona fide role of MICOS is maintenance of cristae junctions (the hypothesis is still plausible and its testing important).

      To clarify we rephrased the sentence to: "Although MICOS has been described as an organizer of crista junctions, its role during the initial formation of nascent cristae has not been investigated."

      2) Line 96-97: "Interestingly, PfMIC60 is much larger than the human MICOS counterpart, with a large, poorly predicted N-terminal extension." This statement is lacking a reference and presumably refers to annotated ORFs. The authors should clarify if the true N-terminus is definitely known - a 120kDa size is shown for the P. falciparum but this is not compared to the expected length or the size in S. cerevisiae.

      To solve the reference issue, we added the uniprot IDs we compared to see that the annotated ORF is bigger in Plasmodium. We also changed the comparison to yeast instead of human, because we realized it is confusing to compare to yeast all throughout the figure, but then talk about human in this specific sentence.

      Regarding whether the true N-terminus is known. Short answer: No, not exactly.

      However, we do know that the Pf version is about double the size of the yeast protein.

      As the reviewer correctly states, we show the size of 120kDa for the tagged protein in Figure 1G. Considering that we tagged the protein C-terminally, and observed a 120kDa product on western blot, it is safe to conclude that the true N-terminus does not deviate massively from the annotated ORF, and hence, that there is a considerable extension of the protein beyond a 60kDa protein. We do not directly compare to yeast MIC60 on our western blots, however, that comparison can be drawn from literature: Tarasenko et al., 2017 showed that purified MIC60 running at ~60kDa on SDS-PAGE actively bends membranes, suggesting that in its active form, the monomer of yeast MIC60 is indeed 60kDa in size.

      To clarify, we now emphasize that we ran the Alphafold prediction on the annotated open reading frame (annotated and sequenced by Bohme et al. and Chapell et al. now cited in the manuscript), and revised the wording to make clear what we are comparing in which sentence.

      3) lines 244-245: "Furthermore, our data indicates the effect size increases with simultaneous ablation of both proteins?". The authors should explain which data they are referring to, as some of the data in Fig 3 and 4 look similar and all significance tests relate to the wild type, not between the different mutants, so it is not clear if any overserved differences are significant. The authors repeat this claim in the discussion in lines 368-369 without referring to a specific significance test. This needs to be clarified.

      As a reply to this and other comments from the reviewers we added the multiple testing within all samples. In addition, to clarify statistics used we included a supplementary dataset with all p-values and statistical tests used.

      4) lines 304-306: "Though well established as the cristae organizing system, the role of MICOS in initial formation of cristae remains hidden in model organisms that constitutively display cristae.". This sentence is misleading since even in organisms that display numerous cristae throughout their life cycle, new cristae are being formed as the cells proliferate. Thus, failure to produce cristae in MICOS knockout lines would have been observable but has apparently not been reported in the literature. Thus, the concerted process in P. falciparum makes it a great model organism, but not fundamentally different to what has been studied before in other organisms.

      We deleted this statement.

      5) lines 373-378. "where ablation of just MIC60 is sufficient to deplete functionality of the entire MICOS (11, 15),". The authors' claim appears to be contrary to what is actually stated in ref 15, which they cite:

      "MICOS subunits have non-redundant functions as the absence of both MICOS subcomplexes results in more severe morphological and respiratory growth defects than deletion of single MICOS subunits or subcomplexes."

      This seems in line with what the authors show, rather than "different".

      This sentence has been removed.

      6) lines 380-385: "... thus suggesting that membrane invaginations still arise, but are not properly arranged in these knockout lines. This suggests that MICOS either isn't fully depleted,...". These conclusions are incompatible with findings from ref. 15, which the authors cite. In that study, the authors generated a ∆MICOS line which still forms membrane invaginations, showing that MICOS is not required at all for this process in yeast. Hence the authors' implication that MICOS needs to be fully depleted before membrane invaginations cease to occur is not supported by the literature.

      This sentence has been deleted in the revised version of the manuscript.

      Minor comments:

      7) The authors should consider if the first part of their title could be seen as misleading: It suggests that MICOS is "the architect" in cristae formation, but this is not consistent with the literature nor their own findings.

      Title is changed accordingly

      Minor comments:

      • Line 43, of the three seminal papers describing the discovery of MICOS in 2011, the authors only cite two (refs 6 and 7), but miss the third paper, Hoppins et al, PMID: 21987634, which should probably be corrected.

      Done, the paper is now cited

      • Page 2, line 58: for a more complete picture the authors should also cite the work of others here which shows that although at very low levels, e.g. complex III (a drug target) and ATP synthase do assemble (Nina et al, 2011, JBC).

      Done

      • Page 3, line 80: "Irrespective of the shape of an organism's cristae, the crista junctions have been described as tubular channels that connect the cristae membrane to the inner boundary membrane (22, 24)." This omits the slit-shaped cristae junctions found in yeast (Davies et al, 2011, PNAS), which the authors should include.

      The paper and concept have been added to the manuscript, though the sentence has been moved up in the introduction, when crista junctions are first introduced.

      • Line 97: "poorly predicted N-terminal extension", as there is no experimental structure, we don't know if the prediction is poor. Presumably the authors mean either poorly ordered or the absence of secondary structure elements, or the poor confidence score for that region in the prediction? This should be clarified or corrected.

      We were referring to the poor confidence score. To address this comment as well as major point 2, we rewrote the respective paragraph. It now clearly states that confidence of the prediction is low, and we mention the tool that was used to identify conserved domains (Topology-based Evolutionary Domains).

      • Line 98: "an antiparallel array of ten β-sheets". They are actually two parallel beta-sheets stacked together. The authors could find out the name of this fold, but the confidence of the prediction is marked a low/very low. So, its existence is unknown, not just its "function".

      We adapted the domain description to "a stack of two parallel beta-sheets" and replaced the statement on unknown function by the statement "Because this domain is predicted solely from computational analysis, both its actual existence in the native protein and its biological function remain unknown."

      Fig 1B: The authors show two alphafold predictions of S. cerevisiae and P. falciparum Mic60 structures. There is however an experimental Mic60/19 (fragment) structure from the former organism (PMID: 36044574), which should be included if possible

      We appreciate the reviewer's suggestion and note that the available structural data indeed provides valuable insight into how MIC60 and MIC19 interact. However, these structures represent fusion constructs of limited protein fragments and therefore capture only a small portion of each protein, specifically the interaction interface. Because our aim in Fig. 1B is to compare the overall domain architecture of the full‑length proteins, we believe that including fragment‑based structures would be less informative in this context.

      Line: 318-321: "The same trend was observed for PfMIC19 and PfMIC60. Although transcriptomic data suggested that low-level transcripts of PfMIC19 and PfMIC60 are present in ABS (38), we did not detect either of the proteins in ABS by western blot analysis. While this statement is true, the authors should comment on the sensitivity of the respective methods - how well was the antibody working in their hands and how do they interpret the absence of a WB band compared to transcriptomics data?

      The HA antibody used in our experiments is a standard commercial reagent that performs reliably in both WB and IFA, although it shows a low background signal in gametocytes. We agree that the sensitivity of the method and the interpretation of weak or absent bands should be addressed explicitly. Transcript levels for both PfMIC19 and PfMIC60 in asexual blood stages fall within the

      • Lines 322-323: would the authors not typically have expected an IFA signal given the strength of the band in Western blot? If possible, the authors should comment if the negative fluorescence outcome can indeed be explained with the low abundance or if technical challenges are an equally good explanation.

      Considering the nature of the investigated proteins (embedded in the IMM and spread throughout the mitochondria) difficulties in achieving a clear signal in IFA or U-ExM are not very surprizing. While epitopes may remain buried in IFA, U-ExM usually increases accessibility for the antibodies. However, U-ExM comes at the cost of being prone to dotty background signals, therefore potentially hiding low abundance, naturally dotty signals such as the signal of MICOS proteins that localize to distinct foci (at the CJ) along the mitochondrion. Current literature suggests that, in both human and yeast, STED is the preferred method for accurate spatial resolution of MICOS proteins (https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pubmed/32567732,https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pubmed/32067344). Unfortunately, we do not have experience with, nor access to, this particular technique/method.

      Lines 357-365: the authors describe limitations of the applied methods adequately. Perhaps it would be helpful to make a similar statement about the analysis of 3D objects like mitochondria and cristae from 2D sections. E.g. the apparent cristae length depends on whether cristae are straight (e.g. coiled structures do not display long cross sections despite their true length in 3D).

      The limitations of other methods are described in the respective results section.

      We added a clarifying sentence in the results section of Figure 4:

      "Note that such measurements do not indicate the true total length or width of cristae, as the data is two-dimensional. The recorded values are to be considered indicative of possible trends, rather than absolute dimensions of cristae."

      This statement refers to the length/width measurements of cristae.

      In the context of Figure 4 D we mention the following (see preprint lines 229 - 230): "We expect this effect to translate into the third dimension and thus conclude that the mean crista volume increases with the loss of either PfMIC19,PfMIC60, or both."

      For Figure 5, we included a clarifying statement in the results section of the preprint (lines 269 - 273): "Note that these mitochondrial volumes are not full mitochondria, but large segments thereof. As a result of the incompleteness of the mitochondria within the section, and the tomography specific artefact of the missing wedge, we were unable to confirm whether cristae were in fact fully detached from the boundary membrane, or just too long to fit within the observable z-range. "

      Line 404: perhaps undetected or similar would be a better description than "hidden"?

      The sentence does not exist in the revised manuscript

      Reviewer #3 (Significance (Required)):

      The main strength of the study is that it provides the first characterisation of the MICOS complex in P. falciparum, a human parasite in which the mitochondrion has been shown to be a drug target. Mic60 and the newly annotated Mic19 are confirmed to be essential for proper cristae formation and morphology, as well as overall mitochondrial morphology. Furthermore, the mutant lines are characterised for their ability to complete the parasite life cycle and defects in infection effectivity are observed. This work is an important first step for deciphering the role of MICOS in the malaria parasite and the composition and function of this complex in this organism. The limitation of the study stems from what is already known about MICOS and its subunits in

      great detail in yeast and humans with similar findings regarding loss of cristae and cristae defects. The findings of this study do not provide dramatic new insight on MICOS function or go substantially beyond the vast existing literature in terms of the extent of the study, which focuses on parasitological assays and morphological analysis. Exploring the role of MICOS in an early-divergent organism and human parasite is however important given the divergence found in mitochondrial biology and P. falciparum is a uniquely suited model system. One aspect that would increase the impact of the paper would be if the authors could mechanistically link the observed morphological defects to the decreased infection efficiency, e.g. by probing effects on mitochondrial function. This will likely be challenging as the morphological defects are diverse and the fitness defects appear moderate/mild.

      As suggested by Reviewer 2, we examined mitochondrial membrane potential in gametocytes using MitoTracker staining and did not observe any obvious differences associated with the morphological defects. At present, additional assays to probe mitochondrial function in P. falciparum gametocytes are not sufficiently established, and developing and validating such methods would require substantial work before they could be applied to our mutant lines. For these reasons, a more detailed mechanistic link between the observed morphological changes and the reduced infection efficiency is currently beyond reach.

      The advance presented in this study is to pioneer the study of MICOS in P. falciparum, thus widening our understanding of the role of this complex to different model organism. This study will likely be mainly of interest for specialised audiences such as basic research parasitologists and mitochondrial biologists. My own field of expertise is mitochondrial biology and structural biology.

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      Referee #3

      Evidence, reproducibility and clarity

      Summary:

      MICOS is a conserved mitochondrial protein complex responsible for organising the mitochondrial inner membrane and the maintenance of cristae junctions. This study sheds first light on the role of two MICOS subunits (Mic60 and the newly annotated Mic19) in the malaria parasite Plasmodium falciparum, which forms cristae de novo during sexual development, as demonstrated by EM of thin section and electron tomography. By generating knockout lines (including a double knockout), the authors demonstrate that knockout of both MICOS subunits leads to defects in cristae morphology and a partial loss of cristae junctions. With a formidable set of parasitological assays, the authors show that despite the metabolically important role of mitochondria for gametocytes, the knockout lines can progress through the life stages and form sporozoites, albeit with diminished infection efficiency.

      Major comments:

      1) The authors should improve to present their findings in the right context, in particular by:

      (i) giving a clearer description in the introduction of what is already known about the role of MICOS. This starts in the introduction, where one main finding is missing: loss of MICOS leads to loss of cristae junctions and the detachment of cristae membranes, which are nevertheless formed, but become membrane vesicles. This needs to be clearly stated in the introduction to allow the reader to understand the consistency of the authors' findings in P. falciparum with previous reports in the literature.

      (ii) at the end to the introduction, the motivating hypothesis is formulated ad hoc "conclusive evidence about its involvement in the initial formation of cristae is still lacking" (line 83). If there is evidence in the literature that MICOS is strictly required for cristae formation in any organism, then this should be explained, because the bona fide role of MICOS is maintenance of cristae junctions (the hypothesis is still plausible and its testing important).

      2) Line 96-97: "Interestingly, PfMIC60 is much larger than the human MICOS counterpart, with a large, poorly predicted N-terminal extension." This statement is lacking a reference and presumably refers to annotated ORFs. The authors should clarify if the true N-terminus is definitely known - a 120kDa size is shown for the P. falciparum but this is not compared to the expected length or the size in S. cerevisiae.

      3) lines 244-245: "Furthermore, our data indicates the effect size increases with simultaneous ablation of both proteins?". The authors should explain which data they are referring to, as some of the data in Fig 3 and 4 look similar and all significance tests relate to the wild type, not between the different mutants, so it is not clear if any overserved differences are significant. The authors repeat this claim in the discussion in lines 368-369 without referring to a specific significance test. This needs to be clarified.

      4) lines 304-306: "Though well established as the cristae organizing system, the role of MICOS in initial formation of cristae remains hidden in model organisms that constitutively display cristae.". This sentence is misleading since even in organisms that display numerous cristae throughout their life cycle, new cristae are being formed as the cells proliferate. Thus, failure to produce cristae in MICOS knockout lines would have been observable but has apparently not been reported in the literature. Thus, the concerted process in P. falciparum makes it a great model organism, but not fundamentally different to what has been studied before in other organisms.

      5) lines 373-378. "where ablation of just MIC60 is sufficient to deplete functionality of the entire MICOS (11, 15),". The authors' claim appears to be contrary to what is actually stated in ref 15, which they cite:

      "MICOS subunits have non-redundant functions as the absence of both MICOS subcomplexes results in more severe morphological and respiratory growth defects than deletion of single MICOS subunits or subcomplexes."

      This seems in line with what the authors show, rather than "different".

      6) lines 380-385: "... thus suggesting that membrane invaginations still arise, but are not properly arranged in these knockout lines. This suggests that MICOS either isn't fully depleted,...". These conclusions are incompatible with findings from ref. 15, which the authors cite. In that study, the authors generated a ∆MICOS line which still forms membrane invaginations, showing that MICOS is not required at all for this process in yeast. Hence the authors' implication that MICOS needs to be fully depleted before membrane invaginations cease to occur is not supported by the literature.

      7) The authors should consider if the first part of their title could be seen as misleading: It suggests that MICOS is "the architect" in cristae formation, but this is not consistent with the literature nor their own findings.

      Minor comments:

      • Line 43, of the three seminal papers describing the discovery of MICOS in 2011, the authors only cite two (refs 6 and 7), but miss the third paper, Hoppins et al, PMID: 21987634, which should probably be corrected.
      • Page 2, line 58: for a more complete picture the authors should also cite the work of others here which shows that although at very low levels, e.g. complex III (a drug target) and ATP synthase do assemble (Nina et al, 2011, JBC).
      • Page 3, line 80: "Irrespective of the shape of an organism's cristae, the crista junctions have been described as tubular channels that connect the cristae membrane to the inner boundary membrane (22, 24)." This omits the slit-shaped cristae junctions found in yeast (Davies et al, 2011, PNAS), which the authors should include.
      • Line 97: "poorly predicted N-terminal extension", as there is no experimental structure, we don't know if the prediction is poor. Presumably the authors mean either poorly ordered or the absence of secondary structure elements, or the poor confidence score for that region in the prediction? This should be clarified or corrected.
      • Line 98: "an antiparallel array of ten β-sheets". They are actually two parallel beta-sheets stacked together. The authors could find out the name of this fold, but the confidence of the prediction is marked a low/very low. So, its existence is unknown, not just its "function".
      • Fig 1B: The authors show two alphafold predictions of S. cerevisiae and P. falciparum Mic60 structures. There is however an experimental Mic60/19 (fragment) structure from the former organism (PMID: 36044574), which should be included if possible
      • Line: 318-321: "The same trend was observed for PfMIC19 and PfMIC60. Although transcriptomic data suggested that low-level transcripts of PfMIC19 and PfMIC60 are present in ABS (38), we did not detect either of the proteins in ABS by western blot analysis. While this statement is true, the authors should comment on the sensitivity of the respective methods - how well was the antibody working in their hands and how do they interpret the absence of a WB band compared to transcriptomics data?
      • Lines 322-323: would the authors not typically have expected an IFA signal given the strength of the band in Western blot? If possible, the authors should comment if the negative fluorescence outcome can indeed be explained with the low abundance or if technical challenges are an equally good explanation.
      • Lines 357-365: the authors describe limitations of the applied methods adequately. Perhaps it would be helpful to make a similar statement about the analysis of 3D objects like mitochondria and cristae from 2D sections. E.g. the apparent cristae length depends on whether cristae are straight (e.g. coiled structures do not display long cross sections despite their true length in 3D).
      • Line 404: perhaps undetected or similar would be a better description than "hidden"?

      Significance

      The main strength of the study is that it provides the first characterisation of the MICOS complex in P. falciparum, a human parasite in which the mitochondrion has been shown to be a drug target. Mic60 and the newly annotated Mic19 are confirmed to be essential for proper cristae formation and morphology, as well as overall mitochondrial morphology. Furthermore, the mutant lines are characterised for their ability to complete the parasite life cycle and defects in infection effectivity are observed. This work is an important first step for deciphering the role of MICOS in the malaria parasite and the composition and function of this complex in this organism.

      The limitation of the study stems from what is already known about MICOS and its subunits in other organism. MICOS subunit knockouts have been characterised in great detail in yeast and humans with similar findings regarding loss of cristae and cristae defects. The findings of this study do not provide dramatic new insight on MICOS function or go substantially beyond the vast existing literature in terms of the extent of the study, which focuses on parasitological assays and morphological analysis.

      Exploring the role of MICOS in an early-divergent organism and human parasite is however important given the divergence found in mitochondrial biology and P. falciparum is a uniquely suited model system. One aspect that would increase the impact of the paper would be if the authors could mechanistically link the observed morphological defects to the decreased infection efficiency, e.g. by probing effects on mitochondrial function. This will likely be challenging as the morphological defects are diverse and the fitness defects appear moderate/mild.

      The advance presented in this study is to pioneer the study of MICOS in P. falciparum, thus widening our understanding of the role of this complex to different model organism. This study will likely be mainly of interest for specialised audiences such as basic research parasitologists and mitochondrial biologists. My own field of expertise is mitochondrial biology and structural biology.

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      Evidence, reproducibility and clarity

      Major comments:

      1) In my opinion, the authors tend to sensationalize or overinterpret their results. The title of the manuscript is very misleading. While MICOS is certainly important for crista formation, it is not the only factor, as ATP synthase dimer rows make a highly significant contribution to crista morphology. Thus, one can argue with equal validity that ATP synthase should be considered the 'architect', as it's the conformation of the dimers and rows modulate positive curvature. Secondly, while cristae are still formed upon mic60/mic19 gene knockout (KO), they are severely deformed, and likely dysfunctional (see below). Thus, I do not agree with the title that MICOS is dispensable for crista formation, because the authors results show that it clearly is essential. So, the title should be changed.

      The Discussion section starting from line 373 also suffers from overinterpretation as well as being repetitive and hard to understand. The authors infer that MICOS stability is compromised less in the single KOs (sKO) in compared to the mic60/mic19 double KO (dKO). MICOS stability was never directly addressed here and the composition of the MICOS complex is unaddressed, so it does not make sense to speculate by such tenuous connections. The data suggest to me that mic60 and mic19 are equally important for crista formation and crista junction (CJ) stabilization, and the dKO has a more severe phenotype than either KO, further demonstrating neither is epistatic.

      The following paragraphs (line 387 to 422) continues with such unnecessary overinterpretation to the point that it is confusing and contradictory. Line 387 mentions an 'almost complete loss of CJs' and then line 411 mentions an increase in CJ diameter, both upon Mic60 ablation. I do not think this discussion brings any added value to the manuscript and should be shortened. Yes, maybe there are other putative MICOS subunits that may linger in the KOS that are further destabilized in the dKO, or maybe Mic60 remains in the mic19 KO (and vice versa) to somehow salvage more CJs, which is not possible in the dKO. It is impossible to say with confidence how ATP synthase behaves in the KOs with the current data.

      2) While the authors went through impressive lengths to detect any effect on lifecycle progression, none was found except for a reduction in oocyte count. However, the authors did not address any direct effect on mitochondria, such as OXPHOS complex assembly, respiration, membrane potential. This seems like a missed opportunity, given the team's previous and very nice work mapping these complexes by complexome profiling. However, I think there are some experiments the authors can still do to address any mitochondrial defects using what they have and not resorting to complexome profiling (although this would be definitive if it is feasible):

      i) Quantification of MitoTracker Red staining in WT and KOs. The authors used this dye to visualize mitochondria to assay their gross morphology, but unfortunately not to assay membrane potential in the mutants. The authors can compare relative intensities of the different mitochondria types they categorized in Fig. 3A in 20-30 cells to determine if membrane potential is affected when the cristae are deformed in the mutants. One would predict they are affected.

      ii) Sporozoites are shown in Fig S5. The authors can use the same set up to track their motion, with the hypothesis that they will be slower in the mutants compared to WT due to less ATP. This assumes that sporozoite mitochondria are active as in gametocytes.

      iii) Shotgun proteomics to compare protein levels in mutants compared to WT, with the hypothesis that OXPHOS complex subunits will be destabilized in the mutants with deformed cristae. This could be indirect evidence that OXPHOS assembly is affected, resulting in destabilized subunits that fail to incorporate into their respective complexes.

      To expedite resubmission, the authors can restrict the cell lines to WT and the dKO, as the latter has a stronger phenotype that the individual KOs and conclusions from this cell line are valid for overall conclusions about Plasmodium MICOS.

      I will also conclude that complexome/shotgun proteomics may be a useful tool also for identifying other putative MICOS subunits by determining if proteins sharing the same complexome profile as PfMic60 and Mic19 are affected. This would address the overinterpretation problem of point 1.

      3) I am aware of the authors previous work in which they were not able to detect cristae in ABS, and thus have concluded that these are truly acristate. This can very well be true, or there can be immature cristae forms that evaded detection at the resolution they used in their volumetric EM acquisitions. The mitochondria and gametocyte cristae are pretty small anyway, so it not unreasonable to assume that putative rudimentary cristae in ABS may be even smaller still. Minute levels of sampled complex III and IV plus complex V dimers in ABS that were detected previously by the authors by complexome profiling would argue for the presence of miniscule and/or very few cristae.

      I think that authors should hedge their claim that ABS is acrisate by briefly stating that there still is a possibility that miniscule cristae may have been overlooked previously.

      This brings me to the claim that Mic19 and Mic60 proteins are not expressed in ABS. This is based on the lack of signal from the epitope tag; a weak signal is detected in gametocytes. Thus, one can counter that Mic19 and Mic60 are also expressed, but below the expression limits of the assay, as the protein exhibits low expression levels when mitochondrial activity is upregulated.

      To address this point, the authors should determine of mature mic60 and mic19 mRNAs are detected in ABS in comparison to the dKO, which will lack either transcript. RT-qPCR using polyT primers can be employed to detect these transcripts. If the level of these mRNAs are equivalent to dKO in WT ABS, the authors can make a pretty strong case for the absence of cristae in ABS.

      4) The major finding of the manuscript is of a Mic19 analog in plasmodium should be highlighted. As far as I know, this manuscript could represent the first instance of Mic19 outside of opisthokonts that was not found by sensitive profile HMM searches and certainly the first time such a Mic19 was functionally analyzed.

      They should highlight the twin CX9C motifs that are a hallmark of Mic19 and other proteins that undergo oxidative folding via the MIA pathway. Interestingly, the Mia40 oxidoreductase that is central to MIA in yeast and animals, is absent in apicomplexans (DOI: 10.1080/19420889.2015.1094593).

      Did the authors try to align Plasmodium Mic19 orthologs with conventional Mic19s? This may reveal some conserved residues within and outside of the CHCH domain.

      5) Statistcal significance. Sometimes my eyes see population differences that are considered insignificant by the statistical methods employed by the authors, eg Fig. 4E, mutants compared to WT, especially the dKO. Have the authors considered using other methods such as student t-test for pairwise comparisons?

      Minor comments:

      Line 33. Anaerobes (eg Giardia) have mitochondria that do produce ATP, unlike aerobic mitochondria

      Line 56: Unclear what authors mean by "canonical model of mitochondria"

      Lines 75-76: This applies to Mic10 only

      Line 80: Cite DOI: 10.1016/j.cub.2020.02.053

      Fig 2D: I find this table difficult to read. If authors keep table format, at least get rid of 'mean' column' as this data is better depicted in 2C. I suggest depicted this data either like in 3B depicting portion of infected vs unaffected flies in all experiments, then move modified Table to supplement. Important to point out experiment 5 appears to be an outlier with reduced infectivity across all cell lines, including WT.

      Fig. 3C-G: I feel like these data repeatedly lead to same conclusions. These are all different ways of showing what is depicted in Fig 2B: mitochondria gross morphology is affected upon ablation of MICOS. I suggest that these graphs be moved to supplement and replaced by the beautiful images

      Line 180: Be more specific with which tubulin isoform is used as a male marker and state why this marker was used in supplemental Fig S6.

      Line 196 and Fig 3C: the word 'intensities' in this context is very ambiguous. Please choose a different term (puncta, elements, parts?). This is related to major point 2i above.

      Line 222: Report male/female crista measurements

      Fig. 4B-E: depict data as violin plots or scatter plots like Fig. 2C to get a better grasp of how the crista coverage is distributed. It seems like the data spread is wider in the double KO. This would also solve the problem with the standard deviation extending beyond 0%.

      Lines 331-333: Please clarify that this applies for some, but not all MICOS subunits. Please also see major point 1 above. Also, the authors should point out that despite their structural divergence, trypanosomal cryptic mitofilins Mic34 and Mic40 are essential for parasite growth, in contrast to their findings with PfMic60 (DOI: https://doi.org/10.1101/2025.01.31.635831).

      Line 320: incorrect citation. Related to point 1above.

      Lines 333-335. This is related to the above. Again, some subunits appear to affect cell growth under lab conditions, and some do not. This and the previous sentence should be rewritten to reflect this.

      Line 343-345: The sentence and citation 45 are strange. Regarding the former, it is about CHCHD10, whose status as a bona fide MICOS subunit is very tenuous, so I would omit this. About the phenomenon observed, I think it makes more sense to write that Mic60 ablation results in partially fragmented mitochondria in yeast (Rabl et al., 2009 J Cell Biol. 185: 1047-63). A fragmented mitochondria is often a physiological response to stress. I would just rewrite as not to imply that mitochondrial fission (or fusion) is impaired in these KOs, or at least this could be one of several possibilities.

      Line 373: 'This indicates' is too strong. I would say 'may suggest' as you have no proof that any of the KOs disrupts MICOS. This hypothesis can be tested by other means, but not by penetrance of a phenotype.

      Line 376-377; 'deplete functionality' does not make sense, especially in the context of talking about MICOS subunit stability. In my opinion, this paragraph overinterprets the KO effects on MICOS stability. None of the experiments address this phenomenon, and thus the authors should not try to interpret their results in this context. See major point 1.

      Other suggestions for added value

      1) Does Plasmodium Sam50 co-fractionate with Mic60 and Mic19 in BN PAGE (Fig. 1E)

      2) Can Alphafold3 predict a heterotetramer of PfMic60? What about the four Mic19 and Mic60 subunits together. Is this tetramer consistent with the Bock-Bierbaum model. Is this model consistent with the CJ diameter measured in plasmodium, which is perhaps better evidence than that in lines 419-422.

      Significance

      The manuscript by Tassan-Lugrezin is predicated on the idea that Plasmodium represents the only system in which de novo crista formation can be studied. They leverage this system to ask the question whether MICOS is essential for this process. They conclude based on their data that the answer is no, which the authors consider unprecedented. But even if their claim is true that ABS is acristate, this supposed advantage does not really bring any meaningful insight into how MICOS works in Plasmodium.

