These "Points of Discussion" questions are difficult for me to respond to out of context. I think they would be more meaningful for learners as reflection questions after conducting their own task analysis. Maybe put the activities first?

Additional "Point of Discussion": How does conducting a real-life task analysis differ from following the textbook models?

I think one of the reasons TA is so misunderstood and unused is because it's taught too formally. Most IDs I know think of task analysis less formally. They sit down with an expert, observe them performing a task, and ask questions that attempt to reveal decision points. The experts are storytellers and the designer or assessor plays the role of a curious listener/apprentice.

Suggestion: An infographic would be helpful here to illustrate the hierarchy of steps in a task analysis. (I created this graphic as an example framework based on the "Step 5: Decompose Task" section in the chapter. But I'm afraid it is too complicated. Adding an actions layer, as indicated in the section, seems like it's adding an unnecessary layer of granularity.) I was taught the Dick and Carey task analysis model: Their model is not pretty, but it's very simple to understand. You've got goals and skills to accomplish those goals. The procedure of a TA is simple: "Break down the goal 'til it can't be broke down no more."

This might be outside the scope of performing a task analysis, but I think it's also important for instructional designers to know how to use their analysis to generate instructional materials. I might include these additional steps from found here:

Step 7. Test- Confirm that the Task is Completely Analyzed.

Step 8: Applying to audience - Determine How the Skill Will be Taught According to Learner Demographics

Step 9: Facilitate - Implement Intervention and Monitoring Progress

Formatting suggestion: H3

Formatting suggestion: Consider numbering these three CTA examples. I got lost a bit after example #2.

Formatting suggestion: H3

Replace with: "How to condition"

Activity suggestion: Given a list of tasks, learners must act as detectives to gather clues to determine which tasks are most important.

This activity would be performed more easily face-to-face. Task list orders may vary among learners. Learners will be asked to justify their positions to other learners.

If online, we could build a simple data-repository inside Canvas accordion tabs--each tab representing a different data source--to help learners make inferences about task priority. The final submission would simply be an ordered list.

Alternatively, we could train a bot to simulate various data sources. It would behave like the old video game ZORK where you navigate a virtual world on your keyboard.

To make it more visual, we could build an entire office space for learners to click around and gather data. But that seems like a big investment for only part of a module-level objective. I prefer the most simple way.

In the text's current state, it's unclear to me how to situate task analysis among other tasks performed during the analysis phase of ADDIE. How is task analysis different from other tasks you bring up here, like needs assessments? What are the relationships among these analysis-related tasks? For example, do they each have unique purposes? Do all these analysis tasks happen simultaneously, or does one typically come before another? Can a designer combine these tasks into a single analysis task, leaving out any unnecessary parts?

Would it help students to know the specific purpose of each analysis-related task? Is that assumed that they are already familiar with it? An optional inline knowledge check (quiz question) might be helpful for learners. For example, a matching activity.

I think it's important to note that task analysis is ONLY used when learners require "detailed specification." Task analysis is important IF we assume that the ID's job is to tell the learner exactly what needs to be done and how. Task analysis is essential when using a behavioristic learning model. However, it may not be as applicable to more constructivist learning models.

It might be helpful to illustrate the next two steps by telling a context-rich story about an assessor who has performed step 1, and now must decide how to gather data to create a comprehensive task inventory, rate each task's importance, and gather task-associated criteria. (Not talking about decomposed subtasks yet; that's step 5.)..

Offer a concrete example of when to perform a task analysis (break down tasks to better understand what to include in instruction). Generally, it's part of a larger needs assessment that determines whether training is necessary.

Move this to its own section

Maybe move this to its own section

• for: annotate, Michael Mann - critique of James Hansen 2023 paper, climate crisis - James Hansen - Michael Mann, suggestion - debate - james hansen - michael mann, question - has Hansen responded to Mann yet?

suggestion - can we arrange an online debate between James Hansen and Michael Mann?

for - adjacency between - primary sense of cellular metabolism - experiences of deep contemplative practice of Rainbow Body - adjacency statement - As per Father Francis Tiso's research into the Tibetan deep contemplative Dzogchen phenomena of Rainbow Body at the time of death as well as rigpa, Trekcho and Togal, he speculates that - such deep contemplations can potentially result in a primary sense of cellular and even subatomic processes taking place within the human body. - https://hyp.is/go?url=http%3A%2F%2Fdocdrop.org%2Fvideo%2FsDyu39FCAMk%2F&group=world - It seems that the multi-scale competency architecture would be a good scientific framework to explore these questions.

