One of my earliest memories is my family coming down to Boston College to watch a football game. I still have the small BC football that my dad and I played catch with that day. I remember drinking extra hot chocolate for relief on that chilly day in Autumn and cheering with the crowd when the Eagles scored. Little did I know at the time that I would grow up to be an avid fan of professional football and even play the sport myself throughout middle school and high school. Now, when considering a subculture to learn more about here on campus, the football team is the first thing that comes to mind.
This piece of writing is a revision of my one-pager for the profile assignment, which asked us to explain which subculture we were thinking about investigating and how we will go about doing the interviews and field observations. I decided to revise this piece because this one seemed especially bland and impersonal compared other shorter pieces, so I figured it needed the most work. This entire introductory paragraph is a new revision to my one-pager for the profile essay. Especially throughout the beginning part of the semester, one of my weaknesses as a writer was that I was not personal enough. I was taught in high school to write in a formal manner and avoid using the first person at all costs. I think that being more personal in my writing is one of my most significant accomplishments as a writer this semester. Here, this short narrative provides context for why I am interested in the football team as a subculture. Before including this, it was not obvious in this piece why I liked football or cared enough to want to interview the players themselves, so I think adding this introduction helps sets up the rest of the piece.