      First the positives of this manuscript. As has been the case with this research team, the manuscript is very sophisticated in the experimental approaches that are made. The highlights are the beautiful and often conclusive microscopy performed by the authors. Only the localization of Mic60 and Mic19 was inconclusive due to their very low expression unfortunately.

      The examination of the MICOS mutants during in vitro life cycle of Plasmodium falciparum is extremely impressive and yields convincing results. Mitochondrial deformation is tolerated by life cycle stage differentiation, with a modest but significant reduction of oocyte production, being observed.

      The manuscript by Tassan-Lugrezin is predicated on the idea that Plasmodium represents the only system in which de novo crista formation can be studied. They leverage this system to ask the question whether MICOS is essential for this process. They conclude based on their data that the answer is no, which the authors consider unprecedented. But even if their claim is true that ABS is acristate, this supposed advantage does not really bring any meaningful insight into how MICOS works in Plasmodium.

      First the positives of this manuscript. As has been the case with this research team, the manuscript is very sophisticated in the experimental approaches that are made. The highlights are the beautiful and often conclusive microscopy performed by the authors. Only the localization of Mic60 and Mic19 was inconclusive due to their very low expression unfortunately.

      The examination of the MICOS mutants during in vitro life cycle of Plasmodium falciparum is extremely impressive and yields convincing results. Mitochondrial deformation is tolerated by life cycle stage differentiation, with a modest but significant reduction of oocyte production, being observed.

      However, despite the herculean efforts of the authors, the manuscript as it currently stands represents only a minor advance in our understanding of the evolution of MICOS, which from the title and focus of the manuscript, is the main goal of the authors.

      In its current form, the manuscript reports some potentially important findings:

      1) Mic60 is verified to play a role in crista formation, as is predicted by its orthology to other characterized Mic60 orthologs.

      2) The discovery of a novel Mic19 analog (since the authors maintain there is no significant sequence homology), which exhibits a similar (or the same?) complexome profile with Mic60. This protein was upregulated in gametocytes like Mic60 and phenocopies Mic60 KO.

      3) Both of these MICOS subunits are essential (not dispensable) for proper crista formation

      4) Surprisingly, neither MICOS subunit is essential for in vitro growth or differentiation from ABS to sexual stages, and from the latter to sporozoites. This says more about the biology of plasmodium itself than anything about the essentiality of Mic60, ie plasmodium life cycle progression tolerates defects to mitochondrial morphology. But yes, I agree with the authors that Mic60's apparent insignificance for cell growth in examined conditions does differ with its essentiality in other eukaryotes. But fitness costs were not assayed (eg by competition between mutants and WT in infection of mosquitoes)

      5) Decreased fitness of the mutants is implied by a reduction of oocyte formation.

      While interesting in their own way, collectively they do not represent a major advance in our understanding of MICOS evolution. Furthermore, the findings bifurcate into categories informing MICOS or Plasmodium biology. Both aspects are somewhat underdeveloped in their current form.

      This is unfortunate because there seem to be many missed opportunities in the manuscript that could, with additional experiments, lead to a manuscript with much wider impact.

      For me, what is remarkable about Plasmodium MICOS that sets it apart from other iterations is the apparent absence of the Mic10 subunit. Purification of plasmodium MICOS via the epitope tagged Mic60 and Mic19 could have verified that MICOS is assembled without this core subunit. Perhaps Mic60 and Mic19 are the vestiges of the complex, and thus operate alone in shaping cristae. Such a reduction may also suggest the declining importance of mitochondria in plasmodium.

      Another missed opportunity was to assay the impact of MICOS-depletion of OXPHOS in plasmodium. This is a salient issue as maybe crista morphology is decoupled from OXPHOS capacity in Plasmodium, which links to the apparent tolerance of mitochondrial morphology in cell growth and differentiation. I suggested in section A experiments to address this deficit.

      Finally, the authors could assay fitness costs of MICOS-ablation and associated phenotypes by assaying whether mosquito infectivity is reduced in the mutants when they are directly competing with WT plasmodium. Like the authors, I am also surprised that MICOS mutants can pass population bottlenecks represented by differentiation events. Perhaps the apparent robustness of differentiation may contribute plasmodium's remarkable ability to adapt.

      I realize that the authors put a lot of efforts into their study and again, I am very impressed by the sophistication of the methods employed. Nevertheless, I think there is still better ways to increase the impact of the study aside from overinterpreting the conclusions from the data. But this would require more experiments along the lines I suggest in Section A and here.

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      Evidence, reproducibility and clarity

      Summary: This manuscript reports the identification of putative orthologues of mitochondrial contact site and cristae organizing system (MICOS) proteins in Plasmodium falciparum - an organism that unusually shows an acristate mitochondrion during the asexual part of its life cycle and then this develops cristae as it enters the sexual stage of its life cycle and beyond into the mosquito. The authors identify PfMIC60 and PfMIC19 as putative members and study these in detail. The authors at HA tags to both proteins and look for timing of expression during the parasite life cycle and attempt (unsuccessfully) to localise them within the parasite. They also genetically deleted both gene singly and in parallel and phenotyped the effect on parasite development. They show that both proteins are expressed in gametocytes and not asexuals, suggesting they are present at the same time as cristae development. They also show that the proteins are dispensible for the entire parasite life cycle investigated (asexuals through to sporozoites), however there is some reduction in mosquito transmission. Using EM techniques they show that the morphology of gametocyte mitochondria is abnormal in the knock out lines, although there is great variation.

      Major comments: The manuscript is interesting and is an intriguing use of a well studied organism of medical importance to answer fundamental biological questions. My main comments are that there should be greater detail in areas around methodology and statistical tests used. Also, the mosquito transmission assays (which are notoriously difficult to perform) show substantial variation between replicates and the statistical tests and data presentation are not clear enough to conclude the reduction in transmission that is claimed. Perhaps this could be improved with clearer text?

      More specific comments to address:

      Line 101/Fig1E (and figure legend) - What is this heatmap showing. It would be helpful to have a sentence or two linking it to a specific methodology. I could not find details in the M+M section and "specialized, high molecular mass gels" does not adequately explain what experiments were performed. The reference to Supplementary Information 1 also did not provide information. Line 115 and Supplementary Figure 2C + D - The main text says that the transgenic parasites contained a mitochondrially localized mScarlet for visualization and localization, but in the supplementary figure 2 it shows mitotracker labelling rather than mScarlet. This is very confusing. The figure legend also mentions both mScarlet and MitoTracker. I assume that mScarlet was used to view in regular IFAs (Fig S2C) and the MitoTracker was used for the expansion microscopy (Fig S2D)? Please clarify. Figure 2C - what is the statistical test being used (the methods say "Mean oocysts per midgut and statistical significance were calculated using a generalized linear mixed effect model with a random experiment effect under a negative binomial distribution." but what test is this?)? Also the choice of a log10 scale for oocyst intensity is an unusual choice - how are the mosquitoes with 0 oocysts being represented on this graph? It looks like they are being plotted at 10^-1 (which would be 0.1 oocysts in a mosquito which would be impossible). Figure 2D - it is great that the data from all feeding replicates has been shared, however it is difficult to conclude any meaningful impact in transmission with the knock-out lines when there is so much variation and so few mosquitoes dissected for some datapoints (10 mosquitoes are very small sample sizes). For example, Exp1 shows a clear decrease in mic19- transmission, but then Exp2 does not really show as great effect. Similarly, why does the double knock out have better transmission than the single knockouts? Sure there would be a greater effect? Figure 3 legend - Please add which statistical test was used and the number of replicates. Figure 4 legend - Please add which statistical test was used and the number of replicates. Figure 5C - the 3D reconstructions are very nice, but what does the red and yellow coloring show? Line 352 - "Still, it is striking that, despite the pronounced morphological phenotype, and the possibly high mitochondrial stress levels, the parasites appeared mostly unaffected in life cycle propagation, raising questions about the functional relevance of mitochondria at these stages." How do the authors reconcile this statement with the proven fact that mitochondria-targeted antimalarials (such as atovaquone) are very potent inhibitors of parasite mosquito transmission?

      Significance

      This manuscript is a novel approach to studying mitochondrial biology and does open a lot of unanswered questions for further research directions. Currently there are limitations in the use of statistical tests and detail of methodology, but these could be easily be addressed with a bit more analysis/better explanation in the text. This manuscript could be of interest to readers with a general interest in mitochondrial cell biology and those within the specific field of Plasmodium research.

      My expertise is in Plasmodium cell biology.

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    1. Author response:

      The following is the authors’ response to the original reviews.

      Reviewer #1 (Public review):

      (1) I have to admit that it took a few hours of intense work to understand this paper and to even figure out where the authors were coming from. The problem setting, nomenclature, and simulation methods presented in this paper do not conform to the notation common in the field, are often contradictory, and are usually hard to understand. Most importantly, the problem that the paper is trying to solve seems to me to be quite specific to the particular memory study in question, and is very different from the normal setting of model-comparative RSA that I (and I think other readers) may be more familiar with.

      We have revised the paper for clarity at all levels: motivation, application, and parameterization. We clarify that there is a large unmet need for using RSA in a trial-wise manner, and that this approach indeed offers benefits to any team interested in decoding trial-wise representational information linked to a behavioral responses, and as such is not a problem specific to a single memory study.

      (2) The definition of "classical RSA" that the authors are using is very narrow. The group around Niko Kriegeskorte has developed RSA over the last 10 years, addressing many of the perceived limitations of the technique. For example, cross-validated distance measures (Walther et al. 2016; Nili et al. 2014; Diedrichsen et al. 2021) effectively deal with an uneven number of trials per condition and unequal amounts of measurement noise across trials. Different RDM comparators (Diedrichsen et al. 2021) and statistical methods for generalization across stimuli (Schütt et al. 2023) have been developed, addressing shortcomings in sensitivity. Finally, both a Bayesian variant of RSA (Pattern component modelling, (Diedrichsen, Yokoi, and Arbuckle 2018) and an encoding model (Naselaris et al. 2011) can effectively deal with continuous variables or features across time points or trials in a framework that is very related to RSA (Diedrichsen and Kriegeskorte 2017). The author may not consider these newer developments to be classical, but they are in common use and certainly provide the solution to the problems raised in this paper in the setting of model-comparative RSA in which there is more than one repetition per stimulus.

      We appreciate the summary of relevant literature and have included a revised Introduction to address this bounty of relevant work. While much is owed to these authors, new developments from a diverse array of researchers outside of a single group can aid in new research questions, and should always have a place in our research landscape. We owe much to the work of Kriegeskorte’s group, and in fact, Schutt et al., 2023 served as a very relevant touchpoint in the Discussion and helped to highlight specific needs not addressed by the assessment of the “representational geometry” of an entire presented stimulus set. Principal amongst these needs is the application of trial-wise representational information that can be related to trial-wise behavioral responses and thus used to address specific questions on brain-behavior relationships. We invite the Reviewer to consider the utility of this shift with the following revisions to the Introduction.

      Page 3. “Recently, methodological advancements have addressed many known limitations in cRSA. For example, cross-validated distance measures (e.g., Euclidean distance) have improved the reliability of representational dissimilarities in the presence of noise and trial imbalance (Walther et al., 2016; Nili et al., 2014; Diedrichsen et al., 2021). Bayesian approaches such as pattern component modeling (Diedrichsen, Yokoi, & Arbuckle, 2018) have extended representational approaches to accommodate continuous stimulus features or temporal variation. Further, model comparison RSA strategies (Diedrichsen et al., 2021) and generalization techniques across stimuli (Schütt et al., 2023) have improved sensitivity and inference. Nevertheless, a common feature shared across most of improvements is that they require stimuli repetition to examine the representational structure. This requirement limits their ability to probe brain-behavior questions at the level of individual events”.

      Page 8. “While several extensions of RSA have addressed key limitations in noise sensitivity, stimulus variance, and modeling (e.g., Diedrichsen et al., 2021; Schütt et al., 2023), our tRSA approach introduces a new methodological step by estimating representational strength at the trial level. This accounts for the multi-level variance structure in the data, affords generalizability beyond the fixed stimulus set, and allows one to test stimulus- or trial-level modulations of neural representations in a straightforward way”.

      Page 44. “Despite such prevalent appreciation for the neurocognitive relevance of stimulus properties, cRSA often does not account for the fact that the same stimulus (e.g., “basketball”) is seen by multiple subjects and produces statistically dependent data, an issue addressed by Schütt et al., 2023, who developed cross validation and bootstrap methods that explicitly model dependence across both subjects and stimulus conditions”.

      (3) The stated problem of the paper is to estimate "representational strength" in different regions or conditions. With this, the authors define the correlation of the brain RDM with a model RDM. This metric conflates a number of factors, namely the variances of the stimulus-specific patterns, the variance of the noise, the true differences between different dissimilarities, and the match between the assumed model and the data-generating model. It took me a long time to figure out that the authors are trying to solve a quite different problem in a quite different setting from the model-comparative approach to RSA that I would consider "classical" (Diedrichsen et al. 2021; Diedrichsen and Kriegeskorte 2017). In this approach, one is trying to test whether local activity patterns are better explained by representation model A or model B, and to estimate the degree to which the representation can be fully explained. In this framework, it is common practice to measure each stimulus at least 2 times, to be able to estimate the variance of noise patterns and the variance of signal patterns directly. Using this setting, I would define 'representational strength" very differently from the authors. Assume (using LaTeX notation) that the activity patterns $y_j,n$ for stimulus j, measurement n, are composed of a true stimulus-related pattern ($u_j$) and a trial-specific noise pattern ($e_j,n$). As a measure of the strength of representation (or pattern), I would use an unbiased estimate of the variance of the true stimulus-specific patterns across voxels and stimuli ($\sigma^2_{u}$). This estimator can be obtained by correlating patterns of the same stimuli across repeated measures, or equivalently, by averaging the cross-validated Euclidean distances (or with spatial prewhitening, Mahalanobis distances) across all stimulus pairs. In contrast, the current paper addresses a specific problem in a quite specific experimental design in which there is only one repetition per stimulus. This means that the authors have no direct way of distinguishing true stimulus patterns from noise processes. The trick that the authors apply here is to assume that the brain data comes from the assumed model RDM (a somewhat sketchy assumption IMO) and that everything that reduces this correlation must be measurement noise. I can now see why tRSA does make some sense for this particular question in this memory study. However, in the more common model-comparative RSA setting, having only one repetition per stimulus in the experiment would be quite a fatal design flaw. Thus, the paper would do better if the authors could spell the specific problem addressed by their method right in the beginning, rather than trying to set up tRSA as a general alternative to "classical RSA".

      At a general level, our approach rests on the premise that there is meaningful information present in a single presentation of a given stimulus. This assumption may have less utility when the research goals are more focused on estimating the fidelity of signal patterns for RSA, as in designs with multiple repetitions. But it is an exaggeration to state that such a trial-wise approach cannot address the difference between “true” stimulus patterns and noise. This trial-wise approach has explicit utility in relating trial-wise brain information to trial-wise behavior, across multiple cognitions (not only memory studies, as applied here). We have added substantial text to the Introduction distinguishing cRSA, which is widely employed, often in cases with a single repetition per stimulus, and model comparative methods that employ multiple repetitions. We clarify that we do not consider tRSA an alternative to the model comparative approach, and discuss that operational definitions of representational strength are constrained by the study design.

      Page 3. “In this paper, we present an advancement termed trial-level RSA, or tRSA, which addresses these limitations in cRSA (not model comparison approaches) and may be utilized in paradigms with or without repeated stimuli”.

      Page 4. “Representational geometry usually refers to the structure of similarities among repeated presentations of the same stimulus in the neural data (as captured in the brain RSM) and is often estimated utilizing a model comparison approach, whereas representational strength is a derived measure that quantifies how strongly this geometry aligns with a hypothesized model RSM. In other words, geometry characterizes the pattern space itself, while representational strength reflects the degree of correspondence between that space and the theoretical model under test”.

      Finally, we clarified that in our simulation methods we assume a true underlying activity pattern and a random error pattern. The model RSM is computed based on the true pattern, whereas the brain RSM comes from the noisy pattern, not the model RSM itself.

      Page 9. “Then, we generated two sets of noise patterns, which were controlled by parameters σ<sub>A</sub> and σ<sub>B</sub> , respectively, one for each condition”.

      (4) The notation in the paper is often conflicting and should be clarified. The actual true and measured activity patterns should receive a unique notation that is distinct from the variances of these patterns across voxels. I assume that $\sigma_ijk$ is the noise variances (not standard deviation)? Normally, variances are denoted with $\sigma^2$. Also, if these are variances, they cannot come from a normal distribution as indicated on page 10. Finally, multi-level models are usually defined at the level of means (i.e., patterns) rather than at the level of variances (as they seem to be done here).

      We have added notations for true and measured activity patterns to differentiate it from our notation for variance. We agree that multilevel models are usually defined at the level of means rather than at the level of variances and we include a Figure (Fig 1D) that describes the model in terms of the means. We clarify that the σ ($\sigma$) used in the manuscript were not variances/standard deviations themselves; rather, they were meant to denote components of the actual (multilevel) variance parameter. Each component was sampled from normal distributions, and they collectively summed up to comprise the final variance parameter for each trial. We have modified our notation for each component to the lowercase letter s to minimize confusion. We have also made our R code publicly available on our lab github, which should provide more clarity on the exact simulation process.

      (5) In the first set of simulations, the authors sampled both model and brain RSM by drawing each cell (similarity) of the matrix from an independent bivariate normal distribution. As the authors note themselves, this way of producing RSMs violates the constraint that correlation matrices need to be positive semi-definite. Likely more seriously, it also ignores the fact that the different elements of the upper triangular part of a correlation matrix are not independent from each other (Diedrichsen et al. 2021). Therefore, it is not clear that this simulation is close enough to reality to provide any valuable insight and should be removed from the paper, along with the extensive discussion about why this simulation setting is plainly wrong (page 21). This would shorten and clarify the paper.

      We have added justification of the mixed-effects model given the potential assumption violations. We caution readers to investigate the robustness of their models, and to employ permutation testing that does not make independence assumptions. We have also added checks of the model residuals and an example of permutation testing in the Appendix. Finally, we agree that the first simulation setting does not possess several properties of realistic RDMs/RSMs; however, we believe that there is utility in understanding the mathematical properties of correlations – an essential component of RSA – in a straightforward simulation where the ground truth is known, thus moving the simulation to Appendix 1.

      (6) If I understand the second simulation setting correctly, the true pattern for each stimulus was generated as an NxP matrix of i.i.d. standard normal variables. Thus, there is no condition-specific pattern at all, only condition-specific noise/signal variances. It is not clear how the tRSA would be biased if there were a condition-specific pattern (which, in reality, there usually is). Because of the i.i.d. assumption of the true signal, the correlations between all stimulus pairs within conditions are close to zero (and only differ from it by the fact that you are using a finite number of voxels). If you added a condition-specific pattern, the across-condition RSA would lead to much higher "representational strength" estimates than a within-condition RSA, with obvious problems and biases.

      The Reviewer is correct that the voxel values in the true pattern are drawn from i.i.d. standard normal distributions. We take the Reviewer’s suggestion of “condition-specific pattern” to mean that there could be a condition-voxel interaction in two non-mutually exclusive ways. The first is additive, essentially some common underlying multi-voxel pattern like [6, 34, -52, …, 8] for all condition A trials, and different one such pattern for condition B trials, etc. The second is multiplicative, essentially a vector of scaling factors [x1.5, x0.5, x0.8, …, x2.7] for all condition A trials, and a different one such vector for condition B trials, etc. Both possibilities could indeed affect tRSA as much as it would cRSA.

      Importantly, If such a strong condition-specific pattern is expected, one can build a condition-specific model RDM using one-shot coding of conditions (see example figure; src: https://www.newbi4fmri.com/tutorial-9-mvpa-rsa), to either capture this interesting phenomenon or to remove this out as a confounding factor. This practice has been applied in multiple regression cRSA approaches (e.g., Cichy et al., 2013) and can also be applied to tRSA.

      (7) The trial-level brain RDM to model Spearman correlations was analyzed using a mixed effects model. However, given the symmetry of the RDM, the correlations coming from different rows of the matrix are not independent, which is an assumption of the mixed effect model. This does not seem to induce an increase in Type I errors in the conditions studied, but there is no clear justification for this procedure, which needs to be justified.

      We appreciate this important warning, and now caution readers to investigate the robustness of their models, and consider employing permutation testing that does not make independence assumptions. We have also added checks of the model residuals and an example of permutation testing in the supplement.

      Page 46. “While linear mixed-effects modeling offers a powerful framework for analyzing representational similarity data, it is critical that researchers carefully construct and validate their models. The multilevel structure of RSA data introduces potential dependencies across subjects, stimuli, and trials, which can violate assumptions of independence if not properly modeled. In the present study, we used a model that included random intercepts for both subjects and stimuli, which accounts for variance at these levels and improves the generalizability of fixed-effect estimates. Still, there is a potential for systematic dependence across trials within a subject. To ensure that the model assumptions were satisfied, we conducted a series of diagnostic checks on an exemplar ROI (right LOC; middle occipital gyrus) in the Object Perception dataset, including visual inspection of residual distributions and autocorrelation (Appendix 3, Figure 13). These diagnostics supported the assumptions of normality, homoscedasticity, and conditional independence of residuals. In addition, we conducted permutation-based inference, similar to prior improvements to cRSA (Niliet al. 2014), using a nested model comparison to test whether the mean similarity in this ROI was significantly greater than zero. The observed likelihood ratio test statistic fell in the extreme tail of the null distribution (Appendix 3, Figure 14), providing strong nonparametric evidence for the reliability of the observed effect. We emphasize that this type of model checking and permutation testing is not merely confirmatory but can help validate key assumptions in RSA modeling, especially when applying mixed-effects models to neural similarity data. Researchers are encouraged to adopt similar procedures to ensure the robustness and interpretability of their findings”.

      Exemplar Permutation Testing

      To test whether the mean representational strength in the ROI right LOC (middle occipital gyrus) was significantly greater than zero, we used a permutation-based likelihood ratio test implemented via the permlmer function. This test compares two nested linear mixed-effects models fit using the lmer function from the lme4 package, both including random intercepts for Participant and Stimulus ID to account for between-subject and between-item variability.

      The null model excluded a fixed intercept term, effectively constraining the mean similarity to zero after accounting for random effects:

      ROI ~ 0 + (1 | Participant) + (1 | Stimulus)

      The full model included the same random effects structure but allowed the intercept to be freely estimated:

      ROI ~ 1 + (1 | Participant) + (1 | Stimulus)

      By comparing the fit of these two models, we directly tested whether the average similarity in this ROI was significantly different from zero. Permutation testing (1,000 permutations) was used to generate a nonparametric p-value, providing inference without relying on normality assumptions. The full model, which estimated a nonzero mean similarity in the right LOC (middle occipital gyrus), showed a significantly better fit to the data than the null model that fixed the mean at zero (χ²(1) = 17.60, p = 2.72 × 10⁻⁵). The permutation-based p-value obtained from permlmer confirmed this effect as statistically significant (p = 0.0099), indicating that the mean similarity in this ROI was reliably greater than zero. These results support the conclusion that the right LOC contains representational structure consistent with the HMAXc2 RSM. A density plot of the permuted likelihood ratio tests is plotted along with the observed likelihood ratio test in Appendix 3 Figure 14.

      (8) For the empirical data, it is not clear to me to what degree the "representational strength" of cRSA and tRSA is actually comparable. In cRSA, the Spearman correlation assesses whether the distances in the data RSM are ranked in the same order as in the model. For tRSA, the comparison is made for every row of the RSM, which introduces a larger degree of flexibility (possibly explaining the higher correlations in the first simulation). Thus, could the gains presented in Figure 7D not simply arise from the fact that you are testing different questions? A clearer theoretical analysis of the difference between the average row-wise Spearman correlation and the matrix-wise Spearman correlation is urgently needed. The behavior will likely vary with the structure of the true model RDM/RSM.

      We agree that the comparability between mean row-wise Spearman correlations and the matrix-wise Spearman correlation is needed. We believe that the simulations are the best approach for this comparison, since they are much more robust than the empirical dataset and have the advantage of knowing the true pattern/noise levels. We expand on our comparison of mean tRSA values and matrix-wise Spearman correlations on page 42.

      Page 42. “Although tRSA and cRSA both aim to quantify representational strength, they differ in how they operationalize this concept. cRSA summarizes the correspondence between RSMs as a single measure, such as the matrix-wise Spearman correlation. In contrast, tRSA computes such correspondence for each trial, enabling estimates at the level of individual observations. This flexibility allows trial-level variability to be modeled directly, but also introduces subtle differences in what is being measured. Nonetheless, our simulations showed that, although numerical differences occasionally emerged—particularly when comparing between-condition tRSA estimates to within-condition cRSA estimates—the magnitude of divergence was small and did not affect the outcome of downstream statistical tests”.

      (9) For the real data, there are a number of additional sources of bias that need to be considered for the analysis. What if there are not only condition-specific differences in noise variance, but also a condition-specific pattern? Given that the stimuli were measured in 3 different imaging runs, you cannot assume that all measurement noise is i.i.d. - stimuli from the same run will likely have a higher correlation with each other.

      We recognize the potential of condition-specific patterns and chose to constrain the analyses to those most comparable with cRSA. However, depending on their hypotheses, researchers may consider testing condition RSMs and utilizing a model comparison approach or employ the z-scored approach, as employed in the simulations above. Regarding the potential run confounds, this is always the case in RSA and why we exclude within-run comparisons. We have also added to the Discussion the suggestion to include run as a covariate in their mixed-effects models. However, we do not employ this covariate here as we preferred the most parsimonious model to compare with cRSA.

      Page 46 - 47. “Further, while analyses here were largely employed to be comparable with cRSA, researchers should consider taking advantage of the flexibility of the mixed-effects models and include co variates of non-interest (run, trial order etc.)”.

      (10) The discussion should be rewritten in light of the fact that the setting considered here is very different from the model-comparative RSA in which one usually has multiple measurements per stimulus per subject. In this setting, existing approaches such as RSA or PCM do indeed allow for the full modelling of differences in the "representational strength" - i.e., pattern variance across subjects, conditions, and stimuli.

      We agree that studies advancing designs with multiple repetitions of a given stimulus image are useful in estimating the reliability of concept representations. We would argue however that model comparison in RSA is not restricted to such data. Many extant studies do not in fact have multiple repetitions per stimulus per subject (Wang et al., 2018 https://doi.org/10.1088/1741-2552/abecc3, Gao et al, 2022 https://doi.org/10.1093/cercor/bhac058, Li et al, 2022 https://doi.org/10.1002/hbm.26195, Staples & Graves, 2020 https://doi.org/10.1162/nol_a_00018) that allow for that type of model-comparative approach. While beneficial in terms of noise estimation, having multiple presentations was not a requirement for implementing cRSA (Kriegeskorte, 2008 https://doi.org/10.3389/neuro.06.004.2008). The aim of this manuscript is to introduce the tRSA approach to the broad community of researchers whose research questions and datasets could vary vastly, including but not limited to the number of repeated presentations and the balance of trial counts across conditions.

      (11) Cross-validated distances provide a powerful tool to control for differences in measurement noise variances and possible covariances in measurement noise across trials, which has many distinct advantages and is conceptually very different from the approach taken here.

      We have added language on the value of cross-validation approaches to RSA in the Discussion:

      Page 47. “Additionally, we note that while our proposed tRSA framework provides a flexible and statistically principled approach for modeling trial-level representational strength, we acknowledge that there are alternative methods for addressing trial-level variability in RSA. In particular, the use of cross-validated distance metrics (e.g., crossnobis distance) has become increasingly popular for controlling differences in measurement noise variance and accounting for possible covariance structures across trials (Walther et al., 2016). These metrics offer several advantages, including unbiased estimation of representational dissimilarities under Gaussian noise assumptions and improved generalization to unseen data. However, cross-validated distances are conceptually distinct from the approach taken here: whereas cross-validation aims to correct for noise-related biases in representational dissimilarity matrices, our trial-level RSA method focuses on estimating and modeling the variability in representation strength across individual trials using mixed-effects modeling. Rather than proposing a replacement for cross-validated RSA, tRSA adds a complementary tool to the methodological toolkit—one that supports hypothesis-driven inference about condition effects and trial-level covariates, while leveraging the full structure of the data”.

      (12) One of the main limitations of tRSA is the assumption that the model RDM is actually the true brain RDM, which may not be the case. Thus, in theory, there could be a different model RDM, in which representational strength measures would be very different. These differences should be explained more fully, hopefully leading to a more accessible paper.