So we're good with three-dimensional space, - but imagine if we had a primary sense of our own blood chemistry. - If you could feel your blood chemistry - the way that you currently see and smell and taste things that are around you, - I think we would have absolutely no problem having an intuitive understanding - of physiological-state space - the way we do for three-dimensional space.

claim - Lifetime practitioners of Tibetan meditation claim they have a primary sensation of their own impending death suggestion - Suggest to Michael Levin to investigate such phenomena from a multi-scale competency architecture perspective - What else can the expert meditators directly experience? And how do they achieve this? How can deep contemplative practice result in such profound experiences? Would expert meditators resonate with Levin's framework?

• for: COP - suggestion for improvement

• suggestion for improvement: COP

  • "the focus of every Cop should not be at the whim of the Presidency
    • every Cop should focus on all areas where emissions reductions are needed.
  • A system of smaller results-based meetings that focus on delivery, accountability, alignment with science, and safeguarding social justice is needed".

• for: SoNeC - SRG / TPF gamified rapid whole system change, SRG / TPF proposal

• SRG / TPF project proposals for SONEC communities

  • Emerge candidates for a global 3rd political party with no money from special interests
    • education,
    • recruitment
    • training
    • as per
      • James Hansen
        • https://hyp.is/70vs5KWoEe6GbH_T_BlQ_Q/docdrop.org/video/8Ag3UVSrlhE/
        • https://hyp.is/Oz5YqqYBEe6cW7N02P7-Pg/academic.oup.com/oocc/article/3/1/kgad008/7335889
      • Progressive International
        • https://hyp.is/N0bxsJaaEe6Nmp_cqQcA7Q/docdrop.org/video/3dxLs-zX5xA/
      • this reflects the polycrisis's entangled nature:
        • climate crisis
        • political crisis
  • Cosmolocal production network
  • Bootstrap local WEconomy via community owned cooperatives:
    • bioeconomy
      • concentrated organic produce production
      • agroforestry production
    • renewable energy
    • low cost desalinated water
  • Open citizen science project on local climate departure as proxy for economic impacts of climate change
  • Deep Humanity / BEing journeys
  • Gamified rapid whole system change via:
    • downscaled earth system boundaries and
    • doughnut economics
  • Cascading Social Tipping Point Theory
  • Youth afterschool climate activism clubs
  • Network of sustainable restaurants for meetings, talks and presentations
  • Local community economics to RELOCALIZE the economy
  • Jan 1, 2024 adders
    • Appeal to local north districts of cities
      • Wealth2Wellth program to show High Net Worth Individuals (HNWI) living in wealthy local north communities climate change trends that are occurring in realtime to show present and near future sea level rise and forest fire impacts on their expensive beachfront and forest properties respectively
    • sister ward / sister city partnerships
      • create local north / south as well as global north / south partnerships for upliftment and
        • creating more wealth in local south communities as well as wellth
        • creating more wellth in local north communities
    • climate crisis / polycrisis education and motivational speaking from top thought leaders via global audience outreach to the SoNeC global network of youth and communty SoNeC hubs
      • many ordinary people do not realize the urgency of our situation or have become so jaded. Personal interaction with leading authorities can make a difference

• for: types of initiators of community projects, SONEC - initiators of community projects, question - frameworks for community projects, suggestion - collaboration with My Climate Risk, suggestion - collaboration with U of Hawaii, suggestion - collaboration with ICICLE, suggestion - collaboration with earth commission, suggestion - collaboration with DEAL

• question: frameworks for community projects

  • If our interest is to attempt to create a global collective action campaign to address our existential polycrisis, which includes the climate crisis, then how do we mobilize at the community level in a meaningful way?

  • I suggest that this must be a cosmolocal effort. Why? Knowledge sharing across all the communities will accelerate the transition of any participating local community.

  • This means that we cannot rely on citizens living in small communities to construct an effective coordination framework for rapid de-escalation of the polycrisis. The capacity does not exist within small communities to build such a complex system. The system can be more effectively built before the collective action campaign is started by a virtual community of experts and ready for trial with pilot communities.
  • To meet this enormous challenge, it cannot be done in an adhoc way. At this point in time, many people in many communities all around the globe know of the existential crisis we face, but if we look at the annual carbon emissions, none of the existing community efforts has made a difference in their continuing escalation.
  • The knowledge required to synchronize millions of communities to have a unified wartime-scale collective action mobilization to reach decarbonization goals that the mainstream approach has not even made a dent in will be a complex problem.
  • In other words, what is proposed is a partnership.
  • Since we are faced with global commons problems that pose existential threats if not mitigated in 5 to 8 years, the scope of the problem is enormous.
  • Super wicked problems require unprecedented levels of collaboration at every level.
  • The downscaling of global planetary boundaries and doughnut economics seems the most logical way to think global, act local.

  • Building such a collaboration system requires expert knowledge. Once built, however, it requires testing in pilot communities. This is where a partnership can take place

  • 2024, Jan. 1 Adder

    • My Climate Risk Regional Hubs
      • time 29:46 of https://hyp.is/go?url=https%3A%2F%2Funfccc.int%2Fevent%2Flater-is-too-late-tipping-the-balance-from-negative-to-positive&group=world
      • https://www.wcrp-climate.org/mcr-hubs
      • Suggestion:
        • SRG has long entertained a collaborative open science project for grassroots polycrisis / climate crisis education - to measure and validate latest climate departure dates
        • This would make climate change far more salient to the average person because of the observable trends in disruption of local economic activity connected to the local ecology due to climate impacts
        • This would be a synergistic project between SRG, LCE, SoNeC, My Climate Risk hubs, ICICLE and U of Hawaii
        • Our community frameworks need to go BEYOND simply adaptation though, which is what "My Climate Risk" focuses exclusively on. We need to also engage equally in climate mitigation.
  • reference
  • I coedited this volume on examples of existing cosmolocal projects
    • https://clreader.net/

• for: James Hansen, paper - Global Warming in the Pipeline, prediction - May 2024, find - May 2024 prediction, suggestion - debate - James Hansen - Michael Mann, climate crisis - politics, climate change - politics

• Summary

  • See the Dan Miller interview in the reference below
  • The key point for SRG work in mobilizing and awakening the sleeping giant of the commons is summarized in the 3rd required action in the last sentence of his abstract:
    • "Current political crises present an opportunity for RESET, especially if young people can grasp their situation." (Bold is from SRG)

• reference

  • James Hansen Dec. 2023 interview discussing this paper
    • https://hyp.is/go?url=http%3A%2F%2Fdocdrop.org%2Fvideo%2F8Ag3UVSrlhE%2F&group=world
    • Dan Miller, who interviews Hansen and who has coauthored a paper with him, states in the interview that May 2024 is a test date for validating the paper's claims:
    • https://hyp.is/HRKEfqYAEe6lGJ_E57_9Mw/docdrop.org/video/8Ag3UVSrlhE/
    • Find
      • Identify the section in the paper that Miller is alluding to which makes the prediction about events of May 2024.
  • Michael Mann's critique of the paper
    • https://hyp.is/go?url=https%3A%2F%2Fmichaelmann.net%2Fcontent%2Fcomments-new-article-james-hansen&group=world

• for: climate crisis - air travel, climate crisis - triage approach, climate communications - SRG suggestion - energy diet

• comment

  • Kevin's use of the term triage is aligned to a Stop Reset Go strategy of reframing the challenges in the next few years in terms of a potentially temporary energy diet
  • That may be more palatable for transition for people accustomed to the existing high carbon lifestyle culture to accept
  • The potential of developing alternative energy resources plus a shift to low energy / high efficiency lifestyle could get us to the target and provide incentive for a drastic energy consumption cut

• for: SRG energy diet, climate communications - suggestion - SRG energy diet

• comment

  • This statement once again echos the idea of a temporary energy diet as a way to reframe the challenges we face
  • There are potential clean high energy density replacements for fossil fuels but they will take time to develop. Meanwhile, an energy diet is recommended
  • This means we must adapt to a much lower intensity world, at least temporarily
  • We would need to calculate the numbers to see what such a future looks like and what steps must be taken to get there

• for: degrowth - criticism - bad communication, suggestion - growth and degrowth simultaneously

• suggestion

  • evolution / transition / transformation are better terms as it indicates something is dying at the same time diverging is being born
  • it is highly misleading to think one dimensionally as there are many things that have to degrow and many things that have to grow simultaneously
    • degrowth of carbon emissions, which implies pragmatically in the short time scale noe available a significant degrowth of fossil fuels
  • growth of a new energy system to replace much of it
  • degrowth of unnecessary and harmful consumption accompanied
    • growth of holistic network of root level wellbeing activities and the low carbon infrastructure to support it

• for: suggestion - SONEC and commons transition plan

• suggestion

  • Is a synthesis of SONEC and existingCommons Transition plans worthwhile considering?
    • City of Ghent https://blog.p2pfoundation.net/a-commons-transition-plan-for-the-city-of-ghent/2017/09/14
    • City of Sydney, Australia https://wiki.p2pfoundation.net/Commons_Transition_Plan_for_the_City_of_Sydney

• for: acronyms - GCC, suggestion

• suggestion: acronyms

  • Have a table of acronyms at the start of the article
  • @Michel introduced this without defining it and I did not know the meaning when I saw it here.