      Indeed, the chosen model RSM may not be the true RSM, but as the noise level increases the correlation between RSMs practically becomes zero. In our simulations we assume this to be true as a straightforward way to manipulate the correspondence between the brain data and the model. However, just like cRSA, tRSA is constrained by the model selections the researchers employ. We encourage researchers to have carefully considered theoretically-motivated models and, if their research questions require, consider multiple and potentially competing models. Furthermore, the trial-wise estimates produced by tRSA encourage testing competing models within the multiple regression framework. We have added this language to the Discussion.

      Page 46. ..”choose their model RSMs carefully. In our simulations, we designed our model RSM to be the “true” RSM for demonstration purposes. However, researchers should consider if their models and model alternatives”.

      Pages 45-46. “While a number of studies have addressed the validity of measuring representational geometry using designs with multiple repetitions, a conceptual benefit of the tRSA approach is the reliance on a regression framework that engenders the testing of competing conceptual models of stimulus representation (e.g., taxonomic vs. encyclopedic semantic features, as in Davis et al., 2021)”.

      Reviewer #2 (Public review):

      (1)  While I generally welcome the contribution, I take some issue with the accusatory tone of the manuscript in the Introduction. The text there (using words such as 'ignored variances', 'errouneous inferences', 'one must', 'not well-suited', 'misleading') appears aimed at turning cRSA in a 'straw man' with many limitations that other researchers have not recognized but that the new proposed method supposedly resolves. This can be written in a more nuanced, constructive manner without accusing the numerous users of this popular method of ignorance.

      We apologize for the unintended accusatory tone. We have clarified the many robust approaches to RSA and have made our Introduction and Discussion more nuanced throughout (see also 3, 11 and16).

      (2) The described limitations are also not entirely correct, in my view: for example, statistical inference in cRSA is not always done using classic parametric statistics such as t-tests (cf Figure 1): the rsatoolbox paper by Nili et al. (2014) outlines non-parametric alternatives based on permutation tests, bootstrapping and sign tests, which are commonly used in the field. Nor has RSA ever been conducted at the row/column level (here referred to by the authors as 'trial level'; cf King et al., 2018).

      We agree there are numerous methods that go beyond cRSA addressing these limitations and have added discussion of them into our manuscript as well as an example analysis implementing permutation tests on tRSA data (see response to 7). We thank the reviewer for bringing King et al., 2014 and their temporal generalization method to our attention, we added reference to acknowledge their decoding-based temporal generalization approach.

      Page 8. “It is also important to note that some prior work has examined similarly fine-grained representations in time-resolved neuroimaging data, such as the temporal generalization method introduced by King et al. (see King & Dehaene, 2014). Their approach trains classifiers at each time point and tests them across all others, resulting in a temporal generalization matrix that reflects decoding accuracy over time. While such matrices share some structural similarity with RSMs, they do not involve correlating trial-level pattern vectors with model RSMs nor do their second-level models include trial-wise, subject-wise, and item-wise variability simultaneously”.

      (3) One of the advantages of cRSA is its simplicity. Adding linear mixed effects modeling to RSA introduces a host of additional 'analysis parameters' pertaining to the choice of the model setup (random effects, fixed effects, interactions, what error terms to use) - how should future users of tRSA navigate this?

      We appreciate the opportunity to offer more specific proscriptions for those employing a tRSA technique, and have added them to the Discussion:

      Page 46. “While linear mixed-effects modeling offers a powerful framework for analyzing representational similarity data, it is critical that researchers carefully construct and validate their models and choose their model RSMs carefully. In our simulations, we designed our model RSM to be the “true” RSM for demonstration purposes. However, researchers should consider if their models and model alternatives. However, researchers should always consider if their models match the goals of their analysis, including 1) constructing the random effects structure that will converge in their dataset and 2) testing their model fits against alternative structures (Meteyard & Davies, 2020; Park et al., 2020) and 3) considering which effects should be considered random or fixed depending on their research question”.

      (4) Here, only a single real fMRI dataset is used with a quite complicated experimental design for the memory part; it's not clear if there is any benefit of using tRSA on a simpler real dataset. What's the benefit of tRSA in classic RSA datasets (e.g., Kriegeskorte et al., 2008), with fixed stimulus conditions and no behavior?

      To clarify, our empirical approach uses two different tasks: an Object Perception task more akin to the classic RSA datasets employing passive viewing, and a Conceptual Retrieval task that more directly addresses the benefits of the trialwise approach. We felt that our Object Perception dataset is a simpler empirical fMRI dataset without explicit task conditions or a dichotomous behavioral outcome, whereas the Retrieval dataset is more involved (though old/new recognition is the most common form of memory retrieval testing) and  dependent on behavioral outcomes. However, we recognize the utility of replication from other research groups and do invite researchers to utilize tRSA on their datasets.

      (5) The cells of an RDM/RSM reflect pairwise comparisons between response patterns (typically a brain but can be any system; cf Sucholutsky et al., 2023). Because the response patterns are repeatedly compared, the cells of this matrix are not independent of one another. Does this raise issues with the validity of the linear mixed effects model? Does it assume the observations are linearly independent?

      We recognize the potential danger for not meeting model assumptions. Though our simulation results and model checks suggest this is not a fatal flaw in the model design, we caution readers to investigate the robustness of their models, and consider employing permutation testing that does not make independence assumptions. We have also added checks of the model residuals and an example of permutation testing in the Appendix. See response to R1.

      (6) The manuscript assumes the reader is familiar with technical statistical terms such as Type I/II error, sensitivity, specificity, homoscedasticity assumptions, as well as linear mixed models (fixed effects, random effects, etc). I am concerned that this jargon makes the paper difficult to understand for a broad readership or even researchers currently using cRSA that might be interested in trying tRSA.

      We agree this jargon may cause the paper to be difficult to understand. We have expanded/added definitions to these terms throughout the methods and results sections.

      Page 12. “Given data generated with 𝑠<sub>𝑐𝑜𝑛𝑑,𝐴</sub> = 𝑠<sub>𝑐𝑜𝑛𝑑,B</sub>, the correct inference should be a failure to reject the null hypothesis of ; any significant () result in either direction was considered a false positive (spurious effect, or Type I error). Given data generated with , the inference was considered correct if it rejected the null hypothesis of  and yielded the expected sign of the estimated contrast (b<sub>B-𝐴</sub><0). A significant result with the reverse sign of the estimated contrast (b<sub>B-𝐴</sub><0) was considered a Type I error, and a nonsignificant (𝑝 ≥ 0.05) result was considered a false negative (failure to detect a true effect, or Type II error)”.

      Page 2. “Compared to cRSA, the multi-level framework of tRSA was both more theoretically appropriate and significantly sensitive (better able to detect) to true effects”.

      Page 25.”The performance of cRSA and tRSA were quantified with their specificity (better avoids false positives, 1 - Type I error rate) and sensitivity (better avoids false negatives 1 - Type II error rate)”.

      Page 6. “One of the fundamental assumptions of general linear models (step 4 of cRSA; see Figure 1D) is homoscedasticity or homogeneity of variance — that is, all residuals should have equal variance” .

      Page11. “Specifically, a linear mixed-effects model with a fixed effect  of condition (which estimates the average effect across the entire sample, capturing the overall effect of interest) and random effects of both subjects and stimuli (which model variation in responses due to differences between individual subjects and items, allowing generalization beyond the sample) were fitted to tRSA estimates via the `lme4 1.1-35.3` package in R (Bates et al., 2015), and p-values were estimated using Satterthwaites’s method via the `lmerTest 3.1-3` package (Kuznetsova et al., 2017)”.

      (7) I could not find any statement on data availability or code availability. Given that the manuscript reuses prior data and proposes a new method, making data and code/tutorials openly available would greatly enhance the potential impact and utility for the community.

      We thank the reviewer for raising our oversight here. We have added our code and data availability statements.

      Page 9. “Data is available upon request to the corresponding author and our simulations and example tRSA code is available at https://github.com/electricdinolab”.

      Reviewer #1 (Recommendations for the authors):

      (13) Page 4: The limitations of cRSA seem to be based on the assumption that within each different experimental condition, there are different stimuli, which get combined into the condition. The framework of RSA, however, does not dictate whether you calculate a condition x condition RDM or a larger and more complete stimulus x stimulus RDM. Indeed, in practice we often do the latter? Or are you assuming that each stimulus is only shown once overall? It would be useful at this point to spell out these implicit assumptions.

      We agree that stimulus x stimulus RDMs can be constructed and are often used. However, as we mentioned in the Introduction, researchers are often interested in the difference between two (or more) conditions, such as “remembered” vs. “forgotten” (Davis et al., https://doi.org/10.1093/cercor/bhaa269) or “high cognitive load” vs. “low cognitive load” (Beynel et al., https://doi.org/10.1523/JNEUROSCI.0531-20.2020). In those cases, the most common practice with cRSA is to construct condition-specific RDMs, compute cRSA scores separately for each condition, and then compare the scores at the group level. The number of times each stimulus gets presented does not prevent one from creating a model RDM that has the same rows and columns as the brain RDM, either in the same condition (“high load”) or across different conditions.

      (14) Page 5: The difference between condition-level and stimulus-level is not clear. Indeed, this definition seems to be a function of the exact experimental design and is certainly up for interpretation. For example, if I conduct a study looking at the activity patterns for 4 different hand actions, each repeated multiple times, are these actions considered stimuli or conditions?

      We have added clarifying language about what is considered stimuli vs conditions. Indeed, this will depend on the specific research questions being employed and will affect how researchers construct their models. In this specific example, one would most likely consider each different hand action a condition, treating them as fixed effects rather than random effects, given their very limited number and the lack of need to generalize findings to the broader “hand actions” category.

      Page 5. “Critically, the distinction between condition-level and stimulus level is not always clear as researchers may manipulate stimulus-level features themselves. In these cases, what researchers ultimately consider condition-level and stimulus-level will depend on their specific research questions. For example, researchers intending to study generalized object representation may consider object category a stimulus-level feature, while researchers interested in if/how object representation varies by category may consider the same category variable condition-level”.

      (15) Page 5: The fact that different numbers of trials / different levels of measurement noise / noise-covariance of different conditions biases non-cross-validated distances is well known and repeatedly expressed in the literature. We have shown that cross-validation of distances effectively removes such biases - of course, it does not remove the increased estimation variability of these distances (for a formal analysis of estimation noise on condition patterns and variance of the cross-nobis estimator, see (Diedrichsen et al. 2021)).

      We thank the reviewer for drawing our attention to this literature and have added discussions of these methods.

      (16). Page 5: "Most studies present subjects with a fixed set of stimuli, which are supposedly samples representative of some broader category". This may be the case for a certain type of RSA experiments in the visual domain, but it would be unfair to say that this is a feature of RSA studies in general. In most studies I have been involved in, we use a "stimulus" x "stimulus" RDM.

      We have edited this sentence to avoid the “most” characterization. We also added substantial text to the introduction and discussion distinguishing cRSA, which is nonetheless widely employed, especially in cases with a single repetition per stimulus (Macklin et al., 2023, Liu et al, 2024) and the model comparative method and explicitly stating that we do not consider tRSA an alternative to the model comparative approach.

      (17). Page 5: I agree that "stimuli" should ideally be considered a random effect if "stimuli" can be thought of as sampled from a larger population and one wants to make inferences about that larger population. Sometimes stimuli/conditions are more appropriately considered a fixed effect (for example, when studying the response to stimulation of the 5 fingers of the right hand). Techniques to consider stimuli/conditions as a random effect have been published by the group of Niko Kriegeskorte (Schütt et al. 2023).

      Indeed, in some cases what may be thought of as “stimuli” would be more appropriately entered into the model as a fixed effect; such questions are increasingly relevant given the focus on item-wise stimulus properties (Bainbridge et al., Westfall & Yarkoni). We have added text on this issue to the Discussion and caution researchers to employ models that most directly answer their research questions.

      Page 46. “However, researchers should always consider if their models match the goals of their analysis, including 1) constructing the random effects structure that will converge in their dataset and 2) testing their model fits against alternative structures (Meteyard & Davies, 2020; Park et al., 2020) and 3) considering which effects should be considered random or fixed depending on their research question. An effect is fixed when the levels represent the specific conditions of theoretical interest (e.g., task condition) and the goal is to estimate and interpret those differences directly. In contrast, an effect is random when the levels are sampled from a broader population (e.g., subjects) and the goal is to account for their variability while generalizing beyond the sample tested. Note that the same variable (e.g., stimuli) may be considered fixed or random depending on the research questions”.

      (18) Page 6: It is correct that the "classical" RSA depends on a categorical assignment of different trials to different stimuli/conditions, such that a stimulus x stimulus RDM can be computed. However, both Pattern Component Modelling (PCM) and Encoding models are ideally set up to deal with variables that vary continuously on a trial-by-trial or moment-by-moment basis. tRSA should be compared to these approaches, or - as it should be clarified - that the problem setting is actually quite a different one.

      We agree that PCM and encoding models offer a flexible approach and handle continuous trial-by-trial variables. We have clarified the problem setting in cRSA is distinct on page 6, and we have added the robustness of encoding models and their limitations to the Discussion.

      Page 6. “While other approaches such as Pattern Component Modeling (PCM) (Diedrichsen et al., 2018) and encoding models (Naselaris et al., 2011) are well-suited to analyzing variables that vary continuously on a trial-by-trial or moment-by-moment basis, these frameworks address different inferential goals. Specifically, PCM and encoding models focus on estimating variance components or predicting activation from features, while cRSA is designed to evaluate representational geometry. Thus, cRSA as well as our proposed approach address a problem setting distinct from PCM and encoding models”.

      (19) Page 8: "Then, we generated two noise patterns, which were controlled by parameters 𝜎 𝐴 and 𝜎𝐵, respectively, one for each condition." This makes little sense to me. The noise patterns should be unique to each trial - you should generate n_a + n_b noise patterns, no?

      We clarify that the “noise patterns” here are n_voxel x n_trial in size; in other words, all trial-level noise patterns are generated together and each trial has their own unique noise pattern. We have revised our description as “two sets of noise patterns” for clarity starting on page 9.

      (20) Page 9: First, I assume if this is supposed to be a hierarchical level model, the "noise parameters" here correspond to variances? Or do these \sigma values mean to signify standard deviations? The latter would make little sense. Or is it the noise pattern itself?

      As clarified in 4., the σ values are meant to denote hierarchical components of the composite standard deviation; we have updated our notation to use lower case letter s instead for clarity.

      (21) Page 10: your formula states "𝜎<sub>𝑠𝑢𝑏𝑗</sub>~ 𝙽(0, 0.5^2)". This conflicts with your previous mention that \sigmas are noise "levels" are they the noise patterns themselves now? Variances cannot be normally distributed, as they cannot be negative.

      As clarified in 4., the σ values are meant to denote hierarchical components of the composite standard deviation; we have updated our notation to use lower case letter s instead for clarity.

      (22) Page 13: What was the task of the subject in the Memory retrieval task? Old/new judgements relative to encoding of object perception?

      We apologize for the lack of clarity about the Memory Retrieval task and have added that information and clarified that the old/new judgements were relative to a separate encoding phase, the brain data for which has been reported elsewhere.

      Page 14. “Memory Retrieval took place one day after Memory Encoding and involved testing participants’ memory of the objects seen in the Encoding phase. Neural data during the Encoding phase has been reported elsewhere. In the main Memory Retrieval task, participants were presented with 144 labels of real-world objects, of which 114 were labels for previously seen objects and 30 were unrelated novel distractors. Participants performed old/new judgements, as well as their confidence in those judgements on a four-point scale (1 = Definitely New, 2 = Probably New, 3 = Probably Old, 4 = Definitely Old)”.

      (23) Page 13: If "Memory Retrieval consisted of three scanning runs", then some of the stimulus x stimulus correlations for the RSM must have been calculated within a run and some between runs, correct? Given that all within-run estimates share a common baseline, they share some dependence. Was there a systematic difference between the within-run and the between-run correlations?

      We have clarified in this portion of the methods that within run comparisons were excluded from our analyses. We also double-checked that the within-run exclusion was included in the description of the Neural RSMs.

      Page 14. “Retrieval consisted of three scanning runs, each with 38 trials, lasting approximately 9 minutes and 12 seconds (within-run comparisons were later excluded from RSA analyses)”.

      Page 18. “This was done by vectorizing the voxel-level activation values within each region and calculating their correlations using Pearson’s r, excluding all within-run comparisons.”

      (24) Page 20: It is not clear why the mean estimate of "representational strength" (i.e., model-brain RSM correlations) is important at all. This comes back to Major point #2, namely that you are trying to solve a very different problem from model-comparative RSA.

      We have clarified that our approach is not an alternative to model-comparative RSA, and that depending on the task constraints researchers may choose to compare models with tRSA or other approaches requiring stimulus repetition (see 3).

      (25) Page 21: I believe the problems of simulating correlation matrices directly in the way that the authors in their first simulation did should be well known and should be moved to an appendix at best. Better yet, the authors could start with the correct simulation right away.

      We agree the paper is more concise with these simulations being moved to the appendix and more briefly discussed. We have implemented these changes (Appendix 1). However, we are not certain that this problem is unknown, and have several anecdotes of researchers inquiring about this “alternative” approach in talks with colleagues, thus we do still discuss the issues with this method.

      (26) Page 26: Is the "underlying continuous noise variable 𝜎𝑡𝑟𝑖𝑎𝑙 that was measured by 𝑣𝑚𝑒𝑎𝑠𝑢𝑟𝑒𝑑 " the variance of the noise pattern or the noise pattern itself? What does it mean it was "measured" - how?

      𝜎𝑡𝑟𝑖𝑎𝑙 is a vector of standard deviations for different trials, and 𝜎𝑡𝑟𝑖𝑎𝑙 i would be used to generate the noise patterns for trial i. v_measured is a hypothetical measurement of trial-level variability, such as “memorability” or “heartbeat variability”. We have revised our description to clarify our methods.

      Reviewer #2 (Recommendations for the authors):

      (8) It would be helpful to provide more clarity earlier on in the manuscript on what is a 'trial': in my experience, a row or column of the RDM is usually referred to as 'stimulus condition', which is typically estimated on multiple trials (instances or repeats) of that stimulus condition (or exemplars from that stimulus class) being presented to the subject. Here, a 'trial' is both one measurement (i.e., single, individual presentation of a stimulus) and also an entry in the RDM, but is this the most typical scenario for cRSA? There is a section in the Discussion that discusses repetitions, but I would welcome more clarity on this from the get-go.

      We have added discussion of stimulus repetition methods and datasets to the Introduction and clarified our use of the terms.

      Page 8. “Critically, in single-presentation designs, a “trial” refers to one stimulus presentation, and corresponds to a row or column in the RSM. In studies with repeated stimuli, these rows are often called “conditions” and may reflect aggregated patterns across trials. tRSA is compatible with both cases: whether rows represent individual trials or averaged trials that create “conditions”, tRSA estimates are computed at the row level”.

      (9) The quality of the results figures can be improved. For example, axes labels are hard to read in Figure 3A/B, panels 3C/D are hard to read in general. In Figure 7E, it's not possible to identify the 'dark red' brain regions in addition to the light red ones.

      We thank the reviewer for raising these and have edited the figures to be more readable in the manner suggested.

      (10) I would be interested to see a comparison between tRSA and cRSA in other fMRI (or other modality) datasets that have been extensively reported in the literature. These could be the original Kriegeskorte 96 stimulus monkey/fMRI datasets, commonly used open datasets in visual perception (e.g., THINGS, NSD), or the above-mentioned King et al. dataset, which has been analyzed in various papers.

      We recognize the great utility of replication from other research groups and do invite researchers to utilize tRSA on their datasets.

      (11) On P39, the authors suggest 'researchers can confidently replace their existing cRSA analysis with tRSA': Please discuss/comment on how researchers should navigate the choice of modeling parameters in tRSA's linear mixed effects setting.

      We have added discussion of the mixed-effects parameters and the various and encourage researchers to follow best practices for their model selection.

      Page 46. “However, researchers should always consider if their models match the goals of their analysis, including 1) constructing the random effects structure that will converge in their dataset and 2) testing their model fits against alternative structures (Meteyard & Davies, 2020; Park et al., 2020) and 3) considering which effects should be considered random or fixed depending on their research question”.

      (12) The final part of the Results section, demonstrating the tRSA results for the continuous memorability factor in the real fMRI data, could benefit from some substantiation/elaboration. It wasn't clear to me, for example, to what extent the observed significant association between representational strength and item memorability in this dataset is to be 'believed'; the Discussion section (p38). Was there any evidence in the original paper for this association? Or do we just assume this is likely true in the brain, based on prior literature by e.g. Bainbridge et al (who probably did not use tRSA but rather classic methods)?

      Indeed, memorability effects have been replicated in the literature, but not using the tRSA method. We have expanded our discussion to clarify the relationship of our findings and the relevant literature and methods it has employed.

      Page 38. “Critically, memorability is a robust stimulus property that is consistent across participants and paradigms (Bainbridge, 2022). Moreover, object memorability effects have been replicated using a variety of methods aside from tRSA, including univariate analyses and representational analyses of neural activity patterns where trial-level neural activity pattern estimates are correlated directly with object memorability (Slayton et al, 2025).”

      (13) The abstract could benefit from more nuance; I'm not sure if RSA can indeed be said to be 'the principal method', and whether it's about assessing 'quality' of representations (more commonly, the term 'geometry' or 'structure' is used).

      We have edited the abstract to reflect the true nuisance in the current approaches.

      Abstract. Neural representation refers to the brain activity that stands in for one’s cognitive experience, and in cognitive neuroscience, a prominent method of studying neural representations is representational similarity analysis (RSA). While there are several recent advances in RSA, the classic RSA (cRSA) approach examines the structure of representations across numerous items by assessing the correspondence between two representational similarity matrices (RSMs): usually one based on a theoretical model of stimulus similarity and the other based on similarity in measured neural data.

      (14) RSA is also not necessarily about models vs. neural data; it can also be between two neural systems (e.g., monkey vs. human as in Kriegeskorte et al., 2008) or model systems (see Sucholutsky et al., 2023). This statement is also repeated in the Introduction paragraph 1 (later on, it is correctly stated that comparing brain vs. model is most likely the 'most common' approach).

      We have added these examples in our introduction to RSA.

      Page 3.”One of the central approaches for evaluating information represented in the brain is representational similarity analysis (RSA), an analytical approach that queries the representational geometry of the brain in terms of its alignment with the representational geometry of some cognitive model (Kriegeskorte et al., 2008; Kriegeskorte & Kievit, 2013), or, in some cases, compares the representational geometry of two neural systems (e.g., Kriegeskorte et al., 2008) or two model systems (Sucholutsky et al., 2023)”.

      (15) 'theoretically appropriate' is an ambiguous statement, appropriate for what theory?

      We apologize for the ambiguous wording, and have corrected the text:

      Page 11. “Critically, tRSA estimates were submitted to a mixed-effects model which is statistically appropriate for modeling the hierarchical structure of the data, where observations are nested within both subjects and stimuli (Baayen et al., 2008; Chen et al., 2021)”.

      (16) I found the statement that cRSA "cannot model representation at the level of individual trials" confusing, as it made me think, what prohibits one from creating an RDM based on single-trial responses? Later on, I understood that what the authors are trying to say here (I think) is that cRSA cannot weigh the contributions of individual rows/columns to the overall representational strength differently.

      We thank the reviewer for their clarifying language and have added it to this section of the manuscript.

      “Abstract. However, because cRSA cannot weigh the contributions of individual trials (RSM rows/columns), it is fundamentally limited in its ability to assess subject-, stimulus-, and trial-level variances that all influence representation”.

      (17) Why use "RSM" instead of "RDM"? If the pairwise comparison metric is distance-based (e..g, 1-correlation as described by the authors), RDM is more appropriate.

      We apologize for the error, and have clarified the Methods text:

      Page3-4. First, brain activity responses to a series of N trials are compared against each other (typically using Pearson’s r) to form an N×N representational similarity matrix.

      (18) Figure 2: please write 'Correlation estimate' in the y-axis label rather than 'Estimate'.

      We have edited the label in Figure 2.

      (19) Page 6 'leaving uncertain the directionality of any findings' - I do not follow this argument. Obviously one can generate an RDM or RSM from vector v or vector -v. How does that invalidate drawing conclusions where one e.g., partials out the (dis)similarity in e.g., pleasantness ratings out of another RDM/RSM of interest?

      We agree such an approach does not invalidate the partial method; we have clarified what we mean by “directionality”.

      Page 8. ”For instance, even though a univariate random variable , such as pleasantness ratings, can be conveniently converted to an RSM using pairwise distance metrics (Weaverdyck et al., 2020), the very same RSM would also be derived from the opposite random variable , leaving uncertain of the directionality (or if representation is strongest for pleasant or unpleasant items) of any findings with the RSM (see also Bainbridge & Rissman, 2018)”.

      (20) P7 'sampled 19900 pairs of values from a bi-variate normal distribution', but the rows/columns in an RDM are not independent samples - shouldn't this be included in the simulation? I.e., shouldn't you simulate first the n=200 vectors, and then draw samples from those, as in the next analysis?

      This section has been moved to Appendix 1 (see responses to Reviewer 1.13).

      (21) Under data acquisition, please state explicitly that the paper is re-using data from prior experiments, rather than collecting data anew for validating tRSA.

      We have clarified this in the data acquisition section.

      Page 13. “A pre-existing dataset was analyzed to evaluate tRSA. Main study findings have been reported elsewhere (S. Huang, Bogdan, et al., 2024)”.

      (22) Figure 4 could benefit from some more explanation in-text. It wasn't clear to me, for example, how to interpret the asterisks depicted in the right part of the figure.

      We clarified the meaning of the asterisks in the main text in addition to the existent text in the figure caption.

      Page 26. “see Figure 4, off-diagonal cells in blue; asterisks indicate where tRSA was statistically more sensitive then cRSA)”.

      (23) Page 38 "the outcome of tRSA's improved characterization can be seen in multiple empirical outcomes:" it seems there is one mention of 'outcomes' too many here.

      We have revised this sentence.

      Page 41. “tRSA's improved characterization can be seen in multiple empirical outcomes”.

      (24) Page 38 "model fits became the strongest" it's not clear what aspect of the reported results in the paragraph before this is referring to - the Appendix?

      Yes, the model fits are in the Appendix, we have added this in text citation.

      Moreover, model-fits became the strongest when the models also incorporated trial-level variables such as fMRI run and reaction time (Appendix 3, Table 6).

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      Diedrichsen, J., & Kriegeskorte, N. (2017). Representational models: A common framework for understanding encoding, pattern-component, and representational-similarity analysis. PLoS Computational Biology, 13(4), e1005508.

      Diedrichsen, J., Yokoi, A., & Arbuckle, S. A. (2018). Pattern component modeling: A flexible approach for understanding the representational structure of brain activity patterns. NeuroImage, 180, 119-133.

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    2. Reviewer #2 (Public review):

      This paper proposes two changes to classic RSA, a popular method to probe neural representation in neuroimaging experiments: computing RSA at row/column level of RDM, and using linear mixed modeling to compute second level statistics, using the individual row/columns to estimate a random effect of stimulus. The benefit of the new method is demonstrated using simulations and a re-analysis of a prior fMRI dataset on object perception and memory encoding.

      The author's claim that tRSA is a promising approach to perform more complete modeling of cogneuro data, and to conceptualize representation at the single trial/event level (cf Discussion section on P42), is appealing.

      In their revised manuscript, the authors have addressed some previous concerns, now referencing more literature aiming to improve RSA and its associated statistical inferences, and providing more guidance on methodological considerations in the Discussion. However, I wish the authors had more extensively edited the Introduction to better contextualize the work and clarify the specific settings in which they see the method as being beneficial over classic RSA. For example, some of the limitations of cRSA mentioned on page 6, e.g. related to presenting the same stimuli to multiple subjects, seem to be quite specific to settings where the researcher expects differential responses across subjects to fundamentally alter the interpretation, rather than something that will just average out by repeatedly offering the same stimulus, or combining data across subjects. It's not clear to me how the switch from 'matrix-level' to 'row-level' analysis in tRSA necessarily addresses this problem. I would be very helpful if the authors would more explicitly outline what problem the row-level aspect of tRSA is solving; what problem statistical inference via LMM is solving; and walk the reader through a very specific use case (perhaps a toy version of the real-data experiment which is now at the end of the paper). Explaining the utility of tRSA for experimental settings in which assessing representational strength for a single-events is crucial would clarify the contribution of this new method better.