Je suggère de plutôt intégrer le terme parresia en alphabet grec ici.

Puisque cette désignation a fait l'objet d'une discussion dans le chapitre précédent, je suggère de l'intégrer au corps du texte en alphabet latin (anaischyntos).<br>Je suggère de conserver l'alphabet grec lorsqu'il est question de faire référence à la formulation exacte des sources primaires, et l'alphabet latin lors de l'emploi de termes empruntés au grec.

La dernière partie du tutoriel portant sur les courbes ROC, peut-être serait-il préférable de déplacer ce tutoriel à la fin du point 3.2

• suggestion
  • we should make an official calendar

• suggestion
  • explicitly write down the entrance fee

• suggestion
  • Perhaps explicitly state this number

• Suggestion
  • Add this to the glossary of terms at the beginning of the constitution

baisent, voire fourrent

You're mixing the assignment section with the body of the text but the rest of the book isn't like that. I'd follow the format from other chapters for consistency.

This musical example is over 150 measures! I would try to have a maximum limit of one page of score to show an example. Also, the concept should be labeled on the score so we know where it happened. The assignments are the places for the students to find them on their own.

I think all the German information is making this topic more complicated than it needs to be. It's fine to make a note in a footnote, but the odds of a OpenMusicTheory reader reading theory texts in German has to be really low so I don't think it's providing much practical information, even if it's interesting.

This table is squished. Needs to be wider.

Also, can this be converted into a MuseScore example so that we can hear each type?

I think these two sentences could be combined into one with something like : "Disjunct mediants have no common tones and their quality changes, but their roots are still a third apart.

This sentence could be combined with the next one: "Chromatic mediants only have one common tone (the first chord's root) and the quality of both chords is the same."

This feels like more of a footnote. Also, I'd be fine with only using LPR and allow this footnote to explain why you've chosen a single system.

Comments about the musescore example: There is a "T" in all the German terms but it's not defined. I'm guessing it means tonic, but it would be good to clarify that.

Grade 2: The UFM, USM, LFM, LSM labels are all underneath the starting chord but it seems like it should be under the second chord. It currently looks like C major is getting a bunch of different names.

What does the "M" stand for? Mediant? I thought it was Major, but then it also occurred for minor, but the disjunct category doesn't have "M" anymore.

Might be better to break this example into three separate examples and place them in the appropriate section below. It's nice to have everything in on example, but it's also information overload.

Bass notes. This chapter doesn't discuss the role of the bass in these contexts and all the example make it look like the bass starts with a chord root and then moves to a chordal inversion. Would be nice to have some information about bass notes or at least say that the bass notes shown in the example do not reflect bass note usage in practice.

I really think dropping "Grade" throughout and just going with the category names will make everything read much smoother. This sentence could start "Diatonic mediants share two common tones ..."

It seems like there are getting two names when only one is needed. Maybe just drop the numbering system (because the numbers provide little meaning) and just use the names. "There are three types: diatonic, chromatic, and disjunct)." That would also get rid of having to write "a.k.a." all over.

Might be good to mention modal mixture here.

I'd avoid any relative terms to the location of other chapters in the book. Removing "previous" would do the trick here.

I'd avoid relative references like this. It could just start with "The third scale degree ..."

Type instead of Grade

"Chords have a mediant relationship when their roots are a third away."

Mettre une image d'en-téte ?

Insérer un lien de retour ? Ajouter une boite de sélection par DEX/DOT/BU ? (pour éviter d'avoir à parcourir tout ou pour sécuriser divulgation infos sensibles ?)

Mettre une image d'en-téte ?

Insérer un lien de retour ? Ajouter une boite de sélection par DEX/DOT/BU ? (pour éviter d'avoir à parcourir tout ou pour sécuriser divulgation infos sensibles ?)

Ceci ne s'apprente-t-il pas à une forme de modélisation?

Cultiver ce mythe du numérique comme immatériel, permet de “cacher” toutes les infrastructures derrière et donc de laisser tranquille les entreprises qui le gèrent. Elles ont donc peut-être plus de liberté et peuvent facilement éviter des scandales.

Un calendrier éditorial pour les publications peut aussi être très utile.

Créer un persona peut s'avérer très utile dans ce cas ci.