      A few weaknesses mentioned in my previous review were not adequately addressed. To demonstrate the utility of the method on real neural recordings, only a single dataset is used with a quite complicated experimental design; it's not clear if there is any benefit of using tRSA on a simpler real dataset. Moreover, the cells of an RDM/RSM reflect pairwise comparisons between response patterns. Because the response patterns are repeatedly compared, the cells of this matrix are not independent of one another. While the authors show examples that failure to meet independence assumptions do not affect results in their specific dataset, it does not get acknowledged as a problem at a more fundamental level. Finally, while the paper now states that 'simulations and example tRSA code' are publicly available, the link points to the lab's general github page containing many lab repositories, in which I could not identify a specific repository related to this paper. This is disappointing given that the main goal of this manuscript is to provide a new method that they encourage others to use; a clear pointer to available code is only a minimal requirement to achieve that goal. A dedicated repository, including documentation, READMEs and tutorials/demo's to run simulations, compare methods, etc. would greatly enhance the paper's contribution.

    3. eLife Assessment

      This study proposes a potentially useful improvement on a popular fMRI method for quantifying representational similarity in brain measurements by focusing on representational strength at the single trial level and adding linear mixed effects modeling for group-level inference. The manuscript provides solid evidence of increased sensitivity with no loss of precision compared to more classic versions of the method. However, several assumptions are insufficiently motivated, and it is unclear to what extent the approach would generalize to other paradigms.

    1. eLife Assessment

      This is an important study that provides compelling data from a diverse set of approaches from single cell transcriptome data and network analysis from genetically diverse mouse cells to identify novel driver genes underlying human GWAS associations. The authors present evidence that network analysis of scRNA-seq data from genetically diverse mouse bone-marrow derived stromal cells can be informative for identifying human BMD GWAS driver genes. Their approach should be broadly used and applicable to other GWAS studies.

    2. Reviewer #1 (Public review):

      In this manuscript, Dillard and colleagues integrate cross-species genomic data with a systems approach to identify potential driver genes underlying human GWAS loci and establish the cell type(s) within which these genes act and potentially drive disease.

      Specifically, they utilize a large single cell RNA-seq (scRNA-seq) dataset from an osteogenic cell culture model - bone marrow-derived stromal cells cultured under osteogenic conditions (BMSC-OBs) - from a genetically diverse outbred mouse population called the Diversity Outbred (DO) stock to discover network driver genes that likely underlie human bone mineral density (BMD) GWAS loci. The DO mice segregate over 40M single nucleotide variants, many of which affect gene expression levels, therefore making this an ideal population for systems genetic and co-expression analyses.

      The current study builds on previous published work from the same group that used co-expression analysis to identify co-expressed "modules" of genes that were enriched for BMD GWAS associations. In this study, the authors utilized a much larger scRNA-seq dataset from 80 DO BMSC-OBs, inferred co-expression based on Bayesian networks for each identified mesenchymal cell type, focused on networks with dynamic expression trajectories that are most likely driving differentiation of BMSC-OBs, and then prioritized genes ("differentiation driver genes" or DDGs) in these osteogenic differentation networks that had known expression or splicing QTLs (eQTL/sQTLs) in any GTEx tissue that co-localized with human BMD GWAS loci. The systems analysis is impressive, the experimental methods are described in detail, and the experiments appear to be carefully done. The computational analysis of the single cell data is comprehensive and thorough, and the evidence presented in support of the identified DDGs, including Tpx2 and Fgfrl1, is for the most part convincing. Some limitations in the data resources and methods hamper enthusiasm somewhat and are discussed below.

      Overall, while this study will no doubt be valuable to the BMD community, the cross-species data integration and analytical framework may be more valuable and generally applicable to the study of other diseases, especially for diseases with robust human GWAS data but for which robust human genomic data in relevant cell types is lacking.

      Specific strengths of the study include the large scRNA-seq dataset on BMSC-OBs from 80 DO mice, the clustering analysis to identify specific cell types and sub-types, the comparison of cell type frequencies across the DO mice, and the CELLECT analysis to prioritize cell clusters that are enriched for BMD heritability (Figure 1). The network analysis pipeline outlined in Figure 2 is also a strength, as is the pseudotime trajectory analysis (results in Figure 3).

      Potential drawbacks of the authors' approach include their focus on genes that were previously identified as having an eQTL or sQTL in any GTEx tissue. The authors rightly point out that the GTEx database does not contain data for bone tissue, but reason that eQTLs can be shared across many tissues - this assumption is valid for many cis-eQTLs, but it could also exclude many genes as potential DDGs with effects that are specific to bone/osteoblasts. Indeed, the authors show that important BMD driver genes have cell-type specific eQTLs. Another issue concerns potential model overfitting in the iterativeWGCNA analysis of mesenchymal cell type-specific co-expression, which identified an average of 76 co-expression modules per cell cluster (range 26-153). Based on the limited number of genes that are detected as expressed in a given cell due to sparse per cell read depth (400-6200 reads/cell) and drop outs, it's surprising that as many as 153 co-expression modules could be distinguished within any cell cluster. I would suspect some degree of model overfitting is responsible for these results.

      Overall, though, these concerns are minor relative to the many strengths of the study design and results. Indeed, I expect the analytical framework employed by the authors here will be valuable to -- and replicated by -- researchers in other disease areas.

      Comments on revisions:

      Thank you for addressing my concerns. This is an impressive study and manuscript that you should be proud of.

    3. Reviewer #2 (Public review):

      Summary:

      In this manuscript, Farber and colleagues have performed single cell RNAseq analysis on bone marrow derived stem cells from DO Mice. By performing network analysis, they look for driver genes that are associated with bone mineral density GWAS associations. They identify two genes as potential candidates to showcase the utility of this approach.

      Strengths:

      The study is very thorough and the approach is innovative and exciting. The manuscript contains some interesting data relating to how cell differentiation is occurring and the effects of genetics on this process. The section looking for genes with eQTLs that differ across the differentiation trajectory (Figure 4) was particularly exciting.

      Weaknesses:

      The manuscript is, in parts, hard to read due to the use of acronyms and there are some questions about data analysis that still need to be addressed.

      Comments on revisions:

      Dillard et al have made several improvements to their manuscript.

      (1) We previously asked the authors to determine whether any cell types were enriched for BMD-related traits since the premise of the paper is that 'many genes impacting BMD do so by influencing osteogenic differentiation or ... adipogenic differentiation'. Given the potential for the cell culture method to skew the cell type distribution non-physiologically, it is important to establish which cell types in their assay are most closely associated with BMD traits. The new CELLECT analysis and Figure 1E address this point nicely. However, it would still be nice to see the correlations between these cell types and BMD traits in the mice as this would provide independent evidence to support their physiological importance more broadly.

      (2) Shortening the introduction.

      (3) Addressing limitations that arise from not accounting for founder genome SNPs when aligning scRNA-seq data.

      (4) The main take-away of this paper is, to us, the development of a single cell approach to studying BMD-related traits. It is encouraging that the cells post-culture appear to be representative of those pre-culture (supplemental figure 3).

      However, the authors seem to have neglected several comments made by both reviewers. While we share the authors' enthusiasm for the single cell analytical approach, we do not understand their reluctance to perform further statistical tests. We feel that the following comments have still not been addressed:

      (1) The manuscript still contains the following:

      "To provide further support that tradeSeq-identified genes are involved in differentiation, we performed a cell type-specific expression quantitative trait locus (eQTL) analysis for each mesenchymal cell type from the 80 DO mice. We identified 563 genes (eGenes) regulated by a significant cis-eQTL in specific cell types of the BMSC-OB scRNA-seq data (Supplementary Table S14). In total, 73 eGenes were also tradeSeq-identified genes in one or more cell type boundaries along their respective trajectories (Supplementary Table S9)."

      The purpose of this paragraph is to convince readers that the eGenes approach aligns with the tradeSeq approach (and that their approach can therefore be trusted). It is essential that such claims are supported by statistical reasoning. Given that it would be very simple to perform permutation/enrichment analyses to address this point, and both reviewers requested similar analyses, we do not understand the author's reluctance here. Otherwise, this section should be rewritten so that it does not imply that the identification of these genes provides support for their approach.

      (2) Given that a central purpose of this manuscript is to establish a systematic workflow for identifying candidate genes, the manuscript could still benefit from more explanation as to why the authors chose to highlight Tpx2 and Fgfrl1. Tpx2 does already have a role in bone physiology through the IMPC. The authors should comment on why they did not explore Kremen1, for instance, as this gene seems important for the transition to both OB1 and 2.

      A final minor comment is that it would be very helpful if the authors could indicate if the DDGs in Table 1 are also eGenes for the relevant cell type. This is much more meaningful than looking through GTEx.

    4. Author response:

      The following is the authors’ response to the original reviews.

      Reviewer #1 (Public review): 

      In this manuscript, Dillard and colleagues integrate cross-species genomic data with a systems approach to identify potential driver genes underlying human GWAS loci and establish the cell type(s) within which these genes act and potentially drive disease. Specifically, they utilize a large single-cell RNA-seq (scRNA-seq) dataset from an osteogenic cell culture model - bone marrow-derived stromal cells cultured under osteogenic conditions (BMSC-OBs) - from a genetically diverse outbred mouse population called the Diversity Outbred (DO) stock to discover network driver genes that likely underlie human bone mineral density (BMD) GWAS loci. The DO mice segregate over 40M single nucleotide variants, many of which affect gene expression levels, therefore making this an ideal population for systems genetic and co-expression analyses. The current study builds on previously published work from the same group that used co-expression analysis to identify co-expressed "modules" of genes that were enriched for BMD GWAS associations. In this study, the authors utilize a much larger scRNA-seq dataset from 80 DO BMSC-OBs, infer co-expression-based and Bayesian networks for each identified mesenchymal cell type, focused on networks with dynamic expression trajectories that are most likely driving differentiation of BMSC-OBs, and then prioritized genes ("differentiation driver genes" or DDGs) in these osteogenic differentiation networks that had known expression or splicing QTLs (eQTL/sQTLs) in any GTEx tissue that colocalized with human BMD GWAS loci. The systems analysis is impressive, the experimental methods are described in detail, and the experiments appear to be carefully done. The computational analysis of the single-cell data is comprehensive and thorough, and the evidence presented in support of the identified DDGs, including Tpx2 and Fgfrl1, is for the most part convincing. Some limitations in the data resources and methods hamper enthusiasm somewhat and are discussed below. Overall, while this study will no doubt be valuable to the BMD community, the cross-species data integration and analytical framework may be more valuable and generally applicable to the study of other diseases, especially for diseases with robust human GWAS data but for which robust human genomic data in relevant cell types is lacking. 

      Specific strengths of the study include the large scRNA-seq dataset on BMSC-OBs from 80 DO mice, the clustering analysis to identify specific cell types and sub-types, the comparison of cell type frequencies across the DO mice, and the CELLECT analysis to prioritize cell clusters that are enriched for BMD heritability (Figure 1). The network analysis pipeline outlined in Figure 2 is also a strength, as is the pseudotime trajectory analysis (results in Figure 3). One weakness involves the focus on genes that were previously identified as having an eQTL or sQTL in any GTEx tissue. The authors rightly point out that the GTEx database does not contain data for bone tissue, but the reason that eQTLs can be shared across many tissues - this assumption is valid for many cis-eQTLs, but it could also exclude many genes as potential DDGs with effects that are specific to bone/osteoblasts. Indeed, the authors show that important BMD driver genes have cell-type-specific eQTLs. Furthermore, the mesenchymal cell type-specific co-expression analysis by iterative WGCNA identified an average of 76 co-expression modules per cell cluster (range 26-153). Based on the limited number of genes that are detected as expressed in a given cell due to sparse per-cell read depth (400-6200 reads/cell) and dropouts, it's hard to believe that as many as 153 co-expression modules could be distinguished within any cell cluster. I would suspect some degree of model overfitting here and would expect that many/most of these identified modules have very few gene members, but the methods list a minimum module size of 20 genes. How do the numbers of modules identified in this study compare to other published scRNA-seq studies that use iterative WGCNA? 

      In the section "Identification of differentiation driver genes (DDGs)", the authors identified 408 significant DDGs and found that 49 (12%) were reported by the International Mouse Knockout [sic] Consortium (IMPC) as having a significant effect on whole-body BMD when knocked out in mice. Is this enrichment significant? E.g., what is the background percentage of IMPC gene knockouts that show an effect on whole-body BMD? Similarly, they found that 21 of the 408 DDGs were genes that have BMD GWAS associations that colocalize with GTEx eQTLs/sQTLs. Given that there are > 1,000 BMD GWAS associations, is this enrichment (21/408) significant? Recommend performing a hypergeometric test to provide statistical context to the reported overlaps here. 

      We thank the reviewer for their constructive feedback and thoughtful questions. In regards to the iterativeWGCNA, a larger number of modules is sometimes an outcome of the analysis, as reported in the iterativeWGCNA preprint (Greenfest-Allen et al., 2017). While we did not make a comparison to other works leveraging this tool for scRNA-seq, it has been used broadly across other published studies, such as PMID: 39640571, 40075303, 33677398, 33653874. While model overfitting, as you mention, may be a cause for more modules, our Bayesian network analysis we perform after iterativeWGCNA highlights smaller aspects of coexpression modules, as opposed to focusing on the entirety of any given module.

      We did not perform enrichment or statistical tests as our goal was to simply highlight attributes or unique features of these genes for additional context.

      Reviewer #2 (Public review): 

      Summary: 

      In this manuscript, Farber and colleagues have performed single-cell RNAseq analysis on bone marrow-derived stem cells from DO Mice. By performing network analysis, they look for driver genes that are associated with bone mineral density GWAS associations. They identify two genes as potential candidates to showcase the utility of this approach. 

      Strengths: 

      The study is very thorough and the approach is innovative and exciting. The manuscript contains some interesting data relating to how cell differentiation is occurring and the effects of genetics on this process. The section looking for genes with eQTLs that differ across the differentiation trajectory (Figure 4) was particularly exciting. 

      Weaknesses: 

      The manuscript is in parts hard to read due to the use of acronyms and there are some questions about data analysis that need to be addressed. 

      We thank the reviewer for their feedback and shared enthusiasm for our work. We tried to minimize the use of technical acronyms as much as we could without compromising readability. Additionally, we addressed questions regarding aspects of data analysis. 

      Reviewer #1 (Recommendations for the authors):

      (1) For increased transparency and to allow reproducibility, it would be necessary for the scripts used in the analysis to be shared along with the publication of the preprint. Also, where feasible, sharing the processed data in addition to the raw data would allow the community greater access to the results and be highly beneficial. 

      Thank you for this suggestion. The raw data will be available via GEO accession codes listed in the data availability statement. We will make available scripts for some analyses on our Github (https://github.com/Farber-Lab/DO80_project) and processed scRNA-seq data in a Seurat object (.rds) on Zenodo (https://zenodo.org/records/15299631)

      (2) Lines 55-76: I think the summary of previous work here is too long. I understand that they would like to cover what has been done previously, but this seems like overkill. 

      Good suggestion. We have streamlined some of the summary of our previous work.

      (3) Did the authors try to map QTL for cell-type proportion differences in their BMSC-OBs? While 80 samples certainly limit mapping power, the data shown in Figs 4C/D suggest that you might identify a large-effect modifier of LMP/OB1 proportions. 

      We did try to map QTL for cell type proportion differences, but no significant associations were identified. 

      (4) Methods question: Does the read alignment method used in your analysis account for SNPs/indels that segregate among the DO/CC founder strains? If not, the authors may wish to include this in their discussion of study limitations and speculate on how unmapped reads could affect expression results. 

      The read alignment method we used does not account for SNPs/indels from the DO founder strains that fall in RNA transcripts captured in the scRNA-seq data. We have included this as a limitation in our discussion (line 422-424). 

      (5) Much of the discussion reads as an overview of the methods, while a discussion of the results and their context to the existing BMD literature is relatively lacking in comparison.

      We have added additional explanation of the results and context to the discussion (line 381-382, 396-407). 

      (6) Figure 1E and lines 146-149: Adjusted p values should be reported in the figure and accompanying text instead of switching between unadjusted and adjusted p values. 

      We updated Figure 1e to portray adjusted p-values, listed the adjusted p-values in legend of Figure 1e, and listed them in the main text (line 153-154).

      (7) Why do the authors bring the IMPC KO gene list into the analysis so late? This seems like a highly relevant data resource (moreso than the GTEx eQTLs/sQTLs) that could have been used much earlier to help identify DDGs. 

      Given that our scRNA-seq data is also from mice, we did choose to integrate information from the IMPC to highlight supplemental features of genes in networks (i.e., genes that have an experimentally-tested and significant effect on BMD in mice). However, our primary goal was to inform human GWAS and leverage our previous work in which we identified colocalizations between human BMD GWAS and eQTL/sQTL in a human GTEx tissue, which is why this information was used to guide our network analysis.

      (8) Does Fgfrl1 and/or Tpx2 have a cis-eQTL in your BMSC-OB scRNA-seq dataset? 

      We did not identify cis-eQTL effects for Fgfrl1 and Tpx2.

      (9) Figure 4B-C: These eQTLs may be real, but based on the diplotype patterns in Figure 4C, I suspect they are artifacts of low mapping power that are driven by rare genotype classes with one or two samples having outlier expression results. For example, if you look at the results in Fig 4C for S100a1 expression, the genotype classes with the highest/lowest expression have lower sample numbers. In the case of Pkm eQTL showing a PWK-low effect, the PWK genome has many SNPs that differ from the reference genome in the 3' UTR of this gene, and I wonder if reads overlapping these SNPs are not aligning correctly (see point 4 above) and resulting (falsely) in lower expression values for samples with a PWK haplotype. 

      As mentioned above, our alignment method did not consider DO founder genetic variation that is specifically located in the 3’ end of RNA transcripts in the scRNA-seq data. We have included this as a limitation in our discussion (line 422-424).

      In future studies, we intend to include larger populations of mice to potentially overcome, as you mention, any artifacts that may be attributable to low statistical power, rare genotype classes, or outlier expression.

      Reviewer #2 (Recommendations for the authors):

      Major Points 

      (1) The authors hypothesize "that many genes impacting BMD do so by influencing osteogenic differentiation or possibly bone marrow adipogenic differentiation". However, cell type itself does not correlate with any bone trait. Does this indicate that the hypothesis is not entirely correct, as genes that drive these phenotypes would not be enriched in one particular cell type? The authors have previously identified "high-priority target genes". So, are there any cell types that are enriched for these target genes? If not, this would indicate that all these genes are more ubiquitously expressed and this is probably why they would have a greater effect on the overall bone traits. Furthermore, are the 73 eGenes (so genes with eQTLs in a particular cell type that change around cell type boundaries) or the DDGs (Table 1) enriched for these high-priority target genes? 

      The bone traits measured in the DO mice are complex and impacted by many factors, including the differentiation propensity and abundance of certain cell types, both within and outside of bone. Though we did not identify correlations between cell type abundance and the bone traits we measured, we tailored our investigations to focus on cellular differentiation using the scRNA-seq data. However, future studies would need to be performed to investigate any connections between cellular differentiation, cell type abundance, and bone traits.

      We did not perform enrichment analyses of either the target genes identified from our other work or eGenes identified here, but instead used the target gene list to center our network analysis and the eGenes to showcase the utility of the DO mouse population.

      (2) The readability of the paper could be improved by minimising the use of acronyms and there are several instances of confusing wording throughout the paper. In many cases, this can be solved by re-organising sentences and adding a bit more detail. For example, it was unclear how you arrived at Fgfrl1 or Tpx2.

      One of the goals of our study was to identify genes that have (to our knowledge) little to no known connection to BMD. We chose to highlight Fgfrl1 and Tpx2 because there is minimal literature characterizing these genes in the context of bone, which we speak to in the results (line 296-297). Additionally, we prioritized these genes in our previous work and they were identified in this study by using our network analyses using the scRNA-seq data, which we mention in the results (line 276-279).

      (3) Technical aspects of the assay. In Figure 1d you show that the cell populations vary considerably between different DO mice. It would be useful to give some sense of the technical variance of this assay given that the assay involves culturing the cells in an exogenous environment. This could take the form of tests between mice within the same inbred strain, or even between different legs of the same DO mice to show that results are technically very consistent. It might also be prudent to identify that this is a potential limitation of the approach as in vitro culturing has the potential to substantially change the cell populations that are present. 

      We agree that in vitro culturing, in addition to the preparation of single cells for scRNA-seq, are unavoidable sources of technical variation in this study. However, the total number of cells contributed by each of the 80 DO mice after data processing does not appear to be skewed and the distribution appears normal (see added figures, now included as Supplemental Figure 3). Therefore, technical variation is at least consistent across all samples. Nevertheless, we have mentioned the potential for technical variation artifacts in our study in the discussion (line 414-416).

      (4) Need for permutation testing. "We identified 563 genes regulated by a significant eQTL in specific cell types. In total, 73 genes with eQTLs were also tradeSeq-identified genes in one or more cell type boundaries". These types of statements are fine but they need to be backed up with permutation testing to show that this level of enrichment is greater than one would expect by chance. 

      We did not perform enrichment tests as our only goal was to 1. determine if eQTL could be resolved in the DO mouse population using our scRNA-seq data and 2. predict in what cell type the associated eQTL and associated eGene may have an effect.

      (5) The main novelty of the paper seems to be that you have used single-cell RNA seq (given that you appear to have already detailed the candidates at the end). I don't think this makes the paper less interesting, but I think you need to reframe the paper more about the approach, and not the specific results. How you landed on these candidates is also not clear. So the paper might be improved by more robustly establishing the workflow and providing guidelines for how studies like this should be conducted in the future. 

      We sought to not only devise a rigorous approach to analyze our single cell data, but also showcase the utility of the approach in practice by highlighting targets for future research (i.e., Fgfrl1 and Tpx2).

      Our goal was to identify novel genes and we landed on these candidate genes (Fgfrl1 and Tpx2) because they had substantial data supporting their causality and they have yet to be fully characterized in the context of bone and BMD (line 295-297).

      In regards to establishing the workflow, we have included rationale for specific aspects of our approach throughout the paper. For example, Figure 2 itemizes each step of our network analysis and we explain why each step is utilized throughout various parts results (e.g., lines 168-170, 179-181, 191-193, 202-203, 257-260, 276-277).

      We have added a statement advocating for large-scale scRNA-seq from genetically diverse samples and network analyses for future studies (line 436-438).

      Minor Points 

      (1) In the summary you use the word "trajectory". Trajectories for what? I assume the transition between cell types, but this is not clear. 

      We added text to clarify the use of trajectory in the summary (line 34).

      (2) This sentence: "By 60 identifying networks enriched for genes implicated in GWAS we predicted putatively causal genes 61 for hundreds of BMD associations based on their membership in enriched modules." is also not clear. Do you mean: we predicted putatively causal genes by identifying clusters of co-expressed genes that were enriched for GWAS genes?" It is not clear how you identify the causal gene in the network. Is this just based on the hub gene? 

      The aforementioned sentence has since been removed to streamline the introduction, as suggested by Reviewer 1.

      In regards to causal gene identification, it is not based on whether it is hub gene. We prioritized a DDG (and their associated networks) if it was a causal gene that we identified in our previous work as having eQTL/sQTL in a GTEx tissue that colocalizes with human BMD GWAS.

      (3) Figure 3C. This is good but the labels are quite small. Would be good to make all the font sizes larger. 

      We have enlarged Figure 3C.

      (4) Line 341 in the Discussion should be "pseudotemporal". 

      We have edited “temporal” to “pseduotemporal”.

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    1. eLife Assessment

      This study presents a valuable finding on the neural representation of time from two distinct egocentric and allocentric reference frames. The evidence is solid and largely supports the hypothesis, with one caveat that the task differences could impact the observed effects. The work will be of interest to cognitive neuroscientists working on the perception and memory of time.

    2. Reviewer #1 (Public review):

      Summary:

      In this fMRI study, the authors wished to assess neural mechanisms supporting flexible temporal construals. For this, human participants learned a story consisting of fifteen events. During fMRI, events were shown to them, and participants were instructed to consider the event from "an internal" or from "an external" perspective. The authors found distinct patterns of brain activity in the posterior parietal cortex (PPC) and anterior hippocampus for the internal and the external viewpoint. Specifically, activation in the posterior parietal cortex positively correlated with distance during the external-perspective task, but negatively during the internal-perspective task. The anterior hippocampus positively correlated with distance in both perspectives. The authors conclude that allocentric sequences are stored in the hippocampus, whereas egocentric sequences are supported by the parietal cortex.

      Strengths:

      The research topic is fascinating, and very few labs in the world are asking the question of how time is represented in the human brain. Working hypotheses have been recently formulated, and the work tackles them from the perspective of construals theory.

      Weaknesses:

      Although the work uses two distinct psychological tasks, the authors do not elaborate on the cognitive operationalization the tasks entail, nor the implication of the task design for the observed neural activation.

    3. Reviewer #2 (Public review):

      Summary:

      Xu et al. used fMRI to examine the neural correlates associated with retrieving temporal information from an external compared to internal perspective ('mental time watching' vs. 'mental time travel'). Participants first learned a fictional religious ritual composed of 15 sequential events of varying durations. They were then scanned while they either (1) judged whether a target event happened in the same part of the day as a reference event (external condition); or (2) imagined themselves carrying out the reference event and judged whether the target event occurred in the past or will occur in the future (internal condition). Behavioural data suggested that the perspective manipulation was successful: RT was positively correlated with sequential distance in the external perspective task, while a negative correlation was observed between RT and sequential distance for the internal perspective task. Neurally, the two tasks activated different regions, with the external task associated with greater activity in the supplementary motor area and supramarginal gyrus, and the internal condition with greater activity in default mode network regions. Of particular interest, only a cluster in the posterior parietal cortex demonstrated a significant interaction between perspective and sequential distance, with increased activity in this region for longer sequential distances in the external task but increased activity for shorter sequential distances in the internal task. Only a main effect of sequential distance was observed in the hippocampus head, with activity being positively correlated with sequential distance in both tasks. No regions exhibited a significant interaction between perspective and duration, although there was a main effect of duration in the hippocampus body with greater activity for longer durations, which appeared to be driven by the internal perspective condition. On the basis of these findings, the authors suggest that the hippocampus may represent event sequences allocentrically, whereas the posterior parietal cortex may process event sequences egocentrically.

      Strengths:

      The topic of egocentric vs. allocentric processing has been relatively under-investigated with respect to time, having traditionally been studied in the domain of space. As such, the current study is timely and has the potential to be important for our understanding of how time is represented in the brain in the service of memory. The study is well thought out and the behavioural paradigm is, in my opinion, a creative approach to tackling the authors' research question. A particular strength is the implementation of an imagination phase for the participants while learning the fictional religious ritual. This moves the paradigm beyond semantic/schema learning and is probably the best approach besides asking the participants to arduously enact and learn the different events with their exact timings in person. Importantly, the behavioural data point towards successful manipulation of internal vs. external perspective in participants, which is critical for the interpretation of the fMRI data. The use of syllable length as a sanity check for RT analyses as well as neuroimaging analyses is also much appreciated.

      Suggestions:

      The authors have done a commendable job addressing my previous comments. In particular, the additional analyses elucidating the potential contribution of boundary effects to the behavioural data, the impact of incorporating RT into the fMRI GLMs, and the differential contributions of RT and sequential distance to neural activity (i.e., in PPC) are valuable and strengthen the authors' interpretation of their findings.

      My one remaining suggestion pertains to the potential contribution of boundary effects. While the new analyses suggest that the RT findings are driven by sequential distance and duration independent of a boundary effect (i.e., Same vs. Different factor), I'm wondering whether the same applies to the neural findings? In other words, have the authors run a GLM in which the Same vs. Different factor is incorporated alongside distance and duration?

    4. Author response:

      The following is the authors’ response to the original reviews.

      Public Reviews:

      Reviewer #1 (Public review):

      Summary:

      In this fMRI study, the authors wished to assess neural mechanisms supporting flexible "temporal construals". For this, human participants learned a story consisting of fifteen events. During fMRI, events were shown to them, and they were instructed to consider the event from "an internal" or from "an external" perspective. The authors found opposite patterns of brain activity in the posterior parietal cortex and the anterior hippocampus for the internal and the external viewpoint. They conclude that allocentric sequences are stored in the hippocampus, whereas egocentric sequences are used in the parietal cortex. The claims align with previous fMRI work addressing this question.

      We appreciate the reviewer's concise summary of our research. We would like to offer two clarifications to prevent any potential misunderstandings.

      First, the activity patterns in the parietal cortex and hippocampus are not entirely opposite across internal and external perspectives. Specifically, the activation level in the posterior parietal cortex shows a positive correlation with sequential distance during external-perspective tasks, but a negative correlation during internal-perspective tasks. In contrast, the activation level in the anterior hippocampus positively correlates with sequential distance, irrespective of the observer's perspective. Therefore, our results suggest that the parietal cortex, with its perspective-dependent activity, supports egocentric representation; the hippocampus, with its consistent activity across perspectives, supports allocentric representation.

      Second, while some of our findings align with previous fMRI studies, to our knowledge, no prior research has explicitly investigated how the neural representation of time may vary depending on the observer's viewpoint. This gap in the literature is the primary motivation for our current study.

      Strengths:

      The research topic is fascinating, and very few labs in the world are asking the question of how time is represented in the human brain. Working hypotheses have been recently formulated, and this work seems to want to tackle some of them.

      We appreciate the reviewer's acknowledgment of the theoretical significance of our study.

      Weaknesses:

      The current writing is fuzzy both conceptually and experimentally. I cannot provide a sufficiently well-informed assessment of the quality of the experimental work because there is a paucity of details provided in the report. Any future revisions will likely improve transparency.

      (1) Improving writing and presentation:

      The abstract and the introduction make use of loaded terms such as "construals", "mental timeline", "panoramic views" in very metaphoric and unexplained ways. The authors do not provide a comprehensive and scholarly overview of these terms, which results in verbiage and keywords/name-dropping without a clear general framework being presented. Some of these terms are not metaphors. They do refer to computational concepts that the authors should didactically explain to their readership. This is all the more important that some statements in the Introduction are misattributed or factually incorrect; some statements lack attributions (uncited published work). Once the theory, the question, and the working hypothesis are clarified, the authors should carefully explain the task.

      We appreciate the reviewer's critics.

      The formulation of the scientific question in the introduction is grounded in the spatial construals of time hypothesis and conceptual metaphor theory (e.g., Traugott, 1978; Lakoff & Johnson, 1980; see recent reviews by Núñez & Cooperrider, 2013; Bender & Beller, 2014). These frameworks were originally developed through analyses of how spatial metaphors are used to describe temporal concepts in natural language. Consequently, it is theoretically motivated and largely unavoidable to introduce the two primary temporal construals—mental time travel and mental time watching— using metaphorical expressions.

      However, we do agree with the reviewer that the introduction in the original manuscript was overly long and that the working hypothesis was not clearly stated. In the revised manuscript, we have streamlined the introduction and substantially revised the following two paragraphs to clarify the formulation of our working hypothesis (Pages 5-6):

      “Recent studies have already begun to investigate the neural representation of the memorized event sequence (e.g., Deuker et al., 2016; Thavabalasingam et al., 2018; Bellmund et al., 2019, 2022; see reviews by Cohn-Sheehy & Ranganath, 2017; Bellmund et al., 2020). Yet, the neural mechanisms that enable the brain to construct distinct construals of an event sequence remain largely unknown. Valuable insights may be drawn from research in the spatial domain, which diPerentiates the neural representation in allocentric and egocentric reference frames. According to an influential neurocomputational model (Byrne et al., 2007; Bicanski & Burgess, 2018; Bicanski & Burgess, 2020), allocentric and egocentric spatial representations are dissociable in the brain—they are respectively implemented in the medial temporal lobe (MTL)—including the hippocampus—and the parietal cortex. Various egocentric representations in the parietal cortex derived from diPerent viewpoints can be transformed and integrated into a unified allocentric representation and stored in the MTL (i.e., bottom-up process). Conversely, the allocentric representation in the MTL can serve as a template for reconstructing diverse egocentric representations across diPerent viewpoints in the parietal cortex (i.e., top-down process).”

      “In line with the spatial construals of time hypothesis, several authors have recently suggested that such mutually engaged egocentric and allocentric reference frames (in the parietal cortex and the medial temporal lobe, respectively) proposed in the spatial domain might also apply to the temporal one (e.g., Gauthier & van Wassenhove, 2016ab; Gauthier et al., 2019, 2020; Bottini & Doeller, 2020). If this hypothesis holds, it could explain how the brain flexibly generates diverse construals of the same event sequence. Specifically, the hippocampus may encode a consistent representation of an event sequence that is independent of whether an individual adopts an internal or external perspective, reflecting an allocentric representation of time. In contrast, parietal cortical representations are expected to vary flexibly with the adopted perspective that is shaped by task demands, reflecting an egocentric representation of time.”

      In the revised manuscript, we also corrected statements in the Introduction that may have been misattributed (see Reviewer 2, comment 4(ii)) and added several relevant and important publications.

      (2) The experimental approach lacks sufficient details to be comprehensible to a general audience. In my opinion, the results are thus currently uninterpretable. I highlight only a couple of specific points (out of many). I recommend revision and clarification.

      (a) No explanation of the narrative is being provided. The authors report a distribution of durations with no clear description of the actual sequence of events. The authors should provide the text that was used, how they controlled for low-level and high-level linguistic confounds.

      We thank the reviewer for the suggestions. The event sequence for the odd-numbered participants is shown in the original Figure 1. In the revised manuscript, we added to Figure 1 the figure supplement 1 to illustrate the actual sequence of events for the participants with both odd and even numbers. We also added the narratives used in the reading phase of the learning procedures for the participants with both odd and even numbers (Figure 1—source data 1).

      To control for low-level linguistic confounds, we included the number of syllables as a covariate in the first-level general linear model in the fMRI analysis. To address high-level linguistic confounds, such as semantic information (which is difficult to quantify), we randomly assigned event labels to the 15 events twice, creating two counterbalanced versions for participants with even and odd numbers (see Comment 2b below).

      (b) The authors state, "we randomly assigned 15 phrases to the events twice". It is impossible to comprehend what this means. Were these considered stimuli? Controls? IT is also not clear which event or stimulus is part of the "learning set" and whether these were indicated to be such to participants.

      We apologize for any confusion in the Results section and the legend of Figure 1. Our motivation was explained in the "Stimuli" section of the Methods. In the revised manuscript, we have clarified this by adding an explanation to the legend of Figure 1 and including the supplementary Figure 1: " To minimize potential confounds between the semantic content of the event phrases and the temporal structure of the events, we randomly assigned the phrases to the events, creating two versions for participants with even and odd ID numbers. Both versions can be seen in Figure1—figure supplement 1 and Figure 1—source data 1."

      (c) The left/right counterbalancing is not being clearly explained. The authors state that there is counterbalancing, but do not sufficiently explain what it means concretely in the experiment. If a weak correlation exists between sequential position and distance, it also means that the position and the distance have not been equated within. How do the authors control for these?

      We thank the reviewer for highlighting this point and apologize for the lack of clarity in the original manuscript. In the current version (Page 40), we have provided further clarification: “We carefully selected two sets of 20 event pairs from the 210 possible combinations, assigning them to the odd and even runs of the fMRI experiment. Using a brute-force search, we identified 20 pairs in which sequential distance showed only weak correlations with positional information for both reference and target events (ranging from 1 to 15), as well as with behavioral responses (Same vs. Different or Future vs. Past, coded as 0 and 1), with all correlation coefficients below 0.2. At the same time, we balanced the proportion of correct responses across conditions: for the external-perspective task, Same/Different = 11/9 and 12/8; for the internal-perspective task, Future/Past = 12/8 and 8/12. Under these constraints, the sequential distances in both sets ranged from 1 to 5. To further mitigate spatial response biases, we pseudorandomized the left/right on-screen positions of the two response options within each task block, while ensuring an equal number of correct responses mapped to the left and right buttons (i.e., 10 per block).”

      The event pairs we selected already represent the best possible choice given all the criteria we aimed to satisfy. It is impossible to completely eliminate all potential correlations. For instance, if the target event occurs near the beginning of the day, it will tend to fall in the past, whereas if it occurs near the end of the day, it is more likely to fall in the future. To further ensure that the significant results were not driven by these weak confounding factors, we constructed another GLM that included three additional parametric modulators: the sequence position of the target event (ranging from 1 to 15) and the behavioral responses (Future vs. Past in the internal-perspective task; Same vs. Different in the external-perspective task, coded as 0 and 1). The significant findings were unaffected.

      (d) The authors used two tasks. In the "external perspective" one, the authors asked participants to report whether events were part of the same or a different part of the day. In the "internal perspective one", the authors asked participants to project themselves to the reference event and to determine whether the target event occurred before or after the projected viewpoint. The first task is a same/different recognition task. The second task is a temporal order task (e.g., Arzy et al. 2009). These two asks are radically different and do not require the same operationalization. The authors should minimally provide a comprehensive comparison of task requirements, their operationalization, and, more importantly, assess the behavioral biases inherent to each of these tasks that may confound brain activity observed with fMRI.

      We understand the reviewer’s concern. We agree that there is a substantial difference between the two tasks. However, the primary goal of this study was not to directly compare these tasks to isolate a specific cognitive component. Rather, the neural correlates of temporal distance were first identified as brain regions showing a significant correlation between neural activity and temporal distance using the parametric modulation analysis. We then compared these neural correlates between the two tasks. Therefore, any general differences between the tasks should not be a confound for our main results. Our aim was to examine whether the hippocampal representation of temporal distance remains consistent across different perspectives, and whether the parietal representation of temporal distance varies as a function of the perspective adopted.

      Therefore, the main aim of our task manipulation was to ensure that participants adopted either an external or an internal perspective on the event sequence, depending on the task condition. In the Introduction (Pages 6–7), we clarify this manipulation as follows: “In the externalperspective task, participants localized events with respect to external temporal boundaries, judging whether the target event occurred in the same or a different part of the day as the reference event. In the internal-perspective task, participants were instructed to mentally project themselves into the reference event and localize the target event relative to their own temporal point, judging whether the target event happened in the future or the past of the reference event (see Methods for details of the scanning procedure).”

      We believe this task manipulation was successful. Behaviorally, the two tasks showed opposite correlations between reaction time and temporal distance, resembling the symbolic distance versus mental scanning effect. Neurally, contrasting the internal- and external-perspective tasks revealed activation of the default mode network, which is known to play a central role in self-projection (Buckner et al., 2017).

      (e) The authors systematically report interpreted results, not factual data. For instance, while not showing the results on behavioral outcomes, the authors directly interpret them as symbolic distance effects.

      Thank you for this comment. In the original paper, we reported the relevant statistics before our interpretation: “Sequential Distance was correlated positively with RT in the external-perspective task (z = 3.80, p < 0.001) but negatively in the internal-perspective task (z = -3.71, p < 0.001).” However, they may have been difficult to notice, and we are including a figure for the RT analysis in the revised manuscript.

      Crucially, the authors do not comment on the obvious differences in task difficulty in these two tasks, which demonstrates a substantial lack of control in the experimental design. The same/different task (task 1 called "external perspective") comes with known biases in psychophysics that are not present in the temporal order task (task 2 called " internal perspective"). The authors also did not discuss or try to match the performance level in these two tasks. Accordingly, the authors claim that participants had greater accuracy in the external (same/different) task than in the internal task, although no data are shown and provided to support this report. Further, the behavioral effect is trivialized by the report of a performance accuracy trade off that further illustrates that there is a difference in the task requirements, preventing accurate comparison of the two tasks.

      As noted in Question 2d, we acknowledge the substantial difference between the two tasks. However, the primary goal of this study was not to directly compare these tasks to isolate a specific cognitive component. Instead, we first identified the neural correlates of temporal distance as brain regions showing a significant correlation between neural activity and temporal distance, independent of task demands. We then compared these neural correlates across the two task conditions, which were designed to engage different temporal perspectives. Therefore, any general differences between the tasks should not be a confound for our main findings and interpretation.

      Our aim was to investigate whether the hippocampal representation of temporal distance remains consistent across different perspectives and whether the parietal representation of temporal distance varies as a function of the perspective adopted. We do not see how this doubledissociation pattern could be explained by differences in task difficulty.

      While we do not consider the overall difference in task difficulty between the two tasks to be a confounding factor, we acknowledge the potential confound posed by variations in task difficulty across temporal distances (1 to 5). This concern arises from the similarity between the activity patterns in the posterior parietal cortex and reaction time across temporal distances. To address this, we conducted control analyses to test this hypothesis (see the second and third points from Reviewer 2 for details).

      On page 8, we present the behavioral accuracy data: “Participants showed significantly higher accuracy in the external-perspective task than in the internal-perspective task (external-perspective task: M = 93.5%, SD = 4.7%; internal-perspective task: M = 89.5%, SD = 8.1%; paired t(31) = 3.33, p = 0.002).”

      All fMRI contrasts are also confounded by this experimental shortcoming, seeing as they are all reported at the interaction level across a task. For instance, in Figure 4, the authors report a significant beta difference between internal and external tasks. It is impossible to disentangle whether this effect is simply due to task difference or to an actual processing of the duration that differs across tasks, or to the nature of the representation (the most difficult to tackle, and the one chosen by the authors).

      We thank the reviewer for pointing out this important issue. Like temporal distance, the neural correlates of duration were not derived from a direct contrast between the two tasks. Instead, they were identified by detecting brain regions showing a significant correlation between neural activity and the implied duration of each event using the parametric modulation analysis. Therefore, what is shown in Figure 4 reflects the significant differences in these neural correlations with duration between the two tasks.

      The observed difference in the neural representation of duration between the two tasks was unexpected. In the original manuscript, we provided a post hoc explanation: “Since the externalperspective task in the current study encouraged the participants to compare the event sequence with the external parallel temporal landmarks, duration representation in the hippocampus may be dampened.”

      However, we agree that this difference might also arise from other factors distinguishing the two tasks. In the revised manuscript, we have clarified this possibility as follows: “The difference in duration representation between the two tasks remains open to interpretation. One possible explanation is that the hippocampus is preferentially involved in memory for durations embedded within event sequences (see review by Lee et al., 2020). In the internal-perspective task, participants indeed localized events within the event sequence itself. In contrast, the externalperspective task encouraged participants to compare the event sequence with external temporal landmarks, which may have attenuated the hippocampal representation of duration.”

      Conclusion:

      In conclusion, the current experimental work is confounded and lacks controls. Any behavioral or fMRI contrasts between the two proposed tasks can be parsimoniously accounted for by difficulty or attentional differences, not the claim of representational differences being argued for here.

      We hope that our explanations and clarifications above adequately address the reviewer’s concerns. We would like to reiterate that we did not directly compare the two tasks. Rather, we first identified the neural representations of sequential distance and duration, and then examined how these representations differed across tasks. It is unclear to us how the overall difference in task difficulty or attentional demands could lead to the observed pattern of results.

      By determining where the neural representations were consistent and where they diverged, we were able to differentiate brain regions that encode temporal information allocentrically from those that represent temporal information in a perspective-dependent manner, modulated by task demands.

      Reviewer #2 (Public review):

      Summary:

      Xu et al. used fMRI to examine the neural correlates associated with retrieving temporal information from an external compared to internal perspective ('mental time watching' vs. 'mental time travel'). Participants first learned a fictional religious ritual composed of 15 sequential events of varying durations. They were then scanned while they either (1) judged whether a target event happened in the same part of the day as a reference event (external condition); or (2) imagined themselves carrying out the reference event and judged whether the target event occurred in the past or will occur in the future (internal condition). Behavioural data suggested that the perspective manipulation was successful: RT was positively correlated with sequential distance in the external perspective task, while a negative correlation was observed between RT and sequential distance for the internal perspective task. Neurally, the two tasks activated different regions, with the external task associated with greater activity in the supplementary motor area and supramarginal gyrus, and the internal condition with greater activity in default mode network regions. Of particular interest, only a cluster in the posterior parietal cortex demonstrated a significant interaction between perspective and sequential distance, with increased activity in this region for longer sequential distances in the external task, but increased activity for shorter sequential distances in the internal task. Only a main effect of sequential distance was observed in the hippocampus head, with activity being positively correlated with sequential distance in both tasks. No regions exhibited a significant interaction between perspective and duration, although there was a main effect of duration in the hippocampus body with greater activity for longer durations, which appeared to be driven by the internal perspective condition. On the basis of these findings, the authors suggest that the hippocampus may represent event sequences allocentrically, whereas the posterior parietal cortex may process event sequences egocentrically.

      We sincerely appreciate the reviewers for providing an accurate, comprehensive, and objective summary of our study.

      Strengths:

      The topic of egocentric vs. allocentric processing has been relatively under-investigated with respect to time, having traditionally been studied in the domain of space. As such, the current study is timely and has the potential to be important for our understanding of how time is represented in the brain in the service of memory. The study is well thought out, and the behavioural paradigm is, in my opinion, a creative approach to tackling the authors' research question. A particular strength is the implementation of an imagination phase for the participants while learning the fictional religious ritual. This moves the paradigm beyond semantic/schema learning and is probably the best approach besides asking the participants to arduously enact and learn the different events with their exact timings in person. Importantly, the behavioural data point towards successful manipulation of internal vs. external perspective in participants, which is critical for the interpretation of the fMRI data. The use of syllable length as a sanity check for RT analyses, as well as neuroimaging analyses, is also much appreciated.

      We thank the reviewer for the positive and encouraging comments.

      Weaknesses/Suggestions:

      Although the design and analysis choices are generally solid, there are a few finer details/nuances that merit further clarification or consideration in order to strengthen the readers' confidence in the authors' interpretation of their data.

      (1) Given the known behavioural and neural effects of boundaries in sequence memory, I was wondering whether the number of traversed context boundaries (i.e., between morning-afternoon, and afternoon-evening) was controlled for across sequential length in the internal perspective condition? Or, was it the case that reference-target event pairs with higher sequential numbers were more likely to span across two parts of the day compared to lower sequential numbers? Similarly, did the authors examine any potential differences, whether behaviourally or neurally, for day part same vs. day part different external task trials?

      We thank the reviewer for the thoughtful comments. When we designed the experiment, we minimized the correlation between the sequential distance between the target and reference events and whether the reference and target events occurred within the same or different parts of the day (coded as Same = 0, Different = 1). The point-biserial correlation coefficient between these two variables across all the trials within the same run were controlled below 0.2.

      To investigate the effect of day-part boundaries on behavior, as well as the contribution of other factors, we conducted a new linear mixed-effects model analysis incorporating four additional variables. They are whether the target and the reference events are within the same or different parts of the day (i.e., Same vs. Different), whether the target event is in the future or the past of the reference event (i.e., Future vs. Past), and the interactions of the two factors with Task Type (i.e., internal- vs. external-perspective task).

      The results are largely the same as the original one in the table: There was a significant main effect of Syllable Length, and the interaction effects between Task Type and Sequence Distance and between Task Type and Duration remain significant. What's new is we also found a significant interaction effect between Task Type and Same vs. Different.

      As shown in the Figure 2—figure supplement 1, this Same vs. Different effect was in line with the effect of Sequential Distance, with two events in the same and different parts of the day corresponding to the short and long sequential distances. Given that Sequential Distance had already been considered in the model, the effect of parts of the day should result from the boundary effect across day parts or the chunking effect within day parts, i.e., the sequential distance across different parts of the day was perceived longer while the sequential distance within the same parts of the day was perceived shorter. We have incorporated these findings into the manuscript.

      Neurally, to further verify that the significant effects of sequential distance were not driven by its weak correlation with the Same/Different judgment or other potential confounding factors, we constructed another GLM that incorporated three additional parametric modulators: the sequence position of the target event (ranging from 1 to 15) and the behavioral responses (Future vs. Past in the internal-perspective task; Same vs. Different in the external-perspective task, coded as 0 and 1). The significant findings were unaffected.

      (2) I would appreciate further insight into the authors' decision to model their task trials as stick functions with duration 0 in their GLMs, as opposed to boxcar functions with varying durations, given the potential benefits of the latter (e.g., Grinband et al., 2008). I concur that in certain paradigms, RT is considered a potential confound and is taken into account as a nuisance covariate (as the authors have done here). However, given that RTs appear to be critical to the authors' interpretation of participant behavioural performance, it would imply that variations in RT actually reflect variations in cognitive processes of interest, and hence, it may be worth modelling trials as boxcar functions with varying durations.

      We appreciate the reviewer’s insightful comment on this important issue. Whether to control for RT’s influence on fMRI activation is indeed a long-standing paradox. On the one hand, RT reflects underlying cognitive processes and therefore should not be fully controlled for. On the other hand, RT can independently influence neural activity, as several brain networks vary with RT irrespective of the specific cognitive process involved—a domain-general effect. For example, regions within the multiple-demand network are often positively correlated with RT across different cognitive domains.

      Our strategy in the manuscript is to first present the results without including RT as a control variable and then examine whether the effects are preserved after controlling for RT. In the revised manuscript, we have clarified this approach (Page 13): “Here, changes in activity levels within the PPC were found to align with RT. Whether to control for RT’s influence on fMRI activation represents a well-known paradox. On the one hand, RT reflects underlying cognitive processes and therefore should not be fully controlled for. On the other hand, RT can independently influence neural activity, as several brain networks vary with RT irrespective of the specific cognitive process involved—a domain-general effect. For instance, regions within the multiple-demand network are often positively correlated with RT and task difficulty across diverse cognitive domains (e.g., Fedorenko et al., 2013; Mumford et al., 2024). To evaluate the second possibility, we conducted an additional control analysis by including trial-by-trial RT as a parametric modulator in the first-level model (see Methods). Notably, the same PPC region remained the only area in the entire brain showing a significant interaction between Task Type and Sequential Distance (voxel-level p < 0.001, clusterlevel FWE-corrected p < 0.05). This finding indicates that PPC activity cannot be fully attributed to RT. Furthermore, we do not interpret the effect as reflecting a domain-general RT influence, as regions within the multiple-demand system—typically sensitive to RT and task difficulty—did not exhibit significant activation in our data.”

      The reason we did not use boxcar functions with varying durations in our original manuscript is that we also applied parametric modulation in the same model. In the parametric modulation, all parametric modulators inherit the onsets and durations of the events being modulated. Consequently, the modulators would also take the form of boxcar functions rather than stick functions—the height of each boxcar reflecting the parameter value and its length reflecting the RT. We were uncertain whether this approach would be appropriate, as we have not encountered other studies implementing parametric modulation in this manner.

      For exploratory purposes, we also conducted a first-level analysis using boxcar functions with variable durations. The same PPC region remained the strongest area in the entire brain that shows an interaction effect between Task Type and Sequential Distance. However, the cluster size was slightly reduced (voxel-level p < 0.001, cluster-level FWE-corrected p = 0.0610; see the Author response image 1 below). The cross indicates the MNI coordinates at [38, –69, 35], identical to those shown in the main results (Figure 4A).

      Author response image 1.

      (3) The activity pattern across tasks and sequential distance in the posterior parietal cortex appears to parallel the RT data. Have the authors examined potential relationships between the two (e.g., individual participant slopes for RT across sequential distance vs. activity betas in the posterior parietal cortex)?

      We thank the reviewer for this helpful suggestion. As shown in the Author response image 2, the interaction between Task Type and Sequential Distance was a stronger predictor of PPC activation than of RT. Because PPC activation and RT are measured on different scales, we compared their standardized slopes (standardized β) measuring the change in a dependent variable in terms of standard deviations for a one-standard-deviation increase in an independent variable. The standardized β for the Task Type × Sequential Distance interaction was −0.30 (95% CI [−0.42, −0.19]) for PPC activation and −0.21 (95% CI [−0.30, −0.13]) for RT. The larger standardized effect for PPC activation indicates that the Task Type × Sequential Distance interaction was a stronger predictor of neural activation than of behavioral RT.

      Author response image 2.

      A more relevant question is whether PPC activation can be explained by temporal information (i.e., the sequential distance) independently of RT. To test this, we included both Sequential Distance and RT in the same linear mixed-effects model predicting PPC Activation Level. As shown in the Author response table 1, although RT independently influenced PPC activation (F(1, 288) = 4.687, p = 0.031), the interaction between Task Type and Sequential Distance was a much stronger independent predictor (F(1, 290) = 19.319, p < 0.001).

      Author response table 1.

      PPC Activation Level Predicted by Sequential Distance and RT

      (3) Linear Mixed Model Formula: PPC Activation Level ~ 1 + Task Type * (Sequential Distance + RT) + (1 | Participant)

      (4) There were a few places in the manuscript where the writing/discussion of the wider literature could perhaps be tightened or expanded. For instance:

      (i) On page 16, the authors state 'The negative correlation between the activation level in the right PPC and sequential distance has already been observed in a previous fMRI study (Gauthier & van Wassenhove, 2016b). The authors found a similar region (the reported MNI coordinate of the peak voxel was 42, -70, 40, and the MNI coordinate of the peak voxel in the present study was 39, -70, 35), of which the activation level went up when the target event got closer to the self-positioned event. This finding aligns with the evidence suggesting that the posterior parietal cortex implements egocentric representations.' Without providing a little more detail here about the Gauthier & van Wassenhove study and what participants were required to do (i.e., mentally position themselves at a temporal location and make 'occurred before' vs. 'occurred after' judgements of a target event), it could be a little tricky for readers to follow why this convergence in finding supports a role for the posterior parietal cortex in egocentric representations.

      We appreciate the reviewer’s comments. In the revised manuscript, we have provided a more detailed explanation of Gauthier and van Wassenhove’s study (Page 17): “The negative correlation between the activation level in the right PPC and sequential distance has already been observed in a previous fMRI study by Gauthier & van Wassenhove (2016b). In their study, the participants were instructed to mentally position themselves at a specific time point and judge whether a target event occurred before or after that time point. The authors identified a similar brain region (reported MNI coordinates of the peak voxel: 42, −70, 40), closely matching the activation observed in the present study (MNI coordinates of the peak voxel: 39, −70, 35). In both studies, activation in this region increased as the target event approached the self-positioned time point, which aligns with the evidence suggesting that the posterior parietal cortex implements egocentric representations.”

      (ii) Although the authors discuss the Lee et al. (2020) review and related studies with respect to retrospective memory, it is critical to note that this work has also often used prospective paradigms, pointing towards sequential processing being the critical determinant of hippocampal involvement, rather than the distinction between retrospective vs. prospective processing.

      We sincerely thank the reviewer for highlighting these important points. In response, we have revised the section of the Introduction discussing the neural underpinnings of duration (Pages 3-4). “Neurocognitive evidence suggests that the neural representation of duration engages distinct brain systems. The motor system—particularly the supplementary motor area—has been associated with prospective timing (e.g., Protopapa et al., 2019; Nani et al., 2019; De Kock et al., 2021; Robbe, 2023), whereas the hippocampus is considered to support the representation of duration embedded within an event sequence (e.g., Barnett et al., 2014; Thavabalasingam et al., 2018; see also the comprehensive review by Lee et al., 2020).”

      (iii) The authors make an interesting suggestion with respect to hippocampal longitudinal differences in the representation of event sequences, and may wish to relate this to Montagrin et al. (2024), who make an argument for the representation of distant goals in the anterior hippocampus and immediate goals in the posterior hippocampus.

      We thank the reviewer for bringing this intriguing and relevant study to our attention. In the Discussion of the manuscript, we have incorporated it into our discussion (Page 21): “Evidence from the spatial domain has suggested that the anterior hippocampus (or the ventral rodent hippocampus) implements global and gist-like representations (e.g., larger receptive fields), whereas the posterior hippocampus (or the dorsal rodent hippocampus) implements local and detailed ones (e.g., finer receptive fields) (e.g., Jung et al., 1994; Kjelstrup et al., 2008; Collin et al., 2015; see reviews by Poppenk et al., 2013; Robin & Moscovitch, 2017; see Strange et al., 2014 for a different opinion). Recent evidence further shows that the organizational principle observed along the hippocampal long axis may also extend to the temporal domain (Montagrin et al., 2024). In that study, the anterior hippocampus showed greater activation for remote goals, whereas the posterior hippocampus was more strongly engaged for current goals, which are presumed to be represented in finer detail.”

      Reviewing Editor Comments:

      While both reviewers acknowledged the significance of the topic, they raised several important concerns. We believe that providing conceptual clarification, adding important methodological details, as well as addressing potential confounds will further strengthen this paper.

      We thank the editor for the suggestions.

      Recommendations for the authors:

      Reviewer #1 (Recommendations for the authors):

      (1) Please, provide the actual ethical approval #.

      We have added the ethical approval number in the revised manuscript (P 36): “The ethical committee of the University of Trento approved the experimental protocol (Approval Number 2019-018),”

      (2) Thirty-two participants were tested. Please report how you estimated the sample size was sufficient to test your working hypothesis.