Le consommateur en veut toujours plus et à un prix toujours plus bas. C'est le même phénomène avec les plateformes de streaming pour la musique ou le cinéma, et cela modifie grandement le fonctionnement des industries.

C'est également sur les métadonnées que se basent les campagnes Google Ads.

Les bibliothèques ont un modèle économique bien particulier. On le retrouve également dans l'économie du Web, au travers de cette idée de mutualisation et de partage des contenus.

Les premiers produits d'Apple sont à l'opposés de ses pratiques actuelles d'obsolescence programmée. Quand et pourquoi ce changement majeur est survenu ?

Je dirais plutôt qu'il faut tout d'abord modéliser son projet pour mieux en concevoir les détails

Il me semble que les auteurs deviennent même de plus en plus des personnalités publiques avec les médias, les comptes d'auteurs, l'image publique, etc.

Il serait intéresser de glisser un mot sur la dualité "digital" et "numérique" dans le contexte francophone. L'anglicisme dont dérive digital a encore une place très marqué dans le vocabulaire courant et s'impose comme équivalence de numérique, mais existe-il une différence entre ces deux termes?

Intéressant d'entrouvrir vers les rapports entre les nouvelles possibilités (physiques) d'interaction et l'agrandissement du web.

Qu'en est-il de l'avènement des réalités virtuelles?

Proposition de modification du titre pour "La personne de lettres et la personne d'entrepreneuriat"

Sans compter que la lisibilité du texte rentre aussi en jeu. Le respect des règles typographiques permet d'assurer une cohérence et une compréhension tout au long du roman. On parle d'infographiste, mais la frontière entre designer graphique et infographiste se fait plus mince aussi maintenant. On attends du designer de pouvoir occuper plusieurs tâches, et on reçoit des cours d'édition de texte pour être capable de véhiculer l'information de la manière la plus claire possible.

Je n'avais pas compris que .com venait de commercial, et je ne m'était encore jamais posé la question. C'est sous-entendu dans le texte, mais considérant que tout les autres acronymes ont des définitions, peut-être en rajouter une ?

Kinderimpfstoff gegen Corona: Stiko-Chef Mertens würde eigene Kinder jetzt nicht impfen lassen. (2021, December 2). FAZ.NET. https://www.faz.net/aktuell/politik/inland/stiko-chef-mertens-wuerde-eigene-kinder-nicht-gegen-corona-impfen-17662194.html

Best to link to or mention source, https://bizcoachinfo.com/archives/6493

plutôt "de"

mettre au pluriel (cf corr précédente) + "font évoluer" le prototype "vers un" dispositif etc. ?! ou "transforment" ?! ou "confortent la démarche en transformant"

des références seraient les bienvenues, d'autant plus si elles sont sujettes à (ré-)interprétations

plutôt "concept" ?

"cette zone" ou "l'endroit" ou "cette presqu'île" pour éviter l'effet répétition

au pluriel (comme projets de recherche) ?

Je propose de compléter par : “ou dans une pratique décalée, et somme toute inversée, par rapport à ces catégories “descendantes” de définition de l'action patrimoniale ?”

Ne faut-il pas ajouter : et [déterminer] comment ces pratiques viennent interroger les catégories de définition de l'action patrimoniale.

Une question n'est pas posée dans cet article mais pourrait constituer un prolongement utile : celle de la communicabilité des documents entrés aux Archives départementales de Loire-Atlantique. Pour les archives publiques, les délais sont réglementés par le code du patrimoine, mais pour ces fonds privés, que dit la lettre de don ou de dépôt ? Ensuite, pour les archives numériques, au-delà des questions de délai de communicabilité, quelles sont les possibilités de communication en salle de lecture ou à distance ? Car cela a véritablement une incidence sur les possibilités de travail pour les chercheurs et sur les pratiques d'écriture à partir des archives.

Ce serait bien de préciser un peu ce qui est entendu ici par "processus de construction des archives"

Il serait intéressant de mieux définir ce qui est entendu ici par "fabrique" par opposition, je suppose, à "collecte", qui est le terme utilisé par les archivistes.

Je suggère d'insérer "à Bibracte" avant les dates

Préciser : "IA (intelligence artificielle)"

plutôt "un" thésaurus (le thésaurus de Bibracte est encore en construction et, pour la partie "Bulliot", très embryonnaire)

je suggère: « devait aussi tenir » car le « avait » n'est pas fluide à la lecture. On cherche le complément.