      We thank the editor for pointing out this omission. In the revised manuscript, we have added an explanation for our choice of sample size (p. 36): “The sample size was chosen to align with the upper range of participant numbers reported in previous fMRI studies that successfully detected sequence or distance effects in the hippocampus (N = 15–34; e.g., Morgan et al., 2011; Howard et al., 2014; Deuker et al., 2016; Garvert et al., 2017; Theves et al., 2019; Park et al., 2021; Cristoforetti et al., 2022).”

      (3) All MRI figures: please orient the reader; left/right should be stated.

      In the revised manuscript, we have added labels to all MRI figures to indicate the left and right hemispheres.

      (4) In Figure 3A-B, the clear lateralization of the activation is not discussed in the Results or in the Discussion. Was it predicted?

      We thank the editors for highlighting this important point regarding hemispheric lateralization. The right-lateralization observed in our findings is indeed consistent with previous literature. In the revised manuscript, we have expanded our discussion to emphasize this aspect more clearly.

      For the parietal cortex, we now note (Page 17-18): “The negative correlation between activation in the right posterior parietal cortex (PPC) and sequential distance has previously been reported in an fMRI study by Gauthier and van Wassenhove (2016b). In their paradigm, participants were instructed to mentally position themselves at a specific time point and judge whether a target event occurred before or after that point. The authors identified a similar region (peak voxel MNI coordinates: 42, −70, 40), closely corresponding to the activation observed in the present study (peak voxel MNI coordinates: 39, −70, 35). In both studies, activation in this region increased as the target event approached the self-positioned time point, consistent with evidence suggesting that the posterior parietal cortex supports egocentric representations. Neuropsychological studies have further shown that patients with lesions in the bilateral or right PPC exhibit ‘egocentric disorientation’ (Aguirre & D’Esposito, 1999), characterized by an inability to localize objects relative to themselves (e.g., Case 2: Levine et al., 1985; Patient DW: Stark, 1996; Patients MU: Wilson et al., 1997, 2005).”

      For the hippocampus, we have added (Page 19): “Previous research has shown that hippocampal activation correlates with distance (e.g., Morgan et al., 2011; Howard et al., 2014; Garvert et al., 2017; Theves et al., 2019; Viganò et al., 2023), and that distributed hippocampal activity encodes distance information (e.g., Deuker et al., 2016; Park et al., 2021). Most studies have reported hippocampal ePects either bilaterally or predominantly in the right hemisphere, whereas only one study (Morgan et al., 2011) found the ePect localized to the left hippocampus.”

    1. eLife Assessment

      This manuscript describes a useful integrated proteogenomics pipeline to enable the discovery of novel peptides in cancer cell lines. The method combines long-read RNA sequencing with a multi-protease digestion and proteomics approach. The method is a further development of the authors' previous approaches to identify cancer-specific peptides; however, the current study focuses on a single cell line, and the characterization remains incomplete and lacks validation for candidate alterations. The manuscript will be of interest to scientists focusing on identifying unique alterations in cancer cells.

    2. Reviewer #1 (Public review):

      In this study, the authors provide an integrated proteogenomics pipeline to enable the discovery of novel peptides in an Ewing sarcoma cell line (A673). To identify novel full-length resolved isoforms, they performed long-read RNA sequencing (Oxford Nanopore Technology). Then, to increase the chance of detecting Ewing-specific neopeptides, the authors combined two approaches: a multi-protease digestion and a multi-dimensional proteomics approach.

      Given the importance of novel isoforms and cryptic sites in neoantigen discovery and its putative applications in immunotherapy, this method and resource paper are of interest for the Ewing community and potentially for a broader cancer audience. The originality of this paper relies mostly on this optimized method to discover novel peptides (long-read sequencing with multiprotease, multi-dimensional trapped ion mobility spectrometry parallel accumulation-serial fragmentation mass spectrometry). Although, to my knowledge, no study combining long-read sequencing and proteomics methods has been published on Ewing Sarcoma, this study appears limited by a few aspects:

      (1) The study is restricted to the analysis of a single cell line (A673). The authors should consider extending the analysis to other Ewing cell lines.

      (2) The characterization of the 1121 non-canonical transcripts can be improved. How many are just splice variants of known genes, and how many are bona fide neogenes? In this respect, the definition of what the authors call neogene is quite unclear. Is a transcript with a new exon reported as a neogene? Is a transcript with a new start site reported as a neogene? It should be clearly indicated which categories of Figure 4B are reported on Figure 4D. A general flow chart would be very useful to help follow the analysis process.

      (3) Similarly, the authors detect 3216 A673 specific proteins with no match in SwissProt. This number decreases to 72 "putative non-canonical proteoforms with unique peptides after BLASTp" against Uniprot. Again, a flow chart would conveniently enable one to follow the step-by-step analysis.

      (4) Finally, only 17 spectral matches are suggested to be derived from non-canonical proteoforms. It would be important to compare the spectrum of these detected peptides with that of synthetic peptides. Such an analysis would enable us to assess the number of reliably detected proteoforms that can be expected in an Ewing sarcoma cell line.

      (5) It is very unclear what the authors want to highlight in Supplementary Figure 5. Is it that non-canonical transcripts are broadly expressed in normal tissue? Which again raises the question of definitions of neogenes, non-canonical... Apparently, this figure shows that these non-canonical transcripts contain a large part of canonical sequences, which account for the strong signal in many normal tissues. A similar heatmap could be presented, including only the non-canonical sequences of the non-canonical transcripts. This figure should also include Ewing sarcoma samples.

    3. Reviewer #2 (Public review):

      The paper from Kulej et al. reports a set of tools for proteogenomic analysis of cancer proteomes. Their approach utilizes modern methods in long-read RNA sequencing to assemble a proteome database that is specific to Ewing sarcoma-derived A673 cells. To maximize proteome coverage and therefore increase the odds of detecting cancer-specific alterations at the protein level, the authors use multiple enzymes (trypsin, gluC, etc.) to digest cellular proteins and then perform multidimensional peptide fractionation. Peptide samples are then analyzed by LC-MS/MS using data-dependent and data-independent schemes on a timstof mass spectrometer. Proteogenomics is an important area of investigation for cancer research and does require new informatics tools.

      The authors describe an end-to-end workflow where they claim to have optimized four different steps:

      (1) Assembly of a sample-specific protein database using long-read transcriptomic data.

      (2) Use of 8 different proteolytic enzymes to maximize diversity of peptides.

      (3) Multiple stages of peptide fractionation using SCX and high pH rp chromatography.

      (4) Utilize acquisition methods on the timstof mass spec to provide MS/MS data from single-charged peptides and multiply-charged peptides.

      The authors published two earlier versions of ProteomeGenerator (versions 1 and 2) in the Journal of Proteome Research. In these earlier versions, 'ProteomeGenerator' was the set of software tools designed to integrate DNA and RNA sequencing to create a sample-specific protein database. To test the performance of each ProteomeGenerator version, the authors generated LC-MS/MS data using a combination of trypsin and LysC, then in the other paper, trypsin, LysC, and GluC. In both papers, they performed some levelof peptide fractionation prior to LC-MS/MS. They acquired LC-MS/MS data on a Thermo Q-Exactive in one paper and a Thermo Orbitrap mass spec in the other paper.

      In the current paper, the primary innovation is the use of long-read sequencing to potentially improve the quality of the sample specific protein database. The other three components noted above are incremental compared to the authors' previous two papers and generally accepted practices in the field of proteomics. To note one example, the authors previously digested proteins using three enzymes and now use eight. Similarly, they are now using a timstof Bruker mass spec instead of one from Thermo. The detailed descriptions around the use of many enzymes and peptide fractionation, etc., create a very technically oriented paper, similar to or more so than the authors' earlier papers in J. Proteome Research. So, while there is enthusiasm for the use of long-read sequencing across biomedical research, the impact here for proteogenomic applications is somewhat lost with all of the technical description for experimental details that are not particularly innovative. In this respect, the report is not well matched to a broad readership.

    4. Author response:

      We thank you and reviewers for their thoughtful, constructive, and fair evaluation of our manuscript. We appreciate the recognition of the value of an end-to-end proteogenomics framework integrating long-read transcriptomics with deep proteomic analysis, and we are grateful for the specific guidance on how to strengthen clarity, generality, and impact for a broad scientific readership. We outline below the key revisions we plan to undertake in response to the public reviews.

      Reviewer #1

      We thank the reviewer for their positive assessment of the relevance of this work to Ewing sarcoma and cancer proteogenomics.

      Scope and generality.

      We agree that analysis of a single cell line limits generalization. In the revised manuscript, we will extend the ProteomeGenerator3 workflow to additional tumor specimens, including Ewing sarcoma tumors, to assess reproducibility and biological relevance beyond a single test cancer cell line.

      Definitions and analytical clarity.

      We will clarify definitions of non-canonical transcripts, alternative splice isoforms, and neogenes, and explicitly distinguish these categories throughout the manuscript. We will add a summary flow diagram that tracks transcripts through classification, ORF prediction, and proteoform detection, clarifying how Figures 4B and 4D relate.

      Proteoform filtering and confidence.

      To improve transparency, we will add a step-wise schematic summarizing how candidate non-canonical proteoforms are filtered to a high-confidence subset, including SwissProt comparison, BLASTp filtering, peptide uniqueness, and competitive database searches.

      Validation.

      We agree that orthogonal validation is important. We will include additional analyses of non-canonical proteofoms detected recurrently in additional tumor specimens to provide an empirical estimate of reliably detectable non-canonical proteoforms.

      Supplementary Figure 5.

      We will revise the presentation and explanation of this figure to avoid misinterpretation, including analyses focused specifically on non-canonical sequence segments and inclusion of tumor samples for direct comparison.

      Reviewer #2

      We thank the reviewer for placing this work in context with our prior ProteomeGenerator publications and for their guidance on framing the manuscript for a broad audience.

      Emphasizing the central conceptual advance.

      We agree that the primary innovation is the use of long-read transcriptomics to generate sample-specific proteogenomic databases. In the revised manuscript, we will directly compare long-read-derived and short-read-derived databases applied to the same samples and proteomic data, explicitly demonstrating where long-read sequencing enables discovery inaccessible to short-read approaches.

      Manuscript reorganization.

      We will substantially revise the manuscript to foreground the biological and conceptual consequences of long-read-enabled proteogenomics, using focused examples. Detailed descriptions of protease selection, fractionation, and acquisition optimization will be moved to supplementary methods, while retaining key conclusions about their impact on discovery.

      Positioning of technical advances.

      We will frame multi-protease and acquisition strategies as general principles required for unbiased proteoform discovery, rather than as static technical prescriptions, emphasizing their relevance across evolving proteomics platforms.

      Overall Significance

      In the revised manuscript, we will more clearly articulate that this work establishes long-read-informed, sample-specific proteogenomics as a discovery-grade framework, revealing cancer-specific proteoforms that are systematically invisible to reference-based and short-read-driven approaches, with broad implications for cancer biology and biomarker discovery.

      We thank the editors and reviewers again for their constructive feedback, which we believe will substantially strengthen the clarity and broad impact of this work.

    1. Colloids share many properties with solutions. For example, the particles in both are invisible without a powerful microscope, do not settle on standing, and pass through most filters. However, the particles in a colloid scatter a beam of visible light, a phenomenon known as the Tyndall effect,The effect is named after its discoverer, John Tyndall, an English physicist (1820–1893), whereas the particles of a solution do not. The Tyndall effect is responsible for the way the beams from automobile headlights are clearly visible from the side on a foggy night but cannot be seen from the side on a clear night. It is also responsible for the colored rays of light seen in many sunsets, where the sun’s light is scattered by water droplets and dust particles high in the atmosphere. An example of the Tyndall effect is shown in Figure 13.10.1.

      Colloids are similar to solutions, but unlike solutions, their particles scatter light, this is called the Tyndall effect. This light scattering explains why headlights are visible in fog and why sunsets appear colorful.

    2. Emulsions are colloids formed by the dispersion of a hydrophobic liquid in water, thereby bringing two mutually insoluble liquids, such as oil and water, in close contact. Various agents have been developed to stabilize emulsions, the most successful being molecules that combine a relatively long hydrophobic “tail” with a hydrophilic “head”. Soaps are natural emulsifying agents and detergents are synthetic ones.  Figure 13.6.4 shows the similarity in structure between the soap sodium stearate [NaCH3(CH2)16CO2,] and detergent sodium dodecyl sulfate [NaCH3(CH2)11OSO3], both of which are salts with a charge on one end (the head) and a long tailed (nonpolar) hydrocarbon chain on the other.  The charged head is soluble in polar compounds like water while the long hydrophobic head is soluble in non polar compounds like fats and oils.

      This passage explains that emulsions are mixtures of two normally immiscible liquids, like oil and water, stabilized by emulsifying agents. Soaps and detergents work because they have both a hydrophilic (water-attracting) charged head and a hydrophobic (oil-attracting) nonpolar tail. This dual structure allows them to interact with both water and oil, helping keep the mixture stable.

    1. Volatile solute are solutes that have a vapor pressure. These are typically miscible liquids that form solutions of any proportion, and so it is not always useful to distinguish one as the solvent and the other as the solute. The vapor pressure above the solution is the sum of the vapor pressure of each component within the solution (Dalton's Law of Partial Pressure, section 10.4.3)., where the vapor pressure of each component is determined by Raoult's Law. For component A, PA=XAP0A, and for component B, PB=XBP0B .We will only look at two component systems, but the vapor pressure of a system with more than two volatile solutes is simply the sum of their individual Vapor Pressures.

      Volatile solutes have their own vapor pressure, so each component in a solution contributes to the total vapor pressure. According to Raoult’s Law and Dalton’s Law, the total vapor pressure equals the sum of each component’s partial pressure.

    2. Nonvolatile solutes do not have an appreciable vapor pressure of their own, and they decrease the vapor pressure of a solvent (over a solution) when added to a solvent. This can be understood by the dynamics depicted in figure 13.5.2. In part (a) you have a pure volatile substance (solvent) and the vapor pressure (Po) is the equilibrium pressure of the solvent when the rate of evaporation equals the rate of condensation (review 11.6, Vapor Pressure as Equilibrium Pressure). Note there are 5 red lines representing the evaporating molecules and 5 black lines representing the condensing molecules (so the rate of condensation equals evaporation and the number of vapor molecules is constant). A non-volatile solute is introduced (b), and when a solute molecule is near the surface it can't escape. This effectively reduces the surface area for evaporation, and so fewer molecules transfer to the vapor phase, but those condensing have no such reduction in surface area (a vaporized solvent molecule can lose energy and condense if it his a surface solute or solvent molecule). So in (b) there are 6 black arrows entering the liquid, but only 4 red arrows leaving. The system is no longer at equilibrium and more solute condense than evaporate, reducing the vapor pressure until the rate of evaporation equals condensation and a new equilibrium has been reached (c). The result is a reduction in the vapor pressure.

      Adding a nonvolatile solute lowers vapor pressure because it reduces the number of solvent molecules that can evaporate. Evaporation decreases while condensation continues, causing a new equilibrium to form at a lower vapor pressure.

    1. eLife Assessment

      This study provides an important contribution by showing that whiteflies and planthoppers use salivary effectors to suppress plant immunity through the receptor-like protein RLP4, suggesting convergent evolution in these insect lineages. The topic is of clear interest for understanding plant-insect interactions and offers ideas that could stimulate further research in the field. The authors provide mostly solid evidence for the functional roles of the salivary effectors; however, the interpretation of the physiological function of RLP4 in plant defense requires clarification.

    2. Reviewer #1 (Public review):

      Summary:

      This manuscript investigates how herbivorous insects, specifically whiteflies and planthoppers, utilize salivary effectors to overcome plant immunity by targeting the RLP4 receptor.

      Strengths:

      The authors present a strong case for the independent evolution of these effectors and provide compelling evidence for their functional roles.

    3. Reviewer #2 (Public review):

      Summary:

      The authors tested an interesting hypothesis that white flies and planthoppers independently evolved salivary proteins to dampen plant immunity by targeting a receptor-like protein. Unlike previously reported receptor-like proteins with large ligand-binding domains, the NtRLP4 here has a malectin LRR domain. Interestingly, it also associates with the adaptor SOBIR1. While the function of this protein remains to be further explored, the authors provide strong evidence showing it's the target of salivary proteins as the insects' survival strategy.

      Major points:

      The authors mixed the concepts of LRR-RLPs with malectin LRR-RLPs. These are two different type of receptors. While LRR-RLPs are well studied, little is known about malectin LRR-RLPs. The authors should not simply apply the mode of function of LRR-RLPs to RLP4 which is a malectin LRR-RLP. In addition, LRR-RLPs that function as ligand-binding receptors typically possess >20 LRRs, whereas RLP4 in this work has a rather small ectodomain. It remains unclear whether it will function as a PRR.

      I can't agree with the author's logic of testing uninfested plants for proving a PRR's function. The function of a pattern recognition receptor depends on perceiving the corresponding ligand. As shown by the data provided, RLP4-OE plants have altered transcriptional profile indicating activated defense, suggesting it's unlikely a PRR. An alternative explanation is needed.

      More work on BAK1 will also help to clarify the ideas proposed by the authors.

    4. Reviewer #3 (Public review):

      Summary:

      In this study, Wang et al., investigate how herbivorous insects overcome plant receptor-mediated immunity by targeting plant receptor-like proteins. The authors identify two independently evolved salivary effectors, BtRDP in whiteflies and NlSP694 in brown planthoppers, that promote the degradation of plant RLP4 through the ubiquitin-dependent proteasome pathway. NtRLP4 from tobacco and OsRLP4 from rice are shown to confer resistance against herbivores by activating defense signaling, while BtRDP and NlSP694 suppress these defenses by destabilizing RLP4 proteins.

      Strengths:

      This work highlights a convergent evolutionary strategy in distinct insect lineages and advances our understanding of insect-plant coevolution at the molecular level.

      Two minor comments:

      In line 140, yeast two-hybrid (Y2H) was used to screen for interacting proteins in plants. However, it is generally difficult to identify membrane receptors using Y2H. Please provide more methodological details to justify this approach, or alternatively, include a discussion explaining this.

      In Figure S12C, the interaction between the two proteins appears to be present in the nucleus as well. Please provide a possible explanation for this observation.

    5. Author response:

      The following is the authors’ response to the original reviews.

      Public Reviews:

      Reviewer #1 (Public review):

      Summary:

      This is a well-structured and interesting manuscript that investigates how herbivorous insects, specifically whiteflies and planthoppers, utilize salivary effectors to overcome plant immunity by targeting the RLP4 receptor.

      Strengths:

      The authors present a strong case for the independent evolution of these effectors and provide compelling evidence for their functional roles.

      Weaknesses:

      Western blot evidence for effector secretion is weak. The possibility of contamination from insect tissues during the sample preparation should be avoided.

      Below are some specific comments and suggestions to strengthen the manuscript.

      Thank you very much for your comments. We have carefully revised the MS following your valuable suggestions and comments.

      (1) Western blot evidence for effector secretion:

      The western blot evidence in Figure 1, which aims to show that the insect protein is secreted into plants, is not fully convincing. The band of the expected size (~30 kDa) in the infested tissues is very weak. Furthermore, the high and low molecular weight bands that appear in the infested tissues do not match the size of the protein in the insects themselves, and a high molecular weight band also appears in the uninfested control tissues. It is difficult to draw a definitive conclusion that this protein is secreted into the plants based on this evidence. The authors should also address the possibility of contamination from insect tissues during the sample preparation and explain how they have excluded this possibility.

      Thank you for pointing out this. One or two bands between 25-35kDa were specifically identified in B. tabaci-infested plants, but not the non-infested plants, and the smaller high intensity band is the same size as that of BtRDP in salivary glands. This experiment has been repeated for six times. In the current version, we reperformed this experiment, and provided salivary gland sample as a positive control, which showed the same molecular weight with a specific band in infested sample. It is noteworthily that in the experiment of current version, only the smaller high intensity band appear, while the low intensity band did not appear. The detection of a protein within infested plant tissue is a key criterion for validating the secretion of salivary effectors, an approach supported by numerous studies in this field. Furthermore, our previous LC-MS/MS analysis of B. tabaci watery saliva identified six unique peptides matching BtRDP, providing independent evidence for its presence in saliva. Therefore, as we now state in the manuscript “the detection of BtRDP in infested plants (Fig. 1a) and in watery saliva (Fig. S1) collectively indicates that BtRDP is a salivary protein”.

      Regarding the higher molecular weight band that present in both infested and non-infested samples, we agree that it most likely represents a non-specific band, which is a common occurrence in Western blot assays. Such bands are sometimes used to indicate comparable sample loading. To address the possibility of contamination by insect tissues, we wish to clarify that all insects and deposited eggs were carefully removed from the infested leaves prior to sample processing. Moreover, BtRDP is undetectable at the egg stage, and no BtRDP-associated band can be detected even in egg contamination. We have revised the Methods section to explicitly state this procedure:

      “After feeding, the eggs deposited on the infested tobacco leaves were removed. The leaves showing no visible insect contamination were immediately frozen in liquid nitrogen and ground to a fine powder.”

      (2) Inconsistent conclusion (Line 156 and Figure 3c):

      The statement in line 156 is inconsistent with the data presented in Figure 3c. The figure clearly shows that the LRR domain of the protein is the one responsible for the interaction with BtRDP, not the region mentioned in the text. This is a critical misrepresentation of the experimental findings and must be corrected. The conclusion in the text should accurately reflect the data from the figure.

      We apologize for any confusion caused by the original phrasing. In our previous manuscript, the description “NtRLP4 without signal peptides and transmembrane domains” referred specifically to the truncated construct NtRLP4<sub>(23-541)</sub> used in the experiment. To prevent any misunderstanding, we have revised the sentence in the updated version to state explicitly: “Point-to-point Y2H assays reveal that NtRLP4<sub>(23-541)</sub> (a truncated version lacking the signal peptide and transmembrane domains) interacts with BtRDP<sup>-sp</sup>”.

      (3) Role of SOBIR1 in the RLP4/SOBIR1 Complex:

      The authors demonstrate that the salivary effectors destabilize the RLP4 receptor, leading to a decrease in its protein levels and a reduction in the RLP4/SOBIR1 complex. A key question remains regarding the fate of SOBIR1 within this complex. The authors should clarify what happens to the SOBIR1 protein after the destabilization of RLP4. Does SOBIR1 become unbound, targeted for degradation itself, or does it simply lose its function without RLP4? This would provide further insight into the mechanism of action of the effectors.

      Thank you for suggestion. In the current version, we assessed the impact of BtRDP on NtSOBIR1 following NtRLP4 destabilization. The results showed that while the NtRLP4-myc accumulation was markedly reduced, NtSOBIR1-flag levels remained unchanged, suggesting that destabilization of NtRLP4 did not affect NtSOBIR1 accumulation.

      (4) Clarification on specificity and evolutionary claims:

      The paper's most significant claim is that the effectors from both whiteflies and planthoppers "independently evolved" to target RLP4. While the functional data is compelling, this evolutionary claim would be more convincing with stronger evidence. Showing that two different effector proteins target the same host protein is a fascinating finding but without a robust phylogenetic analysis, the claim of independent evolution is not fully supported. It would be valuable to provide a more detailed evolutionary analysis, such as a phylogenetic tree of the effector proteins, showing their relationship to other known insect proteins, to definitively rule out a shared, but highly divergent, common ancestor.

      We appreciate the reviewer’s valuable suggestion to investigate a potential evolutionary link between BtRDP and NlSP104. Our initial analysis already indicated no detectable sequence similarity. To address this point more thoroughly, we attempted a phylogenetic analysis. However, we were unable to generate a meaningful alignment due to a complete lack of conserved amino acid sequences. Therefore, we conducted a comparative genomics analysis by blasting both proteins against the genomic or transcriptomic data of 30 diverse insect species. This analysis revealed that RDP is exclusively present in Aleyrodidae species, and SP104 is exclusively present in Delphacidae species (Table S1). Taken together, the absence of sequence similarity, their distinct protein structure, and their lineage-specific distributions, we conclude that BtRDP and NlSP104 are highly unlikely to be homologous and thus did not originate from a common ancestor.

      (5) Role of SOBIR1 in the interaction:

      The results suggest that the effectors disrupt the RLP4/SOBIR1 complex. It is not entirely clear if the effectors are specifically targeting RLP4, SOBIR1, or both. Further experiments, such as a co-immunoprecipitation assay with just RLP4 and the effector, could clarify if the effector can bind to RLP4 in the absence of SOBIR1. This would help to definitively place RLP4 as the primary target.

      We appreciate the reviewer’s insightful comments regarding whether the effector preferentially targets RLP4, SOBIR1, or both. In our study, we conducted reciprocal co-immunoprecipitation assays using RLP4 and BtRDP as controls. These assays showed that BtRDP interacts with RLP4 but does not interact with SOBIR1, supporting the conclusion that SOBIR1 is unlikely to be a direct target of BtRDP. We fully agree that testing the interaction between RLP4 and BtRDP in the absence of SOBIR1 would further strengthen the conclusion. However, we were unable to obtain N. tabacum SOBIR1 knockout mutants, and therefore could not experimentally assess whether the RLP4–BtRDP interaction persists in planta without SOBIR1. Nevertheless, our yeast two-hybrid assays demonstrate that RLP4 and BtRDP can directly interact, indicating that their association does not strictly depend on SOBIR1. Together, these results support the interpretation that RLP4 is the primary target of BtRDP, while SOBIR1 is not directly engaged by the effector.

      (6) Transcriptome analysis (Lines 130-143):

      The transcriptome analysis section feels disconnected from the rest of the manuscript. The findings, or lack thereof, from this analysis do not seem to be directly linked to the other major conclusions of the paper. This section could be removed to improve the manuscript's overall focus and flow. If the authors believe this data is critical, they should more clearly and explicitly connect the conclusions of the transcriptome analysis to the core findings about the effector-RLP4 interaction.

      Thank you for suggestion. As you and Reviewer #2 pointed, the transcriptomic analysis did not closely link to the major conclusions of the paper, and we got little information from the transcriptomic analysis. Therefore, we remove these analyses to improve the manuscript’s overall focus and flow.

      (7) Signal peptide experiments (Lines 145 and beyond):

      The experiments conducted with the signal peptide (SP) are questionable. The SP is typically cleaved before the protein reaches its final destination. As such, conducting experiments with the SP attached to the protein may have produced biased observations and could lead to unjustified conclusions about the protein's function within the plant cell. We suggest the authors remove the experiments that include the signal peptide.

      Thank you for pointing out this. The SP was retained to direct the target proteins to the extracellular space of plant cells. Theoretically, the SP is cleaved in the mature protein. This methodology is widely used in effector biology. For example, the SP directs Meloidogyne graminicola Mg01965 to the apoplast, where it functions in immune suppression, whereas Mg01965 without the SP fails to exert this function (10.1111/mpp.12759). In our study, the SP of BtRDP was expected to guide the target protein to the extracellular space, facilitating its interaction with RLP4. Moreover, the observed protein sizes of BtRDP with and without the SP in transgenic plants were identical, suggesting successful SP cleavage. Therefore, we have retained the experiments involving the SP in the current version.

      (8) Overly strong conclusion and unclear evidence (Line 176):

      The use of the word "must" on line 176 is very strong and presents a definitive conclusion without sufficient evidence. The authors state that the proteins must interact with SOBIR1, but they do not provide a clear justification for this claim. Is SOBIR1 the only interaction partner for NtRLP4? The authors should provide a specific reason for focusing on SOBIR1 instead of demonstrating an interaction with NtRLP4 first. Additionally, do BtRDP or NlSP694 also interact with SOBIR1 directly? The authors should either tone down their language to reflect the evidence or provide a clearer justification for this strong claim.

      Thank you for pointing this out. In the current version, the word “must” has been toned down to “may” due to insufficient supporting evidence. In this study, SOBIR1 was chosen because it has been widely reported to be required for the function of several RLPs involved in innate immunity. However, it remains unclear whether SOBIR1 is the only interaction partner of NtRLP4. In the current version, we have clarified the rationale for focusing on SOBIR1 prior to the experiments “The receptor-like kinase SOBIR1, which contains a kinase domain, has been widely reported to be required for the function of RLPs involved in innate immunity (Gust & Felix, 2014)” and discussed that “Although NtRLP4 interacts with SOBIR1, this alone does not confirm that it operates strictly through this canonical module. Evidence from other RLPs shows that co-receptor usage can be flexible, and some RLPs function partly or conditionally independent of SOBIR1. Therefore, a more definitive assessment of NtRLP4 signaling will therefore require genetic dissection of its co-receptor dependencies, including but not limited to SOBIR1.”. In addition, the direct interaction between BtRDP and SOBIR1 was experimentally tested, and the results showed that BtRDP failed to interact with SOBIR1.