Est-ce que vous pensez qu'il est utile de préciser que le terme est ici employé en un sens assez large? Car au sens précis de la tradition littéraire, le motif concerne une descente provisoire aux Enfers, traversés par le héros épique... qui en ressort. (comme une étape d'une initiation). Dans l'épigramme, c'est bien la descente définitive de Diogène aux Enfers. Mais après tout je n'en suis pas sûr...

Ce que je trouve intéressant ici, c'est que le processus d'"association libre", qui peut bien sûr s'envisager dans bien des contextes, désigne d'abord, dans notre histoire culturelle, le principe fondamental de la cure psychanalytique, notamment telle que Freud l'avait théorisée dès les Etudes sur l'hystérie. Au-delà de la référence freudienne sur laquelle s'appuie en partie l'analyse du palimpseste dans le projet (la « Note sur le bloc magique » qui vous permet une analogie entre le fonctionnement du texte et le fonctionnement de l'esprit humain), est-ce que la référence au paradigme analytique peut apporter un éclairage sur le type d'investissement du lecteur qui est ici encouragé par le projet? Il y a quelque chose du "dites tout ce qui vous passe par l'esprit" de Freud, dans le dispositif du projet, encadré (mais c'est intéressant justement) par la nécessité d'une cohérence thématique autour d'un topos.

Sans avoir d'expérience dans ce domaine de l'édition numérique, je me rends compte que ces multiples solutions éditoriales participatives d'oeuvres littéraires peuvent, d'une façon ou d'une autre, donner une expression (une "documentatiration"?) de la complexité et de l'ouverture, de l'ambiguïté, inhérente à tout phénomène de signification littéraire. Bref, rendre d'une certaine façon visible et tangible ce qui relevait peut-être du for intérieur de chaque lecteur...

D'une manière générale, il pourrait être intéressant de placer cette réflexion sur l'ouverture (des sens, des interprétations...) propres à la forme anthologique (et a fortiori à 'l'anthologie grecque), dans la perspective des grandes études critiques autour de la question de la réception de l'oeuvre littéraire, et sur la façon dont le lecteur crée la signification et participe au sens - car finalement aucune oeuvre n'est close. Je pense par exemple à l'Oeuvre ouverte d'Umberto Eco. Ou d'autres travaux.

Serait-il utile de préciser ici sur quel critère on distingue les expressions artistiques officielles / non officielles?

L'article est vraiment très intéressant. Le titre toutefois semble annoncer une étude de corpus ou une étude de cas alors que l'article se révèle bien plus vaste et aborde des questions plus profondes, se rapprochant plutôt, selon moi, du style de l'essai.

Il serait intéressant de savoir quel pourcentage du public maintient un intérêt et continue de s'impliquer dans le temps après un événement "levier".

J'ai l'impression que ces rapports de force sont réciproques ; est-ce bien le cas ?

Pour un public peu familier de ces questions (dont je fais partie), un approfondissement voire une exemplification de cette distinction me semblerait particulièrement utile.

Sur ce sujet, l'ouvrage Exigeons de meilleures bibliothèques de Lankes adresse une question importante d'adaptation des bibliothèques à de nouvelles pratiques de lecture et d'appropriation de la culture.

Je trouve intéressant de penser le collectif ici et l'entreprise patrimoniale comme un espace public.

Marcello Vitali-Rosati et Eric Méchoulan ont notamment publiés leurs échanges sur la question de l'espace numérique : http://sens-public.org/articles/1312/

Cela m'évoque des passages dans Understanding media : The extension of man de McLuhan où il développe l'importance de la commercialisation de médias comme la machine à écrire dans un phénomène d'appropriation et de compréhension de médias comme le texte.

L'utilisation d'Hypothesis me semble ici aller vers un outil critique scientifique d'enrichissement, ça me fait penser notamment à la structure de l'édition augmentée en html des Ateliers sens public, je mets ici le lien vers le groupe d'édition : https://ateliers.sens-public.org/fabrique-de-l-interaction-parmi-les-ecrans/introduction.html

Comme la suite de l'article ne semble pas traiter de la dimension technique de l'édition numérique, je comprends que régime textuel littéral concerne en fait le format de structuration et de diffusion plus que la structure interne (sinon il faudrait ajouter un développement sur la conception de l'édition en html du texte). Je pense que format textuel serait peut-être plus clair.

ici le terme d'éditorialisation me semble employé au sens d'édition (au sens de structuration, valorisation et diffusion de l'information) ou même à celui de remédiation (passage d'un contexte médiatique à un autre). Voir peut-être au sujet de la remédiation : Remediation: Understanding new media de Bolter et Grusin.

Comme cela n'est pas précisé par la suite, je me permets de demander selon quelle définition l'éditorialisation est ici appréhendée : Merzeau, Vitali-Rosati, Bachimont, Chartron ? Si besoin je peux suggérer des références.

même chose ici : je pense que ça serait très intéressant de développer ou préciser la conception de la lecture comme conversation, de prime abord la lecture me semble être une relation au texte mais pas forcément une conversation (peut être lecture au sens d'interprétation et d'analyse ?). Dans le cas d'une lecture collective, en revanche on se rapprocherait davantage de la conversation et du collaboratif.

C'est un point que présente aussi Giuseppe Cavallari dans Performativité de l’être-en-ligne. Pour une phénoménologie de la présence numérique, (2018 p. 249-50) et que je reprends (ici) : selon les dispositifs et le placement de la caméra, l’individu ne peut pas savoir si je le regarde, car pour m’adresser un regard, il doit regarder la caméra et ainsi ne me voit plus ; inversement, pour voir son regard, je dois regarder son image et ainsi ne le regarde plus. Cavallari interprète ce phénomène comme positif : ainsi l’autre n’est plus dérangé par l’image de son interlocuteur·ice.

Ou “cette mobilisation” ?

Je propose de modifier l'ordre : “En fait, on les a manipulés tout le temps, ces carnets, et”

Je propose d'aménager le titre en : “Participants, musée, organisateurs : trois regards sur la transcription collaborative [etc.]”

Une étude exploratoire (peu d'entretiens) articulant compétences acquises pendant la formation doctorale et professionnalisation. http://journals.openedition.org/dse/1197

Le développement d'une pensée, l'émergence de compétences, la dimension collaborative (et collective) et l'agencement numérique évoquent les travaux de Pierre Lévy relatifs à l'intelligence collective.

Lévy, P. (2007). Intelligence collective pour une anthropologie du cyberespace. Découverte.

Subtract as much as you can until you can't anymore and see where that brings you.

happy couplet, I could see it inscribed on a plate somewhere, maybe the case?

I only highlighted this as I have no real suggestions, everything on the syllabus is ok to me.

Your point that Orwell is very closed-minded about tea traditions is valid and interesting, but the lack of punctuation make sit difficult to understand. Maybe add a comma or period in the middle?

I don't quite understand what you meant by this sentence, so maybe it would help to reword it a little so that it makes more sense? For example, saying I appreciated the assignment as it gave me a deeper perspective surrounding tea traditions and qualities. But good point!

I think you make a good point here! However, these sentences are a little wordy/repetitive and it becomes a little difficult to understand, but great point about whether or not tea should be bitter!

Rule 7 : for c > 1 stretched vertically Rule 8 : for 0 < c < 1 compressed vertically Rule 9 : for c > 1 compressed horizontally Rule 10 : for 0 < c < 1 stretched horizontally

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Michael Eisen on Twitter: “A core problem in science publishing today is that we have a system where the complex, multidimensional assessment of the rigor, validity, utility, audience and impact of a work that emerges from peer review gets reduced to a single overvalued ‘accept/reject’ decision.” / Twitter. (n.d.). Twitter. Retrieved August 10, 2020, from https://twitter.com/mbeisen/status/1291752487448276992

Economic Policies for COVID-19. COVID-19 and the Labor Market. (n.d.). IZA – Institute of Labor Economics. Retrieved August 7, 2020, from https://covid-19.iza.org/publications/pp156/

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préciser de qui est ce projet pour rendre la phrase plus compréhensible. suggestion: Au fond [leur] projet technique et culturel [se réduit] simplement à la question...

I could be misinterpreting your words. In an earlier section, the protagonist seemed confused that a person would transferred to another city. All she knows (from her parents' conversation) is that a person can transferred if they have done a great wrong. Why has she not realized the lady was lying by now? When I first read this, I assumed she was so excited that she wasn't thinking. But after reading the whole story I know she is very curious and astute.

Possible plot hole. I have several questions

• Why hasn't they main city detected them? You said earlier that there is a military. This insinuates that there is an opposing force they must protect themselves from. If this city has a radar, I am going to assume that her old city would have radars able to detect them
• If their radars work when they are close to a pod, does this mean they are close enough for the city to see them? How are they evading the old city?

I like your forward narration in the story. You are telling your audience exactly how it is so you can go straight into the next plot point. With that being said, I would like to see you present this training progress in a more nuanced way. The way I usually see it done is through dialogue, internal dialogue, or a flashback. That way you can weave background information into the plot more seamlessly.