      Minor Comments

      (9) The statement in the abstract, "However, it remains unclear how these invaders are able to overcome receptor perception and disable the plant signaling pathways," is not entirely accurate. The fields of effector biology and host-pathogen interactions have provided significant insight into how pathogens and pests manipulate both Pattern-Triggered Immunity (PTI) and Effector-Triggered Immunity (ETI). While the specific mechanism described in this paper is novel, the broader claim that the field is unclear on these processes weakens the initial hook of the paper. A more precise framing of the problem would be beneficial, perhaps by stating that the specific mechanisms used by these particular herbivores to target RLP4 were previously unknown.

      Thank you for this insightful comment. We agree that the original statement in the abstract overstated the lack of understanding in the field. In the current version, we have refined the sentence to more accurately reflect the current state of knowledge, emphasizing that while microbial suppression of plant immunity has been extensively studied, the strategies used by herbivorous insects to overcome receptor-mediated defenses remain less understood. The revised sentence now reads as follows: “Although the mechanisms used by microbial pathogens to suppress plant immunity are well studied, how herbivorous insects overcome receptor-mediated defenses remains unclear”.

      (10) The introduction is heavily focused on Pattern Recognition Receptors (PRRs), which, while central to the paper's findings, gives a somewhat narrow view of the plant's defense against herbivores. It would be beneficial to briefly acknowledge the broader context of plant defenses, such as physical barriers, direct chemical toxicity, and indirect defenses, before narrowing the focus to the specific molecular interactions of PRRs that are the core of this study. This would provide a more complete picture of the "arms race" between plants and herbivores.

      Thank you for this valuable suggestion. We agree that the original introduction focused too narrowly on pattern-recognition receptors (PRRs). In the current version, we have expanded the introductory section to provide a broader overview of plant defense mechanisms. Specifically, we now acknowledge the multiple layers of plant defenses, including physical barriers (e.g., cuticle and cell wall), chemical defenses (e.g., toxic secondary metabolites and anti-nutritive compounds), and indirect defenses mediated by herbivore-induced volatiles. This addition provides a more complete context for understanding the molecular interactions discussed in this study. The revised paragraph now reads as follows: “Plants have evolved sophisticated defense systems to survive constant attacks from pathogens and herbivorous insects. These defenses operate at multiple levels, including physical barriers such as the cuticle and cell wall, chemical defenses involving toxic secondary metabolites and anti-nutritive compounds, and indirect defenses that attract natural enemies of herbivores through the emission of herbivore-induced volatiles. Beyond these general strategies, plants also rely on highly specialized molecular immune responses that allow them to detect and respond rapidly to invaders.”

      (11) The figure legends are generally clear, but some could be more detailed. For instance, in Figure 2, it would be helpful to explicitly state what each bar represents in the graph and to include the statistical test used. Please ensure all panels in all figures have clear labels.

      Thank you for this helpful suggestion. We have revised the legend of Fig. 2 and other figures to provide more detailed information for each panel. Specifically, we now explicitly describe what each bar represents in the graphs and specify the statistical test used. In addition, we ensured that all panels are clearly labeled. These changes improve clarity and allow readers to better interpret the data.

      (12) The methods section is comprehensive, but it would be helpful to include more specifics on the statistical analyses used. For example, the type of statistical test (e.g., t-test, ANOVA) and the software used should be mentioned for each experiment.

      Thank you for your suggestion. We have revised the Methods section (Statistical analysis) to provide more detailed information on the statistical analysis used for each experiment.

      (13) The manuscript's overall impact is weakened by the inclusion of unnecessary words and a few grammatical issues. A focused revision to tighten the language would make the major findings stand out more clearly. For example, on page 2, line 18, "in whitefly Bemisia tabaci, BtRDP is an Aleyrod..." seems to have an incomplete sentence. A thorough proofreading for typos and grammatical errors is highly recommended to improve the overall readability.

      Thank you for your suggestion. We have carefully revised the abstract and the manuscript to improve clarity, readability, and grammatical correctness. In addition, we sought the assistance of a professional English editor to thoroughly proofread and polish the manuscript, ensuring that the language meets high academic standards.

      (14) The discussion section is strong, but it could benefit from a more explicit connection between the findings and the broader ecological implications. For instance, how might the independent evolution of these effectors in different insect species impact plant-insect co-evolutionary dynamics?

      We thank the reviewer for the valuable suggestion. In the current version, we have added a paragraph in the Discussion section highlighting the broader ecological and evolutionary implications of our findings. Specifically, we discuss how the independent evolution of RLP4-targeting effectors in different insect lineages may drive plant-insect co-evolution, influence selection pressures on both plants and herbivores, and potentially shape defense diversification across plant communities. This addition helps to link our molecular findings to ecological outcomes and co-evolutionary dynamics.

      (15) The sentence on line 98, which reads " A few salivary proteins have been reported to attach to salivary sheath after secretion" seems to serve an unclear purpose in the introduction. It would be helpful for the authors to clarify its relevance to the surrounding context or to the paper's overall argument. Its inclusion currently disrupts the flow of the introduction and makes it difficult for the reader to understand its intended purpose.

      We thank the reviewer for the comment. We have revised the paragraph to clarify the relevance of salivary sheath localization to the study. Specifically, we now introduce the role of the salivary sheath as a potential scaffold for effector delivery and explicitly link previous reports of sheath-associated salivary proteins to our observation that BtRDP localizes to the salivary sheath after secretion.

      (16) The writing in lines 104-106 is both grammatically inconsistent and overly wordy. The authors switch between present and past tense ("is" and "was"), and the sentences could be made more concise to improve the clarity and flow of the text. Also check entire paper.

      We thank the reviewer for pointing this out. We have revised the sentence to improve grammatical consistency and clarity, and also checked the manuscript for similar issues. The sentence is now split into two concise statements. In addition, we have thoroughly checked the entire manuscript for similar tense inconsistencies and overly wordy sentences, and have made revisions throughout to ensure consistent past tense usage and improved readability.

      (16) The sentences on lines 111-113 are quite wordy. The core conclusion, which is that the protein affects the insect's feeding probe, could be expressed more simply and directly to improve clarity and flow. I suggest rephrasing this section to be more concise and to highlight the primary finding without the added language.

      We thank the reviewer for the helpful suggestion. We have revised the sentences to make them more concise and to emphasize the main finding that BtRDP influences the whitefly’s feeding behavior as follow: “Compared with the dsGFP control, dsBtRDP-treated B. tabaci showed a marked reduction in phloem ingestion and a longer pathway duration, indicating that BtRDP is required for efficient feeding (Fig. 2c).”

      (17) On line 118, the authors mention "subcellular location." It is not clear where the protein is localized. The authors should explicitly state the specific subcellular compartment of the protein, as this is crucial for understanding its function and interaction with other proteins.

      We thank the reviewer for this valuable comment. To clarify the subcellular localization of BtRDP, we have revised the manuscript accordingly. The transgenic line overexpressing the full-length BtRDP including the signal peptide (oeBtRDP) is expected to localize in the apoplast (extracellular space), whereas the line expressing BtRDP without the signal peptide (oeBtRDP<sup>-sp</sup>) is likely retained in the cytoplasm.

      (18) Lines 121-128, the description of the fecundity and choice assays in this section is overly wordy. The authors should present the main conclusion of these experiments more directly and concisely. The key finding is that the protein affects feeding behavior; this central point is somewhat lost in the detailed, and sometimes repetitive, phrasing.

      We thank the reviewer for this suggestion. In the revised manuscript, we have simplified the description of the fecundity and two-choice assays to highlight the main conclusion as follow: “Fecundity and two-choice assays showed that BtRDP, whether localized in the apoplast (oeBtRDP) or cytoplasm (oeBtRDP<sup>-sp</sup>), enhanced whitefly settling and oviposition compared with EV controls (Fig. 2d-i; Fig. S10), indicating that BtRDP promotes whitefly feeding behavior regardless of its subcellular location.”

      (19) Line 148, the manuscript mentions experiments involving transformation, but the transformation efficiency is not provided. Please include the transformation efficiency for all transformation experiments, as this is crucial for the reproducibility of the results.

      We thank the reviewer for raising this point. We would like to clarify that no transformation experiments were performed in this section. The experiments described involved Y2H screening using BtRDP<sup>-sp</sup> as a bait to identify interacting proteins from a N. benthamiana cDNA library. Therefore, there is no transformation efficiency to report.

      (20) Line 159, the manuscript refers to a sequence similarity around line 159 but does not provide the specific data. It is important to show the actual sequence similarity, perhaps in a supplementary figure or table, to support the claims being made.

      We thank the reviewer for this suggestion. To support our statement regarding sequence similarity, we have added the corresponding alignment figure in the Fig. S11.

      (21) Line 159, the manuscript refers to "three randomly selected salivary proteins." It is unclear from where these proteins were selected. The authors should clarify the source of this selection (e.g., a specific database or a previous study) to ensure the methodology is transparent and the results are reproducible.

      We thank the reviewer for raising this point. These proteins were selected based on previously reports (10.1093/molbev/msad221; 10.1111/1744-7917.12856). In the current version, we provide the accession of these proteins in the MS.

      (22) Line 160, the description "NtcCf9 without signal peptide and transmembrane domains" is difficult to understand. It would be clearer and more consistent to use a term like "truncated NtcCf9" and then specify which domains were removed, as this is a standard practice in molecular biology for describing protein constructs.

      We thank the reviewer for this suggestion. We have revised the manuscript to describe the construct as “truncated NtCf9” and specified that the signal peptide and transmembrane domains were removed

      (23) The phrase "incubated with anti-flag beads" on line 172 is a detail of a routine method. Such details are more appropriate for the Methods section rather than the main text, which should focus on the results and their implications. Please remove such descriptions from the main text to improve readability and flow.

      We thank the reviewer for this suggestion. We have removed the methodological detail from the main text to improve readability. We also check this throughout the MS.

      I am excited about the potential of this work and look forward to seeing the current version.

      We sincerely thank the reviewer for the positive feedback and encouragement. We appreciate your time and thoughtful comments.

      Reviewer #2 (Public review):

      Summary:

      The authors tested an interesting hypothesis that white flies and planthoppers independently evolved salivary proteins to dampen plant immunity by targeting a receptor-like protein.

      Strengths:

      The authors used a wide range of methods to dissect the function of the white fly protein BtRDP and identify its host target NtRLP4.

      Thank you very much for your comments. We have carefully revised the MS following your valuable suggestions and comments.

      Weaknesses:

      (1) Serious concerns about protein work.

      I did not find the indicated protein bands for anti-BtRDP in Figures 1a and 1b in the original blot pictures shown in Figure S30. In Figure 1a, I can't get the point of showing an unspecific protein band with a size of ~190 kD as a loading control for a protein of ~ 30 kD.

      The data discrepancy led me to check other Western blot pictures. Similarly, Figures 2d, 3b, 3d, and S15b (anti-Myc) do not correspond to the original blots shown. In addition, the anti-Myc blot in Figure 4i, all blot pictures in Figures 5b, 5h, and S19a appeared to be compressed vertically. These data raised concerns about the quality of the manuscript.

      Blots shown in Figure 3d, 4f, 4g, and 4h appeared to be done at a different exposure rate compared to the complete blot shown in Figure S30. The undesirable connection between Western blot pictures shown in the figures and the original data might be due to the reduced quality of compressed figures during submission. Nevertheless, clarification will be necessary to support the strength of the data provided.

      We sincerely thank the reviewer for carefully examining our Western blot data and for pointing out these inconsistencies. The discrepancy between the figures in the main text and the original blots (Figure S30) resulted from an oversight during manuscript revision. This manuscript had undergone multiple rounds of revision after submission to another journal. During this process, the main figures and supplementary figures were updated separately, and we mistakenly failed to replace the original blot files with the corresponding current versions.

      For the different exposure rate, the blots shown in the main text were adjusted for overall contrast and brightness to enhance band visibility and presentation clarity, whereas the original images in Figure S30 were raw, unprocessed scans directly from the imaging system. For example, in the Author response image 1 below, to visualize the loading of the input sample, the output figure was adjusted for overall contrast and brightness. This was acceptable for image processing (https://www.nature.com/nature-portfolio/editorial-policies/image-integrity)

      Author response image 1.

      The same figure with brightness and contrast changes across the entire image.

      For the vertical compression, in the previous version, some images were vertically compressed for layout purposes to make the composite figures appear more visually balanced. However, after consulting relevant publication guidelines, we realized that such one-dimensional compression is not encouraged by certain journals as it may alter the original aspect ratio of the image. Therefore, in the manuscript, we have avoided any non-proportional scaling and retained the original aspect ratio of all images.

      We have now carefully rechecked all Western blot data, replaced the outdated raw blot images with the correct corresponding ones, avoid vertical compression, and ensured that the processed figures in the main text match their original data. The revised supplementary figures now accurately reflect the raw experimental results.

      (2) Misinterpretation of data.

      I am afraid the authors misunderstood pattern-triggered immunity through receptor-like proteins. It is true that several LRR-type RLPs constitutively associate with SOBIR1, and further recruit BAK1 or other SERKs upon ligand binding. One should not take it for granted that every RLP works this way. To test the hypothesis that NtRLP4 confers resistance to B.tabaci infestation, the author compared transcriptional profiles between an EV plant line and an RLP4 overexpression line. If I understood the methods and figure legends correctly, this was done without B. tabaci treatment. This experimental design is seriously flawed. To provide convincing genetic evidence, independent mutant lines (optionally independent overexpression lines) in combination with different treatments will be necessary. Otherwise, one can only conclude that overexpressing the RLP4 protein generated a nervous plant. In addition, ROS burst, but not H2O2 accumulation, is a common immune response in pattern-triggered immunity.

      We agree with the reviewer that not every RLP functions through the same mechanism as the canonical SOBIR1–BAK1 pathway. In the current version, we further examined the interaction between the whitefly salivary protein and SOBIR1, and found that they do not interact. However, our interaction assays clearly demonstrated that NtRLP4 does interact with SOBIR1. Whether NtRLP4 functions through, or exclusively through, SOBIR1 remains uncertain, and we have emphasized this limitation in the Discussion section as follow: “Although NtRLP4 interacts with SOBIR1, this alone does not confirm that it operates strictly through this canonical module. Evidence from other RLPs shows that co-receptor usage can be flexible, and some RLPs function partly or conditionally independent of SOBIR1 [39]. Therefore, a more definitive assessment of NtRLP4 signaling will therefore require genetic dissection of its co-receptor dependencies, including but not limited to SOBIR1.”

      Regarding the transcriptome analysis, our original aim was to explore why B. tabacishowed such a pronounced preference among tobacco plants. As this preference was assessed using uninfested plants, we also performed transcriptome sequencing using plants without B. tabaci treatment. The enrichment analysis demonstrated that the majority of up-regulated DEGs were associated with plant–pathogen interaction, environmental adaptation, MAPK signaling, and signal transduction pathways, while down-regulated DEGs were enriched in glutathione, carbohydrate, and amino acid metabolism. Notably, many DEGs were annotated as RLK/RLPs or WRKY transcription factors, most of which were upregulated, suggesting an enhanced defense state in the NtRLP4-overexpressing plants. The altered expression of JA- and SA-related genes (e.g., upregulation of FAD7 and downregulation of PAL and NPR1) further supported this enhanced defense and hormonal crosstalk. We agree that combining overexpression or knockout lines with insect infestation treatments would provide more direct genetic evidence for NtRLP4-mediated resistance, and we have acknowledged this as an important future direction. Nevertheless, our current data are consistent with the conclusion that NtRLP4 overexpression confers increased resistance to B. tabaci infestation.

      Finally, DAB staining for H<sub>2</sub>O<sub>2</sub> accumulation is also a well-established indicator of PTI responses, and many studies have shown that overexpression of salivary elicitors can trigger such accumulation.

      (3) Lack of logic coherence.

      The written language needs substantial improvement. This impeded the readability of the work. More importantly, the logic throughout the manuscript appeared scattered. The choice of testing protein domains for protein-protein interactions, using plants overexpressing an insect protein to study its subcellular localization, switching back and forth between using proteins with signal peptides and without signal peptides, among others, lacks a clear explanation.

      We appreciate the reviewer’s careful reading and valuable comments regarding the logical coherence of our manuscript.

      (1) To improve the English quality, the entire manuscript has been professionally edited by a certified language-editing service.

      (2) Regarding the rationale for testing protein domains in the protein–protein interaction assays: NtRLP4 is a membrane-anchored receptor-like protein composed of extracellular, transmembrane, and short intracellular domains. We aimed to determine which region of NtRLP4 is responsible for interacting with the salivary protein, as this would help infer the likely site of interaction in planta. In addition, not all RLPs contain a malectin-like domain, and we sought to verify whether the BtRDP–NtRLP4 interaction depends on this domain. To enhance the logical flow, we introduced a brief statement explaining the experimental purpose before presenting the interaction assays in the current version as follow: “These findings raised the question of which domain of NtRLP4 is responsible for binding BtRDP, as identifying the interacting domain could help infer where the salivary protein contacts the receptor in planta. We therefore dissected the NtRLP4 domains accordingly.”

      (3) With respect to using plants overexpressing an insect protein to examine subcellular localization: since both the brown planthopper and the whitefly are non-model species for which stable genetic transformation is technically unfeasible, many previous studies have used Agrobacterium-mediated transient expression or transgenic plant systems to investigate the subcellular localization of insect salivary proteins within host cells. Following these precedents, our study also employed plant systems to determine the localization of the insect protein and to assess how different localizations affect plant defense responses.

      (4) As for switching between constructs with or without signal peptides: the subcellular localization of effectors can influence their biological activity and interactions. Previous studies have used the presence or absence of signal peptides, or replacement with a PR1 signal peptide, to direct protein targeting (for example, Frontiers in Plant Science, 2022, 13:813181). Because salivary sheaths are generally considered to localize in the apoplastic space, we generated two transgenic N. tabacum lines overexpressing BtRDP: one carrying the full-length coding sequence including the signal peptide (oeBtRDP), expected to be secreted into the apoplast, and another lacking the signal peptide (oeBtRDP-sp), likely retained in the cytoplasm. In the current version, we clarified this rationale and added references to similar studies to improve the manuscript’s logic and readability. Details are as follow: “To investigate the role of BtRDP in different subcellular location of host plants, we constructed two transgenic N. tabacum lines overexpressing BtRDP: one carrying the full-length coding sequence including the signal peptide (oeBtRDP), which is expected to be secreted into the apoplast (extracellular space), and the other lacking the signal peptide (oeBtRDP<sup>-sp</sup>), which is likely retained in the cytoplasm.”

      Reviewer #3 (Public review):

      Summary:

      In this study, Wang et al. investigate how herbivorous insects overcome plant receptor-mediated immunity by targeting plant receptor-like proteins. The authors identify two independently evolved salivary effectors, BtRDP in whiteflies and NlSP694 in brown planthoppers, that promote the degradation of plant RLP4 through the ubiquitin-dependent proteasome pathway. NtRLP4 from tobacco and OsRLP4 from rice are shown to confer resistance against herbivores by activating defense signaling, while BtRDP and NlSP694 suppress these defenses by destabilizing RLP4 proteins.

      Strengths:

      This work highlights a convergent evolutionary strategy in distinct insect lineages and advances our understanding of insect-plant coevolution at the molecular level.

      Thank you very much for your comments. We have carefully revised the MS following your valuable suggestions and comments.

      Weaknesses:

      (1) I found the naming of BtRDP and NlSP694 somewhat confusing. The authors defined BtRDP as "B. tabaci RLP-degrading protein," whereas NlSP694 appears to have been named after the last three digits of its GenBank accession number (MF278694, presumably). Is there a standard convention for naming newly identified proteins, for example, based on functional motifs or sequence characteristics? As it stands, the inconsistency makes it difficult for readers to clearly distinguish these proteins from those reported in other studies.

      Thank you for your comment. These are species-specific salivary proteins that have not been reported or annotated in previous studies. Because no homologous genes could be identified in other species, there are no existing names or annotations for these proteins. For such lineage-specific salivary proteins, it is common in recent studies to name them according to their experimentally identified functions. For example, a recently reported salivary protein was named SR45-interacting salivary protein (SISP) based on its function (10.1111/nph.70668). Following this convention, we adopted a similar functional naming strategy in this study. We acknowledge that there may not yet be a standardized rule for naming such proteins, and we would be glad to follow a more authoritative naming guideline if possible.

      (2) Figure 2 and other figures. Transgenic experiments require at least two independent lines, because results from a single line may be confounded by position effects or unintended genomic alterations, and multiple lines provide stronger evidence for reproducibility and reliability.

      We appreciate the reviewer’s suggestion. In our study, two independent transgenic lines were used to ensure the reproducibility and reliability of the results. One representative line was presented in the main figures, while data from the second independent line were included in the supplementary figures. To make this clearer, we have emphasized in the manuscript that bioassays were conducted using two independent transgenic lines.

      (3) Figure 3e. Quantitative analysis of NtRLP4 was required. Additionally, since only one band was observed in oeRLP, were any tags included in the construct?

      Thank you for your comment. In the current version, quantitative analysis of NtRLP4 expression has been performed and is now presented in Figure 3. For the oeRLP plants, no tag was fused to NtRLP4; thus, anti-RLP serum was used to detect the target bands. In contrast, oeBtRDP and oeBtRDP-sp were fused with C-terminal FLAG tags, and their detection was carried out using anti-FLAG serum. This information has been clarified in the revised Methods section as follows: “The oeBtRDP and oeBtRDP<sup>-sp</sup> were fused with C-terminal FLAG tags, while no tag was fused to oeNtRLP4.”

      (4) Figure 4a. The RNAi effect appears to be well rescued in Line 1 but poorly in Line 2. Could the authors clarify the reason for this difference?

      Thank you for pointing this out. We also noticed that the RNAi effect appeared to be better rescued in Line 2 than in Line 1. Based on our measurements, the silencing efficiency of NtRLP4 in RNAi-RLP4 Line 1 was markedly weaker than in Line 2, which likely explains the difference in rescue efficiency. In the current version, we have clarified this point as follows: “Both RNAi-RLP lines showed reduced NtRLP4 levels compared with EV plants, with RNAi-RLP#2 exhibiting a stronger silencing effect (Fig. S19a).” “The differential rescue effect between the two RNAi lines likely resulted from their different NtRLP4 silencing efficiencies, with the lower NtRLP4 level in RNAi-RLP#2 leading to a more complete rescue phenotype.”

      (5) ROS accumulation is shown for only a single leaf. A quantitative analysis of ROS accumulation across multiple samples would be necessary to support the conclusion. The same applies to Figure 16f.

      Thank you for pointing this out. The H<sub>2</sub>O<sub>2</sub> accumulation experiments have been repeated for 5 times in Figure 4 and Figure S16f. In the current version, we addressed that “the experiment is repeated five times with similar results” in the figure legends.

      (6) Figure 4f: NtRLP4 abundance was significantly reduced in oeBtRDP plants but not in oeBtRDP-SP. Although coexpression analysis suggests that BtRDP promotes NtRLP4 degradation in an ubiquitin-dependent manner, the reduced NtRLP4 levels may not result from a direct interaction between BtRDP and NtRLP4. It is possible that BtRDP influences other factors that indirectly affect NtRLP4 abundance. The authors should discuss this possibility.

      Thank you for your valuable suggestion. We agree that the reduced NtRLP4 abundance may not necessarily result from a direct interaction between BtRDP and NtRLP4. In the manuscript, we have further discussed this possibility as follows: “Notably, BtRDP and NlSP104 shared no sequence or structural similarity and lack resemblance to known eukaryotic ubiquitin-ligase domains. Their interaction with RLP4s occurs in the extracellular space (Fig. 3d; Fig. 5c), whereas the ubiquitin-proteasome system primarily functions in the cytosol and nucleus [46]. Furthermore, NtRLP4 reduction is observed only in oeBtRDP transgenic plants, not in oeBtRDP-sp plants (Fig. 4f), suggesting that BtRDP exerts its influence on NtRLP4 in the extracellular space. These observations collectively argue against the possibility that BtRDP or NlSP694 possesses intrinsic E3 ligase activity capable of directly ubiquitinating RLP4s within plant cells. Importantly, the reduced NtRLP4 levels may not result from a direct physical interaction between BtRDP and NtRLP4. Instead, BtRDP may indirectly affect RLP4 post-translational modification, thereby accelerating its degradation, which warrants further investigation”

      (7) The statement in lines 335-336 that 'Overexpression of NtRLP4 or NtSOBIR1 enhances insect feeding, while silencing of either gene exerts the opposite effect' is not supported by the results shown in Figures S16-S19. The authors should revise this description to accurately reflect the data.

      Thank you for pointing this out. We agree that our original statement was not precise, as we measured the insect settling preference and oviposition on transgenic plants, but did not directly assess the feeding behavior of B. tabaci. Therefore, we have revised the description in the manuscript to more accurately reflect our data as follows: “Overexpression of NtRLP4 or NtSOBIR1 in N. tabacum is attractive to B. tabaci and promotes insect reproduction, whereas silencing of either gene exerts the opposite effect.”

      (8) BtRDP is reported to attach to the salivary sheath. Does the planthopper NlSP694 exhibit a similar secretion localization (e.g., attachment to the salivary sheath)? The authors should supplement this information or discuss the potential implications of any differences in secretion localization between BtRDP and NlSP694 for their respective modes of action.

      Thank you for your insightful suggestion. We agree that determining the secretion localization of NlSP694 would provide valuable information for understanding its potential mode of action. Immunohistochemical (IHC) staining is indeed a critical approach for such analysis. However, in this study, we were unable to express NlSP694 in Escherichia coli, and the antibody generated using a synthesized peptide did not show sufficient specificity or sensitivity for IHC detection. Consequently, we were unable to determine whether NlSP694 is attached to the salivary sheath. Therefore, whether BtRDP and NlSP694 acted in different mode require further investigation.

      Recommendations for the authors:

      Reviewer #3 (Recommendations for the authors):

      (1) Figure 1e. The BtRDP-labeled fluorescent signal is difficult to discern. An enlarged view of the target region would be helpful for clarity.

      Thank you for your suggestion. In the current version, an enlarged view of the target region was provided below the figure.

      (2) The finding that BtRDP accumulates in the salivary sheath secreted by Bemisia tabaci is important for understanding the subcellular localization of this protein during actual insect feeding. I suggest moving Figure S5 to the main text.

      Thank you for your suggestion. Figure S5 has been moved to Fig. 1f in the current version.

      (3) Please carefully cross-check the figure numbering to ensure that all in-text citations correspond to the correct figures and panels. i.e., lines 136,188,192, and 194.

      Thank you for pointing this out. We corrected them in the current version.

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      Evidence, reproducibility and clarity

      This study builds upon previous work in schizophrenia and other disorders using fibroblasts derived from patients, assessing mitochondrial phenotypes and then using these to identify compounds which reverse these phenotypes. The study is one of the largest of its kind performed to date with 168 patients included. The authors undertake mitochondrial phenotyping and machine learning of the outputted images to be segregate the patients based on clinical features and the associated cellular phenotype. The authors then go on to screening virtually publicly available datasets of cancer cells treated with compounds and also genetic modulations. In doing so, they can identify compounds which modulate the phenotypes and therefore might be of value to test in the patient derived lines. The study has strengths in the large number of samples, the advanced machine learning and the virtual screening. Furthermore, the authors highlight and discuss the limitations of the study well. There are some weaknesses which the authors can address. Firstly in the introduction, although it is comprehensive in some areas, in other areas for example outlining the fibroblast mitochondrial phenotype and indeed the use of patient fibroblasts to identify compounds, there is significant literature missing, particularly in Parkinson's Disease where screening in fibroblasts has resulted in compounds entering Phase 3 clinical trials. In addition to the studies using 100 or more PD patient fibroblast lines for phenotyping and patient stratification have not been included. It would be useful if the authors could comment on the robustness of the phenotypes identified in the fibroblasts over multiple passages. This is important when considering the biological and disease relevance of the phenotypes and it is not something the authors show or comment on. In discussing the genetic manipulations it would be useful to comment on the genes identified in more detail particularly those which are not known to be associated with changes in mitochondrial phenotypes.

      Significance

      This study builds on work from multiple labs investigating the utility of fibroblasts to identify phenotypes and find potential novel therapeutics. The size of the cohort and the advanced machine learning methods are a particular strength and this advances the field in this area. The availability of the data and code is a strength to allow others to replicate the findings. The lack of experimental validation of any of the compounds or genes identified by the virtual screening is a weakness which could be addressed.