I'm not going to comment on grammar and all that jazz since this is a rough draft. I suggest more sentence variety. For example, you have a lot of sentences starting with I. "I stand up..." "I lean on the glass.." "I breathe in the cool air." Playing with length and structure can improve the flow of your storytelling.

explain

Je suis d'avis de placer cette explication avant, en fait dès que tu emploie le verbe tisser pour expliquer le fonctionnement du texte, car de tout façon on sent/sait bien que tu as cette référence en tête...

Je propose de peut-être modifier cette phrase, car dit ainsi, il n'est pas clair si le fait numérique recentre l'étude de l'inscription sur son support en tant qu'il repose certaines questions qui semblent nouvelles parce qu'étant nouveau espace de médiation, ou si parce qu'il est numérique, il augmente la matérialité des inscriptions.

je dirai plutôt éventré pour rappeler plus clairement la lecture des entrailles.

donc il me semble d'autant plus important de rappeler au début de ton article l'étymologie de texte.

J'ai de la difficulté à penser une écriture inhumaine : peut-être remplacer par "trop peu humaine" ?

de dire que l'écriture remplit les écrits est un peu une tautologie : qu'elle fonde les productions écrites peut-être plus.

Tu n'utilise pas le terme, mais ton approche s'inscrit dans un fondement humaniste d'opposition à un élitisme savant.

je te propose de mettre ce segment en italique compte tenu de l'étymologie latine de texte.

It would be nice if comments and annotations could be voted by people, and have the possibility to sort them chronologically etc.

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EDIT: It is described below the table.

<del>Small text describing the operators would help beginners never exposed to code.</del>

Those of you trying to understand this /= is the not equals operator.

By this point I am not aware of what stack and cabal are. I'm hoping that this is covered in the next chapter as there is no indication. My immediate action was to do a search on these terms.

https://docs.haskellstack.org/en/stable/README/ https://www.haskell.org/cabal/

You should probably also add some predefined tags here to be used in annotations. It would make it easier for you to sift through the annotations.

Would be nice if methodology name is included (I think this is related to reference?)

I like this a lot

Probably, it would be helpful to know why one would like to analyse fragments of phrases. Fragments are not utterances, they don't have a truth value, they only appear as parts of bigger phrases and their grammaticality can not be judged. Furthermore fragments are highly ambiguous. "und auf die" e.g. could be a part of "Er wartet auf Maria ["und auf die" Kinder"], or "Er trinkt wieder ["und auf die" Kinder hat er wieder nicht aufgepasst]." In these 2 structures, what is coordinated are completely different things (PPs or CPs). It is the complete structure which reveals the function and the combinatorial potential of its parts.

Coindexation of "he" with "cousin" in (7a) and "she" with "cousin" in (7b) could make it more clear that it is not an interpretation like (6b) which is intended. The same conindexation could be used in (6) to make the marking consistent.

italics for emphasis? since you have talk very much about sexus.

To make the point of syncretism (and not of "portmanteau morphemes") clear, it would be better to give the example pairs that coincide "as (43a) and (43d) and (43c) and (43e) show".

italics for emphasis

italics for emphasis

Singular

The number of the example would be helpful

Italics would help to understand that "optimal" is used here as an example.

adjectives have positive, comparative and superlative wordforms

Better phrase: "as a neurotransmitter".

It would be good to make this point clearer with an example.

I don't think that this is the correct subject heading, as I would expect that it would refer to the neuroprotective effects of cholinergic neurons. I would probably label this section as "Trophic factors" or something to that effect.

Better word is "homogeneous", although I'm not sure that this statement is well supported.

The City of Ann Arbor's approach to providing these kinds of updates has vasty improved over the last two years. For example, the links don't click through to .pdf files but rather to standalone pages.

I'd suggest that the City take this "News and Announcements" page as a great starting point and (1) add content to which the City has easy access. E.g. outcome-based reporting on City Council votes; new candidate filings; crime graphs on a quarterly basis; etc. (2) tag the articles so readers can filter in and out the kind of thing they want to see. E.g., roadclosing, publicinputmeeting, or what-have-you.; (3) provide a page design that has look and feel of a "news outlet" with appropriate logo and brand it as "Official City News" every so there's no mistaking it for third-party reporting about the city.

This could potentially become the most reliable and well-read "news source" in the city.

can have sizes in the millions parameters can have millions of parameters

Shouldn't you link to the stream at https://hypothes.is/stream?

The bar overlays on top of the sign in link, so it makes difficult to click on it. Maybe a smaller bar would help in the middle of the page?