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      Evidence, reproducibility and clarity

      In their study, Haghighi et al. seek to build upon prior literature linking alterations in mitochondrial network distribution with various kinds of psychosis. Correlations between subcellular mitochondrial localization and different psychological states is an interesting and potentially fruitful frontier and should be explored; however, despite their ambitious strategy to screen 168 skin fibroblasts from patients experiencing psychosis, and examine various online image databases, there is a concerning number of issues related to the image-analysis approach. The foremost of these is a lack of direct measures of mitochondrial distribution, which might serve to validate their proposed MITO-SLOPE protocol. There is also a worrisome lack of robust controls, which are critical in light of how admittedly subtle some of the distribution phenotypes may be. Overall, the aim to screen differences in mitochondrial distribution is a laudable goal and, in the context of psychological disorders, could be helpful in identifying new therapeutic targets; but the methodology employed in this study does not seem to be sufficiently rigorous to be able to leverage this approach for screening purposes.

      I have extensive experience investigating mitochondria with advanced imaging technologies, including super-resolution microscopy as well as high-throughput and 4D imaging modalities. I am also familiar with standard as well as machine-learning approaches for quantifying mitochondrial morphology as well as distribution or trafficking. In my opinion, this study requires substantial revision, both in terms of the indirect and often opaque image-analysis pipeline as well as the inclusion of orthogonal experiments, which could serve to lessen concerns regarding purported differences in mitochondrial distribution, which are so difficult to discern as to be imperceptible. It is worth noting, too, that this study appears to be predicated, in many ways, upon a 2010 study (Cataldo et al.) of mitochondria in patients with bipolar disorder, which appears to reflect its own lack of critical controls for cell size.

      Major comments:

      The authors state, in the first paragraph of the results section: "By eye, we observed that samples from patients in the control and MDD categories show a more fine-grained, dispersed mitochondrial network extending to the edges of the cell, whereas patients in the categories experiencing psychosis tend to show an agglomerated, thicker network more concentrated around the nucleus. The pattern is subtle and heterogeneous across a cell population." The pattern is indeed subtle. I am concerned that it is so subtle as to be imperceptible. Firstly, it is important to note that the mitochondrial reticulum in BP, SZ, and SZA is more difficult to differentiate, by eye, because the signal appears to be saturated in places, such that the boundaries of individual mitochondria are indistinguishable due to differences in contrast or possibly from the fluorescence intensity itself. Although the authors indicate in the legend that the intensity of the mitochondrial fluorescence was adjusted "for visual clarity," it appears that the contrast needs to be decreased in the BP, SZ, and SZA conditions. It is also important to note that MitoTrackers load into mitochondria in a membrane-potential-dependent fashion. Did the authors detect differences in membrane potential between these groups? While imaging, was the same laser power and gain utilized from condition to condition? With this being said, it is not clear that mitochondria in control and MDD categories have different morphologies from the other conditions. It is also not clear what "fine-grained" means in this context. Is this a comment on aspect ratio? If so, it would be better to use standard terminology. (Why are there large red circular structures in the nucleus? These are likely not mitochondria, so why are they showing up in the channel with MitoTracker?) It is also not evident that one condition has more dispersed mitochondria than another. Given that the authors appear to be making this a central claim of their manuscript, it would seem appropriate to highlight specifically the regions of the different cells that they believe exhibit meaningful differences. If I attempt to look at the merged image, which is important because it is really the only way that one can gauge the relative distance of the mitochondrial network from the edge of the cell, there would seem to be no obvious differences between the conditions. Another key point that I think important to mention, given that it is frequently referenced in this manuscript, Cataldo et al., 2010 indicate that mitochondria in patient fibroblasts with bipolar disorder (BD) are more perinuclear than those in control. However, a cursory inspection of the images from this study (e.g., Figure 2A-B; Figure 4A-D; and Figure 6A-H) unambiguously demonstrate that the BD cells are smaller than the control cells. Of course, if the cells are smaller, the distance from the nucleus will tend to be shorter. In Cataldo et al., 2010, the authors state, "We also measured cell area, cell length, cell width, and cell perimeter of the fibroblasts used in this analysis to verify that the observed mitochondrial distributional differences were not simply a result of BD cells being smaller, shorter, or fatter. No significant differences in any of these measurements were seen based on diagnosis after two sample t tests." Notably, the data is not shown, so it is difficult to appreciate what the variance of the population of cells from control and BD would look like, but it must be said, nevertheless, that the representative images in this paper all point to the BD cells being smaller. In light of this, it would be helpful if Haghighi et al. could add scale bars to all the images (e.g., in Figure 2), so readers can ascertain whether all the cells are portrayed at the same scale and are of similar areas.

      As the authors indicate, interpretable measures of mitochondrial morphology include values like size and shape. It is concerning, therefore, that Figure 3 purports to identify a number of significantly different mitochondrial "features" in the patient groups experiencing psychosis, but they do not appear to make an effort to clarify how any of these features might reflect ground truths of mitochondrial architecture, which can be understood directly by values such as aspect ratio, circularity, area, number organelles, number of nodes or branching points in a network, etc. Unless the authors can specifically tie their machine-learning classifications to standard mitochondrial shape descriptors, their classifications will remain opaque and therefore of limited credibility or value. One way to improve the validation of their machine-learning classification methods would be to use empirically sound methods for manipulating a mitochondrial morphology and distribution, which could serve as positive or negative controls. For example, treatment of cells with the uncoupler FCCP would induce mitochondrial fragmentation, treatment with cycloheximide results in stress-induced mitochondrial hyperfusion (SIMH), or treatment with Nocodazole would block mitochondrial trafficking. Treating control cells with these chemicals would help to establish baseline measurements for how far the patient cells are deviating from untreated controls, in one direction or another. Such considerations, I think, are especially important when the mitochondrial phenotypes are so subtle. I agree with the authors' argument that, for the purposes of screening, it is best to focus on a single metric. Based on their apparent discernment of the subtle differences in mitochondrial distribution in patients experiencing psychosis, they opted to examine possible differences in network density. To this end, they developed "MITO-SLOPE." Out of multiple categories of features, they highlight the following as the most powerful for establishing differences in mitochondrial network density:

      "(a) A subset of texture measures in the nuclei and cytoplasm area of the mito channel. (b) A subset of features measuring the intensity of the mitochondria area across the cell."

      Within the concentric bins around the cell nuclei, they measure:

      • FracAtD: Fraction of total stain in an object at a given radius.
      • MeanFrac: Mean fractional intensity at a given radius, calculated as the fraction of total intensity normalized by the fraction of pixels at a given radius.
      • RadialCV: Coefficient of variation of intensity within a ring, calculated across 8 slices."

      While the authors have recommended the use of a single metric for purposes of screening, MITO-SLOPE appears to represent a bundle of metrics, which, in the end, do not amount to a clear readout of what is being measured. From my point of view, if one were interested in measuring mitochondrial distribution, then, in an ideal situation, one would measure the average distance of all the mitochondria from the center of the nucleus. And, since the size of the cell is critical for establishing relative distances to the boundaries or periphery of the cell, one would normalize this metric by cellular area. Thus, the readout would be: [average mitochondrial distance from the nuclear center (µm)]/[cellular area (µm2)]. An even simpler metric could be: [average mitochondrial distance from nuclear center (µm)]/[average cytoplasmic radius (µm)]. When talking about mitochondrial distribution, we typically think in terms of where is the mitochondrial network, on average, in relation to the nucleus (perinuclear) or to the edge of the cell (peripheral). By quantifying the actual mean distance of the mitochondrial network in relation to both the nucleus and the bona fide cell extremities, via the metrics I described above, one can obtain direct measurements of the truly meaningful values related to mitochondrial distribution. It seems deviating from these approaches introduces more and more opportunities for confounding variables.

      However, the MITO-SLOPE analysis does not seem to consider this metric. Is this, or a similar variation, not the most direct way to establish differences in the mitochondrial network distribution? I would, of course, at least want to see a discussion of why the authors have not chosen to use the most direct form of quantification for this purely spatial value. Why opt for a multifaceted measurement of a relatively straightforward quantity, when a simpler form of quantification would not only suffice but arguably be more likely to capture the ground truth? With this being said, it is not clear to me why, within MITO-SLOPE there seems to be a reliance on measuring the "intensity" of the mitochondria. (And what intensity is it? Mean intensity per ROI?) Of course, particularly if MitoTrackers were used for staining mitochondria, there will be heterogeneity in fluorescence intensity from organelle to organelle, which introduces potential confounders into the workflow. Furthermore, as indicated above, to know if the subcellular distribution of mitochondria is truly altered, it is essential to know if the cell size has likewise changed. Therefore, any unbiased measure of mitochondrial distribution must take into consideration the size of the cell; however, based on the information provided about MITO-SLOPE, it does not appear that the authors are accounting for possible variations in cell size that might account for alterations in mitochondrial network distribution - i.e., a smaller cell will have a more constrained area in which mitochondria will be able to disperse - thus, not accounting for cell size (area) will yield ambiguous results. For example, how can we know if mitochondrial motility is impaired or if the cell is simply smaller and there is less space in which to move? Another complexity, here, is if the cell boundaries were not accounted for via staining of actin, etc., then establishing a true cell boundary will be very challenging. How many bins are sufficient to capture the whole cell? Just 12? Furthermore, human fibroblasts have a tendency to be quite large (sometimes several hundred microns from end to end); how can the authors account for the whole cell, particularly in cases where part of the cell is beyond the field of view or cells are growing on top of each other, as is often the case?

      In Figure 6, there is no control image that could be used as a frame of reference. I have extensive experience imaging A549 cells. The mitochondria in these images appear to be highly fragmented. The staining patterns, particularly of the cells treated with divalproex-sodium, are quite dim, indicating mitochondrial depolarization. Of course, depolarization affects the fluorescence intensity of mitochondria stained with vital dyes, such as MitoTrackers, which will, in turn, presumably affect the values obtained from MITO-SLOPE, which appear to rely on intensity gradients, rather than more concrete spatial coordinates. Also, as indicated above, it is unclear how the authors are establishing the edges of cells without a marker of the plasma membrane or cytoskeleton.

      The authors note that "Divalproex-sodium is a benzodiazepine receptor agonist and HDAC inhibitor (Rahman et al. 2025) used to manage a variety of seizure disorders (Willmore 2003) and bipolar disorder(Bond et al. 2010; Cipriani et al. 2013); it shows a positive MITO-SLOPE which is the direction expected to normalize the centralized mitochondrial localization associated with psychosis." Insofar as this recommends the drug for use in "normalizing" perinuclear mitochondria within neurons, it would seem only prudent to mention that this drug also appears to induce mitochondrial depolarization and fragmentation, which are both associated with a range of severe human pathologies. I would caution the authors to not highlight one potential benefit while omitting an obvious side effect involving what appears to be significant perturbation of mitochondrial structure and function. What is the point of normalizing mitochondrial distribution if the mitochondria being redistributed are dysfunctional?

      The authors note, in Figure 7, that their MITO-SLOPE analysis was unable to discern a statistically significant difference in cells with specific knockouts of genes associated with mitochondrial trafficking. If the MITO-SLOPE cannot discern a difference in the context of a substantial abrogation of mitochondrial transport capacity, how is it that it could detect meaningful differences where there is only a "subtle" change in distribution? This result would seem to militate strongly against the efficacy of this analysis pipeline and would not recommend its use for unbiased screening and discovery.

      Minor comments:

      For Figure 6 b and c, "µm" should be "µM."

      The introduction and discussion could be more concise.

      Significance

      This study attempts to fill an important gap in knowledge relating to mitochondrial distribution and psychological disorders. It aims to perform an initial screen to try to validate a novel analysis pipeline called MITO-SLOPE, however, the study appears to lack analytical rigor, both in terms of the underlying cell biology together with the approach for quantification, itself. Conceptually, this study has great promise, but the authors will need to improve their pipeline prior to publication, which will likely require fundamental revisions, including an array of orthogonal measures (largely lacking here) as well as detailed demonstrations of how the segmentation actually works and ultimately yields data reflecting demonstrable mitochondrial trafficking/distribution defects.

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      Evidence, reproducibility and clarity

      Summary:

      The manuscript by Haghighi and McPhie et al. builds upon their previous findings by exploring the mitochondrial localization as a disease-associated phenotype in mental disorders, particularly in psychotic disorders. They recruited a cohort of patients diagnosed with schizophrenia, schizoaffective disorder, bipolar disorder and MDD. By taking advantage of skin biopsies, they screened patient-derived fibroblasts for aberrant mitochondrial localization and morphology using common staining techniques. Then, they use a machine learning approach to classify patients into their respective groups, which was effective for BP, SZA and pooled psychotic patients. Authors then develop a single feature for phenotyping, Mito-SLOPE, a metric of mitochondria density distribution across a cell by radial areas. With this metric, psychotic patients tend to have more nuclear-localized than edge-localized mitochondria; whereas MDD patients show a trend for higher edge-to-nucleus distribution. To find candidate drugs, authors screen publicly available datasets of cells treated with small compounds using mito-SLOPE. Furthermore, authors then apply mitoSLOPE on a CRISPR screen dataset, showcasing the role of mitochondrial dynamics genes and three genes of interest because of their association with psychosis. Finally, they identified the top genes whose KO or overexpression may explain (or reverse) the mitoSLOPE phenotype.

      Overall, the manuscript is well-written, the conclusions are supported within their limitations and this work represents an advancement in the field. I recommend it for publication provided these concerns are addressed:

      Major comments:

      1. The mitoSLOPE measure is very interesting and most likely reflects a subtle changes in mitochondrial transport. How does the microtubule network look like in the patient fibroblasts, are there obvious alterations in e.g. their posttranslational modifications? Is there a difference in mito transport speed or pausing frequency?
      2. I concur with the exclusion of compounds that obviously alter cell shape, as the authors mention for the cancer therapeutics. Some cancer therapeutics actually affect microtubule dynamics (see 1st point), which may underlie their effect on both cell shape and mitoSLOPE. To undertand the mechanism of action, the top hits should also be tested for the integrity of the microtubular network and mitochondrial transport parameters.
      3. While I agree with the authors' reasoning that the observed phenotype could be a result of the disease or the result of a compensatory mechanism, their hypothesis could be experimentally tested by addition of any of the top hits in order to reverse mitoSLOPE in their patient cell lines. It may not have worked for Lithium in their last manuscript, but the mechanism of action of the novel compounds could be cell intrinsic.
      4. Does recreation of the CRISPR cell line in their hands produce the same phenotype?
      5. Additionally, the observed phenotypes could also be a product of the medication taken by the patients. Deeper patient data from the cohort may be relevant to put the findings in context. How were patients diagnosed? Which medications were the patients taking? Was substance abuse present? In Mertens et al, Lithium responders and Lithium non-responders showed a differential mitochondrial response, how does this affect their dataset?
      6. While MDD itself is not a psychotic disorder, it can still present with psychotic features. Was this evaluated during the recruitment? Also important, were they on antipsychotic medication in addition to antidepressant therapy?
      7. The fact that CACNA1C is excluded from the "unbiased" hit discovery (Fig 8) undermines the power of the filtering criteria selected by the authors. Authors should include some discussion around this.

      Minor comments:

      1. Colored images should be made colorblind-accessible. This applies to microscopy images and graphs.
      2. Fig 3: Exact p-values should be reported in the graphs
      3. Fig. 5 and Fig 7a-b: It is not immediately clear what the lines in these graphs represent. Is it the individual drug/gene hits in a pre-ranked manner?
      4. Fig 6 b-c: should the "m" be capitalized for Molarity?
      5. The annotation of divalproex/valproic acid as a "benzodiazepine receptor agonist" is incorrect. While it is known to enhance GABAergic neurotransmission, the mechanism is supported to be through GABA synthesis rather than being a GABA-A receptor agonist (see eg. PMID: 23407051).
      6. Supplementary Fig 3 and 4 could be swapped to match the main text order.
      7. One reference was inaccessible: Anon, Phenomics-Enabled Discovery and Optimization of Small Molecule RBM39 Degraders as Alternative to CDK12 Targeting in High-Grade Serious Ovarian Cancer (HGSOC).

      Significance

      Recently, mitochondria have emerged as mediators of anxious behavior and are increasingly studied in the context of neuropsychiatric disorders. However, the molecular mechanisms that connect altered mitochondrial performance to specific neuropathological conditions are unknown. This study extends our knowledge in this realm. While it is in principle an extension of earlier work from the authors (Cataldo, A.M. et al. Am. J. Pathol. 2010), it has added value due to the application of their automated analysis to publicly available datasets, providing a clear technical advance. This identified known as well as novel compounds that could revert the mitochondrial phenotype and makes this study specifically interesting to an audience interested in translational research. The strength of the manuscript certainly lies in the large number of examples studied and their well-rounded discussion of their findings. It is limited by the fact that the phenotype of neuropsychiatric conditions is studied in peripheral cells, and thus may not be a simple cell-autonomous response but a compensatory, systemic response that is not easy to replicate in a fibroblast in isolation. No mechanistic insight is gained on the underlying cell biology in the current format.

    1. eLife Assessment

      This study demonstrates that endothelial toll-like receptor 4 is a central regulator of leptomeningeal inflammation in the context of neonatal E. coli meningitis. The data are derived from cell type-specific gene knockout in mice as well as from cultured endothelial cells, and are generally solid, with only minor weaknesses in analysis and interpretation. This work is important as it advances our understanding of host cellular processes and molecular pathways underlying meningitis pathogenesis.

    2. Reviewer #1 (Public review):

      Summary:

      In this manuscript, Seegren and colleagues demonstrate that in a mouse model of neonatal E. coli meningitis, loss of endothelial toll-like receptor 4 (TLR4) leads to a marked decrease in transcriptional dysregulation across multiple leptomeningeal cell types, a decrease in vascular permeability, and a decrease in macrophage abundance. In contrast, loss of macrophage TLR4 had less pronounced effects. Using cultured wild-type and TLR4-knockout endothelial cells, the authors further demonstrate that TLR4-NF-κB signaling leads to reversible internalization of the tight junction protein claudin-5, establishing a potential mechanism of increased vascular permeability. Finally, the authors use RNA-sequencing of wild-type and TLR4-knockout endothelial cells to define the TLR4-dependent cell-autonomous transcriptional response to E. coli.

      Strengths:

      (1) The authors address an important, well-motivated hypothesis related to the cellular and molecular mechanisms of leptomeningeal inflammation.

      (2) The authors use model systems (mouse conditional knockouts and cultured endothelial cells) that are appropriate to address their hypotheses. The data are of high quality.

      Weaknesses:

      (1) The authors perform single-nucleus RNA-seq on dissected leptomeninges from control and E. coli-infected mice across three genotypes (WT, Tlr4MKO, and Tlr4ECKO). A major discovery from this experiment, as summarized by the authors, is: "Tlr4ECKO mice exhibited a global attenuation of infection-induced transcriptional responses across all major leptomeningeal cell types, as judged by the positions of cell clusters in the UMAP." This conclusion could be considerably strengthened by improving the qualitative and quantitative analysis.

      (2) The authors interpret E. coli infection-induced increases in leptomeningeal sulfo-NHS-biotin as evidence of compromised BBB integrity (i.e., extravasation from the vasculature) (Results, page 7), but another possible route in this context is sulfo-NHS-biotin entry from the dura across a compromised arachnoid barrier. The complete rescue in Tlr4ECKOs is strongly suggestive that the vascular route dominates, but it would strengthen the work if the authors could assess arachnoid barrier fidelity (e.g. via immunohistochemistry). At a minimum, authors should mention that the sulfo-NHS-biotin signal in this context may represent both vascular and arachnoid barrier extravasation.

      (3) The authors state that "deletion of TLR4 prevented both NF-κB nuclear translocation and Cldn5 internalization in response to E. coli (Figure 4A-D)" (Results, page 9). In Figures 4C and D, however, there is no indicator of a statistical test directly comparing the two genotypes. A comparison of within-genotype P-values should not be used to support a genotype difference (PMID: 34726155).

      (4) In the first paragraph of the Results, the authors summarize the meningeal layers as (1) pia, (2) subarachnoid space, (3) arachnoid, and (4) dura, and then state "The second and third layers constitute the leptomeninges." This definition of leptomeninges seems to omit the pia, which is widely considered part of the leptomeninges (PMID: 37776854).

      (5) The Cdh5-CreER/+;Tlr4 fl/- mouse lacks TLR4 in all endothelial cells (i.e., in peripheral organs as well as CNS/leptomeninges), and, as the authors note, the periphery is exposed to E. coli. It would be helpful if the authors could comment in the Discussion on the possibility that peripheral effects (e.g., peripheral endothelial cytokine production, changes to blood composition as a result of changes to peripheral endothelial permeability) may contribute to the observed leptomeningeal phenotypes.

    3. Reviewer #2 (Public review):

      Summary:

      The authors use a postnatal mouse model of E. coli bacterial meningitis and a mouse brain endothelioma cell line combined with cell-type-specific gene deletion to study the function of endothelial TLR4, a cell surface receptor that recognizes gram positive bacterial wall components, in the local leptomeningeal (LPM) response with a focus on endothelial barrier breakdown mediated by TLR4. Single-cell transcriptional profiling and imaging studies using whole-mount preps of the LPM support that LPM endothelial, CD206+ local macrophage and LPM fibroblast and arachnoid barrier cell inflammatory response and is abrogated in endothelial-specific KO of TLR4, pointing to a role for endothelial TLR4 in local LPM response. Culture studies using Bend3.1 cells (a mouse brain endothelioma cell line) support a direct role for TLR4 in the bacteria-mediated inflammatory response and in internalization of Cldn5 via the endosomal-lysosomal pathway, resulting in loss of barrier integrity

      Strengths:

      The local LPM cell response in meningitis and the role of specific LPM cells in inflammation and CNS barrier breakdown have not been extensively studied, despite ample evidence for primary immune response in the meninges in human patients and in animal models. The authors employ a robust, multi-model approach using both in vivo and in vitro models with cell-type-specific knockout to study the function of TLR4 in brain endothelial cell response. The authors nicely combine functional barrier assays with IF for junctional localization in their experimental design, and they delve into potential mechanisms of Cldn5 internalization using markers of endosomal-lysosomal pathway localization. The authors also describe a new type of barrier assay using a streptavidin-coated plate upon which barrier-forming cell cultures can be placted, this could be a very useful alternative or complement to other size-selective barrier assays and presumably could work for other barrier forming cells types, likely epithelial cells.

      Weaknesses:

      (1) There are no measures of bacterial burden in peripheral organs, blood, in the LPM or brain in the TLR4 endothelial cKO mice. Lack of TLR4 in endothelial cells could prevent bacterial 'access' into the LPM and brain, essentially preventing meningitis and leading to a lack of inflammatory responses in the LPM-located cells simply because there is no bacteria present. Bacteremia may also be reduced, as might inflammatory responses in peripheral organs with TLR4-deficient peripheral endothelium. Bacterial counts and inflammatory measures in peripheral organs and blood are important to better understand the mechanism(s) underlying the reduced inflammatory profile in LPM cells and no LPM endothelial breakdown in the Tlr4 endothelial cKO mice. In other words, does deleting TLR4 in EC protect against the development of meningitis by somehow blocking bacteria access to the LPM (this would be supported by low or no CFU counts in infected Tlr4 endothelial cKO) or is it what the authors appear to propose in Figure 1J that TLF4 in EC is the only cell responding to the bacteria to trigger the immune cascade in the LPM? More data is needed to resolve this, as this is a major claim of the paper.

      (2) The authors look at the underlying cortical response (cerebral vasculature for ICAM and immune cells) but do not use markers that could identify microglia (Iba1), the primary resident immune cell (CD206 is not useful, at this stage, in perivascular macrophages that are extremely sparse in the postnatal brain). This would be important to better study the impact on CNS resident immune cell morphological activation.

      (3) The authors suggest that Cldn5 junctional localization is selectively disrupted upon bacterial exposure, mediated by TLR4 - they suggest this based on studying PECAM, GLUT-1, ZO-1 and B-catenin (all normally junction or cell surface located in cultured Bend3.1) in relationship to Cldn5 localization (normally high) - it is possibly these are also impact by bacteria exposure (maybe through different mechanisms?) - a better measure would be to use the similar cyto/PM measure they do for Cldn5 in Fig. 4D and to evaluate this or to use intensity measurements.

      (4) The discussion could benefit from delving more into the prior literature on E.coli-mediated breakdown of junctions in cultured human microvascular brain endothelial cell model and critical host-pathogen interactions of the bacteria with ECs (PMID: 14593586), and how this might involve TLR4.

      (5) It would be important to discuss how their results relate to earlier studies on TLR4-/- and TLR2-/- global knockout mice and protection vs vulnerability to development of meningitis (see PMCID: PMC3524395) - this paper showed that TLR4 global KO mice have increased susceptibility to die from meningitis and have much higher CFU counts in the CNS. In this manuscript and their prior work (Wang et al., 2023), this group shown that both global TLR4-/- mutants and their EC-specific KO have reduced barrier permeability, but we don't have any information about CFU or susceptibility to death from meningitis in their models.

    4. Reviewer #3 (Public review):

      Summary:

      This study investigates the molecular underpinnings of immune responses in the leptomeninges in neonatal bacterial meningitis. Bacterial meningitis is a major disease burden, particularly for neonates, and it has previously been noted that the meningeal immune environment in infants is permissive to opportunistic infection (Kim et al., Sci Immunol, 2023). There is less known about the contribution of the stromal compartment to meningeal immune responses. Seegren et al. interrogate the role of leptomeningeal endothelium in host defence in E. coli infected neonatal mice using mouse genetic tools to delete the LPS receptor Tlr4 from either endothelial cells (using Cdh5-CreER) or macrophages (using LysM-Cre). The authors use snRNAseq, cleared cortical mounts, and in vitro work to define the impact of E. coli infection on leptomeningeal endothelial cells. This study uses a range of innovative techniques to probe the role of the stromal compartment in meningitis.

      Strengths:

      This study makes excellent use of cleared cortical mounts to examine the biology of the leptomeninges, in particular, changes to the endothelium, with unprecedented detail. In combination with high-quality sequencing data provide new insights into the impact of meningitis on the leptomeninges. The data presented by the authors is of very high quality.

      Weaknesses:

      The weaknesses of the study were in terms of interpretation and perhaps study design.

      (1) Most importantly, the authors need to provide additional validation of their conditional knockout models. The authors need to confirm that the Cdh5-CreER does not impact leptomeningeal fibroblasts and to confirm gene deletion in macrophages.

      (2) The authors could also strengthen the paper by providing data on the impact of these conditional knockout models on the course of meningitis and bacterial burden.

      (3) Finally, it is perhaps not surprising that Tlr4 is required for meningitis responses with E. coli. However, it is unclear if these findings can be generalised to other, more common, meningitis infections (streptococcal/pneumococcal).

      (4) There are additional minor issues; for instance, the arachnoid fibroblast 2 population appears to closely resemble dural border cells.

      (5) The cell line model (bEnd.3) is a relatively low-fidelity model of BBB endothelial cells, and this should be acknowledged.

      With these caveats, it is difficult to be certain that the endothelium alone is the driver of meningeal immune responses in meningitis, and what the impact of these is.

    1. Contract: WAITING_FOR_AGENT 2일 (48시간) Contract: NEGOTIATING 7일

      wating for agent, negotiating 상태에서 이제 제안을 받을 수 없으므로 제안 연장에 대한 조건 필요 없음(삭제 필요)

    1. ville, identité, Paris, mémoire, Récit, espace urbain identity, Paris, city, memory, story, narrative, Architecture

      Les mots-clefs ne sont pas les mêmes en Français et en Anglais, pourquoi ?

      Cela sème un trouble déjà bien présent à la double lecture du titre et du résumé : le sujet porte-t-il sur la ville ? sur l'architecture ? la hiérarchisation et le chainage ne permet de trancher . Peut-être faudrait-il clarifier ce point et mettre titre, résumé, mots-clefs et texte au diapason l'un de l'autre !

    1. Mother noticed and her eyes looked troubled but I did not understand their meaning. Father had tightened the reins of authority and I only tried the harder to writhe myself free.

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    1. PDE4B knockout (KO) mice (46) were generated by Drs. S.-L. Catherine Jin and Marco Conti (Stanford University, CA), and kindly distributed via the Mutant Mouse Resource and Research Centers (MMRRC)

      DOI: 10.1152/ajpendo.00215.2025

      Resource: Mutant Mouse Regional Resource Center (RRID:SCR_002953)

      Curator: @AleksanderDrozdz

      SciCrunch record: RRID:SCR_002953


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